-2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写 急救女孩续写讲评课件(共15张PPT)
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(共15张PPT)
2o21届高三年级阶段训练读后续写
急救女孩
What makes a good continuation writing
阅卷时考虑以下几个方面：
(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;
(2)内容的丰富性;
(3)应用语法结构结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;
(4)上下文的连贯性。
第五档（21-25分）
（1）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的段落开头语衔接合理;
（2）所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确;
（3）有效地使用了语句间的连接成分， 所续写短文结构紧凑。
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Ada! Milk!” Mama called.
Milk. It was Ada’s turn to get it. Ada sighed and shut her first-aid book. Her head hurt from reading in the dim morning light, but how else was she going to learn
Ada tied the cow close to a tree. Somewhere down the mountain, some volunteer doctors were teaching medical skills to village nurses. Ada heard Betty drive off hours ago. “She should have taken me with her. She thinks I’m too young, but she’s wrong. I am already 16!” Ada thought.
Ada carried the milk back to Mama, then wandered up the road. Roy, a village boy, had gotten a donkey, and some kids had gathered around to see it. Roy was always doing something to get attention. Like now: he was trying to stand on the animal’s bare back.
“No wonder they don’t trust kids with anything important”, Ada thought, sighing. She had just turned away when she heard a thud and a few screams. Roy lay on the ground nearby moaning in pain. The donkey stood several meters away. “Roy!” The kids nearby ran towards him. “Get Betty,” one said. Ada shook her head. “Betty’s gone to the city.” The other kids seemed frozen in place.
Ada ran to where Roy was lying. She dropped to her knees on the dusty road. “Roy! Can you hear me ” Roy moaned in agony. Ada saw that one of his legs was crooked, bent a little sideways between the knee and the ankle. A broken leg!
She remembered what the first-aid book had said about broken legs: if there is no ambulance, straighten the bone before moving the victim. There certainly wouldn’t be any ambulance here. Ada looked back up the road. The other kids were still standing there, watching. “Victor!” Ada called to one of the boys. “Go get Roy’s mama, and find someone with a truck.” She turned to the others. “Give me your shirts. We need something to tie his leg with.”
浅层信息获取
When: ___________________
Where: ___________________
Who: ________________________________________________________
What:______________________________________________
Tense:_____________________
In the morning
a remote village
Ada, Betty, Roy, Victor, Mama, volunteer doctors, nurses, other kids
Ada wanted to be a nurse like Betty.
Simple past tense
一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件
2. 深层文本分析
1）梳理主要情节
Time/Place Who did what Reactions/Emotions
Para.1-3 In the Morning Ada: Mama: Betty:
Para. 4-7 On the road Ada: Roy: Victor: Other kids:
一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件
2. 深层文本分析
1)梳理主要情节
2) 分析主要人物特点
Ada: ___________________________________________________________;
Betty: _______________________________________________________;
3)明确故事主题
____________________________________________;
4）品味写作风格
何种细节描写为主：心理 □；动作 □；语言 □；表情 □；环境□；外貌□
一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件
Time/Place Who did what Reactions/Emotions
Para.1-3 In the Morning Ada: Mama: Betty:
Para. 4-7 On the road Ada: Roy: Victor: Other kids:
机会留给有准备的人opportunity favors those who are well-prepared
不要以年龄来评判人don’t/never judge a person by his/her age.
1. 第一段大意：原文末段与两段首句决定框架
Para. 1: Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight.
Para.2: The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home.
Ada 对Roy 进行简单必要的急救过程
Roy母亲的到来及其合理的反应
Roy被卡车送去医院
2. 第二段大意：第二段首句与正能量结尾决定第二段的框架
Para.2: The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home.
Betty对Ada的急救表示认可
Ada对Betty赞赏的反应
二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向
三、增加细节描写，完成读后续写
在已定框架范围内，依据情节推断故事中人物所见，所闻，所思，所说，所做等给每段增加具体细节。
Para. 1: Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight.
Ada 对Roy 进行简单必要的急救过程
Roy母亲的到来及其合理的反应
Roy被卡车送去医院
Para.2: The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home.
Betty对Ada的急救表示认可
Ada对Betty赞赏的反应
Ada 对Roy 进行简单必要的急救过程（重要情节）
Ada wrapped Roy’s leg together with the stick by using those shirts.
Ada深呼吸 跪下 放木棍 回想急救指南 用衬衫包扎
Ada took a deep breath and then knelt down beside Roy, placing the stick next to the broken leg. With the instructions from that first-aid book repeating in her mind, she carefully wrapped his leg together with the stick by using those shirts.
对单一角色的动作进行拆分，使之形成连续发生的动作，即动作链
情节详略不当（急救过程一笔带过）
情节不符常理（急救过程合理性：急救完Roy当天就好了；说Roy一直在动，无法急救；说Roy要被挪到另外一个地方因为怕被驴再次踢到）
与原文/开头语衔接不当（Betty第一段就出现）
主题偏离（不突出人物和主题的续写为无效续写）
增加新情节/新人物，制造新矛盾（分清主次人物）
细节描写单一（对话）
卷面（硬伤）
语言错误多，look for, look forward to, courage, encourage, encouragement, Roy, Joy, skirt, shirt, sigh, sign, 人名前加the, no sooner… than
主要失分问题
高分范文赏析
把动作进行细节拆分，形成动作链条
然后Ada找到一根坚固的木棍，她可以用它来固定Roy的腿伸直（定从）。一些其他的孩子把上衣递给Ada， 然后在旁边焦急地看着。Ada深深吸了一口气，然后在Roy的旁边蹲了下来，把木棍紧贴着骨折的腿（非谓）。急救书里的指南在她脑海里重现开来（with结构），她小心地把腿和木棍用上衣包扎起来。Roy发出痛苦的呻吟，仍然神志不清。“放轻松，已经好了”，Ada轻声说道，手心冒着汗，她快速地完成了剩下急救过程（非谓）
Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight. Some other children handed their shirts to Ada, waiting anxiously. Ada took a deep breath and then knelt down beside Roy, placing the stick next to the broken leg. With the instructions from that first-aid book repeating in her mind, she carefully wrapped his leg together with the stick by using those shirts. Roy let out a sudden painful moan, still unconscious. “Take it easy. It’s almost over.” Ada whispered in s soft voice, quickly finishing the rest of the work with the sweaty hands. She then asked other kids to help move Roy to the side of the road. No sooner had they finished doing that than Victor came back with Roy’s mama and a villager driving a truck following them. Roy was then sent to a nearby hospital immediately.
The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home. She told her that the brave action of helping Roy yesterday had impressed everyone in the village greatly. “The volunteer doctors hope to see you too. “ Betty said with a bright smile, handing out several books about medical care which were said to be a gift for Ada from the doctors. Ada’s face glowed with excitement as she cheered inside the heart. Finally, she had proved that she was not just a kid but a reliable person who can provide first-aid for someone in need! Betty added that if Ada wanted, she was welcome to be an assistant for her when someone in the village needed help next time. The golden sunlight slid into Ada’s room, lighting her face as well as the future path for her to follow: the dream of becoming a medical worker.
Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight. She gently explained what she was going to do then carefully wrapped the shirts around Roy's leg and the stick. Roy cried out in pain. “I know it hurts,” Ada said softly. “But this will hold it still until you get to the hospital.” When Ada was done, she looked up and saw Roy's mama watching from a few meters away. Behind her was a neighbor in a pickup truck. When Ada stepped away, Roy's mama ran over and held Roy's face in her hands. “Thank you, Ada,” she said. Ada helped them lift Roy into the truck, and then they drove down the hillside towards the hospital.
The next day, Betty came to Ada‘s home. “I heard what you did,” Betty said. “You kept your head in an emergency. That's an important skill.” Ada's face turned red. “I was afraid...” Betty shook her head. “It's OK for a nurse to be afraid, as long as she has a clear head. The volunteer doctors are coming tomorrow with vaccines. We need some more hands. Can you help ” “I'd love to.” Ada replied at once. “Come early, then. There is a lot to learn.” Ada smiled. “I'll bring my first aid book.”
2o21届高三年级阶段训练读后续写
急救女孩
What makes a good continuation writing
阅卷时考虑以下几个方面：
(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;
(2)内容的丰富性;
(3)应用语法结构结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;
(4)上下文的连贯性。
第五档（21-25分）
（1）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的段落开头语衔接合理;
（2）所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确;
（3）有效地使用了语句间的连接成分， 所续写短文结构紧凑。
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Ada! Milk!” Mama called.
Milk. It was Ada’s turn to get it. Ada sighed and shut her first-aid book. Her head hurt from reading in the dim morning light, but how else was she going to learn
Ada tied the cow close to a tree. Somewhere down the mountain, some volunteer doctors were teaching medical skills to village nurses. Ada heard Betty drive off hours ago. “She should have taken me with her. She thinks I’m too young, but she’s wrong. I am already 16!” Ada thought.
Ada carried the milk back to Mama, then wandered up the road. Roy, a village boy, had gotten a donkey, and some kids had gathered around to see it. Roy was always doing something to get attention. Like now: he was trying to stand on the animal’s bare back.
“No wonder they don’t trust kids with anything important”, Ada thought, sighing. She had just turned away when she heard a thud and a few screams. Roy lay on the ground nearby moaning in pain. The donkey stood several meters away. “Roy!” The kids nearby ran towards him. “Get Betty,” one said. Ada shook her head. “Betty’s gone to the city.” The other kids seemed frozen in place.
Ada ran to where Roy was lying. She dropped to her knees on the dusty road. “Roy! Can you hear me ” Roy moaned in agony. Ada saw that one of his legs was crooked, bent a little sideways between the knee and the ankle. A broken leg!
She remembered what the first-aid book had said about broken legs: if there is no ambulance, straighten the bone before moving the victim. There certainly wouldn’t be any ambulance here. Ada looked back up the road. The other kids were still standing there, watching. “Victor!” Ada called to one of the boys. “Go get Roy’s mama, and find someone with a truck.” She turned to the others. “Give me your shirts. We need something to tie his leg with.”
浅层信息获取
When: ___________________
Where: ___________________
Who: ________________________________________________________
What:______________________________________________
Tense:_____________________
In the morning
a remote village
Ada, Betty, Roy, Victor, Mama, volunteer doctors, nurses, other kids
Ada wanted to be a nurse like Betty.
Simple past tense
一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件
2. 深层文本分析
1）梳理主要情节
Time/Place Who did what Reactions/Emotions
Para.1-3 In the Morning Ada: Mama: Betty:
Para. 4-7 On the road Ada: Roy: Victor: Other kids:
一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件
2. 深层文本分析
1)梳理主要情节
2) 分析主要人物特点
Ada: ___________________________________________________________;
Betty: _______________________________________________________;
3)明确故事主题
____________________________________________;
4）品味写作风格
何种细节描写为主：心理 □；动作 □；语言 □；表情 □；环境□；外貌□
一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件
Time/Place Who did what Reactions/Emotions
Para.1-3 In the Morning Ada: Mama: Betty:
Para. 4-7 On the road Ada: Roy: Victor: Other kids:
机会留给有准备的人opportunity favors those who are well-prepared
不要以年龄来评判人don’t/never judge a person by his/her age.
1. 第一段大意：原文末段与两段首句决定框架
Para. 1: Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight.
Para.2: The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home.
Ada 对Roy 进行简单必要的急救过程
Roy母亲的到来及其合理的反应
Roy被卡车送去医院
2. 第二段大意：第二段首句与正能量结尾决定第二段的框架
Para.2: The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home.
Betty对Ada的急救表示认可
Ada对Betty赞赏的反应
二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向
三、增加细节描写，完成读后续写
在已定框架范围内，依据情节推断故事中人物所见，所闻，所思，所说，所做等给每段增加具体细节。
Para. 1: Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight.
Ada 对Roy 进行简单必要的急救过程
Roy母亲的到来及其合理的反应
Roy被卡车送去医院
Para.2: The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home.
Betty对Ada的急救表示认可
Ada对Betty赞赏的反应
Ada 对Roy 进行简单必要的急救过程（重要情节）
Ada wrapped Roy’s leg together with the stick by using those shirts.
Ada深呼吸 跪下 放木棍 回想急救指南 用衬衫包扎
Ada took a deep breath and then knelt down beside Roy, placing the stick next to the broken leg. With the instructions from that first-aid book repeating in her mind, she carefully wrapped his leg together with the stick by using those shirts.
对单一角色的动作进行拆分，使之形成连续发生的动作，即动作链
情节详略不当（急救过程一笔带过）
情节不符常理（急救过程合理性：急救完Roy当天就好了；说Roy一直在动，无法急救；说Roy要被挪到另外一个地方因为怕被驴再次踢到）
与原文/开头语衔接不当（Betty第一段就出现）
主题偏离（不突出人物和主题的续写为无效续写）
增加新情节/新人物，制造新矛盾（分清主次人物）
细节描写单一（对话）
卷面（硬伤）
语言错误多，look for, look forward to, courage, encourage, encouragement, Roy, Joy, skirt, shirt, sigh, sign, 人名前加the, no sooner… than
主要失分问题
高分范文赏析
把动作进行细节拆分，形成动作链条
然后Ada找到一根坚固的木棍，她可以用它来固定Roy的腿伸直（定从）。一些其他的孩子把上衣递给Ada， 然后在旁边焦急地看着。Ada深深吸了一口气，然后在Roy的旁边蹲了下来，把木棍紧贴着骨折的腿（非谓）。急救书里的指南在她脑海里重现开来（with结构），她小心地把腿和木棍用上衣包扎起来。Roy发出痛苦的呻吟，仍然神志不清。“放轻松，已经好了”，Ada轻声说道，手心冒着汗，她快速地完成了剩下急救过程（非谓）
Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight. Some other children handed their shirts to Ada, waiting anxiously. Ada took a deep breath and then knelt down beside Roy, placing the stick next to the broken leg. With the instructions from that first-aid book repeating in her mind, she carefully wrapped his leg together with the stick by using those shirts. Roy let out a sudden painful moan, still unconscious. “Take it easy. It’s almost over.” Ada whispered in s soft voice, quickly finishing the rest of the work with the sweaty hands. She then asked other kids to help move Roy to the side of the road. No sooner had they finished doing that than Victor came back with Roy’s mama and a villager driving a truck following them. Roy was then sent to a nearby hospital immediately.
The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home. She told her that the brave action of helping Roy yesterday had impressed everyone in the village greatly. “The volunteer doctors hope to see you too. “ Betty said with a bright smile, handing out several books about medical care which were said to be a gift for Ada from the doctors. Ada’s face glowed with excitement as she cheered inside the heart. Finally, she had proved that she was not just a kid but a reliable person who can provide first-aid for someone in need! Betty added that if Ada wanted, she was welcome to be an assistant for her when someone in the village needed help next time. The golden sunlight slid into Ada’s room, lighting her face as well as the future path for her to follow: the dream of becoming a medical worker.
Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight. She gently explained what she was going to do then carefully wrapped the shirts around Roy's leg and the stick. Roy cried out in pain. “I know it hurts,” Ada said softly. “But this will hold it still until you get to the hospital.” When Ada was done, she looked up and saw Roy's mama watching from a few meters away. Behind her was a neighbor in a pickup truck. When Ada stepped away, Roy's mama ran over and held Roy's face in her hands. “Thank you, Ada,” she said. Ada helped them lift Roy into the truck, and then they drove down the hillside towards the hospital.
The next day, Betty came to Ada‘s home. “I heard what you did,” Betty said. “You kept your head in an emergency. That's an important skill.” Ada's face turned red. “I was afraid...” Betty shook her head. “It's OK for a nurse to be afraid, as long as she has a clear head. The volunteer doctors are coming tomorrow with vaccines. We need some more hands. Can you help ” “I'd love to.” Ada replied at once. “Come early, then. There is a lot to learn.” Ada smiled. “I'll bring my first aid book.”