2024届湖南省高三九校联盟第二次联考英语读后续写--我的金色夹克讲义素材
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阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The school that I went to had a tradition during the eighth-grade graduation: a scholarship(奖学金) jacket was awarded to the student who had kept the highest grades for eight years, with his/her name written in gold letters on the pocket. I had been a straight A student since the first grade and this last year had looked forward very much to owning that jacket.
One day, close to graduation, I happened to overhear a conversation between my teachers, knowing that this year the scholarship jacket might go to Joann, whose father was on the Board(董事会). I went home very sad and cried into my pillow that night.
The next day when the headmaster called me into his office, I knew what it would be about. He looked uncomfortable and unhappy. I decided I wasn’t going to make it any easier for him, so I looked him straight in the eyes. He looked away and kept toying nervously with the pen on his desk.
“Martha,” he said, “there’s been a change in policy this year regarding the scholarship jacket. As you know, it has always been free.” He cleared his throat and continued, “This year the Board has decided to charge fifteen dollars for the jacket.”
Fifteen dollars! I knew it was just an excuse. And I also knew what it meant to my poor family. My father was a farmer who couldn’t earn enough money to feed eight children, so when I was six, I was given to my grandparents to raise.
I stared at him in shock. He still avoided looking in my eyes. “So if you are unable to pay the fifteen dollars, it will be given to the next one in line.” I didn’t need to ask who that was.
Standing with all my dignity(尊严), I said, “I’ll speak to my grandfather about it, sir, and let you know tomorrow.” I cried all the way back home, so by the time I got home my eyes were red and puffy.
续写提示：
I approached Grandpa, who was working in the bean field. ......
I dragged into the headmaster's office the next day. ......
大背景：
“我”所在学校有一个庆祝学术成就的传统：八年级成绩最优秀的学生将被授予一件象征荣誉的金绿色夹克。“我”家境贫寒无法参与任何课外活动，但是“我”从一年级开始就一直保持着全优的成绩记录。所以，对“我”而言，这件夹克不仅仅是学术成就的认可，更是多年来不懈努力和坚持的象征。
具体事件：
随着毕业季的临近，“我”无意中听到了历史老师（Mr. Frank）和校长之间关于是否将夹克授予Joann的激烈争执。Joann的父亲是社区中的有影响力人物，但Joann的成绩不符合要求。紧接着，校长以政策调整为由，告诉“我” 获得夹克需要支付15美元。而这一变化显然是为了排除“我”的资格，而让Joann受益。
“我”不安，伤心，回家跟爷爷讨论对策，明日答复。
P1：回到家后，我把发生的事情告诉了爷爷
P2: 第二天，校长叫我去他的办公室
思路分析：
从P2推出，续写第一段主要讲述在家里发生的故事：爷爷听到我的诉说后的反应和建议。
“爷爷的反应“这部分相对容易，主要通过感官描写，动作描写，情绪表达，甚至环境描写来表述。
“爷爷的建议”这部分的发挥空间比较大
1.爷爷这里认可我付出，安慰我，但...
2.爷爷在这里鼓励我 努力去争取
3.爷爷跟我一起到学校去争取
… …
续写第二段主要讲述事情的转机：“我”最终拿到了金绿夹克。问题是，这个转变是如何产生的呢？
1.“我”听从爷爷的建议（续写第一段详述）自己据理力争
2.爷爷也来到了学校，据理力争
3.历史老师说服了校长
4.校长自己醒悟了
…
续写第一段
P1：Upon arriving home, I told my grandpa what had happened.
首句注重衔接
这里可以添加“我”告诉爷爷的内容（主述推进），及，简要概括学校发生的事，可以在一定程度上提升融洽度; 同时也可以增加对“我”的描写：我是如何把事情经过讲给爷爷听的。
比如The entire story, including the principal's words and the sudden policy change, spilled out between sobs and sighs.
首句衔接也可直接添加爷爷听我讲述事情经过时的情绪变化，而不再重复学校具体发生的事情。
比如As Grandpa listened silently，his brow furrowed in thought, the lines on his face deepening with concern. (一个情绪外露的爷爷)
或者
Grandpa listened silently, his expression unreadable. (面不改色，饱经世故的爷爷)
角色互动拓展情节：描述了爷爷后，镜头到“我”
“我”讲完了（“我”在这里只是一个简单过度，毕竟本段的核心应该是爷爷）
Shortly after I finished,
镜头回到“爷爷” (动作链：站起来，走过去，双手放在我的肩膀上)
he stood up, walked over to me, and placed his weathered hands on my shoulder.
爷爷的建议, 这个地方我选择了“爷爷认可我的努力并鼓励我去争取”
“Martha. The jacket is not just a piece of clothing; it's a symbol of your dedication and perseverance”. he said with a resolve. “It is yours by right, not by wealth”.
“我”的反应
His words filled me with a mix of fear and courage. I knew challenging the school's decision wouldn't be easy, but with Grandpa's unwavering support, I felt a spark of hope.（回应阅读原文的尾句“ I’ll speak to my grandfather and let you know tomorrow,” 跟爷爷谈了，决定也做出来了）
续写第二段
P2: The next day, the principal called me to his office.
首句衔接：校长喊“我”到他办公室，衔接部分可以描述“我”路上的心情
As I walked down the corridor, my heart raced with a sliver of hope.
或者，直接写走进办公室
As I walked in, I was prepared to explain my decision, but the principal’s first words took me by surprise.
校长态度改变的原因：可能是阅读中提及的历史老师说服了他
"Martha,” he cleared his throat and said, “Your history teacher, Mr. Frank, and I had a long discussion after you left yesterday, and we've realized charging fifteen dollars for the scholarship jacket goes against the very spirit of this award. Therefore, we will present it to you at the graduation ceremony for your highest grades during the last eight years."
“我”的感受+升华
Relief washed over me, and a smile tugged at the corners of my lips, growing wider until it stretched across my face.
The real victory was not the jacket itself, but the lesson learned about standing up for what is right, a lesson taught by my grandpa and Mr. Frank.
The school that I went to had a tradition during the eighth-grade graduation: a scholarship(奖学金) jacket was awarded to the student who had kept the highest grades for eight years, with his/her name written in gold letters on the pocket. I had been a straight A student since the first grade and this last year had looked forward very much to owning that jacket.
One day, close to graduation, I happened to overhear a conversation between my teachers, knowing that this year the scholarship jacket might go to Joann, whose father was on the Board(董事会). I went home very sad and cried into my pillow that night.
The next day when the headmaster called me into his office, I knew what it would be about. He looked uncomfortable and unhappy. I decided I wasn’t going to make it any easier for him, so I looked him straight in the eyes. He looked away and kept toying nervously with the pen on his desk.
“Martha,” he said, “there’s been a change in policy this year regarding the scholarship jacket. As you know, it has always been free.” He cleared his throat and continued, “This year the Board has decided to charge fifteen dollars for the jacket.”
Fifteen dollars! I knew it was just an excuse. And I also knew what it meant to my poor family. My father was a farmer who couldn’t earn enough money to feed eight children, so when I was six, I was given to my grandparents to raise.
I stared at him in shock. He still avoided looking in my eyes. “So if you are unable to pay the fifteen dollars, it will be given to the next one in line.” I didn’t need to ask who that was.
Standing with all my dignity(尊严), I said, “I’ll speak to my grandfather about it, sir, and let you know tomorrow.” I cried all the way back home, so by the time I got home my eyes were red and puffy.
续写提示：
I approached Grandpa, who was working in the bean field. ......
I dragged into the headmaster's office the next day. ......
大背景：
“我”所在学校有一个庆祝学术成就的传统：八年级成绩最优秀的学生将被授予一件象征荣誉的金绿色夹克。“我”家境贫寒无法参与任何课外活动，但是“我”从一年级开始就一直保持着全优的成绩记录。所以，对“我”而言，这件夹克不仅仅是学术成就的认可，更是多年来不懈努力和坚持的象征。
具体事件：
随着毕业季的临近，“我”无意中听到了历史老师（Mr. Frank）和校长之间关于是否将夹克授予Joann的激烈争执。Joann的父亲是社区中的有影响力人物，但Joann的成绩不符合要求。紧接着，校长以政策调整为由，告诉“我” 获得夹克需要支付15美元。而这一变化显然是为了排除“我”的资格，而让Joann受益。
“我”不安，伤心，回家跟爷爷讨论对策，明日答复。
P1：回到家后，我把发生的事情告诉了爷爷
P2: 第二天，校长叫我去他的办公室
思路分析：
从P2推出，续写第一段主要讲述在家里发生的故事：爷爷听到我的诉说后的反应和建议。
“爷爷的反应“这部分相对容易，主要通过感官描写，动作描写，情绪表达，甚至环境描写来表述。
“爷爷的建议”这部分的发挥空间比较大
1.爷爷这里认可我付出，安慰我，但...
2.爷爷在这里鼓励我 努力去争取
3.爷爷跟我一起到学校去争取
… …
续写第二段主要讲述事情的转机：“我”最终拿到了金绿夹克。问题是，这个转变是如何产生的呢？
1.“我”听从爷爷的建议（续写第一段详述）自己据理力争
2.爷爷也来到了学校，据理力争
3.历史老师说服了校长
4.校长自己醒悟了
…
续写第一段
P1：Upon arriving home, I told my grandpa what had happened.
首句注重衔接
这里可以添加“我”告诉爷爷的内容（主述推进），及，简要概括学校发生的事，可以在一定程度上提升融洽度; 同时也可以增加对“我”的描写：我是如何把事情经过讲给爷爷听的。
比如The entire story, including the principal's words and the sudden policy change, spilled out between sobs and sighs.
首句衔接也可直接添加爷爷听我讲述事情经过时的情绪变化，而不再重复学校具体发生的事情。
比如As Grandpa listened silently，his brow furrowed in thought, the lines on his face deepening with concern. (一个情绪外露的爷爷)
或者
Grandpa listened silently, his expression unreadable. (面不改色，饱经世故的爷爷)
角色互动拓展情节：描述了爷爷后，镜头到“我”
“我”讲完了（“我”在这里只是一个简单过度，毕竟本段的核心应该是爷爷）
Shortly after I finished,
镜头回到“爷爷” (动作链：站起来，走过去，双手放在我的肩膀上)
he stood up, walked over to me, and placed his weathered hands on my shoulder.
爷爷的建议, 这个地方我选择了“爷爷认可我的努力并鼓励我去争取”
“Martha. The jacket is not just a piece of clothing; it's a symbol of your dedication and perseverance”. he said with a resolve. “It is yours by right, not by wealth”.
“我”的反应
His words filled me with a mix of fear and courage. I knew challenging the school's decision wouldn't be easy, but with Grandpa's unwavering support, I felt a spark of hope.（回应阅读原文的尾句“ I’ll speak to my grandfather and let you know tomorrow,” 跟爷爷谈了，决定也做出来了）
续写第二段
P2: The next day, the principal called me to his office.
首句衔接：校长喊“我”到他办公室，衔接部分可以描述“我”路上的心情
As I walked down the corridor, my heart raced with a sliver of hope.
或者，直接写走进办公室
As I walked in, I was prepared to explain my decision, but the principal’s first words took me by surprise.
校长态度改变的原因：可能是阅读中提及的历史老师说服了他
"Martha,” he cleared his throat and said, “Your history teacher, Mr. Frank, and I had a long discussion after you left yesterday, and we've realized charging fifteen dollars for the scholarship jacket goes against the very spirit of this award. Therefore, we will present it to you at the graduation ceremony for your highest grades during the last eight years."
“我”的感受+升华
Relief washed over me, and a smile tugged at the corners of my lips, growing wider until it stretched across my face.
The real victory was not the jacket itself, but the lesson learned about standing up for what is right, a lesson taught by my grandpa and Mr. Frank.