-2024届高三英语二轮复习2021年浙江高考真题读后续写家庭趣事类头卡南瓜拔不出讲义
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| 名称 | -2024届高三英语二轮复习2021年浙江高考真题读后续写家庭趣事类头卡南瓜拔不出讲义 |  | |
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| 科目 | 英语 | ||
| 更新时间 | 2024-03-11 14:20:51 | ||
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Pumpkin carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child, I have an advantage - I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately, we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I'm unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first, I got jammed just above my eyes, and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally, I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. "I'm going to set it down, now," I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. "I can't get it out!" I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
Paragraph 1 It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer.
Paragraph 2 The video was posted the Monday before Halloween.
在写之前我们先确定一下情节，情节是否跌宕起伏其实在高考写作中并不重要，我们只需要简单的构造一个合理的逻辑闭环，再进行句子扩充：
情节构造三部曲
用三句话概括：
1. 冲突2. 解决过程3. 圆满大结局以本题为例：1. I realized the camera had been rolling the whole time.2. Dad helped me adjust my body to a more relaxed position, and pulled the pumpkin gently off my head.3. The words brought warmth.
稍微进行扩充，就得到了新的Version：
It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer. The air inside the hollow vegetable was full of my anxious breath. I could hear my sister’s laughter and Jason’s muffled voice talking about cutting the giant thing open. “No! Not my precious pumpkin!” I protested. Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my body to a more relaxed position, and pulled the pumpkin gently off my head. Hair in knots, nose plugged with pulp, and chain covered in pumpkin flesh, I let out a sigh of relief. That’s when I realized the camera had been rolling the whole time!
The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. It went viral immediately, in which I looked just like a pumpkin head. Embarrassed and a little annoyed, I fled to my room, but Mom stopped me. “You haven’t read the comments yet.” I scrolled down the screen and marveled at the stories the viewers shared about Halloween. One girl recalled celebrating it with her brothers and sisters, and thanked us for “bringing her home”. The words brought warmth to my heart and tears to my eyes. I felt lucky to be a part of this mischievous yet loving family.
这篇文章已经相当出色，语言流畅，情节完善，有望获得高分，但我们当然可以继续提升一下质量。
Changed "full of my anxious breath" to "thick with my anxious breath" for a more descriptive and immersive atmosphere.
Replaced "talking about cutting the giant thing open" with "discussing how to carve the massive thing open" to provide a clearer description of the situation.
Altered "pulled the pumpkin gently off my head" to "carefully removed the pumpkin from my head" for a more precise and engaging description.
Changed "chain covered in pumpkin flesh" to "clothes were smeared with pumpkin flesh" for clarity and to better convey the messiness of the situation.
Replaced "posted online" with "uploaded online" for a more commonly used term.
Changed "in which I looked just like a pumpkin head" to "showcasing me resembling a pumpkin head" for improved clarity.
Replaced "but Mom stopped me" with "but my Mom intercepted me" for a more active and descriptive expression.
Replaced "brought warmth to my heart" with "warmed my heart" for a smoother and more concise phrase.
Version 1.0
It had been five or six minutes, although it felt much longer. The air inside the hollowed-out pumpkin was thick with my anxious breath. I could hear my sister's laughter and Jason's muffled voice discussing how to carve the massive thing open. "No! Not my precious pumpkin!" I protested. Finally, Dad helped me shift my body into a more relaxed position and carefully removed the pumpkin from my head. My hair was tangled, my nose was clogged with pumpkin pulp, and my clothes were smeared with pumpkin flesh. I let out a sigh of relief. That's when I realized the camera had been recording the entire time!
The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. It immediately went viral, showcasing me resembling a pumpkin head. Feeling embarrassed and slightly annoyed, I headed to my room, but my Mom intercepted me. "You haven't read the comments yet." I scrolled down the screen and was amazed by the stories that viewers shared about their Halloween experiences. One girl reminisced about celebrating with her siblings and expressed her gratitude for us "bringing her home." Those words warmed my heart and brought tears to my eyes. I felt fortunate to be a part of this mischievous yet loving family.
现在这篇文章在语言方面丝滑了不少，但是我们还可以提高一下语域，与“普通高中生”彻底拉开差距。
Vocabulary Enhancement:
Replaced "full" with "exuded" to convey a more precise and descriptive sense of the atmosphere.
Substituted "anxious breath" with "apprehensive exhalations" for a more sophisticated and descriptive term.
Changed "discussing" to "discourse" to elevate the language.
Replaced "carefully" with "fastidiously" to use a more advanced word that conveys meticulousness.
Replaced "tangled" with "ensnared" to enhance the description.
Replaced "clogged" with "besieged" to use a more vivid and sophisticated term.
Substituted "smeared" with "bespattered" for a more refined expression.
Replaced "immediately went viral" with "swiftly attained viral status" to convey a sense of speed and sophistication.
Substituted "showcasing" with "casting me in the role of" to provide a more elaborate and engaging description.
Replaced "Feeling embarrassed and slightly annoyed" with "Overwhelmed by a mix of embarrassment and mild irritation" to offer a more nuanced and advanced description.
Changed "headed to my room" to "retreated to my quarters" for a more formal and refined expression.
Replaced "Mom" with "maternal figure" to introduce a more formal tone.
Substituted "perused" for "read" to use a more sophisticated synonym.
Utilized "navigated" to describe the process of going through the comments in a more advanced manner.
Replaced "amazed" with "astounded" to convey a stronger sense of surprise.
Enhanced the description of the girl's story by using "wistfully recounted" to make it more vivid and emotional.
Substituted "gratitude" with "graciously credited" to emphasize the appreciation more elegantly.
Replaced "warmed my heart" with "ignited a profound warmth within my heart" for a richer and more emotional description.
Used "conjured tears in my eyes" to create a more vivid and evocative image.
Version 2.0
It had been five or six minutes, although it felt much longer. The atmosphere within the excavated pumpkin exuded a palpable tension, suffused with my apprehensive exhalations. The sonorous laughter of my sister and Jason's muted discourse concerning the intricate process of carving the colossal gourd permeated the enclosed space. "No! Spare my cherished pumpkin!" I vehemently objected. At length, my father assuaged my discomposure, adroitly repositioning my frame into a more tranquil posture, and fastidiously extricated the pumpkin from my head. My coiffure was ensnared, my olfactory senses besieged by the cloying pumpkin pulp, and my attire bespattered with vestiges of the pumpkin's viscera. I emitted an audibly relieved sigh. It was at this juncture that I discerned the continuous recording of our escapade by the camera.
The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. It swiftly attained viral status, casting me in the role of a pumpkin-headed protagonist. Overwhelmed by a mix of embarrassment and mild irritation, I retreated to my quarters, only to have my maternal figure intervene with a gentle persuasion. "You haven't perused the comments as yet," she pointed out. Succumbing to her advice, I navigated the comments section, where I was astounded by the captivating narratives shared by the audience about their Halloween exploits. Among these anecdotes, one young girl wistfully recounted her joyous celebrations with siblings and graciously credited us for "bringing her home." These sentiments ignited a profound warmth within my heart, conjuring tears in my eyes. I realized how serendipitous it was to be an integral part of this endearingly mischievous yet affectionate family.
Pumpkin carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child, I have an advantage - I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately, we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I'm unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first, I got jammed just above my eyes, and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally, I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. "I'm going to set it down, now," I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. "I can't get it out!" I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
Paragraph 1 It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer.
Paragraph 2 The video was posted the Monday before Halloween.
在写之前我们先确定一下情节，情节是否跌宕起伏其实在高考写作中并不重要，我们只需要简单的构造一个合理的逻辑闭环，再进行句子扩充：
情节构造三部曲
用三句话概括：
1. 冲突2. 解决过程3. 圆满大结局以本题为例：1. I realized the camera had been rolling the whole time.2. Dad helped me adjust my body to a more relaxed position, and pulled the pumpkin gently off my head.3. The words brought warmth.
稍微进行扩充，就得到了新的Version：
It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer. The air inside the hollow vegetable was full of my anxious breath. I could hear my sister’s laughter and Jason’s muffled voice talking about cutting the giant thing open. “No! Not my precious pumpkin!” I protested. Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my body to a more relaxed position, and pulled the pumpkin gently off my head. Hair in knots, nose plugged with pulp, and chain covered in pumpkin flesh, I let out a sigh of relief. That’s when I realized the camera had been rolling the whole time!
The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. It went viral immediately, in which I looked just like a pumpkin head. Embarrassed and a little annoyed, I fled to my room, but Mom stopped me. “You haven’t read the comments yet.” I scrolled down the screen and marveled at the stories the viewers shared about Halloween. One girl recalled celebrating it with her brothers and sisters, and thanked us for “bringing her home”. The words brought warmth to my heart and tears to my eyes. I felt lucky to be a part of this mischievous yet loving family.
这篇文章已经相当出色，语言流畅，情节完善，有望获得高分，但我们当然可以继续提升一下质量。
Changed "full of my anxious breath" to "thick with my anxious breath" for a more descriptive and immersive atmosphere.
Replaced "talking about cutting the giant thing open" with "discussing how to carve the massive thing open" to provide a clearer description of the situation.
Altered "pulled the pumpkin gently off my head" to "carefully removed the pumpkin from my head" for a more precise and engaging description.
Changed "chain covered in pumpkin flesh" to "clothes were smeared with pumpkin flesh" for clarity and to better convey the messiness of the situation.
Replaced "posted online" with "uploaded online" for a more commonly used term.
Changed "in which I looked just like a pumpkin head" to "showcasing me resembling a pumpkin head" for improved clarity.
Replaced "but Mom stopped me" with "but my Mom intercepted me" for a more active and descriptive expression.
Replaced "brought warmth to my heart" with "warmed my heart" for a smoother and more concise phrase.
Version 1.0
It had been five or six minutes, although it felt much longer. The air inside the hollowed-out pumpkin was thick with my anxious breath. I could hear my sister's laughter and Jason's muffled voice discussing how to carve the massive thing open. "No! Not my precious pumpkin!" I protested. Finally, Dad helped me shift my body into a more relaxed position and carefully removed the pumpkin from my head. My hair was tangled, my nose was clogged with pumpkin pulp, and my clothes were smeared with pumpkin flesh. I let out a sigh of relief. That's when I realized the camera had been recording the entire time!
The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. It immediately went viral, showcasing me resembling a pumpkin head. Feeling embarrassed and slightly annoyed, I headed to my room, but my Mom intercepted me. "You haven't read the comments yet." I scrolled down the screen and was amazed by the stories that viewers shared about their Halloween experiences. One girl reminisced about celebrating with her siblings and expressed her gratitude for us "bringing her home." Those words warmed my heart and brought tears to my eyes. I felt fortunate to be a part of this mischievous yet loving family.
现在这篇文章在语言方面丝滑了不少，但是我们还可以提高一下语域，与“普通高中生”彻底拉开差距。
Vocabulary Enhancement:
Replaced "full" with "exuded" to convey a more precise and descriptive sense of the atmosphere.
Substituted "anxious breath" with "apprehensive exhalations" for a more sophisticated and descriptive term.
Changed "discussing" to "discourse" to elevate the language.
Replaced "carefully" with "fastidiously" to use a more advanced word that conveys meticulousness.
Replaced "tangled" with "ensnared" to enhance the description.
Replaced "clogged" with "besieged" to use a more vivid and sophisticated term.
Substituted "smeared" with "bespattered" for a more refined expression.
Replaced "immediately went viral" with "swiftly attained viral status" to convey a sense of speed and sophistication.
Substituted "showcasing" with "casting me in the role of" to provide a more elaborate and engaging description.
Replaced "Feeling embarrassed and slightly annoyed" with "Overwhelmed by a mix of embarrassment and mild irritation" to offer a more nuanced and advanced description.
Changed "headed to my room" to "retreated to my quarters" for a more formal and refined expression.
Replaced "Mom" with "maternal figure" to introduce a more formal tone.
Substituted "perused" for "read" to use a more sophisticated synonym.
Utilized "navigated" to describe the process of going through the comments in a more advanced manner.
Replaced "amazed" with "astounded" to convey a stronger sense of surprise.
Enhanced the description of the girl's story by using "wistfully recounted" to make it more vivid and emotional.
Substituted "gratitude" with "graciously credited" to emphasize the appreciation more elegantly.
Replaced "warmed my heart" with "ignited a profound warmth within my heart" for a richer and more emotional description.
Used "conjured tears in my eyes" to create a more vivid and evocative image.
Version 2.0
It had been five or six minutes, although it felt much longer. The atmosphere within the excavated pumpkin exuded a palpable tension, suffused with my apprehensive exhalations. The sonorous laughter of my sister and Jason's muted discourse concerning the intricate process of carving the colossal gourd permeated the enclosed space. "No! Spare my cherished pumpkin!" I vehemently objected. At length, my father assuaged my discomposure, adroitly repositioning my frame into a more tranquil posture, and fastidiously extricated the pumpkin from my head. My coiffure was ensnared, my olfactory senses besieged by the cloying pumpkin pulp, and my attire bespattered with vestiges of the pumpkin's viscera. I emitted an audibly relieved sigh. It was at this juncture that I discerned the continuous recording of our escapade by the camera.
The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. It swiftly attained viral status, casting me in the role of a pumpkin-headed protagonist. Overwhelmed by a mix of embarrassment and mild irritation, I retreated to my quarters, only to have my maternal figure intervene with a gentle persuasion. "You haven't perused the comments as yet," she pointed out. Succumbing to her advice, I navigated the comments section, where I was astounded by the captivating narratives shared by the audience about their Halloween exploits. Among these anecdotes, one young girl wistfully recounted her joyous celebrations with siblings and graciously credited us for "bringing her home." These sentiments ignited a profound warmth within my heart, conjuring tears in my eyes. I realized how serendipitous it was to be an integral part of this endearingly mischievous yet affectionate family.