《2024年高考英语读后续写高分宝典》
专题03 2023新高考I卷&II卷读后续写(写作比赛逆袭获奖)
讲义及满分语料8类55句背默 （解析版）
目录
真题呈现 1
答案解析 2
研读材料 3
情节梳理 4
满分语料分类背诵55例 5
满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语） 6
满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型） 6
满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构 7
满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等） 7
满分秘诀五、特殊句式（倒装+强调+省略） 8
满分秘诀六、介词短语位于句首 9
满分秘诀七、直接引语/简洁对话 9
满分秘诀八、主题升华句 9
范文背诵 10
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真题呈现
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: "Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith（银匠）in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again." I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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答案解析
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A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. I was so happy to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher. “I knew you’d win! I am proud of you. You made it!” he said excitedly. Then came the big day. When I was invited to the stage to receive the award, I expressed my thanks to my teacher. I said, “It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher. Without your recognition and guidance, I couldn’t have written this article. Again thank you very much!”
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. My teacher was waiting for me. Holding my hands, he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer, so keep writing.” “You know I didn’t like writing before, but now I am crazy about it! I will try my best to create good works.” I said seriously. Since then, I have written many good works and now I am a famous writer. I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.
【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者上中学的时候，社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛。作者不喜欢写作，于是想都没想就拒绝了。但是在老师的鼓励下，作者同意试一试。作者在写作过程中虽然很累，但是没有放弃，坚持下来了。在作者最终完成写作时，作者感到写作让他很快乐，他已经不在乎输赢了。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后，当我几乎忘记比赛的时候，传来了消息。”和第二段首句“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知，第一段可描写作者获得比赛一等奖，在颁奖典礼上作者表达了对社会老师的感激。
②由第二段首句内容“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知，第二段可描写老师鼓励作者继续写作，自此作者坚持写作取得了成功，作者将这一切归功于自己的老师。
2.续写线索：比赛消息传来——作者获奖——高兴——颁奖典礼感谢老师——颁奖后来到老师办公室——老师告诉作者坚持写作——作者表达了对写作的喜爱——作者写作取得了成功——感激老师
3.词汇激活
行为类
①告知：inform/tell
②成功做到：make it/succeed
③表达：express/convey
情绪类
①高兴的：happy/glad
②激动地：excitedly/with excitement
【点睛】[高分句型1] I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. （运用了由连接词that引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型2] It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher.（运用了强调句）
[高分句型3] I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.（运用了who引导的限制性定语从句）
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研读材料
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第一段：作者的中学老师让她参加英语作文大赛，但作者觉得英语是自己的第二语言，用英语写作太难了，并不想参加。
第二段：老师对作者故事的认可激发了作者参加比赛的想法。
第三段：作者参赛的故事选择了保罗·里维尔的马——有趣且别处心裁。
第四段：作者笔下的里维尔之马也激励着作者尽可能地完善自己的作品。
第五段：当老师看到作者的作品后，赞赏之余让作者继续修改，经过一次又一次的修改，作者由最初只是想获取胜利到后来很享受写作这个过程，至于能否胜出已经没那么重要了。
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情节梳理
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文本大意：
作者初中时期，英语并非其母语，而且他并不热爱写作，但是在社会学课的老师的鼓励下还是投身于一次写作比赛中，将作品主题选定为“Paul Revere的马”以赋予其更生动且独特的视角。作者不断地修订作品，从最初的写作厌恶转变为享受写作的过程，最终作品获得了一等奖。
主题立意：
面对挑战，像Paul Revere's horse一样，坚持不懈并最终收获成功，描绘一个鼓励学生挑战自我、敢于尝试的老师形象。
续写方向：
根据所给句中的“ there came the news.” 和“ I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.”可知，续写首段应当描绘作者获奖的消息，颁奖的情形，作者的情绪，第二段应描绘作者与老师的互动，以及作者的感悟。但同时，为了与原文更好的callback，应该构思如何让Paul Revere’s horse来升华主题。
深入研读：
What: 作者讲述了自己如何从不爱英文写作到最后爱上英文写作的经历和心路历程。
Why: 通过阅读本文可以让学生明白:无论做任何事情，只要用心去做，就会有意想不到的收获；而且有些兴趣是可以培养出来的。
How: 本文是一篇记叙文，作者通过事件发生的先后顺序逐步展开，为了使描写生动、逼真，作者在文章里除了用直接引语体现老师对自己的鼓舞外，还采用了大量的疑问句来展现作者当时内心的真实想法。
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语料背诵
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满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语）
1.当我看到自己的名字在获奖名单上时，我的心高兴得怦怦直跳。
1. The moment I saw my name in the winner’s list, my heart leaped with joy.
2.当我走上舞台，观众的掌声充满了我的耳朵。
2. As I stepped onto the stage, the applause from the audience filled my ears.
3.得知自己获得一等奖，三天后将举行颁奖典礼，我非常激动。
3. I was thrilled to learn that I had gained the first prize and an award ceremony would be held in three days.
4.当我的名字被宣布时，我在热烈的欢呼和雷鸣般的掌声中登上了舞台。
4. When my name was announced, I mounted the stage against wild cheers and thunderous applause.
5.全班同学顿时沸腾了，有的欢呼“祝贺”，有的哭喊“难以置信”。
5. Instantly, the whole class boiled up, some cheering “congratulations” while some crying “unbelievable”.
6.当我读到学校公告栏上的公告时，我的心跳加速——我的作文得了第一名！
6. My heart raced as I read the announcement on the school bulletin board – my essay had won first place!
7.当我读到那封宣布我的文章获得第一名的贺信时，我的心跳加速！
7. My heart raced as I read the letter announcing that my essay had won first place!
8.我的老师相信我有潜力，这激励了我的努力，而且付出了回报。
8. My teacher's belief in my potential had fueled my hard work, and the effort had paid off.
9. 同学们报以雷鸣般的掌声和衷心的祝福，证实了我获得一等奖的消息。
9. The thunderous applause and hearty blessings from my fellow students confirmed the news that I had won the first prize.
满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型）
10.我跳到空中大声喊道：“我成功了！”
10. I leapt into the air and shouted out loud, “I made it!”
11. 他的眼睛里充满了自豪，他灿烂笑着，向我表示祝贺。
11. His eyes lit up with pride, and he congratulated me with a broad smile.
12.直到我参加了颁奖典礼并拿到了证书，我还是觉得很难相信。
12. I still found it hard to believe until I attended the award presentation and got my certificate.
13.他走上前，拍了拍我的肩膀，轻声说：“有志者事竟成。”
13. He stepped forward, patted me on the shoulder, and said softly, “where there is a will, there is a way.”
满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构
14.泪水几乎模糊了我的视线，我给了他一个大大的拥抱。
14. With tears almost blurring my vision, I gave him a big hug.
15.我怀着火热的心情发表了简短的演讲。
15. With a fiery mood in my heart, I delivered my short speech.
16.“祝贺你！”我的老师骄傲地说，眼里噙满了泪水。
16."Congratulations!" my teacher said, pride and tears filling his eyes.
17.当我走进办公室时，他从办公桌上抬起头来，脸上洋溢着自豪的笑容。
17. As I entered the office, he looked up from his desk, his face beaming with pride.
18.当我进去的时候，他抬起头来微笑，他的眼睛反映出他对我的成就感到骄傲。
18. When I entered, he looked up and smiled, his eyes reflecting his pride in my achievement.
19.我赢了写作比赛！我难以置信，内心无比喜悦。
19. I had won the writing contest! I was in disbelief, immense joy overwhelming inside, though.
20.有人叫我去参加写作比赛的颁奖典礼，我惊讶得目瞪口呆。
20. I was told to attend the award presentation for the writing contest, my jaw dropping in astonishment.
21. 我一手拿着奖杯，一手拿着奖状，眼睛投向老师，老师竖起大拇指，眼里闪烁着喜悦和骄傲。
21. With prize cup in one hand and award certificate in the other hand, I threw my eyes at my teacher, who gave me a thumbs up, with his eyes twinkling with pleasure and pride.
满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等）
22.我紧紧地拥抱着他，无法表达他对我的信任有多重要。
22. I hugged him tightly, unable to express just how much his faith in me had meant.
23.他拍了拍我的肩膀，深情地笑了笑：“最重要的是你的努力。”
23. Patting my shoulder, he smiled affectionately, “It is your efforts that count most.”
24.沉浸在喜悦之中，他向我挥手表示祝贺。
24. Bathed in the enjoyment, he waved at me and expressed his congratulations.
25.每当回首这件事，我都对他感激不尽。
25. Whenever looking back on this incident, I feel extremely grateful to him.
26.我迫不及待地想和我的老师，骑马的人分享这个消息，他不断地把我逼到极限之外。
26. I couldn't wait to share the news with my teacher, the horse rider, who kept pushing me beyond my limits.
27.那匹曾经心存疑虑，一度想过退出的疲惫的马，继续前行，驶向终点。
27. The tired horse who once had doubts and once thought about quitting, kept going and made it to the destination.
28.我被这个消息惊呆了，当同学们胜利地举起手时，我激动得哽咽了。
28. Stunned by the news, I was choked with emotion while my classmates were raising their hands in triumph.
29.“非常感谢。我亲爱的老师。”我用温柔的声音说，低着头想引起老师的注意。
29. “Thank you very much. My dear teacher.” I said in a gentle voice, lowering my head to catch my teacher's attention.
30.知道自己已经克服了用第二语言写作的挑战，我感到了一种新的自信和成就感。
30. I felt a newfound sense of confidence and accomplishment, knowing that I had overcome the challenges of writing in my second language.
满分秘诀五、特殊句式（倒装+强调+省略）
31.直到我听到这个消息，我才意识到我赢得了比赛。
31. Not until I heard the news did I realize that I had won the contest.
32.是你让我爱上了写作，我的社会研究老师。
32. It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher.
33.就在那一刻，我对老师感激不尽。
33. It was at that moment that I was overwhelmed with gratitude to my teacher.
34.是他让我意识到，“没有什么是不可能的，一颗心甘情愿的心。”。
34. It was he who made me realize nothing is impossible to a willing heart.
35.听到这个消息，我非常感动和高兴，紧紧地拥抱了我的老师。
35. So moved and happy was I to hear the news that I gave my teacher a tight hug.
36.直到那时我才意识到，只有勇敢和决心才能克服一切困难。
36. Only then did I realize that it was bravery and determination that can conquer all the difficulties.
37.是我的老师体贴地鼓励我，敦促我发挥自己讲故事的潜力。
37. It was my teacher who was considerate enough to encourage me, urging me to take advantage of my potential in telling stories.
满分秘诀六、介词短语位于句首
38.没有你的认可和指导，我不可能写这篇文章。非常感谢。
38. Without your recognition and guidance, I couldn’t have written this article. Thank you!
39.第二天早上，我很幸运地被邀请参加一个简单但令人印象深刻的颁奖典礼。
39. Next morning, I was fortunate enough to be invited to a simple but impressive award presentation ceremony.
40.在颁奖典礼上，我感到一种成就感，不是因为我赢了，而是因为我克服了恐惧和不情愿。
40. Present at the award presentation, I felt a sense of accomplishment, not because I had won, but because I had overcome my fear and reluctance.
满分秘诀七、直接引语/简洁对话
41.“祝贺你！”我的老师坚定地和我握手。
41. "Congratulations!" my teacher greeted me with a firm handshake.
42.“我就知道你会赢！我为你感到骄傲。你成功了！”我的老师兴奋地说。
42. “I knew you’d win! I am proud of you. You made it!” my teacher said excitedly.
43.他紧紧地握着我的手说：“祝贺你！你是个好作家，继续写吧。”
43. Holding my hands tightly, he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer, so keep writing.”
44.“你做得很好！你得了第一名！”我当场僵住了，感觉不可思议，喜出望外。
44. "You've done a good job! You took first place!"I was frozen at the spot, feeling incredible and overjoyed.
满分秘诀八、主题升华句
45. 这次比赛改变了我的人生轨迹，让我找到了自己的方向。
45. This contest changed the course of my life and helped me find my direction.
46.我的成功归功于我的社会老师，他是我写作道路上的指路明灯。
46. I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.
47.我永远不会忘记这段经历，它将永远是我一生中最珍贵的回忆之一。
47. I will never forget this experience, which will always be one of the most precious memories of my life.
48.老师是我人生旅程中的希望灯塔，激励我把“不可能”变成“可能”。
48. The teacher was a beacon of hope on my life journey, inspiring me to transform the “impossible” into “possible”.
49.从那时起，老师鼓励我的话语，就像薄雾中的灯塔，永远照亮我生命的天空。
49. Since then, my teacher's encouraging words, just like a lighthouse in the mist, would always be lighting in the sky of my life.
50.这次经历让我意识到，只要我们勇于尝试，就一定能够取得成功。
50.This experience made me realize that as long as we are brave enough to try, we can surely achieve success.
51.我从这次比赛中学到了很多，不仅提高了写作能力，还增强了自信心。
51. I learned a lot from this contest, not only improving my writing skills but also boosting my confidence.
52.我感谢我的老师，他的鼓励和支持让我发现了自己的潜能。
52. I am grateful to my teacher, whose encouragement and support helped me discover my potential.
53.我永远不会忘记这次经历，它将永远是我人生中最宝贵的回忆之一。
53. It was more than just winning a contest; it was about discovering my own potential and the power of perseverance.
54.从那时起，我不仅能很好地写作，而且我知道了真相——恐惧永远不会造就未来，但希望会。
54. From then on, not only did I have a good command of writing, but I also knew the truth--fear never builds the future, but hope does.
55.到目前为止，我发表的故事赢得了国内外无数读者的心，给我带来了满足感和幸福感。
55. So far, my published stories have won the hearts of numerous readers both at domestic and abroad, bringing me a sense of fulfillment and happiness.
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范文背诵
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A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. My social studies teacher burst into the classroom with an excited expression on his face, holding a piece of paper in his hand.“You won the writing contest!” he exclaimed, “And you're required to attend the award presentation this Friday afternoon!”I couldn't believe what I was hearing. Overwhelmed with joy and pride, the feeling of accomplishment washed over me, and I couldn't help but smile from ear to ear. All those hours of hard work, revisions, and self- doubt had paid off.
I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. He greeted me with a warm smile and congratulated me on my well- deserved victory. I express my gratitude to him for pushing me out of my comfort zone and encouraging me to explore my writing abilities. Then when we were talking about my writing journey, he was so proud of my progress. From that day forward, I became more confident in my writing abilities. Looking back, that writing contest transformed my perception of writing and opened doors to a world of possibilities. It was a journey of self-discovery, growth, and the realization that I could excel in something I once thought was impossible.《2024年高考英语读后续写高分宝典》
专题03 2023新高考I卷&II卷读后续写(写作比赛逆袭获奖)
讲义及满分语料8类55句背默 （原卷版）
目录
真题呈现 1
答案解析 2
研读材料 3
情节梳理 4
满分语料分类背诵55例 5
满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语） 5
满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型） 5
满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构 6
满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等） 6
满分秘诀五、特殊句式（倒装+强调+省略） 7
满分秘诀六、介词短语位于句首 7
满分秘诀七、直接引语/简洁对话 8
满分秘诀八、主题升华句 8
范文背诵 9
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真题呈现
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: "Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith（银匠）in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again." I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
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A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者上中学的时候，社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛。作者不喜欢写作，于是想都没想就拒绝了。但是在老师的鼓励下，作者同意试一试。作者在写作过程中虽然很累，但是没有放弃，坚持下来了。在作者最终完成写作时，作者感到写作让他很快乐，他已经不在乎输赢了。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后，当我几乎忘记比赛的时候，传来了消息。”和第二段首句“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知，第一段可描写作者获得比赛一等奖，在颁奖典礼上作者表达了对社会老师的感激。
②由第二段首句内容“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知，第二段可描写老师鼓励作者继续写作，自此作者坚持写作取得了成功，作者将这一切归功于自己的老师。
2.续写线索：比赛消息传来——作者获奖——高兴——颁奖典礼感谢老师——颁奖后来到老师办公室——老师告诉作者坚持写作——作者表达了对写作的喜爱——作者写作取得了成功——感激老师
3.词汇激活
行为类
①告知：inform/tell
②成功做到：make it/succeed
③表达：express/convey
情绪类
①高兴的：happy/glad
②激动地：excitedly/with excitement
【点睛】[高分句型1] I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. （运用了由连接词that引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型2] It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher.（运用了强调句）
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研读材料
)[高分句型3] I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.（运用了who引导的限制性定语从句）
第一段：作者的中学老师让她参加英语作文大赛，但作者觉得英语是自己的第二语言，用英语写作太难了，并不想参加。
第二段：老师对作者故事的认可激发了作者参加比赛的想法。
第三段：作者参赛的故事选择了保罗·里维尔的马——有趣且别处心裁。
第四段：作者笔下的里维尔之马也激励着作者尽可能地完善自己的作品。
第五段：当老师看到作者的作品后，赞赏之余让作者继续修改，经过一次又一次的修改，作者由最初只是想获取胜利到后来很享受写作这个过程，至于能否胜出已经没那么重要了。
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文本大意：
作者初中时期，英语并非其母语，而且他并不热爱写作，但是在社会学课的老师的鼓励下还是投身于一次写作比赛中，将作品主题选定为“Paul Revere的马”以赋予其更生动且独特的视角。作者不断地修订作品，从最初的写作厌恶转变为享受写作的过程，最终作品获得了一等奖。
主题立意：
面对挑战，像Paul Revere's horse一样，坚持不懈并最终收获成功，描绘一个鼓励学生挑战自我、敢于尝试的老师形象。
续写方向：
根据所给句中的“ there came the news.” 和“ I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.”可知，续写首段应当描绘作者获奖的消息，颁奖的情形，作者的情绪，第二段应描绘作者与老师的互动，以及作者的感悟。但同时，为了与原文更好的callback，应该构思如何让Paul Revere’s horse来升华主题。
深入研读：
What: 作者讲述了自己如何从不爱英文写作到最后爱上英文写作的经历和心路历程。
Why: 通过阅读本文可以让学生明白:无论做任何事情，只要用心去做，就会有意想不到的收获；而且有些兴趣是可以培养出来的。
How: 本文是一篇记叙文，作者通过事件发生的先后顺序逐步展开，为了使描写生动、逼真，作者在文章里除了用直接引语体现老师对自己的鼓舞外，还采用了大量的疑问句来展现作者当时内心的真实想法。
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满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语）
1.当我看到自己的名字在获奖名单上时，我的心高兴得怦怦直跳。
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2.当我走上舞台，观众的掌声充满了我的耳朵。
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3.得知自己获得一等奖，三天后将举行颁奖典礼，我非常激动。
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4.当我的名字被宣布时，我在热烈的欢呼和雷鸣般的掌声中登上了舞台。
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5.全班同学顿时沸腾了，有的欢呼“祝贺”，有的哭喊“难以置信”。
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6.当我读到学校公告栏上的公告时，我的心跳加速——我的作文得了第一名！
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7.当我读到那封宣布我的文章获得第一名的贺信时，我的心跳加速！
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8.我的老师相信我有潜力，这激励了我的努力，而且付出了回报。
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9. 同学们报以雷鸣般的掌声和衷心的祝福，证实了我获得一等奖的消息。
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满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型）
10.我跳到空中大声喊道：“我成功了！”
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11. 他的眼睛里充满了自豪，他灿烂笑着，向我表示祝贺。
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12.直到我参加了颁奖典礼并拿到了证书，我还是觉得很难相信。
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13.他走上前，拍了拍我的肩膀，轻声说：“有志者事竟成。”
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满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构
14.泪水几乎模糊了我的视线，我给了他一个大大的拥抱。
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15.我怀着火热的心情发表了简短的演讲。
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16.“祝贺你！”我的老师骄傲地说，眼里噙满了泪水。
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17.当我走进办公室时，他从办公桌上抬起头来，脸上洋溢着自豪的笑容。
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18.当我进去的时候，他抬起头来微笑，他的眼睛反映出他对我的成就感到骄傲。
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19.我赢了写作比赛！我难以置信，内心无比喜悦。
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20.有人叫我去参加写作比赛的颁奖典礼，我惊讶得目瞪口呆。
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21. 我一手拿着奖杯，一手拿着奖状，眼睛投向老师，老师竖起大拇指，眼里闪烁着喜悦和骄傲。
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满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等）
22.我紧紧地拥抱着他，无法表达他对我的信任有多重要。
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23.他拍了拍我的肩膀，深情地笑了笑：“最重要的是你的努力。”
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24.沉浸在喜悦之中，他向我挥手表示祝贺。
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25.每当回首这件事，我都对他感激不尽。
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26.我迫不及待地想和我的老师，骑马的人分享这个消息，他不断地把我逼到极限之外。
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27.那匹曾经心存疑虑，一度想过退出的疲惫的马，继续前行，驶向终点。
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28.我被这个消息惊呆了，当同学们胜利地举起手时，我激动得哽咽了。
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29.“非常感谢。我亲爱的老师。”我用温柔的声音说，低着头想引起老师的注意。
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30.知道自己已经克服了用第二语言写作的挑战，我感到了一种新的自信和成就感。
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满分秘诀五、特殊句式（倒装+强调+省略）
31.直到我听到这个消息，我才意识到我赢得了比赛。
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32.是你让我爱上了写作，我的社会研究老师。
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33.就在那一刻，我对老师感激不尽。
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34.是他让我意识到，“没有什么是不可能的，一颗心甘情愿的心。”。
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35.听到这个消息，我非常感动和高兴，紧紧地拥抱了我的老师。
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36.直到那时我才意识到，只有勇敢和决心才能克服一切困难。
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37.是我的老师体贴地鼓励我，敦促我发挥自己讲故事的潜力。
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满分秘诀六、介词短语位于句首
38.没有你的认可和指导，我不可能写这篇文章。非常感谢。
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39.第二天早上，我很幸运地被邀请参加一个简单但令人印象深刻的颁奖典礼。
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40.在颁奖典礼上，我感到一种成就感，不是因为我赢了，而是因为我克服了恐惧和不情愿。
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满分秘诀七、直接引语/简洁对话
41.“祝贺你！”我的老师坚定地和我握手。
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42.“我就知道你会赢！我为你感到骄傲。你成功了！”我的老师兴奋地说。
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43.他紧紧地握着我的手说：“祝贺你！你是个好作家，继续写吧。”
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44.“你做得很好！你得了第一名！”我当场僵住了，感觉不可思议，喜出望外。
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满分秘诀八、主题升华句
45. 这次比赛改变了我的人生轨迹，让我找到了自己的方向。
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46.我的成功归功于我的社会老师，他是我写作道路上的指路明灯。
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47.我永远不会忘记这段经历，它将永远是我一生中最珍贵的回忆之一。
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48.老师是我人生旅程中的希望灯塔，激励我把“不可能”变成“可能”。
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49.从那时起，老师鼓励我的话语，就像薄雾中的灯塔，永远照亮我生命的天空。
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50.这次经历让我意识到，只要我们勇于尝试，就一定能够取得成功。
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51.我从这次比赛中学到了很多，不仅提高了写作能力，还增强了自信心。
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52.我感谢我的老师，他的鼓励和支持让我发现了自己的潜能。
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53.我永远不会忘记这次经历，它将永远是我人生中最宝贵的回忆之一。
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54.从那时起，我不仅能很好地写作，而且我知道了真相——恐惧永远不会造就未来，但希望会。
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55.到目前为止，我发表的故事赢得了国内外无数读者的心，给我带来了满足感和幸福感。
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