2024届深圳高三下学期4月二模考试英语读后续写 从假设到道歉：学习语言的力量 讲义
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2024年深圳二模读后续写学案
From Assumptions to Apologies: Learning the Power of Words
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I didn’t like Del so much. He always called me the nickname “Germy,” which meant “dirty,” instead of my real name “Jamie.” Besides, he was known as a trouble-maker in school. So when the head teacher Mr. Smith asked Del to come to his office, I naturally thought that Del had done something mean to someone. Through the window, I caught sight of a smaller boy crying. Del seemed unhappy, too.
He did not return to class that day. All of us were discussing what had happened to him. What else could such an annoying boy do “He must have hit the boy and was sent home,” I whispered to my friends. Their eyes widened. It felt good to see them so interested in what I said.
The next morning, the whole school was talking about Del being expelled (开除) for beating up a kid. I was surprised that my assumptions were passed on so quickly. So when Del walked into the classroom, all the kids were shocked. The kids next to him shifted their desks away. “What’s your problem ” Del asked. “I don’t want you to attack me,” one kid said. Some laughed. “Yeah, I might,” said Del. I could tell he was joking, but many kids thought he admitted he did beat up someone.
During recess (课闻休息), Del tried to join the kickball game.“Neither team wants you,” one of the players said. “Why ” Del asked, looking confused. “I always play with you guys. They ignored him and went on playing. Del sat by himself while the rest of the school enjoyed their recess away from him. Del looked lonely and sad, much different from before. I started to feel sorry for him.
Later that day, I learned what really happened. The kid was Del’s little brother and he was crying because their mother fell ill and was sent to hospital. I felt even sorrier for what I said before, I started a rumor (谣言).
注意:
1.续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答
At recess the next day, I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game._________________________________________________________________________
Now that Del had forgiven me, I decided to do more before the recess was over.______________________________________________________________________
Part 1 Text Analysis and Appreciation (5Rs)
【写作任务分析】
该写作任务以叙述者“我”的观点和情感为中心，并通过叙述者的内心变化和与Del的互动来传达主要观点。叙述者一开始对Del有负面的看法，并通过错误的假设和传播谣言对他造成伤害。但叙述者在了解真相后感到内疚和愧疚，通过向Del道歉并解释自己的错误，最终实现和解和改变。文章强调了做出假设和传播谣言的负面后果，读者在文章中思考言语的影响力和责任，并明白言语可以用来伤害他人，但也可以用来修复关系和改变认知。
该写作任务创设了人与社会、良好的人际关系与社会交往的主题语境，传递宽容与理解、责任与言行一致、尊重与包容、反思与成长的价值观，强调了人际关系中的言语的影响力和责任。这对于当今校园暴力频发、利己的精英主义的现象有教育意义，鼓励青少年用积极的言辞建立良好的人际关系，反校园霸凌，反思自己的偏见，开放的心态对待他人，勇于承担责任和反思成长，促进个人成长和价值观的发展。
本题考查学生的文本理解能力和逻辑推理能力，引导学生根据文本的主题、情节和角色之间的因果关系合理进行文本分析和逻辑推理；考查学生衔接能力和表达能力，学生需要使用适当的语言来实现与原文内容、情感和语言的协同；考查学生道德判断能力和批判性思维，引导学生评估叙述者的偏见和错误，并思考如何对待他人、承担责任和做出积极的改变。
Step 1. Read for main characters
Narrator (Jamie): Initially “I” disliked Del due to Del’s teasing and troublesome behavior. “I” assumed Del hit the little boy and started a rumor. Later I empathized with him.
Del: Troublemaker, called the narrator “Germy.” Revealed to care for his brother and his mother.
Smaller Boy (Del’s little brother): Cried during Del’s meeting due to mother’s illness.
Classmates: Interested in rumors, avoided Del.
Kickball Players: Refused Del’s participation.
Mr. Smith: Head teacher.
Step 2. Read for plot and emotions
Step 3. Read for conflicts/problems
Problem: The narrator disliked Del and spread rumors based on assumptions, causing social isolation and misjudgment.
Resolution: The true reason behind Del’s brother’s tears was revealed, leading to a change in the narrator’s perspective and understanding the harm caused by their actions.
Step 4. Read for theme
The theme of this text can be empathy and the dangers of making assumptions. It explores the importance of understanding others’ perspectives, avoiding snap judgments, and recognizing the potential harm caused by spreading rumors based on incomplete information. The story highlights the need for empathy and compassion in our interactions with others.
Step 5. Read for languages
1. 语言简洁明了
文章使用简洁的语言表达，避免生词，避免冗长和复杂的句子结构，以便更清晰地传达故事的情节和情感。
2. 故事性语言文章使用描写性的语言来描述人物、场景和情感状态，以增强读者对故事的感受和想象力。例如，
非谓语结构补充情感状态 “Why ” Del asked, looking confused；
动作描写The kids next to him shifted their desks away体现孩子们对Del的孤立状态；
虚拟语气表示推断“He must have hit the boy and was sent home,” I whispered to my friends.
3. 直接引语加强冲突
文章中直接引语使得角色之间的交流更加生动和真实，同时促进情节的发展，强调“我”基于错误的假设传播谣言，加剧孩子们孤立Del的冲突。如“I don’t want you to attack me,” “Neither team wants you,”等。
4. 心理描写细腻通过第一人称叙述，读者能够深入主角的内心世界，了解叙述者的感受、想法和情绪变化。主角的内心独白使得读者可以亲身体验叙述者的心理过程；故事中使用恰当的词语和描述来表达主角的情感状态。例如，描述主角的初期不喜欢和后来的忏悔，通过具体的情感描写帮助读者更好地理解他们的内心感受。
5. 叙述性结构
按照时间顺序呈现事件的发展，使故事更易于理解和跟随。例如，在第一段第一和二句突出强调“我”对Del的不喜欢，为后文“我”的错误假设和散播谣言做铺垫。
Part 2 Thinking and Plot Weaving
Step 1. Design four key sentences and main plots
Follow the Action-Reaction principal, Conflict-Resolution principal and Negative-Positive principal, try to raise questions and complete the plot-weaving.
Step 2. Think about language use
无灵主语，饱满情绪
Guilt pushed me to him.Annoyance and surprise flickered across his face.His words soothed me.Whispers of astonishment spread.Soon the playground was filled with laughter and talks.
非谓语结构，增加细节
I apologized, daring not to look into his eyes.I stated, explaining what actually happened.
直接引语，语言协同（回应原文中的直接引语，实在是太妙了！）
“I’m sorry. I wish I had never said that,”“Del didn’t beat up anyone,”“Alright, Del, do you want to join my team ”“Yes, and I want Jamie on it, too!”
独立主格，语法多样
Del asked, his voice sounding more hurt than angry.
从句多样，语言协同
Seeing him isolated was also not what I wanted.（表语从句）I sat next to him and gradually uttered the whole thing about how my hasty assumption turned into such a terrible rumor.（宾语从句）I stated, explaining what actually happened.（宾语从句）
Part 3 Continuation and Sample
官方范文一
At recess the next day, I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game. I hated the nickname “Germy,” but seeing him isolated was also not what I wanted. Guilt pushed me to him. “What do you want, Germy ” Del asked, his voice sounding more hurt than angry. I sat next to him and gradually uttered the whole thing about how my hasty assumption turned into such a terrible rumor. “I’m sorry. I wish I had never said that,” I apologized, daring not to look into his eyes. Annoyance and surprise flickered across his face. But seconds later, he lowered his head and said quietly, “It’s okay. I guess I wasn’t very nice to you, either.” His words soothed me, but I could feel he was still sad. (114词)
Now that Del had forgiven me, I decided to do more before the recess was over. I walked towards the kickball players and called for their attention. Everyone stopped in surprise. “Del didn’t beat up anyone,” I stated, explaining what actually happened. Whispers of astonishment spread and finally one player shouted, “Alright, Del, do you want to join my team ” A smile broke through Del’s gloomy face, “Yes, and I want Jamie on it, too!” He glanced at me shyly, and I could tell his use of my real name was his way of making an apology. Soon the playground was filled with laughter and talks. But this time they made me realize something—words have the power to hurt and heal. (106词)
官方范文二
At recess the next day, I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game. I walked up to him, so nervous that I could hardly talk. “Hey,” I said. “What do you want, Germy ” Del said impatiently without taking his eyes off the game. I could feel something in his voice sounded more hurt than angry. I summoned up my courage and explained to him the whole story. Surprised and angry, Del looked at me with an unbelievable look. “I will tell everyone the truth,” I promised. Del’s face softened a bit. “Okay, Jamie. I owe you an apology too, he said with a shrug. It was the first time he’d used my real name. I almost smiled. I knew I had done the right thing. (111词)
Now that Del had forgiven me, I decided to do more before recess was over. The game was still going on. I approached the players and asked them to stop for a moment. Everyone, including Del, was surprised. “Guys, I am sorry, but I got something to say.” I admitted that it was I who started the rumor. “Del didn’t beat up anyone, I said. Upon hearing this, the players were confused for a brief moment but soon figured out what had really happened. “Hey, welcome back,” They waved to Del. Del nodded willingly, with a happy look back to his face. Seeing Del playing the game vigorously, I finally felt relieved that I eventually mended a big mistake. (109词)
下水作文
At recess the next day, I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game. Ashamed and embarrassed, I was sitting on pins and needles. I should have grasped the full picture before speaking about Del. Blaming myself, I finally summoned up my courage and approached Del inch by inch. At the sight of me, Del beamed with a mixture of surprise and confusion. “Sorry, Del. It was I who spread the rumor that you hit the little boy.” I lowered my head and whispered to Del. It seemed ages as I waited for Del’s response. Unexpectedly, Del didn’t fly into a rage but grinned from ear to ear. Hearing his laughter and calling my real name as a way of apology, I held my head up, met his gaze and understood the tension had been dissolved. (122词)
Now that Del had forgiven me, I decided to do more before recess was over. Swift as an arrow, I borrowed a whistle from the classroom and blew it with all my might. Reluctant as everyone was, they stopped and gathered around me and Del out of curiosity. Later came my sincere apology and detailed explanation about Del and his little brother. A ripple of relief surged through me after I finished my announcement. Meanwhile, to my surprise, thunderous applause erupted, a heartfelt recognition of my honesty and a symbol of acceptance and welcoming for Del. Remorseful eyes turned towards Del, expressing apologies and inviting him to enjoy the recess together. Witnessing the gloomy clouds dissipate and Del’s spirits soar, I eagerly joined the group during recess, armed with newfound insight and a determination to refrain from starting rumors based on superficial impressions. (128词)
下水作文点评
内容协同
本篇试水作文内容上体现关键的情节和事件，如主角向Del承认错误、Del的反应和接受、Del对取外号的歉意、主角向全班做出解释和道歉，以及全班对Del的接纳和欢迎等。这些内容与原文相互呼应，解决冲突，构成了整个故事的连贯性和一致性。
情感协同
本篇试水作文通过描写主角的羞愧和内疚，以及Del的惊讶和喜悦，传达了情感的转变和和解的过程。读者可以感受到主角的内心波动和Del的宽容，以及最终获得的情感解脱和愉悦。
主题协同
本篇试水作文通过理解和宽容来消除偏见和谣言，并实现情感的转变和人际关系的改善。段落中的行动和对话都与这一主题相呼应，强化了故事的中心思想。
语言协同
本篇试水作文延续原文形象生动的语言风格，在语言表达方面精炼和生动。通过使用形象的形容词和动作描写，如 “ashamed and embarrased” “approached Del inch by inch” “a ripple of relief” “fly into a rage” “thunderous applause” “Witnessing the gloomy clouds dissipate”等，增强了情感描写的力度，让读者更加投入和感受到故事的情节和情感变化。
From Assumptions to Apologies: Learning the Power of Words
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I didn’t like Del so much. He always called me the nickname “Germy,” which meant “dirty,” instead of my real name “Jamie.” Besides, he was known as a trouble-maker in school. So when the head teacher Mr. Smith asked Del to come to his office, I naturally thought that Del had done something mean to someone. Through the window, I caught sight of a smaller boy crying. Del seemed unhappy, too.
He did not return to class that day. All of us were discussing what had happened to him. What else could such an annoying boy do “He must have hit the boy and was sent home,” I whispered to my friends. Their eyes widened. It felt good to see them so interested in what I said.
The next morning, the whole school was talking about Del being expelled (开除) for beating up a kid. I was surprised that my assumptions were passed on so quickly. So when Del walked into the classroom, all the kids were shocked. The kids next to him shifted their desks away. “What’s your problem ” Del asked. “I don’t want you to attack me,” one kid said. Some laughed. “Yeah, I might,” said Del. I could tell he was joking, but many kids thought he admitted he did beat up someone.
During recess (课闻休息), Del tried to join the kickball game.“Neither team wants you,” one of the players said. “Why ” Del asked, looking confused. “I always play with you guys. They ignored him and went on playing. Del sat by himself while the rest of the school enjoyed their recess away from him. Del looked lonely and sad, much different from before. I started to feel sorry for him.
Later that day, I learned what really happened. The kid was Del’s little brother and he was crying because their mother fell ill and was sent to hospital. I felt even sorrier for what I said before, I started a rumor (谣言).
注意:
1.续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答
At recess the next day, I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game._________________________________________________________________________
Now that Del had forgiven me, I decided to do more before the recess was over.______________________________________________________________________
Part 1 Text Analysis and Appreciation (5Rs)
【写作任务分析】
该写作任务以叙述者“我”的观点和情感为中心，并通过叙述者的内心变化和与Del的互动来传达主要观点。叙述者一开始对Del有负面的看法，并通过错误的假设和传播谣言对他造成伤害。但叙述者在了解真相后感到内疚和愧疚，通过向Del道歉并解释自己的错误，最终实现和解和改变。文章强调了做出假设和传播谣言的负面后果，读者在文章中思考言语的影响力和责任，并明白言语可以用来伤害他人，但也可以用来修复关系和改变认知。
该写作任务创设了人与社会、良好的人际关系与社会交往的主题语境，传递宽容与理解、责任与言行一致、尊重与包容、反思与成长的价值观，强调了人际关系中的言语的影响力和责任。这对于当今校园暴力频发、利己的精英主义的现象有教育意义，鼓励青少年用积极的言辞建立良好的人际关系，反校园霸凌，反思自己的偏见，开放的心态对待他人，勇于承担责任和反思成长，促进个人成长和价值观的发展。
本题考查学生的文本理解能力和逻辑推理能力，引导学生根据文本的主题、情节和角色之间的因果关系合理进行文本分析和逻辑推理；考查学生衔接能力和表达能力，学生需要使用适当的语言来实现与原文内容、情感和语言的协同；考查学生道德判断能力和批判性思维，引导学生评估叙述者的偏见和错误，并思考如何对待他人、承担责任和做出积极的改变。
Step 1. Read for main characters
Narrator (Jamie): Initially “I” disliked Del due to Del’s teasing and troublesome behavior. “I” assumed Del hit the little boy and started a rumor. Later I empathized with him.
Del: Troublemaker, called the narrator “Germy.” Revealed to care for his brother and his mother.
Smaller Boy (Del’s little brother): Cried during Del’s meeting due to mother’s illness.
Classmates: Interested in rumors, avoided Del.
Kickball Players: Refused Del’s participation.
Mr. Smith: Head teacher.
Step 2. Read for plot and emotions
Step 3. Read for conflicts/problems
Problem: The narrator disliked Del and spread rumors based on assumptions, causing social isolation and misjudgment.
Resolution: The true reason behind Del’s brother’s tears was revealed, leading to a change in the narrator’s perspective and understanding the harm caused by their actions.
Step 4. Read for theme
The theme of this text can be empathy and the dangers of making assumptions. It explores the importance of understanding others’ perspectives, avoiding snap judgments, and recognizing the potential harm caused by spreading rumors based on incomplete information. The story highlights the need for empathy and compassion in our interactions with others.
Step 5. Read for languages
1. 语言简洁明了
文章使用简洁的语言表达，避免生词，避免冗长和复杂的句子结构，以便更清晰地传达故事的情节和情感。
2. 故事性语言文章使用描写性的语言来描述人物、场景和情感状态，以增强读者对故事的感受和想象力。例如，
非谓语结构补充情感状态 “Why ” Del asked, looking confused；
动作描写The kids next to him shifted their desks away体现孩子们对Del的孤立状态；
虚拟语气表示推断“He must have hit the boy and was sent home,” I whispered to my friends.
3. 直接引语加强冲突
文章中直接引语使得角色之间的交流更加生动和真实，同时促进情节的发展，强调“我”基于错误的假设传播谣言，加剧孩子们孤立Del的冲突。如“I don’t want you to attack me,” “Neither team wants you,”等。
4. 心理描写细腻通过第一人称叙述，读者能够深入主角的内心世界，了解叙述者的感受、想法和情绪变化。主角的内心独白使得读者可以亲身体验叙述者的心理过程；故事中使用恰当的词语和描述来表达主角的情感状态。例如，描述主角的初期不喜欢和后来的忏悔，通过具体的情感描写帮助读者更好地理解他们的内心感受。
5. 叙述性结构
按照时间顺序呈现事件的发展，使故事更易于理解和跟随。例如，在第一段第一和二句突出强调“我”对Del的不喜欢，为后文“我”的错误假设和散播谣言做铺垫。
Part 2 Thinking and Plot Weaving
Step 1. Design four key sentences and main plots
Follow the Action-Reaction principal, Conflict-Resolution principal and Negative-Positive principal, try to raise questions and complete the plot-weaving.
Step 2. Think about language use
无灵主语，饱满情绪
Guilt pushed me to him.Annoyance and surprise flickered across his face.His words soothed me.Whispers of astonishment spread.Soon the playground was filled with laughter and talks.
非谓语结构，增加细节
I apologized, daring not to look into his eyes.I stated, explaining what actually happened.
直接引语，语言协同（回应原文中的直接引语，实在是太妙了！）
“I’m sorry. I wish I had never said that,”“Del didn’t beat up anyone,”“Alright, Del, do you want to join my team ”“Yes, and I want Jamie on it, too!”
独立主格，语法多样
Del asked, his voice sounding more hurt than angry.
从句多样，语言协同
Seeing him isolated was also not what I wanted.（表语从句）I sat next to him and gradually uttered the whole thing about how my hasty assumption turned into such a terrible rumor.（宾语从句）I stated, explaining what actually happened.（宾语从句）
Part 3 Continuation and Sample
官方范文一
At recess the next day, I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game. I hated the nickname “Germy,” but seeing him isolated was also not what I wanted. Guilt pushed me to him. “What do you want, Germy ” Del asked, his voice sounding more hurt than angry. I sat next to him and gradually uttered the whole thing about how my hasty assumption turned into such a terrible rumor. “I’m sorry. I wish I had never said that,” I apologized, daring not to look into his eyes. Annoyance and surprise flickered across his face. But seconds later, he lowered his head and said quietly, “It’s okay. I guess I wasn’t very nice to you, either.” His words soothed me, but I could feel he was still sad. (114词)
Now that Del had forgiven me, I decided to do more before the recess was over. I walked towards the kickball players and called for their attention. Everyone stopped in surprise. “Del didn’t beat up anyone,” I stated, explaining what actually happened. Whispers of astonishment spread and finally one player shouted, “Alright, Del, do you want to join my team ” A smile broke through Del’s gloomy face, “Yes, and I want Jamie on it, too!” He glanced at me shyly, and I could tell his use of my real name was his way of making an apology. Soon the playground was filled with laughter and talks. But this time they made me realize something—words have the power to hurt and heal. (106词)
官方范文二
At recess the next day, I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game. I walked up to him, so nervous that I could hardly talk. “Hey,” I said. “What do you want, Germy ” Del said impatiently without taking his eyes off the game. I could feel something in his voice sounded more hurt than angry. I summoned up my courage and explained to him the whole story. Surprised and angry, Del looked at me with an unbelievable look. “I will tell everyone the truth,” I promised. Del’s face softened a bit. “Okay, Jamie. I owe you an apology too, he said with a shrug. It was the first time he’d used my real name. I almost smiled. I knew I had done the right thing. (111词)
Now that Del had forgiven me, I decided to do more before recess was over. The game was still going on. I approached the players and asked them to stop for a moment. Everyone, including Del, was surprised. “Guys, I am sorry, but I got something to say.” I admitted that it was I who started the rumor. “Del didn’t beat up anyone, I said. Upon hearing this, the players were confused for a brief moment but soon figured out what had really happened. “Hey, welcome back,” They waved to Del. Del nodded willingly, with a happy look back to his face. Seeing Del playing the game vigorously, I finally felt relieved that I eventually mended a big mistake. (109词)
下水作文
At recess the next day, I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game. Ashamed and embarrassed, I was sitting on pins and needles. I should have grasped the full picture before speaking about Del. Blaming myself, I finally summoned up my courage and approached Del inch by inch. At the sight of me, Del beamed with a mixture of surprise and confusion. “Sorry, Del. It was I who spread the rumor that you hit the little boy.” I lowered my head and whispered to Del. It seemed ages as I waited for Del’s response. Unexpectedly, Del didn’t fly into a rage but grinned from ear to ear. Hearing his laughter and calling my real name as a way of apology, I held my head up, met his gaze and understood the tension had been dissolved. (122词)
Now that Del had forgiven me, I decided to do more before recess was over. Swift as an arrow, I borrowed a whistle from the classroom and blew it with all my might. Reluctant as everyone was, they stopped and gathered around me and Del out of curiosity. Later came my sincere apology and detailed explanation about Del and his little brother. A ripple of relief surged through me after I finished my announcement. Meanwhile, to my surprise, thunderous applause erupted, a heartfelt recognition of my honesty and a symbol of acceptance and welcoming for Del. Remorseful eyes turned towards Del, expressing apologies and inviting him to enjoy the recess together. Witnessing the gloomy clouds dissipate and Del’s spirits soar, I eagerly joined the group during recess, armed with newfound insight and a determination to refrain from starting rumors based on superficial impressions. (128词)
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内容协同
本篇试水作文内容上体现关键的情节和事件，如主角向Del承认错误、Del的反应和接受、Del对取外号的歉意、主角向全班做出解释和道歉，以及全班对Del的接纳和欢迎等。这些内容与原文相互呼应，解决冲突，构成了整个故事的连贯性和一致性。
情感协同
本篇试水作文通过描写主角的羞愧和内疚，以及Del的惊讶和喜悦，传达了情感的转变和和解的过程。读者可以感受到主角的内心波动和Del的宽容，以及最终获得的情感解脱和愉悦。
主题协同
本篇试水作文通过理解和宽容来消除偏见和谣言，并实现情感的转变和人际关系的改善。段落中的行动和对话都与这一主题相呼应，强化了故事的中心思想。
语言协同
本篇试水作文延续原文形象生动的语言风格，在语言表达方面精炼和生动。通过使用形象的形容词和动作描写，如 “ashamed and embarrased” “approached Del inch by inch” “a ripple of relief” “fly into a rage” “thunderous applause” “Witnessing the gloomy clouds dissipate”等，增强了情感描写的力度，让读者更加投入和感受到故事的情节和情感变化。