中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
专题八 书面表达
书面表达是初中英语学业水平考试中最能直观地检验学生英语运用能力的题型，主要测试学生综合运用所学语言知识和英语表达的能力，即考查学生运用所掌握的词、句、语法、篇章结构等知识与技能表达观点、思想和情感，进行书面交流的能力。可以较为全面地测试考生的语言基本功。
2019-2023年近五年浙江杭州中考书面表达：应用文——回复邮件
年份 内容 体裁 题材
2019 回复Linda的邮件，介绍自己即将去罗马的兄弟 应用文 社会服务与人际沟通
2020 回复Larry的邮件，接受给留学生做中国民乐讲座的邀请并询问细节 应用文 社会服务与人际沟通
2021 回复Matt的邮件，接受参加聚会的邀请 应用文 社会服务与人际沟通
2022 回复交换生Jack的邮件，介绍学校有趣的活动与中国变化 应用文 生活与学习
2023 回复Jack的邮件，介绍来杭州需要带的东西以及送什么礼物 应用文 社会服务与人际沟通
回复邮件
书面表达题的话题通常与学生的学习和生活紧密关联，体裁有生活应用类，人物、事件等故事类，文化传统、祖国建设等介绍类，对图表、流程图等进行描述的说明类，或对某一话题、事件等发表自己观点的夹叙夹议类，等等。题目的任务表现形式多样，一般有明确的任务要求、必要的支持性信息和限定条件。支持性信息有图画、图表、提纲、提示词等。学生应根据写作要求和限定条件，利用所给的支持性信息，尽自己所学、所能，将自己的英语水平展示出来。
试题一般都提供一定的情景内容，内容多与学生日常生活实际相联系。提供情景内容的形式有材料、提纲、图标或图画等。试题也注重考查考生表达个人思想、再现生活经历、描述周边人物和事件以及发表相关观点的能力。近年来，应用文是考查的重点，其涵盖面也十分广泛，包括活动安排、调查报告、倡议书、感谢信、书面通知、自荐应聘、请假条、规则介绍等方面。
具体要求如下：
1.紧扣主题，覆盖内容要点，行文连贯，条理清楚，逻辑严密，格式正确，符合英语表达习惯。
2.词汇丰富，语言优美，无明显的句法、词法、词义、拼写错误。
3.长度符合要求，以写约110词的任务要求为例，词数尽量不少于90词或多于130词；书写要工整、规范。
仔细审题，明确任务
仔细阅读书面表达题的任务，根据所提供的支持性信息，如图表、提纲等，明确写作要求，确定题材和体裁。
厘清要点，列出提纲
根据所给图表或提示，厘清文章写作要点，搭好作文框架；再三检查所列提纲是否已涵盖所需要点，是否可以达成写作目的。
撰写初稿，连贯表达
依据提纲内容，用自己能熟练运用的词语和句型等，撰写初稿。在拟初稿过程中，除了确保作文内容涵盖所有要点外，也需关注文章表达的连贯性和逻辑的严密性。同时还需注意语言的地道性，符合英语的表达习惯，避免中文思维。
回顾全文，修改润色
仔细阅读所写文章初稿，检查内容是否充实，句子的结构是否正确，句子是否通顺，文章格式是否符合要求，单词拼法、标点符号及大小写是否正确等。必要时，可运用丰富的词汇和句型来完善文章。
浙江省中考英语书面表达评分标准如下(以满分20分为例)：
采分点 满分 可给分值
1.内容充实，覆盖要点7 (内容、要点) 7 6~7分:描述所有信息，内容合理、丰富 3~5分:描述了大部分信息，内容比较合理 1~2分:描述了小部分信息，内容不合理 0分: 没有作答或描述内容与主题无关
2.用词适切，语法正确 (词汇、语法、句型) 7 6~7分:用词适切，句型变化多样且有效，完全 或基本没有语言错误 3~5分:用词基本适切，句型较为单一，有少量 语言错误，但不影响理解 1~2分:有较多语言错误，一定程度上影响理解 0分: 有大量语言错误，影响了理解
3.结构紧凑，意思连贯(语意、连词、指代) 4 3~4分:行文连贯，连接词使用恰当，指代清晰 1~2分:行文不够连贯，连接词使用不够恰当， 指代不够清晰 0分: 没有连贯意识
4.书写规范，词数适宜(标点符号、大小写、词数) 2 2分:大小写、标点正确，词数达标， 书写规范整洁 1分:大小写、标点有部分错误，词数达标，书写 尚可辨认 0分:大小写、标点错误较多，语言应用不规范， 词数严重不足，书写难以辨认
1.丰富词汇、灵活表达
在写作时应尽量不要反复使用相同的词汇，以避免文章看起来枯燥、呆板。英语中相同的意思往往有不同的表达方式。用稍难单词或短语代替一些简单、常见的表达，可以使文章更生动、更有表现力。
如: You should try your best to use the new words in your daily life.
升格→You are supposed to make every effort to use the new words in your daily life.
2.扩写句子
写作的时候，我们常遇到写完主谓宾就不知道如何往下写的情况。这时可以运用一定的方法对句子进行扩展，以表达更完整、更具体的意思。
添加定语对名词进行限制或说明，如形容词、介词短语、分词短语、定语从句等。
如: He is a student.
升格1→He is a hard-working student.
升格2→He is a hard-working student(studying)in Sunshine School.
升格3→He is a hard-working student in Sunshine School who always gets good grades,
添加状语表示时间、地点、方式、程度、目的、原因、结果等，如副词、不定式、分词、状语从句等。
如: We should take good care of our eyes.
升格(扩写原因)-We should take good care of our eyes because eyes are the windows to the soul.
You should communicate with your parents often.
升格(扩写目的)→You should communicate with your parents often to get along well with them.
There is nothing to worry about the exam.
升格(扩写条件)→There is nothing to worry about the exam as long as you prepare well for it.
添加同位语，如名词、名词短语等。
如: Dunhuang is an amazing city.
(添加同位语)→Dunhuang is an amazing city,one of the main stops on the Silk Road.
添加例子作补充说明，如用like，such as列举事物或用for example举例说明等。
如: We should pay more attention to personal health.
升格(扩写事例)→We should pay more attention to personal health such as wearing the mask and keeping one metre away from others.
Bad eyesight brings trouble to our life and study.
升格(举例说明)→Bad eyesight brings trouble to our life and study. For example.if we leave our glasses at home,we can't see the blackboard clearly in class.
3.巧用连接词
恰当地运用连接词把词与词、短语与短语、句与句连接起来，这样可以使语言表达更加准确、流畅。连接词功用广泛，有表示并列或选择关系的，有表示转折关系的，有表示因果关系的，有表示条件或让步的，有表示目的或结果的，在选用时要注意正确使用。
4.运用高分句式
写作中恰当运用固定句式不仅可以避免语法错误，还可以使表达更加多样化，从而使文意更加生动。如it代替动词不定式作形式主语或宾语，“make十宾语十宾语补足语”，动名词短语作主语等，此外，灵活改变句子的表达方式，把介词短语、动词不定式或副词等放在句子的开头，也能使句子形式更加多样。
5.行文连贯
行文连贯是衡量书面表达水平的重要标志之一，但很多同学在写作中却往往忽视这一点。如何做到行文连贯呢？我们可以恰当使用连接词，尤其是在引出下文、承上搞述、结束话题和总结话题时使用，使全文条理清楚、结构紧凑。
6.巧用谚语，妙笔生花
写作中巧用格言、谚语，可以丰富文章内容，增强说服力，为文章增色添彩，同时也能展示考生强大的语言积累水平。
【真题在线】
2019年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平,最近收到意大利朋友 Linda 的电子邮件。以下是邮件的一部分,请你阅读后回复,词数 80 左右。
2020年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平，请阅读以下邮件并回复。内容包括接受邀请并询问至少三个相关细节 (如具体地点……)
注意：
1）词数80左右；
2）可适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯。
Dear Li Ping, We would like to invite you to give us a talk on Chinese folk music. The talk will be on the evening of Friday, July 10th at 7:00. If you're able to come, please reply in writing to this invitation by July 2nd. Hope you can make it! Larry Smith President of Foreign Students' Club
Dear Larry,
Yours,
Li Ping
2021年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平，请阅读以下邮件，接受邀请并回复。词数 80 左右，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Hi Li Ping， How is everything going with you？Next week my cousin Mike is staying with me We're having a party next Saturday. Please come!We'll have lots of drinks. But if you remember，can you bring some Chinese food？The party will be starting at 6 pm. What time do you think you'll be coming？Ill probably need one or two people to help me tidy up after the party. Do you think you'll be able to stay and help？ Anyway，hope you can make it. Please write back to tell me if you can come or not. All he best， Matt
Dear Matt，
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Li Ping
2022年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平, 请阅读以下邮件, 接受邀请并回复。词数 80 左右, 可适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯。
To: LiPing@ Subject: Exchange Visit! Hi there, Li Ping! My name’s Jack and I’m going to be at your school for the exchange visit next month. I’m really excited about it! Well, why am I writing right now For one thing, I really want to know something about the interesting activities at your school, so could you introduce one of them Also, I am interested in Chinese culture. So what do you suggest I do after school! Take care and hope to hear from you soon. Jack
Dear Jack,
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2023年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平，请你对英国朋友Jack的邮件进行回复。词数80左右，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
TO LiPing@ SUBJECT C U soon! Hi Li Ping Next week I’ll be with you in Hangzhou. I can’t wait! It’s going to be so cool! We can do lots of exciting things together! I need to pack for my trip. What should I bring with me Is there a swimming pool or tennis center nearby I’d like to get you a gift from where I live. What would you like me to get you I’m so excited about the trip! See you soon. Jack
Hi Jack,
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Li Ping
【限时训练】
嘉兴
假如你是李华，为营造更好的校园英语氛围，你班决定以学校花园为载体，开展“Create Our Outdoor Classroom”项目式学习（COOC Project），经过分组讨论，你们形成了Plan A与Plan B 两个实施方案（见下表）。请你选择其中一个方案，用英语写一篇短文，代表小组在英语拓展课上就你们所选方案的内容和优势进行回报。
注意：(1)短文必须包含表中你所选方案的所有信息，并适当发挥。
(2)文中不得出现与你身份相关的信息。
(3)词数：80~100。短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear classmates,
I’m very proud to share our plan with you today. The plan we choose is _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
That’s all. Thank you!
台州
毕业之际，学校英文报将举行以“My dream job”为题的征文比赛。请你根据自己的理想，选择下表中一个职业或自行确定另一个职业写一篇英语短文，向校英文报投稿。
内容要点 参考词汇
What do you want to be when you grow up a teacher a scientist
Why do you want to be a(n)… ●be good at communicating ●work with children ●be interested in science ●invent new products
How are you going to do that ●get a good education ●learn how to teach children ●study science hard ●do scientific research
Where are you going to work ●… ●…
When are you going to start ●… ●…
注意：(1)文中必须包括所给的内容要点，可适当发挥，参考词汇仅供选择使用；(2)文中不能出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息；
(3)词数80～100。
My dream job
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温州
最近，用手机APP买菜的人多了。手机菜场菜品丰富、洗净配好、预约送菜上门……外国朋友对此也很感兴趣。
请你以A New Use of the Mobile Phone为题，写一篇110词左右的英语短文介绍手机买菜带来的便利，让外国朋友了解中国人民生活中的这个新变化。
A New Use of the Mobile Phone
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专题八 书面表达
书面表达是初中英语学业水平考试中最能直观地检验学生英语运用能力的题型，主要测试学生综合运用所学语言知识和英语表达的能力，即考查学生运用所掌握的词、句、语法、篇章结构等知识与技能表达观点、思想和情感，进行书面交流的能力。可以较为全面地测试考生的语言基本功。
2019-2023年近五年浙江杭州中考书面表达：应用文——回复邮件
年份 内容 体裁 题材
2019 回复Linda的邮件，介绍自己即将去罗马的兄弟 应用文 社会服务与人际沟通
2020 回复Larry的邮件，接受给留学生做中国民乐讲座的邀请并询问细节 应用文 社会服务与人际沟通
2021 回复Matt的邮件，接受参加聚会的邀请 应用文 社会服务与人际沟通
2022 回复交换生Jack的邮件，介绍学校有趣的活动与中国变化 应用文 生活与学习
2023 回复Jack的邮件，介绍来杭州需要带的东西以及送什么礼物 应用文 社会服务与人际沟通
回复邮件
书面表达题的话题通常与学生的学习和生活紧密关联，体裁有生活应用类，人物、事件等故事类，文化传统、祖国建设等介绍类，对图表、流程图等进行描述的说明类，或对某一话题、事件等发表自己观点的夹叙夹议类，等等。题目的任务表现形式多样，一般有明确的任务要求、必要的支持性信息和限定条件。支持性信息有图画、图表、提纲、提示词等。学生应根据写作要求和限定条件，利用所给的支持性信息，尽自己所学、所能，将自己的英语水平展示出来。
试题一般都提供一定的情景内容，内容多与学生日常生活实际相联系。提供情景内容的形式有材料、提纲、图标或图画等。试题也注重考查考生表达个人思想、再现生活经历、描述周边人物和事件以及发表相关观点的能力。近年来，应用文是考查的重点，其涵盖面也十分广泛，包括活动安排、调查报告、倡议书、感谢信、书面通知、自荐应聘、请假条、规则介绍等方面。
具体要求如下：
1.紧扣主题，覆盖内容要点，行文连贯，条理清楚，逻辑严密，格式正确，符合英语表达习惯。
2.词汇丰富，语言优美，无明显的句法、词法、词义、拼写错误。
3.长度符合要求，以写约110词的任务要求为例，词数尽量不少于90词或多于130词；书写要工整、规范。
仔细审题，明确任务
仔细阅读书面表达题的任务，根据所提供的支持性信息，如图表、提纲等，明确写作要求，确定题材和体裁。
厘清要点，列出提纲
根据所给图表或提示，厘清文章写作要点，搭好作文框架；再三检查所列提纲是否已涵盖所需要点，是否可以达成写作目的。
撰写初稿，连贯表达
依据提纲内容，用自己能熟练运用的词语和句型等，撰写初稿。在拟初稿过程中，除了确保作文内容涵盖所有要点外，也需关注文章表达的连贯性和逻辑的严密性。同时还需注意语言的地道性，符合英语的表达习惯，避免中文思维。
回顾全文，修改润色
仔细阅读所写文章初稿，检查内容是否充实，句子的结构是否正确，句子是否通顺，文章格式是否符合要求，单词拼法、标点符号及大小写是否正确等。必要时，可运用丰富的词汇和句型来完善文章。
浙江省中考英语书面表达评分标准如下(以满分20分为例)：
采分点 满分 可给分值
1.内容充实，覆盖要点7 (内容、要点) 7 6~7分:描述所有信息，内容合理、丰富 3~5分:描述了大部分信息，内容比较合理 1~2分:描述了小部分信息，内容不合理 0分: 没有作答或描述内容与主题无关
2.用词适切，语法正确 (词汇、语法、句型) 7 6~7分:用词适切，句型变化多样且有效，完全 或基本没有语言错误 3~5分:用词基本适切，句型较为单一，有少量 语言错误，但不影响理解 1~2分:有较多语言错误，一定程度上影响理解 0分: 有大量语言错误，影响了理解
3.结构紧凑，意思连贯(语意、连词、指代) 4 3~4分:行文连贯，连接词使用恰当，指代清晰 1~2分:行文不够连贯，连接词使用不够恰当， 指代不够清晰 0分: 没有连贯意识
4.书写规范，词数适宜(标点符号、大小写、词数) 2 2分:大小写、标点正确，词数达标， 书写规范整洁 1分:大小写、标点有部分错误，词数达标，书写 尚可辨认 0分:大小写、标点错误较多，语言应用不规范， 词数严重不足，书写难以辨认
1.丰富词汇、灵活表达
在写作时应尽量不要反复使用相同的词汇，以避免文章看起来枯燥、呆板。英语中相同的意思往往有不同的表达方式。用稍难单词或短语代替一些简单、常见的表达，可以使文章更生动、更有表现力。
如: You should try your best to use the new words in your daily life.
升格→You are supposed to make every effort to use the new words in your daily life.
2.扩写句子
写作的时候，我们常遇到写完主谓宾就不知道如何往下写的情况。这时可以运用一定的方法对句子进行扩展，以表达更完整、更具体的意思。
添加定语对名词进行限制或说明，如形容词、介词短语、分词短语、定语从句等。
如: He is a student.
升格1→He is a hard-working student.
升格2→He is a hard-working student(studying)in Sunshine School.
升格3→He is a hard-working student in Sunshine School who always gets good grades,
添加状语表示时间、地点、方式、程度、目的、原因、结果等，如副词、不定式、分词、状语从句等。
如: We should take good care of our eyes.
升格(扩写原因)-We should take good care of our eyes because eyes are the windows to the soul.
You should communicate with your parents often.
升格(扩写目的)→You should communicate with your parents often to get along well with them.
There is nothing to worry about the exam.
升格(扩写条件)→There is nothing to worry about the exam as long as you prepare well for it.
添加同位语，如名词、名词短语等。
如: Dunhuang is an amazing city.
(添加同位语)→Dunhuang is an amazing city,one of the main stops on the Silk Road.
添加例子作补充说明，如用like，such as列举事物或用for example举例说明等。
如: We should pay more attention to personal health.
升格(扩写事例)→We should pay more attention to personal health such as wearing the mask and keeping one metre away from others.
Bad eyesight brings trouble to our life and study.
升格(举例说明)→Bad eyesight brings trouble to our life and study. For example.if we leave our glasses at home,we can't see the blackboard clearly in class.
3.巧用连接词
恰当地运用连接词把词与词、短语与短语、句与句连接起来，这样可以使语言表达更加准确、流畅。连接词功用广泛，有表示并列或选择关系的，有表示转折关系的，有表示因果关系的，有表示条件或让步的，有表示目的或结果的，在选用时要注意正确使用。
4.运用高分句式
写作中恰当运用固定句式不仅可以避免语法错误，还可以使表达更加多样化，从而使文意更加生动。如it代替动词不定式作形式主语或宾语，“make十宾语十宾语补足语”，动名词短语作主语等，此外，灵活改变句子的表达方式，把介词短语、动词不定式或副词等放在句子的开头，也能使句子形式更加多样。
5.行文连贯
行文连贯是衡量书面表达水平的重要标志之一，但很多同学在写作中却往往忽视这一点。如何做到行文连贯呢？我们可以恰当使用连接词，尤其是在引出下文、承上搞述、结束话题和总结话题时使用，使全文条理清楚、结构紧凑。
6.巧用谚语，妙笔生花
写作中巧用格言、谚语，可以丰富文章内容，增强说服力，为文章增色添彩，同时也能展示考生强大的语言积累水平。
【真题在线】
2019年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平,最近收到意大利朋友 Linda 的电子邮件。以下是邮件的一部分,请你阅读后回复,词数 80 左右。
【答案】
Dear Linda,
Thank you so much for agreeing to show my brother around Rome. Now let me tell you something about my brother. He is thirteen years old, easy-going and humorous-we get along really well. He loves different cultures. He is interested in museums and likes trying local food.
My brother is also cute. He's of medium height with short straight black hair. He is good at Chinese kungfu, and usually wears T-shirts and jeans.
Thanks again for your help!
Yours,
Li Ping
【分析】这是一篇应用文写作。首先认真阅读题目所给的电子邮件，了解收到的电子邮件的内容，然后根据要求做出回复。首先感谢Linda同意带着弟弟去罗马观光，接着介绍了自己弟弟的基本信息，最后对Linda表示感谢。
【点评】这篇作文行文连贯、要点齐全，利用了所学句式和一些短语，例如 He's of medium height with short straight black hair. we get along really well. 使文章增色不少。文章拼写正确，没有语法错误，逻辑通顺，是一篇优秀的作文。
2020年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平，请阅读以下邮件并回复。内容包括接受邀请并询问至少三个相关细节 (如具体地点……)
注意：
1）词数80左右；
2）可适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯。
Dear Li Ping, We would like to invite you to give us a talk on Chinese folk music. The talk will be on the evening of Friday, July 10th at 7:00. If you're able to come, please reply in writing to this invitation by July 2nd. Hope you can make it! Larry Smith President of Foreign Students' Club
Dear Larry,
Yours,
Li Ping
【答案】
Dear Larry,
Thank you so much for your invitation. As a big fan of Chinese folk music, it's my great honor to share something interesting with all of you. I'm available on the Friday evening, July 10th and I'll be there on time. But I am still wondering more details about the talk. The first question I would like to know is where the talk will be held. Moreover, I will appreciate if you tell me how long the talk will last so that I can arrange the content of my talk. The last one is who will come to the talk. Thanks again for your invitation.
Looking forward to your reply!
Yours,
Li Ping
【知识点】应用文写作
【解析】【分析】这篇作文是回复邀请函，格式方面：文章为是书信类，根据已有的邮件进行回复，开头和结尾己经给出。审题方面：根据题目的信息可以看到，作文的要求是要根据邮件进行回复，所以需要我们对来信内容有很好地审核，提出自己的问题，从考察的内容看，这次的作文还是比较贴近生活实际和课本，平时这类的作文也有练习过，所以平时每个单元的作文练习还是要引起重视。结构方面：作文一定要注意格式和层次。感谢并接受邀请-询问细节-再次感谢邀请。
【点评】这篇文章内容丰富、表达准确，恰当地使用了连词、固定搭配等，使文章语意通顺、上下文连贯。其中一些用法，如Thank you so much for；As a big fan of；share something interesting with；on time；be held；Moreover；how long；so that；arrange the content of；Looking forward to等，都是可圈可点之处。
2021年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平，请阅读以下邮件，接受邀请并回复。词数 80 左右，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Hi Li Ping， How is everything going with you？Next week my cousin Mike is staying with me We're having a party next Saturday. Please come!We'll have lots of drinks. But if you remember，can you bring some Chinese food？The party will be starting at 6 pm. What time do you think you'll be coming？Ill probably need one or two people to help me tidy up after the party. Do you think you'll be able to stay and help？ Anyway，hope you can make it. Please write back to tell me if you can come or not. All he best， Matt
Dear Matt，
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Li Ping
【答案】
Dear Matt,
It’s good to hear from you. Everything is fine with me here. Thanks for the invitation! I will definitely come! It will be good to meet Mike. I’ll arrive at around 5:30 next Saturday and bring some traditional Chinese foods, like dumplings and zongzi for you. I hope you would like them. Don’t worry. I will stay after the party to help you clean up.
Thanks again for the invitation. I am really looking forward to it!
All the best.
Li Ping
【详解】
1.题干解读：该题目属于应用文写作，但写作时要按邮件格式写。在写作时根据收到的邮件内容，接受邀请并回复，内容包括几点到达，以及所带的食物等。
2.本文应该用第一人称为主来叙述内容；时态采用一般将来时和一般现在时；在写作时，力求语言准确，格式准确，保证条理清晰。
2022年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平, 请阅读以下邮件, 接受邀请并回复。词数 80 左右, 可适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯。
To: LiPing@ Subject: Exchange Visit! Hi there, Li Ping! My name’s Jack and I’m going to be at your school for the exchange visit next month. I’m really excited about it! Well, why am I writing right now For one thing, I really want to know something about the interesting activities at your school, so could you introduce one of them Also, I am interested in Chinese culture. So what do you suggest I do after school! Take care and hope to hear from you soon. Jack
Dear Jack,
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【答案】
Dear Jack,
I’m glad to know that you will come for the exchange visit.
At school, we have many different interesting activities, such as talent show, basketball competition and so on. These activities gives us a good chance to show our talents and it is of great help for us to communicate with others.
As for Chinese culture, I suggest that you visit the Hangzhou National Tea Museum, where you can learn something about the history of Chinese tea. If you are interested in traditional Chinese opera, Hangzhou Yue Opera Theater is a good place
Hopes this helps. If you want to know something more, please write to me.
——Li Ping
【解析】文章主要围绕两个方面展开：
1、interesting activities at your school;
2、Your suggestions about what Jack can do after school;
2023年杭州中考真题
假定你是李平，请你对英国朋友Jack的邮件进行回复。词数80左右，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
TO LiPing@ SUBJECT C U soon! Hi Li Ping Next week I’ll be with you in Hangzhou. I can’t wait! It’s going to be so cool! We can do lots of exciting things together! I need to pack for my trip. What should I bring with me Is there a swimming pool or tennis center nearby I’d like to get you a gift from where I live. What would you like me to get you I’m so excited about the trip! See you soon. Jack
Hi Jack,
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Li Ping
【答案】
Hi Jack,
I am so glad to receive your email. I can’t wait to see you, too.
It will be very hot in Hangzhou next week, so you should bring some T-shirts and shorts as well as some sunscreen. There is a big swimming pool near my house. We can swim in it for free. In addition, there is a tennis center three kilometers from my home, so we can also go to play tennis. I like English local products very much. If it is convenient for you, please bring me some.
I am looking forward to meeting you.
Li Ping
【详解】
[总体分析]
① 题材：本文是一篇应用文，为电子邮件；
② 时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③ 提示：根据所给提示完成写作，不能遗漏信息，以第一人称为主。
[写作步骤]
第一步，首先表示自己很开心收到对方的邮件；
第二步，具体阐述他需要带的东西以及介绍家附近的游泳池或网球中心；
第三步，最后介绍自己想要对方带什么。
[亮点词汇]
①can’t wait to do迫不及待做
②as well as和，以及
③look forward to期待
[高分句型]
①It will be very hot in Hangzhou next week, so you should bring some T-shirts and shorts as well as some sunscreen. （so引导并列句）
②If it is convenient for you, please bring me some.（if引导的条件状语从句）
【限时训练】
嘉兴
假如你是李华，为营造更好的校园英语氛围，你班决定以学校花园为载体，开展“Create Our Outdoor Classroom”项目式学习（COOC Project），经过分组讨论，你们形成了Plan A与Plan B 两个实施方案（见下表）。请你选择其中一个方案，用英语写一篇短文，代表小组在英语拓展课上就你们所选方案的内容和优势进行回报。
注意：(1)短文必须包含表中你所选方案的所有信息，并适当发挥。
(2)文中不得出现与你身份相关的信息。
(3)词数：80~100。短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear classmates,
I’m very proud to share our plan with you today. The plan we choose is _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
That’s all. Thank you!
【答案】
例文：
Plan A
Dear classmates,
I’m very proud to share our plan with you today. The plan we choose is naming the plants in English.
There are mainly two steps. We’ll first do a survey to find information about the plants. We can surf the Internet, or ask our teachers for help if we meet with difficulties. The second step is to design name cards. We’ll describe each kind of plants in English. To make the cards look prettier, a photo of the plant will be included in each card.
We believe this plan will make our school garden a better place to learn about nature and improve our English. I can’t wait to see it come into practice.
That’s all. Thank you!
Plan B
Dear classmates,
I’m very proud to share our plan with you today. The plan we choose is creating an English corner.
The first thing we’ll do is to choose an area for it. As you see in the map, the grassland makes a good choice. We’ll decorate it with several tables and chairs, so that we can have comfortable talks. A shelf of English books and magazines will also be put there. Then we’re going to make some rules. For example, we need to take care of things, and of course, speak English only.
I’m sure this corner will become a popular place for us to improve our spoken English, and make more friends as well.
That’s all. Thank you!
【解析】
1.题干解读：本文是一篇材料作文。要求以“Create Our Outdoor Classroom”为主题，结合提示内容，选择一个方案进行介绍。注意要点齐全，可适当发挥。
2.写作指导：以Plan A为例，写作时要以第一人称来介绍，时态综合使用一般现在时和一般将来时。作文可分为四段，第一段引出话题；第二段介绍具体要怎么做；第三段介绍该计划预期的成果；第四段收尾。要保证语言连贯，无语法和拼写错误。
台州
毕业之际，学校英文报将举行以“My dream job”为题的征文比赛。请你根据自己的理想，选择下表中一个职业或自行确定另一个职业写一篇英语短文，向校英文报投稿。
内容要点 参考词汇
What do you want to be when you grow up a teacher a scientist
Why do you want to be a(n)… ●be good at communicating ●work with children ●be interested in science ●invent new products
How are you going to do that ●get a good education ●learn how to teach children ●study science hard ●do scientific research
Where are you going to work ●… ●…
When are you going to start ●… ●…
注意：(1)文中必须包括所给的内容要点，可适当发挥，参考词汇仅供选择使用；(2)文中不能出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息；
(3)词数80～100。
My dream job
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【答案】例文：
My dream job
We all have dream jobs. As for me, I dream to be a scientist. I have always been interested in science. I want to invent new products to improve people’s life and I also hope to discover the mysteries of the world.
To be a scientist, I need to take actions right now. First, I’m going to study science really hard. Second, I plan to do scientific research. And most importantly, I’ll read as many books as possible. If I become a scientist, I will live in Beijing where I can communicate with more experts. I believe my dream will come true if I work hard.
【解析】
1.题干解读：本文是一篇材料作文。以“我梦想的工作”为题写一篇短文。
2.写作指导：本文采用一般现在时，人称以第一人称为主。分为两段式：第一段介绍自己梦想的工作是什么；第二段介绍自己如何让自己的梦想实现。写作时保持主谓一致性，做到无语法和标点错误。
温州
最近，用手机APP买菜的人多了。手机菜场菜品丰富、洗净配好、预约送菜上门……外国朋友对此也很感兴趣。
请你以A New Use of the Mobile Phone为题，写一篇110词左右的英语短文介绍手机买菜带来的便利，让外国朋友了解中国人民生活中的这个新变化。
A New Use of the Mobile Phone
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【答案】例文：
A New Use of the Mobile Phone
Preparing for meals is tiring. You may have to spend hours getting everything ready for cooking. Now in China, new mobile apps are here to help.
These apps provide you with meat, fish, and vegetables, almost everything you need for a meal. You ,an order whenever you like and decide on the time for them to arrive. If you like. they can be washed, cut and packed for a certain dish. Some apps even guide you to cook step by step, making cooking easier.
Compared with the traditional way of going to the market, mobile apps save your time and energy. With such a new use of the mobile phone, you can enjoy a more relaxing life.
【详解】
这是一篇给材料作文。要求以A New Use of the Mobile Phone为题，写一篇英语短文介绍手机买菜带来的便利，让外国朋友了解中国人民生活中的这个新变化。首先认真审题，看清题目中的要求和要点；然后根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个要点中可能要用到的表达；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作。在写作时，注意连句成篇，保持文章的连贯性，要层次清楚，要点分明，中心突出。同时要注意语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯；尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，最好不要写太长的复合句；尽量选取简单的易拼写的单词，确保正确率；词汇、句式要丰富多样，可以为文章增色添彩。最后要细心复核检查，确保正确无误。
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