-2024届高考英语作文复习专项读后续写：良知和礼物讲义
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教学步骤
1. 分析文本，梳理故事情节，完成情节的语法填空。
2. 引导学生分析本文的故事山。
3. 根据前文伏笔，结合续写段落首句，进行自问自答式Self Question & Answer进行故事情节的推测；
4. 根据推测，结合微写作技能，完成对故事回落和结尾部分描写，注重对前文回应，加强协调性；
5. 点评学生优秀作品，提供范文。
6. 提供同样主题的续写，供参考和仿写。
读后续写：良知和礼物
Jenny stared at the store window longingly (渴望地) . There was nothing in this world that she wanted more than a happy Hanah doll and all that currently separated her from the hottest doll of the holiday season was a thin piece of glass and 29.95 plus tax. Unfortunately, Jenny didn't even have the 95 cents, so she let out a deep sigh and continued walking home.
Suddenly, a pink rectangle (矩形) in the snow caught her eye. Jenny walked over and realized it was a leather wallet She removed it from the snow, and opened the wallet to find a thick pile of folded green bills and two plastic cards. One was a credit card and the other an ID.
Jenny stared at the old woman in her ID photo. The woman had a beautiful smile that reminded Jenny of her grandma. Jenny sighed and then she put the wallet into her purse. She turned around and walked in the direction from which she came.
Jenny's heart beat quickly as she entered the store. She had long dreamed about this moment, but something didn't feel right about it. As she approached a neat pile of Happy Hannah dolls, she pushed away her feelings.She grasped one Happy Hannah doll.
As Jenny approached the register,the Happy Hannah Show theme song began playing. It was her mobile phone. It was her grandma. In one hand she held the Happy Hannah doll and in the other she held the phone on which her grandma was calling. Jenny's heart was filled with love and appreciation as she thought of her sweet old grandma. She put the doll down and picked up the phone call.
"Hi,Grandma I'm going to be a little bit late tonight. I've got to drop something off...Yeah, it was good......OK...Alright... I love you too." Jenny left the store and walked through the melting snow all the way to the other side of the town. She thought of her grandma as she rang the bell at 301 West Street.
Paragraph 1:The woman who answered the door had been crying recently and looked upset and anxious.
Paragraph 2:The woman took the wallet smilingly.
读后续写思维导图
读 写
Who 人物 When, where背景 What， How， why 情节 重要道具 Conflict 冲突、矛盾 情节发展 （action-response） Theme主题
Jenny,Jenny’s grandma, an old woman a lost wallet (包括：credit card and ID), a Happy Hannah Doll / 人与自我——主人公克服诱惑，拾金不昧。
Para1首句信息 Jenney认人、失主解释、Jenny告知钱包并递给她 /
Para2首句信息 失主感谢、Jenney开心、回家、 /
第一个环节：确定文章的要素
Characters:
人：Jenny,Jenny’s grandma, an old woman
物：a lost wallet (包括：credit card and ID), a Happy Hannah Doll
Feelings:
How did Jenny’s emotion change (list all the reasons)
第二个环节：确定文章的Theme
现在确定Theme了：
主人公克服诱惑，拾金不昧。（overcome the temptation, return the wallet to its owner）
如何通过文章列出的要素去体现主题？
Why did the author mention her Grandma
What do you know about the sentence: Something didn’t feel right
Did Jenny get her doll at last
失主给她钱，然后她去买自己的礼物；或者失主给她买礼物；或者Grandma给她买礼物。
这些都可以，但是我认为还有一个更好的选择：
Jenny看到失主的开心，并且看到她的钱能救急，觉得这就是她收到的最好的礼物了，她的精神受到了洗礼。
如果确定了主题，就要学会把文章的要素作为伏笔在不同的地方埋下，前后照应。
在第一段说明这个钱本身就是为了捐给慈善组织的；第二段老人说，孩子们终于有福了。
还可以自己加伏笔：老人说Jenny是一个天使。这个为结尾埋下伏笔。
→确定两段概要：
第一段：Jenney认人、失主解释、Jenny告知钱包并递给她。
第二段：失主感谢、Jenney开心、回家
P1:The woman who answered the door had been crying recently and looked upset and anxious.
“Are you Mrs. Green ” Jenny asked politely, recognizing her from the ID card instantly.
(作为一个陌生人，敲门后第一句应该是确定对方是不是她要找的人，直入主题容易推进故事发展。)
Mrs. Green nodded in confusion and let her come in.
(切换到Mrs. Green，根据生活常识，应该是困惑)
“Madam, did you lose something ” Jenny continued and asked some necessary questions.
（再次切换，符合Action-Response原则）
“I lost my wallet with the money to buy gifts for some poor children.” The old lady blurted out at last, her eyes rounding in surprise and sparkling with hope.
（此时不露声色地把老人的钱的用途说出来）
Overcome with guilt, Jenny felt her face burning and handed the wallet to her. Thank God, she would have disappointed those kids.
(这一段的心里描写很有必要的，和前文的愧疚照应，同时说明了Jenney是多么深刻认识到自己的以前想法和做法的不对。最后虚拟语气也是用的恰当，实际上虚拟语气在记叙文中很常见，一般刻画人物的后悔、惭愧或庆幸)
P2 The woman took the wallet smilingly.
She held it to her chest tightly and then hugged Jenny, tears streaming down her face.
（承接上文，同时刻画她的心理）
“You are the real angel. No one knows what the wallet means to the children.” She sobbed in gratitude.
（写失主的感激的同时，不忘记埋下伏笔）
Jenny’s soft heart was touched because her grandma often called her angel.
(这一句也是照应文章中说的，她想起了grandma的笑容)
That night, she darted across the street, the creaking of snow echoing in the air.
（环境的描写衬托她的开心）
How eager she was to tell her grandma that today she got a present more meaningful than Hannah doll—She was a real angel!
（女孩此时只想赶快告诉grandma：我是真正的天使啦！此句把她的可爱、纯洁刻画得惟妙惟肖）
范文：
The woman who answered the door had been crying recently and looked upset and anxious.
“Are you Mrs. Green ” Jenny asked politely with some certainty, recognizing the face from the ID card instantly.
The woman nodded in confusion and let the girl come in. After a brief conversation, it turned out that Mrs. Green lost her wallet on her way to the store with the money to buy gifts for some poor children.
Feeling her face burning with a sense of guilt as well as somewhat relief, Jenny took out the pink leather wallet, rejoicing to see Mrs. Green’s eyes rounding in surprise and sparkling with hope in a flash.
笔记：现在分词做状语；根据常识合理设置情节；句型”it turned out that...原来“；心理活动+动作+对方反应
The woman took the wallet smilingly.
She held it to her chest tightly and then pulled Jenny into her arms, tears streaming down her face. “You are the real angel. No one knows what the wallet means to the children.” She sobbed out her heartfelt gratitude.
Jenny’s soft heart was touched because her grandma often called her little angel, all her previous inner struggle giving way to the pure pride in her right choice.
That night, she darted across the streets, eager to tell her grandma that today she got a present more meaningful than Hannah doll—she was a real angel!
笔记：动作+表情描写；呼应词angel；心理转变句型；结尾句：人物离场+全新自我
最终自测：
The woman who answered the door had been crying recently and looked upset and anxious.
“你是格林太太吗？“珍妮礼貌地问道，立刻认出了身份证上的那张脸。
女人困惑地点了点头，让女孩进到家里来。简短交谈几句之后，原来格林太太在去商店的路上丢的钱包，里面有给一些贫苦孩子买礼物的钱。
珍妮感到脸上滚烫，有内疚也有一点如释重负，她拿出那个粉红色皮钱包，很高兴看到格林太太的眼睛惊讶地睁大了，一瞬间闪起了希望。
The woman took the wallet smilingly.
她把它紧紧地放在胸前，然后把珍妮拉进怀里，眼泪顺着脸流下来。“你是真正的天使。没人知道这个钱包对孩子们意味着什么。”她哭着表达了她衷心的感激之情。
珍妮柔软的心被感动了，因为她的奶奶经常称她为小天使，她之前所有的内心挣扎都让位于她对自己做了正确选择的纯粹骄傲。
那天晚上，她飞奔过一条条街道，急切地想告诉她的奶奶，今天她得到了一个比汉娜娃娃更有意义的礼物——她是一个真正的天使！
语料默写：
立刻认出了那张脸 ______________________________________
困惑地点头______________________________________
简短交谈几句之后______________________________________
原来... ______________________________________
感到脸上滚烫______________________________________
有内疚感也有一点如释重负______________________________________
很高兴看到______________________________________
眼睛惊讶地睁大了______________________________________
一瞬间闪起了希望______________________________________
把它紧紧地抱在胸前______________________________________
把某人拉进怀里______________________________________
眼泪顺着脸流下来______________________________________
哭着表达某人衷心的感激 ______________________________________
某人柔软的心被感动了______________________________________
所有之前的内心挣扎______________________________________
让位给了一种纯粹的骄傲之情 ______________________________________
飞奔过一条条街道______________________________________
1. 分析文本，梳理故事情节，完成情节的语法填空。
2. 引导学生分析本文的故事山。
3. 根据前文伏笔，结合续写段落首句，进行自问自答式Self Question & Answer进行故事情节的推测；
4. 根据推测，结合微写作技能，完成对故事回落和结尾部分描写，注重对前文回应，加强协调性；
5. 点评学生优秀作品，提供范文。
6. 提供同样主题的续写，供参考和仿写。
读后续写：良知和礼物
Jenny stared at the store window longingly (渴望地) . There was nothing in this world that she wanted more than a happy Hanah doll and all that currently separated her from the hottest doll of the holiday season was a thin piece of glass and 29.95 plus tax. Unfortunately, Jenny didn't even have the 95 cents, so she let out a deep sigh and continued walking home.
Suddenly, a pink rectangle (矩形) in the snow caught her eye. Jenny walked over and realized it was a leather wallet She removed it from the snow, and opened the wallet to find a thick pile of folded green bills and two plastic cards. One was a credit card and the other an ID.
Jenny stared at the old woman in her ID photo. The woman had a beautiful smile that reminded Jenny of her grandma. Jenny sighed and then she put the wallet into her purse. She turned around and walked in the direction from which she came.
Jenny's heart beat quickly as she entered the store. She had long dreamed about this moment, but something didn't feel right about it. As she approached a neat pile of Happy Hannah dolls, she pushed away her feelings.She grasped one Happy Hannah doll.
As Jenny approached the register,the Happy Hannah Show theme song began playing. It was her mobile phone. It was her grandma. In one hand she held the Happy Hannah doll and in the other she held the phone on which her grandma was calling. Jenny's heart was filled with love and appreciation as she thought of her sweet old grandma. She put the doll down and picked up the phone call.
"Hi,Grandma I'm going to be a little bit late tonight. I've got to drop something off...Yeah, it was good......OK...Alright... I love you too." Jenny left the store and walked through the melting snow all the way to the other side of the town. She thought of her grandma as she rang the bell at 301 West Street.
Paragraph 1:The woman who answered the door had been crying recently and looked upset and anxious.
Paragraph 2:The woman took the wallet smilingly.
读后续写思维导图
读 写
Who 人物 When, where背景 What， How， why 情节 重要道具 Conflict 冲突、矛盾 情节发展 （action-response） Theme主题
Jenny,Jenny’s grandma, an old woman a lost wallet (包括：credit card and ID), a Happy Hannah Doll / 人与自我——主人公克服诱惑，拾金不昧。
Para1首句信息 Jenney认人、失主解释、Jenny告知钱包并递给她 /
Para2首句信息 失主感谢、Jenney开心、回家、 /
第一个环节：确定文章的要素
Characters:
人：Jenny,Jenny’s grandma, an old woman
物：a lost wallet (包括：credit card and ID), a Happy Hannah Doll
Feelings:
How did Jenny’s emotion change (list all the reasons)
第二个环节：确定文章的Theme
现在确定Theme了：
主人公克服诱惑，拾金不昧。（overcome the temptation, return the wallet to its owner）
如何通过文章列出的要素去体现主题？
Why did the author mention her Grandma
What do you know about the sentence: Something didn’t feel right
Did Jenny get her doll at last
失主给她钱，然后她去买自己的礼物；或者失主给她买礼物；或者Grandma给她买礼物。
这些都可以，但是我认为还有一个更好的选择：
Jenny看到失主的开心，并且看到她的钱能救急，觉得这就是她收到的最好的礼物了，她的精神受到了洗礼。
如果确定了主题，就要学会把文章的要素作为伏笔在不同的地方埋下，前后照应。
在第一段说明这个钱本身就是为了捐给慈善组织的；第二段老人说，孩子们终于有福了。
还可以自己加伏笔：老人说Jenny是一个天使。这个为结尾埋下伏笔。
→确定两段概要：
第一段：Jenney认人、失主解释、Jenny告知钱包并递给她。
第二段：失主感谢、Jenney开心、回家
P1:The woman who answered the door had been crying recently and looked upset and anxious.
“Are you Mrs. Green ” Jenny asked politely, recognizing her from the ID card instantly.
(作为一个陌生人，敲门后第一句应该是确定对方是不是她要找的人，直入主题容易推进故事发展。)
Mrs. Green nodded in confusion and let her come in.
(切换到Mrs. Green，根据生活常识，应该是困惑)
“Madam, did you lose something ” Jenny continued and asked some necessary questions.
（再次切换，符合Action-Response原则）
“I lost my wallet with the money to buy gifts for some poor children.” The old lady blurted out at last, her eyes rounding in surprise and sparkling with hope.
（此时不露声色地把老人的钱的用途说出来）
Overcome with guilt, Jenny felt her face burning and handed the wallet to her. Thank God, she would have disappointed those kids.
(这一段的心里描写很有必要的，和前文的愧疚照应，同时说明了Jenney是多么深刻认识到自己的以前想法和做法的不对。最后虚拟语气也是用的恰当，实际上虚拟语气在记叙文中很常见，一般刻画人物的后悔、惭愧或庆幸)
P2 The woman took the wallet smilingly.
She held it to her chest tightly and then hugged Jenny, tears streaming down her face.
（承接上文，同时刻画她的心理）
“You are the real angel. No one knows what the wallet means to the children.” She sobbed in gratitude.
（写失主的感激的同时，不忘记埋下伏笔）
Jenny’s soft heart was touched because her grandma often called her angel.
(这一句也是照应文章中说的，她想起了grandma的笑容)
That night, she darted across the street, the creaking of snow echoing in the air.
（环境的描写衬托她的开心）
How eager she was to tell her grandma that today she got a present more meaningful than Hannah doll—She was a real angel!
（女孩此时只想赶快告诉grandma：我是真正的天使啦！此句把她的可爱、纯洁刻画得惟妙惟肖）
范文：
The woman who answered the door had been crying recently and looked upset and anxious.
“Are you Mrs. Green ” Jenny asked politely with some certainty, recognizing the face from the ID card instantly.
The woman nodded in confusion and let the girl come in. After a brief conversation, it turned out that Mrs. Green lost her wallet on her way to the store with the money to buy gifts for some poor children.
Feeling her face burning with a sense of guilt as well as somewhat relief, Jenny took out the pink leather wallet, rejoicing to see Mrs. Green’s eyes rounding in surprise and sparkling with hope in a flash.
笔记：现在分词做状语；根据常识合理设置情节；句型”it turned out that...原来“；心理活动+动作+对方反应
The woman took the wallet smilingly.
She held it to her chest tightly and then pulled Jenny into her arms, tears streaming down her face. “You are the real angel. No one knows what the wallet means to the children.” She sobbed out her heartfelt gratitude.
Jenny’s soft heart was touched because her grandma often called her little angel, all her previous inner struggle giving way to the pure pride in her right choice.
That night, she darted across the streets, eager to tell her grandma that today she got a present more meaningful than Hannah doll—she was a real angel!
笔记：动作+表情描写；呼应词angel；心理转变句型；结尾句：人物离场+全新自我
最终自测：
The woman who answered the door had been crying recently and looked upset and anxious.
“你是格林太太吗？“珍妮礼貌地问道，立刻认出了身份证上的那张脸。
女人困惑地点了点头，让女孩进到家里来。简短交谈几句之后，原来格林太太在去商店的路上丢的钱包，里面有给一些贫苦孩子买礼物的钱。
珍妮感到脸上滚烫，有内疚也有一点如释重负，她拿出那个粉红色皮钱包，很高兴看到格林太太的眼睛惊讶地睁大了，一瞬间闪起了希望。
The woman took the wallet smilingly.
她把它紧紧地放在胸前，然后把珍妮拉进怀里，眼泪顺着脸流下来。“你是真正的天使。没人知道这个钱包对孩子们意味着什么。”她哭着表达了她衷心的感激之情。
珍妮柔软的心被感动了，因为她的奶奶经常称她为小天使，她之前所有的内心挣扎都让位于她对自己做了正确选择的纯粹骄傲。
那天晚上，她飞奔过一条条街道，急切地想告诉她的奶奶，今天她得到了一个比汉娜娃娃更有意义的礼物——她是一个真正的天使！
语料默写：
立刻认出了那张脸 ______________________________________
困惑地点头______________________________________
简短交谈几句之后______________________________________
原来... ______________________________________
感到脸上滚烫______________________________________
有内疚感也有一点如释重负______________________________________
很高兴看到______________________________________
眼睛惊讶地睁大了______________________________________
一瞬间闪起了希望______________________________________
把它紧紧地抱在胸前______________________________________
把某人拉进怀里______________________________________
眼泪顺着脸流下来______________________________________
哭着表达某人衷心的感激 ______________________________________
某人柔软的心被感动了______________________________________
所有之前的内心挣扎______________________________________
让位给了一种纯粹的骄傲之情 ______________________________________
飞奔过一条条街道______________________________________