2024届高三英语二轮复习：读后续写 小男孩的警车 课件(共14张PPT)
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(共14张PPT)
小男孩的警车
读后续写
线索：
1. When we are little kids, birthday parties are momentous occasions. They are our time to shine.
2. Allen Miller thought the police were awesome, hoping to become one of them!
3. And all he wanted for his birthday party was a model police car.
4. His duty is to serve and protect, and he decided to protect Allen from having a bad day, and serve him the most amazing seventh birthday party!
主题：
从线索可以看出文章是：目标（goal）——达成
（realize），也就是说作为一个完整的故事，最后应该有
三点：Allan拿到了 a model police car，并且感觉 become
one of them，同时这一刻是his time to shine。
学生错误：
1. 细节与主旨无关或不合情理，如：
Allen坐上警车的忐忑、 Allen的震惊、警官蒙上Allen眼睛、“生日快乐，许个愿吧”； “这是给我的吗？”台词、对拆盒子之前的动作和心理描写过多
合理的情节是为角色和主题服务，比如：警察们宣布小男孩是他们的一员了，或者带他在小区转一下，执勤，这样的细节描写更合理。
反思：动笔之前要先构思好提纲，并有所取舍。不能一味堆砌辞藻，而应突出主题。
2. 重要道具即Allen的心愿model police car没有读出来
3. 句子之间缺少时间衔接和动作衔接。
分句写作练习：
There, a party was waiting for him.
l 他们走进房间的那一刻，整个房间回荡着“生日快乐”的合唱声，伴随着掌声和欢呼声。
笔记：the moment...时间衔接；a chorus无灵主语；accompanied by...过去分词做伴随状语
The moment they stepped inside, a chorus of “Happy birthday” echoed in the room, accompanied by claps and cheers.
l 艾伦惊喜地转向他的妈妈和史密斯警官，只见他们微笑着看着他。突然间，一切都豁然开朗。这场特别的生日庆祝是为他准备的！
笔记：
only to see...不定式做结果状语，表示意外的结果；
Allen, in surprised disbelief, turned to his mom and Officer Smith, only to see them smiling back at him. Suddenly, it all made sense. The special birthday celebration was for him!
l 就在那时，史密斯警官拉着他的手，带领他走向蛋糕，示意同事们围拢过来。接下来的时刻，他们快乐地分着蛋糕，边聊天边开玩笑。
笔记：Just then 时间衔接
signaling for his colleagues现在分词做伴随状语；
The next moment witnessed them ... 无灵主语句, 时间衔接
Just then, Officer Smith took his hand and guided him to the cake, signaling for his colleagues to gather around. The next moment witnessed them happily dividing the cake, chatting and joking.
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag.
l 所有人的目光都聚集在那个袋子上，当艾伦接过它时，他小心翼翼地打开，手颤抖着兴奋不已。里面是一辆涂着红色和蓝色的模型警车，正是他梦里的那个。
笔记：carefully unwrapping it 现在分词做伴随状语；
with hands trembling with 复合宾语结构；
Inside was a model police car,倒装句；
painted in red and blue. 过去分词做定语；
All eyes were fixed on the bag. Allen accepted it from the officer, carefully unwrapping it with trembling hands and a thumping heart. Inside was a model police car, painted in red and blue, exactly the one in his dream.
l “这是给我的吗？”小男孩试探地问道，把它紧紧地抱在胸前/用手指轻轻在其表面划过。
笔记：
holding it tightly to his chest.现在分词做伴随状语；
“Is this for me ” he asked tentatively, holding it tightly against his chest.
l 史密斯警官把他抱了起来，宣布：“当然。你现在是我们中的一员了！”艾伦笑了起来，紧紧地拥抱着那辆模型车，仿佛在拥抱自己的梦想。这一定是他年轻生命中最快乐的时刻！
笔记：as if embracing his dream.状语从句
关键词点题：now one of us+ model car的象征意义—dream+ shine
Officer Smith lifted him up, declaring, “Of course. You are now one of us!” Allen laughed and hugged the model car tightly, as if embracing his dream. It must be his happiest moment to shine in his young life!
完整范文：
There, a party was waiting for him.The moment they stepped inside, a chorus of “Happy birthday” echoed in the room, accompanied by claps and cheers. Allen, in surprised disbelief, turned to his mom and Officer Smith, only to see them smiling back at him. Suddenly, it all made sense. The special birthday celebration was for him! Just then, Officer Smith took his hand and guided him to the cake, signaling for his colleagues to gather around. The next moment witnessed them happily dividing the cake, chatting and joking.
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag. All eyes were fixed on the bag. Allen accepted it from the officer, carefully unwrapping it with trembling hands and a thumping heart. Inside was a model police car, painted in red and blue, exactly the one in his dream. “Is this for me ” he asked tentatively, holding it tightly against his chest. Officer Smith lifted him up, declaring, “Of course. You are now one of us!” Allen laughed and hugged the model car tightly, as if embracing his dream. It must be his happiest moment to shine in his young life!
最终自测：
There, a party was waiting for him. 他们一进去，一声“生日快乐”的合唱就在房间里回荡，伴随着鼓掌声和欢呼声。艾伦惊讶地难以置信，转向他的妈妈和史密斯警官，却看到他们对他微笑。突然之间，这一切都有意义了。这个特别的生日庆祝活动是为他准备的！就在这时，史密斯警官握着他的手，领着他走到蛋糕前，示意他的同事们聚在一起。接着，他们发现他们高兴地分蛋糕，聊天和开玩笑。
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag.所有的眼睛都盯着那个袋子。艾伦接受了他的邀请，小心地打开它，双手因激动而颤抖。里面是一辆警车模型，上面涂着红色和蓝色，正是他梦里的那个。“这是给我的吗？”他试探地问道，把它紧紧地抱在胸前。史密斯警官把他举起来，对他说：“当然。你现在是我们中的一员了！”艾伦笑着，紧紧地拥抱着模型车，好像在拥抱他的梦想。这一定是他年轻一生中最快乐的时刻！
小男孩的警车
读后续写
线索：
1. When we are little kids, birthday parties are momentous occasions. They are our time to shine.
2. Allen Miller thought the police were awesome, hoping to become one of them!
3. And all he wanted for his birthday party was a model police car.
4. His duty is to serve and protect, and he decided to protect Allen from having a bad day, and serve him the most amazing seventh birthday party!
主题：
从线索可以看出文章是：目标（goal）——达成
（realize），也就是说作为一个完整的故事，最后应该有
三点：Allan拿到了 a model police car，并且感觉 become
one of them，同时这一刻是his time to shine。
学生错误：
1. 细节与主旨无关或不合情理，如：
Allen坐上警车的忐忑、 Allen的震惊、警官蒙上Allen眼睛、“生日快乐，许个愿吧”； “这是给我的吗？”台词、对拆盒子之前的动作和心理描写过多
合理的情节是为角色和主题服务，比如：警察们宣布小男孩是他们的一员了，或者带他在小区转一下，执勤，这样的细节描写更合理。
反思：动笔之前要先构思好提纲，并有所取舍。不能一味堆砌辞藻，而应突出主题。
2. 重要道具即Allen的心愿model police car没有读出来
3. 句子之间缺少时间衔接和动作衔接。
分句写作练习：
There, a party was waiting for him.
l 他们走进房间的那一刻，整个房间回荡着“生日快乐”的合唱声，伴随着掌声和欢呼声。
笔记：the moment...时间衔接；a chorus无灵主语；accompanied by...过去分词做伴随状语
The moment they stepped inside, a chorus of “Happy birthday” echoed in the room, accompanied by claps and cheers.
l 艾伦惊喜地转向他的妈妈和史密斯警官，只见他们微笑着看着他。突然间，一切都豁然开朗。这场特别的生日庆祝是为他准备的！
笔记：
only to see...不定式做结果状语，表示意外的结果；
Allen, in surprised disbelief, turned to his mom and Officer Smith, only to see them smiling back at him. Suddenly, it all made sense. The special birthday celebration was for him!
l 就在那时，史密斯警官拉着他的手，带领他走向蛋糕，示意同事们围拢过来。接下来的时刻，他们快乐地分着蛋糕，边聊天边开玩笑。
笔记：Just then 时间衔接
signaling for his colleagues现在分词做伴随状语；
The next moment witnessed them ... 无灵主语句, 时间衔接
Just then, Officer Smith took his hand and guided him to the cake, signaling for his colleagues to gather around. The next moment witnessed them happily dividing the cake, chatting and joking.
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag.
l 所有人的目光都聚集在那个袋子上，当艾伦接过它时，他小心翼翼地打开，手颤抖着兴奋不已。里面是一辆涂着红色和蓝色的模型警车，正是他梦里的那个。
笔记：carefully unwrapping it 现在分词做伴随状语；
with hands trembling with 复合宾语结构；
Inside was a model police car,倒装句；
painted in red and blue. 过去分词做定语；
All eyes were fixed on the bag. Allen accepted it from the officer, carefully unwrapping it with trembling hands and a thumping heart. Inside was a model police car, painted in red and blue, exactly the one in his dream.
l “这是给我的吗？”小男孩试探地问道，把它紧紧地抱在胸前/用手指轻轻在其表面划过。
笔记：
holding it tightly to his chest.现在分词做伴随状语；
“Is this for me ” he asked tentatively, holding it tightly against his chest.
l 史密斯警官把他抱了起来，宣布：“当然。你现在是我们中的一员了！”艾伦笑了起来，紧紧地拥抱着那辆模型车，仿佛在拥抱自己的梦想。这一定是他年轻生命中最快乐的时刻！
笔记：as if embracing his dream.状语从句
关键词点题：now one of us+ model car的象征意义—dream+ shine
Officer Smith lifted him up, declaring, “Of course. You are now one of us!” Allen laughed and hugged the model car tightly, as if embracing his dream. It must be his happiest moment to shine in his young life!
完整范文：
There, a party was waiting for him.The moment they stepped inside, a chorus of “Happy birthday” echoed in the room, accompanied by claps and cheers. Allen, in surprised disbelief, turned to his mom and Officer Smith, only to see them smiling back at him. Suddenly, it all made sense. The special birthday celebration was for him! Just then, Officer Smith took his hand and guided him to the cake, signaling for his colleagues to gather around. The next moment witnessed them happily dividing the cake, chatting and joking.
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag. All eyes were fixed on the bag. Allen accepted it from the officer, carefully unwrapping it with trembling hands and a thumping heart. Inside was a model police car, painted in red and blue, exactly the one in his dream. “Is this for me ” he asked tentatively, holding it tightly against his chest. Officer Smith lifted him up, declaring, “Of course. You are now one of us!” Allen laughed and hugged the model car tightly, as if embracing his dream. It must be his happiest moment to shine in his young life!
最终自测：
There, a party was waiting for him. 他们一进去，一声“生日快乐”的合唱就在房间里回荡，伴随着鼓掌声和欢呼声。艾伦惊讶地难以置信，转向他的妈妈和史密斯警官，却看到他们对他微笑。突然之间，这一切都有意义了。这个特别的生日庆祝活动是为他准备的！就在这时，史密斯警官握着他的手，领着他走到蛋糕前，示意他的同事们聚在一起。接着，他们发现他们高兴地分蛋糕，聊天和开玩笑。
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag.所有的眼睛都盯着那个袋子。艾伦接受了他的邀请，小心地打开它，双手因激动而颤抖。里面是一辆警车模型，上面涂着红色和蓝色，正是他梦里的那个。“这是给我的吗？”他试探地问道，把它紧紧地抱在胸前。史密斯警官把他举起来，对他说：“当然。你现在是我们中的一员了！”艾伦笑着，紧紧地拥抱着模型车，好像在拥抱他的梦想。这一定是他年轻一生中最快乐的时刻！