2024届高考英语 二轮复习 读后续写 模拟训练（含解析）
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Writing 1
With the start of new school, freshmen of Hendersonville High School in Nashville were excited to meet new classmates and teachers. Among them, however,15-year-old Sergio Peralta was feeling very nervous because his right hand had never fully formed since he was born. Going to a new school and being "different" were always scary. Sergio was particularly concerned with what his classmates would think of him.
Sergio's parents had trained him to use his left hand from an early age. As he grew up, he was used to not using his right hand. He could write with his left one and do some things with special tricks or techniques. Despite this, on the first days of new school, Sergio always felt like hiding his underdeveloped right hand in his sleeve as if nobody would ever find out if he did so.
It didn't take long for someone to learn Sergio's secret. Jeff Wilkins, the teacher of Sergio's engineering class, figured out that Sergio was missing part of his hand and decided to do something for the new student. Jeff had been leading a robotics project in the school and expert in 3D printing technology. Besides, he hoped to take advantage of this hands-on chance to help his robotics students learn more about engineering and how a robotic hand worked.
So in his class, Jeff announced with great enthusiasm, "You're supposed to come up with new ideas and solve issues. Now Sergio needs a new hand, so we'll work together to build Sergio a robotic hand." His words fueled everyone's curiosity and creativity.
For the next four weeks, Jeff and his class including Sergio worked on the project. After some precise measurements and researches, the class put forward a design draft. Jeff made a few adjustments and gave them some practical suggestions. With access to online models and a 3D printer, they eventually created a robotic hand, which was intended to look good and work well, like catching something.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Then came the final testing day.
The life-changing gift for Sergio drew huge attention.
Writing 2
Melati and Isabel deeply love their home on the island, surrounded by tropical rain forests, green fields, and a vast ocean. Enjoying a swim in the waters was once a daily pleasure for them. But when Melati was fifteen, and Isabel just ten, the sisters started to lose their enthusiasm for swimming in the waters near their home. More often than not, plastic bags would be around them as they swam and some were scattered on the beach. They got really upset about that.
Melati didn't think much about it until one day her teacher gave a lesson on some world heroes. Each of those people had sparked movements of positive changes in the world. They believed in the impact they could have and they did inspire more people to do something meaningful. After school, Melati walked home slowly in silence, concerned about the vast amount of plastic rubbish on the beach. The heroes crossed her mind. "If they could do it, we could do it too," she thought. The idea lit her up. She couldn't wait to share what she thought with Isabel and quickened her pace.
"So many plastic bags around! The beach is dirty and messy! It's so terrible! We have lost the clean and beautiful beach. Can't we do something to get it back " Melati said heartily. Isabel felt a bit puzzled at what to do, but she also had a strong desire to do something. Picturing a beach as fascinating as before in mind, the pair jumped with joy.
They talked a lot, anxious to know how Dad and Mom would respond to their ideas. That night when the family sat by the dinner table, the sisters eagerly got their ideas across. When Mom and Dad listened to the girls carefully, their eyes shone. "How amazing that would be! We are so proud of you!" Dad exclaimed. Mom came up, gave them the thumbs up and hugged the sisters.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Melati and Isabel decided to make a positive impact straight away.
One month later, Melati received a call from the local newspaper.
Writing 3
School was over, the day was fading and it started to rain. I stood at the school gate, with a loaded backpack on my shoulders. It was Friday again—a weekend of joy with unlimited sleeping hours and dinner courses specially made to my taste. I waved goodbye to my friends as they jumped into their fathers' warm and comfortable cars. Curiously, this gave rise to a disturbing feeling in me. It was not exactly what they called jealousy(嫉妒), but something like depression. I knew all I could expect was an old bike Mom would ride along on, with the badly-oiled chain creaking against the wheel to announce her arrival.
Every Friday when Mom came to pick me up, it was a moment full of great exception and great unease. I always felt my face burning as we rode our way in and out of the cars and saw my friends' faces sticking out of the car windows. It was like stepping into a ballroom with beautifully dressed ladies and finding myself in a smelly T-shirt.
To tell you the truth, Mom is quite a headache occasionally. She looks like a homely middle-aged housewife. She knits(编织) most of my sweaters, chiefly in old styles. Whenever caught by some curious classmates asking what brand my sweaters are, I'd force a smile and reply in a half-joking manner: homemade. She simply doesn't seem to understand what's in fashion.
I couldn't remember when I started to find her such an embarrassment. As a little boy, I relied on her so much. She had been working at home,cooking in the kitchen, knitting by the lamp, or riding across town to buy me a book I badly needed. It had always been fun riding with her. I had enjoyed watching our shadows growing longer and shorter by the light of the streetlamps along the road. Just now there seemed to be something standing between us, which made her so strange to me and me to her.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Today Mom showed up in a raincoat.
Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in.
Writing 4
I yawned(打哈欠) as I got off the last step of the bus. I had woken early that morning, and had not been able to sleep on the long ride, thinking about that day's race. I had never raced in a statewide race before. Over thirty high school teams ran, along with quite a few colleges. The rest of my team and I unloaded the bus, and we relaxed and waited for our race patiently.
"Start warming up, " our coach told us, roughly forty-five minutes after we arrived. After finishing our stretches, we headed over to the starting line, eager for the race to begin.
The starter walked to the middle of the field. There will be two commands, he boomed, "Runners set, then the gun. If you hear another shot, return to the starting line to start again. " My heart raced as I got my legs ready to race.
"Runners set!" the starter shouted. Bam! The gun fired, and he rushed out of our way. Adrenaline (肾上腺素) rushed through my body as I raced through the mass of runners. As I rounded the first turn, my schoolmates greeted me with heartening shouts. Then, in what felt like only one minute, I arrived at the one mile mark.
"6′10", " a man declared as I ran by. I tried to ignore him, but my legs began to burn as I realized I had run a mile and still had two to go. I slowed down my pace, for I knew the second mile was the worst of all three. Minutes later, I felt horrible. My legs ached, feeling like lead blocks. My vision was clouded as sweat dropped down into my eyes, and my arms felt as if they would fall off if I swung them one more time. Just as I almost reached my limit, a boy passed me. He also seemed to have lost strength but soon he was a little ahead of me.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
I gathered up my strength to speed up but suddenly fell to the ground.
In the last mile, seeing the athletes passing us one by one, I asked the boy to run without me.
Writing 5
Sista raced ahead,the sea breeze streaming against her face. Rafi finally caught up and then they rested in the shade.
"Now I'm hungry. I know where there's a great apple tree," Sista said."It belongs to an old lady called Susan who lives in the little house by the hill. I heard she's stubborn,but that sometimes she gives fruit in return for an errand(差事)."
"Let's go," Rafi said. They crossed a stream by hopping from rock to rock. Finally, upon a hilltop,they saw a splendid apple tree with bright red fruits.
A small farmhouse stood at the bottom of the hill. Rafi's heart pounded as Sista knocked on the door. An elderly woman answered.
"Yes " the lady asked, staring at the girls.
"We heard..." said Sista, her voice shaky, "that we could run an errand for you in exchange for apples."
Susan raised one eyebrow. "Ah, yes," she clicked her tongue. "Nothing is free, eh "
She led the girls into the kitchen. When passing the living room, Sista found that the wall was decorated with colourful crayon drawings, which seemed to be children's. She wondered who drew these since Susan was alone,with no grandchildren,even no families or relatives. The lady grabbed two baskets, one large and one small, and pushed them into the girls' hands. "Go fill these with e right back."
The girls raced up the hill to the tree, climbed the branches, and picked the ripest apples.After filling the baskets, they returned to the house.
Susan filled a bag with rice and dried beans, and then she handed it to Sista."Take this bag and the large basket of apples to the Gomez family. Do you know them "
The girls nodded. Sista had heard that Mr. Gomez had been sick in bed for a long time and that Mrs.Gomez had to raise three little kids.
"Good.And ask them for the payment," Susan added with a tight smile.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
The girls hit the road.
When Susan opened the envelope, the girls saw the payment!
Writing 6
I first became conscious of my body image last year in fifth grade. One day I was walking by my mirror getting ready for bed and I noticed that my stomach looked big. I started to really hate that and think I was fat even though my family always told me how skinny I was. It wasn't only my stomach—I started to think my nose was ugly and that my laugh was disgusting. I was even afraid to laugh or smile in public.
Then, in the sixth grade, a popular guy in my class named Luke made it worse. He told his table group that my body looked swollen in skinny jeans. I heard about it from someone else, but then Luke even told me to my face! I couldn't stop thinking about what Luke had said. Even worse, I started to believe it was true, and I hid my skinny jeans all the way at the bottom of my drawer.
I know I cared too much about what other people said and thought about me. I guess I just wanted to be liked. In fact, I really wish I could have just brushed off comments like that, but I couldn't change my personality and what I cared about that easily.
Luke's mean comment affected me in a big way. I lost confidence in more than just my body—I started to think that I didn't matter and that I didn't have a place in the world. To make it worse, some people also started telling me that I was not meant to be an author, which is what I really want to be. That especially hurt and I started to feel really sad all the time.
I hadn't really told anyone how I'd been feeling until a couple of months ago when I got a call from my cousin. I'm really close to her, and hearing her voice and laugh made me feel so good inside. I thought about how I used to be that way too, and how I was so sick of feeling sad.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Then I started telling her and it all came out.
When I went back to my bedroom, I looked at myself in the mirror for a long time.
Writing 7
Steve grabbed his bat and glove. "See you later, Mom. I'm going to Paul's." He raced out the door and slammed it behind him. Summer vacation just began. The boys planned to play baseball every day so they could make the freshman team.
Paul was waiting outside for Steve. "What are you doing Where's your stuff " Steve lifted his bat onto his shoulder when catching sight of Paul.
Paul shook his head unhappily. "I have to clean Mr Thompson's garage before I can go. With his broken arm, he can't do it himself. My mom always volunteers me for helping the Thompsons. They're kind of old."
"OK," said Steve. "I'll help you. We'll get done quicker working together."
The boys went down the block to the Thompson's and got started. They found a couple of brooms and shovels(铲). Before they swept, they put boxes that were strewn(遍布) around the garage floor on shelves. As Paul put a big box on a shelf, it fell off and with it fell an envelope. He picked it up. It wasn't sealed, so he opened it. There were lots of one-hundred-dollar bills.
"You've got to see this." He pulled out a handful of bills and showed Steve with his eyes lit up. "Where did you get that " said Steve. Paul pointed to the shelf. "It just fell down when the box fell. There's got to be a couple of thousand boxes falling. There's got to be a couple of thousand dollars here. If we take some, I bet no one will ever know."
Steve furrowed his brow(皱眉) and shook his head. "Are you crazy That's stealing." "Well, I do a lot of chores for them and don't get paid. It's not really stealing; it's a kind of payment for my hard work," Paul insisted. At that time, Steve was about to grab the money from Paul's hand when they heard a sound.
注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
"Boys, I baked a chocolate cake," Mrs Thompson walked into the garage.
When they were about to leave, Mrs Thompson handed Paul a brand-new bat and glove.
Writing 8
It was an early winter morning. Joan was sleeping soundly when the phone rang in the living room. She rolled over and glanced at the clock on the wall—it was already nine o'clock.Every weekend morning, her mother had to work part-time in the cafe. Although Joan was still sleepy, she knew she had to get up. After all, she didn't expect her brother Mike, who was sleeping like a log, to hear the phone. She quietly went over to the living room. When she picked up the receiver, on the other end came the warmhearted greetings,"Good morning, my dear!"Recognizing the voice from her father, Joan was immediately surrounded by a sense of joy and the sleepiness swept away.
Joan's father was a seaman, who rarely came back. Working on the sea was really hard.Born in a not rich family, Joan and Mike felt the stress of life but they were happy to enjoy the family atmosphere. At school, they were straight-A students throughout the academic career and actively involved in school activities. They became the pride of the school and the envy of the students.
"Good morning, Dad. What's up "Joan said in an easy tone."I have been very nice recently, my baby. Today is your mother's birthday, and I have ordered her a cake online and it should come to the house in an hour and a half. Do remember to take the cake."
Hearing her father's words, Joan felt a little ashamed. How she could forget Mum's birthday!She took a glance at the dirty clothes piled on the sofa and the oily floor that hadn't been mopped(用拖把擦) for a few days—There was two hours before her mother came back. She calculated they had enough time to prepare a surprise for Mum.
Thinking of this, she felt full of excitement."Well, Dad, now I'm going to wake Mike up.We will give Mum a surprise!"
Joan hung up the phone with Dad, and hurriedly went to Mike's room to share her Big Cleaning plan with him. After listening to Joan, Mike readily accepted her idea.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
The Big Cleaning plan began.
With the cake placed on the table, Mum came in.
【解析】 【写作指导】
故事梗概 15岁的Sergio Peralta因为右手残疾在新学校感到紧张,他特别关心同学们对他的看法。但是没过多久就有人知道了Sergio的秘密,工程课的老师Jeff Wilkins发现Sergio的手少了一部分,于是决定为这个新生做点什么。Jeff一直在学校领导一个机器人项目,是3D打印技术的专家。此外,他希望利用这次亲身实践的机会,帮助他的学机器人科学的学生更多地学习工程知识以及如何制造机械手。所以,在课堂上,Jeff热情地宣布一起为Sergio造一只机械手的想法,他的话激发了每个人的好奇心和创造力。在接下来的四个星期里,Jeff和他的学生们,包括Sergio,一起致力于这个项目。经过他们的努力,他们最终创造了一只机械手,这只机械手看起来很好,工作起来也很好。
续写思路 由第一段首句内容"然后到了最后的测试日"可知,第一段可描写Sergio使用机械手的情况以及同学们的反应。
由第二段首句内容"这份改变Sergio一生的礼物引起了广泛关注"可知,第二段可描写这份礼物对学生和学校带来的影响。
续写线索 测试→成功→欢呼→引起关注→报道→捐款
【范文赏读】
Then came the final testing day. The whole class gathered in the science classroom, watching breathlessly as Jeff carefully loaded their self-made robotic hand onto Sergio's right arm(现在分词短语作状语). It fitted quite well! So excited was Sergio that his arm trembled slightly(部分倒装). Having put a baseball on the desk, Jeff signed to Sergio to pick it up. Slowly, Sergio extended his right hand and reached for the ball.
Successfully he caught hold of it and everyone present broke into cheers! Holding the ball, Sergio couldn't contain his tears. Never in his life did he expect to catch anything with his right hand(部分倒装)!
The life-changing gift for Sergio drew huge attention. Jeff and his students became an instant hit and various media competed to cover the news. When interviewed about the intention of the project, Jeff said, "I intended Sergio's robotic hand to show our support for him. Meanwhile, I hope to foster students' scientific spirit through this hands-on operation." His students stated that Jeff challenged them to transform abstract concepts into reality, from which they benefited greatly(非限制性定语从句). Soon voluntary donations poured in, which would go to the school's scientific research and help students develop better(非限制性定语从句).
【写作指导】
故事梗概 Melati和Isabel深爱着她们在岛上的家,这里被热带雨林、绿色的田野和广阔的海洋包围着。在当地的水域上游泳曾经是她们每天的乐趣。但当Melati 15岁,Isabel 10岁时,姐妹们开始对在她们家附近的水域游泳失去了热情。通常情况下,她们游泳时,塑料袋会围绕着她们,一些塑料袋散落在海滩上。她们对此很不高兴。
Melati并没有想太多,直到有一天她的老师给她上了一堂关于世界英雄的课。这堂课促使Melati担心海滩上大量的塑料垃圾。她想到了英雄们并想做出一些事情来改变海滩的污染状况。她迫不及待地把自己的想法告诉Isabel。Isabel也有强烈的想做点什么的愿望。她们把想法告诉了父母,得到了父母的支持。
续写思路 由第一段首句内容"Melati和Isabel决定立即产生积极的影响"可知,第一段可描写两个女孩采取行动去改善海滩的状况,并发动身边的年轻人参与并创建组织及她们的成果。由第二段首句内容"一个月后,Melati接到了当地一家报社的电话"可知,第二段可描写她们的组织规模不断扩大,在当地造成影响,接受报社采访。
续写线索 去行动改变海滩状况→创建组织→成果→接受采访→采访内容→谈感想
【范文赏读】
Melati and Isabel decided to make a positive impact straight away. They took advantage of their spare time to pick up rubbish on the beach. However, it was soon that they realized that they couldn't solve the problem on their own for there was so much plastic. After discussions and preparations, they started an organization to spread their idea among the youth, involving more youths in the movement, which proved to be a hit(现在分词involving作状语;which引导非限制性定语从句). More and more teenagers took part. In a month, they altogether collected and recycled 2.5 tons of plastic, recovering the beautiful beach.
One month later, Melati received a call from the local newspaper. The two girls were invited to an interview in which they were asked what inspired them to start the organization, what the biggest challenges were and what advice they had for young people who wanted to make changes in this world(in which引导定语从句;what引导的三个并列的宾语从句;who引导定语从句). They said the team is what keeps them going on the challenging days and added, "Keeping our team engaged and motivated has been a challenge and we are happy to have a positive influence." Melati and Isabel are heroes who make a big difference to our world.
【写作指导】
故事梗概 作者的家庭并不富裕,周五放学时,其他学生的家长开着汽车来接他们,而作者的妈妈却骑着一辆破旧的自行车来接他,这让作者感觉很沮丧。妈妈给作者穿的衣服也很朴素,她不懂时尚,这也让作者感觉很难堪。事实上,作者小时候很依赖妈妈,也很喜欢妈妈骑自行车载自己,不知道从什么时候开始,作者和妈妈之间的关系变得疏远了。
续写思路 根据第一段的提示句"Today Mom showed up in a raincoat"可知,妈妈穿着雨衣出现了,据此可知,该段重点描写作者见到妈妈后的尴尬场景。结合续写第二段提示句中的"Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again"可知,本段还应写出作者妈妈用雨衣盖住作者的情景。
根据续写第二段的提示句"Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in"可知,妈妈再次用雨衣将作者盖住。据此可知,该段下文将描写作者对此的感受,还可以描写妈妈在暴风雨中蹬车的情景。最后,注意升华主题:母亲的爱让作者感动哭泣。
续写线索 妈妈叫我→我感到尴尬→妈妈给我盖雨衣→我不愿意接受→暴风雨来袭→妈妈再次给我盖雨衣→我感受到母爱的温暖
【范文赏读】
Today Mom showed up in a raincoat. Once she saw me(时间状语从句), Mom called my name excitedly. Almost everybody present looked in her direction. I swallowed hard and fixed my stare on the middle of the road, sweat forming in tiny droplets on my forehead(独立主格结构). When she tried to cover me with the back of her raincoat(时间状语从句), I simply threw it aside. In silence, I shot her a blaming glance and threw my backpack heavily into the front basket of the bike. Without a single word, I jumped onto the back seat.
Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in. Reluctantly, I pulled it over. With the wind roaring angrily and the raincoat dancing(with复合结构), it felt warm and secure inside. Mom bent forward and pedaled with all her strength, her waist twitching with tension(独立主格结构). I started to feel guilty about my coldness, tears welling up in my eyes(独立主格结构). Quietly, I put my hands around Mom's waist and gently pressed my face against her back. In the crying wind and pouring rain, I found myself hugging my mother(find+宾语+动词-ing形式作宾补), tighter than ever.
【写作指导】
故事梗概 作者一大早睡眼惺忪地坐大巴去参加全州性的比赛。发令枪响了,作者起跑很顺利,并以很快的速度跑完了第一英里。进入第二英里之后,作者感觉不太妙,几分钟之后,作者的体能似乎达到了极限。正在这时,一个男孩超过了作者……
续写思路 续写第一段:两句提示定首段。根据续写第一段的提示句中的"suddenly fell to the ground"可知,作者摔倒了。再结合续写第二段的提示句"In the last mile, seeing the athletes passing us one by one, I asked the boy to run without me"可知,超过作者的男孩帮助作者跑完了第二英里。因此,同学们在本段应该着重描写作者摔倒之后的感受,超过他的男孩如何跑来帮助他,以及二人如何一起跑完了第二英里。同学们在续写的过程中应注意利用对话展示帮助的过程,再通过动作和心理活动来描写作者摔倒后的心情和接受帮助时的感受。
续写第二段:尾段要有正能量。根据本段的提示句"In the last mile, seeing the athletes passing us one by one, I asked the boy to run without me"和常识可知,到了决定名次最关键的最后一英里,作者应该会让超过他的男孩丢下自己,努力去争取好名次。但男孩却拒绝了作者的好意,并认为名次并没那么重要。因此,同学们在本段可以描写二人之间的对话,并应写到二人携手完成比赛,最终获得了全场观众的欢呼。
【范文赏读】
I gathered up my strength to speed up but suddenly fell to the ground. My world was clouded by total darkness. How I wish the ground to crack and swallow me(感叹句)! I could feel everybody staring at me, widening their mouths and not being able to utter a word(现在分词短语作状语).The sudden silence brought a sharp pain in my knees and "failure" was the only word flashing in my mind(现在分词短语作后置定语).Then the silence was broken by a deep voice, "You won't give up so easily, will you " The boy ahead of me turned back and pulled me up. "Let's run to the finishing line together!" The second mile saw its end while we ran shoulder to shoulder(时间状语从句).
In the last mile, seeing the athletes passing us one by one, I asked the boy to run without me. "You will win a place if you go by yourself." I looked at him in the eyes with sweat blurring my sight(with复合结构). The boy breathing heavily(独立主格结构), drops of sweat rolled down his face. He shook his head saying, "Winning a place is not that important." Then we smiled at each other as if we had been the only runners(虚拟语气).The last mile seemed shorter and we enjoyed the moment when we passed the finishing line together with thunderous applause(定语从句).I know they cheered for us not for winning a race but for something more important(宾语从句).
【写作指导】
故事梗概 Sista在和Rafi一起爬山的过程中感到饥饿。她敲开了Susan这位老妇人的门。Susan让她们去采摘了两篮子苹果,之后让女孩们把大篮子里的苹果和装有大米和干豆的袋子送往Mr. Gomez家并向他们要报酬。Mr. Gomez长期卧病在床,Mrs. Gomez不得不养家里的三个孩子。
续写思路 由续写第一段首句可知,第一段可描写女孩们在路上的心情,到了Mr. Gomez家后看到的、交流的,最后拿到了什么。由续写第二段首句可知,续写第二段可描写孩子们拿回信封,看到了里面的东西,感悟到Susan这位老妇人对Mr. Gomez一家的帮助。最后还应呼应故事起因,讲述Susan给了女孩们苹果,还需描述女孩们心情怎么样。
【范文赏读】
The girls hit the road. All the way, the girls wrestled with the bag and the large basket of apples. "What a heavy basket!" they complained. Finally, they arrived at the Gomez's home, sweating like a pig(现在分词短语作伴随状语). Mrs. Gomez answered the door. The girls held up the food and said, "This is from Susan." Mrs. Gomez replied, "Thank you." Rafi continued, "She said to ask you for the payment, too." Mrs. Gomez handed Sista a large sealed envelope stuffed very full(过去分词短语作后置定语). Back at the farmhouse, the girls immediately handed Susan the envelope.
When Susan opened the envelope, the girls saw the payment!"Beautiful!" She began taping the crayon drawings on the wall. Rafi and Sista broke out in smiles, now knowing that what Susan had done was actually not a deal but a favor for the family (现在分词短语作状语,that引导宾语从句,what引导主语从句).After
Susan finished, she joined the girls again. "And here's your payment(完全倒装句)," she said, handing the small basket of apples to the girls(现在分词短语作状语). As they walked home(as 引导时间状语从句), Rafi and Sista enjoyed their treat. The juice was as sweet and warm as the feeling they had inside(省略关系词的定语从句).
【写作指导】
故事梗概 作者在五年级时意识到自己肥胖,于是害怕在公共场合笑;六年级时同学Luke嘲笑作者说紧身牛仔裤让作者显得更加肥胖,这让作者更加丧失信心,甚至不敢再追求自己的作家梦,直到有一天,作者接到表姐的来电……
续写思路 根据续写第一段的提示句" Then I started telling her and it all came out"可知,在续写第一段,同学们可就表姐听了作者的倾诉后的反应进行描写。同学们可以着重描写表姐列举作者的诸多优点以鼓励作者、增强作者的自信心。再结合续写第二段提示句"When I went back to my bedroom, I looked at myself in the mirror for a long time"可知,在表姐的帮助下,作者开始正确审视自己。
根据续写第二段的提示句"When I went back to my bedroom, I looked at myself in the mirror for a long time"可知,续写第二段应该描述作者发现自己的特长或者美丽的过程,最后注意适当升华主题:相信自己,正确对待别人的评价。
续写线索 倾诉→列举优点→警醒→返回卧室→注视镜中的自己→发现自己的美→决定→感受
【范文赏读】
Then I started telling her and it all came out. She seemed so surprised and said how special I was(how引导宾语从句). She started listing all my good qualities, saying I shouldn't listen to people who said mean things because they were probably just feeling bad about themselves or trying to look cool(现在分词短语作伴随状语,who引导定语从句,because引导原因状语从句). Definitely, she added that I shouldn't let them tell me how to feel about myself or my body. It was like a sudden wake-up call:focusing on what other people thought of
me only made things even worse, and I must learn to love and accept myself for who I am(动名词短语作主语;what引导宾语从句;who引导宾语从句).
When I went back to my bedroom, I looked at myself in the mirror for a long time. I saw what I had never seen in myself before(what引导宾语从句), like my nice grey eyes, my cute smile, and the fact that I am beautiful in my own way(that引导同位语从句). I know some people might still make hurtful comments again, and sometimes I may feel like I am fat again, but next time I will be prepared. I will only think well of myself even when I am feeling sad, and stand up for myself when someone puts me down. In my eyes, I am perfect myself—no one can change that.
【写作指导】
故事梗概 Steve邀Paul外出打棒球,而Paul答应妈妈帮Thompson夫妇打扫车库卫生,之后Steve提议一同干活然后再去玩。在打扫卫生时有信封掉落,孩子们发现大量现金,在Paul想据为己有时,Steve极力打消Paul的想法。
续写思路 由第一段首句内容"‘孩子们,我烤了一个巧克力蛋糕,’汤普森太太走进车库"可知,第一段可描写Thompson太太和孩子们的对话以及两个孩子见到Thompson太太后的反应。
由第二段首句内容"当他们准备离开时,汤普森太太递给Paul一只崭新的球棒和手套"可知,第二段可描写Paul看到崭新的球棒和手套时的反应、还钱后Thompson太太的反应和对孩子们的感谢,最后是Paul的思想认识。
续写线索 做蛋糕→送蛋糕→孩子的担心→Thompson太太的反应→Paul的愧疚→送手套和棒球→还钱→感谢→认识
【范文赏读】
"Boys, I baked a chocolate cake," Mrs Thompson walked into the garage. Catching sight of Mrs Thompson, the two froze with fear and followed her step with racing hearts. A few minutes later, they were served with large slices of cake. Delicious as the cake was(as引导的让步状语从句), they didn't have any appetite. Mrs Thompson seemed to notice something was wrong, "Boys, do you like the cake " Paul nodded with his eyes dropping to avoid any eye contact and growing guilt crept into his heart.
When they were about to leave, Mrs Thompson handed Paul a brand-new bat and glove. Paul looked atthem, his face blushing with shame. "Th... thanks so much." Voice trembling(独立主格结构), Paul then bravely poured out everything about the envelope and gave back the money he had hidden before, apologizing for his stealing. However, Mrs Thompson, instead of boiling with anger, came up to Paul, and said gently, "Oh, thank you for helping me find the envelope. I totally forgot where I had put it." In that split second, it dawned on him that what really matters is simple honesty and simple kindness.
【写作指导】
故事梗概 一个冬日周末的上午,Joan还在睡懒觉,一通电话吵醒了她。Joan的爸爸在电话里告诉Joan:今天是Joan的妈妈的生日,他在网上为她订了一个蛋糕,蛋糕一个半小时后送到,注意接收。Joan为忘记妈妈的生日而感到羞愧。她看着凌乱的房间,决定叫醒哥哥,在妈妈下班之前为妈妈准备一个惊喜。哥哥欣然答应了她……
续写思路 续写第一段:根据续写第一段的提示句和第二段的提示句可知,同学们在本段应就大扫除进行描写,而且还可以描写蛋糕如期送到,打扫任务按时完成。另外,同学们在本段应着重对动作进行描写,也可适当加入Joan和Mike对做家务的感悟。
续写第二段:根据上文内容可知,今天是妈妈的生日,Joan和哥哥Mike想通过整理房间给妈妈带来惊喜。结合本段提示句可知,本段可以写妈妈进家门后看到的景象,妈妈看到这些景象时的反应,孩子们对妈妈的祝福,体现其乐融融的氛围。另外,同学们在本段可利用对话推动故事的发展,并注意利用一些形容词、副词来表达感受。
【范文赏读】
The Big Cleaning plan began. Joan collected the clothes from the sofa and then put them in the water of a basin. After pouring in some washing liquids, she began to wash them by hand. Realizing the clothes were clean enough(现在分词短语作状语),Joan gently squeezed water out and hung them up to dry. Meanwhile, Mike was busy mopping the floor back and forth with all his strength, really aware of what hard work his mum had at home(形容词作状语,what引导宾语从句).They had just finished the cleaning when the express boy
came to the door(固定句型sb. had just done...when...).
With the cake placed on the table, Mum came in. "Happy birthday, Mum!" they greeted in chorus. Confused and surprised(形容词作状语),Mum stood frozen. When Mum realized what had happened(宾语从句),a warm current rose in her heart. Staring at the clean floor and the washed clothes(现在分词短语作状语),she could hardly contain her excitement and hugged them tightly. Mum said emotionally,"It is the best birthday gift I have ever had(省略了关系词的定语从句)!" Just then, Joan took out her smartphone and took a happy video named "Mum's Birthday"(过去分词短语作后置定语)and sent it to their dad.
With the start of new school, freshmen of Hendersonville High School in Nashville were excited to meet new classmates and teachers. Among them, however,15-year-old Sergio Peralta was feeling very nervous because his right hand had never fully formed since he was born. Going to a new school and being "different" were always scary. Sergio was particularly concerned with what his classmates would think of him.
Sergio's parents had trained him to use his left hand from an early age. As he grew up, he was used to not using his right hand. He could write with his left one and do some things with special tricks or techniques. Despite this, on the first days of new school, Sergio always felt like hiding his underdeveloped right hand in his sleeve as if nobody would ever find out if he did so.
It didn't take long for someone to learn Sergio's secret. Jeff Wilkins, the teacher of Sergio's engineering class, figured out that Sergio was missing part of his hand and decided to do something for the new student. Jeff had been leading a robotics project in the school and expert in 3D printing technology. Besides, he hoped to take advantage of this hands-on chance to help his robotics students learn more about engineering and how a robotic hand worked.
So in his class, Jeff announced with great enthusiasm, "You're supposed to come up with new ideas and solve issues. Now Sergio needs a new hand, so we'll work together to build Sergio a robotic hand." His words fueled everyone's curiosity and creativity.
For the next four weeks, Jeff and his class including Sergio worked on the project. After some precise measurements and researches, the class put forward a design draft. Jeff made a few adjustments and gave them some practical suggestions. With access to online models and a 3D printer, they eventually created a robotic hand, which was intended to look good and work well, like catching something.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Then came the final testing day.
The life-changing gift for Sergio drew huge attention.
Writing 2
Melati and Isabel deeply love their home on the island, surrounded by tropical rain forests, green fields, and a vast ocean. Enjoying a swim in the waters was once a daily pleasure for them. But when Melati was fifteen, and Isabel just ten, the sisters started to lose their enthusiasm for swimming in the waters near their home. More often than not, plastic bags would be around them as they swam and some were scattered on the beach. They got really upset about that.
Melati didn't think much about it until one day her teacher gave a lesson on some world heroes. Each of those people had sparked movements of positive changes in the world. They believed in the impact they could have and they did inspire more people to do something meaningful. After school, Melati walked home slowly in silence, concerned about the vast amount of plastic rubbish on the beach. The heroes crossed her mind. "If they could do it, we could do it too," she thought. The idea lit her up. She couldn't wait to share what she thought with Isabel and quickened her pace.
"So many plastic bags around! The beach is dirty and messy! It's so terrible! We have lost the clean and beautiful beach. Can't we do something to get it back " Melati said heartily. Isabel felt a bit puzzled at what to do, but she also had a strong desire to do something. Picturing a beach as fascinating as before in mind, the pair jumped with joy.
They talked a lot, anxious to know how Dad and Mom would respond to their ideas. That night when the family sat by the dinner table, the sisters eagerly got their ideas across. When Mom and Dad listened to the girls carefully, their eyes shone. "How amazing that would be! We are so proud of you!" Dad exclaimed. Mom came up, gave them the thumbs up and hugged the sisters.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Melati and Isabel decided to make a positive impact straight away.
One month later, Melati received a call from the local newspaper.
Writing 3
School was over, the day was fading and it started to rain. I stood at the school gate, with a loaded backpack on my shoulders. It was Friday again—a weekend of joy with unlimited sleeping hours and dinner courses specially made to my taste. I waved goodbye to my friends as they jumped into their fathers' warm and comfortable cars. Curiously, this gave rise to a disturbing feeling in me. It was not exactly what they called jealousy(嫉妒), but something like depression. I knew all I could expect was an old bike Mom would ride along on, with the badly-oiled chain creaking against the wheel to announce her arrival.
Every Friday when Mom came to pick me up, it was a moment full of great exception and great unease. I always felt my face burning as we rode our way in and out of the cars and saw my friends' faces sticking out of the car windows. It was like stepping into a ballroom with beautifully dressed ladies and finding myself in a smelly T-shirt.
To tell you the truth, Mom is quite a headache occasionally. She looks like a homely middle-aged housewife. She knits(编织) most of my sweaters, chiefly in old styles. Whenever caught by some curious classmates asking what brand my sweaters are, I'd force a smile and reply in a half-joking manner: homemade. She simply doesn't seem to understand what's in fashion.
I couldn't remember when I started to find her such an embarrassment. As a little boy, I relied on her so much. She had been working at home,cooking in the kitchen, knitting by the lamp, or riding across town to buy me a book I badly needed. It had always been fun riding with her. I had enjoyed watching our shadows growing longer and shorter by the light of the streetlamps along the road. Just now there seemed to be something standing between us, which made her so strange to me and me to her.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Today Mom showed up in a raincoat.
Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in.
Writing 4
I yawned(打哈欠) as I got off the last step of the bus. I had woken early that morning, and had not been able to sleep on the long ride, thinking about that day's race. I had never raced in a statewide race before. Over thirty high school teams ran, along with quite a few colleges. The rest of my team and I unloaded the bus, and we relaxed and waited for our race patiently.
"Start warming up, " our coach told us, roughly forty-five minutes after we arrived. After finishing our stretches, we headed over to the starting line, eager for the race to begin.
The starter walked to the middle of the field. There will be two commands, he boomed, "Runners set, then the gun. If you hear another shot, return to the starting line to start again. " My heart raced as I got my legs ready to race.
"Runners set!" the starter shouted. Bam! The gun fired, and he rushed out of our way. Adrenaline (肾上腺素) rushed through my body as I raced through the mass of runners. As I rounded the first turn, my schoolmates greeted me with heartening shouts. Then, in what felt like only one minute, I arrived at the one mile mark.
"6′10", " a man declared as I ran by. I tried to ignore him, but my legs began to burn as I realized I had run a mile and still had two to go. I slowed down my pace, for I knew the second mile was the worst of all three. Minutes later, I felt horrible. My legs ached, feeling like lead blocks. My vision was clouded as sweat dropped down into my eyes, and my arms felt as if they would fall off if I swung them one more time. Just as I almost reached my limit, a boy passed me. He also seemed to have lost strength but soon he was a little ahead of me.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
I gathered up my strength to speed up but suddenly fell to the ground.
In the last mile, seeing the athletes passing us one by one, I asked the boy to run without me.
Writing 5
Sista raced ahead,the sea breeze streaming against her face. Rafi finally caught up and then they rested in the shade.
"Now I'm hungry. I know where there's a great apple tree," Sista said."It belongs to an old lady called Susan who lives in the little house by the hill. I heard she's stubborn,but that sometimes she gives fruit in return for an errand(差事)."
"Let's go," Rafi said. They crossed a stream by hopping from rock to rock. Finally, upon a hilltop,they saw a splendid apple tree with bright red fruits.
A small farmhouse stood at the bottom of the hill. Rafi's heart pounded as Sista knocked on the door. An elderly woman answered.
"Yes " the lady asked, staring at the girls.
"We heard..." said Sista, her voice shaky, "that we could run an errand for you in exchange for apples."
Susan raised one eyebrow. "Ah, yes," she clicked her tongue. "Nothing is free, eh "
She led the girls into the kitchen. When passing the living room, Sista found that the wall was decorated with colourful crayon drawings, which seemed to be children's. She wondered who drew these since Susan was alone,with no grandchildren,even no families or relatives. The lady grabbed two baskets, one large and one small, and pushed them into the girls' hands. "Go fill these with e right back."
The girls raced up the hill to the tree, climbed the branches, and picked the ripest apples.After filling the baskets, they returned to the house.
Susan filled a bag with rice and dried beans, and then she handed it to Sista."Take this bag and the large basket of apples to the Gomez family. Do you know them "
The girls nodded. Sista had heard that Mr. Gomez had been sick in bed for a long time and that Mrs.Gomez had to raise three little kids.
"Good.And ask them for the payment," Susan added with a tight smile.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
The girls hit the road.
When Susan opened the envelope, the girls saw the payment!
Writing 6
I first became conscious of my body image last year in fifth grade. One day I was walking by my mirror getting ready for bed and I noticed that my stomach looked big. I started to really hate that and think I was fat even though my family always told me how skinny I was. It wasn't only my stomach—I started to think my nose was ugly and that my laugh was disgusting. I was even afraid to laugh or smile in public.
Then, in the sixth grade, a popular guy in my class named Luke made it worse. He told his table group that my body looked swollen in skinny jeans. I heard about it from someone else, but then Luke even told me to my face! I couldn't stop thinking about what Luke had said. Even worse, I started to believe it was true, and I hid my skinny jeans all the way at the bottom of my drawer.
I know I cared too much about what other people said and thought about me. I guess I just wanted to be liked. In fact, I really wish I could have just brushed off comments like that, but I couldn't change my personality and what I cared about that easily.
Luke's mean comment affected me in a big way. I lost confidence in more than just my body—I started to think that I didn't matter and that I didn't have a place in the world. To make it worse, some people also started telling me that I was not meant to be an author, which is what I really want to be. That especially hurt and I started to feel really sad all the time.
I hadn't really told anyone how I'd been feeling until a couple of months ago when I got a call from my cousin. I'm really close to her, and hearing her voice and laugh made me feel so good inside. I thought about how I used to be that way too, and how I was so sick of feeling sad.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Then I started telling her and it all came out.
When I went back to my bedroom, I looked at myself in the mirror for a long time.
Writing 7
Steve grabbed his bat and glove. "See you later, Mom. I'm going to Paul's." He raced out the door and slammed it behind him. Summer vacation just began. The boys planned to play baseball every day so they could make the freshman team.
Paul was waiting outside for Steve. "What are you doing Where's your stuff " Steve lifted his bat onto his shoulder when catching sight of Paul.
Paul shook his head unhappily. "I have to clean Mr Thompson's garage before I can go. With his broken arm, he can't do it himself. My mom always volunteers me for helping the Thompsons. They're kind of old."
"OK," said Steve. "I'll help you. We'll get done quicker working together."
The boys went down the block to the Thompson's and got started. They found a couple of brooms and shovels(铲). Before they swept, they put boxes that were strewn(遍布) around the garage floor on shelves. As Paul put a big box on a shelf, it fell off and with it fell an envelope. He picked it up. It wasn't sealed, so he opened it. There were lots of one-hundred-dollar bills.
"You've got to see this." He pulled out a handful of bills and showed Steve with his eyes lit up. "Where did you get that " said Steve. Paul pointed to the shelf. "It just fell down when the box fell. There's got to be a couple of thousand boxes falling. There's got to be a couple of thousand dollars here. If we take some, I bet no one will ever know."
Steve furrowed his brow(皱眉) and shook his head. "Are you crazy That's stealing." "Well, I do a lot of chores for them and don't get paid. It's not really stealing; it's a kind of payment for my hard work," Paul insisted. At that time, Steve was about to grab the money from Paul's hand when they heard a sound.
注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
"Boys, I baked a chocolate cake," Mrs Thompson walked into the garage.
When they were about to leave, Mrs Thompson handed Paul a brand-new bat and glove.
Writing 8
It was an early winter morning. Joan was sleeping soundly when the phone rang in the living room. She rolled over and glanced at the clock on the wall—it was already nine o'clock.Every weekend morning, her mother had to work part-time in the cafe. Although Joan was still sleepy, she knew she had to get up. After all, she didn't expect her brother Mike, who was sleeping like a log, to hear the phone. She quietly went over to the living room. When she picked up the receiver, on the other end came the warmhearted greetings,"Good morning, my dear!"Recognizing the voice from her father, Joan was immediately surrounded by a sense of joy and the sleepiness swept away.
Joan's father was a seaman, who rarely came back. Working on the sea was really hard.Born in a not rich family, Joan and Mike felt the stress of life but they were happy to enjoy the family atmosphere. At school, they were straight-A students throughout the academic career and actively involved in school activities. They became the pride of the school and the envy of the students.
"Good morning, Dad. What's up "Joan said in an easy tone."I have been very nice recently, my baby. Today is your mother's birthday, and I have ordered her a cake online and it should come to the house in an hour and a half. Do remember to take the cake."
Hearing her father's words, Joan felt a little ashamed. How she could forget Mum's birthday!She took a glance at the dirty clothes piled on the sofa and the oily floor that hadn't been mopped(用拖把擦) for a few days—There was two hours before her mother came back. She calculated they had enough time to prepare a surprise for Mum.
Thinking of this, she felt full of excitement."Well, Dad, now I'm going to wake Mike up.We will give Mum a surprise!"
Joan hung up the phone with Dad, and hurriedly went to Mike's room to share her Big Cleaning plan with him. After listening to Joan, Mike readily accepted her idea.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
The Big Cleaning plan began.
With the cake placed on the table, Mum came in.
【解析】 【写作指导】
故事梗概 15岁的Sergio Peralta因为右手残疾在新学校感到紧张,他特别关心同学们对他的看法。但是没过多久就有人知道了Sergio的秘密,工程课的老师Jeff Wilkins发现Sergio的手少了一部分,于是决定为这个新生做点什么。Jeff一直在学校领导一个机器人项目,是3D打印技术的专家。此外,他希望利用这次亲身实践的机会,帮助他的学机器人科学的学生更多地学习工程知识以及如何制造机械手。所以,在课堂上,Jeff热情地宣布一起为Sergio造一只机械手的想法,他的话激发了每个人的好奇心和创造力。在接下来的四个星期里,Jeff和他的学生们,包括Sergio,一起致力于这个项目。经过他们的努力,他们最终创造了一只机械手,这只机械手看起来很好,工作起来也很好。
续写思路 由第一段首句内容"然后到了最后的测试日"可知,第一段可描写Sergio使用机械手的情况以及同学们的反应。
由第二段首句内容"这份改变Sergio一生的礼物引起了广泛关注"可知,第二段可描写这份礼物对学生和学校带来的影响。
续写线索 测试→成功→欢呼→引起关注→报道→捐款
【范文赏读】
Then came the final testing day. The whole class gathered in the science classroom, watching breathlessly as Jeff carefully loaded their self-made robotic hand onto Sergio's right arm(现在分词短语作状语). It fitted quite well! So excited was Sergio that his arm trembled slightly(部分倒装). Having put a baseball on the desk, Jeff signed to Sergio to pick it up. Slowly, Sergio extended his right hand and reached for the ball.
Successfully he caught hold of it and everyone present broke into cheers! Holding the ball, Sergio couldn't contain his tears. Never in his life did he expect to catch anything with his right hand(部分倒装)!
The life-changing gift for Sergio drew huge attention. Jeff and his students became an instant hit and various media competed to cover the news. When interviewed about the intention of the project, Jeff said, "I intended Sergio's robotic hand to show our support for him. Meanwhile, I hope to foster students' scientific spirit through this hands-on operation." His students stated that Jeff challenged them to transform abstract concepts into reality, from which they benefited greatly(非限制性定语从句). Soon voluntary donations poured in, which would go to the school's scientific research and help students develop better(非限制性定语从句).
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故事梗概 Melati和Isabel深爱着她们在岛上的家,这里被热带雨林、绿色的田野和广阔的海洋包围着。在当地的水域上游泳曾经是她们每天的乐趣。但当Melati 15岁,Isabel 10岁时,姐妹们开始对在她们家附近的水域游泳失去了热情。通常情况下,她们游泳时,塑料袋会围绕着她们,一些塑料袋散落在海滩上。她们对此很不高兴。
Melati并没有想太多,直到有一天她的老师给她上了一堂关于世界英雄的课。这堂课促使Melati担心海滩上大量的塑料垃圾。她想到了英雄们并想做出一些事情来改变海滩的污染状况。她迫不及待地把自己的想法告诉Isabel。Isabel也有强烈的想做点什么的愿望。她们把想法告诉了父母,得到了父母的支持。
续写思路 由第一段首句内容"Melati和Isabel决定立即产生积极的影响"可知,第一段可描写两个女孩采取行动去改善海滩的状况,并发动身边的年轻人参与并创建组织及她们的成果。由第二段首句内容"一个月后,Melati接到了当地一家报社的电话"可知,第二段可描写她们的组织规模不断扩大,在当地造成影响,接受报社采访。
续写线索 去行动改变海滩状况→创建组织→成果→接受采访→采访内容→谈感想
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Melati and Isabel decided to make a positive impact straight away. They took advantage of their spare time to pick up rubbish on the beach. However, it was soon that they realized that they couldn't solve the problem on their own for there was so much plastic. After discussions and preparations, they started an organization to spread their idea among the youth, involving more youths in the movement, which proved to be a hit(现在分词involving作状语;which引导非限制性定语从句). More and more teenagers took part. In a month, they altogether collected and recycled 2.5 tons of plastic, recovering the beautiful beach.
One month later, Melati received a call from the local newspaper. The two girls were invited to an interview in which they were asked what inspired them to start the organization, what the biggest challenges were and what advice they had for young people who wanted to make changes in this world(in which引导定语从句;what引导的三个并列的宾语从句;who引导定语从句). They said the team is what keeps them going on the challenging days and added, "Keeping our team engaged and motivated has been a challenge and we are happy to have a positive influence." Melati and Isabel are heroes who make a big difference to our world.
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故事梗概 作者的家庭并不富裕,周五放学时,其他学生的家长开着汽车来接他们,而作者的妈妈却骑着一辆破旧的自行车来接他,这让作者感觉很沮丧。妈妈给作者穿的衣服也很朴素,她不懂时尚,这也让作者感觉很难堪。事实上,作者小时候很依赖妈妈,也很喜欢妈妈骑自行车载自己,不知道从什么时候开始,作者和妈妈之间的关系变得疏远了。
续写思路 根据第一段的提示句"Today Mom showed up in a raincoat"可知,妈妈穿着雨衣出现了,据此可知,该段重点描写作者见到妈妈后的尴尬场景。结合续写第二段提示句中的"Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again"可知,本段还应写出作者妈妈用雨衣盖住作者的情景。
根据续写第二段的提示句"Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in"可知,妈妈再次用雨衣将作者盖住。据此可知,该段下文将描写作者对此的感受,还可以描写妈妈在暴风雨中蹬车的情景。最后,注意升华主题:母亲的爱让作者感动哭泣。
续写线索 妈妈叫我→我感到尴尬→妈妈给我盖雨衣→我不愿意接受→暴风雨来袭→妈妈再次给我盖雨衣→我感受到母爱的温暖
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Today Mom showed up in a raincoat. Once she saw me(时间状语从句), Mom called my name excitedly. Almost everybody present looked in her direction. I swallowed hard and fixed my stare on the middle of the road, sweat forming in tiny droplets on my forehead(独立主格结构). When she tried to cover me with the back of her raincoat(时间状语从句), I simply threw it aside. In silence, I shot her a blaming glance and threw my backpack heavily into the front basket of the bike. Without a single word, I jumped onto the back seat.
Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in. Reluctantly, I pulled it over. With the wind roaring angrily and the raincoat dancing(with复合结构), it felt warm and secure inside. Mom bent forward and pedaled with all her strength, her waist twitching with tension(独立主格结构). I started to feel guilty about my coldness, tears welling up in my eyes(独立主格结构). Quietly, I put my hands around Mom's waist and gently pressed my face against her back. In the crying wind and pouring rain, I found myself hugging my mother(find+宾语+动词-ing形式作宾补), tighter than ever.
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故事梗概 作者一大早睡眼惺忪地坐大巴去参加全州性的比赛。发令枪响了,作者起跑很顺利,并以很快的速度跑完了第一英里。进入第二英里之后,作者感觉不太妙,几分钟之后,作者的体能似乎达到了极限。正在这时,一个男孩超过了作者……
续写思路 续写第一段:两句提示定首段。根据续写第一段的提示句中的"suddenly fell to the ground"可知,作者摔倒了。再结合续写第二段的提示句"In the last mile, seeing the athletes passing us one by one, I asked the boy to run without me"可知,超过作者的男孩帮助作者跑完了第二英里。因此,同学们在本段应该着重描写作者摔倒之后的感受,超过他的男孩如何跑来帮助他,以及二人如何一起跑完了第二英里。同学们在续写的过程中应注意利用对话展示帮助的过程,再通过动作和心理活动来描写作者摔倒后的心情和接受帮助时的感受。
续写第二段:尾段要有正能量。根据本段的提示句"In the last mile, seeing the athletes passing us one by one, I asked the boy to run without me"和常识可知,到了决定名次最关键的最后一英里,作者应该会让超过他的男孩丢下自己,努力去争取好名次。但男孩却拒绝了作者的好意,并认为名次并没那么重要。因此,同学们在本段可以描写二人之间的对话,并应写到二人携手完成比赛,最终获得了全场观众的欢呼。
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I gathered up my strength to speed up but suddenly fell to the ground. My world was clouded by total darkness. How I wish the ground to crack and swallow me(感叹句)! I could feel everybody staring at me, widening their mouths and not being able to utter a word(现在分词短语作状语).The sudden silence brought a sharp pain in my knees and "failure" was the only word flashing in my mind(现在分词短语作后置定语).Then the silence was broken by a deep voice, "You won't give up so easily, will you " The boy ahead of me turned back and pulled me up. "Let's run to the finishing line together!" The second mile saw its end while we ran shoulder to shoulder(时间状语从句).
In the last mile, seeing the athletes passing us one by one, I asked the boy to run without me. "You will win a place if you go by yourself." I looked at him in the eyes with sweat blurring my sight(with复合结构). The boy breathing heavily(独立主格结构), drops of sweat rolled down his face. He shook his head saying, "Winning a place is not that important." Then we smiled at each other as if we had been the only runners(虚拟语气).The last mile seemed shorter and we enjoyed the moment when we passed the finishing line together with thunderous applause(定语从句).I know they cheered for us not for winning a race but for something more important(宾语从句).
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故事梗概 Sista在和Rafi一起爬山的过程中感到饥饿。她敲开了Susan这位老妇人的门。Susan让她们去采摘了两篮子苹果,之后让女孩们把大篮子里的苹果和装有大米和干豆的袋子送往Mr. Gomez家并向他们要报酬。Mr. Gomez长期卧病在床,Mrs. Gomez不得不养家里的三个孩子。
续写思路 由续写第一段首句可知,第一段可描写女孩们在路上的心情,到了Mr. Gomez家后看到的、交流的,最后拿到了什么。由续写第二段首句可知,续写第二段可描写孩子们拿回信封,看到了里面的东西,感悟到Susan这位老妇人对Mr. Gomez一家的帮助。最后还应呼应故事起因,讲述Susan给了女孩们苹果,还需描述女孩们心情怎么样。
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The girls hit the road. All the way, the girls wrestled with the bag and the large basket of apples. "What a heavy basket!" they complained. Finally, they arrived at the Gomez's home, sweating like a pig(现在分词短语作伴随状语). Mrs. Gomez answered the door. The girls held up the food and said, "This is from Susan." Mrs. Gomez replied, "Thank you." Rafi continued, "She said to ask you for the payment, too." Mrs. Gomez handed Sista a large sealed envelope stuffed very full(过去分词短语作后置定语). Back at the farmhouse, the girls immediately handed Susan the envelope.
When Susan opened the envelope, the girls saw the payment!"Beautiful!" She began taping the crayon drawings on the wall. Rafi and Sista broke out in smiles, now knowing that what Susan had done was actually not a deal but a favor for the family (现在分词短语作状语,that引导宾语从句,what引导主语从句).After
Susan finished, she joined the girls again. "And here's your payment(完全倒装句)," she said, handing the small basket of apples to the girls(现在分词短语作状语). As they walked home(as 引导时间状语从句), Rafi and Sista enjoyed their treat. The juice was as sweet and warm as the feeling they had inside(省略关系词的定语从句).
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故事梗概 作者在五年级时意识到自己肥胖,于是害怕在公共场合笑;六年级时同学Luke嘲笑作者说紧身牛仔裤让作者显得更加肥胖,这让作者更加丧失信心,甚至不敢再追求自己的作家梦,直到有一天,作者接到表姐的来电……
续写思路 根据续写第一段的提示句" Then I started telling her and it all came out"可知,在续写第一段,同学们可就表姐听了作者的倾诉后的反应进行描写。同学们可以着重描写表姐列举作者的诸多优点以鼓励作者、增强作者的自信心。再结合续写第二段提示句"When I went back to my bedroom, I looked at myself in the mirror for a long time"可知,在表姐的帮助下,作者开始正确审视自己。
根据续写第二段的提示句"When I went back to my bedroom, I looked at myself in the mirror for a long time"可知,续写第二段应该描述作者发现自己的特长或者美丽的过程,最后注意适当升华主题:相信自己,正确对待别人的评价。
续写线索 倾诉→列举优点→警醒→返回卧室→注视镜中的自己→发现自己的美→决定→感受
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Then I started telling her and it all came out. She seemed so surprised and said how special I was(how引导宾语从句). She started listing all my good qualities, saying I shouldn't listen to people who said mean things because they were probably just feeling bad about themselves or trying to look cool(现在分词短语作伴随状语,who引导定语从句,because引导原因状语从句). Definitely, she added that I shouldn't let them tell me how to feel about myself or my body. It was like a sudden wake-up call:focusing on what other people thought of
me only made things even worse, and I must learn to love and accept myself for who I am(动名词短语作主语;what引导宾语从句;who引导宾语从句).
When I went back to my bedroom, I looked at myself in the mirror for a long time. I saw what I had never seen in myself before(what引导宾语从句), like my nice grey eyes, my cute smile, and the fact that I am beautiful in my own way(that引导同位语从句). I know some people might still make hurtful comments again, and sometimes I may feel like I am fat again, but next time I will be prepared. I will only think well of myself even when I am feeling sad, and stand up for myself when someone puts me down. In my eyes, I am perfect myself—no one can change that.
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故事梗概 Steve邀Paul外出打棒球,而Paul答应妈妈帮Thompson夫妇打扫车库卫生,之后Steve提议一同干活然后再去玩。在打扫卫生时有信封掉落,孩子们发现大量现金,在Paul想据为己有时,Steve极力打消Paul的想法。
续写思路 由第一段首句内容"‘孩子们,我烤了一个巧克力蛋糕,’汤普森太太走进车库"可知,第一段可描写Thompson太太和孩子们的对话以及两个孩子见到Thompson太太后的反应。
由第二段首句内容"当他们准备离开时,汤普森太太递给Paul一只崭新的球棒和手套"可知,第二段可描写Paul看到崭新的球棒和手套时的反应、还钱后Thompson太太的反应和对孩子们的感谢,最后是Paul的思想认识。
续写线索 做蛋糕→送蛋糕→孩子的担心→Thompson太太的反应→Paul的愧疚→送手套和棒球→还钱→感谢→认识
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"Boys, I baked a chocolate cake," Mrs Thompson walked into the garage. Catching sight of Mrs Thompson, the two froze with fear and followed her step with racing hearts. A few minutes later, they were served with large slices of cake. Delicious as the cake was(as引导的让步状语从句), they didn't have any appetite. Mrs Thompson seemed to notice something was wrong, "Boys, do you like the cake " Paul nodded with his eyes dropping to avoid any eye contact and growing guilt crept into his heart.
When they were about to leave, Mrs Thompson handed Paul a brand-new bat and glove. Paul looked atthem, his face blushing with shame. "Th... thanks so much." Voice trembling(独立主格结构), Paul then bravely poured out everything about the envelope and gave back the money he had hidden before, apologizing for his stealing. However, Mrs Thompson, instead of boiling with anger, came up to Paul, and said gently, "Oh, thank you for helping me find the envelope. I totally forgot where I had put it." In that split second, it dawned on him that what really matters is simple honesty and simple kindness.
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故事梗概 一个冬日周末的上午,Joan还在睡懒觉,一通电话吵醒了她。Joan的爸爸在电话里告诉Joan:今天是Joan的妈妈的生日,他在网上为她订了一个蛋糕,蛋糕一个半小时后送到,注意接收。Joan为忘记妈妈的生日而感到羞愧。她看着凌乱的房间,决定叫醒哥哥,在妈妈下班之前为妈妈准备一个惊喜。哥哥欣然答应了她……
续写思路 续写第一段:根据续写第一段的提示句和第二段的提示句可知,同学们在本段应就大扫除进行描写,而且还可以描写蛋糕如期送到,打扫任务按时完成。另外,同学们在本段应着重对动作进行描写,也可适当加入Joan和Mike对做家务的感悟。
续写第二段:根据上文内容可知,今天是妈妈的生日,Joan和哥哥Mike想通过整理房间给妈妈带来惊喜。结合本段提示句可知,本段可以写妈妈进家门后看到的景象,妈妈看到这些景象时的反应,孩子们对妈妈的祝福,体现其乐融融的氛围。另外,同学们在本段可利用对话推动故事的发展,并注意利用一些形容词、副词来表达感受。
【范文赏读】
The Big Cleaning plan began. Joan collected the clothes from the sofa and then put them in the water of a basin. After pouring in some washing liquids, she began to wash them by hand. Realizing the clothes were clean enough(现在分词短语作状语),Joan gently squeezed water out and hung them up to dry. Meanwhile, Mike was busy mopping the floor back and forth with all his strength, really aware of what hard work his mum had at home(形容词作状语,what引导宾语从句).They had just finished the cleaning when the express boy
came to the door(固定句型sb. had just done...when...).
With the cake placed on the table, Mum came in. "Happy birthday, Mum!" they greeted in chorus. Confused and surprised(形容词作状语),Mum stood frozen. When Mum realized what had happened(宾语从句),a warm current rose in her heart. Staring at the clean floor and the washed clothes(现在分词短语作状语),she could hardly contain her excitement and hugged them tightly. Mum said emotionally,"It is the best birthday gift I have ever had(省略了关系词的定语从句)!" Just then, Joan took out her smartphone and took a happy video named "Mum's Birthday"(过去分词短语作后置定语)and sent it to their dad.