-2024届高三英语二轮复习新阵地联盟读后续写讲评 姐弟俩一起逃离火山岛 讲义
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浙江省新阵地教育联盟2024届第三次联考
试题呈现：
Rising to reach for the book on the desk in the living room, Gudrun fell over her little brother, who had crawled out from underneath her chair. “Arnar! Why do you always have to be right under me ”
The five-year-old giggled. “I was hiding," he said, “and you found me.” “I'm not playing," Gudrun scolded, “I'm knitting. And it's time for you to go to bed." Her parents had gone out for the evening, leaving Gudrun in charge.
“Let me hide once more,” Arnar begged. “Then I'll go to sleep, I promise.”
Gudrun couldn't help smiling. “Oh, all right." She turned back to her knitting. “I'll look for you when I've finished this row.”
“Here's a clue,” Arnar called as he skipped away. “Look for me where I always am.”
But Gudrun was already absorbed in her work.
Gudrun wasn't sure what had awakened her in the middle of the night. Was it the urgency in Mamma's voice or the frightening and low rumble that rolled through her room Gudrun found herself suddenly wide awake, drawn to the window by a strange and unfamiliar brilliance outside.“An eruption," Marma said as she began to gather Gudrun's clothes.“Maybe Helgafell, maybe a new volcano. We must leave the island quickly.” “Tonight How ” Gudrun asked, her heart pounding.“Where will we go ”
“We're lucky, The fishing boats will take us to the mainland,” Mamma turned to face Gudrun.“Pabbi has already gone to the harbor. I'm going to help Margret.” Their elderly neighbor lived alone. Mamma proceeded, “can you dress Arnar and take him to the harbor by yourself ”
“Of course,” she declared. Everyone would help tonight. Icelanders had always worked together to survive in a land ruled by volcanoes, glaciers, and ocean.
Gudrun dressed and ran to her brother's room, “Amar!” she cried, “Wake up!” Hearing no response, Gudrun hurried to the bed and pulled back her brother's thick cover.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.开头已给出。
Arnar wasn’t there!
There, curled around a worn stuffed bear, was Arnar, sound asleep.
文本分析：
续写就围绕姐姐找弟弟而找不到，后来想起弟弟最常躲的地方后找到了他，最后姐弟两共同奔向安全的故事线展开。
续写线索：
1，弟弟平时就很喜欢躲在姐姐下面。（姐姐坐在凳子上读书时，他就躲在凳子下，姐姐在吃饭时，他就也躲在桌子下，那么文章最后，姐姐睡觉时，弟弟应该会躲在姐姐的床底下）
2，所以最后姐姐找到弟弟的地方，应该确定在姐姐睡觉的床底下比较符合故事设定。
3，姐姐由找不到到灵光乍现，应该是弟弟的那句话起作用。
姐姐在不小心踩到弟弟时，吐槽道
“Why do you always have to be right behind me ”
弟弟再躲前说:
Here is a clue. Look for me where I always am.
首段衔接处：
首段衔接1:A:(主语Amar平行叙述:他去哪里拉呀 )Arnar disappeared from his room!
首段衔接1: B:(结合尾段叙事主语 Gudrun,进行交叉叙事，描述弟弟不见了姐姐的情感体验:Seized by an enormous wave of shock,Gudrun couldn't believe what she saw under the thick cover.
首段尾句衔接2:A:(根据Paraz主语 Amar进行平行叙述:Arar 又躲在了她的椅子下)
Arnar hid himself again under her chair. As Gudrun was dedicated to her knitting, she took no notice of what Arnar did at all.
首段尾句衔接2: B:(躲藏的地方，只要是家里，还可以是床底下)Never in Gudrun's wildest dream had she imagined that her clever adorable brother hid himself under her bed.
二段首句衔接3:A:(根据原文新火山喷发，说明Gudrun 要行动迅速，分秒必争)
Gudrun pulled/ dragged her brother out from under the bed and woke up him immediately . “ We have to race against time. We are in danger. And we have to run to the harbor. where our parents and our neighbor Margret are waiting for us.”
段首句衔接3:B:(找到了弟弟，姐姐可以松一口气了。但是轰鸣声越来越响。)Seeing his brother sleeping soundly, Gudrun breathed a sigh of relief. But she had only a little time for an escape, with the volcano rumbling outside like thunders. She cupped her hands over Arnar and soothed him gently.
参考范文：
Para1:Arnar wasn't there! Seized by an enormous wave of shock, Gudrun couldn't believe what she saw under the thick cover!“ where did Arnar go what did he do before l went to bed , Gudrun thought to herself. How Gudrun regretted being absorbed in knitting instead of looking after her adorable brother. Then suddenly Arnar's words echoed in her ear- 'Here's a clue. Look for me where l always am.”An inspiration flashed across her mind. Arnar must have hidden under something Gudrun kicked off her search by looking down Arnar‘s bed but no luck. As she went back to the living room, her eyes fell on the chair.
Para2:There, curled around a worn stuffed bear, was Arnar,sound asleep. Gudrun breathed a sigh of relief. with the volcano rumbling outside like thunders, Gudrun felt her heart almost beating out of her chest. Noticing Arnar in great panic, Gudrun cupped her hands over Arnar's ears and soothed him gently.“we will hide in a boat in the harbor. Arnar, let's run ! After what seemed like centuries, the sibling made it to the harbor. Their anxious parents were waiting for them, looking up in the distance, with worry on their face. No sooner had the family and neighbors hopped onto the boat than red hot lava swallowed their beautiful homes. Tears streaming down their faces, they bid farewell to their homeland, setting for mainland. They,would work together again to build a brand new hometown!
试题呈现：
Rising to reach for the book on the desk in the living room, Gudrun fell over her little brother, who had crawled out from underneath her chair. “Arnar! Why do you always have to be right under me ”
The five-year-old giggled. “I was hiding," he said, “and you found me.” “I'm not playing," Gudrun scolded, “I'm knitting. And it's time for you to go to bed." Her parents had gone out for the evening, leaving Gudrun in charge.
“Let me hide once more,” Arnar begged. “Then I'll go to sleep, I promise.”
Gudrun couldn't help smiling. “Oh, all right." She turned back to her knitting. “I'll look for you when I've finished this row.”
“Here's a clue,” Arnar called as he skipped away. “Look for me where I always am.”
But Gudrun was already absorbed in her work.
Gudrun wasn't sure what had awakened her in the middle of the night. Was it the urgency in Mamma's voice or the frightening and low rumble that rolled through her room Gudrun found herself suddenly wide awake, drawn to the window by a strange and unfamiliar brilliance outside.“An eruption," Marma said as she began to gather Gudrun's clothes.“Maybe Helgafell, maybe a new volcano. We must leave the island quickly.” “Tonight How ” Gudrun asked, her heart pounding.“Where will we go ”
“We're lucky, The fishing boats will take us to the mainland,” Mamma turned to face Gudrun.“Pabbi has already gone to the harbor. I'm going to help Margret.” Their elderly neighbor lived alone. Mamma proceeded, “can you dress Arnar and take him to the harbor by yourself ”
“Of course,” she declared. Everyone would help tonight. Icelanders had always worked together to survive in a land ruled by volcanoes, glaciers, and ocean.
Gudrun dressed and ran to her brother's room, “Amar!” she cried, “Wake up!” Hearing no response, Gudrun hurried to the bed and pulled back her brother's thick cover.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.开头已给出。
Arnar wasn’t there!
There, curled around a worn stuffed bear, was Arnar, sound asleep.
文本分析：
续写就围绕姐姐找弟弟而找不到，后来想起弟弟最常躲的地方后找到了他，最后姐弟两共同奔向安全的故事线展开。
续写线索：
1，弟弟平时就很喜欢躲在姐姐下面。（姐姐坐在凳子上读书时，他就躲在凳子下，姐姐在吃饭时，他就也躲在桌子下，那么文章最后，姐姐睡觉时，弟弟应该会躲在姐姐的床底下）
2，所以最后姐姐找到弟弟的地方，应该确定在姐姐睡觉的床底下比较符合故事设定。
3，姐姐由找不到到灵光乍现，应该是弟弟的那句话起作用。
姐姐在不小心踩到弟弟时，吐槽道
“Why do you always have to be right behind me ”
弟弟再躲前说:
Here is a clue. Look for me where I always am.
首段衔接处：
首段衔接1:A:(主语Amar平行叙述:他去哪里拉呀 )Arnar disappeared from his room!
首段衔接1: B:(结合尾段叙事主语 Gudrun,进行交叉叙事，描述弟弟不见了姐姐的情感体验:Seized by an enormous wave of shock,Gudrun couldn't believe what she saw under the thick cover.
首段尾句衔接2:A:(根据Paraz主语 Amar进行平行叙述:Arar 又躲在了她的椅子下)
Arnar hid himself again under her chair. As Gudrun was dedicated to her knitting, she took no notice of what Arnar did at all.
首段尾句衔接2: B:(躲藏的地方，只要是家里，还可以是床底下)Never in Gudrun's wildest dream had she imagined that her clever adorable brother hid himself under her bed.
二段首句衔接3:A:(根据原文新火山喷发，说明Gudrun 要行动迅速，分秒必争)
Gudrun pulled/ dragged her brother out from under the bed and woke up him immediately . “ We have to race against time. We are in danger. And we have to run to the harbor. where our parents and our neighbor Margret are waiting for us.”
段首句衔接3:B:(找到了弟弟，姐姐可以松一口气了。但是轰鸣声越来越响。)Seeing his brother sleeping soundly, Gudrun breathed a sigh of relief. But she had only a little time for an escape, with the volcano rumbling outside like thunders. She cupped her hands over Arnar and soothed him gently.
参考范文：
Para1:Arnar wasn't there! Seized by an enormous wave of shock, Gudrun couldn't believe what she saw under the thick cover!“ where did Arnar go what did he do before l went to bed , Gudrun thought to herself. How Gudrun regretted being absorbed in knitting instead of looking after her adorable brother. Then suddenly Arnar's words echoed in her ear- 'Here's a clue. Look for me where l always am.”An inspiration flashed across her mind. Arnar must have hidden under something Gudrun kicked off her search by looking down Arnar‘s bed but no luck. As she went back to the living room, her eyes fell on the chair.
Para2:There, curled around a worn stuffed bear, was Arnar,sound asleep. Gudrun breathed a sigh of relief. with the volcano rumbling outside like thunders, Gudrun felt her heart almost beating out of her chest. Noticing Arnar in great panic, Gudrun cupped her hands over Arnar's ears and soothed him gently.“we will hide in a boat in the harbor. Arnar, let's run ! After what seemed like centuries, the sibling made it to the harbor. Their anxious parents were waiting for them, looking up in the distance, with worry on their face. No sooner had the family and neighbors hopped onto the boat than red hot lava swallowed their beautiful homes. Tears streaming down their faces, they bid farewell to their homeland, setting for mainland. They,would work together again to build a brand new hometown!