2024届4月云南师大附中月考读后续写---患有自闭症的出色赛车手 讲义
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2024年4月云南师大附中高三统测读后续写
As a journalist, I have had the chance to meet some remarkable people in different fields, but no one has impressed me more than Austin Riley.
Austin Riley is a race car driver. He has been attracting crowds to the race track for years. But his claim to fame isn’t just being fast on the speedway. He is overcoming difficulties on the track for those with disabilities. Riley has autism (自闭症). Simple tasks like tying his shoes are extremely complicated for him, but when put in a race car—a complex delicate piece of machine—he will take you by surprise.
I first met Riley and his father Jason in 2014, in Uxbridge, Ontario, at the local go-cart track. I still remember how excited Riley was to have me and my cameraman there filming his every move. He was a go-cart racer then. He could barely talk to me, let alone look at me. No matter how quiet and shy he was, I knew this kid was going to be something big.
The go-cart track is where Riley’s racing career began. His dad, Jason, just wanted to give him something to focus his energy on. Riley has always loved cars. He has been crazy about them since he was a very young child. He also loves speed. The minute he hit the gas, his mind began to move fast and everything felt in sync (同步).
Riley's journey on the track soon took him from fast go-carts to really fast cars. He became the first person with autism in Canada to get his race car license. It opened up the track for Riley to drive in the big leagues — the Radical Motorsports circuit. Riley is now racing across North America, putting him on the podium (领奖台) almost every time.
Paragraph 1: However, behind every success for Riley and his family is a story of hardship.
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Paragraph 2: Riley has also made a difference off the track.
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文本故事中文梗概
Austin Riley是一名赛车手，尽管患有自闭症，但他在赛车领域却表现出色。作者“我”是一名记者，我于2014年在加拿大安大略省的一家小型赛车场首次采访到Riley及其父亲Jason。Riley当时还是一名卡丁车（go-cart track）赛车手。那时候我就感觉Riley一定大有前途。随着时间的推移，Riley从卡丁车转向了职业赛车，并成为加拿大第一位获得赛车执照的自闭症人士，参加Radical Motorsports赛事。Riley目前在北美比赛，并几乎每次比赛都能站上领奖台。
主要人物：
Austin Riley （患有自闭症的赛车手）
次要人物：
Jason （Riley的爸爸）
I （作者我）
续写思路建议
第一段主要写成功的背后Riley付出的努力以及他的家人给与的支持和帮助。Riley的努力可以具体提到赛车训练。家人的支持可以说一说经济和精神支持。本着“非必要不增加新人物”的续写原则，家人方面可以用集体名词family以及代词they代指。
第二段可以着重点写Riley的成功具体和别人有何不同。在写这种不同的时候，建议把核心放在Riley 身患自闭症(autism)这个点上。突出race car driver with disabilities 给人带来的榜样励志作用。
注意：
本文中的次要人物作者“我”是一名记者（journalist）。文章是作者叙述Riley的励志故事，叙事的主要视角是第三人称。这种叙事视角在续写中不能改变。
写作示范
However, behind every success for Riley and his family is a story of hardship. Riley's path to the championship was tough, marked not only by wins but also by challenges. Long hours of practice every time and huge financial pressure were just some of the hurdles they faced regularly. There were moments of doubt, moments when they thought car racing was a world not designed for people with autism. Yet, Jason's unwavering belief in his son's abilities and Riley's own indomitable spirit kept them going. Together, they turned each setback into an opportunity, building resilience that became as much a part of Riley’s racing gear as his helmet and suit. （96 words）
Riley has also made a difference off the track. His success have turned him into an unexpected advocate for autism awareness. He's worked with charities, participated in events that focus on the abilities rather than disabilities of individuals with autism, and inspired countless families. Parents of children with autism have approached him, sharing stories of how Riley's journey has given them hope. His message is clear: with passion and perseverance, the finish line is never too far away, no matter the starting point. Riley isn't just racing for trophies; he's racing to rewrite the narrative of autism, one lap at a time.（93 words）
写作细节分析
However, behind every success for Riley and his family is a story of hardship. Riley's path to the championship was tough, marked not only by wins but also by challenges.（challenges和作文题给定段首句的hardship 自然呼应）Long hours of practice every time and huge financial pressure were just some of the hurdles they faced regularly.（对hardship做进一步具体描述：主要困难是长时间艰苦的训练以及较大的家庭经济负担）There were moments of doubt, moments when they thought car racing was a world not designed for people with autism.（合理叙述：他们家人也有过彷徨和不确定，毕竟Riley患有自闭症）Yet, Jason's unwavering belief in his son's abilities and Riley's own indomitable spirit kept them going.（适度正能量鸡汤：相信精神的力量）Together, they turned each setback into an opportunity, building resilience that became as much a part of Riley’s racing gear as his helmet and suit. （和赛车运动高度关联的概念表述：helmet and suit）
Riley has also made a difference off the track. His success have turned him into an unexpected advocate for autism awareness.（依据题目给出的开头句这段要开始讲Riley的成功在“赛车场之外”（ off the track）的影响） He's worked with charities, participated in events that focus on the abilities rather than disabilities of individuals with autism, and inspired countless families.（强调Riley对自闭症人群的关注和影响。强调多关注他们的abilities 而不只是disabilities） Parents of children with autism have approached him, sharing stories of how Riley's journey has given them hope.（进一步的说是Riley给家有自闭症孩子的家长带来了希望） His message is clear: with passion and perseverance, the finish line is never too far away, no matter the starting point. Riley isn't just racing for trophies; he's racing to rewrite the narrative of autism, one lap at a time. （使用恰到好处的比喻（Metaphor），把Riley的赛车比赛比作一场和社会偏见的较量，暗示了他通过每一圈的比赛在社会认知中为自闭症重新定位）
词汇和表达积累
financial pressure 财务压力
hurdle n. 障碍
unwavering belief 坚定的信念
indomitable spirit 不屈的精神
setback n. 挫折
racing gear 赛车装备
advocate n. 倡导者
perseverance n. 坚持不懈
trophy n. 奖杯
narrative n. 叙述
As a journalist, I have had the chance to meet some remarkable people in different fields, but no one has impressed me more than Austin Riley.
Austin Riley is a race car driver. He has been attracting crowds to the race track for years. But his claim to fame isn’t just being fast on the speedway. He is overcoming difficulties on the track for those with disabilities. Riley has autism (自闭症). Simple tasks like tying his shoes are extremely complicated for him, but when put in a race car—a complex delicate piece of machine—he will take you by surprise.
I first met Riley and his father Jason in 2014, in Uxbridge, Ontario, at the local go-cart track. I still remember how excited Riley was to have me and my cameraman there filming his every move. He was a go-cart racer then. He could barely talk to me, let alone look at me. No matter how quiet and shy he was, I knew this kid was going to be something big.
The go-cart track is where Riley’s racing career began. His dad, Jason, just wanted to give him something to focus his energy on. Riley has always loved cars. He has been crazy about them since he was a very young child. He also loves speed. The minute he hit the gas, his mind began to move fast and everything felt in sync (同步).
Riley's journey on the track soon took him from fast go-carts to really fast cars. He became the first person with autism in Canada to get his race car license. It opened up the track for Riley to drive in the big leagues — the Radical Motorsports circuit. Riley is now racing across North America, putting him on the podium (领奖台) almost every time.
Paragraph 1: However, behind every success for Riley and his family is a story of hardship.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2: Riley has also made a difference off the track.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
文本故事中文梗概
Austin Riley是一名赛车手，尽管患有自闭症，但他在赛车领域却表现出色。作者“我”是一名记者，我于2014年在加拿大安大略省的一家小型赛车场首次采访到Riley及其父亲Jason。Riley当时还是一名卡丁车（go-cart track）赛车手。那时候我就感觉Riley一定大有前途。随着时间的推移，Riley从卡丁车转向了职业赛车，并成为加拿大第一位获得赛车执照的自闭症人士，参加Radical Motorsports赛事。Riley目前在北美比赛，并几乎每次比赛都能站上领奖台。
主要人物：
Austin Riley （患有自闭症的赛车手）
次要人物：
Jason （Riley的爸爸）
I （作者我）
续写思路建议
第一段主要写成功的背后Riley付出的努力以及他的家人给与的支持和帮助。Riley的努力可以具体提到赛车训练。家人的支持可以说一说经济和精神支持。本着“非必要不增加新人物”的续写原则，家人方面可以用集体名词family以及代词they代指。
第二段可以着重点写Riley的成功具体和别人有何不同。在写这种不同的时候，建议把核心放在Riley 身患自闭症(autism)这个点上。突出race car driver with disabilities 给人带来的榜样励志作用。
注意：
本文中的次要人物作者“我”是一名记者（journalist）。文章是作者叙述Riley的励志故事，叙事的主要视角是第三人称。这种叙事视角在续写中不能改变。
写作示范
However, behind every success for Riley and his family is a story of hardship. Riley's path to the championship was tough, marked not only by wins but also by challenges. Long hours of practice every time and huge financial pressure were just some of the hurdles they faced regularly. There were moments of doubt, moments when they thought car racing was a world not designed for people with autism. Yet, Jason's unwavering belief in his son's abilities and Riley's own indomitable spirit kept them going. Together, they turned each setback into an opportunity, building resilience that became as much a part of Riley’s racing gear as his helmet and suit. （96 words）
Riley has also made a difference off the track. His success have turned him into an unexpected advocate for autism awareness. He's worked with charities, participated in events that focus on the abilities rather than disabilities of individuals with autism, and inspired countless families. Parents of children with autism have approached him, sharing stories of how Riley's journey has given them hope. His message is clear: with passion and perseverance, the finish line is never too far away, no matter the starting point. Riley isn't just racing for trophies; he's racing to rewrite the narrative of autism, one lap at a time.（93 words）
写作细节分析
However, behind every success for Riley and his family is a story of hardship. Riley's path to the championship was tough, marked not only by wins but also by challenges.（challenges和作文题给定段首句的hardship 自然呼应）Long hours of practice every time and huge financial pressure were just some of the hurdles they faced regularly.（对hardship做进一步具体描述：主要困难是长时间艰苦的训练以及较大的家庭经济负担）There were moments of doubt, moments when they thought car racing was a world not designed for people with autism.（合理叙述：他们家人也有过彷徨和不确定，毕竟Riley患有自闭症）Yet, Jason's unwavering belief in his son's abilities and Riley's own indomitable spirit kept them going.（适度正能量鸡汤：相信精神的力量）Together, they turned each setback into an opportunity, building resilience that became as much a part of Riley’s racing gear as his helmet and suit. （和赛车运动高度关联的概念表述：helmet and suit）
Riley has also made a difference off the track. His success have turned him into an unexpected advocate for autism awareness.（依据题目给出的开头句这段要开始讲Riley的成功在“赛车场之外”（ off the track）的影响） He's worked with charities, participated in events that focus on the abilities rather than disabilities of individuals with autism, and inspired countless families.（强调Riley对自闭症人群的关注和影响。强调多关注他们的abilities 而不只是disabilities） Parents of children with autism have approached him, sharing stories of how Riley's journey has given them hope.（进一步的说是Riley给家有自闭症孩子的家长带来了希望） His message is clear: with passion and perseverance, the finish line is never too far away, no matter the starting point. Riley isn't just racing for trophies; he's racing to rewrite the narrative of autism, one lap at a time. （使用恰到好处的比喻（Metaphor），把Riley的赛车比赛比作一场和社会偏见的较量，暗示了他通过每一圈的比赛在社会认知中为自闭症重新定位）
词汇和表达积累
financial pressure 财务压力
hurdle n. 障碍
unwavering belief 坚定的信念
indomitable spirit 不屈的精神
setback n. 挫折
racing gear 赛车装备
advocate n. 倡导者
perseverance n. 坚持不懈
trophy n. 奖杯
narrative n. 叙述