2024届高考英语二轮总复习 写作专项提升 读后续写课件(共22张PPT)
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第五讲 5步建构,考场作文速成
典型例题
(2021新高考全国Ⅰ卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil when they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. _____
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
When Mrs.Meredith heard of John’s idea,she thought it was a good one, too.So she praised John for his proposal,and offered him some advice.Very soon the children were busy popping the corn,while their mother went out to buy the paper bags.When she came back,she brought Bernard with her.All the children came surrounding Bernard and they gave a basket to Bernard.The basket was full of paper bags which were filled with popcorn.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.And much sooner than could be expected,Bernard returned with an empty basket. Never before had he earned so much money in his life.When he found that it was all to be his,he was so happy that he could hardly speak,but his bright smiling face spoke for him.People began to watch for the“little popcorn boy”, who earned some money to take home every week.All this was because of John’s bright idea.
5步建构,续写成功
第一步 抓大意,定主题
速读所给信息,了解文章大意,确定写作主题。
文章大意 一对双胞胎在母亲节为母亲做早饭,给母亲惊喜
写作主题 表达孩子对母亲的爱
第二步 理双情,思细节
梳理文章情节和情感两条线索,确定续写情节和情感。
Parts 情节 情感
已给信息 计划为母亲做早饭 excited
如何准备做早饭 curious/pleased
做早饭遭到失败 anxious/panicky/calm
续写第一段 父亲了解孩子的意图 delighted/proud
父亲和孩子共同做早饭 excited/delighted
续写第二段 孩子带早饭上楼 excited
母亲惊喜 moved
第三步 四句话,建框架
借助四句话,建构续写框架,明确续写方向。
位置与功能 内容
Para.1 第二句 承上启下 “Don’t panic!” he handed each one a wet towel,helping them clean the mess quickly.
段尾句 Everything settled,Father left the kitchen,promising to keep their secret.
Para.2 第二句 Meeting their smiling eyes,Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and said,“Happy Mother’s Day!”
段尾句 回扣主题 What a big surprise on Mother’s Day!
第四步 活表达,定语言
原文使用了定语从句、感叹句、非谓语动词、名词性从句、状语从句、并列复合句等高级表达手段,在续写部分要灵活沿用这些手法为自己的写作增光添彩。
第五步 巧衔接,保流畅
在叙述事情的发展时可采用时间状语从句、非谓语动词、副词等形式进行连接,以使行文流畅自然。
【满分作文】
As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared. “Don’t panic!” he handed each one a wet towel,helping them clean the mess quickly.After that,Jeff stammered out their plan,with his face flushing. However,Father laughed,“Sounds great!Let’s do it together!”Hearing this, Jenna and Jeff almost jumped to their feet,joy in eyes.Under his careful guidance,it didn’t take long before the French toast and chicken porridge were ready.Everything settled,Father left the kitchen,promising to keep their secret.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. Meeting their smiling eyes,Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and said,“Happy Mother’s Day!” Mother gave them a tight hug, saying,“Unbelievable!You can cook!It’s the biggest surprise that I have received.” Her face lit up with happiness.“They have known how to take care of others,” Father said in response to her excitement,winking at Jenna and Jeff. They couldn’t help giggling.What a big surprise on Mother’s Day!
跟踪训练
1
(2020新高考全国Ⅰ卷)
The Meredith family lived in a small community.As the economy was in decline,some people in the town had lost their jobs.Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet.People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs.Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman.She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor.She knew they had problems,and they needed all kinds of help.When she had time,she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before.There was a man sick in bed,his wife,who took care of him and could not go out to work,and their little boy.The little boy—his name was Bernard—had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,”she said to her own children,John,Harry,and Clara.“He is such a help to his mother.He wants very much to earn some money,but I don’t see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room,the children sat thinking about Bernard.“I wish we could help him to earn money,”said Clara.“His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments,John said nothing,but,suddenly,he sprang to his feet and cried,“I have a great idea!I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention.When John had an idea,it was sure to be a good one.“I tell you what we can do,”said John.“You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well,we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags,and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea,she thought it was a good one, too.____________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
2
(2023黑龙江齐齐哈尔二模)
My teenage daughter,Jane,always complained about having to be home earlier than all her friends.She would tell me that she was already seventeen. She believed that she was already an adult,yet still had a curfew(宵禁).
“But you are still in high school,” I said one day when she was complaining again.
“You will never trust me!” she yelled.
Before I could continue,she rolled her eyes,entered her bedroom and shut the door.
“How could I make Jane see that I only want to keep her safe ” I sighed.
I decided to go for a walk,hoping the cold air would clear up my mind.I opened the front door and nearly stepped on our small black cat,which seemed like a meatball.
“Hi,Meatball,” I said,taking it into my arms and touching it gently.
Meatball sneezed in my arms.Realizing it was too cold outside,I went inside.Meatball seemed happy enough to stay in the warm house.But after an hour or two,it went to the door and wanted to go outside again.
“Why won’t it just stay in with us all the time ” Nathan,my youngest daughter asked.
I explained to her that it was happy to be here but it liked being able to come and go as it pleased.
“That must be nice,” Jane,who happened to come out for a cup of tea,cut in,“Why the cat,not I,could come and go Why not give Meatball a curfew,too ”
I turned a deaf ear to her complaint.
Later in the night,temperatures dropped unusually low.Meatball stood at the door,meowing to go outside,again.I shook my head at it,being afraid that it might freeze to death.It looked at me and kept meowing.
“I know you’re not happy,but it’s for your own good,” I said,patting its head.
“Mom’s not being mean to you,” Jane told the cat.“She’s just trying to keep you from turning into a frozen meatball,” said Jane,looking at me meaningfully.
We all laughed at the joke.
The next morning,I couldn’t find Meatball.I asked the kids if anyone had seen her.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
“I let it out last night,” Jane said calmly.___________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
As I drove to the animal hospital,Jane held Meatball inside her coat.____
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
“I let it out last night,” Jane said calmly.My mouth dropped open and was very angry.I was sure Meatball would die,since it was freezing outside.I grabbed my coat and rushed out.Jane followed me,with fear welling up in her eyes.Several minutes later,we found the poor thing under the car.It curled into a tiny ball and kept shaking.I picked it up and shouted at Jane,“We need to go to the animal hospital.Now!”
As I drove to the animal hospital,Jane held Meatball inside her coat.I could hear her talking to the cat,apologizing repeatedly.Luckily,Meatball recovered soon.On the way back from the hospital,Jane suddenly turned to me and apologized for the first time,“Mom.I knew that you just wanted to keep me safe.I was happy to stay at home.But I just wanted to stay out a little longer once for a while.Now,I’m ready to observe the curfew.Perhaps it’s good for me.”
第五讲 5步建构,考场作文速成
典型例题
(2021新高考全国Ⅰ卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil when they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. _____
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
When Mrs.Meredith heard of John’s idea,she thought it was a good one, too.So she praised John for his proposal,and offered him some advice.Very soon the children were busy popping the corn,while their mother went out to buy the paper bags.When she came back,she brought Bernard with her.All the children came surrounding Bernard and they gave a basket to Bernard.The basket was full of paper bags which were filled with popcorn.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.And much sooner than could be expected,Bernard returned with an empty basket. Never before had he earned so much money in his life.When he found that it was all to be his,he was so happy that he could hardly speak,but his bright smiling face spoke for him.People began to watch for the“little popcorn boy”, who earned some money to take home every week.All this was because of John’s bright idea.
5步建构,续写成功
第一步 抓大意,定主题
速读所给信息,了解文章大意,确定写作主题。
文章大意 一对双胞胎在母亲节为母亲做早饭,给母亲惊喜
写作主题 表达孩子对母亲的爱
第二步 理双情,思细节
梳理文章情节和情感两条线索,确定续写情节和情感。
Parts 情节 情感
已给信息 计划为母亲做早饭 excited
如何准备做早饭 curious/pleased
做早饭遭到失败 anxious/panicky/calm
续写第一段 父亲了解孩子的意图 delighted/proud
父亲和孩子共同做早饭 excited/delighted
续写第二段 孩子带早饭上楼 excited
母亲惊喜 moved
第三步 四句话,建框架
借助四句话,建构续写框架,明确续写方向。
位置与功能 内容
Para.1 第二句 承上启下 “Don’t panic!” he handed each one a wet towel,helping them clean the mess quickly.
段尾句 Everything settled,Father left the kitchen,promising to keep their secret.
Para.2 第二句 Meeting their smiling eyes,Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and said,“Happy Mother’s Day!”
段尾句 回扣主题 What a big surprise on Mother’s Day!
第四步 活表达,定语言
原文使用了定语从句、感叹句、非谓语动词、名词性从句、状语从句、并列复合句等高级表达手段,在续写部分要灵活沿用这些手法为自己的写作增光添彩。
第五步 巧衔接,保流畅
在叙述事情的发展时可采用时间状语从句、非谓语动词、副词等形式进行连接,以使行文流畅自然。
【满分作文】
As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared. “Don’t panic!” he handed each one a wet towel,helping them clean the mess quickly.After that,Jeff stammered out their plan,with his face flushing. However,Father laughed,“Sounds great!Let’s do it together!”Hearing this, Jenna and Jeff almost jumped to their feet,joy in eyes.Under his careful guidance,it didn’t take long before the French toast and chicken porridge were ready.Everything settled,Father left the kitchen,promising to keep their secret.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. Meeting their smiling eyes,Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and said,“Happy Mother’s Day!” Mother gave them a tight hug, saying,“Unbelievable!You can cook!It’s the biggest surprise that I have received.” Her face lit up with happiness.“They have known how to take care of others,” Father said in response to her excitement,winking at Jenna and Jeff. They couldn’t help giggling.What a big surprise on Mother’s Day!
跟踪训练
1
(2020新高考全国Ⅰ卷)
The Meredith family lived in a small community.As the economy was in decline,some people in the town had lost their jobs.Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet.People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs.Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman.She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor.She knew they had problems,and they needed all kinds of help.When she had time,she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before.There was a man sick in bed,his wife,who took care of him and could not go out to work,and their little boy.The little boy—his name was Bernard—had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,”she said to her own children,John,Harry,and Clara.“He is such a help to his mother.He wants very much to earn some money,but I don’t see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room,the children sat thinking about Bernard.“I wish we could help him to earn money,”said Clara.“His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments,John said nothing,but,suddenly,he sprang to his feet and cried,“I have a great idea!I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention.When John had an idea,it was sure to be a good one.“I tell you what we can do,”said John.“You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well,we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags,and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea,she thought it was a good one, too.____________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
2
(2023黑龙江齐齐哈尔二模)
My teenage daughter,Jane,always complained about having to be home earlier than all her friends.She would tell me that she was already seventeen. She believed that she was already an adult,yet still had a curfew(宵禁).
“But you are still in high school,” I said one day when she was complaining again.
“You will never trust me!” she yelled.
Before I could continue,she rolled her eyes,entered her bedroom and shut the door.
“How could I make Jane see that I only want to keep her safe ” I sighed.
I decided to go for a walk,hoping the cold air would clear up my mind.I opened the front door and nearly stepped on our small black cat,which seemed like a meatball.
“Hi,Meatball,” I said,taking it into my arms and touching it gently.
Meatball sneezed in my arms.Realizing it was too cold outside,I went inside.Meatball seemed happy enough to stay in the warm house.But after an hour or two,it went to the door and wanted to go outside again.
“Why won’t it just stay in with us all the time ” Nathan,my youngest daughter asked.
I explained to her that it was happy to be here but it liked being able to come and go as it pleased.
“That must be nice,” Jane,who happened to come out for a cup of tea,cut in,“Why the cat,not I,could come and go Why not give Meatball a curfew,too ”
I turned a deaf ear to her complaint.
Later in the night,temperatures dropped unusually low.Meatball stood at the door,meowing to go outside,again.I shook my head at it,being afraid that it might freeze to death.It looked at me and kept meowing.
“I know you’re not happy,but it’s for your own good,” I said,patting its head.
“Mom’s not being mean to you,” Jane told the cat.“She’s just trying to keep you from turning into a frozen meatball,” said Jane,looking at me meaningfully.
We all laughed at the joke.
The next morning,I couldn’t find Meatball.I asked the kids if anyone had seen her.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
“I let it out last night,” Jane said calmly.___________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
As I drove to the animal hospital,Jane held Meatball inside her coat.____
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
“I let it out last night,” Jane said calmly.My mouth dropped open and was very angry.I was sure Meatball would die,since it was freezing outside.I grabbed my coat and rushed out.Jane followed me,with fear welling up in her eyes.Several minutes later,we found the poor thing under the car.It curled into a tiny ball and kept shaking.I picked it up and shouted at Jane,“We need to go to the animal hospital.Now!”
As I drove to the animal hospital,Jane held Meatball inside her coat.I could hear her talking to the cat,apologizing repeatedly.Luckily,Meatball recovered soon.On the way back from the hospital,Jane suddenly turned to me and apologized for the first time,“Mom.I knew that you just wanted to keep me safe.I was happy to stay at home.But I just wanted to stay out a little longer once for a while.Now,I’m ready to observe the curfew.Perhaps it’s good for me.”