2024届浙江省嘉兴二模英语读后续写 善良温暖的男店主 讲义
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年度暖男店主2024年嘉兴二模续写下水
My flight arrived in San Diego around midnight, and by the time I drove home and got into bed it was nearly 2:00 a.m. I was tired and jet-lagged when I dragged myself out of the bed. Nevertheless, I had to be up bright and early that morning: I was the opening keynoter（主旨发言人）at a national conference.
In short, I needed to recover quickly. A hearty breakfast in the early morning sun was what I needed. I headed for Carlos & Annie's, a popular restaurant located in the heart of the seaside town.
"I'd like steak and eggs, please," I said to the waitress after I had finally found a table in the restaurant. "Oh, I'm sorry," she apologized. "We're out of Special#2. We've served the last of our steaks. How about Special#14 " "Oh, no steak and eggs " I couldn't seem to accept it.
I'm not sure if it was my heartfelt sigh that caught Carlos the owner's attention. His warm, caring brown eyes seemed determined to pinpoint the best solution. He then said,“You know, I think I did see one final steak back there.”
Pressing my luck, I quickly declared, "Wow, that would be great. But you know, I'm not sure if I want a breakfast steak at all. What I really want is a steak—one that's two inches thick, tender and juicy, served medium rare." "Not to worry," Carlos assured me and left. The young waitress gave me a wink（眨眼）and said with a knowing smile, “Carlos is being Carlos again!" I did not give her words much thought.
Then, I noticed Carlos as he left the restaurant through the side door and walked into a neighborhood grocery store across the street. Carlos exchanged morning greetings with everyone he knew and even helped the owner of the bookstore next door by holding the items that filled her arms. Then he reentered the restaurant with a bag in his hand.
Paragraph 1:Within minutes, an exact Special#2 was in front of me.
Paragraph 2:I was about to leave when I learned Carlos had already sold the restaurant.
续写范文：
Paragraph 1: Within minutes, an exact Special#2 was in front of me. The steak was cooked just as I had requested, tender and juicy, medium-rare. The aroma filling the air refreshed me even before I took a bite. I knew my so-called luck was all about Carlos’ dedication. In a fleeting moment of imagination, I wondered if I were a restaurant owner, would I go to such lengths to buy ingredients in the early morning for a single customer The thought lingered briefly before I brushed it aside and focused on the delightful meal before me. As I finished, I couldn’t help expressing my admiration for Carlos’ efforts, declaring that he must be the best restaurant owner in the town. (108 words)
Paragraph 2: I was about to leave when I learned Carlos had already sold the restaurant. “Carlos is being Carlos, not being an owner anymore.” The young waitress’s words immediately rooted me there. It dawned on me that his actions had nothing to do with profit. The morning greeting exchanges and kindhearted help to the bookstore owner, which I had just witnessed, sprang to my mind, and in that moment, I realized the profound impact of simple acts of kindness in our lives. Later that day, as the opening keynoter, before all those professional lines I’d prepared, I briefly shared my Special#2 story at the national conference, just to inspire more people to embrace and celebrate the simple joys of human connection. (103 words)
一些读原文时产生的协同小想法：
Nevertheless, I had to be up bright and early that morning: I was the opening keynoter（主旨发言人）at a national conference.
关于opening keynoter的角色功能我查了一下，应该可以参考下面这个图。很有意思的是，在我还没来得及好好看这道续写题时，有学生和我分享他的思路——店可能是因为开不下去了才不开的，可以利用主人公的keynoter身份倡导从政策上去支持餐厅店主……我个人扶额表示他go too far...但他利用到身份和national conference这个思路是合理的，但国家性会议主题肯定是提前定的不容临时更改的，所以我们就briefly share就好啦~
In short, I needed to recover quickly.
对那肯定是要满足下的，所以写的是The aroma filling the air refreshed me even before I took a bite. 至于为啥我要用aroma来写，因为……毕竟Carlos给出了额外的热情，咱也回应一手“意想不到的没吃就recover了”
Pressing my luck, I quickly declared,...
press the luck表示一种碰碰运气的感觉，哎这不就给他碰着了嘛，但是这个luck是sheer luck吗？个人认为只能是so-called luck，然后借着这个就可以点出实际上我的好运是由于Carlos的某种性格啦。不要含蓄，建议直接给出类似于dedication、hospitality这些词让阅卷老师看到的。
What I really want is a steak—one that's two inches thick, tender and juicy, served medium rare."
盲猜这里对steak的描述是学生们在考场上直接抄到续写里的频次最高的内容之一，所以我也抄！(*^▽^*) 抄得合理，抄出自信！
The young waitress gave me a wink（眨眼）and said with a knowing smile, “Carlos is being Carlos again!" I did not give her words much thought.
waitress的这个动作可以作为语料积累下，然后她说的这句话本来我是没注意到的，但是作者加了一句“本来没多想”啊! 那就像是老师说“我本来不想批评你”就代表着接下去要批评你了一样他后来应该要想到这句话的含义，或者就是让这句话直接再出现一次（那就自然而然会有second thought了），我个人写着写着选了后一种思路，前一种当然也是很好的~
Carlos exchanged morning greetings with everyone he knew and even helped the owner of the bookstore next door by holding the items that filled her arms.
主打的就是一个大暖男形象，用来引出主旨是再好不过了，个人是把主旨落在the impact of simple acts of kindness和人与人之间的connection上了。
I was about to leave when I learned Carlos had already sold the restaurant.
其实二段首句这个信息太关键了，每次考试的二段首句当然都很重要，但是这次的二段首句读完我有一种“啊！”的感觉，现在回想一下这个感觉很重要，也是我们续写一直在强调的要和第一人称的角色高度共情。既然第二段才知道他不再是这家店的老板了，第一段我就故意处理成“顺其自然地以为他还是老板”好啦~
续写亮点：
The steak was cooked just as I had requested, tender and juicy, medium-rare.
运用了主从复合句。
The aroma filling the air refreshed me even before I took a bite.
运用了主从复合句以及现在分词短语作后置定语。
In a fleeting moment of imagination, I wondered if I were a restaurant owner, would I go to such lengths to buy ingredients in the early morning for a single customer
运用了主从复合句宾语从句。
The thought lingered briefly before I brushed it aside and focused on the delightful meal before me.
运用了主从复合句时间状语从句。
As I finished, I couldn’t help expressing my admiration for Carlos’ efforts, declaring that he must be the best restaurant owner in the town.
运用了主从复合句时间状语从句以及现在分词短语作状语。
It dawned on me that his actions had nothing to do with profit.
运用了It dawned on sb that句型。
The morning greeting exchanges and kindhearted help to the bookstore owner, which I had just witnessed, sprang to my mind, and in that moment, I realized the profound impact of simple acts of kindness in our lives.
运用了主从复合句定语从句。
My flight arrived in San Diego around midnight, and by the time I drove home and got into bed it was nearly 2:00 a.m. I was tired and jet-lagged when I dragged myself out of the bed. Nevertheless, I had to be up bright and early that morning: I was the opening keynoter（主旨发言人）at a national conference.
In short, I needed to recover quickly. A hearty breakfast in the early morning sun was what I needed. I headed for Carlos & Annie's, a popular restaurant located in the heart of the seaside town.
"I'd like steak and eggs, please," I said to the waitress after I had finally found a table in the restaurant. "Oh, I'm sorry," she apologized. "We're out of Special#2. We've served the last of our steaks. How about Special#14 " "Oh, no steak and eggs " I couldn't seem to accept it.
I'm not sure if it was my heartfelt sigh that caught Carlos the owner's attention. His warm, caring brown eyes seemed determined to pinpoint the best solution. He then said,“You know, I think I did see one final steak back there.”
Pressing my luck, I quickly declared, "Wow, that would be great. But you know, I'm not sure if I want a breakfast steak at all. What I really want is a steak—one that's two inches thick, tender and juicy, served medium rare." "Not to worry," Carlos assured me and left. The young waitress gave me a wink（眨眼）and said with a knowing smile, “Carlos is being Carlos again!" I did not give her words much thought.
Then, I noticed Carlos as he left the restaurant through the side door and walked into a neighborhood grocery store across the street. Carlos exchanged morning greetings with everyone he knew and even helped the owner of the bookstore next door by holding the items that filled her arms. Then he reentered the restaurant with a bag in his hand.
Paragraph 1:Within minutes, an exact Special#2 was in front of me.
Paragraph 2:I was about to leave when I learned Carlos had already sold the restaurant.
续写范文：
Paragraph 1: Within minutes, an exact Special#2 was in front of me. The steak was cooked just as I had requested, tender and juicy, medium-rare. The aroma filling the air refreshed me even before I took a bite. I knew my so-called luck was all about Carlos’ dedication. In a fleeting moment of imagination, I wondered if I were a restaurant owner, would I go to such lengths to buy ingredients in the early morning for a single customer The thought lingered briefly before I brushed it aside and focused on the delightful meal before me. As I finished, I couldn’t help expressing my admiration for Carlos’ efforts, declaring that he must be the best restaurant owner in the town. (108 words)
Paragraph 2: I was about to leave when I learned Carlos had already sold the restaurant. “Carlos is being Carlos, not being an owner anymore.” The young waitress’s words immediately rooted me there. It dawned on me that his actions had nothing to do with profit. The morning greeting exchanges and kindhearted help to the bookstore owner, which I had just witnessed, sprang to my mind, and in that moment, I realized the profound impact of simple acts of kindness in our lives. Later that day, as the opening keynoter, before all those professional lines I’d prepared, I briefly shared my Special#2 story at the national conference, just to inspire more people to embrace and celebrate the simple joys of human connection. (103 words)
一些读原文时产生的协同小想法：
Nevertheless, I had to be up bright and early that morning: I was the opening keynoter（主旨发言人）at a national conference.
关于opening keynoter的角色功能我查了一下，应该可以参考下面这个图。很有意思的是，在我还没来得及好好看这道续写题时，有学生和我分享他的思路——店可能是因为开不下去了才不开的，可以利用主人公的keynoter身份倡导从政策上去支持餐厅店主……我个人扶额表示他go too far...但他利用到身份和national conference这个思路是合理的，但国家性会议主题肯定是提前定的不容临时更改的，所以我们就briefly share就好啦~
In short, I needed to recover quickly.
对那肯定是要满足下的，所以写的是The aroma filling the air refreshed me even before I took a bite. 至于为啥我要用aroma来写，因为……毕竟Carlos给出了额外的热情，咱也回应一手“意想不到的没吃就recover了”
Pressing my luck, I quickly declared,...
press the luck表示一种碰碰运气的感觉，哎这不就给他碰着了嘛，但是这个luck是sheer luck吗？个人认为只能是so-called luck，然后借着这个就可以点出实际上我的好运是由于Carlos的某种性格啦。不要含蓄，建议直接给出类似于dedication、hospitality这些词让阅卷老师看到的。
What I really want is a steak—one that's two inches thick, tender and juicy, served medium rare."
盲猜这里对steak的描述是学生们在考场上直接抄到续写里的频次最高的内容之一，所以我也抄！(*^▽^*) 抄得合理，抄出自信！
The young waitress gave me a wink（眨眼）and said with a knowing smile, “Carlos is being Carlos again!" I did not give her words much thought.
waitress的这个动作可以作为语料积累下，然后她说的这句话本来我是没注意到的，但是作者加了一句“本来没多想”啊! 那就像是老师说“我本来不想批评你”就代表着接下去要批评你了一样他后来应该要想到这句话的含义，或者就是让这句话直接再出现一次（那就自然而然会有second thought了），我个人写着写着选了后一种思路，前一种当然也是很好的~
Carlos exchanged morning greetings with everyone he knew and even helped the owner of the bookstore next door by holding the items that filled her arms.
主打的就是一个大暖男形象，用来引出主旨是再好不过了，个人是把主旨落在the impact of simple acts of kindness和人与人之间的connection上了。
I was about to leave when I learned Carlos had already sold the restaurant.
其实二段首句这个信息太关键了，每次考试的二段首句当然都很重要，但是这次的二段首句读完我有一种“啊！”的感觉，现在回想一下这个感觉很重要，也是我们续写一直在强调的要和第一人称的角色高度共情。既然第二段才知道他不再是这家店的老板了，第一段我就故意处理成“顺其自然地以为他还是老板”好啦~
续写亮点：
The steak was cooked just as I had requested, tender and juicy, medium-rare.
运用了主从复合句。
The aroma filling the air refreshed me even before I took a bite.
运用了主从复合句以及现在分词短语作后置定语。
In a fleeting moment of imagination, I wondered if I were a restaurant owner, would I go to such lengths to buy ingredients in the early morning for a single customer
运用了主从复合句宾语从句。
The thought lingered briefly before I brushed it aside and focused on the delightful meal before me.
运用了主从复合句时间状语从句。
As I finished, I couldn’t help expressing my admiration for Carlos’ efforts, declaring that he must be the best restaurant owner in the town.
运用了主从复合句时间状语从句以及现在分词短语作状语。
It dawned on me that his actions had nothing to do with profit.
运用了It dawned on sb that句型。
The morning greeting exchanges and kindhearted help to the bookstore owner, which I had just witnessed, sprang to my mind, and in that moment, I realized the profound impact of simple acts of kindness in our lives.
运用了主从复合句定语从句。