2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写之生日惊喜 课件-(共13张PPT)
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读后续写原题阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When we are little kids, birthday parties are momentous occasions. They are our time to shine, and we love everything about them: the balloons, the games, the cake, the gifts, and so on.After reading cool stories about police officers solving mysteries, Allen Miller thought the police were awesome, hoping to become one of them! So, when he had to choose a theme for his seventh birthday party—he went with his favorite: the police! And all he wanted for his birthday party was a model police car. He excitedly invited some of his friends and anxiously awaited the day. Unfortunately, none of them could make it to the party due to various reasons. Allen’s mom Rachel wrestled with the challenging decision: should she cancel the party and save Allen the embarrassment of an empty party room He had been looking forward to the party and talking about it daily, so it would break his heart to cancel it.
Officer Frank Smith, who had already planned with Rachel and agreed to show up at the party, heard from Rachel that it might be canceled due to low attendance. That’s when he decided to save the day—he is a police officer after all! His duty is to serve and protect, and he decided to protect Allen from having a bad day, and serve him the most amazing seventh birthday party! Officer Smith got the whole local police to join in. “We like to be involved in our community. It’s not just about enforcing (执行) the law. We like to be there in the good times as well,” he explained to Rachel.
On the day of Allen’s party, Officer Smith picked up Rachel and Allen in his police car. The boy didn’t know where they were going, but was excited. They stopped at Town Hall, and officer Smith led them into the meeting room where a group of policemen were waiting to wish Allen a happy birthday.
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右:2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
There, a party was waiting for him.
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag.
一. 读情节，标线索（关键句）
When we are little kids, birthday parties are momentous occasions. They are our time to shine, and we love everything about them: the balloons, the games, the cake, the gifts, and so on.After reading cool stories about police officers solving mysteries, Allen Miller thought the police were awesome, hoping to become one of them! So, when he had to choose a theme for his seventh birthday party—he went with his favorite: the police! And all he wanted for his birthday party was a model police car. He excitedly invited some of his friends and anxiously awaited the day. Unfortunately, none of them could make it to the party due to various reasons. Allen’s mom Rachel wrestled with the challenging decision: should she cancel the party and save Allen the embarrassment of an empty party room He had been looking forward to the party and talking about it daily, so it would break his heart to cancel it.
Officer Frank Smith, who had already planned with Rachel and agreed to show up at the party, heard from Rachel that it might be canceled due to low attendance. That’s when he decided to save the day—he is a police officer after all! His duty is to serve and protect, and he decided to protect Allen from having a bad day, and serve him the most amazing seventh birthday party! Officer Smith got the whole local police to join in. “We like to be involved in our community. It’s not just about enforcing (执行) the law. We like to be there in the good times as well,” he explained to Rachel.
On the day of Allen’s party, Officer Smith picked up Rachel and Allen in his police car. The boy didn’t know where they were going, but was excited. They stopped at Town Hall, and officer Smith led them into the meeting room where a group of policemen were waiting to wish Allen a happy birthday.
提示：礼物袋装的东西
二. 提问题：拉情节线（情节合理，风格与原文一致）
第一段：There, a party was waiting for him.
1. 派对是什么样子的？
2. Allen的感受？
3. 享用蛋糕（呼应第二段开头）
第二段：After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag.
1. Allen拆开礼物袋时的心情？
2. 礼物是什么？
3. Allen看到礼物时候的心情？
4. 立意？（如何升华？）
三. 学生佳句赏析
1. No sooner had Allen entereed the room than the police cheered him:“Happy Birthday!”
2. Feeling completely refreshed, Allen embraced his mom and the policemen when they sang the song together.
3. The moment Allen entered the room, the scene that was laid out before him made him so astonished that words failed him.
4. Standing rooted to the spot, Allen’s face beamed and his bright smile lit up the whole room.
5. Having shared the cake together, everyone sank in the delightful atmosphere.
6. Singing Happy Birthday song, they shared the cake, wishing Allen good luck.
三. 学生佳句赏析
1. What was in store for Allen was a model police car, which was shining itself.
2. Casting a glance at the room, Allen seemed to realize what would happen, feeling his heart racing/pounding furiously.
3. Inside the gift box was a model police car which he had desired for a long time.
4. Touched and excited,Allen held it against his breast, smiled at the camera and then said with eyes brimming with tears.
5. So amazed was the little boy that he could hardly speak.
6. The moment he caught sight of the model police car, he exclaimed excitedly, rushed to Officer Smith and embraced him tightly.
7. A bright smile spread across his face, with uncovered thrill in his eyes.
四. 学生问题分析
1. 对于场景描写的表达较匮乏。
2. 用词不准确。例如：表达个人由于惊喜，激动而发出的叫喊声。用“shout”, 其一般形容由于愤怒、害怕、激动等而发出的呼喊，喊叫声。可以用“exclaim”。轻拍某人的头用“pat one’s head slightly”也是不太合适的，可以用“pat one’s head gently”。
3. 对话显得赘余。
4. 走题：第一段就提到礼物是什么。
五. 遣词造句（词汇地道，句式丰富）
（一） 动作描写
1. 动作链
The moment he caught sight of the model police car, he exclaimed excitedly, rushed to Officer Smith and embraced him tightly.
2. 非谓语动词
Bathed in the countless wishes and blessings, they lit the candles and shared the birthday cake together.
3.独立主格
Hands trembling,he touched it gently and burst into tears.
4. 固定的句型结构
Hardly had they entered the room when thunderous cheers burst out /erupted from the crowds.
(二) 情感描写
1. 形容词作主语补足语
Thrilled and astonished, Allen exclaimed with thrill.
2. with的复合结构
He held the precious gift against his breast tightly, with his eyes sparkling with enormous joy.
3. 独立主格（n./ pron +doing）
He grinned from ear to ear and bounced up and down, eyes sparkling/shining/gleaming in excitement.
4. 倒装
So amazed was the little boy that he could hardly speak.
（三） 场景描写
1.非谓语动词
Decorated with colorful balloons and flowers, the room was alive with people, who were policemen wearing genuine smiles.
2. 独立主格
The joyful atmosphere hanging in the air, Allen’s eyes automatically rested on the cake, which is exactly like the police car.
六. 范文
There, a party was waiting for him. The room buzzed with a warmth that enveloped Allen as he stepped in, greeted by the smiling faces of officers who had momentarily stepped away from their duties to celebrate with him. Decorations in colors of blue and gold adorned the walls, and a large cake stood at the center of the room, drawing Allen’s gaze. As they gathered around the cake, Allen felt a rush of joy. With each officer’s cheer, he blew out the candles, making a wish that sparkled in his eyes as brightly as the candles had.
在那里，有一群人在等着他。当艾伦走进去的时候，房间里充满了包围着Allen的温暖，迎接他的是那些暂时离开工作岗位和他一起庆祝的军官们的笑脸。墙上装饰着蓝色和金色的装饰品，房间中央放着一个大蛋糕，吸引了艾伦的目光。当他们围在蛋糕周围时，艾伦感到一阵喜悦。在每个军官的欢呼声中，他吹灭了蜡烛，许下了一个愿望，这个愿望在他的眼中闪烁着和蜡烛一样明亮的光芒。
六. 范文
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag. With trembling hands, Allen opened the bag to find a model police car, exactly like the one he had dreamed of. The room erupted in cheers as Allen’s face lit up with an unbeatable smile. Allen's heart was full, not just from the gift, but from the overwhelming sense of love and acceptance he felt from everyone in the room. This wasn’t just a celebration of his seventh birthday; it was a celebration of dreams, kindness, and the beginning of lifelong aspirations.
他们吃完蛋糕后，史密斯警官拿出了一个礼物袋。艾伦用颤抖的双手打开包，发现一辆警车模型，和他梦想中的一模一样。当艾伦的脸上绽放出无与伦比的笑容时，全场爆发出欢呼声。艾伦的心很充实，不仅因为这份礼物，还因为房间里每个人对他的无尽的爱和接纳。这不仅仅是庆祝他的七岁生日;这是一场梦想、善良的庆典，也是一生志向的开始。
读后续写原题阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When we are little kids, birthday parties are momentous occasions. They are our time to shine, and we love everything about them: the balloons, the games, the cake, the gifts, and so on.After reading cool stories about police officers solving mysteries, Allen Miller thought the police were awesome, hoping to become one of them! So, when he had to choose a theme for his seventh birthday party—he went with his favorite: the police! And all he wanted for his birthday party was a model police car. He excitedly invited some of his friends and anxiously awaited the day. Unfortunately, none of them could make it to the party due to various reasons. Allen’s mom Rachel wrestled with the challenging decision: should she cancel the party and save Allen the embarrassment of an empty party room He had been looking forward to the party and talking about it daily, so it would break his heart to cancel it.
Officer Frank Smith, who had already planned with Rachel and agreed to show up at the party, heard from Rachel that it might be canceled due to low attendance. That’s when he decided to save the day—he is a police officer after all! His duty is to serve and protect, and he decided to protect Allen from having a bad day, and serve him the most amazing seventh birthday party! Officer Smith got the whole local police to join in. “We like to be involved in our community. It’s not just about enforcing (执行) the law. We like to be there in the good times as well,” he explained to Rachel.
On the day of Allen’s party, Officer Smith picked up Rachel and Allen in his police car. The boy didn’t know where they were going, but was excited. They stopped at Town Hall, and officer Smith led them into the meeting room where a group of policemen were waiting to wish Allen a happy birthday.
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右:2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
There, a party was waiting for him.
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag.
一. 读情节，标线索（关键句）
When we are little kids, birthday parties are momentous occasions. They are our time to shine, and we love everything about them: the balloons, the games, the cake, the gifts, and so on.After reading cool stories about police officers solving mysteries, Allen Miller thought the police were awesome, hoping to become one of them! So, when he had to choose a theme for his seventh birthday party—he went with his favorite: the police! And all he wanted for his birthday party was a model police car. He excitedly invited some of his friends and anxiously awaited the day. Unfortunately, none of them could make it to the party due to various reasons. Allen’s mom Rachel wrestled with the challenging decision: should she cancel the party and save Allen the embarrassment of an empty party room He had been looking forward to the party and talking about it daily, so it would break his heart to cancel it.
Officer Frank Smith, who had already planned with Rachel and agreed to show up at the party, heard from Rachel that it might be canceled due to low attendance. That’s when he decided to save the day—he is a police officer after all! His duty is to serve and protect, and he decided to protect Allen from having a bad day, and serve him the most amazing seventh birthday party! Officer Smith got the whole local police to join in. “We like to be involved in our community. It’s not just about enforcing (执行) the law. We like to be there in the good times as well,” he explained to Rachel.
On the day of Allen’s party, Officer Smith picked up Rachel and Allen in his police car. The boy didn’t know where they were going, but was excited. They stopped at Town Hall, and officer Smith led them into the meeting room where a group of policemen were waiting to wish Allen a happy birthday.
提示：礼物袋装的东西
二. 提问题：拉情节线（情节合理，风格与原文一致）
第一段：There, a party was waiting for him.
1. 派对是什么样子的？
2. Allen的感受？
3. 享用蛋糕（呼应第二段开头）
第二段：After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag.
1. Allen拆开礼物袋时的心情？
2. 礼物是什么？
3. Allen看到礼物时候的心情？
4. 立意？（如何升华？）
三. 学生佳句赏析
1. No sooner had Allen entereed the room than the police cheered him:“Happy Birthday!”
2. Feeling completely refreshed, Allen embraced his mom and the policemen when they sang the song together.
3. The moment Allen entered the room, the scene that was laid out before him made him so astonished that words failed him.
4. Standing rooted to the spot, Allen’s face beamed and his bright smile lit up the whole room.
5. Having shared the cake together, everyone sank in the delightful atmosphere.
6. Singing Happy Birthday song, they shared the cake, wishing Allen good luck.
三. 学生佳句赏析
1. What was in store for Allen was a model police car, which was shining itself.
2. Casting a glance at the room, Allen seemed to realize what would happen, feeling his heart racing/pounding furiously.
3. Inside the gift box was a model police car which he had desired for a long time.
4. Touched and excited,Allen held it against his breast, smiled at the camera and then said with eyes brimming with tears.
5. So amazed was the little boy that he could hardly speak.
6. The moment he caught sight of the model police car, he exclaimed excitedly, rushed to Officer Smith and embraced him tightly.
7. A bright smile spread across his face, with uncovered thrill in his eyes.
四. 学生问题分析
1. 对于场景描写的表达较匮乏。
2. 用词不准确。例如：表达个人由于惊喜，激动而发出的叫喊声。用“shout”, 其一般形容由于愤怒、害怕、激动等而发出的呼喊，喊叫声。可以用“exclaim”。轻拍某人的头用“pat one’s head slightly”也是不太合适的，可以用“pat one’s head gently”。
3. 对话显得赘余。
4. 走题：第一段就提到礼物是什么。
五. 遣词造句（词汇地道，句式丰富）
（一） 动作描写
1. 动作链
The moment he caught sight of the model police car, he exclaimed excitedly, rushed to Officer Smith and embraced him tightly.
2. 非谓语动词
Bathed in the countless wishes and blessings, they lit the candles and shared the birthday cake together.
3.独立主格
Hands trembling,he touched it gently and burst into tears.
4. 固定的句型结构
Hardly had they entered the room when thunderous cheers burst out /erupted from the crowds.
(二) 情感描写
1. 形容词作主语补足语
Thrilled and astonished, Allen exclaimed with thrill.
2. with的复合结构
He held the precious gift against his breast tightly, with his eyes sparkling with enormous joy.
3. 独立主格（n./ pron +doing）
He grinned from ear to ear and bounced up and down, eyes sparkling/shining/gleaming in excitement.
4. 倒装
So amazed was the little boy that he could hardly speak.
（三） 场景描写
1.非谓语动词
Decorated with colorful balloons and flowers, the room was alive with people, who were policemen wearing genuine smiles.
2. 独立主格
The joyful atmosphere hanging in the air, Allen’s eyes automatically rested on the cake, which is exactly like the police car.
六. 范文
There, a party was waiting for him. The room buzzed with a warmth that enveloped Allen as he stepped in, greeted by the smiling faces of officers who had momentarily stepped away from their duties to celebrate with him. Decorations in colors of blue and gold adorned the walls, and a large cake stood at the center of the room, drawing Allen’s gaze. As they gathered around the cake, Allen felt a rush of joy. With each officer’s cheer, he blew out the candles, making a wish that sparkled in his eyes as brightly as the candles had.
在那里，有一群人在等着他。当艾伦走进去的时候，房间里充满了包围着Allen的温暖，迎接他的是那些暂时离开工作岗位和他一起庆祝的军官们的笑脸。墙上装饰着蓝色和金色的装饰品，房间中央放着一个大蛋糕，吸引了艾伦的目光。当他们围在蛋糕周围时，艾伦感到一阵喜悦。在每个军官的欢呼声中，他吹灭了蜡烛，许下了一个愿望，这个愿望在他的眼中闪烁着和蜡烛一样明亮的光芒。
六. 范文
After they enjoyed the cake, Officer Smith took out a gift bag. With trembling hands, Allen opened the bag to find a model police car, exactly like the one he had dreamed of. The room erupted in cheers as Allen’s face lit up with an unbeatable smile. Allen's heart was full, not just from the gift, but from the overwhelming sense of love and acceptance he felt from everyone in the room. This wasn’t just a celebration of his seventh birthday; it was a celebration of dreams, kindness, and the beginning of lifelong aspirations.
他们吃完蛋糕后，史密斯警官拿出了一个礼物袋。艾伦用颤抖的双手打开包，发现一辆警车模型，和他梦想中的一模一样。当艾伦的脸上绽放出无与伦比的笑容时，全场爆发出欢呼声。艾伦的心很充实，不仅因为这份礼物，还因为房间里每个人对他的无尽的爱和接纳。这不仅仅是庆祝他的七岁生日;这是一场梦想、善良的庆典，也是一生志向的开始。