Unit 2 Neighbours班级优秀作文&作文错误总结 牛津译林版七年级英语下册

Unit 2 班级优秀作文&作文错误总结
假如你叫Lucy，住在深圳。Alice是你的一位英国笔友，她想了解深圳。请你给她写一封信，介绍深圳的有关信息并邀请她来深圳做客。内容提示：
1. 深圳位于中国的南部，是一个有很多景点的城市。
2. 著名景点有如欢乐谷(Happy Valley)、世界之窗和大梅沙。
3. 每年有很多人来深圳, 人们可以在深圳观光、购物、爬山等。
4. 深圳因它的海鲜、荔枝 (litchi)和小吃出名。
班级优秀作文：
Dear Alice,
Hi, I am cheerful that you want to know more about Shenzhen.
Shenzhen is located in the south of China. It is a modern and international （国际化的）city with many new opportunities （机会） for everyone.
There are also many wonderful attractions in Shenzhen, such as the Happy Valley, the Window of the world and Dameisha beach. Every year millions of tourists come here to visit these excellent places of interest. Apart from that（除此之外）， tourists can also go sightseeing, go shopping, climb mountains and do many other indoor and outdoor activities in this big city. If you come here, you will lost yourself （沉迷）in the attractive （吸引人的）scenery （风景） and the artistic beauty （艺术美）of Shenzhen. I think you may get a lot of unforgettable （难忘的）moments in Shenzhen. Besides（除此之外）, Shenzhen is famous for its seafood, litchi and snacks too. If you taste them a little, you will remember the taste and the smell forever （永远）.
Come and visit Shenzhen! It is worth （值得的）visiting. I am waiting for you to explore （探索） more about this city!
Best wishes,
Lucy
班级作文错误总结：
深圳在中国的南方
学生错误：Shenzhen is lies in south of Shenzhen. （be动词和动词连用）
(正确： Shenzhen lies in the south of Shenzhen)
我将告诉你关于深圳的一些事。
学生错误： I will tell you about Shenzhen.
(正确： I will tell you something about Shenzhen)
这个城市有许多名胜古迹。
学生错误：The city with many places of interest.
正确：There are many places of interest in this city./ It is a city with many places of interest
人们可以观光，购物和爬山。
错： People can go sightseeing, go shopping and climbing mountain. (句子写太长就忘记can后加动词原形；爬山，climb很多同学不会写，mountain忘记加s）
正确：People can go sightseeing, go shopping and climb mountains.
如果你参观深圳，你就会喜欢它。
错误：If you go sightseeing Shenzhen, you will love it.（go sightseeing去观光，后不接任何东西）
正确：If you visit Shenzhen, you will love it.
你可以欣赏自然美。
错误：You can look natural beauty. (过于中式表达，搭配不当）
正确：You can enjoy natural beauty.
每年有数以百万计的游客。
错误：Every years has millions of tourists. （every year；中式表达直接翻译）
正确：Every year, there are millions of tourists.(某地有用there be 句型）
你可以在世界之窗参观来自世界各地的建筑物。
错误：You can see come from the world build.
正确：In the Window of the World, you can enjoy different buildings from all over the world.
写作自测：
深圳在中国的南方
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我将告诉你关于深圳的一些事。
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这个城市有许多名胜古迹。
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人们可以观光，购物和爬山。
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如果你参观深圳，你就会喜欢它。
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你可以欣赏自然美。
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每年有数以百万计的游客。
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你可以在世界之窗参观来自世界各地的建筑物。
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