2024届高三下学期英语作文复习专项读后续写：多事之夏 课件-(共23张PPT)
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读后续写：多事之夏
1.I knew I would have a beyond-busy summer.I would be a junior teacher for the Little Dragons Karate (空手道)Camp.AndI had to do summer swim team.And Ollie and I already had two customers for our dog-walking business.
2.“You might be biting off more than you can chew,”my mom said with a warning glimpse when I talked to her about it andannounced,“I want to do everything!”
3.“Don't worry."I grinned."I have strong teeth!”
4.My mom smiled back.“In this case,it's your organizational skills,not your teeth,that need to be strong."I didn't take it tomy heart.
5.And the first week really was no problem.My friend Ollie was out of town and karate camp hadn't started,so my swimstuff was all I needed to worry about.The next week was great too.I swam,and a Little Dragon at karate camp told me I washis favorite teacher ever!
6.I did learn,though,that staying organized with two activities was harder.My backpack was already stuffed with a towel andswim things,so I needed another for my karate clothing.Riding my bike from karate camp to the pool with two backpackswas a challenge.But I still had it under control until Ollie got back.
7."We're late getting our business together!"he said."We'll have to spend every spare minute preparing."
8.“But I don't have any spare minutes!”I said.
9.“Did you forget we agreed to walk Alfie every Saturday And Muffin on Tuesdays at 4:00 ”Ollie asked.I couldn't let Olliedown,so I took out a third backpack and filled it with dog toys,treats,and plastic bags.I thought I was all set.
10.But I was wrong!It didn't take long for my dog-walking stuff and karate stuff and swim stuff to get all mixed up,forgotten,or lost.One day,I forgot my karate backpack and had to borrow Emma's extra outfit,which was too tight.The next day,Iremembered my karate stuff but forgot my swimsuit,so I had to help out in the snack shop and stay out of the pool allafternoon.And another time,when I reached into my dog-walking pack for plastic bags,all I could find were swimgoggles(护目镜)and sunscreen.
Paragraph 1:Worse still,I had to keep track of all the special times.
Paragraph 2:Luckily,l,with my parents,came up with a solution to get organized.
1.两段的首句衔接不到位
2.缺少人物的情绪变化描写
3.情节构思单一
4.主题没有升华
5.语言缺少准确性和丰富性
缺少与原文的协同
Activity1 READ FOR 6T
Settings
Characters
协同效应 Emotional changes&plot
6T Theme
Language features
exceedingly busy summer
1. I knew I would have a beyond-busy summer. I would be a junior teacher for the Little Dragons Karate(空手道) Camp.And I had to do summer swim team.And Ollie and I already had two customers for our dog-walking business.
2."You might be biting off more than you can chew贪多嚼不烂:"my mom said with awarning glimpse when I talked to her about it and announced,"I want to doeverything!"
3.“Don't worry."I grinned."I have strong teeth!”
4.My mom smiled back."In this case,it's your organizational skills,notyour teeth,that need to be strong."I didn t take it to my hear.
5.And the first week really was no problem.My friend Ollie was out oftown and karate camp hadn't started,so my swim stuff was all I needed toworry about.The next week was great too.I swam,and a Little Dragon atkarate camp told me I was his favorite teacher ever!
6.I did learn,though,that staying organized with two activities was harder.My backpack was already stuffed with a towel and swim things,so I
needed another for my karate clothing.Riding my bike from karate camp tothe pool with two backpacks was a challenge.But I still had it undercontrol until Ollie got back.
7.“We're late getting our business together!"he said."We'll have to spendevery spare minute preparing."
8.“But I don't have any spare minutes!”I said.
9.“Did you forget we agreed to walk Alfie every Saturday And Muffin on Tuesdays at 4:00 ”Ollie asked.I couldn't letOllie down, so I took out a third backpack and filled it withdog toys,treats,and plastic bags.I thought I was all set.Made full preparations，
10.But I was wrong!It didn't take long for my dog-walkingstuff and karate stuff and swim stuff to get all mixed up,forgotten,or lost.One day, I forgot my karate backpack andhad to borrow Emma's extra outfit, which was too tight.Thenext day,I remembered my karate stuff but forgot my swimsuiso I had to help out in the snack shop and stay out of the poolall afternoon.And another time,when I reached into my dog-walking pack for plastic bags,all I could find were swim goggles(护目镜)and sunscreen.
How to convey the theme
tip 1:T consist with characters(角色协同)
tip2: consist with key words(线索词协同)
1. I learned an important lesson:If you tried to use the dog's rope as your karate belt,it's time to improve your organizational skill
2.It was a valuable lesson in time management and organization that would serve me well not just during that busy summer but also in my future endeavors.
3. From then on,my beyond-busy summer was smooth sailing, during which l learned a valuable lesson:If you tried to use the dog's rope as your karate belt,it's time to improve your organizationa skill.
4.While it wasn't flawless,it was indeed a beginning,and it
significantly aided in managing my bustling summer schedule withless stress and more success.
THEME
1.My mom said with a warning glimpse when I talked to herabout it.With结构
2.I did learn,though,that staying organized with twoactivities was harder.
3.Riding my bike from karate camp to the pool with twobackpacks was a challenge.非谓语结构
4.But I still had it under control until Ollie got back.Until状从
5.It didn't take long for my dog-walking stuff and karate stuffand swim stuff to get all mixed up,forgotten,or lost. It句型
6.One day,I forgot my karate backpack and had to borrowEmma's extra outfit,which was too tight.定从
7.When I reached into my dog-walking pack for plastic bags,all l could find were swim goggles(护目镜)and sunscreen.
名从
Activity 2 design the plots using 321
para.1 Worse still,I had to keep track of all the special times.
衔接句1
过渡句1
衔接句2
para.2:Luckily,I,withmy parents,came upwitha solutionto get organized
衔接句3
过渡句2
主题1
1.Riding my bike from karate camp to the pool with two backpacks was a challenge.
2.we agreed to walk Alfie every Saturday And Muffin on Tuesdays at 4:00
3.stay out of the pool all afternoon.
Karate camp
teacher Swimmer Dog-walker
Before the
swimming
practice In the afternoon walk Alfie every SaturdaylWalk Muffin on Tuesdays at 4:00
微场景1 如何表达崩溃/不知所措
I ran around like a chicken with its head off, on the verge of breaking down.
l flopped onto the couch at the end of a particularly discombobulated day and cried.I was so restless and nervous as if I had ants in my pants.
Desperate to go out of this sea of chaos,I had to turn to my parents for help. It felt like a never-ending juggling act,and I was dropping more and more balls.It felt like I was constantly playing catch-up,and it was starting to take a toll on myperformance and my sanity.
I had been thrown in a whirlpool of despair.
微场景2 如何表达后悔
Remorse crowded my heart.
A surge of regret welled up in my body.
If only I had taken my mom's warning seriously.
Had I taken my mom's warning seriously,I wouldn't have been thrown in a whirlpool ofdespair.
wish+I had done sth.宾语从句I shouldn't have done本不该I needn'thave done本不必
Problem1:Fail to manage time properly
1创建了1.created a detailed schedule that included all my tasks
2.每日计划2.Set up a color-coded schedule on a daily planner APP
3.使用计划used a planner to write down all the important datesand times
Problem2:Mix up backpacks
1.each backpack marked clearly with labels for easy identification.
2.Each activity had a different color:blue forswimming,black for karate,and brown for dog-walking
3.We put a whiteboard in the kitchen to make sure that I tookthe right bag on the appropriate day.
点评
1.卷面不清、书写潦草
2.内容上未达到角色的情绪、情节、主题协同，以及第一段
和第二段的首句衔接不到位，内容上未体现special times和solutions.
3.语言准确性和丰富性欠缺。
点评
1.卷面较清楚，但涂改过多。
2.内容上6T协同基本做到，但不够充分。
3.第一段和第二段的首句衔接不到位，内容上未体现specialtimes和solutions.
4.语言上虽有一些心理描写和动作描写，但缺乏高级词汇。
点评
1.卷面较清楚。
2.内容上6T协同完成，3句衔接句都衔接到位，内容上体现了solutions,但未体现special times
3.语言协同佳，兼具准确性和丰富性，情绪描写的语言细腻，用词精准如weary,suffocated,struggled, whistled,glimpsed,ruffled,修辞手法如like a massive slap,语法结构如形容词作状语、介词结构under、非谓语结构。
4.最后一句借助线索词实现了主题协同。
下水作文
Worse still,I had to keep track of all the special times. Karate camp had specifand end times,swim team practice was at a different time each day。 Appointments were scattered throughout the week. It was becoming overwhelming to juggieall these commitments and remember when and where I needed to be.There were timeswhen I showed up late or even missed some important events because I got confused with the schedules. It felt like I was constantly playing catch-up, and it was starting to take a tollon my performance and my sanity. Desperate to go out of this sea of chaos,I had to turn to my parents for help.
Luckily,I,with my parents,came up with a solution to get organized.We created adetailed schedule that included all my activities and their respective timings.We color-coded each backpack to make it visually easier to distinguish.I also started using a plannerto write down all the important dates and times. This way,I could easily see what I had toprioritize and plan my day accordingly.My parents also offered to help me with some extraresponsibilities like packing my bags and preparing the necessary equipment for each activity.With this new system in place,I no longer had to worry about forgetting or losing things, and I felt more confident and in control of my busy schedule.It was a valuable lesson in time management and organization that would serve me well not just during thatbusy summer but also in my future endeavors.
参考范文1
Worse still,I had to keep track of all the special times.I had to arrive earlykarate test on Monday. I had to stay later to help with swimming pool cleanup on had to pick up Alfie 15 minutes early on Saturday. I had to walk Muffin on Tuesday afternoons.I ran around like a chicken with its head off, on the verge of breaking down.Itwas then that I recalled my mother's warning. Although embarrassed beyond words,Iworked up the nerve and walked to my parents,making a clean breast of my trouble and calling for backup.
Luckily, I, with my parents,came up with a solution to get organized.We started with acalendar,on which I marked all my tasks with a red marker.Then we found three bagsrespectively used for my dog-walking stuff,karate stuff and swim stuff.We also put awhiteboard in the kitchen to make sure that I took the right bag on the appropriate day.From then on,my beyond-busy summer was smooth sailing, during which I learned avaluable lesson: If you tried to use the dog's rope as your karate belt, it's time to improveyour organizational skill.
参考范文2
Worse still, I had to keep track of all the special times.I had to arrive earlykarate test on Monday.I had to stay later to help with swimming pool cleanup on had to pick up Alfie 15 minutes early on Saturday. My life was a catastrophe.Admitting Iwas wrong was never my favorite thing,but I knew I had to make a change."Help!"Iflopped onto the couch at the end of a particularly discombobulated day and cried,“Everything's everywhere and nothing's anywhere and I keep being late and messing up.”In this way I succeeded in catching my parents'eyes.
Luckily, I, with my parents,came up with a solution to get organized.We started with adaily pocket calendar that had room to write all my tasks.Then we found three drawstringbags that fitted into one big backpack,so I could keep my stuff separated but still in oneplace.We also put a whiteboard in the kitchen with brightly colored reminders and achecklist to make sure I had everything I needed.From then on, my beyond-busy summerwas smooth sailing.I learned an important lesson:If you tried to use the dog's rope as yourkarate belt,it's time to improve your organizational skill.
读后续写：多事之夏
1.I knew I would have a beyond-busy summer.I would be a junior teacher for the Little Dragons Karate (空手道)Camp.AndI had to do summer swim team.And Ollie and I already had two customers for our dog-walking business.
2.“You might be biting off more than you can chew,”my mom said with a warning glimpse when I talked to her about it andannounced,“I want to do everything!”
3.“Don't worry."I grinned."I have strong teeth!”
4.My mom smiled back.“In this case,it's your organizational skills,not your teeth,that need to be strong."I didn't take it tomy heart.
5.And the first week really was no problem.My friend Ollie was out of town and karate camp hadn't started,so my swimstuff was all I needed to worry about.The next week was great too.I swam,and a Little Dragon at karate camp told me I washis favorite teacher ever!
6.I did learn,though,that staying organized with two activities was harder.My backpack was already stuffed with a towel andswim things,so I needed another for my karate clothing.Riding my bike from karate camp to the pool with two backpackswas a challenge.But I still had it under control until Ollie got back.
7."We're late getting our business together!"he said."We'll have to spend every spare minute preparing."
8.“But I don't have any spare minutes!”I said.
9.“Did you forget we agreed to walk Alfie every Saturday And Muffin on Tuesdays at 4:00 ”Ollie asked.I couldn't let Olliedown,so I took out a third backpack and filled it with dog toys,treats,and plastic bags.I thought I was all set.
10.But I was wrong!It didn't take long for my dog-walking stuff and karate stuff and swim stuff to get all mixed up,forgotten,or lost.One day,I forgot my karate backpack and had to borrow Emma's extra outfit,which was too tight.The next day,Iremembered my karate stuff but forgot my swimsuit,so I had to help out in the snack shop and stay out of the pool allafternoon.And another time,when I reached into my dog-walking pack for plastic bags,all I could find were swimgoggles(护目镜)and sunscreen.
Paragraph 1:Worse still,I had to keep track of all the special times.
Paragraph 2:Luckily,l,with my parents,came up with a solution to get organized.
1.两段的首句衔接不到位
2.缺少人物的情绪变化描写
3.情节构思单一
4.主题没有升华
5.语言缺少准确性和丰富性
缺少与原文的协同
Activity1 READ FOR 6T
Settings
Characters
协同效应 Emotional changes&plot
6T Theme
Language features
exceedingly busy summer
1. I knew I would have a beyond-busy summer. I would be a junior teacher for the Little Dragons Karate(空手道) Camp.And I had to do summer swim team.And Ollie and I already had two customers for our dog-walking business.
2."You might be biting off more than you can chew贪多嚼不烂:"my mom said with awarning glimpse when I talked to her about it and announced,"I want to doeverything!"
3.“Don't worry."I grinned."I have strong teeth!”
4.My mom smiled back."In this case,it's your organizational skills,notyour teeth,that need to be strong."I didn t take it to my hear.
5.And the first week really was no problem.My friend Ollie was out oftown and karate camp hadn't started,so my swim stuff was all I needed toworry about.The next week was great too.I swam,and a Little Dragon atkarate camp told me I was his favorite teacher ever!
6.I did learn,though,that staying organized with two activities was harder.My backpack was already stuffed with a towel and swim things,so I
needed another for my karate clothing.Riding my bike from karate camp tothe pool with two backpacks was a challenge.But I still had it undercontrol until Ollie got back.
7.“We're late getting our business together!"he said."We'll have to spendevery spare minute preparing."
8.“But I don't have any spare minutes!”I said.
9.“Did you forget we agreed to walk Alfie every Saturday And Muffin on Tuesdays at 4:00 ”Ollie asked.I couldn't letOllie down, so I took out a third backpack and filled it withdog toys,treats,and plastic bags.I thought I was all set.Made full preparations，
10.But I was wrong!It didn't take long for my dog-walkingstuff and karate stuff and swim stuff to get all mixed up,forgotten,or lost.One day, I forgot my karate backpack andhad to borrow Emma's extra outfit, which was too tight.Thenext day,I remembered my karate stuff but forgot my swimsuiso I had to help out in the snack shop and stay out of the poolall afternoon.And another time,when I reached into my dog-walking pack for plastic bags,all I could find were swim goggles(护目镜)and sunscreen.
How to convey the theme
tip 1:T consist with characters(角色协同)
tip2: consist with key words(线索词协同)
1. I learned an important lesson:If you tried to use the dog's rope as your karate belt,it's time to improve your organizational skill
2.It was a valuable lesson in time management and organization that would serve me well not just during that busy summer but also in my future endeavors.
3. From then on,my beyond-busy summer was smooth sailing, during which l learned a valuable lesson:If you tried to use the dog's rope as your karate belt,it's time to improve your organizationa skill.
4.While it wasn't flawless,it was indeed a beginning,and it
significantly aided in managing my bustling summer schedule withless stress and more success.
THEME
1.My mom said with a warning glimpse when I talked to herabout it.With结构
2.I did learn,though,that staying organized with twoactivities was harder.
3.Riding my bike from karate camp to the pool with twobackpacks was a challenge.非谓语结构
4.But I still had it under control until Ollie got back.Until状从
5.It didn't take long for my dog-walking stuff and karate stuffand swim stuff to get all mixed up,forgotten,or lost. It句型
6.One day,I forgot my karate backpack and had to borrowEmma's extra outfit,which was too tight.定从
7.When I reached into my dog-walking pack for plastic bags,all l could find were swim goggles(护目镜)and sunscreen.
名从
Activity 2 design the plots using 321
para.1 Worse still,I had to keep track of all the special times.
衔接句1
过渡句1
衔接句2
para.2:Luckily,I,withmy parents,came upwitha solutionto get organized
衔接句3
过渡句2
主题1
1.Riding my bike from karate camp to the pool with two backpacks was a challenge.
2.we agreed to walk Alfie every Saturday And Muffin on Tuesdays at 4:00
3.stay out of the pool all afternoon.
Karate camp
teacher Swimmer Dog-walker
Before the
swimming
practice In the afternoon walk Alfie every SaturdaylWalk Muffin on Tuesdays at 4:00
微场景1 如何表达崩溃/不知所措
I ran around like a chicken with its head off, on the verge of breaking down.
l flopped onto the couch at the end of a particularly discombobulated day and cried.I was so restless and nervous as if I had ants in my pants.
Desperate to go out of this sea of chaos,I had to turn to my parents for help. It felt like a never-ending juggling act,and I was dropping more and more balls.It felt like I was constantly playing catch-up,and it was starting to take a toll on myperformance and my sanity.
I had been thrown in a whirlpool of despair.
微场景2 如何表达后悔
Remorse crowded my heart.
A surge of regret welled up in my body.
If only I had taken my mom's warning seriously.
Had I taken my mom's warning seriously,I wouldn't have been thrown in a whirlpool ofdespair.
wish+I had done sth.宾语从句I shouldn't have done本不该I needn'thave done本不必
Problem1:Fail to manage time properly
1创建了1.created a detailed schedule that included all my tasks
2.每日计划2.Set up a color-coded schedule on a daily planner APP
3.使用计划used a planner to write down all the important datesand times
Problem2:Mix up backpacks
1.each backpack marked clearly with labels for easy identification.
2.Each activity had a different color:blue forswimming,black for karate,and brown for dog-walking
3.We put a whiteboard in the kitchen to make sure that I tookthe right bag on the appropriate day.
点评
1.卷面不清、书写潦草
2.内容上未达到角色的情绪、情节、主题协同，以及第一段
和第二段的首句衔接不到位，内容上未体现special times和solutions.
3.语言准确性和丰富性欠缺。
点评
1.卷面较清楚，但涂改过多。
2.内容上6T协同基本做到，但不够充分。
3.第一段和第二段的首句衔接不到位，内容上未体现specialtimes和solutions.
4.语言上虽有一些心理描写和动作描写，但缺乏高级词汇。
点评
1.卷面较清楚。
2.内容上6T协同完成，3句衔接句都衔接到位，内容上体现了solutions,但未体现special times
3.语言协同佳，兼具准确性和丰富性，情绪描写的语言细腻，用词精准如weary,suffocated,struggled, whistled,glimpsed,ruffled,修辞手法如like a massive slap,语法结构如形容词作状语、介词结构under、非谓语结构。
4.最后一句借助线索词实现了主题协同。
下水作文
Worse still,I had to keep track of all the special times. Karate camp had specifand end times,swim team practice was at a different time each day。 Appointments were scattered throughout the week. It was becoming overwhelming to juggieall these commitments and remember when and where I needed to be.There were timeswhen I showed up late or even missed some important events because I got confused with the schedules. It felt like I was constantly playing catch-up, and it was starting to take a tollon my performance and my sanity. Desperate to go out of this sea of chaos,I had to turn to my parents for help.
Luckily,I,with my parents,came up with a solution to get organized.We created adetailed schedule that included all my activities and their respective timings.We color-coded each backpack to make it visually easier to distinguish.I also started using a plannerto write down all the important dates and times. This way,I could easily see what I had toprioritize and plan my day accordingly.My parents also offered to help me with some extraresponsibilities like packing my bags and preparing the necessary equipment for each activity.With this new system in place,I no longer had to worry about forgetting or losing things, and I felt more confident and in control of my busy schedule.It was a valuable lesson in time management and organization that would serve me well not just during thatbusy summer but also in my future endeavors.
参考范文1
Worse still,I had to keep track of all the special times.I had to arrive earlykarate test on Monday. I had to stay later to help with swimming pool cleanup on had to pick up Alfie 15 minutes early on Saturday. I had to walk Muffin on Tuesday afternoons.I ran around like a chicken with its head off, on the verge of breaking down.Itwas then that I recalled my mother's warning. Although embarrassed beyond words,Iworked up the nerve and walked to my parents,making a clean breast of my trouble and calling for backup.
Luckily, I, with my parents,came up with a solution to get organized.We started with acalendar,on which I marked all my tasks with a red marker.Then we found three bagsrespectively used for my dog-walking stuff,karate stuff and swim stuff.We also put awhiteboard in the kitchen to make sure that I took the right bag on the appropriate day.From then on,my beyond-busy summer was smooth sailing, during which I learned avaluable lesson: If you tried to use the dog's rope as your karate belt, it's time to improveyour organizational skill.
参考范文2
Worse still, I had to keep track of all the special times.I had to arrive earlykarate test on Monday.I had to stay later to help with swimming pool cleanup on had to pick up Alfie 15 minutes early on Saturday. My life was a catastrophe.Admitting Iwas wrong was never my favorite thing,but I knew I had to make a change."Help!"Iflopped onto the couch at the end of a particularly discombobulated day and cried,“Everything's everywhere and nothing's anywhere and I keep being late and messing up.”In this way I succeeded in catching my parents'eyes.
Luckily, I, with my parents,came up with a solution to get organized.We started with adaily pocket calendar that had room to write all my tasks.Then we found three drawstringbags that fitted into one big backpack,so I could keep my stuff separated but still in oneplace.We also put a whiteboard in the kitchen with brightly colored reminders and achecklist to make sure I had everything I needed.From then on, my beyond-busy summerwas smooth sailing.I learned an important lesson:If you tried to use the dog's rope as yourkarate belt,it's time to improve your organizational skill.