2024届高三英语读后续写遇险类--解救被绑架的奶奶 讲义
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 续写的词数应为150左右。
I received an urgent call from my aunt. " Turn on the TV. Granny's on the Channel 10 news. " It turned out that Granny had made a sandwich run for her office and was stopped at a red light downtown. She had the window rolled down to enjoy the breeze when a man rushed up to the driver's side window, intending to carjack （劫车）her.
我接到姑妈的紧急电话。“打开电视。奶奶在第十频道的新闻。”原来，奶奶跑去办公室吃三明治，在市中心的红灯前被拦了下来。她让车窗摇下来享受微风，这时一名男子冲到驾驶员侧车窗，打算劫车(劫车）她
Now, what the would-be carjacker couldn't have known was that this woman simply wasn't " a granny" . This was Nancy Johnson — the same woman who owned and lived on a Texas cattle farm, drove her own tractors, and dug her own post holes to lay fence. The week before, she had shot a rattlesnake and chopped off its head with a shovel . She was the proud owner of the new minivan （小型货车）she was driving. In other words, she was not your normal kind of granny.
现在，这位想劫车的人不可能知道的是，这个女人根本不是“老奶奶”。这就是南希·约翰逊，她拥有并生活在得克萨斯州的一个养牛场，开着自己的拖拉机，自己挖柱子洞来铺设围栏。前一周，她射杀了一条响尾蛇，并用铲子砍下了它的头。她是这辆新小型货车的骄傲车主(小型货车）她在开车。换句话说，她不是你那种正常的奶奶。
The carjacker leaned into the open window, one hand stuffed in his pocket, and said, " Get out of this car. I have a gun, and I will shoot you.” A statement like that would have terrified anyone else. Instead, Granny saw it as a challenge." If you really had a gun in your pocket, you would've pulled it out and led with that first," she shouted at him, apparently unworried.
劫车者靠在打开的车窗上，一只手插在口袋里，说：“滚出这辆车。我有枪，我会开枪打你的。”这样的话会吓坏其他人。相反，奶奶认为这是一个挑战。“如果你口袋里真的有枪，你会先把枪拔出来，然后领着枪走，”她对他喊道，显然并不担心。
She was right. The criminal didn't have a gun. He instead reached into the window, grabbed her, and tried to pull her out of the van. He pulled open the door, wildly catching Granny's arms. Granny leaned her shoulder inside to press the horn （喇叭) and started yelling to make people around notice what was happening. With the door now open, she held tight the steering wheel with one arm and started kicking the man anywhere her foot could make contact. This tall woman had quite a reach.
她是对的。罪犯没有枪。相反，他把手伸进窗户，抓住她，试图把她从货车里拉出来。他推开门，疯狂地抓住奶奶的胳膊。奶奶把肩膀靠在里面按喇叭(喇叭)开始大喊大叫，让周围的人注意到发生了什么。现在车门打开了，她用一只手臂紧紧抓住方向盘，开始在她脚能接触到的任何地方踢那个男人。这个高个子的女人够伸出手的。
第一段：After a wellplaced kick, the man was done, and attempted to release her and run.
______________________________________________________________
第二段Later, we asked “Granny, don't you realize you could have got yourself killed！”
________________________________________________________________
读后续写文本分析：
学生存在的问题：
1. 原文阅读理解不到位。人物身份混乱，不知道the tall woman就是granny；没有找准故事情节发展伏笔，与原文情景融洽度不高。
2．提示句理解不到位。第一段提示句暗示granny在搏斗中逐渐占据上风， 劫车贼企图松手逃跑，这时应该写granny不放手，如何成功将其抓住的。但学生习作中，许多学生还是继续描写劫车贼拿出刀子，继续搏斗，或者逃脱成功，granny开车追赶等情节，与提示句和原文衔接不够。第二段提示句中暗示续写部分应该写granny当时的心理变化和从granny身上学到的优秀品质（勇敢，无畏， 冷静）。但许多学生偏离主题，变成寻求帮助或帮助别人。或者主题升华太高，把这种行为当成一种责任。
3．语言表达错误，
1) 语言表达不地道，词汇和句式表达不丰富
2）仍然存在汉语式思维表达。如：granny crashed the car.; in a nobody street; the phone don’t’ useful；
3）词性不分，仅仅是单词的罗列。如：meet difficult or dangerous; Granny was bravery.
4) 不规则动词变化掌握不牢。如：catch –catched；know—knowed
5) 单词拼写错误。语法错误较多，基本句子结构写不对。
1）run can’t solve the problems. 2）the phone don’t useful
3) suddenly, he taken the knife; 4) we prevent he got himself killed.；
5) the carjacker were caught.; 6） I know how protect myself.
7）书写虽好，但句不成句。句与句之间缺少衔接过渡。
4. 字数不够，书写潦草，卷面划痕多， 书写不规范。
5. 存在抄袭原文的现象。
【参考答案】
After a well-placed kick, the man was done, and attempted to release her and run. But Granny wouldn’t stand for that. It was now her turn to grab onto him, her hands made strong from hours and hours of farm work. That poor fool didn’t have a chance. She shouted for help to bystanders, and they rushed to her aid. With Granny leading the charge, a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk, holding him there until the police came. A silver-haired woman had just made a citizen’s arrest.
Later, we asked “Granny, don’t you realize you could have got yourself hilled ” Granny’s answer was surprisingly amusing and simple: “I wasn’t scared of that little idiot. I’d had my brand-new van for less than two days and a pack of good sandwiches for my office. And there was no way he was going to get either of those!” But we all learned an important lesson from her that day- the same lesson that had been building through the years. She encouraged us to push boundaries and expectations. But even more so, she taught us fearlessness.
【解析】
本文是一篇读后续写。本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者的奶奶开车上街。在停车等红绿灯的时候遇到了拦路抢劫犯。作者的奶奶没有被吓到，反而在路上和抢劫犯作斗争。抓住了抢劫犯，并因此上了电视。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：在踢了一脚后，这名男子被击倒，并试图放开她并逃跑……，所以这一段应该写歹徒试图逃跑而奶奶伙同其他人制服歹徒，并因此上了电视。要详细写奶奶是如何抓住那个歹徒的。第二段开头是：后来，我们问:“奶奶，难道你没有意识到你会被人盯上吗 ” 本段应该写奶奶不畏惧任何坏人。并且通过奶奶的事迹，教会了我们一些人身哲理：我们要无所畏惧。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:with的复合结构With Granny leading the charge, a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk, holding him there until the police came；定语从句：But we all learned an important lesson from her that day- the same lesson that had been building through the years等。高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
I received an urgent call from my aunt. " Turn on the TV. Granny's on the Channel 10 news. " It turned out that Granny had made a sandwich run for her office and was stopped at a red light downtown. She had the window rolled down to enjoy the breeze when a man rushed up to the driver's side window, intending to carjack （劫车）her.
我接到姑妈的紧急电话。“打开电视。奶奶在第十频道的新闻。”原来，奶奶跑去办公室吃三明治，在市中心的红灯前被拦了下来。她让车窗摇下来享受微风，这时一名男子冲到驾驶员侧车窗，打算劫车(劫车）她
Now, what the would-be carjacker couldn't have known was that this woman simply wasn't " a granny" . This was Nancy Johnson — the same woman who owned and lived on a Texas cattle farm, drove her own tractors, and dug her own post holes to lay fence. The week before, she had shot a rattlesnake and chopped off its head with a shovel . She was the proud owner of the new minivan （小型货车）she was driving. In other words, she was not your normal kind of granny.
现在，这位想劫车的人不可能知道的是，这个女人根本不是“老奶奶”。这就是南希·约翰逊，她拥有并生活在得克萨斯州的一个养牛场，开着自己的拖拉机，自己挖柱子洞来铺设围栏。前一周，她射杀了一条响尾蛇，并用铲子砍下了它的头。她是这辆新小型货车的骄傲车主(小型货车）她在开车。换句话说，她不是你那种正常的奶奶。
The carjacker leaned into the open window, one hand stuffed in his pocket, and said, " Get out of this car. I have a gun, and I will shoot you.” A statement like that would have terrified anyone else. Instead, Granny saw it as a challenge." If you really had a gun in your pocket, you would've pulled it out and led with that first," she shouted at him, apparently unworried.
劫车者靠在打开的车窗上，一只手插在口袋里，说：“滚出这辆车。我有枪，我会开枪打你的。”这样的话会吓坏其他人。相反，奶奶认为这是一个挑战。“如果你口袋里真的有枪，你会先把枪拔出来，然后领着枪走，”她对他喊道，显然并不担心。
She was right. The criminal didn't have a gun. He instead reached into the window, grabbed her, and tried to pull her out of the van. He pulled open the door, wildly catching Granny's arms. Granny leaned her shoulder inside to press the horn （喇叭) and started yelling to make people around notice what was happening. With the door now open, she held tight the steering wheel with one arm and started kicking the man anywhere her foot could make contact. This tall woman had quite a reach.
她是对的。罪犯没有枪。相反，他把手伸进窗户，抓住她，试图把她从货车里拉出来。他推开门，疯狂地抓住奶奶的胳膊。奶奶把肩膀靠在里面按喇叭(喇叭)开始大喊大叫，让周围的人注意到发生了什么。现在车门打开了，她用一只手臂紧紧抓住方向盘，开始在她脚能接触到的任何地方踢那个男人。这个高个子的女人够伸出手的。
第一段：After a wellplaced kick, the man was done, and attempted to release her and run.
______________________________________________________________
第二段Later, we asked “Granny, don't you realize you could have got yourself killed！”
________________________________________________________________
读后续写文本分析：
学生存在的问题：
1. 原文阅读理解不到位。人物身份混乱，不知道the tall woman就是granny；没有找准故事情节发展伏笔，与原文情景融洽度不高。
2．提示句理解不到位。第一段提示句暗示granny在搏斗中逐渐占据上风， 劫车贼企图松手逃跑，这时应该写granny不放手，如何成功将其抓住的。但学生习作中，许多学生还是继续描写劫车贼拿出刀子，继续搏斗，或者逃脱成功，granny开车追赶等情节，与提示句和原文衔接不够。第二段提示句中暗示续写部分应该写granny当时的心理变化和从granny身上学到的优秀品质（勇敢，无畏， 冷静）。但许多学生偏离主题，变成寻求帮助或帮助别人。或者主题升华太高，把这种行为当成一种责任。
3．语言表达错误，
1) 语言表达不地道，词汇和句式表达不丰富
2）仍然存在汉语式思维表达。如：granny crashed the car.; in a nobody street; the phone don’t’ useful；
3）词性不分，仅仅是单词的罗列。如：meet difficult or dangerous; Granny was bravery.
4) 不规则动词变化掌握不牢。如：catch –catched；know—knowed
5) 单词拼写错误。语法错误较多，基本句子结构写不对。
1）run can’t solve the problems. 2）the phone don’t useful
3) suddenly, he taken the knife; 4) we prevent he got himself killed.；
5) the carjacker were caught.; 6） I know how protect myself.
7）书写虽好，但句不成句。句与句之间缺少衔接过渡。
4. 字数不够，书写潦草，卷面划痕多， 书写不规范。
5. 存在抄袭原文的现象。
【参考答案】
After a well-placed kick, the man was done, and attempted to release her and run. But Granny wouldn’t stand for that. It was now her turn to grab onto him, her hands made strong from hours and hours of farm work. That poor fool didn’t have a chance. She shouted for help to bystanders, and they rushed to her aid. With Granny leading the charge, a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk, holding him there until the police came. A silver-haired woman had just made a citizen’s arrest.
Later, we asked “Granny, don’t you realize you could have got yourself hilled ” Granny’s answer was surprisingly amusing and simple: “I wasn’t scared of that little idiot. I’d had my brand-new van for less than two days and a pack of good sandwiches for my office. And there was no way he was going to get either of those!” But we all learned an important lesson from her that day- the same lesson that had been building through the years. She encouraged us to push boundaries and expectations. But even more so, she taught us fearlessness.
【解析】
本文是一篇读后续写。本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者的奶奶开车上街。在停车等红绿灯的时候遇到了拦路抢劫犯。作者的奶奶没有被吓到，反而在路上和抢劫犯作斗争。抓住了抢劫犯，并因此上了电视。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：在踢了一脚后，这名男子被击倒，并试图放开她并逃跑……，所以这一段应该写歹徒试图逃跑而奶奶伙同其他人制服歹徒，并因此上了电视。要详细写奶奶是如何抓住那个歹徒的。第二段开头是：后来，我们问:“奶奶，难道你没有意识到你会被人盯上吗 ” 本段应该写奶奶不畏惧任何坏人。并且通过奶奶的事迹，教会了我们一些人身哲理：我们要无所畏惧。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:with的复合结构With Granny leading the charge, a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk, holding him there until the police came；定语从句：But we all learned an important lesson from her that day- the same lesson that had been building through the years等。高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。