2023届重庆市二诊读后续写人与自然和谐相处：小蠕虫 讲义
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A group of boys ran to small parts of mud to play. I joined them. One boy held up a worm (蠕虫) , and with an extremely strong pull, he tore the poor creature in half.
How could anyone be so cruel I ran to the nearest playground supervisor (主曾人) to report the incident. The supervisor sighed and waved me away.Something had to be done.
推断出：How could anyone be so cruel “cruel残忍”是我对别人折腾蠕虫的态度，也是本篇文章很关键的情感词。这里需要反思后文“我报复”the Worm Ripper就上不残忍了吗？原文协同解读：mud是续写的背景信息。Mud play is not only a way to make precious childhood memories, it’s also a great way for children .Medical research shows that it can also be good for your child’s physical and emotional health.
When I returned to the mud, I inspected the two halves of the worm and was astonished to find that they were still moving. I quickly picked up the worms and a little extra dirt and put them into my jeans pocket.
A few minutes before lunch, I tiptoed to the bin that held the class's lunch boxes, looking for the one that belonged to the Worm Ripper the boy who had torn the worm cruelly, Fortunately for me, I recognized it immediately. I looked behind me to be sure no one saw me before slipping the worm pieces inside the plastic baggie that held his apple slices I held my breath as the Worm Ripper pulled the apple slices from his lunchbox. When he noticed the worm. he let out a sharp cry, which brought the lunchroom supervisors to him.
推断出：the Worm Ripper看到虫子时的心情是“惊恐“的，衔接续写第二段：勇敢说服其他男孩不要残杀蠕虫。
I should've felt triumphant (大获全胜的). Instead, my heart pounded in my chest. I knew what I had to do. I walked up to lunch supervisors and admitted, “It was me! I put the worm in his lunchbox."
推断出：我勇于承认错误，却很紧张。衔接续写第一段校长对我的态度转变。
The Worm Ripper glared in my direction, One supervisor rubbed his back to comfort him, while the other ordered me to go to the headmistress's office.
The Worm Ripper glared in my direction.“glare”和上文提到的“ he let out a sharp cry”是蠕虫开膛手对我报复事件的态度。也是本篇文章很关键的情感词，可联系到后文续写情绪变化。
Headmistress Lehrer was a strict old woman. My best friend Ricky said she would look students in the eye making them tell her everything bad they had ever done. Then they were punished by writing apologies until their hands fell of. L expected to at least receive a severe scolding (训斥).
推断出：后文校长听我解释，也不那么“strict严格的”和“serious严肃的”。续写可以刻画校长态度的反差。
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
第一段：After I told her the truth, with a kind of' strange smile on her lips, she went down on her knees.
第二段：The next day, not allowed to go out for break, i stared out and watched a boy by the mud pile picking up a worm.
文本分析：
1.文章行文思路是什么？
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者I和“一群男孩”在一小块泥地去玩，其中一个小男孩成为了The worm Ripper把一只worm撕成了两半，我跑到最近的操场主管人那里报告了这件事 ，主管却叹了口气，置之不理，挥手让我走，“我”觉得该事件很残忍，实在没办法，必须做点什么，用自己的方法来报复他，（把虫子放在他的午餐盒里）。结果是，The worm ripper（蠕虫开膛手）受到到了惊吓，我勇敢承认拉我的所作所为，被其他主管人命令去校长办公室。而校长却是一位难对付的女人，我希望至少会受到一次严厉的训斥就算过去。
2. 文章有哪些可续写点，以便设置衔接？
见文章紫色批注。
3.续写思路是什么？
第一段：告诉她真相，奇怪的微笑并蹲下来——①校长的语言描写和神态描写，对我的批评。——②我的动作描写，我以为轻而易举离开——③被惩罚下周不能去外面操场耍。
第二段：不允许外出休息，我盯着外面，看着一个男孩在泥堆旁捡一只虫子。——①我以为是又要残害虫子，心惊胆战——②是The worm ripper 上一次的蠕虫开膛手来劝说——③主人公的个人成长总结
文章主题是什么？
本文主人公面临道德困境并采取行动，导致后果和解决方案。文本还突出了同情、公正和个人责任的主题。文本的主题是道德行为和道德决策。它探讨了即使是小行动也可以产生影响的观念，以及坚持正确的事情可能很困难，但最终是有益的。
The intention of the story is to educate people to be kind to the animals./remind of the lesson that one's good behavior will make a difference to others.
参考范文：
After I told her the truth, with a kind of strange smile on her lips, she went down on her knees. "When I was your age, I got mad at someone for hurting my friend. They apologized, and we became friends, too. I appreciate that you tried to stand up for the worm, but try to keep the creepy-crawlies (出) outside, okay " said Lehrer. I nodded and turned to leave, thinking I had gotten off easily. I still had my writing hand, and I'd only had to admit one misdeed. “Wait!" the headmistress called. I turned around, "You'll be staying in for break for the next week.
The next day, not allowed to go out for break, I stared out and watched a boy by the mud pile pick up a worm I fearfully thought what would happen to it since l couldn't be outside to persuade him not to hurt it, He held it by both ends and looked like he was about to pull, Then someone ran across the playground to talk to him. It was the Worm Ripper, After their conversation, the boy gently placed the worm back in the mud, I smiled. Perhaps I had made a difference after all.
原文语言欣赏：
I. .with an extremely strong pull, he tore the poor creature in half.
2....the supervisor sighed and waved me away.
3......l tiptoed to the bin that held the class's lunch boxed,looking for the one that belonged to .
4. I held my breath as the Worm Ripper pulled the ..
5. Instead , my heart pounded in my chest.
高分语言积累：
蠕虫的动作细节描写积累
1 .The worm wriggled through the damp soil, leaving behind a trail of slime.(蠕虫在潮湿的土壤中蠕动，留下一条黏液的痕迹。)
2.The worm stretched out its slender body and began to burrow deeper into the ground.(蠕虫伸展它纤细的身体，开始深入地下挖掘。)
3.The worm reacted to the rain by coming to the surface of the soil, seeking air and avoiding drowning.(蠕虫受到雨水的影响而浮出土壤表面，寻找空气避免淹死。)
4.The worm wriggled and squirmed its way through the damp soil.(蠕虫扭动着蠕动着穿过潮湿的土壤。)
5.As it burrowed deeper into the ground, it left a trail of small, perfectly formed tunnels.(当蠕虫深入地下时，它留下一串小巧而完美的隧道。)
A group of boys ran to small parts of mud to play. I joined them. One boy held up a worm (蠕虫) , and with an extremely strong pull, he tore the poor creature in half.
How could anyone be so cruel I ran to the nearest playground supervisor (主曾人) to report the incident. The supervisor sighed and waved me away.Something had to be done.
推断出：How could anyone be so cruel “cruel残忍”是我对别人折腾蠕虫的态度，也是本篇文章很关键的情感词。这里需要反思后文“我报复”the Worm Ripper就上不残忍了吗？原文协同解读：mud是续写的背景信息。Mud play is not only a way to make precious childhood memories, it’s also a great way for children .Medical research shows that it can also be good for your child’s physical and emotional health.
When I returned to the mud, I inspected the two halves of the worm and was astonished to find that they were still moving. I quickly picked up the worms and a little extra dirt and put them into my jeans pocket.
A few minutes before lunch, I tiptoed to the bin that held the class's lunch boxes, looking for the one that belonged to the Worm Ripper the boy who had torn the worm cruelly, Fortunately for me, I recognized it immediately. I looked behind me to be sure no one saw me before slipping the worm pieces inside the plastic baggie that held his apple slices I held my breath as the Worm Ripper pulled the apple slices from his lunchbox. When he noticed the worm. he let out a sharp cry, which brought the lunchroom supervisors to him.
推断出：the Worm Ripper看到虫子时的心情是“惊恐“的，衔接续写第二段：勇敢说服其他男孩不要残杀蠕虫。
I should've felt triumphant (大获全胜的). Instead, my heart pounded in my chest. I knew what I had to do. I walked up to lunch supervisors and admitted, “It was me! I put the worm in his lunchbox."
推断出：我勇于承认错误，却很紧张。衔接续写第一段校长对我的态度转变。
The Worm Ripper glared in my direction, One supervisor rubbed his back to comfort him, while the other ordered me to go to the headmistress's office.
The Worm Ripper glared in my direction.“glare”和上文提到的“ he let out a sharp cry”是蠕虫开膛手对我报复事件的态度。也是本篇文章很关键的情感词，可联系到后文续写情绪变化。
Headmistress Lehrer was a strict old woman. My best friend Ricky said she would look students in the eye making them tell her everything bad they had ever done. Then they were punished by writing apologies until their hands fell of. L expected to at least receive a severe scolding (训斥).
推断出：后文校长听我解释，也不那么“strict严格的”和“serious严肃的”。续写可以刻画校长态度的反差。
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
第一段：After I told her the truth, with a kind of' strange smile on her lips, she went down on her knees.
第二段：The next day, not allowed to go out for break, i stared out and watched a boy by the mud pile picking up a worm.
文本分析：
1.文章行文思路是什么？
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者I和“一群男孩”在一小块泥地去玩，其中一个小男孩成为了The worm Ripper把一只worm撕成了两半，我跑到最近的操场主管人那里报告了这件事 ，主管却叹了口气，置之不理，挥手让我走，“我”觉得该事件很残忍，实在没办法，必须做点什么，用自己的方法来报复他，（把虫子放在他的午餐盒里）。结果是，The worm ripper（蠕虫开膛手）受到到了惊吓，我勇敢承认拉我的所作所为，被其他主管人命令去校长办公室。而校长却是一位难对付的女人，我希望至少会受到一次严厉的训斥就算过去。
2. 文章有哪些可续写点，以便设置衔接？
见文章紫色批注。
3.续写思路是什么？
第一段：告诉她真相，奇怪的微笑并蹲下来——①校长的语言描写和神态描写，对我的批评。——②我的动作描写，我以为轻而易举离开——③被惩罚下周不能去外面操场耍。
第二段：不允许外出休息，我盯着外面，看着一个男孩在泥堆旁捡一只虫子。——①我以为是又要残害虫子，心惊胆战——②是The worm ripper 上一次的蠕虫开膛手来劝说——③主人公的个人成长总结
文章主题是什么？
本文主人公面临道德困境并采取行动，导致后果和解决方案。文本还突出了同情、公正和个人责任的主题。文本的主题是道德行为和道德决策。它探讨了即使是小行动也可以产生影响的观念，以及坚持正确的事情可能很困难，但最终是有益的。
The intention of the story is to educate people to be kind to the animals./remind of the lesson that one's good behavior will make a difference to others.
参考范文：
After I told her the truth, with a kind of strange smile on her lips, she went down on her knees. "When I was your age, I got mad at someone for hurting my friend. They apologized, and we became friends, too. I appreciate that you tried to stand up for the worm, but try to keep the creepy-crawlies (出) outside, okay " said Lehrer. I nodded and turned to leave, thinking I had gotten off easily. I still had my writing hand, and I'd only had to admit one misdeed. “Wait!" the headmistress called. I turned around, "You'll be staying in for break for the next week.
The next day, not allowed to go out for break, I stared out and watched a boy by the mud pile pick up a worm I fearfully thought what would happen to it since l couldn't be outside to persuade him not to hurt it, He held it by both ends and looked like he was about to pull, Then someone ran across the playground to talk to him. It was the Worm Ripper, After their conversation, the boy gently placed the worm back in the mud, I smiled. Perhaps I had made a difference after all.
原文语言欣赏：
I. .with an extremely strong pull, he tore the poor creature in half.
2....the supervisor sighed and waved me away.
3......l tiptoed to the bin that held the class's lunch boxed,looking for the one that belonged to .
4. I held my breath as the Worm Ripper pulled the ..
5. Instead , my heart pounded in my chest.
高分语言积累：
蠕虫的动作细节描写积累
1 .The worm wriggled through the damp soil, leaving behind a trail of slime.(蠕虫在潮湿的土壤中蠕动，留下一条黏液的痕迹。)
2.The worm stretched out its slender body and began to burrow deeper into the ground.(蠕虫伸展它纤细的身体，开始深入地下挖掘。)
3.The worm reacted to the rain by coming to the surface of the soil, seeking air and avoiding drowning.(蠕虫受到雨水的影响而浮出土壤表面，寻找空气避免淹死。)
4.The worm wriggled and squirmed its way through the damp soil.(蠕虫扭动着蠕动着穿过潮湿的土壤。)
5.As it burrowed deeper into the ground, it left a trail of small, perfectly formed tunnels.(当蠕虫深入地下时，它留下一串小巧而完美的隧道。)