专题10 书面表达（16区二模新题速递）
目 录
2023·上海秋考·真题 2024·上海虹口·二模
2024·上海杨浦·二模 2024·上海宝山·二模
2024·上海浦东·二模 2024·上海奉贤·二模
2024·上海青浦·二模 2024·上海闵行·二模
2024·上海黄浦·二模 2024·上海金山·二模
2024·上海普陀·二模 2024·上海嘉定·二模
2024·上海徐汇·二模 2024·上海长宁·二模
2024·上海松江·二模 2024·上海崇明·二模
2024·上海静安·二模
2023·上海秋考·真题
VI.Guided Writing (共25分)
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“ 快乐童年”的展览，邀请每个同学提供一件生活中物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读，要求描述展品以及选择原因。
内容必须包括：
1）对该物品的简要描述
2）你选择该物品参展的原因
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【点睛】：二考的作文一定程度上给考生带来了“惊吓”，因为以往真题中考查较多的作文为“回复邮（信）件，提供建议”等常见类型，而本篇文章则类似于雅思口语考试中第二部分的物品描述题。但是，只要考生平时的写作功底扎实，熟悉“三段式”作文写作方法，在面对本篇作文题时，依然可以在有限的时间内写出一篇漂亮的高分作文。
在开篇段中，考生可利用题干重点信息，适当进行翻译，交代写作背景，并可以在开篇段的最后直接表明所提供的参展物品是什么。中间段落可以分成两个自然段书写，来回答题干中的两个问题：
1、对参考物品的简要描述；
2、选择该物品参展的原因。
其中，对于第一个问题的回答可以简洁一些，回答第二个问题时，则需要注意段落内部的并列逻辑。结尾段可以用来表达对本次“快乐童年”主题展览的美好祝愿。
笔者认为，考生选择的参展物品是什么并不重要，真正重要的是，考生能够运用准确的词汇来对物品进行描述，在中间段落的原因陈述部分做到言之有理，能够体现出清晰的逻辑即可。
备考建议：考生在备考过程中，需要关注作文评分的三个维度——内容、语言、结构。
1. 内容方面要求学生能够涵盖所有要点，表达有条理。
2. 语言方面要求学生能够避免单词拼写和语法错误，避免中式思维的干扰性表达。同时要注意长短句的交错使用，准确运用高级词汇，适当升级句型，从而使文章的语言多元化、高级化。
3. 结构方面要求考生在写作的时候脉络清晰，重点突出。能够运用恰当得运用连接词这一显性手段或者代词、原词重现等隐形手段使得段内和段间的衔接自然，结构紧凑。
综合来看，2023年二考英语的主观题部分依旧能够体现本文最开始提到的三点规律，考生在备考过程中一方面要做大量的积累工作，另一方面需要提升实际应用英语的能力。
2024·上海杨浦·二模
VI. Guided Writing
56. Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
最近上海的某些餐馆和面包房采取了一项新的举措：在微信小程序上以盲盒的形式降价销售当天卖剩的食物，购买者能在小程序上看到商家信息、价格和取货时间。英语报“YOUR VOICE”专栏欢迎读者来信，就这一做法展开讨论。假定你是高三学生李华，请给专栏编辑写信，表达看法，说明理由。
(食物盲盒: mystery boxes of randomly packed leftover foods )
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2024·上海浦东·二模
VI. Guided Writing (25分)
76. Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
56. 随着人工智能的快速发展，ChatGPT已进入我们的生活，正逐渐影响我们的学习方式和体验，有人认为它会带来诸多便利，也有人心存顾虑。假设你是明启中学的学生王磊，学校贴吧就此话题正在热议，你对此很感兴趣，决定回帖响应。回帖内容应包括：
1.你是否支持使用ChatGPT;
2.你的理由。
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2024·上海黄浦·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
“人设”通常指人们向公众展示的自我，现在很多学生经常说“我的人设不能倒”。校学生会正在开展有关“人设能不能倒？（Can my public image fall apart ）”的讨论，请你在学生会邮箱投稿，表达自己的想法。你的投稿须包括（文中请不要出现真实的校名和人名）：
1）你觉得自己的人设是什么？
2）你觉得你的人设能倒吗？为什么？
2024·上海普陀·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76. 假设你是明启中学高三学生张磊，你的英国朋友Michael来信说他打算今年暑期来中国度假，你想邀请他去你的家乡游览。请你给他回信，内容需包括：
1）你最想带他去的几个地方，以及参与的活动；
2）你所提建议的理由。
2024·上海徐汇·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
在一堂写作课上，老师给出了以下三个题目供学生选择。
题目一：
以“盛年不重来,一日难再晨。”（Prime years do not return; a day's morning is hard to come by again.）为题，结合你的生活体验，写一篇文章。 题目二：
针对目前因为了升学考试而导致的学生知识结构很不平衡（unbalanced knowledge structures）的现象，你觉得有什么好的方法或手段能够改变这种情况，谈谈你的想法。 题目三：
续写“当最后一个地球人（earthling）坐在房间里时，传来了敲门声……”
如果你是这个班级的学生，你会怎么选择呢？
写一篇短文，说明你选择的题目，简述理由并介绍你的写作思路。
文章必须包括以下内容：
1.你选择的作文题目及理由。
2.你的写作思路。
2024·上海松江·二模
Ⅵ．Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120—150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76．你是新华中学的高三学生张敏。临近毕业，同学间正在互留赠言。假设李华是你的同班好友，请给他/她写一封邮件，你需要在邮件中：
1）写明你给他/她的临别赠言；
2）结合李华的高中生活经历，谈谈你送他/她该赠言的理由。
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2024·上海静安·二模
VI. Guided Writing
56. Directions: Write an English composition in 120—150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
假设你是明启中学李华，你校艺术节即将举办主题为“最美瞬间”的摄影展，捕捉“热爱生活、积极向上、全面发展”等正能量的精彩瞬间。现邀请每位同学提供自己生活中的一张照片参展，并撰写摄影作品的介绍供参观者阅读。你打算提供什么样的照片？请写一篇短文作为参展摄影作品的介绍，内容包括：
1) 对该照片的简要描述；
2) 你选择该照片参展的理由。
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2024·上海虹口·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76. 假设你是明启中学高三学生赵磊，你的外国朋友William一直对中国文化很感兴趣。近日，他在网上了解到有两个相关的线上节目（节目信息如下表所示），但他对节目选择有些茫然，想听听你的建议。请给William回复一封邮件，邮件内容须包括：
（1）推荐其中一个节目；
（2）通过比较两个节目的信息，说明你推荐该节目的理由。
节目名称 故宫里的国宝 Treasures of the Forbidden City 寻访中国美食 Exploring Chinese Cuisine
节目内容 介绍故宫里的国宝及其背后的故事 介绍中国传统美食及其烹饪方式
节目形式 纪录片 短视频
节目语言 英语解说 无字幕 (subtitles) 中文解说 英语字幕
2024·上海宝山·二模
VI. Guided Writing
76. Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
假如你是李华，是希望中学的一名学生。现在你们班级英语课上的互动形式和内容都越来越丰富了，但有一个现象需要注意，就是当老师提出的问题学生不能及时回答时，有时候老师会代替学生回答，有时候也会出现较长时间的冷场。针对这种情况，请你给老师写一封邮件，提出你的意见和建议。你的文章必须包括：
简单描述你觉得能改变这种现象的方法；
阐述你所提建议的理由。
（文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称）
2024·上海奉贤·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76.
随着中国传统文化的复兴，汉服（Hanfu）作为一种独特的服饰文化，逐渐受到人们的关注和喜爱。假如你是明启中学的学生李华，你校正在向学生们征集新社团的创建意向。作为汉服爱好者，你准备成立汉服社，请给校委会写一封邮件表达你的想法。你的邮件需包含：
1.成立该社团的目的；
2.社团拟开展的活动及原因。
2024·上海青浦·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76.
假设你是浦润中学高三学生李青。学校将举办“中国工坊”（Chinese Workshop）活动，主题涉及本地美食（cuisine）、中国传统手工艺（handicraft）、中国书法（calligraphy）和中国绘画。届时，英国姐妹学校的师生代表将到校访问。学校拟招募学生现场教授相关技能。请写一封自荐信，内容必须包括：
申请参加本次活动；
阐述你对本次文化交流活动意义的理解；
结合个人兴趣和特长，说明一项你想要教授的技能，并陈述理由。
（注：文中不得出现真实的姓名及学校名称。）
2024·上海闵行·二模
VI. Guided Writing
76. Directions: Write an English composition in120 -150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
假设你是上海市明启中学的高三学生李华，你的新西兰笔友Terry即将在下个学期来你们学校参加为期2个月的学习交流项目。他发来邮件，请你给他一些在上海生活和学习的建议。请你回复邮件。你的邮件须包含2～3条建议和相关理由。
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2024·上海金山·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120—150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76. 假设你是明启中学的学生吴磊，你在英语一考中取得了118分的成绩，现在你正面临着是否参加6月份二考的选择，请谈谈你的想法。内容需包括：
1）说明你的选择；
2）阐述你的理由。
2024·上海嘉定·二模
VI. Guided writing（25）
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
你所在的小区附近将新建一个大型游乐场，很多居民表示不满。社区管理处决定征集居民意见并召开专题讨论会，作为居民代表，写一份讨论会发言稿，内容需包括：
1. 你认为新建大型游乐场可能会存在的问题（至少2个）；
2. 你对以上问题的建议和理由。
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2024·上海长宁·二模
Ⅵ. Guided Writing
56. Directions: Write an English composition in 120 - 150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假如你是李华，准备参加《英文报》举办的主题为 “Changes in my community”的征文活动,要求用英文介绍身边发生的变化。你的征文必须包括：
1. 描述发生的变化；
2. 客观分析变化发生的原因。
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2024·上海崇明·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76. 假设你是明启中学的高三学生徐晶，你远在英国的朋友Anna前几天给你发来电子邮件，向你叙述了她未能成功入选校学生会的事情，为此一直闷闷不乐。恰巧你在图书馆看到右侧图中英国前首相丘吉尔讲过的这句名言。你给Anna回一封邮件，用这句名言来劝慰和鼓励她。在邮件中你必须：
对Anna的失败表示同情；
用你对这句名言的理解和1-2个实例来劝慰和鼓励Anna。
注：不要在邮件中提及你的真实姓名和学校等相关信息。专题10 书面表达（16区二模新题速递）
目 录
2023·上海秋考·真题 2024·上海虹口·二模
2024·上海杨浦·二模 2024·上海宝山·二模
2024·上海浦东·二模 2024·上海奉贤·二模
2024·上海青浦·二模 2024·上海闵行·二模
2024·上海黄浦·二模 2024·上海金山·二模
2024·上海普陀·二模 2024·上海嘉定·二模
2024·上海徐汇·二模 2024·上海长宁·二模
2024·上海松江·二模 2024·上海崇明·二模
2024·上海静安·二模
2023·上海秋考·真题
VI.Guided Writing (共25分)
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“ 快乐童年”的展览，邀请每个同学提供一件生活中物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读，要求描述展品以及选择原因。
内容必须包括：
1）对该物品的简要描述
2）你选择该物品参展的原因
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解题思路：
第一段：自我介绍+背景介绍+引出主题（我的展品）
第二段：对展品的展开描述。
可以选择一件与快乐童年有关的物品，秘鲁一本喜欢的童话书或者一个陪伴自己成长的玩具
第三段：选择此展品的原因。解释为什么选择了该物品参展，可以从个人情感回忆和影响等方面进行阐述，说明该物品与快乐童年之间的联系。
第四段：总结全文，深化主题
常用表达：
介绍外形： long, white, high ,round, square, big small , shape,color, pink, brown
介绍用途： be used to； be applied to； be used for different purposes
介绍材料质地：be made of/ from； steel; iron copper, plastic; leather;wood;cloth; cotton
句型：
1. It is …… centimeters long.
2.It is……centimeters in length and…… centimeters in width.
3. It is made in/of/from
4. The problem it may bring is
5. It can be used to
6. It is convenient for……
参考范文1:
I’m Wu Lei.For the "Happy Childhood" exhibition, I have chosen to exhibit my cherished Barbie doll. This special doll was given to me by my mother, and she has been my constant companion throughout my entire childhood. With her beautiful black hair, pink skirt, and captivating big eyes, she exudes a sense of elegance and charm. I enjoyed dressing her up and experimenting with different styles, making her even more stunning.
The Barbie doll holds immense sentimental value to me, as she played a significant role in my childhood. She was not just a toy; she became my confidante and my dearest friend. During moments of sadness or conflict with my peers, I would turn to her and pour out my heart. She patiently listened, providing solace and comfort during my loneliest and darkest days. Her presence was a source of strength and understanding.
Reflecting upon my childhood, memories of this beloved Barbie doll never fail to surface. She remains a symbol of unwavering companionship and a source of joy. Regardless of the circumstances, she was always there, faithfully accompanying me. Through this exhibition, I aim to share the significance of this doll in my life and evoke a sense of nostalgia and appreciation for the simple joys and cherished connections of childhood.
参考范文2：
I'm glad to know that our school is organizing an English festival with the theme “Happy Childhood”, where each student is invited to provide an item from their life to be exhibited. After much consideration, I have decided to exhibit my favorite childhood book, “The Adventures of Peter Rabbit ”
The Adventures of Peter Rabbit is a classic children's book. It tells the story of a rabbit named Peter and his exciting adventures in McGregor's Garden. I chose this book for the exhibition because it represents the joy and innocence of my early years. It reminds me of the carefree days of my childhood where I could immerse myself in the enchanting word of stories.
By exhibiting this book, I hope to share the happiness and wonder of my childhood with others. I believe that everyone deserves to experience the joy of a carefree and imaginative childhood.
语篇分析： 今年作文，围绕人与自我的新课标主题，再次体现关注学生心理健康和个人成长。关注社会生活，关注世道人心，关注励志成长，这是高考作文立足现实的体现，也是高考作文核心价值观的体现。所以考生们在备考的时候，应多关注这类个人成长的话题
备考建议：考生在备考过程中，需要关注作文评分的三个维度——内容、语言、结构。
1. 内容方面要求学生能够涵盖所有要点，表达有条理。
2. 语言方面要求学生能够避免单词拼写和语法错误，避免中式思维的干扰性表达。同时要注意长短句的交错使用，准确运用高级词汇，适当升级句型，从而使文章的语言多元化、高级化。
3. 结构方面要求考生在写作的时候脉络清晰，重点突出。能够运用恰当得运用连接词这一显性手段或者代词、原词重现等隐形手段使得段内和段间的衔接自然，结构紧凑。
【点睛】：二考的作文一定程度上给考生带来了“惊吓”，因为以往真题中考查较多的作文为“回复邮（信）件，提供建议”等常见类型，而本篇文章则类似于雅思口语考试中第二部分的物品描述题。但是，只要考生平时的写作功底扎实，熟悉“三段式”作文写作方法，在面对本篇作文题时，依然可以在有限的时间内写出一篇漂亮的高分作文。
在开篇段中，考生可利用题干重点信息，适当进行翻译，交代写作背景，并可以在开篇段的最后直接表明所提供的参展物品是什么。中间段落可以分成两个自然段书写，来回答题干中的两个问题：
1、对参考物品的简要描述；
2、选择该物品参展的原因。
其中，对于第一个问题的回答可以简洁一些，回答第二个问题时，则需要注意段落内部的并列逻辑。结尾段可以用来表达对本次“快乐童年”主题展览的美好祝愿。
笔者认为，考生选择的参展物品是什么并不重要，真正重要的是，考生能够运用准确的词汇来对物品进行描述，在中间段落的原因陈述部分做到言之有理，能够体现出清晰的逻辑即可。
备考建议：考生在备考过程中，需要关注作文评分的三个维度——内容、语言、结构。
1. 内容方面要求学生能够涵盖所有要点，表达有条理。
2. 语言方面要求学生能够避免单词拼写和语法错误，避免中式思维的干扰性表达。同时要注意长短句的交错使用，准确运用高级词汇，适当升级句型，从而使文章的语言多元化、高级化。
3. 结构方面要求考生在写作的时候脉络清晰，重点突出。能够运用恰当得运用连接词这一显性手段或者代词、原词重现等隐形手段使得段内和段间的衔接自然，结构紧凑。
综合来看，2023年二考英语的主观题部分依旧能够体现本文最开始提到的三点规律，考生在备考过程中一方面要做大量的积累工作，另一方面需要提升实际应用英语的能力。
2024·上海杨浦·二模
VI. Guided Writing
56. Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
最近上海的某些餐馆和面包房采取了一项新的举措：在微信小程序上以盲盒的形式降价销售当天卖剩的食物，购买者能在小程序上看到商家信息、价格和取货时间。英语报“YOUR VOICE”专栏欢迎读者来信，就这一做法展开讨论。假定你是高三学生李华，请给专栏编辑写信，表达看法，说明理由。
(食物盲盒: mystery boxes of randomly packed leftover foods )
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【答案】Dear Editor,
Recently, the “bread blind box” has quietly become popular. You can buy bread at 50％ discount of the original price or even lower, which is accompanied by the freshness and excitement of opening a blind box and has attracted many diners.
It is true that the emergence of the “bread blind box” not only helps the store to solve the waste and loss caused by the failure to sell the products in time, but also enables consumers to buy good and cheap food.
However, some merchants put expired bread into blind boxes for sale, violating the original intention of selling “bread blind box” to avoid food waste. We hope to strengthen market supervision to ensure quality and safety and the consumers’ rights.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给英语报“YOUR VOICE”专栏写一封信，就最近上海的某些餐馆和面包房采取了一项新的举措：在微信小程序上以盲盒的形式降价销售当天卖剩的食物现象表达看法，说明理由。
【详解】1.词汇积累
吸引：attract →draw
出现：emergence →appearance
引起：caused by →resulting from
违背：violate →go against
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：However, some merchants put expired bread into blind boxes for sale, violating the original intention of selling “bread blind box” to avoid food waste.
拓展句：However, some merchants put expired bread into blind boxes for sale, which violates the original intention of selling “bread blind box” to avoid food waste.
【点睛】【高分句型1】You can buy bread at 50％ discount of the original price or even lower, which is accompanied by the freshness and excitement of opening a blind box and has attracted many diners.(使用了which引导的非限制性定语从句)
【高分句型2】However, some merchants put expired bread into blind boxes for sale, violating the original intention of selling “bread blind box” to avoid food waste. (使用了现在分词充当结果状语)
2024·上海浦东·二模
VI. Guided Writing (25分)
76. Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
56. 随着人工智能的快速发展，ChatGPT已进入我们的生活，正逐渐影响我们的学习方式和体验，有人认为它会带来诸多便利，也有人心存顾虑。假设你是明启中学的学生王磊，学校贴吧就此话题正在热议，你对此很感兴趣，决定回帖响应。回帖内容应包括：
1.你是否支持使用ChatGPT;
2.你的理由。
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【答案】As a student at Mingqi High School, I am intrigued by the ongoing discussion surrounding the integration of ChatGPT into our lives amidst the rapid development of artificial intelligence. Regarding the use of ChatGPT, I am cautiously supportive, recognizing both its potential benefits and concerns.
Firstly I support the use of ChatGPT because of its convenience and accessibility. With ChatGPT, we have instant access to information and assistance, which can greatly enhance our learning experiences. Whether it’s clarifying concepts, practicing language skills, or receiving personalized feedback, ChatGPT offers valuable support that complements traditional learning methods.
Additionally, ChatGPT can foster creativity and exploration. By interacting with ChatGPT, students have the opportunity to engage in stimulating conversations, explore new ideas, and expand their knowledge in diverse subjects. This interactive learning experience can spark curiosity, inspire innovation, and encourage independent thinking among students.
However, I also acknowledge the need for caution when using ChatGPT. As with any technology, there are concerns about privacy, accuracy, and overreliance. It’s essential to use ChatGPT responsibly, critically evaluate the information it provides, and maintain a balance between technological assistance and independent learning.
In conclusion, while I support the use of ChatGPT as a valuable tool in education, it’s important to approach its integration thoughtfully and mindfully to maximize its benefits while addressing potential challenges. (word: 217)
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。随着人工智能的快速发展，ChatGPT已进入我们的生活，正逐渐影响我们的学习方式和体验，有人认为它会带来诸多便利，也有人心存顾虑。假设你是明启中学的学生王磊，学校贴吧就此话题正在热议，你对此很感兴趣，决定回帖响应。
【详解】1.词汇积累
提高，促进：enhance→prompt/facilitate
鼓励：inspire→motivate
重要的：essential→vital
总之：in conclusion→to conclude
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：Firstly, I support the use of ChatGPT because of its convenience and accessibility.
拓展句：Firstly, I support the use of ChatGPT because it is convenient and accessible.
【点睛】【高分句型1】Whether it’s clarifying concepts, practicing language skills, or receiving personalized feedback, ChatGPT offers valuable support that complements traditional learning methods.（运用了whether...or引导的让步状语从句）
【高分句型2】With ChatGPT, we have instant access to information and assistance, which can greatly enhance our learning experiences.（运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句）
2024·上海黄浦·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
“人设”通常指人们向公众展示的自我，现在很多学生经常说“我的人设不能倒”。校学生会正在开展有关“人设能不能倒？（Can my public image fall apart ）”的讨论，请你在学生会邮箱投稿，表达自己的想法。你的投稿须包括（文中请不要出现真实的校名和人名）：
1）你觉得自己的人设是什么？
2）你觉得你的人设能倒吗？为什么？
Can My Public Image Fall Apart
In today's social media-driven world, the concept of "personal branding" or "public image" has become increasingly significant.
For many students, including myself, the "public image" is a carefully crafted projection of one's identity, values, and aspirations. Mine, for instance, is someone who is diligent, responsible, and passionate about learning.
However, the question of whether this "public image" can fall apart is complex. Technically, any facade can crack under pressure. But the true essence of personal branding lies not just in the external projection, but in the consistency of one's character and actions. If my actions align with my "public image," then it cannot truly fall apart, regardless of external opinions or criticisms.
Moreover, I believe that a healthy approach to personal branding is one that is flexible and adaptable. It should not be a rigid mask that one is afraid to take off. Instead, it should be a reflection of one's growth and evolution.
Therefore, even if my "public image" seems to fall apart at times, it's an opportunity for self-reflection and growth, rather than a cause for concern.
In conclusion, while the external projection of a "public image" may be affected by external factors, the true essence of personal branding lies in one's internal consistency and growth.
2024·上海普陀·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76. 假设你是明启中学高三学生张磊，你的英国朋友Michael来信说他打算今年暑期来中国度假，你想邀请他去你的家乡游览。请你给他回信，内容需包括：
1）你最想带他去的几个地方，以及参与的活动；
2）你所提建议的理由。
Dear Michael,
I am thrilled to hear that you are planning to visit China this summer! As a proud student of Mingqi High School and a native of this beautiful country, I would love to invite you to explore my hometown.
There are several places I believe you would enjoy visiting. Firstly, we must visit the Forbidden City in Beijing, a magnificent testament to ancient Chinese imperial architecture. Walking through its grand gates and admiring the intricate details of its palaces would be an unforgettable experience. Secondly, the Terracotta Army in Xi'an is another must-see. Standing face-to-face with these life-sized figures is a truly awe-inspiring moment.
The reason I suggest these places is because they offer a unique insight into Chinese history and culture. The Forbidden City showcases the grandeur and sophistication of ancient China, while the Terracotta Army tells the remarkable story of Emperor Qin Shi Huang's ambition and legacy. Visiting these places would not only allow you to appreciate the beauty of China's past but also to understand its rich cultural heritage.
I am confident that a trip to my hometown would provide you with an enriching and memorable experience. I look forward to showing you the beauty and charm of China this summer.
Best regards,
Zhang Lei
2024·上海徐汇·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
在一堂写作课上，老师给出了以下三个题目供学生选择。
题目一：
以“盛年不重来,一日难再晨。”（Prime years do not return; a day's morning is hard to come by again.）为题，结合你的生活体验，写一篇文章。 题目二：
针对目前因为了升学考试而导致的学生知识结构很不平衡（unbalanced knowledge structures）的现象，你觉得有什么好的方法或手段能够改变这种情况，谈谈你的想法。 题目三：
续写“当最后一个地球人（earthling）坐在房间里时，传来了敲门声……”
如果你是这个班级的学生，你会怎么选择呢？
写一篇短文，说明你选择的题目，简述理由并介绍你的写作思路。
文章必须包括以下内容：
1.你选择的作文题目及理由。
2.你的写作思路。
VI. Guided writing
Sample 1
If I were a student in this class, I would choose topic one: "Prime years do not return; a day's morning is hard to come by again."
I am drawn to this topic because it speaks to the essence of seizing the moment and cherishing the present. It prompts reflection on the fleeting nature of time and the importance of making the most of our youth and opportunities.
My approach to this topic would be to draw from personal experiences and observations to illustrate the significance of embracing each day and living with purpose. I would share anecdotes of moments where I felt the weight of time passing, inspiring me to take action and pursue my passions.
I would explore themes of ambition, resilience, and gratitude, emphasizing the value of perseverance in the face of challenges and the importance of cultivating meaningful relationships.
Ultimately, I would aim to convey a message of empowerment and motivation, encouraging others to embrace the present moment, seize opportunities, and live with intention. By recognizing the fleeting nature of time and the preciousness of each day, we can strive to make a positive impact and create lasting memories.
Sample 2
If I were a student in this class, I would choose topic two: addressing the unbalanced knowledge structures caused by the current emphasis on entrance exams. My choice stems from the relevance and importance of this issue in the educational landscape today.
My approach to this topic would involve first acknowledging the root causes of the problem, such as excessive focus on exam-oriented learning and neglect of holistic education. Then, I would propose practical solutions like curriculum reforms to encourage interdisciplinary learning, promoting critical thinking skills over rote memorization, and incorporating project-based assessments to gauge a student's true understanding.
I believe this topic offers a chance to explore innovative educational strategies that can lead to more well-rounded and adaptable learners, better equipped to navigate the complexities of the modern world. By addressing the issue of unbalanced knowledge structures, we can foster a learning environment that values both academic achievement and personal growth.
Sample 3
If I were a student in this class, I would choose topic three: continuing the story of "When the last earthling sat in the room, there came a knock on the door..."
I am drawn to this topic because of its open-ended nature, which allows for creativity and imagination to take flight. It presents an opportunity to explore themes of loneliness, curiosity, and the unknown, offering a canvas for storytelling that can captivate both the writer and the reader.
My approach to this topic would involve delving into the emotions and thoughts of the last earthling as they hear the knock on the door. I would consider various possibilities for who or what could be on the other side of the door – perhaps it's another survivor, an alien visitor, or even a symbolic representation of hope or redemption.
I would aim to create a narrative that builds suspense and intrigue, keeping the reader engaged as they eagerly await the revelation behind the mysterious knock. Through descriptive language and vivid imagery, I would seek to evoke a sense of wonder and anticipation, leaving the reader with a lingering sense of curiosity and a desire for more.
2024·上海松江·二模
Ⅵ．Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120—150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76．你是新华中学的高三学生张敏。临近毕业，同学间正在互留赠言。假设李华是你的同班好友，请给他/她写一封邮件，你需要在邮件中：
1）写明你给他/她的临别赠言；
2）结合李华的高中生活经历，谈谈你送他/她该赠言的理由。
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Dear Li Hua,
As graduation looms ahead and our high school journey comes to an end, I find myself reflecting on our shared experiences and the memories we've created together. As your close friend and classmate, I want to leave you with a few heartfelt words.
"Always remember, the journey is more valuable than the destination." Your high school journey has been a testament to this truth. Your dedication, perseverance, and unwavering spirit have been an inspiration to me and our classmates. From your participation in various extracurricular activities to your commitment to academic excellence, you've shown us that the process of growth and learning is far more rewarding than any outcome.
Your journey ahead is bound to be filled with new challenges and opportunities. Remember to cherish each step, learn from every experience, and never stop exploring and growing. The lessons you've learned in high school will guide you, but it's the journey itself that will shape you into the person you want to be.
As we part ways, I want you to hold onto this sentiment. No matter where life takes us, let's remember to appreciate the journey and make it count.
Best wishes for your future success and happiness.
Warm regards,
Zhang Min
2024·上海静安·二模
VI. Guided Writing
56. Directions: Write an English composition in 120—150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
假设你是明启中学李华，你校艺术节即将举办主题为“最美瞬间”的摄影展，捕捉“热爱生活、积极向上、全面发展”等正能量的精彩瞬间。现邀请每位同学提供自己生活中的一张照片参展，并撰写摄影作品的介绍供参观者阅读。你打算提供什么样的照片？请写一篇短文作为参展摄影作品的介绍，内容包括：
1) 对该照片的简要描述；
2) 你选择该照片参展的理由。
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【答案】One possible version:
This is a photo depicting a sunrise over a misty mountain peak. In the image, the sun is just peeking over the horizon, casting a warm golden glow across the sky and illuminating the rolling clouds that cling to the mountain slopes.
I chose this photo for the exhibition because it captures a breathtaking moment of natural beauty and serenity. The vibrant colors of the sunrise symbolize hope and new beginnings, reflecting the theme that the art festival seeks to promote. Additionally, the tranquil atmosphere of the scene encourages viewers to pause and appreciate the wonders of nature, fostering a sense of mindfulness and gratitude. The photo invites viewers to connect with their surroundings and find inspiration in the simple joys of everyday life. It serves as a reminder to embrace each moment with enthusiasm and a positive outlook.
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于开放性作文。题目要求学生以李华的身份，参与学校艺术节即将举办的“最美瞬间”摄影展，为参展摄影作品写一篇介绍，需涵盖简要描述和选择的理由。
【详解】1. 词汇积累
描绘：depict→portrary
捕捉：capture→catch, seize
象征：symbolize→represent signify
激励某人做某事：encourage sb. to do→motivate sb. to do, inspire sb. to do
培养：foster→cultivate, develop
2. 句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：This is a photo depicting a sunrise over a misty mountain peak.
拓展句：This is a photo that depicts a sunrise over a misty mountain peak.
【点睛】[高分句型1] In the image, the sun is just peeking over the horizon, casting a warm golden glow across the sky and illuminating the rolling clouds that cling to the mountain slopes (运用了现在分词短语作状语、that引导限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2] I chose this photo for the exhibition because it captures a breathtaking moment of natural beauty and serenity. (运用了because引导原因状语从句)
2024·上海虹口·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76. 假设你是明启中学高三学生赵磊，你的外国朋友William一直对中国文化很感兴趣。近日，他在网上了解到有两个相关的线上节目（节目信息如下表所示），但他对节目选择有些茫然，想听听你的建议。请给William回复一封邮件，邮件内容须包括：
（1）推荐其中一个节目；
（2）通过比较两个节目的信息，说明你推荐该节目的理由。
节目名称 故宫里的国宝 Treasures of the Forbidden City 寻访中国美食 Exploring Chinese Cuisine
节目内容 介绍故宫里的国宝及其背后的故事 介绍中国传统美食及其烹饪方式
节目形式 纪录片 短视频
节目语言 英语解说 无字幕 (subtitles) 中文解说 英语字幕
Dear William,
I hope this email finds you well. I'm thrilled that you're interested in exploring Chinese culture, and I'm more than happy to help you choose a program to watch.
Between "Treasures of the Forbidden City" and "Exploring Chinese Cuisine," I would recommend "Treasures of the Forbidden City." This program introduces the national treasures of the Forbidden City and the stories behind them, providing a deep dive into Chinese history and culture. The program is presented as a documentary, with English narration but no subtitles, which should make it accessible for you.
While "Exploring Chinese Cuisine" is also an intriguing program that showcases traditional Chinese food and cooking methods, it's presented in Chinese with English subtitles. This might pose a challenge for you if you're not familiar with the language. By contrast, "Treasures of the Forbidden City" focuses more on the cultural and historical aspects of China, which I believe will provide you with a broader understanding of the country.
I hope my recommendation helps. Enjoy watching the program and discovering the richness of Chinese culture!
Best regards,
Zhao Lei
2024·上海宝山·二模
VI. Guided Writing
76. Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
假如你是李华，是希望中学的一名学生。现在你们班级英语课上的互动形式和内容都越来越丰富了，但有一个现象需要注意，就是当老师提出的问题学生不能及时回答时，有时候老师会代替学生回答，有时候也会出现较长时间的冷场。针对这种情况，请你给老师写一封邮件，提出你的意见和建议。你的文章必须包括：
简单描述你觉得能改变这种现象的方法；
阐述你所提建议的理由。
（文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称）
Dear Teacher,
I hope this email finds you well. As a student in our English class, I've noticed a recent trend in our classroom interactions that I feel deserves attention. When students are unable to promptly respond to questions posed during class, I've observed that sometimes you end up answering on our behalf, or there are extended periods of silence.
To address this, I suggest that we explore alternative approaches to encourage active participation. One idea is to introduce small group discussions before asking class-wide questions. This way, students can brainstorm ideas within their groups, feel more prepared, and are likely to contribute more confidently when called upon. Another suggestion is to utilize wait time effectively. When a question is posed, instead of immediately answering or calling on a student, you could pause for a few seconds to allow students to think and gather their thoughts. This brief delay can significantly increase the number of students who are willing and able to contribute.
The reason I propose these changes is that I believe active student participation is crucial for effective learning. When students are engaged and involved, they are more likely to retain information, develop critical thinking skills, and feel a sense of ownership over their learning. By fostering a classroom environment that encourages participation and thinking, we can all benefit from a richer, more dynamic learning experience.
Thank you for considering my suggestions. I look forward to our continued discussions and learning together.
Best regards,
Li Hua
2024·上海奉贤·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76.
随着中国传统文化的复兴，汉服（Hanfu）作为一种独特的服饰文化，逐渐受到人们的关注和喜爱。假如你是明启中学的学生李华，你校正在向学生们征集新社团的创建意向。作为汉服爱好者，你准备成立汉服社，请给校委会写一封邮件表达你的想法。你的邮件需包含：
1.成立该社团的目的；
2.社团拟开展的活动及原因。
Proposal for Establishing Hanfu Club at Mingqi High School
Dear School Committee,
I hope this email finds you well. My name is Li Hua, a student at Mingqi High School, and I am writing to proposc the establishment of a Hanfu Club within our school community.
The purpose of creating this club is to promote and preserve Chinese traditional culture, particularly the revival of Hanfu clothing. As we witness the resurgence of interest in traditional Chinese culture across the nation, it is crucial for us, as young students, to actively engage in this movement. By establishing a Hanfu Club, we ai m to provide a platform for students who share a passion for Hanfu to come together, learn, and celebrate our heritage.
The activities that the Hanfu Club plans to undertake include:
1. Workshops and Tutorials: We will organize workshops to teach interested students about the history of Hanfu, its significance in Chinese culture, and how to wear it correctly. These sessions will be interactive and informative, allowing students to appreciate the beauty and elegance of Hanfu.
2. Cultural Events and Performances: The club will host cultural events and performances showcasing various aspects of traditional Chinese culture, with a focus on Hanfu. This could include fashion shows, dance performances, and exhibitions, providing students with opportunities to immerse themselves in our rich cultural heritage.
3. Community Outreach: We aim to collaborate with other school clubs and local organizations to promote awareness and appreciation of Hanfu and traditional Chinese culture. This could involve participating in cultural festivals, volunteering at community events, and engaging in discussions about cultural identity and diversity.
By engaging in these activities, we believe that the Hanfu Club can contribute to fostering a greater sense of cultural pride and identity among our student body. Moreover, it offers a space for students to explore their interests, develop new skills, and build meaningful connections with their peers.
Thank you for considering our proposal. We are excited about the prospect of establishing the Hanfu Club at Mingqi High School and look forward to your support in bringing this initiative to fruition.【336 words】
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
2024·上海青浦·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76.
假设你是浦润中学高三学生李青。学校将举办“中国工坊”（Chinese Workshop）活动，主题涉及本地美食（cuisine）、中国传统手工艺（handicraft）、中国书法（calligraphy）和中国绘画。届时，英国姐妹学校的师生代表将到校访问。学校拟招募学生现场教授相关技能。请写一封自荐信，内容必须包括：
申请参加本次活动；
阐述你对本次文化交流活动意义的理解；
结合个人兴趣和特长，说明一项你想要教授的技能，并陈述理由。
（注：文中不得出现真实的姓名及学校名称。）
Dear Organizers,
I am Li Qing, a student from the third year of Pu Run High School. I am writing to express my keen interest in participating in the upcoming "Chinese Workshop" event. This event, which focuses on local cuisine, traditional handicrafts, calligraphy, and Chinese painting, is an excellent opportunity for cultural exchange between our school and the visiting delegation from our sister school in the UK.
I firmly believe that cultural exchange is crucial in promoting mutual understanding and respect between different nations. Through this workshop, we can introduce our rich cultural heritage to the visiting students and teachers, allowing them to gain a deeper understanding of Chinese culture. At the same time, we can also learn from their culture, broadening our horizons and enriching our own understanding.
Regarding the skills I would like to teach, I am particularly interested in sharing my knowledge of Chinese calligraphy. Calligraphy is not only a form of art but also a way of life in China, reflecting the beauty of nature, the harmony of the universe, and the wisdom of the ancients. I am confident that through my demonstration and guidance, the visiting students will be able to appreciate the elegance and depth of Chinese calligraphy and perhaps even develop an interest in this fascinating art form.
Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to contributing to this meaningful cultural exchange event.
Best regards,
Li Qing
2024·上海闵行·二模
VI. Guided Writing
76. Directions: Write an English composition in120 -150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
假设你是上海市明启中学的高三学生李华，你的新西兰笔友Terry即将在下个学期来你们学校参加为期2个月的学习交流项目。他发来邮件，请你给他一些在上海生活和学习的建议。请你回复邮件。你的邮件须包含2～3条建议和相关理由。
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【答案】Dear Terry,
Happy to know that you will come to our school to participate in a 2-month learning exchange program next semester, I’m writing to give you some suggestions on your life and study here.
First, it is better to live in the dormitory, which can give you more chances to communicate with your classmates and know more about our school. Besides, you can go out at night to Shanghai Bund to enjoy its beauty and learn some customs and cultures of the city. What’s the most important is that if you can’t feel at home at first, making video calls to your parents is a good way to ease your bad feelings.
Hope my advice here can be of great help to you. Looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【导语】本文是书面表达类应用文。要求考生给即将在下个学期来你们学校参加为期2个月的学习交流项目的新西兰笔友Terry发邮件，告诉他一些在上海生活和学习的建议。
【详解】1. 词汇积累
高兴的：happy→glad/delighted
参加：participate in→take part in
此外：besides→what’s more
欣赏：enjoy→appreciate
2. 句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：Besides, you can go out at night to Shanghai Bund to enjoy its beauty and learn some customs and cultures of the city.
拓展句：Besides, you can go out at night to Shanghai Bund so that you can enjoy its beauty and learn some customs and cultures of the city.
【点睛】【高分句型1】Happy to know that you will come to our school to participate in a 2-month learning exchange program next semester, I’m writing to give you some suggestions on your life and study here. (由that引导的宾语从句)
【高分句型2】First, it is better to live in the dormitory, which can give you more chances to communicate with your classmates and know more about our school. (由which引导的非限制性定语从句)
2024·上海金山·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120—150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76. 假设你是明启中学的学生吴磊，你在英语一考中取得了118分的成绩，现在你正面临着是否参加6月份二考的选择，请谈谈你的想法。内容需包括：
1）说明你的选择；
2）阐述你的理由。
My Decision on the June English Exam
As a student of Mingqi Middle School, I recently achieved a score of 118 in the first English exam. Now, faced with the choice of whether to participate in the second exam in June, I have decided to sit for it again.
My reason for this choice is two-fold. Firstly, although 118 is a respectable score, I believe I can improve upon it. I have identified areas where I made mistakes and am confident that with additional preparation, I can address these weaknesses and achieve a better score. Secondly, I value the opportunity to challenge myself. Participating in the second exam will not only help me improve my English proficiency but also teach me the importance of perseverance and self-improvement.
In conclusion, while acknowledging my performance in the first exam, I am eager to embrace the challenge and participate in the June exam. This decision is rooted in my desire to improve, learn, and push my boundaries.
2024·上海嘉定·二模
VI. Guided writing（25）
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
你所在的小区附近将新建一个大型游乐场，很多居民表示不满。社区管理处决定征集居民意见并召开专题讨论会，作为居民代表，写一份讨论会发言稿，内容需包括：
1. 你认为新建大型游乐场可能会存在的问题（至少2个）；
2. 你对以上问题的建议和理由。
Version 01:
Dear fellow residents,
As a representative of our community,I would like to address the concerns surrounding the proposed construction of a large amuscment park ncar our neighborhood.While the idea of having such a facility may initially scem cxciting,
there are several potential issues that we need to consider.
Firstly,the construction of a large amusement park may lead to increased noise levels in our area.The constant sounds of rides,music,and crowds could disrupt the peace and quiet that many of us value in our homes,affecting our overall quality of life.Secondly,there is a concern about the potential increase in traffic congestion caused by the influx of visitors to the amusement park.This could result in difficulties for residents trying to navigate our neighborhood roads,
as well as safety hazards for pedestrians and cyclists.
To address these issues,I suggest conducting thorough studies to assess the impact of the amusement park on noise levels and traffic flow.Additionally,implementing measures such as sound barricrs and alternative transportation options
can help mitigate the negative effects on our community.
It is essential to prioritize transparency and community engagement throughout this process to ensure that the concerns of residents are heard and addressed.Together,we can work towards finding solutions that enhance our
ncighborhood while minimizing any potential drawbacks.
Thank you for your attention.【223 words】
Version 02:
Ladies and Gentlemen,
As a representative of our community,I appreciate the opportunity to voice the concerns of many residents regarding the proposed construction of a large amusement park in our neighborhood.While the idea of having a
recreational facility nearby is appealing,it is crucial to consider the potential drawbacks and implications it may bring.
First and foremost,the construction of a large amusement park could lead to increased noise pollution in our neighborhood.The constant sound of rides,music,and crowds may disrupt the peace and tranquility that many of us cherish in our homes.This disturbance could adversely affect the quality of life for residents,especially those living in close proximity to the proposed site.
Furthermore, the influx of visitors to the amusement park may exacerbate traffic congestion in our area.With more vehicles on the roads,there is a risk of gridlock during peak hours,making it challenging for residents to commute to work,run errands,or simply navigate within the neighborhood.This not only adds to the frustration of residents but also poscs safcty concerns for pedestrians and cyclists sharing the same roads.
In light of these potential issues,I propose several measures to mitigate the negative impacts of the proposed amusement park. Firstly,it is essential to conduct a comprehensive environmental impact assessment to evaluate the potential noise pollution and traffic congestion that the park may generate.This assessment should involve input from cxperts in urban planning,transportation,and cnvironmental scicncc to cnsure a thorough and unbiased analysis.
Secondly,measures should be implemented to minimize noise pollution from the amusement park,such as the use of sound barriers,sound-absorbing materials,and restrictions on operating hours for certain rides and attractions. Additionally,the development of alternative transportation options,such as shuttle services or bike lanes,could help alleviate traffic congcstion and reduce reliance on private vchicles.
Lastly,community engagement and consultation should be prioritized throughout the planning and construction process to address the concerns and preferences of residents.Transparency and open communication between the developers,local authorities,and residents are essential to fostering a sense of trust and accountability in the decision-making proccss.
In conclusion,while the construction of a large amusement park may offer recreational opportunities for residents, it is imperative to carefully consider and address the potential challenges it may bring to our community.By taking proactive measures to mitigate noise pollution,alleviate traffic congestion,and engage with residents,we can ensure that the development enhances rather than detracts from the quality of life in our ncighborhood.
Thank you for your attention.【426 words】
2024·上海长宁·二模
Ⅵ. Guided Writing
56. Directions: Write an English composition in 120 - 150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假如你是李华，准备参加《英文报》举办的主题为 “Changes in my community”的征文活动,要求用英文介绍身边发生的变化。你的征文必须包括：
1. 描述发生的变化；
2. 客观分析变化发生的原因。
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【答案】Changes in my community
It’s common phenomenon in my community that electric cars take up the most parking lot in the garage instead of gas vehicles. Also, when we commute between home and company, electric scooters play a critical role in time efficiency, convenience and expense spent on transportation. People travel everywhere with faster means of transports, and make full use of digital payment system such as WeChat, Alipay.
There are a few reasons contributing to this. Firstly, with the rapid development of technology, people tend to cater to mainstream lifestyle as technology aims to create a better and modern life and has achieved what it promises, which is beneficial to the public eventually. Secondly, our society has turned into a highly efficient one that people have to speed up to adapt to. So it comes as a trend that the faster, the more efficient, the better.
I do hope technology will do us good more economically and bring more comfort to our community.
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于开放性作文，要求学生用英文介绍社区发生的变化，并客观分析变化发生的原因。
【详解】1.词汇积累
重要的：critical→crucial
利用：make use of→take advantage of
倾向于：tend to→be likely to
加速：speed up→accelerate
2.句式拓展
同义句转换
原句：Secondly, our society has turned into a highly efficient one that people have to speed up to adapt to.
拓展句：Secondly, our society has turned into such a highly efficient one that people have to speed up to adapt to it.
【点睛】【高分句型1】Firstly, with the rapid development of technology, people tend to cater to mainstream lifestyle as technology aims to create a better and modern life and has achieved what it promises, which is beneficial to the public eventually.（运用了what引导的宾语从句，which引导的非限制性定语从句和as引导的状语从句）
【高分句型2】It’s common phenomenon in my community that electric cars take up the most parking lot in the garage instead of gas vehicles.（运用了it作形式主语，that引导主语从句）
2024·上海崇明·二模
VI. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
76. 假设你是明启中学的高三学生徐晶，你远在英国的朋友Anna前几天给你发来电子邮件，向你叙述了她未能成功入选校学生会的事情，为此一直闷闷不乐。恰巧你在图书馆看到右侧图中英国前首相丘吉尔讲过的这句名言。你给Anna回一封邮件，用这句名言来劝慰和鼓励她。在邮件中你必须：
对Anna的失败表示同情；
用你对这句名言的理解和1-2个实例来劝慰和鼓励Anna。
注：不要在邮件中提及你的真实姓名和学校等相关信息。
Dear Anna,
I hope this email finds you well. I was sorry to hear about your recent disappointment of not being selected for the school student council. I know how much effort and dedication you put into the application process, and it can be devastating to fall short of your goals.
As I was browsing through the library, I came across a quote by Winston Churchill that resonated deeply with me. He said, "Success is not final, failure is not fatal: It is the courage to continue that counts." This quote reminds us that failure is not permanent, and it certainly doesn't define us. What matters is how we choose to respond to it.
Think of it as an opportunity for growth and learning. Each failure brings with it valuable lessons that can help us become stronger and wiser. Remember when you failed in your math exam last year but bounced back with an improved score the next time That showed your resilience and determination.
I believe you possess the same courage and perseverance. This setback is just a temporary halt in your journey. Keep your chin up, Anna, and don't let this failure define you. There are plenty of other opportunities and challenges waiting for you to conquer.
I'm here to support you always. Feel free to talk or vent whenever you need to. Hoping to see your bright smile again soon.
Take care,
Xu Jing
VI. Guided Writing（共25分）
档次 内容 语言 组织结构
A 9-10 9-10 5-4
B 7-8 7-8 3
C 5-6 5-6 2
D 3-4 3-4 1
E 0-2 0-2 0
评分标准：
1. 本题总分为25分，按A, B, C, D, E五个档次给分。
2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。其中，内容和语言两部分相加，得15分或以上者，可考虑加4-5分，15分以上下只能考虑加0，1，2，3分。
3. 词数少于 70，总分最多不超过10分。
4. 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。
5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写和词汇用法均可接受。
6. 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。
7. 内容要点可用不同方式表达，对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。
各档次给分要求:
内容部分：
A. 内容充实，主题突出，详略得当。
B. 内容较充实，能表达出作文要求。
C. 内容基本充实，尚能表达出作文要求。
D. 遗漏或未能写清楚主要内容，有些内容与主题无关。
E. 明显遗漏主要内容，严重离题。
F. 完全未作答或作答与本题无关。
语言部分：
A. 具有很好的语言表达能力，语法结构正确或有些小错误，主要因为使用了较复杂结构或词汇所致。句子结构多样，词汇丰富。
B. 具有较强的语言表达能力，语法结构和词汇的应用基本正确，错误主要是因为尝试较复杂结构或词汇所致。句子结构多样，词汇较丰富。
C. 有一些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。句子结构有一定的变化，词汇使用得当。
D. 语法结构与词汇错误较多，影响了对内容的理解。句子结构单调，词汇较贫乏。
E. 语法结构与词汇的错误很多，影响了对内容的理解。词不达意。
F. 完全未作答或作答与本题无关。
组织结构部分：
A. 自然地使用了语句间的连接成分，全文流畅，结构紧凑。
B. 能使用语句间连接成分，全文较流畅，结构较紧凑。
C. 能使用简单的语句间连接成分，全文内容连贯。
D. 尚能使用语句间连接成分，语言连贯性较差。
E. 缺乏语句间的连接成分，语言不连贯。
F. 完全未作答或作答与本题无关。
