2024届高考英语 二轮复习 写作 专项训练(含写作指导和范文欣赏)

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写作 专项训练
Writing 1
你校将举办英语演讲比赛。请你以Be smart online learners为题写一篇发言稿参赛,内容包括:
1.分析优势与不足;
2.提出学习建议。
注意:
1.词数100左右;
2.题目和首句已为你写好。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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Writing 2
假定你是李华,上周日你校举办了5公里越野赛跑活动。请你为校英文报写一篇报道,内容包括:
1.参加人员;
2.跑步路线:从校门口到南山脚下;
3.活动反响。
注意:
1.写作词数应为80左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
A Cross-Country Running Race
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Writing 3
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply:"Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this." Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith(银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, "Great. Now, write it again." I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher‘s office after the award presentation.
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Writing 4
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs(蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering(悬停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, "She must have come to say good-bye."
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右
2.请按如下格式作答。
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
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I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
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Writing 5
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened."I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably."I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well — he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer — that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
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I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
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Writing 6
I needed to do something in my community (社区)in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.
I thought that we would just be passing out dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.
As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act How would they treat me Would they hate me for having more than they did While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous. I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配)to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.
I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and that the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.
注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile.
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Paragraph 2:
I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way.
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Writing 7
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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Writing 8
Pumpkin(南瓜) carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork(软木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. "I’m going to set it down, now," I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. "I can’t get it out!" I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.
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Paragraph 2:
That video was posted the day before Halloween.
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Writing 1
【写作指导】
根据试题的写作要求,考生应以"Be smart online learners"为题,写一篇发言稿参加英语演讲比赛。写作的内容应包括对网络学习的利弊进行分析,然后针对如何使用网络进行学习提出一些建议。发言稿的结构如下:
如上图所示,第一部分旨在引出发言稿的话题;第二部分是全文的重点,对某个问题进行论证;第三部分是全文的结尾,对文章进行总结,得出合理的结论。当然,根据具体写作要点,可以添加其他内容。
由于发言稿具有口语的特点,要使听众听懂,文章就要条理清楚、层次分明,我们尽量使用简短的句子和口语化的语言,流畅地表达思想。此外,我们要动之以情、晓之以理,语言富有"鼓动"性, 可使用祈使句、感叹句、强调句等句式,以增强语言的感染力。
【范文赏读】
Be smart online learners
  Online learning has become an important way to learn recently. However, online learning has both advantages and disadvantages.
  Its advantages are obvious. It allows us to learn at any time wherever we are(地点状语从句). Besides, we can absorb all kinds of resources to learn more efficiently. However, its disadvantages cannot be ignored. Staring at the screen is harmful to our eyes. Worse still, we don’t have many opportunities to interact with our teachers and classmates.
  Then how to be smart online learners First, we should be brave to discuss our problems with others. Second, it is wise to take a short break after learning for 30 minutes(不定式作真正的主语).
  In conclusion, only by being smart online learners can we truly enjoy the benefits of modern technology(only+介词短语位于句首引起的部分倒装).
Writing 2
【写作指导】
本题要求写一篇活动报道,介绍学校举办的5公里越野赛跑活动,为半开放性写作。写作时需要注意:
1.审要点。题目给了三个要点(参加人员;跑步路线;活动反响),根据要点内容合理安排每个要点的详略,参加人员简述即可,跑步路线和活动反响可以详细写作。
2.审时态和人称。题目要求报道已经发生过的活动,所以时态主要用一般过去时,人称以第一人称为主。
3.提分词汇和句式。写作时注意各要点之间使用合适的关联词衔接,并运用一些高级词汇和高级句式来为自己的作文提升得分档次。
【范文赏读】
A Cross-Country Running Race
In order to enrich our campus life, our school organized a 5km cross-country running race last Sunday. Ninety students from twenty classes participated in the race, among whom thirty were girls(非限制性定语从句). Participants set out at 9 am from the gate of the school, through the Renmin Park, and finally arrived at the foot of Nanshan Mountain. After the race, we felt that not only did the event improve our physical and psychological quality, but it also helped us build a positive attitude towards life(倒装句). We do hope that the school will carry out more similar activities in the future.
Writing 3
【写作指导】
故事梗概 作者来自移民家庭,英语只是他的第二语言,写作是他非常头疼的事,但老师却安排他参加写作竞赛。在老师的鼓励下,作者想到一个独特的写作视角:以1775年4月18日晚驮着主人向人们传递英军来犯情报的马的角度去讲述这个故事。作者理解这匹马,因为作者也有相似的心境,这匹马的精神鼓励作者查阅史料,用心写作。终于,作者完成了作品,享受到了写作的快乐。
续写思路 续写要依据两个原则:1.明暗两条线:在写作故事情节发展的同时,适时插入主人公的情感变化。2.四句定语篇:根据续写第一段的开头语确定写作第一段第二句的故事情节,根据续写第二段的开头语确定写作第一段最后一句的内容,以保证故事情节的完美衔接;根据续写第二段的开头语来确定续写第二段第二句的故事情节,最后一句升华主题,讲述作者的感悟。
根据续写第一段和第二段的开头语可知,续写第一段应该描述作者得知自己的作品获奖,并出席颁奖仪式的情节,然后根据"明暗两条线"的原则,中间穿插作者的情感变化:老师告诉作者获奖消息——作者万分欣喜——参加主办方的颁奖仪式。
根据续写第二段的开头语可知,作者在颁奖仪式之后来到老师的办公室。这里应该接着讲述老师的鼓励与鞭策,最后升华主题——那匹马的形象一直在作者的脑海里,作者从此坚持写作,感受写作的快乐。
【范文赏读】
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I still remember it was a Monday morning in spring, when my teacher called me to his office, telling me that I had taken first place in the writing contest, and that I was the only winner whose native language wasn’t English(定语从句). Dominated by an overwhelming sense of excitement and pride at his words, I simply stood there dumbfounded, and my feet, as if rooted to the ground, couldn’t move a bit. The next day, I was presented with my award and a certificate at the ceremony.
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. Giggling instantly with a broad smile spreading on his face(with复合结构), he told me that he was proud of my wonderful performance. It was at that moment that a warm surge of streams washed through my body(强调句), and the image of the horse emerged in my mind, encouraging me to continue writing. Indeed, I got a taste of victory and learned to pursue my dream with perseverance, whatever difficulties might arise(让步状语从句).
Writing 4
【写作指导】
故事梗概 "我"被邀请去老朋友的农场上吃露天烧烤,停车后经过一个长时间未使用的挤奶间,一阵声音吸引了"我"的注意力。"我"进去一看是一只蜂鸟被蜘蛛网困住了,"我"一拿起它,它就放弃挣扎了。"我"把它捧在手中,好奇它是怎么进去的。破碎的窗玻璃说明它应该是从这里进去的,所以"我"塞了一块布,将其带出,关上门走了。当"我"展开手,它并未飞走而是坐在"我"手上看着"我"。 "我"把它头部和翅膀上黏糊糊的蜘蛛网扯掉,但它还是不愿意飞走,大概是刚刚挣扎时间太长而累了或者渴了。当"我"向车走去拿水给它喝时,它开始动了,"我"停下来,不久它展翅飞翔,但是没有马上飞走,而是在空中悬停着,一直看着"我",头晃来晃去。然后它快速飞走了。在露天烧烤期间"我"跟朋友们提了这个蜂鸟事件,他们保证会维修这个窗户。当"我"离开时,我的朋友们陪"我"走到车旁,这只蜂鸟飞了过来,它飞过每个人停在了"我"的面前一直看着"我",发出吱吱声,然后走了。我们都震惊得说不出话来,朋友打趣儿道:"它一定是来道别的"。
续写思路 根据续写第一段的首句"几周后,我又回到了这个农场"可知,续写第一段应该描述 "我"回到农场后的场景。根据上文可知,东道主答应会把窗户修补好,所以"我"这次来的目的很可能是看他们是否履行了自己的诺言;目的也可以是"我"又来拜访老朋友,顺便看一下窗户是否修补好了。通常,按照正能量的方向发展,这个窗户应该是被修补好了。此外,续写第一段可以穿插一些"我"与朋友之间的互动,也可以设置一个小矛盾,即一开始"我"没有见到蜂鸟的失落,然后续写第二段"我"正准备离开时蜂鸟出现。另外该段也可以描述我们吃露天烧烤时的场面。
【写作指导】
根据续写第二段的首句"我正要离开,这时这只蜂鸟出现了"可知,续写第二段应该主要写"我"与蜂鸟之间的互动。可以通过对蜂鸟进行细节描写(外貌、动作等),再结合"我"的情绪与动作展开构思。结尾可以围绕好几个点展开:可以写蜂鸟再次与"我"告别,也可以讲述"我"与蜂鸟相知相惜,还可以从"我"与蜂鸟这段珍贵的相遇与回忆入手,也可以从人与自然的角度切入。
同学们需要注意一点:上文描写蜂鸟用的是she,根据内容需保持一致的要求续写时也要用she而非it。
以下为3Q法助推情节发展,列出三个问题,但方向可以多样化。
Paragraph 1:A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
Q1:Why did I come back again
Q2:Did the hosts keep the promise (and my feelings)
Q3:What did I do with my friends /How did I feel when not seeing the hummingbird
Paragraph 2: I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
Q4:What did the hummingbird do at first and at last
Q5:How did I react when seeing the hummingbird again
Q6:Eventually, what did I gain from such an experience
【范文赏读1】
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. I still remembered my friends’promise so I went past the abandoned milking house to see if they had fixed the broken window(宾语从句). To my satisfaction, no other tiny creatures would meet this trouble any more. As I approached the farm(时间状语从句), I was greeted by a spicy smell of the barbecue, urging me to walk faster(现在分词短语作状语). We were totally immersed in the peaceful atmosphere, enjoying the delicate cuisines, talking about our interesting experiences and singing songs(现在分词短语作伴随状语) till the sun set. The evening glow spreading across the farm(独立主格结构), it was time for us to say goodbye so we went to the parking lot together.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. With a squeaking call, she dived towards me and hovered before my face, looking at me with her bright eyes(现在分词短语作伴随状语). Then she stopped on my left shoulder. I patted her on the back which was covered by colorful feathers(定语从句). And I took out my water bottle, trying to give her some water(现在分词短语作状语). Content and joyful(形容词短语作伴随状语), she flew about two meters above the ground, turning her head from side to side as if expressing her gratitude for saving her life to me again(现在分词短语作状语). At that moment, happiness and the feeling of being moved mingled, welling up into my heart, tears rolling down my cheeks(独立主格结构).
【范文赏读2】
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. Having finished visiting my friend(现在分词短语作状语), I wandered alone along the path, kicking pebbles. Memories with the hummingbird occurred to me when I walked to the blackberry-lined path. Was she alright Would she remember me Unknowingly, the milking house appeared in my vision, in which I spotted that the broken window had been repaired(非限制性定语从句). My head went blank. I couldn’t help missing her at the prospect of our precious friendship. The sky seemed to turn cloudy then.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. There she was! Delightedly, the clouds in my heart soon cleared. Hands waving(独立主格结构), I dashed towards the bird, yelling to make myself noticed. She hovered cheerfully and lowered to stand on my shoulder. It was not until the moment she got closer that I saw the raspberries held in her sharp mouth(强调句型). What a kind bird! Even animals know returning. Apparently, a good deed deserves another one. Solid bridges can be built between species.
Writing 5
【写作指导】
故事梗概 越野跑那天,来自小镇内外的七所小学的学生们正在热身,身体残疾的David独自待在篱笆旁。原来教练担心其他学校的孩子会嘲笑他,就让他选择参加与否,他选择放弃比赛。他虽患有脑疾,但是他的同学将他视为正常的孩子。无论同学们在做什么,他总是尽自己最大的能力参与其中。
续写思路 根据续写第一段首句可确定第一段的写作思路——面对David不愿看我一眼的情况,我是如何和他交流的?我说服他了吗?他是否决定参加比赛?根据续写第二段首句可确定第二段的写作思路——走路不便的David是否克服了困难?在比赛中发生了什么事?他最后取得胜利了吗?同学们对他的态度怎么样
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We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I quietly said, "David, if you don’t want to run today(if引导条件状语从句), no one is going to make you do. But if you’re not running because you’re afraid someone is going to laugh, that’s not a good enough reason. There will always be someone who will laugh and say mean words(who引导定语从句). That’s just the way it is. The real question is whether you are going to let those few people stop you from doing something you really want to do(whether引导表语从句,里面包含了省略了that的定语从句). Are you going to let them get in your way If you really want to run, David, then you run!"I held my breath as David took this in. Then he looked at the field and said with fierce but quiet determination, "I’m gonna run."
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The starter’s gun sounded, and David lurched forward with the other children. But he had only gone a few metres before he tripped and fell flat on the ground. My heart sank. As I started to shout encouragement, other voices around me appeared too.David picked himself up and started again. This was David’s run. He had worked for it, and he wouldn’t give up! At last, he raised his arms in triumph as he crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause.At the end of the year, the coach asked the class to nominate one of their classmates for the athletic award for their grade. Without hesitation the whole class voted for David, saying that no one had worked harder for that award than he(现在分词短语作伴随状语,第一个that引导宾语从句).
Writing 6
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故事梗概 "我"为了完成高中毕业所要求的社区服务时间,到一个施食处帮忙。刚开始"我"以为去帮忙只是分发食物,但实际上这却是一项既耗时又艰巨的任务。在服务的过程中,"我"发现许多流浪者排着队等着食物。他们当中有的亲切友善,有的面露凶相。"我"刚开始有些害怕,但一位女士的微笑和鼓励让"我"感到十分欣慰。在随后的工作中,"我"想到了这么多人都没有一个可称之为家的地方,并且他们能获得的唯一食物来自一个施食处,此时一股莫名的悲伤涌上心头。
续写思路 根据续写第一段的首句"As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile"可以确定第一段的思路——"我"看到了什么?"我"又是如何做的?他们有什么反应或感受?"我"又是什么感受
根据续写第二段的首句"I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way"可以确定第二段的写作思路——"我"如此高兴的原因是什么?"我"从中又学到了什么?这个经历对"我"以后的人生会有怎样的启示?
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Paragraph 1:
As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. In my sight, I found a lot of homeless people in need of something to eat were waiting in the queue. In the next few hours I was very busy giving out the meat and other food items into their hands. And what moved me most(what引导主语从句) was that when those hungry people went off, they also left with some friendly words of gratitude. Though I felt rather tired and worn out(Though引导让步状语从句), I still seemed delighted. Seeing what I did make their day(现在分词短语作状语;宾语从句), I felt deep pleasure welling up from the bottom of my heart.
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I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. Never had I ever experienced such an appealing situation(never置于句首引起的倒装). It was definitely a rewarding thing to do the community service! Following the lady’s advice, I even tried my best to know them. And it turned out that the seemingly dangerous people were actually quite friendly. Through this unforgettable experience, I also earned something more valuable. To help the people in need is also a help to myself. By offering the voluntary assistance, we can not only actually comfort the poor people, but also lift our own spirits, which can help build a better world with warmth and friendliness for all of us(which引导的非限制性定语从句).
Writing 7
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本文是一篇记叙文,讲述一对双胞胎在母亲节那天为妈妈做早餐的故事。已给文段的段落大意如下:
第一段:双胞胎计划在母亲节那天给妈妈一个惊喜,为她做早餐。
第二段:母亲节这一天,双胞胎来到厨房,煮粥,做吐司。
第三段:粥煮沸溢了出来,把火浇灭了,灶台乱糟糟的,Jeff的手烫着了,面包片炸糊了。
读后续写的写作中,我们应该注意下面几个写作原则:
1.主题必须是积极向上的,问题得到解决,矛盾冲突得到化解,皆大欢喜。
2.两大主线:1)故事的发展线索;2)主人公情感变化的线索。
3.四句定乾坤:1)根据给出的续写第一段的首句,确定续写第一段第二句的内容:2)根据续写第二段的首句确定续写第一段的最后一句,以保证两段之间的平稳过渡;3)根据给出的续写第二段首句确定续写第二段第二句的内容;4)确定文章最后一句,给故事一个完美的结局。
续写两段内容:
续写第一段首句:当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时,他们的爸爸出现了。
续写部分:看到眼前的情景,爸爸安慰孩子,并帮他们收拾、做早饭,最后,早饭做好了,双胞胎很高兴。
续写第二段首句:双胞胎端着早餐上楼,喊醒妈妈。
续写部分:妈妈醒来,看见早餐,感到十分惊喜;爸爸出现,告诉妈妈所发生的事情;孩子长大了,妈妈为此感到高兴与自豪。
【范文赏读】
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Seeing the mess in the kitchen(现在分词作伴随状语), he immediately understood what had happened(宾语从句), but he wasn’t upset. Instead, he applied some medicine to Jeff’s hand, and then set out to help them clean up the mess, throwing away the burnt toast. Next, they began to make breakfast, and by now the twins looked cheerful. Before long, the porridge was ready. Their father instructed them to fry the rest of the bread. Soon, the breakfast was ready, too.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. Opening her eyes, she couldn’t believe what she had seen. Before she could ask any question, their father turned up and told his wife about how the twins had made preparations to give her the surprise breakfast(about后的第一个宾语从句), and what trouble they had gone through when making the porridge and toast(about后的第二个宾语从句,其中when making相当于when they were making). Disbelief gave way to excitement and pride. Hugging them in her arms, she said, "Thank you, children. It’s such an unforgettable Mother’s Day for me."
Writing 8
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根据Paragraph 1的开头"我被困了五六分钟,但感觉起来要更长"可知,本段应该主要描述作者的家人对作者的头被卡在南瓜中这件事的反应;结合Paragraph 1的开头可知,作者的家人拍摄记录了这个场景。文章采用了比较幽默的口吻进行描述,续写时应该延续这一写作风格。
根据Paragraph 2的开头"这段视频是万圣节前一天发布的"可推知,接下来应该描述视频被上传后有什么影响,或给作者生活带来的变化。
【范文赏读】
Paragraph 1:
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. During the process, the voices from outside were oddly calm. My mom was amused, suggesting "Don’t use up all your oxygen". My smallest brother was singing a song I couldn’t make out. Fortunately, my dad came to respond to my shout. He helped pull my head hard. Finally, I was rescued with messy hair and a sore nose, and it was only then that I realized my mom had been filming the whole time. And she said she was going to upload the video online.
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That video was posted the day before Halloween. To our surprise, by the end of that day it had over 1,000 views. Next morning, we got 5 a.m. calls from local media — the video started racking up hundreds of thousands of views. When Jason and I went on a youth camp, I was recognized by children I’d never met. The pumpkin also became a minor celebrity.