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2021年新高考Ⅰ卷
读后续写分析
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试卷续写材料呈现
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
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试卷续写材料呈现
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.
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试卷续写材料呈现
Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
试卷续写材料呈现
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试卷续写要求
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. ___________________________________
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ________________________________________
词汇积累
everything was going smoothly 一切都很顺利
panicked adj. 感动恐慌的、惊慌失措的
catch the smell of 闻到……的味道
文章大意
文章主要讲述了Jenna and Jeff双胞胎俩人为他们的妈妈 准备母亲节早餐的过程。虽然准备的过程手忙脚乱 ,但是却充满了孩子与父母之间深深地爱。该故事围绕“孩子对父母的爱和感恩以及兄弟姊妹互帮互助”这一主题展开。
文本分析
梳理原文
梳理原文(记叙文五要素)
Jenna and Jeff, the father and mother
Mother's Day
The kitchen
excited → confident, careful, calm
→ frightened, panicked, powerless
→ disappointed, depressed
Jenna and Jeff tried their best to prepare breakfast for their mother.
Who
When
Where
How
(emotion)
What
(main idea)
读五要素
2. 情感
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情节分析
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情节
情感
Jenna and Jeff思考着如何给妈妈准备母亲节早餐。
内心充满期待的、无比激动的、兴致勃勃的。
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情节
情感
Jenna and Jeff准备早餐的过程,精心地煎着面包片。
自信的、小心翼翼的、谨慎地、仔细地、开心的、期待的、镇定的。
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情节
情感
厨房弄得一团糟,Jenna and Jeff分工明确、互帮互助,但是粥依然没煮出来,面包片也焦了。
面对厨房一团糟的恐惧不安与担心、手背锅烫了的痛苦难受、一直做不出母亲节早餐的焦急之情、忐忑不安、忧心忡忡。
续写段1.
情节
情感
爸爸的突然出现救场缓解了双胞胎俩人的窘境,描写爸爸是如何知道孩子们做好这一顿早餐的,描写出爸爸的耐心与孩子们的认真。结合续写第二段的既给首局可知爸爸领着孩子俩给妈妈做早餐成功了。
①孩子角度:看见爸爸出现了很激动,内心如释重负,重拾信心;
②爸爸角度:知道孩子们做早餐时内心充满了对孩子和妻子的爱以及耐心。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. ________
续写段2.
情节
情感
①描写做好早餐后孩子们将其端上楼给妈妈的动作(仔细,小心翼翼,激动,期待);②描写妈妈看见爱心早餐的动作反应;③描写双胞胎与爸爸妈妈的语言互动;④主旨升华(亲情类的名人名言)。
妈妈看见早餐后既惊喜又激动,妈妈的感动之情,以及双胞胎俩人对妈妈和爸爸的感激之情。
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. _____________________
句子衔接
(使用“TEAM”框架)
读后续写“TEAM” 框架
T: transitional sentence 衔接句
E: environment/emotion 环境/情感描写
A: action 动作描写
M: monologue/conversation 内心独白/对话
续写小贴士:
第一段
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _______________________________
①(衔接句)
They turned to father for help immediately.
与既给首句相衔接
第一段
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _______________________________
②(心理描写)
They were extremely delighted and their eyes twinkled with pleasure.
描写双胞胎看见爸爸时的快乐
第一段
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _______________________________
③(动作描写)
Their father patiently explained why the breakfast they made had been a mess and showed them the right procedures.
描写爸爸耐心地教双胞胎做早餐
第一段
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _______________________________
④(动作描写)
He also told them that problems would become smaller as long as they didn’t avoid them but confront them.
描写爸爸以早餐为例教孩子道理
第一段
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _______________________________
⑤(心理描写)
Thanks to his encouragement, the twins were confident of making a tasteful breakfast for their mother.
双胞胎受爸爸鼓舞之后重拾信心
第一段
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _______________________________
⑥(动作描写)
Jeff cleaned up the mess with a glove and cooked the porridge with great care. Jenna fried three pieces of bread on low heat and painted a heart on the first one with their mother’s favorite salad sauce absorbedly.
描写双胞胎重做早餐的过程
第一段
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _______________________________
⑦(衔接句)
They felt satisfied when everything was done.
与第二段既给首句相衔接
第二段
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ________________________________________
①(衔接句)
She stared at the breakfast on the plate, with tears of joy streaming down her face.
与既给首句相衔接
第二段
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ________________________________________
②(动作描写)
She told the twins that it was the best surprise she had ever received.
描写妈妈收到早餐后的反应
第二段
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ________________________________________
③(动作描写)
The twins were so delighted that they gave kisses on their mother’s cheeks.
描写双胞胎的回应
第二段
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ________________________________________
④(总结全文)
In addition, they learned that it was essential to seek advice from an experienced person like their father when they were in trouble. They were ready to face unpredictable challenges in their future life.
描写双胞胎从此事件中的感悟
第二段
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ________________________________________
⑤(主旨升华)
All glory and pride of the world, all come from the mother.
用关于母爱亲情的名言升华主旨
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. They turned to father for help immediately. They were extremely delighted and their eyes twinkled with pleasure. Their father patiently explained why the breakfast they made had been a mess and showed them the right procedures. He also told them that problems would become smaller as long as they didn’t avoid them but confront them. Thanks to his encouragement, the twins were confident of making a tasteful breakfast for their mother. Jeff cleaned up the mess with a glove and cooked the porridge with great care. Jenna fried three pieces of bread on low heat and painted a heart on the first one with their mother’s favorite salad sauce absorbedly. They felt satisfied when everything was done.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. She stared at the breakfast on the plate, with tears of joy streaming down her face. She told the twins that it was the best surprise she had ever received. The twins were so delighted that they gave kisses on their mother’s cheeks. In addition, they learned that it was essential to seek advice from an experienced person like their father when they were in trouble. They were ready to face unpredictable challenges in their future life. All glory and pride of the world, all come from the mother.
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