高考英语读后续写提分升档攻略 4
精彩句式,文笔翩翩
要想使得读后续写的作文提分升档,除了用词精巧之外,恰当使用一些精彩的句式也是很必要的。使用丰富的句式可以让文章更加生动、有趣,增强文章的吸引力和阅读体验,从而提高文章的质量。以下我们列举一些读后续写实践中学生可借鉴的句式。所选例句均来自高考真题原文、真题高分范文、模考试题或范文以及词典例句等。
一、善用状语,描述有层次
副词作状语
1.Suddenly, a thought occurred to Arthur:the young man might be the bank robber.
突然,Arthur有一个想法:那个年轻人可能就是银行抢劫犯。
2.Sadly, the helicopter flew away again.(2016年10月浙江卷)
不幸的是,直升机又飞走了。
3.Occasionally, Poppy was still found quiet with her eyes watching in the distance.(2020年1月浙江卷)
有时,波比会安静地坐着,眼睛注视着远处。
4.Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly(2021年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
幸好,杰夫保持冷静并迅速关闭了燃气
形容词作状语
1.He ran through the finish line, exhausted but victorious.
他冲过终点线,疲惫不堪但胜利了。
2.The children played in the park, happy and carefree.
孩子们在公园里玩耍,快乐而无忧无虑。
3.Excited about the upcoming trip, she could hardly sleep the night before.
对即将到来的旅行感到兴奋,她在前一晚几乎无法入睡。
4.Nervous and anxious, he checked his phone every few minutes, waiting for her call.
他紧张不安,每隔几分钟就会看看手机,等待她的电话。
5.Exhausted from the long hike,we collapsed on the grass and rested for a while.
在长途徒步旅行中感到疲惫不堪,我们倒在草地上休息了一会儿。
非谓语作状语
1.So for the next few hours I found myself busy serving the salad to them, forgetting all my negative thoughts.(2022年6月浙江卷)
然后在接下来的几个小时里,我发现自己忙着给他们端沙拉,忘记了所有消极的想法。
2.Startled by the sudden incident, the horse began to race like crazy.(2018年6月浙江卷)
受到突然的惊吓,马开始疯狂地跑起来。
3.Gasping with pain, David forced himself to his feet and with slow, shaky steps, began to run.(2022年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
(虽然)疼得直吸气,大卫还是强迫自己站起来,然后迈着缓慢、摇摇晃晃的步子开始跑起来。
4.Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.(2023年新课标I、Ⅱ卷)
受到他的鼓励,我决定试一试。
with复合结构作状语
1.With the gun ringing out, David rushed as quickly as he could.(2022年新高考I、IⅡ卷)
听到枪响,大卫尽可能快地跑起来。
2.With his arms crossed and a stern expression on his face, he looked like he meant business.
他双臂交叉,面容严峻,看起来像是认真处理事务的样子。
3.With the wind howling outside and the rain pouring down, it was a perfect night for staying indoors and reading a book.
外面风声呼啸,雨水倾泻而下,这是一个室内读书的完美夜晚。
4.With a smile on her face and a skip in her step, she walked down the street feeling happy and carefree.
面带微笑,步履轻盈,她走在街上,感到快乐无忧。
5.With a new album coming out next month and a world tour in the works, the band is ready for a big comeback.
下个月将推出新专辑,世界巡回演出正在筹备中,这支乐队已准备好重返乐坛。
介词短语作状语
1.In fear of falling, I pedaled carefully,holding the handlebars tightly with my sweaty hands.(2022年汕头一模)
由于害怕拌倒,我小心翼翼地踩着踏板,用汗津津的手紧紧抓住车把。
2.As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and
was proud of his strong determination.(2022年新高考I,Ⅱ卷)
作为学校的一名特殊教有老师,我熟悉大卫所面临的挑战,也为他坚强的决心感到骄傲。
独立主格结构作状语
1.Knocking on the door,I entered to find him amidst a sea of papers, a smile lighting up his face as he saw me.(2023年新课标I、II卷)
敲门后,我走进房间,在一大堆试卷、资料中发现了他的身影,他看到我时脸上露出了微笑。
2.The storm having passed, we ventured outside to assess the damage.
暴风雨过去了,我们冒险走出去评估损失。
3.The food having been served, we all sat down to enjoy the meal.
食物已经上桌,我们都坐下来享用美食。
4.The game won, the team celebrated their victory with
high-fives and cheers.
比赛赢了,团队用击掌和欢呼庆祝他们的胜利。
状语从句作状语
1.Much as I wanted to photograph the approaching bear with my camera, I, without hesitation, grabbed the bread and threw it far away.(2020年7月浙江卷)
虽然我很想拿起相机给那只不断逼近的熊拍照,但我还是毫不犹豫地抓起面包,将它扔远。
2.David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish.(2022年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
大卫从未错过一次练习,尽管他总是比其他孩子跑得慢,但他总能坚持到最后。
3.As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends.(2017年11月浙江卷)
随着我们旅行的第一天临近,我和8岁的弟弟大卫不情愿地向所有的朋友告别。
多重状语
1.After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.(2022年新高考I、Ⅱ卷状语从句+独立主格)
在确保大卫如果自己愿意跑可以奔跑之后,我转过身来发现他朝我走来,他向前摆动脚时,小身体晃来晃去。
2.Seeing their discouraged faces, Father told the twins to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother.(2021年新高考I、Ⅱ卷非谓语+状语从句)
看到他们失望的面孔,爸爸告诉双胞胎打扫干净厨房,他帮助他们给妈妈做早饭。
3.Feeling tired after a long day at work, and with a headache coming on, she decided to take a nap before dinner.(非谓语+with复合结构)
工作了一整天感到疲惫,又开始头痛,她决定在晚餐前小睡一会儿。
4.Despite having studied for days, and with the exam just a few hours away, he still felt unprepared.(介词短语+with复合结构)
尽管已经学习了几天,且现在距离考试只有几个小时,他仍然感到没有准备好。
⑤Having missed the last train, and with no other transportation available, we had to walk home in the pouring rain.(非谓语+with复合结构)
错过了最后一班火车,又没有其他交通工具可用,我们不得不在倾盆大雨中步行回家。
二、巧用定语、名词性从句,提升句子紧凑度
定语从句
1.There will always be someone who will laugh and say mean things.(2022年新高考I、II卷)
总会有人会嘲笑你,说一些刻薄的话。
2.The book, which is a memoir of her childhood, tells the story of her family's struggles during the Great Depression.
这本书是她的童年回忆录,讲述了她的家庭在大萧条期间的困境。
3.The professor with whom I studied history was very knowledgeable and passionate about the subject.
教我历史的教授知识非常渊博,对历史也非常有热情。
4.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts.(2023年新课标I、II卷)
我曾经感到写作非常难,让我很痛苦,以至于我的老师允许我通过表演一出戏剧来展示我关于泰坦尼克号沉没的论文,而我在表演中扮演了所有角色。
5.I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.(2022年新高考I、I1卷)
我环顾四周,终于发现了大卫,他独自站在栅栏旁边。
6.There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy.(2020年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
有一个男人卧病在床,他的妻子照顾他,不能出去工作,还有他们的小男孩。
名词性从句
1.Mother bit into the sandwich and exclaimed it was the best sandwich she had ever tasted.(2021年新高考I、IⅡ卷宾语从句)
母亲咬了一口三明治,惊叫道这是她尝过的最好吃的三明治。
2.What she could do was just wait.(2016年10月浙江卷主语从句)
她能做的只是等待。
3.Her belief that hard work and persistence are the keys to success has helped her achieve her goals.(同位语从句)
她的信念,即勤奋和坚持是成功的关键,帮助她实现了自己的目标。
三、灵活使用特殊结构,提升阅读体验
倒装
1.So sweet was the surprise that Mother excitedly shook Father, who was pretending to snore.(2021年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
惊喜如此甜美,以至于母亲兴奋地摇晃着假装打呼噜的父亲。
2.Tired though I was, when I saw the finished graphic novel, I couldn't help breathing a deep breath of relief, imagining Kash's first facial expression when he caught sight of this well-designed graphic novel.(2023年广东二模)
虽然我很累,但当我看到完成的漫画小说时,我情不自禁松了口气,想象着卡什看到这本精心设计的漫画小说的第一个面部表情。
强调
1.It was she, with her angelic voice and flawless performance, who won the singing competition.
是她,用她天使般的嗓音和完美的表现,赢得了这次歌唱比赛
2.It was in that moment that I fully grasped the extent of my actions and the hurt I had caused her.
就在那一刻,我完全明白了自己的行为以及对她造成的伤害。
省略
Though embarrassed, I was satisfied with the happiness and fun that I had brought to others.(2021年1月浙江卷)(Though embarrassed补全为Though I was embarrassed)
虽然有些尴尬,但我对于给大家带来的快乐还是非常满足的。
虚拟语气
1.If only I hadn't said those bad words.
如果我当初没说那些难听的话就好了。
2.If I had worked hard, I would have passed the exam.
如果我当初努力学习,我就能通过考试了。
3.And I know I should have watched Ethan more carefully, but I really thought he was just in the
bathroom.
我知道我本该更小心地看着伊森的,但我当时真的认为他只是在卫生间里。
It作形式主语
1.It dawned on me that his seriousness was quite handy when it came to setting up an experiment.(2022年1月浙江卷)
我意识到,他的认真对于设计实验非常有帮助。
2 It is easy to overlook her in a crowd simply because she is nothing extraordinary to see.
在人群中很容易忽视她,因为她没有什么特别之处。
感叹句
1.How I wish I had worked harder!
我多希望自己从前努力学习啊!
2.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.(2021年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
当他们将早餐端到床前,妈妈将会多么开心和骄傲啊。
四、善用动作链,具体描写,推进动作
1.My horse got off the track and kept running, and only stopped when it reached the river.(2018年6月浙江卷)
我的马脱离了跑道,继续往前跑,最后跑到河边时停了下来。
2.He balanced himself on the truck, leaned back and threw the rock at the window. Finally, the glass cracked and broke and Steve kicked in the remaining pieces of glass.(2022年深圳一模)
他在卡车上保持平衡,向后一靠,把石头扔向窗户。最后,玻璃破裂了,史蒂夫把剩下的玻璃碎片踢了进去。
3.All in a split second, the girls slipped their scarves off their shoulders and threw them to Aminah, who quickly tied thick knots, connecting the scarves.(2022年嘉兴基础测试)
顷刻间,女孩们把围巾从肩上脱下来,扔给阿米娜,阿米娜迅速地把围巾打上了厚厚的结,将围巾连起来。
五、多种描写混搭,营造画面感
1.This time I pedaled more confidently, enjoying the gentle breeze passing my ears.(2022年汕头一模动作描写+环境描写)
这一次我更自信地踩着踏板,享受着微风吹过耳边的感觉。
2.Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he'd be easy caught up and the wolf's teeth would be tearing into his flesh.(2017年6月浙江卷动作描写+心理描写)
麦克使劲蹬着车。他挥着手对过往的汽车大喊大叫,但同时力求不减速。他看到面前有一段陡峭的上坡路。他知道,一旦他骑上去,就很容易被抓住,狼的牙齿就会咬碎他的肉。
3.Seized by the increasing eagerness to contact his grandmother, he wolfed down his supper once it was ready.(2022年台州一模动作描写+心理描写)
他越来越渴望与祖母取得联系,晚饭一做好,他就狼吞虎咽地吃了下去。
即学即练
根据括号中的提示,补全下列句子。
1.“_____________________________________________(如果不是因为那个愚蠢的争吵,我也不会被困在这里 虚拟语气),”she thought to herself.(2016年10月浙江卷)
2._____________________________________________(从他眼中的光芒判断 非谓语作状语),I was firmly convinced that he loved this graphic novel.(2023年广东二模)
3.I swallowed hard, ducked my head and inched towards her, _____________________________________________(前额冒起了细密的汗珠 独立主格作状语).(2022年浙江10月强基联盟)
4.He rushed to his grandfather, _____________________________________________(手里拿着手表 非谓语作状语).(2022年枣庄二模)
5.Frozen with fear, Mia stood in front of the class, _____________________________________________(手里拿着她的卷子 with复合结构作状语),shaking.(2022年辽宁高三模拟测试)
6._____________________________________________(我开始明白 it作形式主语)it was the encouragement from my teacher that helped me find my confidence.(2022年浙江高二七彩阳光联盟)
7.The trip, _____________________________________________(一次千载难逢的冒险 定语从句),taught me the value of taking risks and trying new things.
8._____________________________________________(一切准备就绪 介词短语作状语),Bernard started out on his new business.(2020年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
9.Under his guidance, _____________________________________________(很快法式吐司和鸡粥就做好了 It didn't take long before...). (2021年新高考1、Ⅱ卷)
10.In not even a minute _____________________________________________(那只饥饿的熊就吃完了面包 倒装).(2020年7月浙江卷)
11._____________________________________________(当我最终完成时 状语从句),the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.(2023年新课标I、II卷)
12.Then out of the box _____________________________________________(那只可爱的小狗跳了出来 倒装)(2020年1月浙江卷)
13.Never before _____________________________________________(他挣过这么多钱 倒装)in his life.(2020年新高考I、II卷)
14.The twins prepared the breakfast tray, _____________________________________________
(加了一个他们自制的卡片 非谓语作状语+定语从句).(2021年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
15._____________________________________________(当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时 状语从句),their father appeared.(2021年新高考I、Ⅱ卷)
16._____________________________________________(直到那时 强调结构)I realised Mom had been filming the whole time.(2021年1月浙江卷)
17.Paul quickly unlocked the door,and the frightened man _____________________________________________dived in.(砰地把门关上了 非谓语作状语)(2017年6月浙江卷)
18._____________________________________________(尴尬地挠了挠他的后脑勺 非谓语作状语),Arthur apologized to the young man sincerely.(2015年考试中心样题)
19.While studying for her exams, _____________________________________________(她的脑海中都是关于成功的想法 独立主格结构作状语),she couldn’t help but feel a sense of determination.
20.The rain poured down heavily,soaking everyone outside, _____________________________________________(淋得湿透且狼狈不堪 形容词作状语)
21.The puppy wagged its tail, _____________________________________________(兴奋而活泼形容词作状语)
22._____________________________________________(感到不耐烦和沮丧 形容词作状语),she slammed the door and stormed out of the room.
23._____________________________________________(感到困惑和茫然 形容词作状语),he looked around the unfamiliar surroundings, trying to figure out where he was.
24._____________________________________________(太阳在山后落下 with复合结构作状语),we enjoyed a breathtaking view of the valley.
25._____________________________________________(太阳已经落山 独立主格结构作状语),we lit a fire and settled in for the night.
26._____________________________________________(他的工作完成后 独立主格结构作状语),he decided to take a break and go for a walk.
27._____________________________________________(直到那时我才明白 倒装)Joe actually understood how to take care of me despite his trouble with the housework.(2020年温州高三模考)
28.Seized by a sudden panic, _____________________________________________(我的大脑一片空白,疯狂叫着“爸爸” 动作描写+心理描写).(2022年汕头一模)
29._____________________________________________(我拿着包裹回到自己的房间,坐在床边,打开它。动作链)(2022年杭州高二教学检测)
30._____________________________________________(我焦急地来回藏步,不知道该怎么办才好。动作描写+心理描写)(2022年浙南名校测试)
参考答案
1.If it weren't for that stupid quarrel, I wouldn't be trapped here
2.Judging from the light shining in his eyes
3.sweat forming in tiny droplets on my forehead
4.holding the watch in his hand
5.with her hands holding her paper
6.It dawned on me that
7.which was a once-in-a-lifetime adventure
8.With everything ready
9.it didn't take long before the French toast and
chicken porridge were ready
10.did the hungry bear finish the bread
11.When I finally finished it
12.jumped the little cute puppy
13.had he earned so much money
14.adding a card they had made
15.As the twins looked around them in disappointment
16.It was only then that
17.slamming the door behind him
18.Scratching the back of his head awkwardly
19.her mind racing with thoughts of success
20.wet and miserable
21.excited and playful
22.Impatient and frustrated
23.Confused and bewildered
24.With the sun setting behind the mountains
25.The sun having set
26.His work completed
27.Only then did I realize
28.I went blank,calling“Dad”crazily
29.I went to my room with the package,sat on the edge of my bed, and opened it.
30.I paced back and forth anxiously,not knowing what to do.