2024届高三英语下学期作文复习专项不可思议的同伴Dion(选手)和Gobi(小狗)的旅程 讲义-
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不可思议的同伴Dion(选手)和Gobi(小狗)的旅程
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Paragraph 1: Dion was having a running race. This race would stretch in six stages over seven days and cover almost 155 miles. Gobi, a little she-dog happened to join him. It was their third day.
Paragraph 2: The sky was clear, the weather was warm: the ground was firm beneath Gobi's feet. From time to time, Dion would look over at her and smile. The warmth of that smile was even brighter than the sun beating down on them, but in a good way. It filled Gobi up.
Paragraph 3: As they progressed, a broad river popped into their sight, lying right in front. Dion had no idea how deep it was, but the race markers led right across, so he had to assume he'd be able to make it across as well.
Paragraph 4: cc It was surprisingly cold considering how warm the day was, and he sank down up to his waist, but that was it. At least the riverbed seemed solid. He could make his way across; he just had to go slowly. One wrong step and he'd get completely wet. Plus, he could hurt himself since he couldn't see where he was putting his feet. This was going to take a while.
Paragraph 5: Gobi watched as the man jumped into the water. She wagged her tail, but he didn't look her way. He was clearly busy concentrating. She sat down just before the water and watched. Surely, he would turn around and notice that she wasn't with him. But several minutes passed, and he got farther and farther away. Finally, Gobi couldn't take it any longer. She began anxiously running up and down the riverbank. Was the man going to leave her
Paragraph 6: At the sound of her bark, Dion stopped. He always made a point of facing forward, always forward, during a race. But this time he did glance back. Gobi was sitting at the river's edge, barking fiercely. There was no way the little dog could cross that on her own. These days, he'd fed her, given her water, and named her. He had to admit that he liked having her with him. She lifted his spirits.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Right now, listening to her barking as he left her behind nearly broke his heart.
Paragraph 2: This became tougher for Dion to cross the broad river.
不可思议的同伴：
Dion(选手)和Gobi(小狗)的旅程"——续写（24浙南名校好题分享）
一、故事大意
Paragraph 1:
Dion and Gobi's encounter during a running race(迪昂和戈比在一场长跑比赛中的相遇)
Paragraph 2:
The bond between Dion and Gobi grows stronger during the race (比赛中迪昂和戈比之间的羁绊加深)
Paragraph 3:
Dion faces a challenge with a river crossing (迪昂面对过河的挑战)
Paragraph 4:
Dion navigates through the river cautiously (迪昂小心翼翼地穿过河流)
Paragraph 5:
Gobi worries about being left behind (戈比担心被抛下的情绪)
Paragraph 6:
Dion acknowledges his fondness for Gobi as a companion (迪昂意识到他对戈比作为伙伴的喜爱)
二、原文信息支架
人物：角色性格协同
Dion: The sentences describing Dion in the above text
1. Dion was having a running race.
2. This race would stretch in six stages over seven days and cover almost 155 miles.
3. It was their third day.
4. From time to time, Dion would look over at her and smile.
5. Taking a deep breath, he took a careful step into the water.
6. At the sound of her bark, Dion stopped.
7. These days, he’d fed her, given her water, and named her.
8. He had to admit that he liked having her with him.
综上信息归纳：虽然比赛很累，但相处让Dion不会丢下她。
Gobi: The sentences describing Gobi in the above text
1. Gobi, a little she-dog, happened to join him.
2. The warmth of Dion’s smile filled Gobi up.
3. Gobi watched as the man jumped into the water.
4. She sat down just before the water and watched.
5. Finally, Gobi couldn't take it any longer.
6. She began anxiously running up and down the riverbank.
7. There was no way the little dog could cross that on her own.
8. She lifted his spirits.
综上信息归纳：Gobi因Dion而开心，因为Dion的离开而焦虑，可自己无法穿越宽阔的河流，所以，故事的后续一定是不离不弃，共同渡河。
原文描述性信息支架：预判故事结尾
1. From time to time, Dion would look over at her and smile. 渡河后，用face to face，smiling happily结尾。
2.She began anxiously running up and down the riverbank. 过河后，从小狗的角度收尾，那就是Gobi不再焦虑，开心的在河岸上跑来跑去。
原文语言支架：语言协同
无灵主语：The warmth of that smile was even brighter than the sun beating down on them, but in a good way. It filled Gobi up.
非谓语：Taking a deep breath, he took a careful step into the water.
三联动：These days, he’d fed her, given her water, and named her.
并列句：One wrong step and he’d get completely wet.
从句：（部分）Plus, he could hurt himself since he couldn't see where he was putting his feet.
三、段落首句情节预判
Right now, listening to her barking as he left her behind nearly broke his heart.（核心是共情，返回带上小狗）
游回岸上（Dion心理+动作；Gobi心理+动作）——带上小狗（她的行动；Dion的语言+动作）——准备就绪继续下河（基于二段首句tougher to cross the broad river可得出过渡句是下河准备）
This became tougher for Dion to cross the broad river.（核心是如何渡河，和过河后的描写）
在河中（Dion的动作；小狗Gobi动作）——上岸（Dion的动作，Gobi的动作）——故事收尾（基于原文信息支架）
四、微场景训练——Dion带着小狗Gobi在河中游泳的描写
_______________________________(抱着忠诚的伙伴戈壁), Dion stepped into the cool water, keeping Gobi close to him. His strong steps and Gobi’s steady presence created a graceful dance through the gentle currents.
Every move showcased their bond—the runner’s determined swimming, Gobi’s trusting snuggle against him. The water shone around them as they moved forward together, with Gobi _________________(增加了额外的重量) to challenge them. However, their unity fueled their progress.
______________________(一到达河对面), a sense of accomplishment embraced them. The runner, slightly out of breath but victorious, emerged from the water with Gobi still in his arms. ____________________(戈壁拖着她的尾巴), her eyes mirroring a shared victory.
参考答案：
Holding his loyal companion, Gobi, in his arms, Dion stepped into the cool water, keeping Gobi close to him. His strong steps and Gobi's steady presence created a graceful dance through the gentle currents.
Every move showcased their bond—the runner’s determined swimming, Gobi’s trusting snuggle against him. The water shone around them as they moved forward together, with Gobi adding a little extra weight to challenge them. However, their unity fueled their progress.
Upon reaching the opposite side, a sense of accomplishment embraced them. The runner, slightly out of breath but victorious, emerged from the water with Gobi still in his arms. Gobi wagged her tail, her eyes mirroring a shared victory.
下水文：
Paragraph 1:
Right now, listening to Gobi's desperate barking as he left her behind nearly broke Dion’s heart. The heart-wrenching barking tore Dion’s heart apart, he quickly turned back, and soon made his way back to the river’s edge, where Gobi anxiously awaited his return. As he approached, Gobi's eyes brightened with hope, her tail wagging vigorously. Dion scooped her up into his arms, showering her with affectionate words. With newfound strength, Dion set off towards the river once again, determined to find a way for both of them to overcome the obstacle together.
Paragraph 2:
Crossing the broad river became an even tougher challenge with Gobi in his arms. Dion carefully stepped into the cold water, struggling to maintain his balance as Gobi nestled herself in his arms, acutely aware of the danger that surrounded them. Slowly and cautiously, Dion navigated the unpredictable riverbed, ensuring each step was solid. Together, they moved ahead, step by step. Finally, they reached the opposite bank. Gently placed on the ground, Gobi bounded around Dion, wagging her tail in celebration. He laughed and scooped her up again, planting a kiss on her furry head.
官方范文
One possible version:
Right now, listening to her barking as he left her behind nearly broke his heart. “Oh, fine!” Dion declared at last. Turning carefully, he started to make his way back. The second she saw him turn around, Gobi was on her feet, tail wagging furiously, her whimpers changing to happy barks. When he was close enough, Dion reached out one long arm and scooped Gobi up off the ground. Then he hugged her to his chest. The little dog lifted her head and licked his cheek, which tickled. Dion laughed. “Yeah, yeah, you’re welcome,” he told her.
This became tougher for Dion to cross the broad river. Before, Dion had kept his arms out for balance. Now one of them was holding Gobi instead. That meant he had only one arm free. He had to go even more slowly and more carefully. Through it all, Gobi was amazingly good. She didn't struggle. She didn't bark. She didn't whimper. She just snuggled up against his chest and watched as they slowly inched their way across the river. Once they reached the other side, Dion set her down. She quickly circled him, barking and wagging her tail.
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Paragraph 1: Dion was having a running race. This race would stretch in six stages over seven days and cover almost 155 miles. Gobi, a little she-dog happened to join him. It was their third day.
Paragraph 2: The sky was clear, the weather was warm: the ground was firm beneath Gobi's feet. From time to time, Dion would look over at her and smile. The warmth of that smile was even brighter than the sun beating down on them, but in a good way. It filled Gobi up.
Paragraph 3: As they progressed, a broad river popped into their sight, lying right in front. Dion had no idea how deep it was, but the race markers led right across, so he had to assume he'd be able to make it across as well.
Paragraph 4: cc It was surprisingly cold considering how warm the day was, and he sank down up to his waist, but that was it. At least the riverbed seemed solid. He could make his way across; he just had to go slowly. One wrong step and he'd get completely wet. Plus, he could hurt himself since he couldn't see where he was putting his feet. This was going to take a while.
Paragraph 5: Gobi watched as the man jumped into the water. She wagged her tail, but he didn't look her way. He was clearly busy concentrating. She sat down just before the water and watched. Surely, he would turn around and notice that she wasn't with him. But several minutes passed, and he got farther and farther away. Finally, Gobi couldn't take it any longer. She began anxiously running up and down the riverbank. Was the man going to leave her
Paragraph 6: At the sound of her bark, Dion stopped. He always made a point of facing forward, always forward, during a race. But this time he did glance back. Gobi was sitting at the river's edge, barking fiercely. There was no way the little dog could cross that on her own. These days, he'd fed her, given her water, and named her. He had to admit that he liked having her with him. She lifted his spirits.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Right now, listening to her barking as he left her behind nearly broke his heart.
Paragraph 2: This became tougher for Dion to cross the broad river.
不可思议的同伴：
Dion(选手)和Gobi(小狗)的旅程"——续写（24浙南名校好题分享）
一、故事大意
Paragraph 1:
Dion and Gobi's encounter during a running race(迪昂和戈比在一场长跑比赛中的相遇)
Paragraph 2:
The bond between Dion and Gobi grows stronger during the race (比赛中迪昂和戈比之间的羁绊加深)
Paragraph 3:
Dion faces a challenge with a river crossing (迪昂面对过河的挑战)
Paragraph 4:
Dion navigates through the river cautiously (迪昂小心翼翼地穿过河流)
Paragraph 5:
Gobi worries about being left behind (戈比担心被抛下的情绪)
Paragraph 6:
Dion acknowledges his fondness for Gobi as a companion (迪昂意识到他对戈比作为伙伴的喜爱)
二、原文信息支架
人物：角色性格协同
Dion: The sentences describing Dion in the above text
1. Dion was having a running race.
2. This race would stretch in six stages over seven days and cover almost 155 miles.
3. It was their third day.
4. From time to time, Dion would look over at her and smile.
5. Taking a deep breath, he took a careful step into the water.
6. At the sound of her bark, Dion stopped.
7. These days, he’d fed her, given her water, and named her.
8. He had to admit that he liked having her with him.
综上信息归纳：虽然比赛很累，但相处让Dion不会丢下她。
Gobi: The sentences describing Gobi in the above text
1. Gobi, a little she-dog, happened to join him.
2. The warmth of Dion’s smile filled Gobi up.
3. Gobi watched as the man jumped into the water.
4. She sat down just before the water and watched.
5. Finally, Gobi couldn't take it any longer.
6. She began anxiously running up and down the riverbank.
7. There was no way the little dog could cross that on her own.
8. She lifted his spirits.
综上信息归纳：Gobi因Dion而开心，因为Dion的离开而焦虑，可自己无法穿越宽阔的河流，所以，故事的后续一定是不离不弃，共同渡河。
原文描述性信息支架：预判故事结尾
1. From time to time, Dion would look over at her and smile. 渡河后，用face to face，smiling happily结尾。
2.She began anxiously running up and down the riverbank. 过河后，从小狗的角度收尾，那就是Gobi不再焦虑，开心的在河岸上跑来跑去。
原文语言支架：语言协同
无灵主语：The warmth of that smile was even brighter than the sun beating down on them, but in a good way. It filled Gobi up.
非谓语：Taking a deep breath, he took a careful step into the water.
三联动：These days, he’d fed her, given her water, and named her.
并列句：One wrong step and he’d get completely wet.
从句：（部分）Plus, he could hurt himself since he couldn't see where he was putting his feet.
三、段落首句情节预判
Right now, listening to her barking as he left her behind nearly broke his heart.（核心是共情，返回带上小狗）
游回岸上（Dion心理+动作；Gobi心理+动作）——带上小狗（她的行动；Dion的语言+动作）——准备就绪继续下河（基于二段首句tougher to cross the broad river可得出过渡句是下河准备）
This became tougher for Dion to cross the broad river.（核心是如何渡河，和过河后的描写）
在河中（Dion的动作；小狗Gobi动作）——上岸（Dion的动作，Gobi的动作）——故事收尾（基于原文信息支架）
四、微场景训练——Dion带着小狗Gobi在河中游泳的描写
_______________________________(抱着忠诚的伙伴戈壁), Dion stepped into the cool water, keeping Gobi close to him. His strong steps and Gobi’s steady presence created a graceful dance through the gentle currents.
Every move showcased their bond—the runner’s determined swimming, Gobi’s trusting snuggle against him. The water shone around them as they moved forward together, with Gobi _________________(增加了额外的重量) to challenge them. However, their unity fueled their progress.
______________________(一到达河对面), a sense of accomplishment embraced them. The runner, slightly out of breath but victorious, emerged from the water with Gobi still in his arms. ____________________(戈壁拖着她的尾巴), her eyes mirroring a shared victory.
参考答案：
Holding his loyal companion, Gobi, in his arms, Dion stepped into the cool water, keeping Gobi close to him. His strong steps and Gobi's steady presence created a graceful dance through the gentle currents.
Every move showcased their bond—the runner’s determined swimming, Gobi’s trusting snuggle against him. The water shone around them as they moved forward together, with Gobi adding a little extra weight to challenge them. However, their unity fueled their progress.
Upon reaching the opposite side, a sense of accomplishment embraced them. The runner, slightly out of breath but victorious, emerged from the water with Gobi still in his arms. Gobi wagged her tail, her eyes mirroring a shared victory.
下水文：
Paragraph 1:
Right now, listening to Gobi's desperate barking as he left her behind nearly broke Dion’s heart. The heart-wrenching barking tore Dion’s heart apart, he quickly turned back, and soon made his way back to the river’s edge, where Gobi anxiously awaited his return. As he approached, Gobi's eyes brightened with hope, her tail wagging vigorously. Dion scooped her up into his arms, showering her with affectionate words. With newfound strength, Dion set off towards the river once again, determined to find a way for both of them to overcome the obstacle together.
Paragraph 2:
Crossing the broad river became an even tougher challenge with Gobi in his arms. Dion carefully stepped into the cold water, struggling to maintain his balance as Gobi nestled herself in his arms, acutely aware of the danger that surrounded them. Slowly and cautiously, Dion navigated the unpredictable riverbed, ensuring each step was solid. Together, they moved ahead, step by step. Finally, they reached the opposite bank. Gently placed on the ground, Gobi bounded around Dion, wagging her tail in celebration. He laughed and scooped her up again, planting a kiss on her furry head.
官方范文
One possible version:
Right now, listening to her barking as he left her behind nearly broke his heart. “Oh, fine!” Dion declared at last. Turning carefully, he started to make his way back. The second she saw him turn around, Gobi was on her feet, tail wagging furiously, her whimpers changing to happy barks. When he was close enough, Dion reached out one long arm and scooped Gobi up off the ground. Then he hugged her to his chest. The little dog lifted her head and licked his cheek, which tickled. Dion laughed. “Yeah, yeah, you’re welcome,” he told her.
This became tougher for Dion to cross the broad river. Before, Dion had kept his arms out for balance. Now one of them was holding Gobi instead. That meant he had only one arm free. He had to go even more slowly and more carefully. Through it all, Gobi was amazingly good. She didn't struggle. She didn't bark. She didn't whimper. She just snuggled up against his chest and watched as they slowly inched their way across the river. Once they reached the other side, Dion set her down. She quickly circled him, barking and wagging her tail.