2024届高考英语读后续写技能养成 专题练习（含答案）
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（5）2024届高考英语读后续写技能养成
增强故事可读性，以描述性语言取胜
叙事语篇通常是围绕角色(人物、动物等)展开的。为了增强故事的趣味性和可读性，可以通过对角色动作、情感变化等行为的细节描写来完成，因此，读后续写的另一语言特点是常常以描述性语言为辅，常常用于描写角色动作、心理和情感以及环境等，描摹状貌，起到烘托角色性格或表达主旨意思作用。
1. 角色动作、情感等描写
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A few minutes later the other two cyclists arrived. They found a wolf walking around the car, they realized someone need help. They tried their best to stop cars passing by. Finally, an old driver stopped. He was a policeman who had a gun. Then they got close to the wolf slowly, and shot it! With an astonishing sound disappeared, the wolf fell down and lied on the ground. Mac and Paul as well as Becky were saved.
问题诊断：细节描写错用了叙述性语言。
对文本解读不够，不但会错失原文中隐含的关键细节接续故事，而且在有限的篇幅里另外添加无助于主题表达的新角色，如这里的角色an old driver, a policeman，且衍生stop cars passing by 这一枝节，使得原文中Paul和Becky 两人和他们的车辆成了摆设和赘笔，本可以通过the other two cyclists这一视角再次聚焦原有人物Mac, Paul和Becky的动作、情感等行为来烘托、表现主题，但是因为缺乏对叙事节奏的主次把握，节外生枝，撕裂了故事合理的发展逻辑，混淆了叙述性语言和描述性语言的运用场合，伤害了主题的准确表达,段落二成了貌似曲折实则无效的流水账。
2. 环境描写
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we brought with us. That night we set up our tent in a park, The moon was held up above the sky, shining her smooth and charming moonlight, Twinkle stars blinking, fragrant breeze gently stroked my head, as if com forting all the tiredness along the trip. The next day, Dad brought us to the car and asked me to clear all the things away. Not long after we came back to the car, Mom arrived, and then we continued our trip.
问题诊断：不当描述语言，导致主题意义偏离。
此语篇从That night...开始到... as if comforting all the tiredness along the trip用了一半多的篇幅在描写月夜美景，极尽描写之能事，但因缺乏交代为何描述这段美景的关联句子，有堆砌词藻之嫌，让人觉得纯粹为了写景而写景，与主题表达不相干。
好题精练：
一、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
At age 10, I stood in front of my new class, my new classmates looking at me with mild interest as my teacher introduced me. I joined in the middle of the school year. There were 41 students in my new class. I was the 42nd.
All my classmates sat in pairs except for this one girl, Kate. I went and sat down next to her and gave her a small, uncertain smile. She smiled in return. The class started and we didn't talk until lunch time. At lunch time, I pulled out my lunch box, packed by my mother. It had fried rice with home-made cakes and a small box of fruits. Clearly my mom had spent time packing this yummy lunch. This girl took out a small box with bread butter inside. In India, it's pretty rare for kids to just get bread butter for lunch. The only time I had bread butter for lunch was if my mom was unwell. So I thought that was what the problem here was. I offered her a small part of my lunch and forgot all about it. The next day, she again had bread butter. Well, I thought, her mother might have fallen ill, so she was taking time to recover. I again offered her a part of my lunch. This went on for a week. Then one day, I asked the one question that I shouldn't have. "Is your mom not well "
In fact, I wasn't prepared for the answer. Later, I knew that her mother, who worked in a supermarket, was in poor health. She constantly stayed at home with no income. I didn't know what to do. So I did the most obvious thing. I went home and told my mom that my lunch wasn't enough and I still felt hungry after eating it. My mom started packing a bigger lunch. And in school, I'd tell Kate that my mom had packed me a lunch too big, so could she please help me finish it Then I asked her what her favorite dish was. "Naan," she whispered.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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When I told my mom that I wanted very much to have Naan, she felt puzzled. _______________
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I moved out of that school soon after and didn't stay in touch with Kate. ____________________
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二、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When my sister, Dona, and I were little kids, my parents both joined the army. They stayed far away from our town and hardly returned home. My grandpa took on the big responsibility of taking care of us. Still, without our parents by our side, Dona and I sometimes felt lonely and sad, especially one winter.
One morning in that winter when Dona and I were sitting in our bedroom, dull and quiet, Grandpa said, "My dear, how about trying skating for fun " Our faces immediately lit up and we answered together, "Great, we surely like it, Grandpa!"
He smiled and quickly set about building us a skating rink(溜冰场) in our yard. The process of building a skating rink was not easy. First, Grandpa laid out long wooden boards around the yard. Next, he made the base of the rink flat. Grandpa then began spraying the water, lightly at first, until the first layer of ice was established. He would then put some water onto the ice each night. And thus, the ice became thicker and thicker.
In the darkness of the night, from the kitchen window Dona and I watched Grandpa with great expectations. His back and shoulders rounded to protect him from the freezing wind. He stood alone, busying himself creating a perfect skating rink for us. The only light was from the moon and stars.
One night, Grandpa suddenly pressed his waist and the look on his face showed he was painful. Quite concerned, Dona and I rushed out and asked, "Grandpa! What's wrong " "My waist is painful. Don't worry! I'll be fine just after a little rest," he smiled. Dona and I offered to help create the rink. But he said it was too cold outside at night and that building the rink needs much experience and lots of skills. Then, we gave up the idea of offering him a hand, but demanded he build the rink a few days later. Seeing we were determined, he walked into the room with us and had warm tea. Before long, Dona and I were tired and went to bed.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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When we fell asleep, Grandpa quietly walked out into the yard. ___________________________
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Amazed, we hurriedly put on the skating equipment and rushed out. _______________________
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三、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was in middle school, my family moved to Seattle, where my parents started their new business--a small grocery store downstairs my house. As a girl of shy and reserved nature, I had to take a fresh start to fit into the sophisticated city life.
One sunny day, my school announced an exciting event, a talent show for the local food bank. Students were encouraged to showcase their unique talents in front of the public in the city hall on National Day. A buzz of excitement filled the school as everyone began preparing for the big day. Deep down, I felt a spark of curiosity and a desire to participate. However, my self-doubt held me back, "I don't have any special skills to share."
Days turned into weeks, and the talent show drew closer. I couldn't shake the upsetting feeling until one day Emma, one of the most popular girls in my class, came to me while I was helping in the grocery store after class. "How about singing together in the talent show " She grinned, "I heard you singing a tune, along the way back home. I can't help following you here." Gosh, I couldn't believe my ears. Emma, with personality and popularity, acknowledged my little talent. Since Emma had the world's prettiest voice, I felt like being favoured by fortune.
"You two The talent show for the food bank " My mum bent towards us and her face lit up. "A big occasion." Then a light bulb seemed to go in her head. "Why not practise right now upstairs I bet you'll be a perfect match." Winking at us, she seemed to know we were thinking alike.
Emma and I embarked on rehearsing almost every single day after school. We brainstormed, exchanged ideas and rehearsed the scene. As the days rolled by, I was feeling pretty good about our act. But the day before the performance, Emma called that she had an acute stomachache and was not in.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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I was completely knocked out by the news. __________________________________________
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Finally came the big moment. _____________________________________________________
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四、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
During summer vacation when I was twelve, a sawmill(锯木厂) was operating in the woods near our farm. Early each morning, I'd watch the men cut down big trees and saw them into logs. Then they were dragged by two horses named Jack and Billy to the mill. They were gentle, and I petted them every chance I got.
One day, Mr. Davis, the mill owner, said he would pay me 15 cents a day to bring fresh water to the men. I said yes!
One afternoon when Jack and Billy were pulling a log up to the mill, a stick became wedged(塞入) in Jack's right front foot. After Mr. Davis removed the stick, the horse driver said that the foot should be doctored. But Mr. Davis said he didn't have time for that. He said if the horse couldn't work, he'd get one that could.
I felt sick inside. Jack and Billy were my best friends! I couldn't stop thinking about Jack's foot and what Mr. Davis had said. For the rest of the day the horses pulled logs from the woods. By nightfall Jack was limping(跛行) badly. Mr. Davis told his crew that the mil would be closed for three days. He offered to pay me a dollar to feed and water the horses while he was gone. I quickly agreed.
The next morning, I rode my bike to Mr. Davis's mill. I fed the horses their grain and led them to a stream for water, I was sad to see that Jack was still limping. After I led the horses back, I wanted to look at Jack's foot. I reached down and grabbed the hair on the back of his leg, Jack lifted up his foot so I could see. The part inside of the big iron shoe looked red and swollen. When I put the foot down, Jack let only the front of it rest lightly on the ground.
I knew if Jack couldn't work with that injured foot, Mr. Davis would get rid of him. I just couldn't let that happen. But what could I do I didn't know anything about medicine, and Mr. Davis said he wouldn't pay for a doctor.
As I slowly rode my bike home, my mind raced. I needed to find a way to help my big friend. At my house, I saw our neighbor, Mr. Sherman. It occurred to me that he raised horses and knew how to care for them.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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I told Mr. Sherman all about Jack anxiously. __________________________________________
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The morning that Mr. Davis returned, I woke up early. ___________________________________
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五、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I have a 6-year-old boy, Sam. He is autistic(患自闭症的). Thus, dining out can be terrible. Though he loves to eat out, he dislikes the loud noise in a restaurant. He has a method to solve it: overpower(压倒) all noise with a much louder noise of his own.
This begins what I think of as fighting tables: neighboring parties raise their voice followed by Sam raising his until the loudest point of the noise is reached, making us quite unpopular with other dinners.
Faced with a possible long-time dining alone, I decided to teach my son table manners with his favourite chocolate cake at a new modern cake shop early one Tuesday night.
To my joy, we arrived at an empty cake shop. Everything went well until women entered. Neatly dressed in a simple way, they were two tables away from us. I felt a sense of bad luck coming.
The women began to chat, paying little attention to us. Sam happily took this as his start to talk loudly and overpower them. I asked Sam for a quiet voice, but unluckily Sam had left that voice at home. I looked at the neighboring table, knowing we wouldn't go noticed much longer. I planned to ask Sam to eat quickly and leave. Sam, who usually has food unhurriedly, refused to accept the sudden idea of fast dining, and he kept talking endlessly.
"SHUSH!" I said, a little angry. Sam laughed loudly as his reply. "Be quiet!" I could see that the two women were now watching us.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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Finally, the older of the two women came over. _______________________________________
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It turned out to be a perfect night. __________________________________________________
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六、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was July 2019 and my mum Rebecca was taking me on a 120 km walking holiday from Portugal to Spain as a special treat for my 10th birthday. One day, while walking along the coastal path staring out at the Atlantic Ocean, I chatted away to Mum. "When Lexi turns.10, are you going to take her on a trip like this " I asked, referring to my seven-year-old sister. Mum said Lexi had already asked to go to Svalbard in the north of Norway because she was crazy about polar bears.
Although I was still on my first special trip, I'd been learning about ancient civilizations at school and knew I'd love to see some relics in the flesh. So I continued saying, "Why don't I go to Egypt while you're in Svalbard with Lexi ", adding that my dad, Olaf, could take me there. "Great, but I'm not paying for it." Muim replied, chuckling. "That's fine. I'll pay," I said, "I'll save up my pocket money and get a job."
So that's exactly what I did. Though I was too young to do any other paid work, I had my own solution. I started saving my $10-a-week pocket money. Also, I washed my parents' car or mowed the lawn for extra cash.
In 2020, we moved to Perth. One day, I saw a pamphlet(小册子) in the letter box advertising a job delivering catalogues. When I told Mum I wanted to do it, she tried to put me off the idea, reminding me that the work was tiring and time-consuming. But when seeing the determination in my eyes, she agreed to call them. Thankfully, my young age didn't bother them-I got the job. On a Monday, a mountain of catalogues was dropped off at our house, which shocked me a lot. I told myself to calm down and dedicated to work. It took me nine hours to sort through them. At first, I used my bike and carried the catalogues in my backpack to deliver them to 430 houses in my area.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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After several deliveries, I found it wasn't very efficient. __________________________________
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Three and a half years later, I saved a massive $6,500, and Dad and I flew to Cairo, Egypt. _____
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答案以及解析
一、
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When I told my mom that I wanted very much to have Naan, she felt puzzled. Naan was not a common dish in our household, and my mom wasn't sure if she could prepare it, but she promised she would try. The next day, I was thrilled to find that my lunch box now contained a piece of Naan, and I eagerly shared it with Kate. Seeing her smiling face made me feel really happy inside. From that day on, my mom would occasionally pack some Indian delicacies for me to share with Kate, and I would be more than happy to do so.
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I moved out of that school soon after and didn't stay in touch with Kate. However, this experience taught me an important lesson about kindness and understanding. Often we judge people too quickly, without realizing their underlying struggles. While it may seem small, sharing my lunch with Kate helped me to connect with her on a deeper level and to understand her better. As I grew older, I would try to apply this lesson in my daily life – to be a little kinder, a little more empathetic, and a little more understanding of people's struggles.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"当我告诉我妈妈我非常想要馕饼时，她感到困惑"可知，第一段可描写作者发现母亲给他准备了馕饼，并与Kate分享。
②由第二段首句内容"不久之后，我就搬出了那所学校，没有和凯特保持联系"可知，第二段可描写作者对自己的经历的感悟。
2.续写线索：告诉母亲—看到馕饼—分享—搬出学校—感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①分享：share/divide/split
②准备：prepare/intend/draw up
③判断：judge/estimate/assess
情绪类
①开心：happy/content/joyous
②激动：thrill/excit/amaze
[高分句型1]Seeing her smiling face made me feel really happy inside. (动名词做主语)
[高分句型2]As I grew older, I would try to apply this lesson in my daily life – to be a little kinder, a little more empathetic, and a little more understanding of people's struggles. （由As引导的时间状语从句）
二、
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When we fell asleep, Grandpa quietly walked out into the yard. He kept spraying water onto the ice in the yard. It was so cold outside that Grandpa trembled all over. But he went on building the rink for us. He hoped to complete the work as soon as possible. That night he worked for a long time although his waist was very painful. The next morning when we woke up, we found skating equipment placed before our bed. Grandpa called out, "Kids, come out! The rink was ready!"
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Amazed, we hurriedly put on the skating equipment and rushed out. Seeing the perfect rink, we were so excited and could no longer wait to skate on it, while Grandpa stood aside, smiling. We skated in the cold for what felt like hours laughing and dancing, creating memories that would last a lifetime. Grandpa was proud of what he had accomplished and happy to see us having so much fun. Now we always remember the special gift, which Grandpa built with great love.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"等我们睡着了，爷爷悄悄地走到院子里。"以及第二段首句内容"感到很惊讶，我们赶紧穿上滑冰装备，冲了出去。"可知，第一段可描写爷爷悄悄建好了溜冰场的经过。
②由第二段首句内容"感到很惊讶，我们赶紧穿上滑冰装备，冲了出去。"可知，第二段可描写看到爷爷为自己所做的事情，作者和妹妹非常感动。
2.续写线索：作者和妹妹小时候，由于父母参军，所以只能由爷爷照顾——没有父母的陪伴，作者和妹妹常常感到孤独——爷爷看到这一切，决定为作者和妹妹建造一个溜冰场——天气寒冷，爷爷每晚都忙着建溜冰场——一天，爷爷的腰很疼，作者和妹妹让爷爷在家休息——可是，爷爷还是悄悄建溜冰场——次日早餐，作者和妹妹惊讶地看到了建好的溜冰场——作者和妹妹很感激爷爷所做的一切
3.词汇激活
行为类
①继续：go on/continue
②完成：complete/finish
③希望：hope/wish
情绪类
①兴奋的：excited/thrilled
②对……感到自豪：be proud of/take pride in
【高分句型1】That night he worked for a long time although his waist was very painful.（运用了although引导的状语从句）
【高分句型2】Seeing the perfect rink, we were so excited and could no longer wait to skate on it, while Grandpa stood aside, smiling.（运用了现在分词作状语，while引导的状语从句）
三、
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I was completely knocked out by the news. It's impossible for me to stand on stage and sing by myself. With a glimmer of hope, I asked her if she could come back before the performance. "Sorry my friend, you might have to go on stage by yourself. I believe you can make it!" I hung up the phone helplessly when my mom came to me. "You certainly can do it well on your own. All you need to do is make yourself confident." Hearing that, I determined to accomplish this performance perfectly, and I worked day and night on it.
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Finally came the big moment. Sitting on pins and needles, I heard the host call my shoe to the stage. With butterflies in my stomach, I took a deep breath. When I stepped onto the stage, I could feel all the eyes fixed on me. A strong sense of nervousness flooded over me. I started my performance as I usually practised and struggled to overcome my fear. The end of our performance was met with a moment of surprising silence, and then the audience erupted into thunderous applause. My heart beating wildly, I was totally immersed in the delight of performance. Not only did I get the chance to shine, but I also obtain the precious quality: Confidence.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"这消息使我完全震惊了。"以及第二段首句内容"重要的时刻终于到来了。"可知，第一段可描写作者得知Emma身体不适不能表演，心里忐忑不安，几番思索，决定独自登台。
②由第二段首句内容"重要的时刻终于到来了。"可知，第二段可描写作者鼓起勇气终于战胜了恐惧，歌唱的很好，取得了成功和作者的感悟。
2.续写线索：作者对消息感到惊讶—作者犹豫不决—最终鼓起勇气独自参加了才艺表演—表演取得了成功—作者也克服了恐惧和自我怀疑
3.词汇激活
行为类
①开始：start/commence
②阻碍：hold back/discourage
③决定：resolve//be determined to
情绪类
①忧郁的：gloomy/depressed
②开心：joy/delight
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I told Mr. Sherman all about Jack anxiously. I turned to him for help. When we got to the barn, Mr. Sherman told me to get a foot tub of warm water. He cleaned Jack's hoof with a brush, then put it into the tub of water to soak. We found a large can of animal medicine, which Mr. Sherman put on the wound. He said that Jack's foot would be well in a few days. I thanked Mr. Sherman deeply. For the next two days, I looked after Jack carefully as told.
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The morning that Mr. Davis returned, I woke up early. Just as I arrived, Jack and Billy were dragging a big log from the woods. Jack pulled with all his might, and he wasn't limping! When they stopped, I dropped my bike and ran down to the horses. I wrapped my arms around Jack's big head and hugged him tightly. At that moment. I was filled with happiness. I knew that my friend wouldn't have to be sent away.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"我焦急地把杰克的一切都告诉了谢尔曼先生。"可知，第一段可描写谢尔曼先生帮忙为杰克治疗，作者非常感激。
②由第二段首句内容"戴维斯先生回来的那天早上。我以最快的速度骑着自行车去了工厂。"可知，第二段可描写作者发现杰克已经痊愈，知道它不会被送走，作者感觉很高兴。
2.续写线索：作者寻求帮助——谢尔曼先生帮忙治疗——作者表示感激——老板回来——杰克痊愈——作者拥抱杰克——作者感觉幸福
3.词汇激活
行为类
①照顾：look after/take care of
②拥抱：hug/embrace
③知道：know/be aware of/realize
情绪类
①兴奋地：in excitement/excitedly
②快乐：be filled with happiness/be full of joy
【高分句型1】We found a large can of animal salve, which Mr. Sherman put on the wound.（由关系代词which引导非限制性定语从句）
【高分句型2】When the team stopped, I dropped my bike and ran down to the horses.（由when引导时间状语从句）
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Finally, the older of the two women came over. Here came the bad luck, I thought. She completely surprised me when she said, "Honey, stop shushing your boy. Clearly, he has something important to say. He can talk as much as he wants. I want to hear everything he wishes to say." Smiling, she added, "You have a lovely boy. Relax and enjoy your dinner—and don't let him forget the chocolate cake." Sam smiled because finally, someone wanted him to do what he did best: make noise and eat chocolate cake.
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It turned out to be a perfect night. I met a wonderful woman who was clearly god-sent. Sam found the chocolate cake to be heavenly, too. I will always remember that lovely lady. Her kindness meant the world to a stressed-out mom. Whenever she is, we're sending her lots of thanks. Her kind words do not cost much. Yet they achieve much.
解析：本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者的儿子山姆患有自闭症,他喜欢外出吃饭,但不喜欢餐馆的噪音。一旦有噪音,他经常用他自己更大的噪音盖过所有的噪音。一次,作者决定在一家新开的现代蛋糕店用儿子最喜欢的巧克力蛋糕教他餐桌礼仪。刚开始,一切很顺利。几位女性顾客进来并开始聊天,儿子突然大声制止她们的故事。
1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容"最后,年长的那个女性走了过来。"可知,第一段可描写那位年长的女性安慰作者儿子的经过。
②由第二段首句内容"结果是一个完美的夜晚。"可知,第二段可描写作者感激这位年长的女性。
2.续写线索:担心—安慰—欣慰—感激
3.词汇激活
行为类
①想: think/suppose
②.遇到: meet/come across
③记得: remember/keep in mind/bear in mind
情绪类
①.感谢:sending her lots of thanks /show our gratitude/be grateful
②.微笑: smile/beam on
[高分句型1]. I want to hear everything he wishes to say.(运用省略关系代词that的定语从句)
[高分句型2].Whenever she is, we're sending her lots of thanks.(运用了whenever引导的时间状语从句)
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After several deliveries, I found it wasn't very efficient. Strained by the weight of the catalogues and limited by the bike's capacity, I was compelled to seek a better method. Collaborating with Dad, we devised a solution: constructing a small cart for towing behind my bike, a move that drastically expanded my delivery capabilities. This innovation cut my delivery time in half and made the job less physically demanding. Witnessing my savings account grow, bolstered by determination and familial support, transformed the catalogues from mere paper into tickets to my dream.
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Three and a half years later, I saved a massive $6,500, and Dad and I flew to Cairo, Egypt. Upon arrival, the realization of my dream was overwhelming. Confronted with the majestic pyramids, symbols of the ancient civilization I yearned to explore, the experience was surreal. As Dad and I wandered through the bustling streets of Cairo, the sights, sounds, and smells of the city were a stark contrast to where my journey began. This adventure, the fruit of long-lasting saving meticulous planning, and relentless dreaming, stood as proof that perseverance and creativity can turn the loftiest dreams into reality.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"几次递送后，我发现效率不是很高。"可知，第一段可描写作者通过努力和创新解决效率低的问题。
②由第二段首句内容"三年半后，我存了6500美元，爸爸和我飞往埃及开罗。"可知，第二段可描写作者实现梦想，到达埃及以及感悟。
2.续写线索：发现效率低——创新方案解决问题——攒够所需费用——实现埃及之旅——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①寻找：seek/look for/search after
②想出：devise/come up with
③加强改善：bolster/improve/enhance
情绪类
①崇高的：lofty/noble/sublime
②一丝不苟的：meticulous/scrupulous/cautious
[高分句型1] Collaborating with Dad, we devised a solution: constructing a small cart for towing behind my bike, a move that drastically expanded my delivery capabilities.（运用了that引导的定语从句）
[高分句型2]. As Dad and I wandered through the bustling streets of Cairo, the sights, sounds, and smells of the city were a stark contrast to where my journey began.（运用了 as引导的时间状语从句以及where引导的宾语从句）
增强故事可读性，以描述性语言取胜
叙事语篇通常是围绕角色(人物、动物等)展开的。为了增强故事的趣味性和可读性，可以通过对角色动作、情感变化等行为的细节描写来完成，因此，读后续写的另一语言特点是常常以描述性语言为辅，常常用于描写角色动作、心理和情感以及环境等，描摹状貌，起到烘托角色性格或表达主旨意思作用。
1. 角色动作、情感等描写
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A few minutes later the other two cyclists arrived. They found a wolf walking around the car, they realized someone need help. They tried their best to stop cars passing by. Finally, an old driver stopped. He was a policeman who had a gun. Then they got close to the wolf slowly, and shot it! With an astonishing sound disappeared, the wolf fell down and lied on the ground. Mac and Paul as well as Becky were saved.
问题诊断：细节描写错用了叙述性语言。
对文本解读不够，不但会错失原文中隐含的关键细节接续故事，而且在有限的篇幅里另外添加无助于主题表达的新角色，如这里的角色an old driver, a policeman，且衍生stop cars passing by 这一枝节，使得原文中Paul和Becky 两人和他们的车辆成了摆设和赘笔，本可以通过the other two cyclists这一视角再次聚焦原有人物Mac, Paul和Becky的动作、情感等行为来烘托、表现主题，但是因为缺乏对叙事节奏的主次把握，节外生枝，撕裂了故事合理的发展逻辑，混淆了叙述性语言和描述性语言的运用场合，伤害了主题的准确表达,段落二成了貌似曲折实则无效的流水账。
2. 环境描写
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we brought with us. That night we set up our tent in a park, The moon was held up above the sky, shining her smooth and charming moonlight, Twinkle stars blinking, fragrant breeze gently stroked my head, as if com forting all the tiredness along the trip. The next day, Dad brought us to the car and asked me to clear all the things away. Not long after we came back to the car, Mom arrived, and then we continued our trip.
问题诊断：不当描述语言，导致主题意义偏离。
此语篇从That night...开始到... as if comforting all the tiredness along the trip用了一半多的篇幅在描写月夜美景，极尽描写之能事，但因缺乏交代为何描述这段美景的关联句子，有堆砌词藻之嫌，让人觉得纯粹为了写景而写景，与主题表达不相干。
好题精练：
一、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
At age 10, I stood in front of my new class, my new classmates looking at me with mild interest as my teacher introduced me. I joined in the middle of the school year. There were 41 students in my new class. I was the 42nd.
All my classmates sat in pairs except for this one girl, Kate. I went and sat down next to her and gave her a small, uncertain smile. She smiled in return. The class started and we didn't talk until lunch time. At lunch time, I pulled out my lunch box, packed by my mother. It had fried rice with home-made cakes and a small box of fruits. Clearly my mom had spent time packing this yummy lunch. This girl took out a small box with bread butter inside. In India, it's pretty rare for kids to just get bread butter for lunch. The only time I had bread butter for lunch was if my mom was unwell. So I thought that was what the problem here was. I offered her a small part of my lunch and forgot all about it. The next day, she again had bread butter. Well, I thought, her mother might have fallen ill, so she was taking time to recover. I again offered her a part of my lunch. This went on for a week. Then one day, I asked the one question that I shouldn't have. "Is your mom not well "
In fact, I wasn't prepared for the answer. Later, I knew that her mother, who worked in a supermarket, was in poor health. She constantly stayed at home with no income. I didn't know what to do. So I did the most obvious thing. I went home and told my mom that my lunch wasn't enough and I still felt hungry after eating it. My mom started packing a bigger lunch. And in school, I'd tell Kate that my mom had packed me a lunch too big, so could she please help me finish it Then I asked her what her favorite dish was. "Naan," she whispered.
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1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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When I told my mom that I wanted very much to have Naan, she felt puzzled. _______________
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I moved out of that school soon after and didn't stay in touch with Kate. ____________________
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二、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When my sister, Dona, and I were little kids, my parents both joined the army. They stayed far away from our town and hardly returned home. My grandpa took on the big responsibility of taking care of us. Still, without our parents by our side, Dona and I sometimes felt lonely and sad, especially one winter.
One morning in that winter when Dona and I were sitting in our bedroom, dull and quiet, Grandpa said, "My dear, how about trying skating for fun " Our faces immediately lit up and we answered together, "Great, we surely like it, Grandpa!"
He smiled and quickly set about building us a skating rink(溜冰场) in our yard. The process of building a skating rink was not easy. First, Grandpa laid out long wooden boards around the yard. Next, he made the base of the rink flat. Grandpa then began spraying the water, lightly at first, until the first layer of ice was established. He would then put some water onto the ice each night. And thus, the ice became thicker and thicker.
In the darkness of the night, from the kitchen window Dona and I watched Grandpa with great expectations. His back and shoulders rounded to protect him from the freezing wind. He stood alone, busying himself creating a perfect skating rink for us. The only light was from the moon and stars.
One night, Grandpa suddenly pressed his waist and the look on his face showed he was painful. Quite concerned, Dona and I rushed out and asked, "Grandpa! What's wrong " "My waist is painful. Don't worry! I'll be fine just after a little rest," he smiled. Dona and I offered to help create the rink. But he said it was too cold outside at night and that building the rink needs much experience and lots of skills. Then, we gave up the idea of offering him a hand, but demanded he build the rink a few days later. Seeing we were determined, he walked into the room with us and had warm tea. Before long, Dona and I were tired and went to bed.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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When we fell asleep, Grandpa quietly walked out into the yard. ___________________________
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Amazed, we hurriedly put on the skating equipment and rushed out. _______________________
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was in middle school, my family moved to Seattle, where my parents started their new business--a small grocery store downstairs my house. As a girl of shy and reserved nature, I had to take a fresh start to fit into the sophisticated city life.
One sunny day, my school announced an exciting event, a talent show for the local food bank. Students were encouraged to showcase their unique talents in front of the public in the city hall on National Day. A buzz of excitement filled the school as everyone began preparing for the big day. Deep down, I felt a spark of curiosity and a desire to participate. However, my self-doubt held me back, "I don't have any special skills to share."
Days turned into weeks, and the talent show drew closer. I couldn't shake the upsetting feeling until one day Emma, one of the most popular girls in my class, came to me while I was helping in the grocery store after class. "How about singing together in the talent show " She grinned, "I heard you singing a tune, along the way back home. I can't help following you here." Gosh, I couldn't believe my ears. Emma, with personality and popularity, acknowledged my little talent. Since Emma had the world's prettiest voice, I felt like being favoured by fortune.
"You two The talent show for the food bank " My mum bent towards us and her face lit up. "A big occasion." Then a light bulb seemed to go in her head. "Why not practise right now upstairs I bet you'll be a perfect match." Winking at us, she seemed to know we were thinking alike.
Emma and I embarked on rehearsing almost every single day after school. We brainstormed, exchanged ideas and rehearsed the scene. As the days rolled by, I was feeling pretty good about our act. But the day before the performance, Emma called that she had an acute stomachache and was not in.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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I was completely knocked out by the news. __________________________________________
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Finally came the big moment. _____________________________________________________
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
During summer vacation when I was twelve, a sawmill(锯木厂) was operating in the woods near our farm. Early each morning, I'd watch the men cut down big trees and saw them into logs. Then they were dragged by two horses named Jack and Billy to the mill. They were gentle, and I petted them every chance I got.
One day, Mr. Davis, the mill owner, said he would pay me 15 cents a day to bring fresh water to the men. I said yes!
One afternoon when Jack and Billy were pulling a log up to the mill, a stick became wedged(塞入) in Jack's right front foot. After Mr. Davis removed the stick, the horse driver said that the foot should be doctored. But Mr. Davis said he didn't have time for that. He said if the horse couldn't work, he'd get one that could.
I felt sick inside. Jack and Billy were my best friends! I couldn't stop thinking about Jack's foot and what Mr. Davis had said. For the rest of the day the horses pulled logs from the woods. By nightfall Jack was limping(跛行) badly. Mr. Davis told his crew that the mil would be closed for three days. He offered to pay me a dollar to feed and water the horses while he was gone. I quickly agreed.
The next morning, I rode my bike to Mr. Davis's mill. I fed the horses their grain and led them to a stream for water, I was sad to see that Jack was still limping. After I led the horses back, I wanted to look at Jack's foot. I reached down and grabbed the hair on the back of his leg, Jack lifted up his foot so I could see. The part inside of the big iron shoe looked red and swollen. When I put the foot down, Jack let only the front of it rest lightly on the ground.
I knew if Jack couldn't work with that injured foot, Mr. Davis would get rid of him. I just couldn't let that happen. But what could I do I didn't know anything about medicine, and Mr. Davis said he wouldn't pay for a doctor.
As I slowly rode my bike home, my mind raced. I needed to find a way to help my big friend. At my house, I saw our neighbor, Mr. Sherman. It occurred to me that he raised horses and knew how to care for them.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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I told Mr. Sherman all about Jack anxiously. __________________________________________
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The morning that Mr. Davis returned, I woke up early. ___________________________________
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I have a 6-year-old boy, Sam. He is autistic(患自闭症的). Thus, dining out can be terrible. Though he loves to eat out, he dislikes the loud noise in a restaurant. He has a method to solve it: overpower(压倒) all noise with a much louder noise of his own.
This begins what I think of as fighting tables: neighboring parties raise their voice followed by Sam raising his until the loudest point of the noise is reached, making us quite unpopular with other dinners.
Faced with a possible long-time dining alone, I decided to teach my son table manners with his favourite chocolate cake at a new modern cake shop early one Tuesday night.
To my joy, we arrived at an empty cake shop. Everything went well until women entered. Neatly dressed in a simple way, they were two tables away from us. I felt a sense of bad luck coming.
The women began to chat, paying little attention to us. Sam happily took this as his start to talk loudly and overpower them. I asked Sam for a quiet voice, but unluckily Sam had left that voice at home. I looked at the neighboring table, knowing we wouldn't go noticed much longer. I planned to ask Sam to eat quickly and leave. Sam, who usually has food unhurriedly, refused to accept the sudden idea of fast dining, and he kept talking endlessly.
"SHUSH!" I said, a little angry. Sam laughed loudly as his reply. "Be quiet!" I could see that the two women were now watching us.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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Finally, the older of the two women came over. _______________________________________
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It turned out to be a perfect night. __________________________________________________
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六、
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was July 2019 and my mum Rebecca was taking me on a 120 km walking holiday from Portugal to Spain as a special treat for my 10th birthday. One day, while walking along the coastal path staring out at the Atlantic Ocean, I chatted away to Mum. "When Lexi turns.10, are you going to take her on a trip like this " I asked, referring to my seven-year-old sister. Mum said Lexi had already asked to go to Svalbard in the north of Norway because she was crazy about polar bears.
Although I was still on my first special trip, I'd been learning about ancient civilizations at school and knew I'd love to see some relics in the flesh. So I continued saying, "Why don't I go to Egypt while you're in Svalbard with Lexi ", adding that my dad, Olaf, could take me there. "Great, but I'm not paying for it." Muim replied, chuckling. "That's fine. I'll pay," I said, "I'll save up my pocket money and get a job."
So that's exactly what I did. Though I was too young to do any other paid work, I had my own solution. I started saving my $10-a-week pocket money. Also, I washed my parents' car or mowed the lawn for extra cash.
In 2020, we moved to Perth. One day, I saw a pamphlet(小册子) in the letter box advertising a job delivering catalogues. When I told Mum I wanted to do it, she tried to put me off the idea, reminding me that the work was tiring and time-consuming. But when seeing the determination in my eyes, she agreed to call them. Thankfully, my young age didn't bother them-I got the job. On a Monday, a mountain of catalogues was dropped off at our house, which shocked me a lot. I told myself to calm down and dedicated to work. It took me nine hours to sort through them. At first, I used my bike and carried the catalogues in my backpack to deliver them to 430 houses in my area.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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After several deliveries, I found it wasn't very efficient. __________________________________
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Three and a half years later, I saved a massive $6,500, and Dad and I flew to Cairo, Egypt. _____
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答案以及解析
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When I told my mom that I wanted very much to have Naan, she felt puzzled. Naan was not a common dish in our household, and my mom wasn't sure if she could prepare it, but she promised she would try. The next day, I was thrilled to find that my lunch box now contained a piece of Naan, and I eagerly shared it with Kate. Seeing her smiling face made me feel really happy inside. From that day on, my mom would occasionally pack some Indian delicacies for me to share with Kate, and I would be more than happy to do so.
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I moved out of that school soon after and didn't stay in touch with Kate. However, this experience taught me an important lesson about kindness and understanding. Often we judge people too quickly, without realizing their underlying struggles. While it may seem small, sharing my lunch with Kate helped me to connect with her on a deeper level and to understand her better. As I grew older, I would try to apply this lesson in my daily life – to be a little kinder, a little more empathetic, and a little more understanding of people's struggles.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"当我告诉我妈妈我非常想要馕饼时，她感到困惑"可知，第一段可描写作者发现母亲给他准备了馕饼，并与Kate分享。
②由第二段首句内容"不久之后，我就搬出了那所学校，没有和凯特保持联系"可知，第二段可描写作者对自己的经历的感悟。
2.续写线索：告诉母亲—看到馕饼—分享—搬出学校—感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①分享：share/divide/split
②准备：prepare/intend/draw up
③判断：judge/estimate/assess
情绪类
①开心：happy/content/joyous
②激动：thrill/excit/amaze
[高分句型1]Seeing her smiling face made me feel really happy inside. (动名词做主语)
[高分句型2]As I grew older, I would try to apply this lesson in my daily life – to be a little kinder, a little more empathetic, and a little more understanding of people's struggles. （由As引导的时间状语从句）
二、
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When we fell asleep, Grandpa quietly walked out into the yard. He kept spraying water onto the ice in the yard. It was so cold outside that Grandpa trembled all over. But he went on building the rink for us. He hoped to complete the work as soon as possible. That night he worked for a long time although his waist was very painful. The next morning when we woke up, we found skating equipment placed before our bed. Grandpa called out, "Kids, come out! The rink was ready!"
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Amazed, we hurriedly put on the skating equipment and rushed out. Seeing the perfect rink, we were so excited and could no longer wait to skate on it, while Grandpa stood aside, smiling. We skated in the cold for what felt like hours laughing and dancing, creating memories that would last a lifetime. Grandpa was proud of what he had accomplished and happy to see us having so much fun. Now we always remember the special gift, which Grandpa built with great love.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"等我们睡着了，爷爷悄悄地走到院子里。"以及第二段首句内容"感到很惊讶，我们赶紧穿上滑冰装备，冲了出去。"可知，第一段可描写爷爷悄悄建好了溜冰场的经过。
②由第二段首句内容"感到很惊讶，我们赶紧穿上滑冰装备，冲了出去。"可知，第二段可描写看到爷爷为自己所做的事情，作者和妹妹非常感动。
2.续写线索：作者和妹妹小时候，由于父母参军，所以只能由爷爷照顾——没有父母的陪伴，作者和妹妹常常感到孤独——爷爷看到这一切，决定为作者和妹妹建造一个溜冰场——天气寒冷，爷爷每晚都忙着建溜冰场——一天，爷爷的腰很疼，作者和妹妹让爷爷在家休息——可是，爷爷还是悄悄建溜冰场——次日早餐，作者和妹妹惊讶地看到了建好的溜冰场——作者和妹妹很感激爷爷所做的一切
3.词汇激活
行为类
①继续：go on/continue
②完成：complete/finish
③希望：hope/wish
情绪类
①兴奋的：excited/thrilled
②对……感到自豪：be proud of/take pride in
【高分句型1】That night he worked for a long time although his waist was very painful.（运用了although引导的状语从句）
【高分句型2】Seeing the perfect rink, we were so excited and could no longer wait to skate on it, while Grandpa stood aside, smiling.（运用了现在分词作状语，while引导的状语从句）
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I was completely knocked out by the news. It's impossible for me to stand on stage and sing by myself. With a glimmer of hope, I asked her if she could come back before the performance. "Sorry my friend, you might have to go on stage by yourself. I believe you can make it!" I hung up the phone helplessly when my mom came to me. "You certainly can do it well on your own. All you need to do is make yourself confident." Hearing that, I determined to accomplish this performance perfectly, and I worked day and night on it.
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Finally came the big moment. Sitting on pins and needles, I heard the host call my shoe to the stage. With butterflies in my stomach, I took a deep breath. When I stepped onto the stage, I could feel all the eyes fixed on me. A strong sense of nervousness flooded over me. I started my performance as I usually practised and struggled to overcome my fear. The end of our performance was met with a moment of surprising silence, and then the audience erupted into thunderous applause. My heart beating wildly, I was totally immersed in the delight of performance. Not only did I get the chance to shine, but I also obtain the precious quality: Confidence.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"这消息使我完全震惊了。"以及第二段首句内容"重要的时刻终于到来了。"可知，第一段可描写作者得知Emma身体不适不能表演，心里忐忑不安，几番思索，决定独自登台。
②由第二段首句内容"重要的时刻终于到来了。"可知，第二段可描写作者鼓起勇气终于战胜了恐惧，歌唱的很好，取得了成功和作者的感悟。
2.续写线索：作者对消息感到惊讶—作者犹豫不决—最终鼓起勇气独自参加了才艺表演—表演取得了成功—作者也克服了恐惧和自我怀疑
3.词汇激活
行为类
①开始：start/commence
②阻碍：hold back/discourage
③决定：resolve//be determined to
情绪类
①忧郁的：gloomy/depressed
②开心：joy/delight
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I told Mr. Sherman all about Jack anxiously. I turned to him for help. When we got to the barn, Mr. Sherman told me to get a foot tub of warm water. He cleaned Jack's hoof with a brush, then put it into the tub of water to soak. We found a large can of animal medicine, which Mr. Sherman put on the wound. He said that Jack's foot would be well in a few days. I thanked Mr. Sherman deeply. For the next two days, I looked after Jack carefully as told.
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The morning that Mr. Davis returned, I woke up early. Just as I arrived, Jack and Billy were dragging a big log from the woods. Jack pulled with all his might, and he wasn't limping! When they stopped, I dropped my bike and ran down to the horses. I wrapped my arms around Jack's big head and hugged him tightly. At that moment. I was filled with happiness. I knew that my friend wouldn't have to be sent away.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"我焦急地把杰克的一切都告诉了谢尔曼先生。"可知，第一段可描写谢尔曼先生帮忙为杰克治疗，作者非常感激。
②由第二段首句内容"戴维斯先生回来的那天早上。我以最快的速度骑着自行车去了工厂。"可知，第二段可描写作者发现杰克已经痊愈，知道它不会被送走，作者感觉很高兴。
2.续写线索：作者寻求帮助——谢尔曼先生帮忙治疗——作者表示感激——老板回来——杰克痊愈——作者拥抱杰克——作者感觉幸福
3.词汇激活
行为类
①照顾：look after/take care of
②拥抱：hug/embrace
③知道：know/be aware of/realize
情绪类
①兴奋地：in excitement/excitedly
②快乐：be filled with happiness/be full of joy
【高分句型1】We found a large can of animal salve, which Mr. Sherman put on the wound.（由关系代词which引导非限制性定语从句）
【高分句型2】When the team stopped, I dropped my bike and ran down to the horses.（由when引导时间状语从句）
五、
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Finally, the older of the two women came over. Here came the bad luck, I thought. She completely surprised me when she said, "Honey, stop shushing your boy. Clearly, he has something important to say. He can talk as much as he wants. I want to hear everything he wishes to say." Smiling, she added, "You have a lovely boy. Relax and enjoy your dinner—and don't let him forget the chocolate cake." Sam smiled because finally, someone wanted him to do what he did best: make noise and eat chocolate cake.
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It turned out to be a perfect night. I met a wonderful woman who was clearly god-sent. Sam found the chocolate cake to be heavenly, too. I will always remember that lovely lady. Her kindness meant the world to a stressed-out mom. Whenever she is, we're sending her lots of thanks. Her kind words do not cost much. Yet they achieve much.
解析：本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者的儿子山姆患有自闭症,他喜欢外出吃饭,但不喜欢餐馆的噪音。一旦有噪音,他经常用他自己更大的噪音盖过所有的噪音。一次,作者决定在一家新开的现代蛋糕店用儿子最喜欢的巧克力蛋糕教他餐桌礼仪。刚开始,一切很顺利。几位女性顾客进来并开始聊天,儿子突然大声制止她们的故事。
1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容"最后,年长的那个女性走了过来。"可知,第一段可描写那位年长的女性安慰作者儿子的经过。
②由第二段首句内容"结果是一个完美的夜晚。"可知,第二段可描写作者感激这位年长的女性。
2.续写线索:担心—安慰—欣慰—感激
3.词汇激活
行为类
①想: think/suppose
②.遇到: meet/come across
③记得: remember/keep in mind/bear in mind
情绪类
①.感谢:sending her lots of thanks /show our gratitude/be grateful
②.微笑: smile/beam on
[高分句型1]. I want to hear everything he wishes to say.(运用省略关系代词that的定语从句)
[高分句型2].Whenever she is, we're sending her lots of thanks.(运用了whenever引导的时间状语从句)
六、
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After several deliveries, I found it wasn't very efficient. Strained by the weight of the catalogues and limited by the bike's capacity, I was compelled to seek a better method. Collaborating with Dad, we devised a solution: constructing a small cart for towing behind my bike, a move that drastically expanded my delivery capabilities. This innovation cut my delivery time in half and made the job less physically demanding. Witnessing my savings account grow, bolstered by determination and familial support, transformed the catalogues from mere paper into tickets to my dream.
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Three and a half years later, I saved a massive $6,500, and Dad and I flew to Cairo, Egypt. Upon arrival, the realization of my dream was overwhelming. Confronted with the majestic pyramids, symbols of the ancient civilization I yearned to explore, the experience was surreal. As Dad and I wandered through the bustling streets of Cairo, the sights, sounds, and smells of the city were a stark contrast to where my journey began. This adventure, the fruit of long-lasting saving meticulous planning, and relentless dreaming, stood as proof that perseverance and creativity can turn the loftiest dreams into reality.
解析：1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"几次递送后，我发现效率不是很高。"可知，第一段可描写作者通过努力和创新解决效率低的问题。
②由第二段首句内容"三年半后，我存了6500美元，爸爸和我飞往埃及开罗。"可知，第二段可描写作者实现梦想，到达埃及以及感悟。
2.续写线索：发现效率低——创新方案解决问题——攒够所需费用——实现埃及之旅——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①寻找：seek/look for/search after
②想出：devise/come up with
③加强改善：bolster/improve/enhance
情绪类
①崇高的：lofty/noble/sublime
②一丝不苟的：meticulous/scrupulous/cautious
[高分句型1] Collaborating with Dad, we devised a solution: constructing a small cart for towing behind my bike, a move that drastically expanded my delivery capabilities.（运用了that引导的定语从句）
[高分句型2]. As Dad and I wandered through the bustling streets of Cairo, the sights, sounds, and smells of the city were a stark contrast to where my journey began.（运用了 as引导的时间状语从句以及where引导的宾语从句）