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Unit5 What were you doing when the rainstorm came
Name
Writing
Ⅰ. Answer the question according to your memory(记忆) when the snow came
When and where did it happen
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Where were you when the snow came
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What were you/your friends /family doing
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How did you and your family /friends feel Why
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IIAnalyze the topic
假定你是Li Hua, 你收到好朋友Cathy的来信向你询问2024下大雪时你和你家人的活动。请根据来信内容回信。
Dear Li Hua,
How are you doing I know there was a heavy snow in Mianyang at the beginning of 2024. Where were you and your family What were you and your family doing at the time of snow How did you feel
Please write to me soon.
Yours,
Cathy
写作要求：1.条理清晰，语句通顺，语法正确；
2.书写规范，80词左右；
3.文中不得出现涉及真实的人名、地名或校名等。
Person：
Tense：
Text：
Details：
III Make an outline
Structure：
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IV. Finish the first draft
V. Finish the second draft(共11张PPT)
Unit 5
What were you doing
when the rainstorm came
writing
Pre-writing
Do you remember the first snow in 2024
Post-writing
Answer the question according to your memory(记忆) when the snow came
1. When and where did it happen
2. Where were you when the snow came
3. What were you/your friends /family doing
4. How did you and your family /friends feel Why
There was a heavy snow in Mian Yang on 24th January 2024.
It was one of the heaviest snow so far in 10 years.
I was...
I/My father/mother/friend was doing...
I felt...because
Post-writing
Dear Li Hua,
How are you doing I know there was a heavy snow in Mian Yang at the beginning of 2024. Where were you and your family What were you and your family doing at the time of snow How did you feel
Please write to me soon.
Yours,
Cathy
写作要求：
1.条理清晰，语句通顺，语法正确
2.书写规范，80词左右。
假定你是Li Hua, 你收到好朋友Cathy的来信向你询问2024下大雪时你和你家人的活动。请根据来信内容回信。
Person
The first& third person
Tense
The simple past tense/The past continuous tense
Text
A letter
Details
1.answer all the questions
（when,what, where, how）
2.80 words
Analyze the writing topic
Pre-Writing
Pre-Writing
Make an outline
Structure
(结构)
Beginning:
Body:
Ending:
Lead to the topic.
(show the topic.When/where)
Where were you and your family
What were you and your family doing
Show the feelings
How did you feel
Write a passage in 15 minutes
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已开始计时
时间到
While-Writing
What should a good writing have
Post-writing
A good writing should have:
a clear structure:beginning,body,ending.
correct content:when/where/where/what/how
some conjunction words and transitional sentences
some good sentences/add some sayings.
no spelling mistakes
a clear and tidy hand writing
no wrong sentences
enough words
Structure
and
content
Grammar and language
Spelling mistakes
Wrong sentences &Punctuation mistakes
Good sentences
Conjunction words
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Check the composition
Post-writing
Work in groups,correct the mistakes and appreciate(欣赏) your group members’ compositions. Then show it to the class.
Focus on: 1. structure(结构)
2. handwriting(书写)
3. points(要点)
4. grammar(语法)
5. punctuation(标点)
6. language(语言)
7. fluency(流畅度)
Post-writing：
Dear Cathy,
I'm fine these days.Yes,there was a heavy snow in Mian Yang on 24th January 2024.And It was one of the heaviest snow so far in 10 years.
I and my family were at home when the snow came.While I was doing my homework,my elder sister told me It started to snow. We were so excited that we ran to tell it to my parents.At that time,my mother was cooking at home while my father was reading a newspaper in the study.They both were happy when they heard it. And then we went out together and touched the snow.It snowed heavily for a long day so that we also made a snow man the next day.We played happily.
This is the first time in my life that it snowed heavily in Mian Yang.We felt so excited and happy.
Yours,
Cathy
A sample
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Marking ladders
Unit5 What were you doing when the rainstorm came
For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure, content, grammar & language Self-check Peer check Teacher’s assessment
Structure and content I write the letter into paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I lead to the topic (1 point)
Para_____:I have answered all the questions.(when/where/what/how) (3 points)
Para.____:I have showed my feelings (1 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (1 point)
Grammar and language My expressions are right. (3 points)
There are spelling mistakes. (1 point)
I have used some good sentences. (2 point)
I have used some conjunction words and transitional sentences.. (1 point)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total Score
What can I do to improve my writing next time
