-2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写练习写作 An experience in the lift 讲义
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An experience in the lift电梯惊魂
试题呈现：
When we were finally dismissed from the last class of the day, the students streamed out of the classrooms. It was another boring day after school. I dragged my feet home as I sighed. Yet another uneventful day, I thought. Little did I know that the day would take a turn for the worse.
The lift lobby(电梯间) of my flat was old and dirty. The walls, which were painted white, had been dirtied over many years. I reached my flat’s lobby, and pressed the lift button and went in. Just then, Mrs. Lim, my elderly neighbour, hobbled (蹒跚) in. She looked ancient with tissue paper white hair, wearing a faded old-fashioned dress. I held the lift door open, flashing a friendly smile, and politely greeted her. I asked her how she felt that day and pressed the buttons. She thanked me for being so polite, then we were silent for the rest of the ride.
The lift fell down increasingly fast. There were loud clanking sounds here and there while the lift grew slower and slower. My heart beat hard and fast as my hands turned cold and wet with sweat. Unfortunately, the lift came to an abrupt stop at the fifth floor. I pressed the buttons hard several times, but it was of no help. The lights on the buttons had gone out. It soon dawned on me that we were trapped. An icy fear crept up my spine. Mrs. Lim was hysterical (歇斯底里的).
“We will never get out!” she cried with her face pale. It had become a colourless mask. I had no time to lose. I pressed the bell in the lift immediately. The sound was surely deafening, but what other choice did I have Mrs. Lim burst into tears. I tried my very best to comfort her, telling her that everything would be all right and that we needed to find out how to get out safely. Mrs. Lim began having trouble breathing, and I immediately helped her sit down and loosened her collar.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Several minutes passed, but no help came.
Paragraph 2: Bang! My hopes were lifted when I heard the firefighters on the other side of the lift door.
写作指导
1. 确定人称：第三人称
2. 梳理原文情节：
3. 文章走向： 文章主旨？：
4. 构思情节
Paragraph 1: Several minutes passed, but no help came.
【P1】似乎没东西可写，按照我们之前讲过的构思技巧，可逐一通过主人公场景来添加，也可以用上遇险类求助无果套句，所以P1并不难。
①【衔接1】场景描写：电梯里笼罩着可怕的氛围
② Mrs. Lim的反应：虚弱，不断啜泣 发抖
③ 我的反应：尽力安抚Mrs. Lim +自己，表现得平静
④ 我的反应：敲电梯门求助，but 无果
⑤【衔接2】随着时间流逝，心态要崩了。
Paragraph 2: Bang! My hopes were lifted when I heard the firefighters on the other side of the lift door.
①【衔接3】我的反应：大喊，“快救救我们 + 里面有老人”
② firefighters 的回应：让我们保持镇定+等待救援
③ 我的反应：转头安抚Mrs. Lim，营救人员来了
④ 过了一会门终于开了，我们也获救了
⑤【结尾】回应下开头：回到家瘫在沙发上，回想着这不安稳的一天，珍惜平凡普通的一天。
【下水作文】
Paragraph 1: Several minutes passed, but no help came. The elevator was enveloped in a terrifying atmosphere, the dim light and deadly silence adding to our mounting fear. Mrs. Lim, my elderly neighbor, was a picture of despair, her body trembling as she continuously sobbed and gasped for air. Despite the fear that gripped me, I put on a brave face, trying to comfort her with reassuring words and a gentle pat on her shoulder. I then turned my efforts to the lift doors, pounding and shouting for assistance, yet the only response was the echo of my own desperate calls bouncing off the cold metal walls. As time wore on, the tension became unbearable, and I could feel my composure beginning to fray at the edges.
Paragraph 2: Bang! My hopes were lifted when I heard the firefighters on the other side of the lift door. "Please help us! There's an elderly woman in here!" I yelled at the top of my lung, my voice tinged with renewed hope and relief. The firefighters responded with calming words, instructing us to remain composed and assuring us that rescue was imminent. Turning back to Mrs. Lim, I conveyed the good news, comforting her that help had arrived and we would soon be safe. After what seemed like an eternity, the door finally creaked open, and we were ushered into the welcoming arms of our rescuers. Back home, I collapsed onto the couch, reflecting on the day's events and reminding myself to cherish the ordinary, seemingly unremarkable days.
【参考范文】
Several minutes passed, but no help came. The air-conditioning had died out, and the lift became really stuffy. We were sweating buckets. We tried to ring the emergency alarm again. Every second that passed was painful. "Help!!!" I screamed at the top of my lungs, trying to get someone's attention. A wave of despair washed over me. I felt like we would never make it. In one last effort, I tried banging on the doors. The next few minutes felt like hours as we waited in complete silence.
Bang! My hopes were lifted when 1 heard the firefighters on the other side of the lift door. Help was finally here! The brave firefighters hit the doors open using their tools. It felt like a hundred pound weight was lifted off me, and Mrs Lim thanked the heavens that someone had come to our rescue. I made a sigh of relief when the doors were finally opened and all this drama was over. The firefighters praised me for helping Mrs Lim. I returned their praise with gratitude and Mrs Lim thanked me and even gave me a hug.
试题呈现：
When we were finally dismissed from the last class of the day, the students streamed out of the classrooms. It was another boring day after school. I dragged my feet home as I sighed. Yet another uneventful day, I thought. Little did I know that the day would take a turn for the worse.
The lift lobby(电梯间) of my flat was old and dirty. The walls, which were painted white, had been dirtied over many years. I reached my flat’s lobby, and pressed the lift button and went in. Just then, Mrs. Lim, my elderly neighbour, hobbled (蹒跚) in. She looked ancient with tissue paper white hair, wearing a faded old-fashioned dress. I held the lift door open, flashing a friendly smile, and politely greeted her. I asked her how she felt that day and pressed the buttons. She thanked me for being so polite, then we were silent for the rest of the ride.
The lift fell down increasingly fast. There were loud clanking sounds here and there while the lift grew slower and slower. My heart beat hard and fast as my hands turned cold and wet with sweat. Unfortunately, the lift came to an abrupt stop at the fifth floor. I pressed the buttons hard several times, but it was of no help. The lights on the buttons had gone out. It soon dawned on me that we were trapped. An icy fear crept up my spine. Mrs. Lim was hysterical (歇斯底里的).
“We will never get out!” she cried with her face pale. It had become a colourless mask. I had no time to lose. I pressed the bell in the lift immediately. The sound was surely deafening, but what other choice did I have Mrs. Lim burst into tears. I tried my very best to comfort her, telling her that everything would be all right and that we needed to find out how to get out safely. Mrs. Lim began having trouble breathing, and I immediately helped her sit down and loosened her collar.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Several minutes passed, but no help came.
Paragraph 2: Bang! My hopes were lifted when I heard the firefighters on the other side of the lift door.
写作指导
1. 确定人称：第三人称
2. 梳理原文情节：
3. 文章走向： 文章主旨？：
4. 构思情节
Paragraph 1: Several minutes passed, but no help came.
【P1】似乎没东西可写，按照我们之前讲过的构思技巧，可逐一通过主人公场景来添加，也可以用上遇险类求助无果套句，所以P1并不难。
①【衔接1】场景描写：电梯里笼罩着可怕的氛围
② Mrs. Lim的反应：虚弱，不断啜泣 发抖
③ 我的反应：尽力安抚Mrs. Lim +自己，表现得平静
④ 我的反应：敲电梯门求助，but 无果
⑤【衔接2】随着时间流逝，心态要崩了。
Paragraph 2: Bang! My hopes were lifted when I heard the firefighters on the other side of the lift door.
①【衔接3】我的反应：大喊，“快救救我们 + 里面有老人”
② firefighters 的回应：让我们保持镇定+等待救援
③ 我的反应：转头安抚Mrs. Lim，营救人员来了
④ 过了一会门终于开了，我们也获救了
⑤【结尾】回应下开头：回到家瘫在沙发上，回想着这不安稳的一天，珍惜平凡普通的一天。
【下水作文】
Paragraph 1: Several minutes passed, but no help came. The elevator was enveloped in a terrifying atmosphere, the dim light and deadly silence adding to our mounting fear. Mrs. Lim, my elderly neighbor, was a picture of despair, her body trembling as she continuously sobbed and gasped for air. Despite the fear that gripped me, I put on a brave face, trying to comfort her with reassuring words and a gentle pat on her shoulder. I then turned my efforts to the lift doors, pounding and shouting for assistance, yet the only response was the echo of my own desperate calls bouncing off the cold metal walls. As time wore on, the tension became unbearable, and I could feel my composure beginning to fray at the edges.
Paragraph 2: Bang! My hopes were lifted when I heard the firefighters on the other side of the lift door. "Please help us! There's an elderly woman in here!" I yelled at the top of my lung, my voice tinged with renewed hope and relief. The firefighters responded with calming words, instructing us to remain composed and assuring us that rescue was imminent. Turning back to Mrs. Lim, I conveyed the good news, comforting her that help had arrived and we would soon be safe. After what seemed like an eternity, the door finally creaked open, and we were ushered into the welcoming arms of our rescuers. Back home, I collapsed onto the couch, reflecting on the day's events and reminding myself to cherish the ordinary, seemingly unremarkable days.
【参考范文】
Several minutes passed, but no help came. The air-conditioning had died out, and the lift became really stuffy. We were sweating buckets. We tried to ring the emergency alarm again. Every second that passed was painful. "Help!!!" I screamed at the top of my lungs, trying to get someone's attention. A wave of despair washed over me. I felt like we would never make it. In one last effort, I tried banging on the doors. The next few minutes felt like hours as we waited in complete silence.
Bang! My hopes were lifted when 1 heard the firefighters on the other side of the lift door. Help was finally here! The brave firefighters hit the doors open using their tools. It felt like a hundred pound weight was lifted off me, and Mrs Lim thanked the heavens that someone had come to our rescue. I made a sigh of relief when the doors were finally opened and all this drama was over. The firefighters praised me for helping Mrs Lim. I returned their praise with gratitude and Mrs Lim thanked me and even gave me a hug.