2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写 一次难忘的远足讲义-

读后续写：一次难忘的远足
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mr. Taylor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic… Bingo! He put all that he prepared for the coming hiking into his backpack.
Mr. Taylor was fond of hiking, this time in particular, for it was the first time for him to hike with his two sons, Harry and Joel. Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term. “It will be an unforgettable experience, definitely.” he whispered to himself, unconsciously a smile spreading over his face.
Harry and Joel, however, argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip. Harry accused Joel of wearing smelly old shoes. Joel blamed Harry for using all of the bug spray (喷雾防虫剂). Harry told Joel he smelled terrible, Joel called Harry a coward (懦夫).
“Will the two of you just quiet down and enjoy our hike together ” their father said. “You’re missing all of the beautiful scenery!”
It was true. Neither Joel nor Harry had taken notice of the bear their father had spied at the start of their trip. They hadn’t looked up at the eagle he pointed out overhead. Worst of all, they hadn’t paid any attention to the turns and twists along the way while they continued their argument.
“Joel threw a stick at me!” Harry screamed.
“That’s not true!” Joel shouted back.
Mr. Taylor could no longer contain his anger. “And both of you need to stop arguing!” he erupted. As he turned to face them, his left foot caught on a root. He slipped backward and down muddy bank, falling into the river that ran alongside the path.
Harry and Joel raced to their father’s assistance. They helped him up out of the water, and then dragged his wet backpack up onto land.
Fortunately, their wet-through father found himself just slightly injured.
注意：所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
Paragraph 1: But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.
Paragraph 2: “Just calm down.” Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.”
审题：
读前文：人物、性格、背景、情节、冲突、道具、伏笔。
读衔接句：圈出人物、场景、衔接等信息。
对各个信息自我追问（why, how, what 为什么/怎么样/怎么办）并回答。
续写：作用：推动情节发展，形成与前文首尾相应/有始有终的故事，并凸显主题（明+暗）。
考虑：主人公所看、听、想、说、做。
情节合理：符合人物性格、符合常识、符合伏笔、符合主题。
细节设置：comment+action+response+conflict+solution+echo/theme
主题：明：完成一次远足
暗：克服困难（父亲落水，眼镜丢了，无法看清地图），两个儿子合作成长
伏笔：指南针、地图、争吵不休、美丽的风景等
常用的写作技巧：
现在/过去分词作状语
独立主格结构
形容词（短语）做状语
with+n.做方式状语
无灵主语
动作链
角色切换，多角度叙事
表情+动作+情绪描写
时间/动作衔接
每段的对话尽量不超过一处
非限定从补充说明
思想+行动+（预期的）结果
哲理感悟式/定格动作式/景色画面式结尾
范文：
But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.
Mr. Taylor sighed before he quickly took off his wet clothes and squeezed the water out. While Harry was spreading the clothes on a huge stone, Joel walked their half-naked father to an opening. Seeing his father wrapping the wound with the bandage, Joel felt strange. 泰勒先生叹了口气，然后迅速脱下湿衣服，把水挤了出来。当哈利把衣服铺在一块大石头上时，乔尔带着他们半裸的父亲走到一个出口前。看到父亲用绷带包扎伤口，乔尔感到怪怪的。
A thought went through his mind like an electric shock. How could they continue hiking if Dad was unable to see clearly 一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他们怎么能继续徒步旅行呢？
“If only Harry stopped arguing earlier with me!” he grumbled, his brows rising into his forehead. “I heard you!” Harry yelled, glaring at him with burning eyes.
“要是哈利早点停止和我争论就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皱到额头。“我听见了！”哈利喊道，用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他。
写作手法： Seeing his father...动作衔接；A thought went through his mind无灵主语；his brows rising into his forehead.独立主格结构； glaring at him 现在分词做伴随状语
“Just calm down.”Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.”
He mentioned the map and compass before the boys approached reluctantly and fumbled for them in his backpack. It was not long before they located where they were and headed off. 他提到地图和指南针，男孩们不情愿地走过去，在背包里摸索指南针。没过多久，他们就定位到了他们的位置，然后出发。
Joel soon found himself an expert at using a compass while Harry learnt to be an excellent map reader. Now and then, pretty birds singing merry songs and flowers blooming with smiles made the kids gasp. 乔尔很快发现自己是一个使用指南针的专家，而哈利学会了成为一个优秀的读图者。不时地，漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌，怒放的鲜花让孩子们屏气赞叹。
Later that day, they managed to catch sight of some mountain goats and even a grizzly bear and an eagle. It was the highlight of the day and they talked about it for hours, grinning from ear to ear.那天晚些时候，他们还看到了一些山羊，甚至还有一只灰熊和一只鹰。这是一天中的亮点，他们谈了好几个小时，开怀大笑。
写作手法：...mentioned...approached... fumbled 动作链；It was not long before ..时间衔接；Seeing his father...动作衔接； pretty birds... and flowers...景色描写；grinning from ear to ear.现在分词做伴随状语
最终自测：
But his glasses came off when he fell in the water. 但当他掉在水里时，眼镜掉了。泰勒先生叹了口气，然后迅速脱下湿衣服，把水挤了出来。当哈利把衣服铺在一块大石头上时，乔尔带着他们半裸的父亲走到一个出口前。看到父亲用绷带包扎伤口，乔尔感到怪怪的。一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他们怎么能继续徒步旅行呢？“要是哈利早点停止和我争论就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皱到额头。“我听见了！”哈利喊道，用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他。
“Just calm down.”Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.” “冷静下来！“泰勒先生吼道：“我没了眼镜，我们需要一起努力才能找到路。”他提到地图和指南针，男孩们不情愿地走过去，在背包里摸索指南针。没过多久，他们就定位到了他们的位置，然后出发。乔尔很快发现自己是一个使用指南针的专家，而哈利学会了成为一个优秀的读图者。不时地，漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌，怒放的鲜花让孩子们屏气赞叹。那天晚些时候，他们还看到了一些山羊，甚至还有一只灰熊和一只鹰。这是一天中的亮点，他们谈了好几个小时，开怀大笑。
语料默写：
脱下湿衣服_______________________
把水挤了出来______________________
把衣服铺在一块大石头上______________________
用绷带包扎伤口______________________
一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海______________________
抱怨v.______________________
眉毛皱到额头______________________
用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他______________________
摸索______________________
没过多久______________________
漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌______________________
怒放的鲜花______________________
让孩子们屏气赞叹______________________
看到______________________
一天中的亮点______________________
开怀大笑______________________
答案：
take off his wet clothes
squeeze the water out
spread the clothes on a huge stone
wrap the wound with the bandage
a thought go through his mind like an electric shock
grumble v.
brows rise into his forehead
glare at him with burning eyes
fumble for
It was not long before...
pretty birds sing merry songs
flowers bloom with smiles
make the kids gasp.
catch sight of
the highlight of the day
grin from ear to ear