2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写 理解情节 构建情节 “十句五定”定大纲 课件-(共12张PPT)

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47. 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I grew up in a poor family with six brothers, three sisters, my father and mother. We had little money and few goods, but plenty of love and attention. I was happy and energetic. I understood that no matter how poor a person was, he could still afford a dream.【theme？】
My dream was athletics田径. By the time I was sixteen, I could throw a ninety-mile-per-hour fastball and hit anything moving on the football field. And I was so lucky that my high-school coach was Ollie Jarvis, who not only believed in me, but often told me “Dream is priceless”.【theme？】 However, when I was about to get off the ground使（某事物）开始运作或进行成功, one particular incident事件，事故 happened, which almost ruined my long-held长期以来的 dream.
STEP1 读懂故事，理清5W1H1E
Who
Who
It was the summer holiday in senior two and a friend recommended me for a summer job. I was offered $ 12.25 per pared with the average $3.5, that was a big sum. I was so excited, because this meant a chance for money in my pocket, certainly money for a new bike and new clothes, and the start of savings for a house for my mother. The prospect(前景)of the job was inviting诱人的，吸引人的, and I wanted to jump at the opportunity迅速逮住机会.
Then I realized I would have to give up summer baseball training to handle the work schedule. I didn't dare to tell my coach, I thought of the advice my mother often gave me when I lacked courage, "If you make your bed, you have to lie in it." I decided to talk to my coach in person亲自. After all, my dream of buying my mom a house and having money in my pocket was worth facing his disappointment to me.
When
What
What
Emotion
What
I Study the given story
Task 1 Summarize how the given story developed.
Build-up
Opening/Introduction
Ending
Resolution
续写部分
Story Mountain
1.Though born in a poor family，my dream was athletics.
2. I did well in sports. And my coach often told me “Dream is priceless”.
3. Facing the inviting summer job, I dreamed of making money but had to give up the training.
Dilemma/Conflict
positive negative
positive
Climax
4. I decided to talk to my
coach in person.

Then I realized I would have to give up summer baseball training to handle the work schedule. I didn't dare to tell my coach, I thought of the advice my mother often gave me when I lacked courage, "If you make your bed, you have to lie in it." I decided to talk to my coach in person亲自. After all, my dream of buying my mom a house and having money in my pocket was worth facing his disappointment to me.
I gathered my courage and knocked at his door.
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That question reminded me of what my coach used to say.________________________________________________________________________________
STEP 2 构建情节
四句定框架，
设疑并解答，
动作情绪和【对话】,
结尾主题要升华
上文结尾：决定找教练坦白
续写段1：I gathered my courage and knocked at his door.
续写段2：That question reminded me of what my coach used to say.
II.构建情节
四句定框架，设疑并解答，
动作情绪和【对话】,结尾主题要升华
段1尾句：承上启下，推动故事发展
段2结尾：顺接故事，升华主题
续写段1：I gathered my courage and knocked at his door.
就地取材，文字接龙（Para1首句）
2.
3.
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5. 就地取材，反向文字接龙（Para2首句）
续写段2：That question reminded me of what my coach used to say.
就地取材，文字接龙（Para2首句）
交代结局：问题解决（符合价值观结局）
10.点睛升华：价值观/感叹
III.写大纲：“十句五定法”
承上启下
顺接故事，升华主题
调配演员，描写情绪
动作/环境/语言
关键情节（由角色特点决定）
关键情节（同时空，各个角色做什么）
动作/环境/语言
设疑并解答，
动作情绪和“对话”
【STEP1理解故事】
本文以人物为线索，主要讲述了作者出生在并不富裕的家庭，但他很有运动天赋，梦想当一名运动员，高中时遇到了影响自己一生的教练Ollie Jarvis，他经常说的话是“梦想是无价的”。高二那年的暑假，作者想去做兼职补贴家用，因而打算放弃棒球训练，却不敢跟教练说，在母亲的鼓励下，作者决定当面跟教练说明情况。
【构建情节，定大纲】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我鼓起勇气敲响了他的门”可知，第一段可描写开门后，作者与教练之间的对话。
②由第二段首句内容“这个问题让我想起了我的教练过去常说的话。”可知，第二段可描写作者的心理变化及所做的决定。
2.续写线索：向教练坦白——教练生气并质问——恍然大悟——参加训练——获取奖学金——感悟
【答案】 I gathered my courage and knocked at his door. As expected（回应上文伏笔disappointment）, his face turned purple immediately. He glared at me like a bull.【情绪】 "You have your whole life to work," he said, “but your playing days are limited. You can't afford to waste them." 【语言】I stood before him with my head down. 【动作+情绪】“How much will you be paid, son ” He demanded. "$12.25 per hour.” “Well," he shrugged. “Is $12.25 an hour the price of a dream ”【语言，呼应下文that question】
【答案】That question reminded me of what my coach used to say. Yes, dream is priceless.(回应伏笔) It's stupid to earn pocket money at the expense of my dream.（所思） I held my head high and said firmly, “Sorry, Mr. Jarvis. I know what to do next." 【动作+情绪+对话】My coach smiled with great satisfaction. That summer I dedicated myself to baseball training. And one year later, I obtained a baseball scholarship to the University. I knew I would soon buy my mum a house. 【问题解决】Thankfully, I made a right choice. Without Mr. Jarvis, I would never know I could afford a dream.(回应伏笔，升华主题)
续写段1：...
就地取材，文字接龙（Para1首句）
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3.
4.
5. 就地取材，反向文字接龙（Para2首句）
续写段2：...
就地取材，文字接龙（Para2首句）
交代结局：问题解决（符合价值观结局）
10.点睛升华：价值观/感叹
读懂5W1H1E--构建情节--写大纲：“十句五定法”
承上启下
顺接故事，升华主题
调配演员，描写情绪
动作/环境/语言
关键情节（由角色特点决定）
关键情节（同时空，各个角色做什么）
动作/环境/语言
设疑并解答，
动作情绪和“对话”
“十句五定”
剩下的五句补齐细节【所见，所闻，所说，所做，所思+万能拥抱加哭泣（混分句式）】
续写语料库【常考主旨升华+环境描写】
1.所见：At the sight of sth, sb.
2.所闻：Upon hearing the news that..., sb.
3.所说：“...”said sb.,”...”
4.所做：【动作链+动作面/简单陈述】
sb. did sth, and did sth【并列几个谓语】
sb. did sth.,v-ing【谓语+非谓语】
5.所思
It was at the moment that sb. realized that...
It suddenly occurred to sb. that...