2024届高考英语二轮复习应用文写作 我们的成长 讲义
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2024年高考英语写作 我们的成长
上个月，你校举办了“我的成长”的英语主题分享 请你写一篇英语短文，汇报你们小组四人的分享内容，需包括以下要点.
Member Fang Fang Sun Lei Zhao Yun You
Aspects study voluntary work environmental protection
Progress have good learning habits help others in recycle old things
范文一
Hello, everyone! We had a sharing session on "My Progress" last month. Here is what we shared in our group.
Everyone has their own progress. First of all, FangFang, who was poor in studies, has developed a good learning habit. Thus, she can study in an efficient way.
In addition, Sun Lei did a lot of voluntary work, which probably helped him become responsible. When he finished helping others in need, he realized that it is necessary for teenagers to take part in social activities. Moreover, recycling old things made Zhao Yun feel fulfilled. He certainly enjoyed protecting the environment by himself. As far as I'm concerned, I was dealing with my mental health problem, and it was a big success. I was glad to change my diet because it could prevent me from serious diseases. Overall, everyone in our group has made great progress. Let's make a difference to our daily lives!
范文二
Hello, everyone! We had a sharing session on "My Progress" last month. Here is what we shared in our group.
Each individual has forged their own unique path of advancement. To illustrate, FangFang, who had previously struggled academically, has cultivated an exemplary study regimen, thereby enhancing her efficiency in learning.
Furthermore, Sun Lei embarked on numerous volunteer endeavors, undoubtedly honing his sense of responsibility. Upon conclusion of his charitable works, he came to comprehend the significance of adolescents engaging in societal undertakings. Additionally, Zhao Yun derived fulfillment from up cycling discarded items, genuinely relishing the opportunity to contribute to environmental preservation. Personally, I confronted my own mental health challenges, ultimately attaining notable success. Adjusting my diet proved beneficial in warding off potential health complications. Ultimately, every member of our cohort has achieved remarkable progress. Collectively, let us strive to make a profound impact on our daily lives.
大家好！上个月，我们参加了一个名为“我的进步”的分享会。请允许我概述一下我们小组内发生的事情。
每个人都开拓了自己独特的进步之路。举例来说，芳芳，之前在学业上遇到了困难，现在已经培养出了优秀的学习习惯，从而提高了她的学习效率。
此外，孙磊投身于众多的志愿活动中，这无疑磨练了他的责任感。在完成慈善工作后，他开始理解青少年参与社会活动的重要性。另外，赵云从升级利用废旧物品中获得了成就感，真正享受到了为环境保护做贡献的机会。就我个人而言，我面对了自己的心理健康挑战，并最终取得了显著的成功。调整饮食对预防潜在的健康问题很有帮助。最终，我们小组的每位成员都取得了显著的进步。让我们共同努力，对我们的日常生活产生深远的影响。
范文一与范文二优化改写理由供参考
1.“Last month, we participated in a sharing session titled 'My Progress.'” 使用更正式的“participated in”替换了原先的“had”，提升了句子的正式度，同时明确了分享会的主题。
2.“Allow me to recapitulate what transpired within our group.” 采用了更书面化的用语“recapitulate”和“transpired”，来替代原先的口语化表达，使文章显得更加正式和专业。
3.在描述芳芳的进步时，用“cultivated an exemplary study regimen”替换了“developed a good learning habit”，使表达更加生动和具体。
4.“thereby enhancing her efficiency in learning”中的“thereby”增强了句子的逻辑性，指明了学习习惯与学习效率之间的因果关系。在描述孙磊的部分，用“embarked on numerous volunteer endeavors”替换了“did a lot of voluntary work”，使表达更加丰富多彩。
5.“honing his sense of responsibility”比原先的“become responsible”更加细腻地描述了孙磊责任感的提升过程。
6.“Upon conclusion of his charitable works”中的“upon conclusion of”使句子更加流畅，并强调了时间顺序。
7.在描述赵云的部分，用“derived fulfillment from upcycling discarded items”替换了“recycling old things made ... feel fulfilled”，使表达更加准确和生动。“genuinely relishing the opportunity to contribute to environmental preservation”中的“genuinely relishing”和“contribute to environmental preservation”提升了句子的表达层次，使其更具深度和内涵。在
8.“I confronted my own mental health challenges”中的“confronted”比原先的“dealing with”更加生动和有力。
9.“Adjusting my diet proved beneficial in warding off potential health complications”中的“warding off potential health complications”更加具体和准确。
10.“Ultimately, every member of our cohort has achieved remarkable progress”中的“cohort”替换了原先的“group”，使表达更加专业和准确。“remarkable progress”也提升了表达的层次。结尾部分，“Collectively, let us strive to make a profound impact on our daily lives”中的“Collectively”和“profound impact”使句子更加有力和鼓舞人心。
上个月，你校举办了“我的成长”的英语主题分享 请你写一篇英语短文，汇报你们小组四人的分享内容，需包括以下要点.
Member Fang Fang Sun Lei Zhao Yun You
Aspects study voluntary work environmental protection
Progress have good learning habits help others in recycle old things
范文一
Hello, everyone! We had a sharing session on "My Progress" last month. Here is what we shared in our group.
Everyone has their own progress. First of all, FangFang, who was poor in studies, has developed a good learning habit. Thus, she can study in an efficient way.
In addition, Sun Lei did a lot of voluntary work, which probably helped him become responsible. When he finished helping others in need, he realized that it is necessary for teenagers to take part in social activities. Moreover, recycling old things made Zhao Yun feel fulfilled. He certainly enjoyed protecting the environment by himself. As far as I'm concerned, I was dealing with my mental health problem, and it was a big success. I was glad to change my diet because it could prevent me from serious diseases. Overall, everyone in our group has made great progress. Let's make a difference to our daily lives!
范文二
Hello, everyone! We had a sharing session on "My Progress" last month. Here is what we shared in our group.
Each individual has forged their own unique path of advancement. To illustrate, FangFang, who had previously struggled academically, has cultivated an exemplary study regimen, thereby enhancing her efficiency in learning.
Furthermore, Sun Lei embarked on numerous volunteer endeavors, undoubtedly honing his sense of responsibility. Upon conclusion of his charitable works, he came to comprehend the significance of adolescents engaging in societal undertakings. Additionally, Zhao Yun derived fulfillment from up cycling discarded items, genuinely relishing the opportunity to contribute to environmental preservation. Personally, I confronted my own mental health challenges, ultimately attaining notable success. Adjusting my diet proved beneficial in warding off potential health complications. Ultimately, every member of our cohort has achieved remarkable progress. Collectively, let us strive to make a profound impact on our daily lives.
大家好！上个月，我们参加了一个名为“我的进步”的分享会。请允许我概述一下我们小组内发生的事情。
每个人都开拓了自己独特的进步之路。举例来说，芳芳，之前在学业上遇到了困难，现在已经培养出了优秀的学习习惯，从而提高了她的学习效率。
此外，孙磊投身于众多的志愿活动中，这无疑磨练了他的责任感。在完成慈善工作后，他开始理解青少年参与社会活动的重要性。另外，赵云从升级利用废旧物品中获得了成就感，真正享受到了为环境保护做贡献的机会。就我个人而言，我面对了自己的心理健康挑战，并最终取得了显著的成功。调整饮食对预防潜在的健康问题很有帮助。最终，我们小组的每位成员都取得了显著的进步。让我们共同努力，对我们的日常生活产生深远的影响。
范文一与范文二优化改写理由供参考
1.“Last month, we participated in a sharing session titled 'My Progress.'” 使用更正式的“participated in”替换了原先的“had”，提升了句子的正式度，同时明确了分享会的主题。
2.“Allow me to recapitulate what transpired within our group.” 采用了更书面化的用语“recapitulate”和“transpired”，来替代原先的口语化表达，使文章显得更加正式和专业。
3.在描述芳芳的进步时，用“cultivated an exemplary study regimen”替换了“developed a good learning habit”，使表达更加生动和具体。
4.“thereby enhancing her efficiency in learning”中的“thereby”增强了句子的逻辑性，指明了学习习惯与学习效率之间的因果关系。在描述孙磊的部分，用“embarked on numerous volunteer endeavors”替换了“did a lot of voluntary work”，使表达更加丰富多彩。
5.“honing his sense of responsibility”比原先的“become responsible”更加细腻地描述了孙磊责任感的提升过程。
6.“Upon conclusion of his charitable works”中的“upon conclusion of”使句子更加流畅，并强调了时间顺序。
7.在描述赵云的部分，用“derived fulfillment from upcycling discarded items”替换了“recycling old things made ... feel fulfilled”，使表达更加准确和生动。“genuinely relishing the opportunity to contribute to environmental preservation”中的“genuinely relishing”和“contribute to environmental preservation”提升了句子的表达层次，使其更具深度和内涵。在
8.“I confronted my own mental health challenges”中的“confronted”比原先的“dealing with”更加生动和有力。
9.“Adjusting my diet proved beneficial in warding off potential health complications”中的“warding off potential health complications”更加具体和准确。
10.“Ultimately, every member of our cohort has achieved remarkable progress”中的“cohort”替换了原先的“group”，使表达更加专业和准确。“remarkable progress”也提升了表达的层次。结尾部分，“Collectively, let us strive to make a profound impact on our daily lives”中的“Collectively”和“profound impact”使句子更加有力和鼓舞人心。