2024届高考英语二轮专题复习读后续写之句子提升 课件(共24张PPT)

(共24张PPT)
读后续写微技能
优化句子表达
提升续写技能
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To learn the scoring criteria (评分标准) of continuation writing.
Teaching objectives
To accumulate some practical advanced expressions.
To mater some important skills of sentence improving in writing.
To apply the skills to the writing practice.
高考读后续写的评分原则（部分）：
1、与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接。
2、内容的合理性。
3、应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。
4、上下文的连贯性。
第七档
创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情景融洽度高。（内容合理性）
使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解。（语言准确性）
自然有效的使用了段落间、句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰、前后呼应、意义连贯。（语篇连贯性）
续写时的问题
情节不合理
句子简单
语言苍白
主题抓不住
无话可说
时间来不及
语法错误
拼写错误
非谓语动词+独立主格
介词短语
(尤其with)
三大从句(定从，状从，同位从)
状态形容词,副词
动作链
特殊句式
(倒装,感叹,强调...)
高级
优化句子表达常见微技能
无灵主语
（物作主语）
女孩打开她的礼物盒。
The girl unwrapped her gift box.
(主) (谓) (宾)
句子扩写 Sentence expansion
(informative, specific and vivid)
形容词，可以是一个形容词，也可以是并列形容词或者形容词短语。
1.The ____________(天真的)girl unwrapped her ___________(精致的)gift box.
2.______________________(好奇又兴奋), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
3.____________________________________________________(满心喜悦), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
副词，修饰动词、形容词、其他副词或整个句子，指的是时间、地点、程度、方式等概念。
(_____)The little girl eagerly/ carefully/ merrily/ joyfully/ expectantly/ excitedly unwrapped her gift box (_____).
innocent
delicate
Curious and excited
Full of joy/ wild with joy/ overflowing with joy
技巧1：使用形容词、副词
The girl unwrapped her gift box.
女孩打开她的礼物盒。
技巧2：使用介词短语
1. ______________________________________________(毫不犹豫地), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
2. _______________(惊讶地), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
3. The girl unwrapped her gift box __________________(非常小心地).
4. The girl __________________________(黑色长发的) unwrapped her delicate gift box.
Without any hesitation/ a second thought
In surprise
with long black hair
with great care
The girl unwrapped her gift box.
女孩打开她的礼物盒。
技巧3：使用非谓语动词
1. _________________________________(兴奋地尖叫着), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
2. _________________________________(感受到了温暖), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
3. _________________________________(受到妈妈鼓励), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
Feeling a sense of warmth
Screaming with excitement
Encouraged by her mom
注意：
1.非谓语的选择要考虑状语和主句的主语是否一致，以及动词和主语的主被动关系；
2.非谓语动词结构也可以放在句中或句尾，如果放在句中，需要一前一后出现两个逗号。请看下面例句：
①The girl, screaming with excitement, unwrapped her gift box.
②The girl unwrapped her gift box, screaming with excitement.
The girl unwrapped her gift box.
女孩打开她的礼物盒。
技巧4：使用with 复合结构/独立主格结构
with的复合结构
1. ______________________________(张大了嘴巴), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
独立主格结构
2. ____________________________(心狂跳), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
3. _______________________(眼睛闪耀光芒), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
With her mouth wide open
Her heart beating wildly
Her eyes sparkling
The girl unwrapped her gift box.
女孩打开她的礼物盒。
技巧5：使用从句
定语从句
1.The girl unwrapped her gift box __________________________________________________________(一直期待的).
2.The girl unwrapped her gift box __________________________________________________________(用红丝带/蝴蝶结系好的).
名词性从句
1.____________________________________(好奇里面是什么), the girl unwrapped her gift box.
状语从句
The girl unwrapped her gift box______________________________(好像它是这世界上最珍贵的礼物).
which she had been looking forward to
which was tied with red ribbon(/ with a red bow)
Curious about what was inside
as if it were the most precious gift in the world
“句无霸”
Curious about what was inside, the innocent girl unwrapped the delicate gift box which was tied with a red bow.
With her heart beating wildly, the innocent girl, encouraged by her mom, unwrapped her delicate gift box which she had been looking forward to for a long time.
The girl unwrapped her gift box.
女孩打开她的礼物盒。
小试牛刀
The children swam in the Devil River.
a. 介词短语(作时间状语)：在一个美丽的黄昏__________________________________________________
b. 非谓语作定语：在当地人的带领下_______________________________________________
c. 同位语：一个可怕的(terrify)地方____________________________________________________________
d. 定语从句：一个没人敢接近的可怕的地方___________________________________________________
合并：
_______________________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________________
at a beautiful dusk
led by the local people
a terrifying place
a terrifying place where nobody dared to approach
At a beautiful dusk, the children, led by the local people, swam in the Devil River, a terrifying place where nobody dared to approach.
Practice
1. ______________________________(迅速解开(unbuckle安全带), he threw open the folding doors and jumped out. (2021年8月 广东大联考)
2. ___________________(所有事情解决了)，Father urged us to give Mum a big surprise. (2021.6浙江高考)
3. _________________________________(为掩盖自己的糟糕行为), the terrified boy glued the pieces together hastily and put the vase back to its place. (2021年广州一模)
4. ________________________________________(犹豫地瞥了一眼巧克力) , the boy timidly (羞怯，胆小) raised his head before his mother. (2021年广州一模)
Quickly unbuckling his seat belt
To hide/cover his terrible action
微技能 1. 非谓语动词
Glancing at the chocolate with hesitation
Everything settled
微技能2. 独立主格结构
1. 躺在床上，利奥情不自禁地盯着唯一的窗户，眼泪顺着脸颊流了下来。(2021.8 省实等四校联考)
Lying in the bed, Leo couldn’t help staring at the only window, _________________________________
________________________.
2. Jeremy意识到有什么不对劲，站在那里一动不动，他的心都快碎了。(2021.8广东大联考)
Realizing there was something wrong, Jeremy stood frozen, _________________________.
3. 一股(surge)幸福与温暖流遍全身，妈妈轻轻地亲了两姐妹。（2020.11 温州一模）
_____________________________________________________________, Mom kissed the two sisters gently .
tears rolling / pouring / streaming down his cheeks
his heart almost broken
A surge of happiness and warmth running through her
1. However, ___________________________________
__________________(面对儿子紧张的双眼) and the suspicious looks of the other family members, Ben’s mother remained calm.（2021年广州一模）
2. The twins raised their heads, __________________
______________________. (眼里充满了好奇) (2021年6月新高考I卷)
3. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, _______________________________________(妈妈在拍摄一年一度的活动). (2021年1月浙江高考)
微技能3. 介词短语（尤其with结构）
in the face of / faced with her son’s nervous eyes
with eyes full of / filled with curiosity
with my mom filming the annual event
微技能4. 三大从句(定从、状从、同位从)
1.We learned a lesson from the experience that _______
___________________________________________(善良和同情会对我们的生活产生巨大变化) our life. (2021年湖北12校联考)
2. As he had already lied, he was determined to deny everything to the end, ____________________________
____________(无论他妈妈多么生气). (2021年广州一模)
3. There was a time when I didn’t believe that. ______
__________________(改变我主意的是) was a seemingly small event that took place in 1953. (广东省2022届高三8月摸底考)
4. Terri was transformed to a nearby hospital, ________
_____________________________________ (在那里她花了五天才恢复) the attack. (2021年8月广东大联考)
kindness
and sympathy would make a big difference to
where she spent five days recovering from
no matter how angry his mom became/was
What changed my mind
1. He ______________ (放下) his hand, ___________ (瞥了一眼) cautiously at Carter and ______________ __________(低下) his head. （2021.4 浙江三地联考）
2. Meanwhile, the twins ___________ (准备) the breakfast tray, __________ (加) a card they had made and walked out of the kitchen. (2021新高考I卷)
3. At that time, Henry, who noticed my embarrass-ment, came to my aid. He _______________ (擦去) my tears, ______________ (弯下腰来) and ________ (系) a beautiful knot. “It’s done.” （2021年南通市二模）
微技能 6. 动作链
put down
glanced
lowered / dropped
prepared
added
wiped away
bent down
tied
1. _______________________ (既惊讶又感动), hardly had Terri struggled to stand up with her walker when she saw Douglas. (2021年8月广东大联考)
2. ________________(尴尬的), I looked down, but managed to nod my head. (广东省2022届高三8月考)
3. __________, ___________ (慢慢地，痛苦地), he propped (支撑) himself up on one elbow and strained to turn to his first look at the world through the window. (2021年省实四校联考)
微技能 7. 表状态的形容词，副词
Surprised and moved
Embarrassed
Slowly painfully
微写作
请运用本节课所学多样化的句子优化微技能完成下列小段落。
1. 收到她儿子的来信后，那个可怜的母亲感到焦虑不安，整个人都崩溃了，眼泪顺着脸颊不停流淌。多么感人的一幕呀！(状语从句，独立主格，感叹句)
After hearing from her son, the poor mother felt _____________________.
(1) so that broke down, tears keeping rolling/pouring/streaming down her cheeks. What a moving scene!
(2) that tore her into pieces and tears kep What a moving scene!
2. 演出一结束，她就冲到亨利身边，紧紧地抱着他，向他表示感谢。亨利满意地点点头，朝她竖起了大拇指(thumb v.)，“你的努力终于得到了回报”。(动作链，介词短语，非谓语)
The moment the performance was over, she
____________________________________________________. “Your efforts paid off finally”.
(1) rushed to Henry, hugged him tightly and said her thanks to him. Henry nodded with satisfaction，thumbing up at her
(2) rushed to Henry, hugged him tightly and expressed her gratitude to him. Henry nodded with satisfaction, thumbing up at her
Thank you