专题07 书面表达(读后续写)-2024年高考英语满分冲刺攻略(命题分析+应试技巧+真题回顾(2013-2023))(学生版+教师版)

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中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
专题07 书面表达(读后续写)
命题分析
读后续写新题型自2016年以来一直备受青睐,在未来三年可能都会写作之主流。认真研究读后续写,会发现其写作式很有规律和技巧的,学生只要好好备考,基本上可以拿高分。
读后续写是一种将阅读与写作相结合的考察形式,要求考生对所读材料进行续写,将其发展成一篇与给定材料有所衔接,情节架构自然,而且结构完整的短文(教育部考试中心,2015年)。2015年8月,教育部考试中心发布《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明》(高考综合改革试验省份试用)(第一版),明确了考试内容和要求,考试形式与试卷结构,提供了一份参考试卷。首次提出了写作新题型:读后续写或概要写作,两种形式在不同考次不定期交替使用。参考试卷的读后续写,记叙文,试题未提供标题。紧接着,2016年浙江首次迎来了读后续写的考试时代。
近七年(2016-2023)年高考英语书面表达(应用文)考查情况一览表
卷别 来源 体裁 原文字数 话题
2023年 新高考全国I卷&II 卷 记叙文 323 写作取得成功
2022年 新高考全国I卷 记叙文 317 患病男孩的奔跑
浙江卷1月 记叙文 345 我和学霸的搭档
2021年 新高考全国I卷 记叙文 306 母亲节的礼物
浙江卷6月 记叙文 315 暑假打工薪水
浙江卷1月 记叙文 348 万圣节南瓜趣事
2020年 全新高考全国I卷 记叙文 325 帮助弱者脱困
浙江卷7月 记叙文 330 与熊对抗脱险
浙江卷1月 记叙文 350 抚慰狗狗心伤
2018 浙江卷6月 记叙文 325 度假骑马迷路
2017 浙江卷6月 记叙文 348 骑行途中偶遇狼
浙江卷11月 记叙文 343 健忘妈妈趣事
2016 浙江卷10月 记叙文 335 吵架出走迷路
题型解读
从上表中我们不难发现,近几年高考读后续写真题命题形式体现在以下四个方面:
一、有标题,情感(亲情)话题(如2021年新高考全国Ⅰ卷)
二、无标题,情感(亲情)话题(如2022年新高考全国Ⅰ卷)
三、无标题,情感(人与动物)话题(如2020年浙江卷1月)
四、无标题,遇险话题(如2020年浙江卷7月)
五、有标题,开放性话题(如2017年浙江卷11月)
读后续写多以记叙文故事类文章为主,而且主题多与社会,自然和自我相结合。比如2020年1月浙江真题反应了社会的人际关系。因此,做好读后续写的英语写作的前提是研究记叙文的行文规律以及了解读后续学的考察能力:
一、把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力。学生需要了解所给短文的主要内容,清楚其关键词和语言结构的使用情况,并通过续写短文表现出来。
二、语言运用的准确性和丰富性。学生能准确、恰当地使用所学词汇和语言结构,还能够根据内容需要使用较多、较复杂的词汇和语言结构。
三、对语篇结构的把控能力。学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系,所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语之间要有连贯性,所续写的短文内语句要连贯、有序。
四、创造性思维能力。学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容,包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。
评分标准
一、评分原则
1.本题总分为25分,按七个档次进行评分。
2.评分时,主要从内容、语言表达和篇章结构三个方面考查,具体为:
(1)续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。
(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
4.评分时还应注意:
(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分;
(2)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受;
(3)书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分。
二、各档次给分范围和要求
第七档(22-25分)
—创造了丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高:
—使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错误很少,且完全不影响理解:
—自然有效地使用了段落间、句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯。
第六档(18-21分)
—创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原文情境融洽度较高:
—使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有个别错误,但不影响理解:
—比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第五档(15-17分)
—创造了基本合理的内容,有一定的逻辑性,续写基本完整,与原文情境相关:
—使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达方式不够多样性,表达有些许错误,但基本不影响理解:
—使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第四档(11-14分)
—创造了基本完整的故事内容,但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强,与原文情境基本相关:
—使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误和不恰当之处,个别部分影响理解:
—尚有语句衔接的意识,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯。
第三档(6-10分)
—内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题,续写不够完整,与原文有一定程度脱节:
—所用的词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误较多且比较低级,影响理解:
—未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义欠连贯。
第二档(1-5分)
—内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题,或有部分内容抄自原文,续写不完整,与原文情境基本脱节:
—所使用的词汇非常有限,语法结构单调,错误极多,严重影响理解:
—几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯。
第一档0分
—未作答:所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判:所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
三、高考评分解读
总体来看,读后续写以读为辅,以写为主,其目标是考查学生的综合语言运用能力。评分标准是评分的依据和绝对标准。
依据评分标准,读后续写主要考查内容创作和语言运用两个方面。评卷时,评卷老师先根据考生所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
阅卷老师在阅卷时,主要考虑以下内容:
1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;
2.内容的丰富性;
3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;
4.上下文的连贯性。
应对策略
(1)精读文章,确定文章线索。
每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路,通过精读文章,找到该篇文章的写作线索,例如什么人(who)什么时间(when)在什么地方(where)因为什么(why)做了什么事儿(what),最后有了什么发展(how)。这样分析有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜”。
(2)仔细审题,明确续写要求。
一般短文后面的“注意”都有对此短文续写的具体要求,如字数限制、使用几处下划线关键词语、续写段落的首句提示,这样考生能做到“心中有数”。
(3)回扣原文,揣摩续写思路。
根据文章后面的要求,再次快速回读短文,抓住文章的思路,结合段首的提示语,最终确定续写段落的思路,同时结合文章划线词语提示,确定续写段落的内容。
(4)拟写草稿,修改错词病句。
在确定了思路和内容之后,最关键的就是结合提示语或者文中划线的关键词语拟写草稿。拟写时,注意句子结构的多样性、语言的丰富性,并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用,使上下文连贯。
(5)标出续写部分中使用到的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语。
这一点可以帮助考生检查关键词语的使用情况并根据情况做出修改。最后在誊写文字时,务必做到“字迹工整、清晰”。
真题回顾
浙江卷读后续写:
浙江卷读后续写以遇险类话题为主,但是2021年开始转移到情感话题,侧重亲情和友情,后期备考中可以适当练习情感相关的写作。其要求考生在所给短文的基础上续写,并且结合划线词,构成一篇合理的完整故事。读后续写对学生学习语言知识的综合运用能力有着较高的要求。同时也考查学生们的发散思维能力和创造性思维能力。续写故事时,要求考生读懂文章,然后明白故事的发展进程、前因后果、人物特征和情感等。在此基础上,考生必须沿着文章的思路,根据提供的线索,恰当进行发挥,并且要使用给出的至少5个词语等。故事的结尾也必须符合原文的主题意义。
新高考读后续写:
新高考主要以情感类话题为主, 侧重学校生活,人间大爱和亲情。要求考生结合上文,进行一定的情节续写的同时,还要准确把握细节,最后进行主旨的升华。考生只要对继续吻行文规律掌握到位,利用语言知识,是可以把文章续写好的。下面以近几年的话题分类,讲解高考实战题型的出题思路和规律:
一、无标题,情感话题
【2023 年新高考全国I&II 卷】
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your
stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I
sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on PaulRevere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I
wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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【答案】
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I was informed that I won
the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. I was so happy to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher. “I knew you’d win! I am proud of you. You made it!” he said excitedly. Then came the big day. When I was invited to the stage to receive the award, I expressed my thanks to my teacher. I said, “It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher. Without your recognition and guidance, I couldn’t have written this article. Again thank you very much!”
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. My teacher was waiting for me. Holding my hands,
he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer, so keep writing.” “You know I didn’t like writing before, but now I am crazy about it! I will try my best to create good works.” I said seriously. Since then, I have written many good
works and now I am a famous writer. I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.
【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者上中学的时候,社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛。作
者不喜欢写作,于是想都没想就拒绝了。但是在老师的鼓励下,作者同意试一试。作者在写作过程中虽然
很累,但是没有放弃,坚持下来了。在作者最终完成写作时,作者感到写作让他很快乐,他已经不在乎输
赢了。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后,当我几乎忘记比赛的时候,传来了消息。”和第二段首句“颁奖后我
去了老师的办公室。”可知,第一段可描写作者获得比赛一等奖,在颁奖典礼上作者表达了对社会老师的
感激。
②由第二段首句内容“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知,第二段可描写老师鼓励作者继续写作,自此
作者坚持写作取得了成功,作者将这一切归功于自己的老师。
2.续写线索:比赛消息传来——作者获奖——高兴——颁奖典礼感谢老师——颁奖后来到老师办公室——老师告诉作者坚持写作——作者表达了对写作的喜爱——作者写作取得了成功——感激老师
3.词汇激活
行为类
①告知:inform/tell
②成功做到:make it/succeed
③表达:express/convey
情绪类
①高兴的:happy/glad
②激动地:excitedly/with excitement
典例一 (2022 新高考全国I卷)
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well — he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer — that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
参考范文
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I placed my hand on his shoulder and said, “Just participate to the best of your ability. I believe in you.” He looked at me, his eyes widening. “You know you are not special in my eyes, and I am always proud of your strong determination.” I encouraged him with a sincere tone. He moved his lips several times but couldn’t say a word. I just smiled at him. “So do you still decide to give up the running ” “No.” he said, looking back at the running track. “Then go you!” I said. He ran for his warm-up exercise.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The race began. It seemed that the runway was extremely long for David with a heart disease. But he ran as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses. As the other runners charged to the finish line, I felt a little nervous, fearing that he would be laughed at. However, classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him. “Come on! We are proud of you!” they shouted enthusiastically. Eventually, David made it. As he was announced to win the 18th, I saw his usual toothy smile returned. He eventually proved himself to be a strong-willed man even though he wasn’t the first.
【分析】
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. [我安抚的动作、语言呼应原文]I placed my hand on his shoulder and said, “Just participate to the best of your ability. I believe in you.” [他吃惊的表情]He looked at me, his eyes widening. [我的鼓励层层递进] “You know you are not special in my eyes, and I am always proud of your strong determination.” I encouraged him with a sincere tone. [他受到鼓舞]He moved his lips several times but couldn’t say a word. I just smiled at him. “So do you still decide to give up the running ” [衔接下一段开头语] “No.” he said, looking back at the running track. “Then go you!” I said. He ran for his warm-up exercise.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The race began. [强调比赛的困难]It seemed that the runway was extremely long for David with a heart disease. [突出David的品质]But he ran as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses. As the other runners charged to the finish line, I felt a little nervous, fearing that he would be laughed at. [同学们的表现照应原文“thought of him as a regular kid”]However, classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him. “Come on! We are proud of you!” they shouted enthusiastically. Eventually, David made it. [照应原文人物特征]As he was announced to win the 18th, I saw his usual toothy smile returned. [点明主旨]He eventually proved himself to be a strong-willed man even though he wasn’t the first.
典例二 (2022 浙江卷1月)
When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate (命运)would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren't there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn't mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn't look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn't say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis (假说), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I was outmatched. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn't sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 结部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后, 请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1. We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
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Para 2. One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
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【答案】We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully, I failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back. I just kept nodding when he asked me whether it is ok to do this way or that way. I thought it was impossible to persuade him into accepting my views, so I didn’t want to waste our time to discuss. I started to wait to leave immediately we arrived at the place, and so did he. I just hoped that the presentation day could come earlier.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. I felt so sorry to hear that and I thought I should visit him in any case. He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits. I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect it. We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time. Our hard work paid off and Dr. Henderson’s was very satisfied with our wonderful findings. From this project, we also learned the significance of teammates. Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.
【解析】
【分析】本文以事件为线索展开,讲述了作者在一次课上被分配了一个不想要的队友共同完成作业共享分数,他们从最开始的无法配合到最后圆满完成任务的温暖故事。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由续写段落第一段首句内容“我们开始定期见面起草计划。”可知,第一段可描写见面起草过程中所发生的事情以及过程中的心理活动。
②由续写段落第二段首句内容“有一天,我听说他因为严重的疾病住院了”可知,第二段可描写我的搭档住院以后我们是如何应对并最终圆满完成作业的。
2.续写线索:见面起草——我害怕说错,基本保持沉默,只是顺从他的想法——搭档生病住院——探望取得互信——合作圆满完成——懂得了团队合作的意义
3.词汇激活
行为类
①与…分享:share sth with sb / exchange sth with sb
②没能做:fail to do/be unable to do /not make it
③到达:arrived at /get to /reach/
④走进:step into/enter/come into
情绪类
①惊讶的:surprised/amazed/shocked
②满意的:satisfied /content/ pleased
【点睛】[高分句型1]. I started to wait to leave immediately we arrived at the place, and so did he.(使用了“so+(助)动词+主语”表示“……也一样”的倒装句型)
[高分句型2]. Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully, I failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back.(使用了though 引导的让步状语从句)
典例三 (2021 浙江卷6月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass(超过)anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football. , preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号).
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:When I brought my paycheck home--it was $ 119--my dad wanted to talk to me.
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Paragraph2:I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.
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参考答案:
When I brought my paycheck home--it was$119--my dad wanted to talk to me. Knowing that he would talk about my earnings, I pulled a long face and intended to simply walk past him and slip back to my bedroom. “Come here, son.” Dad exclaimed, wearing an accessible expression. My heart sank. What I had been looking forward to—a dreamy new football outfit would finally give way to family expenses. Reluctantly, I inched forward and submitted the paycheck. However, Dad slid the paycheck back into my hand, saying in a tender voice, “You've grown up. You have every right to decide what to do with the money.”
I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. My previous desperation was immediately erased by great bills. I stepped closer and hugged him tightly. Just at that moment I noticed his grey hair and stiff neck. Memories of his usual cry of pain on the neck came crowding in. I realized how much he had contributed to the family through his tiring work of being a trucker. Tears began to blur my vision, “Dad, thanks for your hard work these years. I shouldn’t have been so selfish and not willing to contribute my money.” On that day, I began to understand Dad’s world and it seemed that he was also on the way into my world.
【解析】
1.段落续写
①由第一段首句内容“拿到119美元的工资了,父亲却有话说。”可知,第一段可描写作者的工资到手后,父亲想用这笔钱,得知消息后,作者的情绪变化。经过和爸爸意味深长的谈话后,虽然作者仍有想要的东西,“迫于压力”,却还是把钱交给了父亲.
②由第二段首句内容“父亲竟然让我自己决定如何支配这份工资。”可知,第二段主要描述作者内心活动以及最终的决定,突出孩子长大后,对父亲和家人多了一份理解。
2.续写线索高兴——不情愿——惊讶——开心--发现--主动贡献
3.词汇
行为类
① 发现:talk/ find
②奉献:offer to contribute
情绪类
①不情愿的:unwilling/surprised/happy/willing
②自豪地:understanding and thankful
二、有标题,情感话题
典例一 (2021 新高考全国I卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右。
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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【答案】As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Father’s appearing was like a savior to the two children. Under the guidance of their father, they took positive actions and started all over again. They made the bread and then went on cooking porridge. Father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success. It was all right this time. Delicious breakfast was ready. How happy they were!
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When their mother saw the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, she was very surprised. It was not only the gift, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. The two children could finish cooking a breakfast, which she didn’t expect. The children said loudly, “Happy Mother’s Day!” Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them again and again.
【解析】
【分析】本文以母亲节为线索展开,讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐,自己动手,做起饭餐来,但是不幸的是,他们连连失败,后来在父亲的帮助下,获得成功,他们把早餐献给亲爱的母亲,妈妈非常感动的故事。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时,他们的父亲出现了。”可知,第一段可描写他们的父亲指导帮助他们准备早餐。
②由第二段首句内容“这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上,叫醒了他们的母亲。”可知,第二段可描写母亲收到孩子们的礼物早餐,非常感动。
2.续写线索:帮助——指导——积极——献礼——感动
3.词汇激活
行为类
①帮助:help/assist
②.指导:guide/conduct
③.献礼:present a gift/give a gift
情绪类
①.积极:positive/positively/take positive actions
②.感动:moved/touched
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success. (which引导的非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]. It was not only the breakfast, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. (使用not only…but (also)句型及强调句型)
三、无标题,遇险话题
典例三 (2020 浙江卷7月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal:to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter(相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’ t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar(吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
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参考范文1
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Roars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness. The noises turned Elli and I pale with horror. I feared that the giant would destroy our whole fence. He roared repeatedly, shattering what was left of the silence. Elli seized this opportunity to take some pictures of the bear. The animal’s noises echoed all around us. We betrayed our feelings by huddling together, shivering with fear. After thoroughly scrutinizing the area, he trotted forward a few steps.
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to be saved. Elli used pepper spray again to buy us enough time. But this time the bear became more alert. He regarded us with the merciless necessity of hunger, so we throw all the food we have. He then turned away and started devouring. As we were climbing the rope ladder, Elli prayed like thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound.
参考范文2
A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp. Roars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness. The noises turned Elli and I pale with horror. I feared that the giant would destroy our whole fence.He roared repeatedly, shattering what was left of the silence. Elli seized this opportunity to take some pictures of the bear. The animal’s noises echoed all around us. We betrayed our feelings by huddling together, shivering with fear. After thoroughly scrutinizing the area, he trotted forward a few steps.
At that very moment,the helicopter arrived. My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to be saved. Elli used pepper spray again to buy us enough time. But this time the bear became more alert.He regarded us with the merciless necessity of hunger, so we throw all the food we have. He then turned away and started devouring. As we were climbing the rope ladder, Elli prayed like a thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound. (154词,21分)
四、有标题,开放性话题
典例四 (2017 浙江卷11月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
A vacation with my mother
I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother-loving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept:” You stand outside the door and play lookout while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids ” “What ! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections. If a strange family showed upon her front doorsteps, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para1:
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.
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Para2:
We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.
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参考范文:
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Thinking of this tent, Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. When the door of our car opened, Mom stormed out instantly and urged us to put up the tent. David and I were asked to pick up some branches to build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mom had already lain down the grass comfortably in front of the tent, talking merrily with a local boy at our age, who kept glancing at this tent curiously. Soon we learnt that the boy in rags even didn’t have a home to live in. Of course, Mom “forgot” to take this tent with us again.
We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. And we also had a nice time living with my grandparents during that trip. But what impressed me most was that tent, which was forgotten deliberately by Mom. Though she did love going camping, she presented that poor boy with this tent out of sympathy. It was Mom that made my childhood colorful. And it was also she that showed me the true meaning of giving.
五、无标题,人与动物话题
典例五 (2020 浙江卷1月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions(情绪) get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay ” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn’t.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up ” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”
It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
Para 1. Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.
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Para 2. A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university.
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范文赏析:
Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. Poppy approached with caution, trying not to scare the puppy. Sure enough, it was only moments later that the ball of fur lifted its head out of the box to peek at its new home and its new friend. Mom and Dad watched delightedly as the two made acquaintances. They were glad to see Poppy coming back to her usual self, guiding the little dog on daily walks and even introducing to it her favorite toys.
A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. Hearing his bags unloaded on the driveway, Poppy’s ears pricked up and suddenly she was on all fours. The boy was greeted with a cheerful high-pitched bark. Then the front door popped open and Poppy darted to his embrace, followed by the little one who licked his fingers fondly. Smiling ever so bright, he called out to his parents, who tugged him in for a long hug. Despite the chill autumn wind, their home was filled with the warmth of love and reunion.
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专题07 书面表达(读后续写)
命题分析
读后续写新题型自2016年以来一直备受青睐,在未来三年可能都会写作之主流。认真研究读后续写,会发现其写作式很有规律和技巧的,学生只要好好备考,基本上可以拿高分。
读后续写是一种将阅读与写作相结合的考察形式,要求考生对所读材料进行续写,将其发展成一篇与给定材料有所衔接,情节架构自然,而且结构完整的短文(教育部考试中心,2015年)。2015年8月,教育部考试中心发布《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明》(高考综合改革试验省份试用)(第一版),明确了考试内容和要求,考试形式与试卷结构,提供了一份参考试卷。首次提出了写作新题型:读后续写或概要写作,两种形式在不同考次不定期交替使用。参考试卷的读后续写,记叙文,试题未提供标题。紧接着,2016年浙江首次迎来了读后续写的考试时代。
近七年(2016-2023)年高考英语书面表达(应用文)考查情况一览表
卷别 来源 体裁 原文字数 话题
2023年 新高考全国I卷&II 卷 记叙文 323 写作取得成功
2022年 新高考全国I卷 记叙文 317 患病男孩的奔跑
浙江卷1月 记叙文 345 我和学霸的搭档
2021年 新高考全国I卷 记叙文 306 母亲节的礼物
浙江卷6月 记叙文 315 暑假打工薪水
浙江卷1月 记叙文 348 万圣节南瓜趣事
2020年 全新高考全国I卷 记叙文 325 帮助弱者脱困
浙江卷7月 记叙文 330 与熊对抗脱险
浙江卷1月 记叙文 350 抚慰狗狗心伤
2018 浙江卷6月 记叙文 325 度假骑马迷路
2017 浙江卷6月 记叙文 348 骑行途中偶遇狼
浙江卷11月 记叙文 343 健忘妈妈趣事
2016 浙江卷10月 记叙文 335 吵架出走迷路
题型解读
从上表中我们不难发现,近几年高考读后续写真题命题形式体现在以下四个方面:
一、有标题,情感(亲情)话题(如2021年新高考全国Ⅰ卷)
二、无标题,情感(亲情)话题(如2022年新高考全国Ⅰ卷)
三、无标题,情感(人与动物)话题(如2020年浙江卷1月)
四、无标题,遇险话题(如2020年浙江卷7月)
五、有标题,开放性话题(如2017年浙江卷11月)
读后续写多以记叙文故事类文章为主,而且主题多与社会,自然和自我相结合。比如2020年1月浙江真题反应了社会的人际关系。因此,做好读后续写的英语写作的前提是研究记叙文的行文规律以及了解读后续学的考察能力:
一、把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力。学生需要了解所给短文的主要内容,清楚其关键词和语言结构的使用情况,并通过续写短文表现出来。
二、语言运用的准确性和丰富性。学生能准确、恰当地使用所学词汇和语言结构,还能够根据内容需要使用较多、较复杂的词汇和语言结构。
三、对语篇结构的把控能力。学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系,所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语之间要有连贯性,所续写的短文内语句要连贯、有序。
四、创造性思维能力。学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容,包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。
评分标准
一、评分原则
1.本题总分为25分,按七个档次进行评分。
2.评分时,主要从内容、语言表达和篇章结构三个方面考查,具体为:
(1)续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。
(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
4.评分时还应注意:
(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分;
(2)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受;
(3)书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分。
二、各档次给分范围和要求
第七档(22-25分)
—创造了丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高:
—使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错误很少,且完全不影响理解:
—自然有效地使用了段落间、句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯。
第六档(18-21分)
—创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原文情境融洽度较高:
—使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有个别错误,但不影响理解:
—比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第五档(15-17分)
—创造了基本合理的内容,有一定的逻辑性,续写基本完整,与原文情境相关:
—使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达方式不够多样性,表达有些许错误,但基本不影响理解:
—使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第四档(11-14分)
—创造了基本完整的故事内容,但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强,与原文情境基本相关:
—使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误和不恰当之处,个别部分影响理解:
—尚有语句衔接的意识,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯。
第三档(6-10分)
—内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题,续写不够完整,与原文有一定程度脱节:
—所用的词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误较多且比较低级,影响理解:
—未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义欠连贯。
第二档(1-5分)
—内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题,或有部分内容抄自原文,续写不完整,与原文情境基本脱节:
—所使用的词汇非常有限,语法结构单调,错误极多,严重影响理解:
—几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯。
第一档0分
—未作答:所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判:所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
三、高考评分解读
总体来看,读后续写以读为辅,以写为主,其目标是考查学生的综合语言运用能力。评分标准是评分的依据和绝对标准。
依据评分标准,读后续写主要考查内容创作和语言运用两个方面。评卷时,评卷老师先根据考生所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
阅卷老师在阅卷时,主要考虑以下内容:
1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;
2.内容的丰富性;
3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;
4.上下文的连贯性。
应对策略
(1)精读文章,确定文章线索。
每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路,通过精读文章,找到该篇文章的写作线索,例如什么人(who)什么时间(when)在什么地方(where)因为什么(why)做了什么事儿(what),最后有了什么发展(how)。这样分析有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜”。
(2)仔细审题,明确续写要求。
一般短文后面的“注意”都有对此短文续写的具体要求,如字数限制、使用几处下划线关键词语、续写段落的首句提示,这样考生能做到“心中有数”。
(3)回扣原文,揣摩续写思路。
根据文章后面的要求,再次快速回读短文,抓住文章的思路,结合段首的提示语,最终确定续写段落的思路,同时结合文章划线词语提示,确定续写段落的内容。
(4)拟写草稿,修改错词病句。
在确定了思路和内容之后,最关键的就是结合提示语或者文中划线的关键词语拟写草稿。拟写时,注意句子结构的多样性、语言的丰富性,并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用,使上下文连贯。
(5)标出续写部分中使用到的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语。
这一点可以帮助考生检查关键词语的使用情况并根据情况做出修改。最后在誊写文字时,务必做到“字迹工整、清晰”。
真题回顾
浙江卷读后续写:
浙江卷读后续写以遇险类话题为主,但是2021年开始转移到情感话题,侧重亲情和友情,后期备考中可以适当练习情感相关的写作。其要求考生在所给短文的基础上续写,并且结合划线词,构成一篇合理的完整故事。读后续写对学生学习语言知识的综合运用能力有着较高的要求。同时也考查学生们的发散思维能力和创造性思维能力。续写故事时,要求考生读懂文章,然后明白故事的发展进程、前因后果、人物特征和情感等。在此基础上,考生必须沿着文章的思路,根据提供的线索,恰当进行发挥,并且要使用给出的至少5个词语等。故事的结尾也必须符合原文的主题意义。
新高考读后续写:
新高考主要以情感类话题为主, 侧重学校生活,人间大爱和亲情。要求考生结合上文,进行一定的情节续写的同时,还要准确把握细节,最后进行主旨的升华。考生只要对继续吻行文规律掌握到位,利用语言知识,是可以把文章续写好的。下面以近几年的话题分类,讲解高考实战题型的出题思路和规律:
一、无标题,情感话题
【2023 年新高考全国I&II 卷】
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your
stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I
sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on PaulRevere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I
wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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典例一 (2022 新高考全国I卷)
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well — he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer — that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
典例二 (2022 浙江卷1月)
When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate (命运)would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren't there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn't mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn't look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn't say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis (假说), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I was outmatched. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn't sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 结部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后, 请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1. We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
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Para 2. One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
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典例三 (2021 浙江卷6月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass(超过)anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football. , preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号).
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:When I brought my paycheck home--it was $ 119--my dad wanted to talk to me.
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Paragraph2:I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.
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二、有标题,情感话题
典例一 (2021 新高考全国I卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右。
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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三、无标题,遇险话题
典例三 (2020 浙江卷7月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal:to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter(相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’ t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar(吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
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四、有标题,开放性话题
典例四 (2017 浙江卷11月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
A vacation with my mother
I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother-loving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept:” You stand outside the door and play lookout while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids ” “What ! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections. If a strange family showed upon her front doorsteps, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para1:
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.
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Para2:
We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.
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五、无标题,人与动物话题
典例五 (2020 浙江卷1月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions(情绪) get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay ” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn’t.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up ” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”
It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
Para 1. Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.
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Para 2. A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university.
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