-2024届高三英语作文复习专项读后续写：探险成长类主题 课件(共41张PPT)
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读后续写：探险成长类主题
（成长主题）
一、一次难忘的远足
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mr. Taylor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic… Bingo! He put all that he prepared for the coming hiking into his backpack.
Mr. Taylor was fond of hiking, this time in particular, for it was the first time for him to hike with his two sons, Harry and Joel. Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term. “It will be an unforgettable experience, definitely.” he whispered to himself, unconsciously a smile spreading over his face.
Harry and Joel, however, argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip. Harry accused Joel of wearing smelly old shoes. Joel blamed Harry for using all of the bug spray (喷雾防虫剂). Harry told Joel he smelled terrible, Joel called Harry a coward (懦夫).
“Will the two of you just quiet down and enjoy our hike together ” their father said. “You’re missing all of the beautiful scenery!”
It was true. Neither Joel nor Harry had taken notice of the bear their father had spied at the start of their trip. They hadn’t looked up at the eagle he pointed out overhead. Worst of all, they hadn’t paid any attention to the turns and twists along the way while they continued their argument.
“Joel threw a stick at me!” Harry screamed.
“That’s not true!” Joel shouted back.
Mr. Taylor could no longer contain his anger. “And both of you need to stop arguing!” he erupted. As he turned to face them, his left foot caught on a root. He slipped backward and down muddy bank, falling into the river that ran alongside the path.
Harry and Joel raced to their father’s assistance. They helped him up out of the water, and then dragged his wet backpack up onto land.
Fortunately, their wet-through father found himself just slightly injured.
注意：所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
Paragraph 1: But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.
Paragraph 2: “Just calm down.” Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.”
审题：
读前文：人物、性格、背景、情节、冲突、道具、伏笔。
读衔接句：圈出人物、场景、衔接等信息。
对各个信息自我追问（why, how, what 为什么/怎么样/怎么办）并回答。
续写：作用：推动情节发展，形成与前文首尾相应/有始有终的故事，并凸显主题（明+暗）。
考虑：主人公所看、听、想、说、做。
情节合理：符合人物性格、符合常识、符合伏笔、符合主题。
细节设置：comment+action+response+conflict+solution+echo/theme
主题：明：完成一次远足 暗：克服困难（父亲落水，眼镜丢了，无法看清地图），两个儿子合作成长
伏笔：指南针、地图、争吵不休、美丽的风景等
常用的写作技巧：1. 现在/过去分词作状语2. 独立主格结构3. 形容词（短语）做状语4. with+n.做方式状语5. 无灵主语6. 动作链7. 角色切换，多角度叙事8. 表情+动作+情绪描写9. 时间/动作衔接10. 每段的对话尽量不超过一处11. 非限定从补充说明12. 思想+行动+（预期的）结果13. 哲理感悟式/定格动作式/景色画面式结尾
下水文：
But his glasses came off when he fell in the water. l Mr. Taylor sighed before he quickly took off his wet clothes and squeezed the water out. While Harry was spreading the clothes on a huge stone, Joel walked their half-naked father to an opening. Seeing his father wrapping the wound with the bandage, Joel felt strange.
泰勒先生叹了口气，然后迅速脱下湿衣服，把水挤了出来。当哈利把衣服铺在一块大石头上时，乔尔带着他们半裸的父亲走到一个出口前。看到父亲用绷带包扎伤口，乔尔感到怪怪的。
l A thought went through his mind like an electric shock. How could they continue hiking if Dad was unable to see clearly
一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他们怎么能继续徒步旅行呢？
l “If only Harry stopped arguing earlier with me!” he grumbled, his brows rising into his forehead. “I heard you!” Harry yelled, glaring at him with burning eyes.
“要是哈利早点停止和我争论就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皱到额头。“我听见了！”哈利喊道，用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他。
笔记：
Seeing his father...动作衔接；
A thought went through his mind无灵主语；
his brows rising into his forehead.独立主格结构；
glaring at him 现在分词做伴随状语
“Just calm down.”Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.”
He mentioned the map and compass before the boys approached reluctantly and fumbled for them in his backpack. It was not long before they located where they were and headed off.
他提到地图和指南针，男孩们不情愿地走过去，在背包里摸索指南针。没过多久，他们就定位到了他们的位置，然后出发。
l Joel soon found himself an expert at using a compass while Harry learnt to be an excellent map reader. Now and then, pretty birds singing merry songs and flowers blooming with smiles made the kids gasp.
乔尔很快发现自己是一个使用指南针的专家，而哈利学会了成为一个优秀的读图者。不时地，漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌，怒放的鲜花让孩子们屏气赞叹。
l Later that day, they managed to catch sight of some mountain goats and even a grizzly bear and an eagle. It was the highlight of the day and they talked about it for hours, grinning from ear to ear.
那天晚些时候，他们还看到了一些山羊，甚至还有一只灰熊和一只鹰。这是一天中的亮点，他们谈了好几个小时，开怀大笑。
笔记：
...mentioned...approached... fumbled 动作链；
It was not long before ..时间衔接；
Seeing his father...动作衔接；
pretty birds... and flowers...景色描写；
grinning from ear to ear.现在分词做伴随状语
中文背诵：
But his glasses came off when he fell in the water. 但当他掉在水里时，眼镜掉了。泰勒先生叹了口气，然后迅速脱下湿衣服，把水挤了出来。当哈利把衣服铺在一块大石头上时，乔尔带着他们半裸的父亲走到一个出口前。看到父亲用绷带包扎伤口，乔尔感到怪怪的。一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他们怎么能继续徒步旅行呢？“要是哈利早点停止和我争论就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皱到额头。“我听见了！”哈利喊道，用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他。
“Just calm down.”Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.” “冷静下来！“泰勒先生吼道：“我没了眼镜，我们需要一起努力才能找到路。”他提到地图和指南针，男孩们不情愿地走过去，在背包里摸索指南针。没过多久，他们就定位到了他们的位置，然后出发。乔尔很快发现自己是一个使用指南针的专家，而哈利学会了成为一个优秀的读图者。不时地，漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌，怒放的鲜花让孩子们屏气赞叹。那天晚些时候，他们还看到了一些山羊，甚至还有一只灰熊和一只鹰。这是一天中的亮点，他们谈了好几个小时，开怀大笑。
语料默写：
1.脱下湿衣服_______________________
2.把水挤了出来______________________
3.把衣服铺在一块大石头上______________________
4.用绷带包扎伤口______________________
5.一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海______________________
6.抱怨v.______________________
7.眉毛皱到额头______________________
8.用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他______________________
9.摸索______________________
10.没过多久______________________
11.漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌______________________
12.怒放的鲜花______________________
13.让孩子们屏气赞叹______________________
14.看到______________________
15.一天中的亮点______________________
16.开怀大笑______________________
Keys:
1.1.take off his wet clothes
2.squeeze the water out
3.spread the clothes on a huge stone
4.wrap the wound with the bandage
5.a thought go through his mind like an electric shock
6.grumble v.
7.brows rise into his forehead
8.glare at him with burning eyes
9.fumble for
10.It was not long before...
11.pretty birds sing merry songs
12.flowers bloom with smiles
13.make the kids gasp.
14.catch sight of
15.the highlight of the day
16.grin from ear to ear
二、孤岛寻宝
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成篇完整的短文。
In the town of Greenfield, a group of three adventurous spirits—Jack, Simon, and Lucas—had discovered an ancient map in Jack’s grandfather’s house. The map, yellowed with age, described a mysterious island that had the legendary(传说的) Silver Falcon, a statue that was said to award its finder enormous wisdom and fortune.
As typical eighth graders with the excitement of discovery and dreams of greatness, they decided they would be the ones to discover this hidden treasure. They agreed to start this search during the up-and-coming spring break, keeping their plans a secret from the adults who would undoubtedly discourage such a dangerous adventure.
The days that followed were filled with preparation. They read books on survival, learned about the stars for navigation, and tested their courage in smaller woods. The boys were united by their unshakable resolve and the promise of an adventure that could change their lives forever.
As spring break began, they set out just as the sun painted the sky with colors of orange and gold. They felt a mixture of excitement and slight nervousness. They carried backpacks filled with supplies and the ancient map that they hoped would lead them to glory.
The beginning of their journey was full of laughter and songs around the campfire, but as days passed, the trip's reality set in. The path grew more dangerous, and the maps guided them through thick woods and muddy wetlands. They learned to work together as their friendship was tested by constant challenges. Slowly, the island drew nearer.
A conflict arose when they reached the foot of Mount Veritas, the final barrier before reaching the island. Lucas twisted his ankle, and the slightest movement sent sharp pains shooting through his leg. With time running out, Jack and Simon had to make a choice: should they push on and risk Lucas’ well-being or turn back after coming so far
Para1: At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances.
Para2: When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all.
一、Read for clues:
1. Jack, Simon, and Lucas (人物)
2. a statue that was said to award its finder enormous wisdom and fortune（寻找目标）
3. They read books on survival, learned about the stars for navigation, and tested their courage in smaller woods. （学习的技能）
4. The boys were united by their unshakable resolve and the promise of an adventure that could change their lives forever.（出现品质词resolve，初步判断为主题句相关）
5. They felt a mixture of excitement and slight nervousness.（情感）
6. They learned to work together as their friendship was tested by constant challenges.（初步判断friendship为主题句相关）
7.With time running out, Jack and Simon had to make a choice: should they push on and risk Lucas’ well-being or turn back after coming so far (问题)
二、Read for the theme:
本文是三个男孩要去探险寻宝，遇到困难。
Theme—goal: a statue that was said to award its finder enormous wisdom and fortune
Theme—problem: Jack and Simon had to make a choice: should they push on and risk Lucas’ well-being or turn back after coming so far
主题通常是问题解决，或者目标实现，而这篇文章二者兼备，但殊途同归，合并起来：他们找到了宝，但这个宝是他们的决心、友谊和团结。
三、Design the plot:
Para1: At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances.
1.根据exchange glances推：两人有解决问题的主意了（根据第二个提示句，可知三人继续走）
Helping Lucas sit down, they then outlined the next plan. With tears glistening in his eyes, Lucas nodded in gratitude.
他们帮助卢卡斯坐下来，然后概述了下一个计划。卢卡斯的眼睛里闪烁着泪水，感激地地点了点头。
（这里没有说明主意内容，因为内容在后面具体展开，相当于卖关子）
2.路途中的艰辛（体现线索resolve）
The following hours saw Jack and Simon taking turns carrying Lucas on their backs, weaving through the woods and cautiously wading through water with great determination.
接下来的几个小时里，杰克和西蒙轮流背着卢卡斯，在树林中穿梭，小心翼翼地涉水水中。
3.看到了那个岛和雕塑the Silver Falcon
After what felt like forever, just on the point of their breaking down, the mysterious island finally came to light. And they did see the Silver Falcon, their heart racing with excitement. In an instant, they rushed towards it, despite their exhaustion.
感觉永远，就在他们崩溃的时候，这个神秘的岛屿终于曝光了。他们确实看到了银鹰，他们的心兴奋得跳动。一瞬间，他们尽管精疲力尽，还是冲了过去。
笔记：
Helping Lucas sit down现在分词做状语
With tears glistening in his eyes，with+复合宾语
The following hours saw Jack and Simon taking无灵主语句
weaving through the woods and cautiously wading through现在分词做状语
After what felt like forever时间衔接
their heart racing with excitement独立主格结构
Para2: When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all.1.他们的response: 沮丧（动作、语言、表情展开来，因为这一段主要写这个）
Unwilling to accept this reality, they scanned every corner, but in vain. Jack and Simon collapsed on the ground, murmuring in disappointment, “Have we gained nothing ”
他们不愿接受这个现实，他们扫视了每一个角落，但没有成功。杰克和西蒙倒在地上，失望地喃喃自语：“我们什么也没有得到吗？”
2.转机：什么东西深深吸引了他们？（除了scenery没有其它）
“No! Look ahead at the scenery!” Lucas exclaimed loudly, his voice trembling with tears of joy. Following Lucas’s pointing direction, Jack and Simon saw countless birds chirping, seemingly welcoming them. Never in their wildest dreams had they imagined such a visual feast!
不看看前方的风景！”卢卡斯大声喊道，他的声音随着喜悦的泪水而颤抖。按照卢卡斯的指示，杰克和西蒙看到无数的鸟儿在鸣叫，似乎在欢迎它们。
3.主题升华：这美丽的风景就是对他们的品质的回馈，而这个品质才是treasure。
Never in their wildest dreams had they imagined such a visual feast! And wasn’t all of this a reward for their determination, unity, and bravery—the true treasure of their journey
在他们最疯狂的梦里，他们从来没有想象过这样一场视觉盛宴！这一切难道不是对他们的决心、团结和勇敢的奖励吗——这是他们旅程中真正的财富吗？
笔记：
Unwilling to accept this reality形容词短语做状语
murmuring in disappointment现在分词做状语
his voice trembling with tears of joy独立主格结构
Never in their wildest dreams had they imagined 倒装句
Version 1：(下水文)
At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances. Helping Lucas sit down, they then outlined the next plan. With tears glistening in his eyes, Lucas nodded in gratitude. The following hours saw Jack and Simon taking turns carrying Lucas on their backs, weaving through the woods and cautiously wading through water with great determination. After what felt like forever, just on the point of their breaking down, the mysterious island finally came to light. And they did see the Silver Falcon, their heart racing with excitement. In an instant, they rushed towards it, despite their exhaustion.
When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all. Unwilling to accept this reality, they scanned every corner, but in vain. Jack and Simon collapsed on the ground, murmuring in disappointment, “Have we gained nothing ” “No! Look ahead at the scenery!” Lucas exclaimed loudly, his voice trembling with tears of joy.Following Lucas’s pointing direction, Jack and Simon saw countless birds chirping, seemingly welcoming them. Never in their wildest dreams had they imagined such a visual feast! And wasn’t all of this a reward for their determination, unity, and bravery—the true treasure of their journey
译文：At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances.他们帮助卢卡斯坐下来，然后概述了下一个计划。卢卡斯的眼睛里闪烁着泪水，感激地地点了点头。接下来的几个小时里，杰克和西蒙轮流背着卢卡斯，在树林中穿梭，小心翼翼地涉水水中。感觉永远，就在他们崩溃的时候，这个神秘的岛屿终于曝光了。他们确实看到了银鹰，他们的心兴奋得跳动。一瞬间，他们尽管精疲力尽，还是冲了过去。When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all. 他们不愿接受这个现实，他们扫视了每一个角落，但没有成功。杰克和西蒙倒在地上，失望地喃喃自语：“我们什么也没有得到吗？”不看看前方的风景！”卢卡斯大声喊道，他的声音随着喜悦的泪水而颤抖。按照卢卡斯的指示，杰克和西蒙看到无数的鸟儿在鸣叫，似乎在欢迎它们。在他们最疯狂的梦里，他们从来没有想象过这样一场视觉盛宴！这一切难道不是对他们的决心、团结和勇敢的奖励吗——这是他们旅程中真正的财富吗？
Version 2：（官方范文）At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances. They realized they couldn’t leave Lucas behind and that the statue could wait, but their friendship could not. With great determination and strengthened bonds, they constructed a makeshift stretcher and carried Lucas through the last leg of their journey. As they reached the top of the last hill, the island revealed itself in all its glory. It was more impressive than they could have ever imagined. The Silver Falcon stood in the center, its wings shining in the sunlight. When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all. At that time, they realized the true treasure of their journey（主旨句）. It wasn't about the wisdom or fortune the Silver Falcon could bring—it was about the memories they had created together and the lessons they learned along the way. In an unexpected turn, the Silver Falcon seemed to acknowledge their growth. As they stood before it, its eyes shone brightly, and the forest around them came alive with the songs of birds and rustling leaves. A soft voice filled the clearing, congratulating them on their bravery and unity.
三、野外迷路
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West．
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend， picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos．
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm.”he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze（吃草）. I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool．
In the afternoon I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride and he said yes as long as my dad went with me. I wasn't going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper.” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don't get lost!" "OK!" my dad cried back. After a while, Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven（编织的） blanket spread out upon the ground just for us．Para1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Para2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
情节设计：
Para1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
马受到惊吓---控住缰绳---发现自己迷路
Para2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
恶劣环境描写---循水流找到出路---结尾
The unexpected guest frightened my horse, sending it running wildly. I could only see everything zipping by and hear the wind whistling. Heart in mouth, I held the reins( 缰绳) tightly and tried not to fall down.
这位不速之客吓到了我的马，使得它狂跑起来。我只能看到一切飞驰而过，听到风在呼啸。心都提到了嗓子眼，我紧紧地握着缰绳，尽量不掉下去。
At the critical moment, Dad's comforting words came from behind, “Don’t panic, son! Try hard to pull back your reins!” I followed what Dad told me and stopped my horse with all my strength.
在关键时刻，爸爸从后面说了一句安慰的话：“不要惊慌，孩子！努力收回你的缰绳！”我听了爸爸的话，竭尽全力停下了马。
But before we had the time for relief and relaxation, we found we had been off the beaten track and got lost.
但我们还来不及放松，我们发现我们已经偏离了轨道，迷路了。
笔记：
现在分词作结果状语；
现在分词作补语；
独立主格结构；
with作方式状语；
before...还没来得及...
Para2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
The wind, chilly and cold, crept into my bones.Worse still, fog began to close in and enveloped everything, which undoubtedly added to our difficulties and left us more
helpless. Everything was in deadly silence.
寒冷的风悄咪咪地钻进了我的骨头。更糟糕的是，雾开始逼近，包围了一切，这无疑增加了我们的困难，使我们更加无助。一切是死一般的寂静。
Just at the very instant, the murmur of water rolling down the river lifted our spirits---we could return home safe and sound down the river. Surprisingly, fog had cleared somehow and the stars appeared in the sky, blinking their eyes at us with pleasure.
就在这时，小河轻轻的流水声使我们振奋起来——我们可以沿着河安全地回家。令人惊讶的是，雾不知怎么地消散了，星星出现在天空中，高兴地向我们眨着眼睛。
What an unforgettable vacation we had!
我们过了一个多么难忘的假期！
笔记：
“风钻进骨头”拟人；
which非限定从；
“水轻轻流动”拟人；
现在分词作状语；
感叹句结尾！
最终自测：
Para1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
这位不速之客吓到了我的马，使得它狂跑起来。我只能看到一切飞驰而过，听到风在呼啸。心都提到了嗓子眼，我紧紧地握着缰绳，尽量不掉下去。
在关键时刻，爸爸从后面说了一句安慰的话：“不要惊慌，孩子！努力收回你的缰绳！”我听了爸爸的话，竭尽全力停下了马。
但我们还来不及放松，我们发现我们已经偏离了轨道，迷路了。
Para2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
寒冷的风悄咪咪地钻进了我的骨头。更糟糕的是，雾开始逼近，包围了一切，这无疑增加了我们的困难，使我们更加无助。一切是死一般的寂静。
就在这时，小河轻轻的流水声使我们振奋起来——我们可以沿着河安全地回家。令人惊讶的是，雾不知怎么地消散了，星星出现在天空中，高兴地向我们眨着眼睛。
我们过了一个多么难忘的，前所未有的假期！
读后续写：探险成长类主题
（成长主题）
一、一次难忘的远足
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mr. Taylor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic… Bingo! He put all that he prepared for the coming hiking into his backpack.
Mr. Taylor was fond of hiking, this time in particular, for it was the first time for him to hike with his two sons, Harry and Joel. Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term. “It will be an unforgettable experience, definitely.” he whispered to himself, unconsciously a smile spreading over his face.
Harry and Joel, however, argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip. Harry accused Joel of wearing smelly old shoes. Joel blamed Harry for using all of the bug spray (喷雾防虫剂). Harry told Joel he smelled terrible, Joel called Harry a coward (懦夫).
“Will the two of you just quiet down and enjoy our hike together ” their father said. “You’re missing all of the beautiful scenery!”
It was true. Neither Joel nor Harry had taken notice of the bear their father had spied at the start of their trip. They hadn’t looked up at the eagle he pointed out overhead. Worst of all, they hadn’t paid any attention to the turns and twists along the way while they continued their argument.
“Joel threw a stick at me!” Harry screamed.
“That’s not true!” Joel shouted back.
Mr. Taylor could no longer contain his anger. “And both of you need to stop arguing!” he erupted. As he turned to face them, his left foot caught on a root. He slipped backward and down muddy bank, falling into the river that ran alongside the path.
Harry and Joel raced to their father’s assistance. They helped him up out of the water, and then dragged his wet backpack up onto land.
Fortunately, their wet-through father found himself just slightly injured.
注意：所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
Paragraph 1: But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.
Paragraph 2: “Just calm down.” Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.”
审题：
读前文：人物、性格、背景、情节、冲突、道具、伏笔。
读衔接句：圈出人物、场景、衔接等信息。
对各个信息自我追问（why, how, what 为什么/怎么样/怎么办）并回答。
续写：作用：推动情节发展，形成与前文首尾相应/有始有终的故事，并凸显主题（明+暗）。
考虑：主人公所看、听、想、说、做。
情节合理：符合人物性格、符合常识、符合伏笔、符合主题。
细节设置：comment+action+response+conflict+solution+echo/theme
主题：明：完成一次远足 暗：克服困难（父亲落水，眼镜丢了，无法看清地图），两个儿子合作成长
伏笔：指南针、地图、争吵不休、美丽的风景等
常用的写作技巧：1. 现在/过去分词作状语2. 独立主格结构3. 形容词（短语）做状语4. with+n.做方式状语5. 无灵主语6. 动作链7. 角色切换，多角度叙事8. 表情+动作+情绪描写9. 时间/动作衔接10. 每段的对话尽量不超过一处11. 非限定从补充说明12. 思想+行动+（预期的）结果13. 哲理感悟式/定格动作式/景色画面式结尾
下水文：
But his glasses came off when he fell in the water. l Mr. Taylor sighed before he quickly took off his wet clothes and squeezed the water out. While Harry was spreading the clothes on a huge stone, Joel walked their half-naked father to an opening. Seeing his father wrapping the wound with the bandage, Joel felt strange.
泰勒先生叹了口气，然后迅速脱下湿衣服，把水挤了出来。当哈利把衣服铺在一块大石头上时，乔尔带着他们半裸的父亲走到一个出口前。看到父亲用绷带包扎伤口，乔尔感到怪怪的。
l A thought went through his mind like an electric shock. How could they continue hiking if Dad was unable to see clearly
一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他们怎么能继续徒步旅行呢？
l “If only Harry stopped arguing earlier with me!” he grumbled, his brows rising into his forehead. “I heard you!” Harry yelled, glaring at him with burning eyes.
“要是哈利早点停止和我争论就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皱到额头。“我听见了！”哈利喊道，用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他。
笔记：
Seeing his father...动作衔接；
A thought went through his mind无灵主语；
his brows rising into his forehead.独立主格结构；
glaring at him 现在分词做伴随状语
“Just calm down.”Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.”
He mentioned the map and compass before the boys approached reluctantly and fumbled for them in his backpack. It was not long before they located where they were and headed off.
他提到地图和指南针，男孩们不情愿地走过去，在背包里摸索指南针。没过多久，他们就定位到了他们的位置，然后出发。
l Joel soon found himself an expert at using a compass while Harry learnt to be an excellent map reader. Now and then, pretty birds singing merry songs and flowers blooming with smiles made the kids gasp.
乔尔很快发现自己是一个使用指南针的专家，而哈利学会了成为一个优秀的读图者。不时地，漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌，怒放的鲜花让孩子们屏气赞叹。
l Later that day, they managed to catch sight of some mountain goats and even a grizzly bear and an eagle. It was the highlight of the day and they talked about it for hours, grinning from ear to ear.
那天晚些时候，他们还看到了一些山羊，甚至还有一只灰熊和一只鹰。这是一天中的亮点，他们谈了好几个小时，开怀大笑。
笔记：
...mentioned...approached... fumbled 动作链；
It was not long before ..时间衔接；
Seeing his father...动作衔接；
pretty birds... and flowers...景色描写；
grinning from ear to ear.现在分词做伴随状语
中文背诵：
But his glasses came off when he fell in the water. 但当他掉在水里时，眼镜掉了。泰勒先生叹了口气，然后迅速脱下湿衣服，把水挤了出来。当哈利把衣服铺在一块大石头上时，乔尔带着他们半裸的父亲走到一个出口前。看到父亲用绷带包扎伤口，乔尔感到怪怪的。一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海。如果爸爸看不清楚，他们怎么能继续徒步旅行呢？“要是哈利早点停止和我争论就好了！”他抱怨道，眉毛皱到额头。“我听见了！”哈利喊道，用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他。
“Just calm down.”Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.” “冷静下来！“泰勒先生吼道：“我没了眼镜，我们需要一起努力才能找到路。”他提到地图和指南针，男孩们不情愿地走过去，在背包里摸索指南针。没过多久，他们就定位到了他们的位置，然后出发。乔尔很快发现自己是一个使用指南针的专家，而哈利学会了成为一个优秀的读图者。不时地，漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌，怒放的鲜花让孩子们屏气赞叹。那天晚些时候，他们还看到了一些山羊，甚至还有一只灰熊和一只鹰。这是一天中的亮点，他们谈了好几个小时，开怀大笑。
语料默写：
1.脱下湿衣服_______________________
2.把水挤了出来______________________
3.把衣服铺在一块大石头上______________________
4.用绷带包扎伤口______________________
5.一个想法像电击一样掠过他的脑海______________________
6.抱怨v.______________________
7.眉毛皱到额头______________________
8.用燃烧的眼睛瞪着他______________________
9.摸索______________________
10.没过多久______________________
11.漂亮的鸟儿唱着欢快的歌______________________
12.怒放的鲜花______________________
13.让孩子们屏气赞叹______________________
14.看到______________________
15.一天中的亮点______________________
16.开怀大笑______________________
Keys:
1.1.take off his wet clothes
2.squeeze the water out
3.spread the clothes on a huge stone
4.wrap the wound with the bandage
5.a thought go through his mind like an electric shock
6.grumble v.
7.brows rise into his forehead
8.glare at him with burning eyes
9.fumble for
10.It was not long before...
11.pretty birds sing merry songs
12.flowers bloom with smiles
13.make the kids gasp.
14.catch sight of
15.the highlight of the day
16.grin from ear to ear
二、孤岛寻宝
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成篇完整的短文。
In the town of Greenfield, a group of three adventurous spirits—Jack, Simon, and Lucas—had discovered an ancient map in Jack’s grandfather’s house. The map, yellowed with age, described a mysterious island that had the legendary(传说的) Silver Falcon, a statue that was said to award its finder enormous wisdom and fortune.
As typical eighth graders with the excitement of discovery and dreams of greatness, they decided they would be the ones to discover this hidden treasure. They agreed to start this search during the up-and-coming spring break, keeping their plans a secret from the adults who would undoubtedly discourage such a dangerous adventure.
The days that followed were filled with preparation. They read books on survival, learned about the stars for navigation, and tested their courage in smaller woods. The boys were united by their unshakable resolve and the promise of an adventure that could change their lives forever.
As spring break began, they set out just as the sun painted the sky with colors of orange and gold. They felt a mixture of excitement and slight nervousness. They carried backpacks filled with supplies and the ancient map that they hoped would lead them to glory.
The beginning of their journey was full of laughter and songs around the campfire, but as days passed, the trip's reality set in. The path grew more dangerous, and the maps guided them through thick woods and muddy wetlands. They learned to work together as their friendship was tested by constant challenges. Slowly, the island drew nearer.
A conflict arose when they reached the foot of Mount Veritas, the final barrier before reaching the island. Lucas twisted his ankle, and the slightest movement sent sharp pains shooting through his leg. With time running out, Jack and Simon had to make a choice: should they push on and risk Lucas’ well-being or turn back after coming so far
Para1: At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances.
Para2: When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all.
一、Read for clues:
1. Jack, Simon, and Lucas (人物)
2. a statue that was said to award its finder enormous wisdom and fortune（寻找目标）
3. They read books on survival, learned about the stars for navigation, and tested their courage in smaller woods. （学习的技能）
4. The boys were united by their unshakable resolve and the promise of an adventure that could change their lives forever.（出现品质词resolve，初步判断为主题句相关）
5. They felt a mixture of excitement and slight nervousness.（情感）
6. They learned to work together as their friendship was tested by constant challenges.（初步判断friendship为主题句相关）
7.With time running out, Jack and Simon had to make a choice: should they push on and risk Lucas’ well-being or turn back after coming so far (问题)
二、Read for the theme:
本文是三个男孩要去探险寻宝，遇到困难。
Theme—goal: a statue that was said to award its finder enormous wisdom and fortune
Theme—problem: Jack and Simon had to make a choice: should they push on and risk Lucas’ well-being or turn back after coming so far
主题通常是问题解决，或者目标实现，而这篇文章二者兼备，但殊途同归，合并起来：他们找到了宝，但这个宝是他们的决心、友谊和团结。
三、Design the plot:
Para1: At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances.
1.根据exchange glances推：两人有解决问题的主意了（根据第二个提示句，可知三人继续走）
Helping Lucas sit down, they then outlined the next plan. With tears glistening in his eyes, Lucas nodded in gratitude.
他们帮助卢卡斯坐下来，然后概述了下一个计划。卢卡斯的眼睛里闪烁着泪水，感激地地点了点头。
（这里没有说明主意内容，因为内容在后面具体展开，相当于卖关子）
2.路途中的艰辛（体现线索resolve）
The following hours saw Jack and Simon taking turns carrying Lucas on their backs, weaving through the woods and cautiously wading through water with great determination.
接下来的几个小时里，杰克和西蒙轮流背着卢卡斯，在树林中穿梭，小心翼翼地涉水水中。
3.看到了那个岛和雕塑the Silver Falcon
After what felt like forever, just on the point of their breaking down, the mysterious island finally came to light. And they did see the Silver Falcon, their heart racing with excitement. In an instant, they rushed towards it, despite their exhaustion.
感觉永远，就在他们崩溃的时候，这个神秘的岛屿终于曝光了。他们确实看到了银鹰，他们的心兴奋得跳动。一瞬间，他们尽管精疲力尽，还是冲了过去。
笔记：
Helping Lucas sit down现在分词做状语
With tears glistening in his eyes，with+复合宾语
The following hours saw Jack and Simon taking无灵主语句
weaving through the woods and cautiously wading through现在分词做状语
After what felt like forever时间衔接
their heart racing with excitement独立主格结构
Para2: When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all.1.他们的response: 沮丧（动作、语言、表情展开来，因为这一段主要写这个）
Unwilling to accept this reality, they scanned every corner, but in vain. Jack and Simon collapsed on the ground, murmuring in disappointment, “Have we gained nothing ”
他们不愿接受这个现实，他们扫视了每一个角落，但没有成功。杰克和西蒙倒在地上，失望地喃喃自语：“我们什么也没有得到吗？”
2.转机：什么东西深深吸引了他们？（除了scenery没有其它）
“No! Look ahead at the scenery!” Lucas exclaimed loudly, his voice trembling with tears of joy. Following Lucas’s pointing direction, Jack and Simon saw countless birds chirping, seemingly welcoming them. Never in their wildest dreams had they imagined such a visual feast!
不看看前方的风景！”卢卡斯大声喊道，他的声音随着喜悦的泪水而颤抖。按照卢卡斯的指示，杰克和西蒙看到无数的鸟儿在鸣叫，似乎在欢迎它们。
3.主题升华：这美丽的风景就是对他们的品质的回馈，而这个品质才是treasure。
Never in their wildest dreams had they imagined such a visual feast! And wasn’t all of this a reward for their determination, unity, and bravery—the true treasure of their journey
在他们最疯狂的梦里，他们从来没有想象过这样一场视觉盛宴！这一切难道不是对他们的决心、团结和勇敢的奖励吗——这是他们旅程中真正的财富吗？
笔记：
Unwilling to accept this reality形容词短语做状语
murmuring in disappointment现在分词做状语
his voice trembling with tears of joy独立主格结构
Never in their wildest dreams had they imagined 倒装句
Version 1：(下水文)
At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances. Helping Lucas sit down, they then outlined the next plan. With tears glistening in his eyes, Lucas nodded in gratitude. The following hours saw Jack and Simon taking turns carrying Lucas on their backs, weaving through the woods and cautiously wading through water with great determination. After what felt like forever, just on the point of their breaking down, the mysterious island finally came to light. And they did see the Silver Falcon, their heart racing with excitement. In an instant, they rushed towards it, despite their exhaustion.
When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all. Unwilling to accept this reality, they scanned every corner, but in vain. Jack and Simon collapsed on the ground, murmuring in disappointment, “Have we gained nothing ” “No! Look ahead at the scenery!” Lucas exclaimed loudly, his voice trembling with tears of joy.Following Lucas’s pointing direction, Jack and Simon saw countless birds chirping, seemingly welcoming them. Never in their wildest dreams had they imagined such a visual feast! And wasn’t all of this a reward for their determination, unity, and bravery—the true treasure of their journey
译文：At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances.他们帮助卢卡斯坐下来，然后概述了下一个计划。卢卡斯的眼睛里闪烁着泪水，感激地地点了点头。接下来的几个小时里，杰克和西蒙轮流背着卢卡斯，在树林中穿梭，小心翼翼地涉水水中。感觉永远，就在他们崩溃的时候，这个神秘的岛屿终于曝光了。他们确实看到了银鹰，他们的心兴奋得跳动。一瞬间，他们尽管精疲力尽，还是冲了过去。When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all. 他们不愿接受这个现实，他们扫视了每一个角落，但没有成功。杰克和西蒙倒在地上，失望地喃喃自语：“我们什么也没有得到吗？”不看看前方的风景！”卢卡斯大声喊道，他的声音随着喜悦的泪水而颤抖。按照卢卡斯的指示，杰克和西蒙看到无数的鸟儿在鸣叫，似乎在欢迎它们。在他们最疯狂的梦里，他们从来没有想象过这样一场视觉盛宴！这一切难道不是对他们的决心、团结和勇敢的奖励吗——这是他们旅程中真正的财富吗？
Version 2：（官方范文）At crossroads, Jack and Simon exchanged knowing glances. They realized they couldn’t leave Lucas behind and that the statue could wait, but their friendship could not. With great determination and strengthened bonds, they constructed a makeshift stretcher and carried Lucas through the last leg of their journey. As they reached the top of the last hill, the island revealed itself in all its glory. It was more impressive than they could have ever imagined. The Silver Falcon stood in the center, its wings shining in the sunlight. When reaching the Silver Falcon, the three boys found no fortune there at all. At that time, they realized the true treasure of their journey（主旨句）. It wasn't about the wisdom or fortune the Silver Falcon could bring—it was about the memories they had created together and the lessons they learned along the way. In an unexpected turn, the Silver Falcon seemed to acknowledge their growth. As they stood before it, its eyes shone brightly, and the forest around them came alive with the songs of birds and rustling leaves. A soft voice filled the clearing, congratulating them on their bravery and unity.
三、野外迷路
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West．
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend， picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos．
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm.”he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze（吃草）. I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool．
In the afternoon I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride and he said yes as long as my dad went with me. I wasn't going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper.” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don't get lost!" "OK!" my dad cried back. After a while, Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven（编织的） blanket spread out upon the ground just for us．Para1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Para2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
情节设计：
Para1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
马受到惊吓---控住缰绳---发现自己迷路
Para2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
恶劣环境描写---循水流找到出路---结尾
The unexpected guest frightened my horse, sending it running wildly. I could only see everything zipping by and hear the wind whistling. Heart in mouth, I held the reins( 缰绳) tightly and tried not to fall down.
这位不速之客吓到了我的马，使得它狂跑起来。我只能看到一切飞驰而过，听到风在呼啸。心都提到了嗓子眼，我紧紧地握着缰绳，尽量不掉下去。
At the critical moment, Dad's comforting words came from behind, “Don’t panic, son! Try hard to pull back your reins!” I followed what Dad told me and stopped my horse with all my strength.
在关键时刻，爸爸从后面说了一句安慰的话：“不要惊慌，孩子！努力收回你的缰绳！”我听了爸爸的话，竭尽全力停下了马。
But before we had the time for relief and relaxation, we found we had been off the beaten track and got lost.
但我们还来不及放松，我们发现我们已经偏离了轨道，迷路了。
笔记：
现在分词作结果状语；
现在分词作补语；
独立主格结构；
with作方式状语；
before...还没来得及...
Para2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
The wind, chilly and cold, crept into my bones.Worse still, fog began to close in and enveloped everything, which undoubtedly added to our difficulties and left us more
helpless. Everything was in deadly silence.
寒冷的风悄咪咪地钻进了我的骨头。更糟糕的是，雾开始逼近，包围了一切，这无疑增加了我们的困难，使我们更加无助。一切是死一般的寂静。
Just at the very instant, the murmur of water rolling down the river lifted our spirits---we could return home safe and sound down the river. Surprisingly, fog had cleared somehow and the stars appeared in the sky, blinking their eyes at us with pleasure.
就在这时，小河轻轻的流水声使我们振奋起来——我们可以沿着河安全地回家。令人惊讶的是，雾不知怎么地消散了，星星出现在天空中，高兴地向我们眨着眼睛。
What an unforgettable vacation we had!
我们过了一个多么难忘的假期！
笔记：
“风钻进骨头”拟人；
which非限定从；
“水轻轻流动”拟人；
现在分词作状语；
感叹句结尾！
最终自测：
Para1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
这位不速之客吓到了我的马，使得它狂跑起来。我只能看到一切飞驰而过，听到风在呼啸。心都提到了嗓子眼，我紧紧地握着缰绳，尽量不掉下去。
在关键时刻，爸爸从后面说了一句安慰的话：“不要惊慌，孩子！努力收回你的缰绳！”我听了爸爸的话，竭尽全力停下了马。
但我们还来不及放松，我们发现我们已经偏离了轨道，迷路了。
Para2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
寒冷的风悄咪咪地钻进了我的骨头。更糟糕的是，雾开始逼近，包围了一切，这无疑增加了我们的困难，使我们更加无助。一切是死一般的寂静。
就在这时，小河轻轻的流水声使我们振奋起来——我们可以沿着河安全地回家。令人惊讶的是，雾不知怎么地消散了，星星出现在天空中，高兴地向我们眨着眼睛。
我们过了一个多么难忘的，前所未有的假期！