专题06 写作
第一步：
审题
找关键词
确定以下内容：
体裁
时态
人称
第二步：列出写作提纲
开头部分：引出你所要写的话题
主体部分：就此问题，给出几点措施
结尾部分：提出自己的愿望并号召大家行动起来
广州市近4年考情分析
年限 题裁 话题
2020 材料作文 介绍送过的礼物
2021 日记写作 讲述授课人及课堂内容
2022 材料作文 绿色图书馆
2023 电子邮件 介绍活动安排
深圳市近5年考情分析
年限 题裁 话题
2018 提纲作文 致答谢辞
2019 写信 中国红
2020 倡议书 “创文”
2021 提纲作文 介绍活动安排
2022 解说词 介绍活动安排
2020年广州市中考
七、书面表达（共1题，满分15分）
21．（2020·广州）今天的英语课上，班级进行了题为“我送过的一份珍贵礼物，”的主题分享。请你写一篇英语短文，汇报你们四人小组的分享内容，需包括以下要点。
From Bob Kate Lily You
To parents good friend foreign teacher （请补充）
What soup Photo album Paper cutting （请补充）
Why thanks and love friendship culture （请补充）
注意：
1）词数：80词左右（短文的开头己给出，不计入词数）：
2）不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
In today's English class, we had a discussion on "A valuable gift I gave". Here is what we
2021年广州市中考
第三节 书面表达（共1题， 满分15分）
今天，跳绳世界冠军李华给大家上了一节云体育课。请写一则英文日记，记录这特别的一课。日记需包括以下要点：
1. 授课者：李华，14岁，红星中学学生；
2. 上课内容：跳绳讲解和示范等；
3. 你的收获和感受。
注意：1. 参考词汇：跳绳(rope skipping)、冠军(champion)；
2. 词数：80词左右（日记的开头已给出，不计入词数）；
3. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
Monday, May 31st
Dear Diary,
Today, we had a special online PE lesson. _______________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
2022年广州市中考
七、书面表达（共1题，满分15分）
56．（2022·广州）你校将兴建新图书馆，学校英文报以"My Green School Library"为题向学生征稿。请根据以下思维导图的内容提示写一篇短文投稿，介绍你所设计（design）的绿 色图书馆。
注意：1）可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息；
2）词数80词左右（短文的开头已给出，不计入词数）；
3）不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
My Green School Library l want to design a green school library.
2023年广州市中考
第三节 书面表达（共1题，满分15分）
56. 你是校志愿队队长李华。你校将于下周六组织主题（theme）为“健康你和我”的志愿服务活动，交换生Sam也报名参加。请你根据以下内容写一封电子邮件，向他介绍活动的安排。
Theme Healthy You and Me
Time 8:30 a.m.—11:30 a.m.
Place Sports Center
Activities …
Purpose …
注意：
1. 可在内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息；
2. 词数80词左右（邮件的开头已给出，不计入词数）；
3. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
Dear Sam,
Thank you for joining us in our voluntary work next Saturday.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
2018年深圳市中考
六、书面表达
23．（2018·深圳）英国某中学邀请你校学生代表团 7 月中旬前往访问交流。假定你是成员之一，请你代表访问团在欢迎会上致答谢辞，内容包括：
⒈感谢邀请和接待；
⒉希望在文化习俗、创新与发明等方面进行交流；
⒊重点介绍一个中国传统节日；
⒋邀请他们访问深圳。
注意：
⒈词数 80 左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）；
⒉致辞必须要点齐全，可适当发挥；
⒊致辞中不得出现真实姓名和校名；
⒋条理清楚，语句通顺，意义连贯，书写规范。
参考词汇：
接待 reception；习俗 custom；创新 innovation。
Ladies and gentlemen,
Good evening! It's really a great honour for me to speak here.
That's all. Thank you.
2019年深圳市中考
V. 书面表达（15 分）
假设你是李华，你的英国朋友 Tony 对“中国红”一词很感兴趣，想了解“中国红”在中国人日常生活中的体现，请你根据以下表格信息写一封回信帮助他了解。
提示词：
婚礼 wedding，中国结 Chinese Knot，红包 red packet， 代表 stand for Dear Tony,
It’s great to receive your letter. I’m writing to tell you something about Chinese
red.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
I truly hope my letter will help you understand better about Chinese red.
Yours,
Li Hua
中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
2020年深圳市中考
六、书面表达(共15分)
23．（2020·深圳）深圳市正在争创全国文明城市。假定你是鹏城中学学生会主席，希望同学们为“创文”做出自己的贡献。
请你按照所提示的要点，代表学生会写一篇倡议书。
环境保护 ①垃圾分类；②绿色出行
公益慈善 ①志愿服务；......
人际交往 ①诚信友善；②....
要求:
1）词数80左右(开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数)；
2）要点齐全，可适当发挥；
3）条理清晰，语句通顺，意义连贯，书写规范；
4）文中不得出现真实姓名和校名。
参考词汇：分类sort out志愿 者volunteer贡献contribution
Dear
friends,
As we know, Shenzhen is working hard to win
the title of China's National Civilized City.
All in all, Shenzhen is our home. It's time
to take action.
The
Student Union
July
20, 2020
2021年深圳市中考
46．（2021·深圳）深圳是一座科技之城、创新之城，为培养学生对科技的兴趣，你的学校上周举办了科技节。假定你是你校英语报的小记者，请你编写一篇新闻报道，介绍这次活动。
要点∶
1）活动目的
2）活动项目∶①模型制作比赛②
3）活动亮点∶学生发明的服务于校园的机器人=（外表, 功能）
4）学生感受
提示词∶
1）科技节 science festival 2）实验 experiment
Shenzhen is well-known
as a city of technology and innovation. Last week,
2022年深圳市中考
五、书面表达(15分)
46．（2022·深圳）假定你是李华，你和同学们拍了一个毕业活动视频，打算做成视频日志( vlog ), 参加主题为"青春飞扬"的国际中学生vlog作品展。请给该视频写一段解说词，内容包括：
1）海边活动：
下午：①沙滩排球；② …… ;
晚上：搭帐篷；聚餐和清理垃圾；分享会。
2）活动感言。
注意：1）词数80左右(开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数);
2）要点齐全，可适当发挥；
3）不得出现真实姓名和校名；
4）条理清楚，语句通顺，意义连贯，书写规范。
参考词汇：冲浪 surf 帐 篷 tent
Hi, everyone! I am Li Hua. It's my great pleasure to present my vlog to you.
Last Saturday, we went to the seaside to celebrate our graduation. In the afternoon,
So much for my video. I hope you have enjoyed it. Thank you.
1 / 1专题06 写作
第一步：
审题
找关键词
确定以下内容：
体裁
时态
人称
第二步：列出写作提纲
开头部分：引出你所要写的话题
主体部分：就此问题，给出几点措施
结尾部分：提出自己的愿望并号召大家行动起来
广州市近4年考情分析
年限 题裁 话题
2020 材料作文 介绍送过的礼物
2021 日记写作 讲述授课人及课堂内容
2022 材料作文 绿色图书馆
2023 电子邮件 介绍活动安排
深圳市近5年考情分析
年限 题裁 话题
2018 提纲作文 致答谢辞
2019 写信 中国红
2020 倡议书 “创文”
2021 提纲作文 介绍活动安排
2022 解说词 介绍活动安排
2020年广州市中考
七、书面表达（共1题，满分15分）
21．（2020·广州）今天的英语课上，班级进行了题为“我送过的一份珍贵礼物，”的主题分享。请你写一篇英语短文，汇报你们四人小组的分享内容，需包括以下要点。
From Bob Kate Lily You
To parents good friend foreign teacher （请补充）
What soup Photo album Paper cutting （请补充）
Why thanks and love friendship culture （请补充）
注意：
1）词数：80词左右（短文的开头己给出，不计入词数）：
2）不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
In today's English class, we had a discussion on "A valuable gift I gave". Here is what we shared in our group. ...
【答案】 In today's English class. We had a discussion on "A valuable gift I gave".
Here is what we shared in our group.
A valuable gift given by Bob was a bowl of soup to his parents. In his opinion, he considered it as a good gift to express his thanks and love to them. Kate gave a photo album to one of her good friends because she wanted to cherish every moment with her/him hoping that their friendship could last forever. In addition.
Lily sent her foreign teacher a piece of paper cutting which can fully represent Chinese culture.
For me. What I gave to my grandparent was a smartphone. We don't live together and my parents are so busy that we can't meet each other often.
However. We can have video chats by smartphone.
【知识点】材料作文
【解析】【分析】这篇作文要求根据题目中所给的图表，汇报一下你这个小组中四个人送过的珍贵的礼物。分析可知，时态以一般现在时和一般过去时态为主，人称以第三人称为主。仔细观察图表中的信息，应介绍清楚这个礼物是什么，是谁送的，送给谁的，以及为什么送这个礼物。并对最后一栏的内容发挥想象力,结合实际情况进行补充。
【点评】考查材料作文。叙述完整，条理清晰，语法规范，句式结构完整。短文采用了三段式作文。第一段题目已给出，第二段中作者主要介绍了小组中其他三人送的礼物，最后一段介绍了自己送过的礼物。
高分亮点：短语: in one' s opinion， in addition， each other，one of+复数名词；句型： Kate gave a photo album to one of her good friends because she wanted to cherish every moment with her/him hoping that their friendship could last forever. We don't live together and my parents are so busy that we can't meet each other often.
2021年广州市中考
第三节 书面表达（共1题， 满分15分）
今天，跳绳世界冠军李华给大家上了一节云体育课。请写一则英文日记，记录这特别的一课。日记需包括以下要点：
1. 授课者：李华，14岁，红星中学学生；
2. 上课内容：跳绳讲解和示范等；
3. 你的收获和感受。
注意：1. 参考词汇：跳绳(rope skipping)、冠军(champion)；
2. 词数：80词左右（日记的开头已给出，不计入词数）；
3. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
Monday, May 31st
Dear Diary,
Today, we had a special online PE lesson. _______________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
例文：
Monday, May 31st
Dear Diary,
Today, we had a special online PE lesson. The teacher was the world champion of rope skipping named Li Hua. He is 14 years old, and he is also the student of Hongxing Middle School. In the class, he explained the way of rope skipping and showed us how to do it well. We were interested in the sports. He answered some questioned and told his experience to us. I learned that the best way to do something best is by practicing it a lot. Practice makes perfect. What an interesting lesson we had!
【解析】
【分析】
【详解】
1.题干解读：该题目属于日记写作。在写作时应承接短文开头；讲述授课者的个人信息，上课的内容，最后讲述个人的收获和感受。
2.写作指导：本文应该用第三人称来叙述；时态采用一般过去时为主，讲述授课人的信息和课堂内容需要叙述完整，保证条理清晰。
2022年广州市中考
七、书面表达（共1题，满分15分）
56．（2022·广州）你校将兴建新图书馆，学校英文报以"My Green School Library"为题向学生征稿。请根据以下思维导图的内容提示写一篇短文投稿，介绍你所设计（design）的绿 色图书馆。
注意：1）可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息；
2）词数80词左右（短文的开头已给出，不计入词数）；
3）不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
My Green School Library l want to design a green school library.
【答案】My Green School Library
I want to design a green school library. It will be greatly different from the present ones. (做个简单过渡) The library is green, blue, white and it is in the shape of spaceships with all kinds of electrical appliances. They will use solar power and be controlled by computer (能源)s. Smart and green, isn't it What's more, it is made of recyclable materials which is environment-friendly to our Earth (材料). Thanks to the modern computer system, students can lend the books we are interested in and return it conveniently by scaning our face. The most exciting thing is that you can listen to music in your seat to relax yourself when you feel tired. (It is large enough so that you can also rest inside and feel comfortable. )
What a wonderful library it is! I can't wait to experience it.
【知识点】材料作文
【解析】【分析】这篇作文要求以"My Green School Library"为题，根据思维导图， 介绍你所设计的绿色图书馆。根据图片提示，可知内容上从图书馆的外观，什么使它绿色和我们可以在图书馆做什么几个方面去描述。可以适当地拓展。时态用一般现在时，人称以第三人称单数为主。可先列出要点，根据要点去组织语言，去充实内容，让它变得完整、合理，内容丰富。写作时，应注意英语表达和汉语的不同，使用正确的词汇和句型，还需要注意语法规范。注意语句间的衔接，使文意连贯，表达流畅。最后检查有无书写错误。
【点评】考查材料作文。范文根据思维导图的提示描述了自己设计的绿色图书馆，文中层次清晰，逻辑清楚。高分亮点：短语：in the shape of，all kinds of，be made of，so that等；句型：What's more, it is made of recyclable materials which is environment-friendly to our Earth （定语从句）。 The most exciting thing is that you can listen to music in your seat to relax yourself when you feel tired. （表语从句，时间状语从句，形容词的最高级）。
2023年广州市中考
第三节 书面表达（共1题，满分15分）
56. 你是校志愿队队长李华。你校将于下周六组织主题（theme）为“健康你和我”的志愿服务活动，交换生Sam也报名参加。请你根据以下内容写一封电子邮件，向他介绍活动的安排。
Theme Healthy You and Me
Time 8:30 a.m.—11:30 a.m.
Place Sports Center
Activities …
Purpose …
注意：
1. 可在内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息；
2. 词数80词左右（邮件的开头已给出，不计入词数）；
3. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
Dear Sam,
Thank you for joining us in our voluntary work next Saturday.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】例文
Dear Sam,
Thank you for joining us in our voluntary work next Saturday. Let me introduce something about the activity to you.
The theme of the activity is “Healthy You and Me”, and it will be held from 8:30 a.m. to 11:30 a.m. next Saturday. It will be held in the Sports Center. There are many interesting activities. First, there will be a sports history show. It will be held in our school hall. Besides, “Healthy You and Me” speech will be on, too. If you want to take part, please let us know before this Friday. There will be different kinds of after-school exercise classes, such as football, basketball, tennis and so on. You can choose the one you like.
The main purpose is to increase students’ interest in sports, and encourage students to take exercise actively. I am looking forward to your reply!
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇应用文，为电子邮件；
②时态：时态以“一般将来时”为主；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意结合表格提示内容介绍活动的安排。适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，表明写作意图，引出对活动的重点介绍；
第二步，具体阐述写作内容。从“主题、时间、地点、活动”几个方面重点介绍；
第三步，介绍活动的目的并书写结语。
[亮点词汇]
①introduce...to...介绍……给……
②from...to...从……到……
③different kinds of各种不同的
④look forward to期待
[高分句型]
①The theme of the activity is “Healthy You and Me”, and it will be held from 8:30 a.m. to 11:30 a.m. next Saturday. （and连接并列句）
②The main purpose is to increase students’ interest in sports, and encourage students to take exercise actively.（不定式结构作表语和作宾语补足语）
2018年深圳市中考
六、书面表达
23．（2018·深圳）英国某中学邀请你校学生代表团 7 月中旬前往访问交流。假定你是成员之一，请你代表访问团在欢迎会上致答谢辞，内容包括：
⒈感谢邀请和接待；
⒉希望在文化习俗、创新与发明等方面进行交流；
⒊重点介绍一个中国传统节日；
⒋邀请他们访问深圳。
注意：
⒈词数 80 左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）；
⒉致辞必须要点齐全，可适当发挥；
⒊致辞中不得出现真实姓名和校名；
⒋条理清楚，语句通顺，意义连贯，书写规范。
参考词汇：
接待 reception；习俗 custom；创新 innovation。
Ladies and gentlemen,
Good evening! It's really a great honour for me to speak here.
That's all. Thank you.
【答案】Ladies and gentlemen,
Good evening! It's really a great honourfor me to speak here. I extremely appreciate your invitation and reception.
To start with, I sincerely hope more chances will be given to exchange our culture, customs, innovations and inventions in the near future. What's more, it's known that China possesses a long historical culture standing. Therefore, a lot of festivals are calebrated, among which the Mid-Autumn Festival is of great importance. It is regarded as a symbol of family reunionand usually celebrated in the middle of autumn. On that day,all the family members get together and enjoy delicious moon cakeswhile appreciating the moon.
Children usually ask their parents to tell the story of Chang'e. Finally, I warmly welcome all of you to Shenzhen, a young and modern city.
That's all. Thank you.
【知识点】应用文写作；提纲作文
【解析】【分析】这是一篇应用文写作，根据要求写一篇致辞。在写作时应注意符合题意，根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯。
写作步骤：
一、阅读提示，弄清所有信息，明确写作要点。
1.感谢邀请和接待； I extremely appreciate your invitation and reception
2.希望在文化习俗、创新与发明等方面进行交流；hope more chances will be given to exchange our culture, customs, innovations and inventions
3.重点介绍一个中国传统节日What's more, it's known that……；a lot of festivals are calebrated, among which the ……Festival is of great importance；. It is regarded as a symbol of ……
4.邀请他们访问深圳。welcome all of you to Shenzhen
5.结束语：That's all. Thank you.
地位 最受欢迎的颜色之一
代表 幸福，可以带来好运
使用场所 婚礼，春节等
表达方式 剪纸，中国结，红包，灯笼
二、根据要点，写出关键词、短语或句子。
三、组词成句。连句成篇。注意使用一般现在时。
【点评】本题考查对所学知识的综合运用，熟练使用相关短语、单词和句型，注意词性的搭配，时态的把握，人称的使用等细节问题。
2019年深圳市中考
V. 书面表达（15 分）
假设你是李华，你的英国朋友 Tony 对“中国红”一词很感兴趣，想了解“中国红”在中国人日常生活中的体现，请你根据以下表格信息写一封回信帮助他了解。
提示词：
婚礼 wedding，中国结 Chinese Knot，红包 red packet， 代表 stand for Dear Tony,
It’s great to receive your letter. I’m writing to tell you something about Chinese
red.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
I truly hope my letter will help you understand better about Chinese red.
Yours,
Li Hua
中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
Dear Tony,
It’s great to receive your letter. I’m writing to tell you something about Chinese red. Chinese red, considered as the symbolic color of China, is extremely popular with Chinese people. It usually represents happiness, and we believe that it can bring us good luck.
People in our country attach such great importance to Chinese red that they use many red objects in some important events. For instance, in a wedding, you can see that the bride is in a red wedding dress and the wedding room is decorated with red. What’s more, the houses are also filled with red paper cuts, lanterns and Chinese Knots during the Spring Festival. Children will get red pockets for best wishes as well. Obviously, Chinese red plays a significant role and enjoys the highest popularity in China.
I truly hope my letter will help you understand better about Chinese red.
Yours,
Li Hua
2020年深圳市中考
六、书面表达(共15分)
23．（2020·深圳）深圳市正在争创全国文明城市。假定你是鹏城中学学生会主席，希望同学们为“创文”做出自己的贡献。
请你按照所提示的要点，代表学生会写一篇倡议书。
环境保护 ①垃圾分类；②绿色出行
公益慈善 ①志愿服务；......
人际交往 ①诚信友善；②....
要求:
1）词数80左右(开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数)；
2）要点齐全，可适当发挥；
3）条理清晰，语句通顺，意义连贯，书写规范；
4）文中不得出现真实姓名和校名。
参考词汇：分类sort out志愿 者volunteer贡献contribution
Dear
friends,
As we know, Shenzhen is working hard to win
the title of China's National Civilized City.
All in all, Shenzhen is our home. It's time
to take action.
The
Student Union
July
20, 2020
【答案】Dear friends,
As we know, Shenzhen is working hard to win the title of China's National Civilized City.
It's well known that Shenzhen is striving for one of the ten civilized cities in China, and now it is a good opportunity for us to make our own contributions.
Firstly, more changes in our daily life, such as sorting out the rubbish and travelling in a greener way, can be made to protect the city environment. What's more, to make Shenzhen a loving city, we are also supposed to help those in need by doing some voluntary work or raising donations. Last but not least, get along with others in an honest and friendly way. We'd better avoid talking about others' privacy if we want to show our respect.
I strongly believe that we will make Shenzhen a more civilized and beautiful city with our joint efforts.
All in all, Shenzhen is our home. It's time to take action.
The Student Union
July 20, 2020
【知识点】应用文写作；提纲作文
【解析】【分析】这是一篇有提示信息的应用文，时态主要是一般现在时，人称主要用第一人称。注意运用形容词的比较级，如 more civilized and beautiful ；连接词first，what's more和last but not least
2021年深圳市中考
46．（2021·深圳）深圳是一座科技之城、创新之城，为培养学生对科技的兴趣，你的学校上周举办了科技节。假定你是你校英语报的小记者，请你编写一篇新闻报道，介绍这次活动。
要点∶
1）活动目的
2）活动项目∶①模型制作比赛②
3）活动亮点∶学生发明的服务于校园的机器人=（外表, 功能）
4）学生感受
提示词∶
1）科技节 science festival 2）实验 experiment
Shenzhen is well-known
as a city of technology and innovation. Last week,
【答案】
Shenzhen is well-known as a city of technology and innovation. Last week, our school held a science festival, which aims to develop students' interest in science and technology and broaden their horizons.
At the festival, some students took an active part in the model-making competition. Many of their robots, which were the highlight of the festival, drew people's attention. These robots were in the shape of lovely animals, such as rabbits, monkeys and dogs. They were doing some simple tasks like sweeping the floor and throwing away rubbish. Besides, some other students carried out science experiments. The students present at the festival were all surprised at the exhibits and gave them a big around of applause.
Our school hopes that more and more students can learn science and technology better to serve our country.
【知识点】提纲作文
【解析】【分析】这是一篇提纲作文。假定你是你校英语报的小记者，请你编写一篇新闻报道，介绍你的学校上周举办的科技节 。文章要包含所给的要点内容，可以适当发挥，要求条理清楚，表达符合英文逻辑，主要用一般过去时，主语是第三人称。注意用一些固定搭配和固定句型为文章增色，同时注意文章上下文要联系紧密。
【点评】这篇短文根据所给的四个要点内容逐一阐述，条理清晰，意思连贯，表达清楚，时态正确，运用了一些固定搭配如 aims to，took an active part in，in the shape of，such as，carried out 等，同时也使用了复合句 Last week, our school held a science festival, which aims to develop students' interest in science and technology and broaden their horizons. Many of their robots, which were the highlight of the festival, drew people's attention. Our school hopes that more and more students can learn science and technology better to serve our country. 这些好词好句的应用使文章增色很多。
2022年深圳市中考
五、书面表达(15分)
46．（2022·深圳）假定你是李华，你和同学们拍了一个毕业活动视频，打算做成视频日志( vlog ), 参加主题为"青春飞扬"的国际中学生vlog作品展。请给该视频写一段解说词，内容包括：
1）海边活动：
下午：①沙滩排球；② …… ;
晚上：搭帐篷；聚餐和清理垃圾；分享会。
2）活动感言。
注意：1）词数80左右(开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数);
2）要点齐全，可适当发挥；
3）不得出现真实姓名和校名；
4）条理清楚，语句通顺，意义连贯，书写规范。
参考词汇：冲浪 surf 帐 篷 tent
Hi, everyone! I am Li Hua. It's my great pleasure to present my vlog to you.
Last Saturday, we went to the seaside to celebrate our graduation. In the afternoon,
So much for my video. I hope you have enjoyed it. Thank you.
【答案】
One Possible Version.
Hi, everyone! I am Li Hua. It's my great pleasure to present my vlog to you.
Last Saturday, we went to the seaside to celebrate our graduation. In the afternoon, we had a beach volleyball game. Then, we enjoyed the fun of surfing in the sea. Before dark, we picked up the litter on the beach. How meaningful it was! At night, we put up two tents and had a picnic. The food cooked by us was so delicious. Finally, all of us shared our feelings about this fantastic experience Not only can it promote our friendship, but also it leaves us a valuable experience.
So much for my video. I hope you have enjoyed it.
Thank you
【知识点】提纲作文
【解析】【分析】这是一篇提纲作文，本文要求按照所给提示给视频写一段解说词，写作中要详细介绍海边的活动，以及对活动的感言，根据材料内容可知时态为一般过去时，人称主要为第一人称复数，注意并列连词的使用及主谓一致问题，写作中注意上下文的过渡要符合逻辑关系。
【点评】这篇短文根据所给内容的提示将毕业活动进行了详细的陈述，内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚，连贯，时态运用灵活准确，一些固定短语如pick up采摘，not only...but also...不但......，而且.....，have a picnic野餐，so much如此多的，等以及句型结构，如Not only can it promote our friendship, but also it leaves us a valuable experience.等运用较为得体，表达比较准确，使文章更加自然流畅。
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