读后续写示例与写作训练3
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One day when I was 12, my mother gave me an order: I was to walk to the public library, and borrow at least one book for the summer. This was one more weapon for her to defeat my strange problem — inability to read.
In the library, I found my way into the“Children’s Room.” I sat down on the floor and pulled a few books off the shelf at random. The cover of a book caught my eye. It presented a picture of a beagle. I had recently had a beagle, the first and only animal companion I ever had as a child. He was my secret sharer, but one morning, he was gone, given away to someone who had the space and the money to care for him. I never forgot my beagle.
There on the book’s cover was a beagle which looked identical to my dog. I ran my fingers over the picture of the dog on the cover. My eyes ran across the title, Amos, the Beagle with a Plan. Unknowingly, I had read the title. Without opening the book, I borrowed it from the library for the summer.
Under the shade of a bush, I started to read about Amos. I read very, very slowly with difficulty. Though pages were turned slowly, I got the main idea of the story about a dog who, like mine, had been separated from his family and who finally found his way back home. That dog was my dog, and I was the little boy in the book. At the end of the story, my mind continued the final scene of reunion, on and on, until my own lost dog and I were, in my mind, running together. When I finished my reading, a stream of tears ran down my checks. It was until then I realized that I have overcome my inability to read. Thus, this was the very first book for me which I had read through and deeply immersed in real sense.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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My mother’s call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something:
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Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：故事中的“我”从小患有阅读障碍，某年暑假，母亲鼓励“我”必须完成一本书的阅读，于是“我”便去图书馆寻找读物，偶然间，“我”发现了一本故事书，该书的封面上是一只猎犬，这让“我”想起了自己曾经养过的小狗。在兴趣的驱使下，我成功的读完了整本书，克服了阅读障碍。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为患有阅读障碍的“我”和“我”的母亲。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。故事主人公“我”患有阅读障碍，主人公的母亲为了让他克服这个障碍要求他暑假必须完成一本书的阅读，于是“我”便去图书馆借书，一本关于猎犬的书引起了主人公的兴趣，他想起了自己曾经的宠物，最后主人公成功看完了整本书克服了他的阅读障碍。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是主人公“我”开始对阅读产生兴趣，每个礼拜都会去图书馆借书看书，并且一直到大学他也从未停止过对阅读的热爱，毕业后“我”拿到了文学博士学位，并且成为了一名作家。续写第一段：“我”开始热爱上了阅读，在母亲的鼓励下，我每天坚持去图书馆阅读各类书籍，并且我也尝试着自己去写一些故事，到了大学，“我”主修文学，对阅读的热爱丝毫不减。续写第二段：“我”成功拿到了文学博士的学位，母亲为我感到骄傲，并且“我”也找到了人生的方向，即成为一名作家，而这一切完全归功于那一年暑假我读的第一本书。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“Did he overcome his inability to read Did he go on reading What was the influence of the first book ”等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What would happened after he got his PhD in literature Why would he choose literature as his major What would he do for his future career And how did it related to his very first book 等”
[参考范文]
My mother’s call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something: Books could be incredibly wonderful and I was going to read them. From then on, I kept going to the library more often. In the library, I was exposed to different types of books: detective stories, love stories, poems, fables and so on. My mother encouraged me to spend time doing my favorite thing. Day by day, I was finally succeed in overcoming my inability to read. Moreover, I began to write some stories by myself. When I went to the university, I chose literature as my major.
Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature. I never told my mother about my “miraculous” experience that summer. It was the very first book that made me what I am today. This year, I began writing my first book carried the topic of my beagle. I hope it could be my lifelong career. The power of the words has held. (174words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。第一段写了“我”在母亲的鼓励之下，一直坚持不懈的阅读，在图书馆里接触不同类型的各类书籍，最终完全的克服了阅读障碍，本着对阅读的热爱，“我”在大学将文学作为主修。第二段，我成功获得文学博士学位，并且成为了一名作家，开始了第一本书的写作，而“我”的第一本书正是关于我的猎犬，与上文对我人生产生影响的第一本书交相呼应，符合故事发展的逻辑，升华了主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 展开充分想象
续写有助于培养想象力，但是想象力贵在合理。这个“理”指的就是生活的逻辑性。续写部分不应该游离开头部分，应该是开头部分的顺理成章的发展。如文中第二段所给开头写到Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature. 以首句为前提，进行合理的想象，即“我”在毕业之后，开始了我的写作生涯，并且成为了一名作家，这符合文中发展，又充满了丰富的想象，使得文章成为了一个有机的整体。
注意前后照应
续写要注意前后照应，防止自相矛盾。特别是给出开头的续写，必须要与上文紧密联系，使上下文融为一体。如文章前面提到“我”所读的第一本书对“我”的意义非同小可，所以在续写中，“我”开始了一本书的写作，而第一本书的主题刚好就是关于“我”的曾经养过的猎犬，与前文相互照应。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was 1st January, the first day of the year and a holiday for me. What luck! I decided to withdraw some money from the bank, The bank person, an elderly gentleman with a white beard, replied indifferently as usual to my polite “Happy New Year.” He nodded and I sat in front of him.
Minutes passed but he didn’t raise his head.
Then very hesitantly I put my form and booklet in front of him. He was busy filling up entries in his register. After a few minutes he took my form and from his cabinet he took out a very thick file, from which he started filling in my details, I sat there wondering why we had computerized banking if we were still filling in forms and register.
After waiting for a few more minutes, in which I showed all signs of being impatient, I asked him if my work was done. The moment I said the words, I felt as if a bomb had fallen on him. He shouted, “Nothing is done, it will take time!”
Just then I saw his morning cup of tea which had been lying there for the last ten minutes, untouched. The tea had tuned almost cold while he was doing his work. Suddenly I felt what this man, who had been working at this counter for the last God-knows-how-many years, must be feeling when customers like me come who are always in a hurry to get their work done. We do not even feel the need to thank them for being there, He must be feeling so anxious that “here comes another person who will push me for doing his work first.”
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Thinking of this, I told him, “Sir, you please hare your tea, I am not in a hurry.”
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What he said really touched my heart.
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When I spent the last summer with my Grandmother in Warwick, N.Y., she sent me down to the grocery store with a long shopping list. Staring at all the items on the list, I wondered how I could find anything on the packed shelves around me. But she insisted.
I walked up to the counter. Behind it was a lady like no one I’d ever seen. Thick glasses rested on the tip of her nose, gray hair was piled on her head.
“Excuse me,” I said. She looked up.
“You’re that Clements kid,” she said. “I’m Miss e closer and let me get a look at you.” She pushed her glasses up her nose. “I want to be able to describe you to the policeman if something goes missing from the store.”
“I’m not a thief!” I was shocked. I was too young to be a thief!
“Maybe not, but I can tell you’ve got potential.” She went back to reading her newspaper.
“I need to get these.” I said, holding up my list.
“So Go get them.” She ignored my need of a favor, “There’s no one here except you and me and I’m not your servant, so I suggest you start looking for the things on that list.”
The store was a puzzle to a seven-year-old, and it seemed to hold all the goods in the world. I complained about this task Grandma had set me to do while trying to find all the items on my list. It took me one and half an hour to do it, and the mean lady behind the counter didn’t even bother to look at me once.
I visited Miss Bee a couple of times a week that summer. Sometimes she sold me an old newspaper instead of one that was the latest. Sometimes she overcharged me and didn’t seem embarrassed when I pointed it out. Going to the store was more like going into battle, but I survived. By summer’s end the shopping trip that had once taken me an hour was done in 15 minutes. The morning I was to return to Brooklyn, I stopped in to get a soda.
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“All right, Miss Potential, what did you learn this summer ” she said.
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One day after all those years my seven-year-old daughter came to me with homework troubles.
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A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.
I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there something I can do to help ” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
“No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.”
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.
It was from the bank. There had been a robbery!
Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.
She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that ” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!”
Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.
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As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
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The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur…
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Sara Savick remembers one special Easter when she was nine years old. Her parents gave her a baby duckling in a yellow basket.
“Mom said later that she bought the little duck because she felt sorry for it,” recalled Sara. The people at the pet store colored the feathers pink for Easter. Sara named the duck Pinky.
Sara’s mother really didn’t think the baby duck would survive very long. But to her surprise, Pinky grew and got stronger and stronger. Soon, the little duckling was a healthy, hungry duck with white feathers.
“We fed Pinky oatmeal, cooked and uncooked, and small pieces of vegetables,” said Sara. Pinky lived inside the house with Sara and her family. She specially fancied taking baths with Sara. Everyone treated Pinky as a family member.
But just when everything appeared to be perfect, the night of the “talk” came. Sara’s Mom and Dad sat her down, explaining that the best thing for Pinky was to live a normal duck life, with other ducks. It was not natural for ducks to live indoors with a family, her father told her. He added Pinky needed to swim in ponds and do all the same things that ducks in the wild do.
Sara started to cry, knowing what was going to happen. Sara’s parents decided to take Pinky to a park, which was two miles away. There was a pond with a lot of other ducks. Pinky would have the chance to live a natural life and Sara could still visit her.
The big day came, Sara and her parents put Pinky in a box and drove to the park. Sara said that Pinky did not look happy; maybe Pinky was convinced that she was a human, not a duck.
注意:
所续写短文的词数应为 l50 左右;
续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
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Everyone was sad when they left Pinky at the pond, even Sara’s father.
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The next morning, when looking out of the kitchen window, Sara couldn’t believe her eyes!
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5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为 150 左右。
Last year at Christmas time, my wife, three children and I were on our way from Paris to Nice. Somehow everything went wrong. Our hotels were “tourist traps” and our rented car broke down. On Christmas Eve, when we checked into a dirty hotel in Nice, there was no Christmas spirit in our hearts.
It was raining and cold when we went out to eat. We found a small restaurant poorly decorated for the holiday. Only five tables in the restaurant were taken. There were two German couples, two French families, and an American sailor, by himself. They were eating in stony silence except the sailor. He was writing a letter, and a half-smile lighted his face. In the corner a piano player was listlessly (无精打采地) playing Christmas music.
All of us were interrupted by an old French flower woman through the front door. She had a worn overcoat and her old shoes were wet. Carrying her basket of flowers, she went from one table to another. No one bought any. Exhausted and frustrated, she sat down at a table.
The sailor finished his meal and got up to leave. Putting on his coat, he walked over to the flower woman’s table.
“Merry Christmas,” he said, smiling and picking out a handful of flowers. “How much are they ” “Two francs, sir.”
The sailor put a twenty franc note in the woman’s hand.
“I don’t have change, sir,” she said. “I'll get some from the waiter.”
“No, ma’am,” said the sailor, leaning over and kissing the ancient cheek. “This is my Christmas present for you.”
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
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Then the sailor headed for our table with the flowers in his hand.
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The piano player came alive and pleasant music filled the whole room.
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答案与解析
1.【参考答案】
Para.1:
Thinking of this, I told him, “Sir, you please have your tea, I am not in a hurry.” This gentleman, who had worked in the bank for so many years, suddenly looked up at me and for the first time we had eye contact—he had never made eye contact earlier. I saw a different person there. He gave me a rare smile and said, “It is an everyday affair with me; you are not in a hurry but somebody else will come who will be in a hurry.”
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What he said really touched my heart. I felt that all this time I thought of him as a robot, someone who was there for my convenience, but today I suddenly felt a strange bond with him. I promised to be more friendly with people who help me with my work and be thankful that they are there for me. In our life, we need to put ourselves in other people’s shoes to imagine their thoughts. In this way, we can understand others better.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知， 作者在去银行取钱的时候，遇到银行一位上了年纪的白胡子绅士。作者等了几分钟感觉不耐烦，然后看到了他早上喝的那杯茶，已经放了十分钟了，一动也不动。于是换位思考了对方的感受。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：想到这里，我对他说:“先生，请您用茶吧，我不赶时间。”。所以后文应该是讲述听到作者的话后，这位在银行工作了这么多年的先生突然抬头看着我，我们第一次有了眼神交流——他之前从未有过这样的交流。第二段开头是：他的话真的触动了我的心。接着应当写作者的感悟，突然感到与他之间有一种奇怪的纽带。我承诺对帮助自己工作的人更加友好，并感谢他们一直支持自己。在我们的生活中，我们需要设身处地为别人着想，想象他们的想法。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：look up at，eye contact，help with等高级词汇；定语从句This gentleman, who had worked in the bank for so many years, suddenly looked up at me and for the first time we had eye contact—he had never made eye contact earlier.；主语从句What he said really touched my heart.等高级句式。
2.【参考答案】
“All right, Miss Potential, what did you learn this summer ” she said. “That you’re mean!” Finally I said it, thinking that I didn’t have to deal with her again. To my amazement, Miss Bee laughed. “I know what you think of me,” she continued “Well, I don’t care! Each of us is put on this earth for a reason. I believe my job is to teach every child I meet some life lessons to help them.” Embarrassed as I felt, I wasn’t capable of appreciating the lessons she claimed she had given me at such a young age, and I only wished that I had never met her. After checking out, I left.
One day after all those years my seven-year-old daughter came to me with homework troubles. “It’s too hard,” she complained. “Could you finish my math problems for me ” “If I do it for you how will you ever learn to do it yourself ” I responded. Suddenly, I was back at the grocery store where I had learned the hard way to deal with my own business. Had I ever been overcharged since As my daughter went back to her homework, I wondered: Had Miss Bee really taught me something all those years ago Sure enough, she didn’t act as a servant but she inspired potential in a seven-year-old.
【解析】
短文叙述了作者七岁时，祖母列出了采购的清单，让作者独自去购买采购清单上的物品，而商店的女店主对待作者一点也不友好，她甚至怀疑作者是小偷，不帮助作者选购商品，让作者独自去采购，而那个夏天作者多次去那里购物，而这位女店主，不是多收她钱，就是卖给作者过期的报纸，在这里购物如同战争一样，不过作者都能成功的应付。一天早上，作者又去了这家商店……续写由此开始。
第一段续写以“All right, Miss Potential, what did you learn this summer ” she said.开始，这时要着重续写，女店主与作者的对话，女店主说了什么，作者是怎么想的。第二段续写以One day after all those years my seven-year-old daughter came to me with homework troubles.开使，本段承接第一段续写，这段要着重续写作者与女儿之间的对话，女儿说了什么，作者突然间思绪回到了当年去杂货店买东西的时候，作者意识到了当年女店主Miss Bee激发了自己的潜能。续写的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式：as 引导的让步状语从句和wish的虚拟语气Embarrassed as I felt, I wasn’t capable of appreciating the lessons she claimed she had given me at such a young age, and I only wished that I had never met her. After checking out, I left. where引导的定语从句Suddenly, I was back at the grocery store where I had learned the hard way to deal with my own business.高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
3.【参考答案】
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” “Give my suitcase back to me!” Hearing this, Arthur immediately realized that the young man was the bank thief. So he continued running until he stopped a taxi. Then he quickly got into it and sat in the back seat. Out of breath, Arthur said to the taxi driver, “Please go to the Police Station as soon as possible. I have a robbery to report to the policeman.” The moment the taxi driver got the request, he drove straight to the police station without hesitation.
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur ran into it, shouting, “There is a bank robbery and I know who the bank thief is.” On hearing Arthur’s story, the policeman decided to head for the bank to investigate the case. However, Just at that moment, the young man came to the police station in a hurry. Out of breath, He told the whole story. As a matter of fact, he was not the bank thief and what in the suitcase were only some clothes. How embarrassed Arthur was when he learned the truth!
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者在街上遇到一个司机发动车子有困难，作者想要上前提供帮助，帮助司机拿箱子，然而正好碰到银行警报响起，有人在抢劫银行。作者拿着箱子的时候被一个女人盯着，因此作者认为别人误以为自己是抢劫犯，情急之下，作者带着司机的箱子就开始跑起来。
续写部分分为2段，第一段的开头是当他正在跑着，他听见身后的年轻人大喊：停下来，停下来……，所以这里写作者带着箱子跑之后的场景，作者又误以为司机才是抢劫犯，然后带着箱子去警察局报警。
第二段开头是出租车停在了警局门口，作者……，所以这里要描写作者去警局以后发生了什么事情，作者报了案，但是就在那个时候，司机也赶到了，原来只是个误会，警察检查了箱子，箱子里只是衣服。因此，作者知道真相后，感到很尴尬。
【范文点评】
本文的续写比较有趣，故事情节比较吸引读者，使用了高级词汇和句子。如：immediately, out of breath, robbery, without hesitation, embarrassed等高级词汇，非谓语动词Hearing this, Arthur immediately realized that the young man was the bank thief. 时间状语从句The moment the taxi driver got the request, he drove straight to the police station without hesitation. 宾语从句here is a bank robbery and I know who the bank thief is.等高级句式。
4.【参考答案】
Everyone was sad when they left Pinky at the pond, even Sara’s father. But he tried to convince Sara that Pinky was fine. Walking towards the car, Sara looked over her shoulder and saw Pinky standing alone. The other ducks were swimming around in circles, looking at Pinky. To Sara, it seemed that they were trying to identify the strange animal. They didn’t recognize Pinky as a duck. Worried about Pinky, Sara dreamed of Pinky being bullied by other ducks the whole night.
The next morning, when looking out of the kitchen window, Sara couldn’t believe her eyes! There was Pinky, happily walking around on the grass. Thrilled at what she saw, she kept asking herself,” How did she make it ” After all, it was two miles away and he managed to walk back through the city street. Incredible! But her parents drove Pinky back to the pond again regardless of her request. The following morning, there was Pinky again on the grass! Seeing Pinky again, her father, waving his arms about wildly, moved his lips without saying anything. Meanwhile, Sarah, overjoyed, hugged Pinky tightly, tears streaming down her cheeks.
【解析】本篇书面表达是读后续写。Sara Savick九岁时的复活节，父母送给她一只小鸭子Pinky，在他们的精心照顾下Pinky渐渐长大，有一天父母告诉Sara，Pinky必须回到野外和其他鸭子过一样的生活，他们决定把Pinky带到附近公园的一个池塘，那一天到来了。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：当他们把Pinky放到池塘离开时，每个人都很难过……所以应该写Pinky第一天到池塘发生的事情，即他们依依不舍里离开池塘，其他鸭子看到Pinky后的反应及Sara对Pinky的担心等内容。第二段开头是：第二天早上，当向厨房窗户外面看时，Sara不敢相信自己的眼睛……本段应该写Sara看到的情况，即Pinky回到了家里，Sara不知道它是怎么做到的，父母看到后把Pinky放回池塘，但是Pinky再次回到家里，Sara激动得紧紧抱着Pinky。
续写时注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：looked over，recognize … as，regardless of等高级词汇；Everyone was sad when they left Pinky at the pond中when引导的时间状语从句；Thrilled at what she saw, she kept asking herself,中what引导的宾语从句等高级句式。
5.【参考答案】
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Then the sailor headed for our table with the flowers in his hand. He picked out a red flower and placed it on our table. “Merry Christmas!” he greeted us in a cheerful voice. Before we could say “ Thank you”, he went to other tables. In an instant, everyone in the room was presented with flowers, including the waiter and the piano player. In the bright light, the flowers were glowing in full bloom. These magical flowers melted our frustrated hearts and blew away all the unpleasant moods.
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The piano player came alive and pleasant music filled the whole room. A festival atmosphere drowned all of us. We merrily danced to the joyful music, singing, laughing and wishing each other good luck. The old flower woman also joined us, unable to conceal her excitement and gratitude. The spirit of Christmas came back to us again. It brought all of us together in this small restaurant on a foreign land. All this was due to a young American sailor, who, through his kindness and generosity, brightened our paths.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，去年圣诞节期间作者一家从巴黎前往尼斯，但是包括旅馆、汽车在内的一切都出现状况，令大家没了圣诞精神。出去吃饭的时候，又找了一家装修得很差的小餐馆。餐厅里除了水手以外，其他人都沉默不语，连钢琴师都没有精神。这时水手去买了卖花老太婆的花。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：然后，那个水手手里拿着花朝我们的桌子走来，所以应该写水手把一朵花给了我们桌，也给了其他桌的客人，包括钢琴师和侍者。这些花发挥了强大的作用，驱散了大家不愉快的心情等。第二段开头是：钢琴演奏者活跃起来，整个房间充满了美妙的音乐。本段应该写餐厅里的人都恢复了愉快的心情庆祝圣诞节，大家跟着欢快的音乐跳舞，唱歌，大笑，互相祝福好运。是水手的善良感染了大家。
续写时要求所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：be presented with，blow away，come back to等高级词汇；In an instant, everyone in the room was presented with flowers, including the waiter and the piano player.使用了现在分词作状语；All this was due to a young American sailor, who, through his kindness and generosity, brightened our paths.使用了非限制性定语从句等高级句式。读后续写示例与写作训练9
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
The passengers on the bus watched sympathetically as the attractive young woman with a white walking stick made her way carefully up the steps. She paid the driver and, found the seat he’d told her was empty. Then she settled in and rested her stick against her leg.
It had been a year since Susan became blind. Due to a medical misdiagnosis(误诊), she was suddenly thrown into a world of darkness and frustration. And all she had to depend on was her husband, Mark.
Mark was an Air Force officer. When she first lost her sight, he watched her sink into hopelessness and was determined to help he gain the confidence.
Finally, Susan felt ready to return to her job, but how would she get there She was now too frightened to get around the city by herself. So, Mark drove her to work each day, even though they worked at opposite ends of the city.
At first, this comforted Susan. Soon, however, Mark realized the necessity for Susan to become independent and wanted her to start taking the bus again. Just as expected, Susan was afraid of this idea. But Make promised Susan that he would ride the bus with her until she got the hang of it.
For two weeks, Mark, in military uniform accompanied Susan to and from work each day. He taught her how to rely on her other senses, specifically her hearing, to tell where she was and how to adapt to her new surroundings.
At last, Susan decided that she was ready to try on her own. Monday morning arrived, and before she left, she hugged Mark. Her eyes was filled with tears of gratitude for his patience and love. She said good-bye, and for the first time, they went their separate ways.
Each day went perfectly, and Susan had never felt better. She made it.
On Friday morning, Susan took the bus to work as usual. As she was paying for the bus fare, the driver said, “Lady, I sure do envy you.” (340 words)
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语以为你写好；
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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Curious, she asked the driver, “Why do you say that you envy me ”
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Tears of happiness poured down Susan’s cheeks.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一位女士因失明而感到沮丧与绝望，丈夫陪伴她重建自信。在她害怕独自出门时，她丈夫每天开车接送她上下班。为了让她重新独立起来，她丈夫说服她重新坐公交车上班。一开始，他陪她一同坐公交车，教她学会用其他的感官去判断位置。两周后，女士决定独自出行，一切都很顺利。在第五天早上上车之后，司机表达了对她的羡慕。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为失明的女士Susan，她的丈夫Mark以及公交车司机。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。丈夫陪失明的妻子每天坐公交车上下班两周后，妻子开始自己坐公交车。在她独自出行的第五天，公交车司机表达了对她的羡慕。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是司机告诉Susan羡慕她的原因。因为司机叙述的这个原因，Susan流下了幸福的眼泪。可以结合前文表达的Mark对Susan的耐心与爱，预测这个原因可能是因为Mark每天都在暗中跟着Susan上下班，为了保证她的安全。续写第一段：Susan问司机为何羡慕她，司机告诉她羡慕她的原因是因为她有一个非常爱她的人。他看到她丈夫每天都看着她坐公交车安全到达办公室才离开，表达了对她浓浓的爱意。续写第二段：Susan听完之后流下了幸福的眼泪。或许她回忆起Mark一直以来对她的爱和照顾，并因此而感到幸福与感动；或许她开始想象回想这一周上班的经历，回忆着Mark在周围暗中关注她的迹象；也有可能她回家后表达了对Mark所做的一切的感动，表达了她的幸运与对丈夫的爱。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“Why did the driver envy Susan What would be the possible answer What would the driver say Did it have anything to do with Susan’s husband, Mark 等”；第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：What would Susan think What might be her futher reaction What would she do 等”。
[参考范文]
Curious, she asked the driver, “Why do you say that you envy me ” The driver responded, “It must feel good to be taken care of and protected like you are.” Confused, Susan asked again, “What do you mean ” The driver explained, “Well, you know, every morning for the past week, a fine looking gentleman in a military uniform has been standing across the corner watching you as you get off the bus. He makes sure you cross the street safely and he watches until you enter your office building. Then he blows you a kiss and walks away. You are a lucky lady.”
Tears of happiness poured down Susan’s cheeks. Although she couldn’t see him with her eyes, she had always felt that Mark was just there. She was such a lucky and happy lady, for her husband had given her a gift more powerful than sight, a gift that she could feel and didn’t need to see—the gift of love that can bring light where there is darkness. (150 words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。给出的两段开头分别为Susan 好奇地问司机为何羡慕她，以及Susan留下幸福的眼泪。因此第一段主要写司机对Susan的这一问题进行回答，而这一原因是Susan的丈夫为确保安全而每天暗暗陪伴她上班，因而让Susan流下了幸福的眼泪。第二段写Susan知道之后的心理活动，包括回顾这几天坐公交车有被陪伴的感觉，以及对丈夫的这种无微不至的爱的感动。范文最后一句写了这份爱“照亮”了Susan黑暗的世界，既与她失明这一事实想结合，又升华了主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的心理整理和语言组织。在该练习中，我们通过7个问题来拓展并整理自己的写作思路，这7个问题以“司机羡慕Susan的原因”以及“Susan由此做出的反应”为主体，之间有一定的逻辑关系，符合故事发展的合理结局。
2. 有效运用衔接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectives)的有效运用，例如在范文中，我们用了“until”，“although”，“for”等连词，使得小句间的逻辑关系更清晰明了，文章更加连贯。同时，我们也使用了“waching …”和“confused”这样的非谓语动词结构作伴随状语和原因状语，使得行文更加流畅，语言更加地道。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
At Dana’s yard sale, Tim chose a baseball from the toys spread on the card table and asked about the price. Dana told him everything was a quarter except Nezumi, a cotton toy rat. It was grey with some cotton sticking out from the hole where an ear had been torn off.
“Nezumi is extra special, so he is ten dollars. He needs a safe new home.” Dana sighed. Tim laughed saying he didn’t have ten dollars. Dana laughed too and gave Nezumi to Tim as a free gift because he was her friend. When Tim whispered it was sort of old, Dana said old toys were the best. She then invited Tim to her birthday party the next evening, adding that her parents were giving her a real rat for her birthday. Tim was amazed and asked if it was a live rat.
“Of course.” Dana said.
At home, Tim’s mother showed him the gift she had bought for Dana. It was a knitting spool(针织线轴) shaped like a mushroom. Mom said Dana could knit a scarf for her doll. Tim sighed that Dana wasn’t a knitting kind of person but a rat kind of person. Mom laughed after knowing what had happened. Together they drove to the pet store, where Tim searched and searched and selected a clear plastic ball, one in which the rat could run around on the floor safe from cats and dogs. Tim thought of Nezumi’s ear and decided Dana’s new rat would need this ball.
The next day, Dana brought cupcakes to class. When she handed a cupcake to Tim, she asked if Tim brought Nezumi to school as Nezumi liked to ride in backpacks. Tim was at a loss because Nezumi was at home on his bed. Then Dana asked what gift he was giving her. Tim replied it was a surprise. In silence they sat for a while before he heard Dana say her parents were giving her a new bike for her birthday instead of a live rat because they thought rats would bite things.
注意:1. 所续写的短文词数应为 150 左右;
2. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
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At home that afternoon, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball.
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All of a sudden, he had an idea.
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Every night after dinner, my grandparents would turn on TV for the 6 o'clock news. No matter how hard I tried to act the grown-up and watch with them, I would inevitably(不可避免地) get distracted until 6:30 when Wheel of Fortune came on.
My grandma would play along, trying to guess the answers before the players. Her shouts of excitement when she succeeded could be heard across the house.
As I grew older, my love of reading and writing blossomed, and I would join my grandma in yelling out letters. Soon, I was experiencing the thrill of solving the puzzles faster than the contestants(选手) and even my grandma. I was hooked.
Due to constant moving around with my mom and father, I started to spend less time with my grandparents, but our bond remained strong. My grandparents provided me with the stability, love and support that I desperately needed when I grew up. When I was in a bad mood, I would remember those sweet nights.
A few years later, I was living with my grandpa in Chicago. While watching an episode(集) of Wheel of Fortune, we had a wave of nostalgia(怀旧). With application, I didn't think much of it until I received a mail months later, announcing that the Wheel of Fortune casting team would come to Chicago. In order to be considered for an in-person audition(试演), applicants would need to submit a sixty-second video explaining why they wanted to be a contestant.
All my childhood memories of watching the show came flooding back, and I knew I was meant to spin(旋转) the wheel for real. Immediately, I recorded a video and submitted it. A couple of weeks later, I received an e-mail inviting me to audition in person. I was very nervous on the audition day. I couldn't believe I was trying out for ''America's Game''! After two rounds of intense auditioning, with half of the hopefuls letting go after the first round, it was over. All of us applicants were told we would receive a letter in the mail within two weeks if we were selected.
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;
2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语
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I ran to the mailbox every day but there was nothing.
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Then one morning while getting ready for work, I checked my mail and let out the loudest scream ever.
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When she looked around her house, Betty Margaret saw lots of electronics. Along with the usual things like her laptop and smart phone, there were all of her kids’ electronic devices: cell phones, video game devices and more! There seemed to be more than enough ways for her and her three children to be online all day, every day.
Ms. Margaret worried that her kids were becoming too dependent on the Internet and electronics. Then she began to reread one of her favorite books, Henry Thoreau’s Walden, which gave Ms. Margaret an idea. Thoreau spent 2 years in a simple cabin without running water, and having to grow his own food. Maybe she and her family could live without such luxuries as computers and electronic devices for a while.
Ms. Margaret talked with her kids and explained that she wanted the family to try living for 6 months without the Internet, cell phones, TV, and video games. Ms. Margaret writes articles for a newspaper in Australia, and had written several books as well. She told her children that if they agreed, she would write a book about their experience and they could go on a trip abroad with the money from sales of the book. Her three children agreed, and “the experiment,” as Ms. Margaret called, began.
Over the course of the experiment, the Margaret children had different reactions to life without electronics. Before the experiment began, Anni, the eldest of the children, read books more than her younger brother and sister. She therefore had a relatively easy adjustment to the family’s new lifestyle. Anni could also use the library’s computer for her homework. Bill, who loved to play video games before the experiment began, had to find a way to spend all of his new free time. He started to spend more time practicing his saxophone (萨克斯管). Susan, the youngest child in the family, had the hardest time adjusting to life without electronics. She felt restless for the first weeks and later, influenced by her elder sister, gradually began to find interest in the novel experiences brought by various books.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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The family carried on with the experiment for the 6 months without technology controlling their lives.
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Ms. Margaret wrote the book she had planned.
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I was lacking in everything needed to start a new friendship.
My parents moved to the town when they decided to look for new jobs but they didn’t realize I was really hurt when I said goodbye to my old friends. It felt awful to be a new student in the school and when my classmates were chatting, what I could do was to be caught up in my thoughts watching the clouds outside the window. I was not good at math or history; nor was I good at drawing or dancing. I was shy and timid. I had a few friends back at my hometown and it seemed that they were the only ones who I could be friends with for my whole life. I felt I had achieved a point of saturation with regard to having friends and I could make no further addition to my friend list. I was ashamed of myself, so I believed I deserved no notice from others until Emily came to my world.
Emily was fearless, outspoken and easy to go. She was everything I was not and I was too shy to come out of my shell. I met Emily in school almost every day and yet I never talked to her. We were in the same class but we were like poles apart. How I wished I could be like her or at least be a friend of hers!
It was another ordinary day.
I wandered to the bus stop in the morning and waited for the school bus. Birds were singing songs with their friends but who could I sing songs with I got on the bus and went straight to my usual seat, complaining in a low voice about getting up early and going to school like every other day, and about how things were going to be the same all over again. Little did I realize something different would happen that day.
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When I got up to get down the bus, my schoolbag was stuck in the armrest. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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I got noticed by Emily, who brought me courage to start a new friendship!
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5.阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右:
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para.1:
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
At home that afternoon, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball. Wondering about the use of the clear plastic ball if Dana had no rat, he started walking up and down the room with a frown on his face. Mom was surprised and asked him what was happening. Tim told her Dana wasn’t getting a live rat from her parents but a bike. As they were racking their brains (绞脑汁) to come up with an appropriate gift, Tim turn around and saw Nezumi on his bed.
All of a sudden, he had an idea. He lifted Nezumi and squeezing Nezumi into the plastic ball with great caution so that Nezumi would be safe from cats and dogs. Seeing this, Mom asked Tim whether he was giving Dana an old cotton rat with one ear as a gift, Tim nodded with a smile saying she would definitely like it. Looking at Mom’s confused expression, Tim added that Dana was a Nezumi kind of person who thought old toys were the BEST.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，Tim从Dana的庭院旧货出售会得到了有一只耳朵被扯掉了的玩具老鼠Nezumi，Tim很喜欢。Dana的生日快到了，Tim去商店里为Dana喜欢的老鼠买了一个透明的塑料球，可以让它在里面跑，不会被猫和狗咬伤。第二天Tim听到Dana说她的父母给她的生日礼物是一辆新自行车，而不是一只活老鼠，因为他们认为老鼠会咬东西。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：那天下午在家里，Tim盯着塑料老鼠球。所以后文应该是讲述Tim得知Dana不会受到老鼠作为生日礼物后的心理活动，他觉得买的这个塑料老鼠球没有用了，于是他皱着眉头开始在房间里走来走去。妈妈很惊讶，问他发生了什么事。Tim告诉她Dana从她父母那里得到的不是一只活老鼠，而是一辆自行车。当他们绞尽脑汁想出合适的礼物时，Tim转过身，看见Nezumi躺在床上；第二段开头是：突然，他有了一个主意。本段应该写Tim为Dana准备生日礼物的过程，Tim要送Dana一只长着一只耳朵的老鼠。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：walk up and down, not…but…, with great caution等高级词汇；Wondering about the use of the clear plastic ball if Dana had no rat, he started walking up and down the room with a frown on his face.非谓语动词的运用和if引导的条件状语从句；Seeing this, Mom asked Tim whether he was giving Dana an old cotton rat with one ear as a gift, Tim nodded with a smile saying she would definitely like it.运用了whether引导的宾语从句等高级句式。
2.【参考范文】
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I ran to the mailbox every day but there was nothing. After one week, I became very frustrated and even thought the mail had been delivered to the wrong department. My grandma came and comforted me, ''Laura, wait patiently.'' Feeling defeated, I replied, ''I wasn't good enough. They didn't want me. '' She said with a confident tone, ''You will be selected and receive the mail. Trust me.'' Though I didn't believe I would receive the mail, I was not so anxious. I calmed down and lived my life as before.
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Then one morning while getting ready for work, I checked my mail and let out the loudest scream ever. There it was: a mail from Wheel of Fortune stating that they had a tape date for me. I had to read it several times before I truly believed it. I was going to be a contestant on Wheel of Fortune! I ended up filming my episode a few months later, and the entire experience was amazing. From meeting Pat and Vanna, to spinning the wheel and, most importantly, saying those magical words, ''I'd like to solve the puzzle. '' It was a day I will never forget.
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。文章讲述了作者在爷爷奶奶的影响下喜欢上一档名叫Wheel of Fortune的节目。多年后，当回到芝加哥和爷爷一起居住时，作者收到一封信，邀请他参加这个节目的试演。出于对这个节目的喜爱，作者决定录制一个短片尝试。两轮比赛后，节目组请作者回家等通知。
续写分为两段。
根据第一段的开头“我每天都去邮筒看，但什么都没有”可以接着写：一周后还是没有信件，作者感到沮丧，估计自己可能被淘汰了。但是祖父母安慰她，给她信心，并且让她耐心等待。作者调整心态，回归正常生活。
根据第二段的开头“那天早上我正准备好去上班，检查邮筒时，我大声尖叫起来”可以接着写：作者不敢相信自己收到节目组的来信，并给她安排了录制时间。作者把自己的喜悦同祖父母分享。非常感谢曾经那段陪着他们一起观看节目的日子，让她不仅得到了欢乐还学到了很多知识，得以参加这个全美国人民都喜欢的节目。
用5个以上的关键词加大了写作难度。考生应熟悉关键词，以便在适当时候加以运用。写作完成后，要将关键词下划线。
【范文点评】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些主从复合句，例如：Though I didn't believe I would receive the mail, I was not so anxious.中though引导让步状语从句；There it was: a mail from Wheel of Fortune stating that they had a tape date for me.中that引导宾语从句。
3.【参考范文】
The family carried on with the experiment for the 6 months without technology controlling their lives. Ms. Margaret believes they all came out better for the experience. The children had a lot more interaction with each other and with their mother. Now that they could not text others, they had to actually see each other and talk. Meanwhile, the family played board games together, cooked meals together and read the newspaper together. Bill ended up developing a serious interest in music, and in Susan’s case, she improved her grades in school.
Ms. Margaret wrote the book she had planned. The book became an immediate hit and aroused great interest among many parents. In her book and in interviews about the book, Ms. Margaret describes the pleasant changes that happened in her family and the progress her children have made. She encourages families to set aside special “screen-free days” where families unplug themselves and spend time together, which is exactly what her family have agreed to do after returning from an enjoyable family trip abroad.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，贝蒂·玛格丽是一位母亲，她有3个孩子。因为担心她的孩子们变得过于依赖互联网和电子产品，于是她向她的孩子们提出说她想让这个家庭试着在没有互联网、手机、电视和电子游戏的情况下生活6个月的计划。如果他们同意，她将写一本关于他们的经历的书，他们可以用卖书的钱去国外旅行。孩子们同意并开始了这种生活。
【范文点评】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：这个家庭在没有科技控制他们生活的情况下进行了6个月的实验。所以本段应该写这次经历给她的孩子们带来的变化(好的方面)。第二段开头是：玛格丽特写了这本她计划好的书。本段应该写这本书出版后引起了人们的兴趣，以及贝蒂·玛格丽就这种生活方式向家长提出建议。续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
4.【参考范文】
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When I got up to get off the bus, my schoolbag was stuck in the armrest. I didn’t notice it and stood up with all my strength. Unfortunately, my schoolbag was torn apart and all the contents fell on the ground. I knelt down to pick them up. Suddenly, I saw a hand passing me some of the books. I looked up and found it was Emily who was helping me. With her help, I put all the contents back to my schoolbag. I began to talk with her and was surprised to find that we had much in common.
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I got noticed by Emily, who brought me courage to start a new friendship! One day when I told her that I admired her and how I wished to be a friend of hers, she said, “We have already been friends.” I felt so happy that I even sang a song. Hearing my song, she thought highly of it and asked me to teach her to sing it. She made me realize how unique I was and at last I came out of me shell.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者跟随父母来到了一个新城镇，作为一名新生在学校的感觉很糟糕，作者很害羞，胆小，为自己感到羞愧，作者注意到了无所畏惧，直言不讳，容易相处的Emily，作者希望和她成为朋友，直到某一天一个早上发生了一些不同的事情。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：当我起身下车时，我的书包被卡在扶手上了。所以后文应该是讲述作者的书包被卡住，东西掉了出来，而Emily帮助了作者，二人开始相识起来；第二段开头是：我被Emily注意到了，她给了我勇气去开始一段新的友谊！本段应该写作者和Emily的友谊进展情况。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：with all my strength, fall on, talk with, have much in common等高级词汇；I began to talk with her and was surprised to find that we had much in common.运用了宾语从句；One day when I told her that I admired her and how I wished to be a friend of hers, she said, “We have already been friends.”运用了时间状语从句等高级句式。
5.【参考范文】
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. So, they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernard’s home. They told Bernard how to sell the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. He took the popcorn around to the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, he wanted to be self-dependent. Therefore, he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also added cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of Meredith’s family, and he also did what he could to help those in need.
【解析】
本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意--制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。
续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.(当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意)可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.(一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意)可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。
续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。读后续写示例与写作训练4
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Arriving in Sydney on his own from India, my husband , Rashid, stayed in a hotel for a short time while looking for a house for me and our children as we would go there when he made everything settled.
During the first week of his stay, he went out one to do some shopping. He almost got lost in those unfamiliar blocks. When he came back in the late afternoon, he discovered that his suitcase was gone. He was extremely worried as the suitcase had all his important papers, including his passport. For a while, he was overwhelmed with depression with no one to turn to.
He reported the case to the police and then sat there，lost and lonely in a strange , thinking of the terrible troubles of getting all the paperwork organized again a distant country while trying to settle down in a new one.
Late in the evening, the phone rang. It was a stranger. He was trying to pronounce my husband’s name and was asking him a lot of questions. Then he said they had found a pile of papers in their trash can(垃圾桶)that had been left out on the footpath.
My husband rushed to their home to find a kind family holding all papers and documents. Their young daughter had gone to the trash can and found a pile of unfamiliar papers. Her parents had carefully sorted them out, although they had found mainly foreign addresses on of the documents. At they had seen a half-written letter in the pile in which my husband had given his new tele number to a friend. My husband was so excited about the return of the suitcase. Meanwhile, the kindness of this family made him feel that this place could be a new start, a new home for a brand new life.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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In order to thank this family,…
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A few weeks later, my children and I arrived in Sydney.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：主人公Rashid来到陌生的城市悉尼，打算找房子开始他的新生活。然而他的手提箱却意外丢失，包括里面所有的重要文件，他向警方报案，在这座陌生城市他感到孤独和无助。幸运的是，最后手提箱被一个善良的家庭捡到，并顺利回到Rashid手中。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为Rashid，捡到旅行箱的热心家庭。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。Rashid来到陌生城市准备找房子安顿下来；结果意外丢失其重要的旅行箱；旅行箱被当地一户善良的人家捡到，失而复得。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是主人公Rashid为了表示对这户家庭的感谢晚上请他们一家在餐馆吃饭，同时也聊到了Rashid的经历以及在陌生城市的迷惘和无助。这户人家在知道了Rashid的事情之后，决定帮助Rashid找房子，同时帮助他熟悉街区，一来一往之后，Rashid和他们成为了挚友。几个星期之后，Rashid的妻子和孩子也来到了悉尼，他们的房子已经定下来，开启了他们人生的一段新旅程。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“According to the story, what would Rashid do to thank this family How could he find his house 等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What would happen when Rashid’s family came to Sydney Would they have a new life in this unfamiliar city, why 等”
[参考范文]
In order to thank this family, Rashid invited them to a dinner in a nearby restaurant. Rashid told them he was a newcomer in this city and wanted to find a house to settle down here waiting for his family to join him. “When I found out that my suitcase was missing, I was disappointed and hopeless. Thank you sincerely for your help. What a timely assistance for me! ” Rashid said. This family could have chosen to ignore this suitcase. However, they didn’t. They found out the owner out of their kindness and turned this trash into a treasure. “You are welcome, Rashid. I heard that there are some houses for sale in my neighborhood. I can show you around, if you’re interested.” Again, thanks to this kind family, Rashid found a sweet home.
A few weeks later, my children and I arrived in Sydney. My husband had prepared a new home for us surrounded by kind neighbors. Though the beginning of the story was filled with terrible troubles, it worked out perfectly in the end. This family let us feel the warmth from this unfamiliar city. A small kindness can indeed make a difference.(除给定词外，160 words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。根据故事发展的线索，范文第一段将续写Rashid为了回报这个家庭的善举请他们在餐馆里。于是Rashid向他们叙说了自己的处境，而捡到手提箱的家庭又一次帮助Rashid找到了住处。第二段，Rashid的家人来到悉尼，而此时，Rashid已经安顿好了一切，虽然这个城市对他们来说仍旧陌生，但是他们相信这是一个值得安家定居的地方因为当地人的善行。在故事的最后，再一次点名主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中，我们通过4个问题来拓展并整理自己的写作思路，这4个问题以Rashid以及其家人为表达的主体，问题之间有一定的逻辑联系，符合故事发展的合理结局。
2. 有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectives)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了However，though来说明事件的转折，again表示Rashid再一次对这户家庭的感谢。这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
I lay on my bed, legs leaning against the wall, desperately wishing my mother would call. But I remembered the last time I'd seen her, right before the train for Providence pulled out of the station, “You know how expensive it is to call,” she said, then hugged me tight and said good- bye.
This was my first birthday away from home. I missed my mom, missed my sister, and most certainly missed the special pound cake my mother always made for my birthday. Since getting to college that year, I would watch jealously as the other freshmen received care packages from their parents on their birthdays--and even on ordinary days. Big boxes containing summer slacks and blouses, packages of M&M's and Snickers , things they needed and things they didn't. Instead of feeling thrilled about my upcoming eighteenth birthday, I felt empty. I wished my mom would send me something, too, but I knew that she couldn’t afford presents or the postage. She had done her best with my sister and me--raising us by herself. The simple truth was there just was never enough money.
But that didn’t stop her from filling us with dreams. “You can be anything you want to be,” she would tell us. “Politicians, dancers, writers -- you just have to work for it; you have to get an education.”
Thanks to my mom's sacrifices and big dreams, I’d made it to the Ivy League: Brown University in Providence, Rhode Island.
As I was recalling these things, my roommate joined me on the bed. “Hey. After we study, let's buy ice cream and cake.” I nodded, closed my eyes, and imagined the cake Mom would have made. Mmm. I could see the golden yellow of each of the twelve eggs, and I could almost smell the vanilla(香草) filling the house while the cake baked.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
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As I daydreamed, there was a knock on the door.
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How had she managed to afford it ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
2..阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Mr. Plumbean lived on a street where all the houses were the same. He liked it that way. So did everybody else on Mr. Plumbean's street. Then one day a seagull flew over Mr. Plumbean's house and made a big orange splot(斑块) on Mr. Plumbean's house.
“Oh! Too bad!” everybody said. “Mr. Plumbean will have to paint his house again.”
So Mr. Plumbean got some blue paint and some white paint, and that night he got busy. He painted at night because it was cooler. When the paint was gone, the roof was blue. The walls were white. And the big orange splot was still there. Then he got some more paint. He got red paint, yellow paint, green paint, and purple paint.
In the morning the other people on the street came out of their houses. Their houses were all the same. But Mr. Plumbean's house was like a rainbow. It was like a jungle. It was like an explosion. There was the big orange splot. And there were little orange splots. There were stripes. There were pictures of elephants and lions and pretty girls and steam-shovels. That day Mr. Plumbean bought carpenter's tools. That night he built a tower on top of his roof, and he painted a clock on the tower.
At night the next day Mr. Plumbean got a truck full of green things. He planted palm trees, baobabs , bushes, and onions. When the other people came out of their houses, they saw Mr. Plumbean swinging between two palm trees and Mr. Plumbean was drinking lemonade.
Plumbean has gone too far! “Plumbean, what have you done to your house ” the people shouted.
“My house is me and I am it. My house is where I like to be and it looks like all my dreams,” Mr. Plumbean said.
The people went away. They asked the man who lived next door to Mr. Plumbean to go and have a talk with him. "Tell him that we all liked it here before he changed his house. Tell him that his house has to be the same as ours so we can have a neat street."
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
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The man went to see Mr. Plumbean that evening.
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Then, one by one, they went to see Mr. Plumbean, late at night.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
I had been swimming competitively for five years and was ready to quit because I felt I was horrible at it. I was often the only African American at a swimming competition. I kept receiving “Honourable Mentions”. Any athlete knows that you don’t want to have a bookshelf full of “Honourable Mentions”, which you get just because you showed up.
One summer day, the day before a big swim meet, I decided to break the news to my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. When I told her of my desire to quit swimming, she looked me into my face, saying firmly but warmly, “Baby, remember these words ‘Quitters never win and winners never quit.’ Your grandmother didn’t raise losers or quitters. You go to that meet tomorrow, and you swim like you are a grandchild of mine, you hear ” I was too afraid to say anything but “Yes, ma’am.”
The next day we arrived at the swim meet late, missing my group of swimmers in the 15/16 age group. My coach insisted I be allowed to swim with the older group. I knew she was including me in the race so our long drive would not be wasted, and she had no expectations whatsoever that I would come in anything but eighth place and only that because there were not nine lanes.
As I was mounting the board, all the other girls looked at me. I quickly noticed that these girls were here to do one thing—beat me! All of a sudden my grandma’s words rang in my head：“Quitters never win and winners never quit. You swim like you are a grandchild of mine. Quitters never win and winners never quit...” “Yes, grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild of yours, ” I said to myself.
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SPLASH! I was swimming harder than I’d ever swum before.
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Just then, cheers and claps overwhelmed me.
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4.阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文, 续写的词数应为150左右。
Mike licked the last of the mint chocolate chip ice cream. It was almost time to leave. He jumped into the car with his parents and headed off to the Olympic-sized pool for the big swim meet.
When his race came up, Mike was confident. He was strong and swift. Mike climbed out the pool, smiling. He had just won first place, making him the fastest boy in his age group.
“Congratulations, son, “ his father said. His mom gave him a hug, even though he was soaking wet.
A week later, it was time for another swim meet. Like before, Mike decided to enjoy his favorite ice cream flavor. Mike remembered that the last time he had won a race, he also ate mint chocolate chip ice cream first. Maybe he’d win again.
He took first place again in his race. Mike was feeling pretty good. As it turned out, Mike decided to have mint chocolate chip ice cream before every one of the next few swim meets. He began to think of it as his lucky charm. After several mouths of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable. And he wouldn’t admit it, but all that ice cream was adding a few pounds to his athletic swimmer’s build.
It didn’t take long after that for Mike to start coming in second place---and then third---and then last place in his races. The lucky mint chocolate chip ice cream had lost its magic.
On the day of his next swim meet, his mother sat down at the table with him. “Mike, we all love ice cream, bu it’s not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. Maybe it’s time to quit the sweet treats for a while, especially before you go swimming.”
Mike unwillingly agreed. He went to the swim meet, and didn’t perform well. His father offered to go running with him a few days a week to help him feel better and strengthen his muscles. The extra weight soon disappeared, and Mike found himself breathing easier at swim practices.
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It was the last meet of the season, and Mike wasn’t sure what to expect.
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Finally came the end of the race.
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I would like to share an act of kindness, which I practice regularly and which gives me great joy. I always carry at least $ 10 in my car and also in my pocket. I save it for the first person who asks if I can “spare some change. Smiling at the person, I always respond very cheerfully with a comment like, “Yes, I would love to.” or “It would be my pleasure. “ And I give them the money. Then I replace it with my next $ 10 for the next person. I never spend this money myself. I think that it is the possession of the next person who asks for it. Ten dollars is a small amount, yet it means a lot to the person who expects it, especially when delivered with joy and respect to them.
I also have taken to carrying things in my car, such as hats, socks, gloves and umbrellas, just in case someone needs them. Recently I put together some care packages for the homeless. It occurred to me that things like band-aids, toothpaste, aspirin, combs, as well as food and bottled water would be of use. I imagined that they would need things that are non - breakable, so I chose plastic or paper containers. The folks who received them were delighted. But I feel it’s not just that I give them things that matters. I always remember it is they who bless me with an opportunity to be kind. What a joy!
注意：
1.续写的词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The idea of helping others this way came to me when I got similar help from a woman.
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Interestingly enough, I often get something in return from the person I help.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
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As I daydreamed, there was a knock on the door. My roommate opened it to find a deliveryman asking for me. He handed her a large box, which she carefully placed on the desk near my bed. “Open it”. I did, and inside was a vanilla cake with chocolate frosting. In icing were the words: “Happy Birthday, Sande! Love, Mom.” I was filled with excitement, as if Mom were right there hugging me close.
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How had she managed to afford it I felt as if I were back at home with her, safe and secure while she sang and told me how much she loved having me in her life. I ran out to the hall and knocked on my dormmates’ doors. “Birthday cake,” I called. I cut cake for the students gathering in my room and watched their faces as they ate, because I didn't need to eat to feel both full and rich inside.
【解析】
第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求续写两段内容(我收到妈妈送我的生日蛋糕和我的感受以及我和室友们一起分享的情节)，注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好时态应为一般过去时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词(组)，如； deliveryman(送货员)，carefully(小心翼翼地)，excitement(兴奋)，secure(安全)， hug(拥抱)及gather(聚集)等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。
【范文点评】
范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有be filled with(充满)，run out(跑出去)，as if (仿佛、好像)，ask for sb(找某人)以及knock on(敲门)，而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“He handed her a large box, which she carefully placed on the desk near my bed.”，状语从句“I was filled with excitement, as if Mom were right there hugging me close.”以及“I cut cake for the students gathering in my room and watched their faces as they ate, because I didn't need to eat to feel both full and rich inside.”，非谓语动词“My roommate opened it to find a deliveryman asking for me.”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。
2.【参考范文】
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The man went to see Mr. Plumbean that evening. They sat under the palm trees drinking lemonade and talking all night long. Early the next morning the man went out to get rope and nails and paint. When the people came out of their houses they saw a red and yellow ship next door to the house of Mr. Plumbean. “What have you done to your house ” they shouted at the man. “My house is where I like to be and it looks like all my dreams,” said the man, who had always loved ships.
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Then, one by one, they went to see Mr. Plumbean, late at night. They would talk about their dreams. Whenever anybody visited Mr. Plumbean's house, the very next day that person would set about changing his own house to fit his dreams. Whenever a stranger came to the street, the stranger would say, “This is not a neat street.” Then all the people would say, “Our street is us and we are it. Our street is where we like to be, and it looks like all our dreams.”
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，这篇文章主要讲了Plumbean先生按照自己的想法设计和改造房子，使得街道看起来很不整洁，人们让Plumbean先生的邻居去劝说他。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：那天晚上，这个人去见了Plumbean先生，所以后文应该是讲述这个人见到了Plumbean先生后，发生的事情，并且第二天这个人对自己的房子进行了改变。第二段开头是：然后，他们一个接一个地在深夜去见Plumbean先生。本段应该写同样的故事继续上演着，所有人都对自己的房子进行了改变。当有陌生人问起时，所有的人都会异口同声地回答Plumbean先生经常说的话。 最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：“My house is where I like to be and it looks like all my dreams,” said the man, who had always loved ships.表语从句和非限制性定语从句的运用；Whenever anybody visited Mr. Plumbean's house, the very next day that person would set about changing his own house to fit his dreams.时间状语从句的运用。
3.【参考范文】
SPLASH(扑通一声)! I was swimming harder than I’d ever swum before. As I drew my right arm back, I noticed I was tied with one person. I assumed we were battling for eighth place and I refused to finish dead last, so I added more kick on the last 200 yards. I hit the wall and looked to the left and to the right for the swimmers who had beat me, but no one was there. They must have gotten out of the water already.
Just then, cheers and claps overwhelmed me. I raised my head to see my coach screaming hysterically. My eyes followed her pointing finger and I couldn’t believe what I saw. The other swimmers had just reached the halfway point of the pool! That day, at age 15, I broke the national 17/18 year old 400 freestyle record. I hung up my honourable mentions and replaced them with a huge trophy. “Yes, grandma, you’re right. Quitters never win and winners never quit.”
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，上文讲述了作者已经参加了五年的游泳比赛，准备退出，因为觉得自己很糟糕。一个夏天的一天，在一个大型游泳比赛的前一天，作者把决定退出游泳队的消息告诉了奶奶，结果奶奶让作者坚持下去。第二天作者和奶奶来到比赛地点，没有赶上作者15/16岁年龄组的游泳选手。教练坚持允许作者和年龄大一些的人一起游泳。当作者登上跳板时，其他所有的女孩都看着自己。作者很快注意到这些女孩是来做一件事的——打败自己！突然，奶奶的话在作者的脑海里回响：“放弃者永不成功，胜利者永不放弃。”
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：扑通一声！我游得比以前任何时候都努力。所以后文应该是讲述作者比赛的经过和心理活动；第二段开头是：就在那时，欢呼声和掌声淹没了我。本段应该写作者打破了17/18 400自由泳的全国纪录，以及作者获胜后的感想。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：add on，hysterically，honourable等高级词汇；As I drew my right arm back, I noticed I was tied with one person.运用时间状语从句；My eyes followed her pointing finger and I couldn’t believe what I saw.运用宾语从句等高级句式。
4.【参考范文】
It was the last meet of the season, and Mike was not sure what to expect. He’d been training hard with his dad, and staying away from the rich desserts he enjoyed so much. He felt healthy again, but he didn’t know if he still had any speed in the pool.As he jumped into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. He made the turn at the end of the lane perfectly, and was feeling strong. Whenever he came up for a breath, he could see he was gaining on the boy ahead of him in the next lane. Feeling determined to pass him, Mike found the power in his muscles to push ahead, and as his hand touched the edge of the pool, the race was over.
Finally came the end of the race. His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else’s too. Mike had won his race. The audience and his teammates cheered loudly, and his parents were grinning from ear to ear. “Hey champ, let’s go grab some of your favorite ice cream and celebrate!” said his father.“Thanks, Dad, but I’ll pass on the ice cream; it’s not such a lucky charm after all!” he said.
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写类书面表达。前文记叙了迈克游泳比赛的表现。根据其内容和所给段落开头语，续写两段，构成一篇完整的短文。
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知， 迈克以比赛前吃冰淇淋为幸运符，开始时能获得第一名，之后导致成绩逐步下滑。放弃甜食后，也没有表现好。父亲同他一起跑步，使他游泳时呼吸更加轻松。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：这是本赛季的最后一场比赛，迈克不知道该期待什么。所以应该写比赛前他对自己的看法以及比赛时的表现：他一直在和父亲一起刻苦训练，远离他非常喜欢的油腻甜点。他又恢复了健康，但他不知道自己在泳池里是否还有速度。当他跳进水里的时候，他踢着他的腿，并把他的手臂尽可能地伸展。努力的进行比赛。第二段开头是：比赛终于结束了。本段应该写比赛结束后迈克的成绩，以及结束后对自己取得的成绩的感悟。要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：stay away from，at the end of ，come up等高级词汇；省略关系词that的定语从句He’d been training hard with his dad, and staying away from the rich desserts he enjoyed so much.，as引导的时间状语从句As he jumped into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could.等高级句式。
5.【参考范文】
The idea of helping others this way came to me when I got similar help from a woman. One day, I was shopping at a grocery store and when I went to pay for my groceries I discovered my wallet was gone. You can imagine how embarrassed I was then. Luckily, a woman, overhearing my problem, offered to pay my bill. I was so thankful and asked for her phone number so that I could pay back the money. “Don’t pay it back. Pay it forward,” the woman replied with a smile. That was when I decided to do something nice for whoever needs help.
Interestingly enough, I often get something in return from the person I help. The other day, a young lady to whom I gave some change, asked if I could use a spare pair of gloves she had. So I accepted them for the next person who needs them. I was touched to see she wanted to give me something. In fact, she gave me more. She gave me a feeling of happiness that only those who are happy to show kindness to others can understand.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，文章主要为作者分享自己经常做的一件善事，它给了作者莫大的快乐。作者总是在车里和口袋里至少带10美元，会把它留给第一个问“能不能给点零钱”的人。对着别人微笑，作者总是非常愉快地回答说：“是的，我很乐意。”或者“这是我的荣幸。”然后我给他们钱。作者还习惯在车里放一些东西，比如帽子、袜子、手套和雨伞，以防有人需要。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：当我从一位女士那里得到类似的帮助时，我产生了用这种方式帮助别人的想法。所以后文应该是讲述让作者有了这种善举的原因是，作者从一个女士那里得到了类似的帮助，记叙故事发生的经过；第二段开头是：有趣的是，我经常从我帮助的人那里得到一些回报。本段应该写作者是如何从自己帮助的人那里得到回报的。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：grocery store，pay for，ask for，in fact等高级词汇；One day, I was shopping at a grocery store and when I went to pay for my groceries I discovered my wallet was gone.运用时间状语从句；She gave me a feeling of happiness that only those who are happy to show kindness to others can understand.运用定语从句等高级句式。读后续写示例与写作训练10
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Change is defined as to give a different position, course, or direction to. Change is essential in life because you learn from change and it gives you a new route to take in life. Many people in life tend to not understand change but it’s the ones that do who are the successful ones.
For years now I have no idea what I have been doing with my life. I wake up every morning ashamed of the person I am today, and fall asleep with the same mind set. I play everything in life by the book and never do anything out of the ordinary.
I am a 30-year-old lawyer in New York. I spent most of my life in school perusing a job in Law. But being a lawyer was never my dream or goal in life.
I honestly wanted to be a Writer. I have a great imagination and would write amazing stories in my head. I would write about slaying dragons and life far beyond what we can imagine today. I always knew that being a writer was never possible for me because it was a better financial decision to stay a lawyer.
Recently, the days were abnormal for me. Usually I would fall asleep at ten and wake up at seven and drive to my office so I can get to work on time. But for some reason I couldn’t go to sleep, and when I did fall asleep I had the same dream over and over again. It wasn’t a dream I had ever had in the past. The dream starts with me in the ocean trying to go for a swim searching for something, but for some reason I start to drown and I can’t even gasp for air. I have no control over my body. Then a light shines through the bright waters and when I look up, all I can see is myself in a bright white room writing a novel. The I heard a voice say repeatedly “now is the time to try something new”.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldn’t have been any happier. _____________________________________________________________
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My life started at 30, and every day since that point I haven’t stopped enjoying life._________________________________________________________________
【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一位30岁的女律师曾经为了在律师行业取得好的职位，花了大量的时间去学习法律；但是当她在律师行业干了数年之后，她发现虽然收入很高，但她并不喜欢这种严谨的、循规蹈矩的生活。于是，在她30岁的时候，她辞去这个工作，去追寻自己想当作家的梦想；后来的生活经历证明，她当年的抉择是正确的。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事主题(theme)。本文作者开篇就告诉我们“改变”(change)在生活中的重要性，如“Change is essential in life because you learn from change and it gives you a new route to take in life”这句话告诉我们“改变”能给我们的生活带来新的可能性。然后，作者通过自己的亲身经历进一步说明这一主题。
(2)理清主人公的矛盾所在(conflicts)。从文章中的“I am a 30-year-old lawyer in New York. I spent most of my life in school perusing a job in Law. But being a lawyer was never my dream or goal in life.”可知，作者本来是在追求大多数人梦寐以求的律师职业，但后来发现自己并不是真正喜欢这一职业，而自己真正喜欢的是当作家。之后，根据文中的“The dream starts with me in the ocean trying to go for a swim searching for something, but for some reason I start to drown and I can’t even gasp for air. I have no control over my body”可知，作者内心中的这个矛盾愈发激烈。
(3)根据已知事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。根据第二段的首句“For years now I have no idea what I have been doing with my life.”可知，作者对自己的当前的工作毫无真正意义上的好感。从第四段的首句“I honestly wanted to be a Writer”可知作者的真正梦想是想成为作家。根据第五段的开头部分“Recently, the days were abnormal for me. Usually I would fall asleep at ten and wake up at seven and drive to my office so I can get to work on time.”可知作者内心的矛盾越来越强烈。最后根据续写的第一段的开头“That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldn’t have been any happier”可知，作者最终选择了追求自己内心真正的梦想。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。根据文中所给的划线词，如change, my life, my dream, being a writer, control等可知，作者在文章的后半部分可能会说明：(1)自己是否敢于做出“改变”；(2)如果“改变”了，那改变之后的结果怎样；(3)作者通过自己的经历，最后对“改变”究竟持怎样一种态度。
(5)结合文章的手段决定文章的结束部分(endings)。根据续写的第一段的开头“That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldn’t have been any happier”可以罗列一些作者在“改变”自后自己的生活与心情的变化。根据续写的第二段的开头“My life started at 30, and every day since that point I haven’t stopped enjoying life”可以在文章的结尾处说明作者对自己这些经历的看法与感受。
[参考范文]
That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldn’t have been any happier. Relieved from that job, I walked taller that day. When I got home I threw away my suits and nicely ironed pants and went out and got a pair of ripped jeans and a baggy shirt. I could not have been any more wrong. However, it wasn’t just a dream. My opportunity to make something good out of my life began. It was tough at first, but I just made myself under control.
My life started at 30, and every day since that point I haven’t stopped enjoying life. I can now enjoy the smaller things in life like watching the sunset or going for a walk in the park. I also have found the woman of my dreams and just can’t get enough of her. And by the way I started to write and have been on the best sellers list for the last 2 months. Things have definitely turned around. Yes, change is a good thing not just for me but for everyone, it gives us all an opportunity to take a chance. (156 words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕故事的情节和主要矛盾进行了合情合理的拓展。职业女律师的工作本身就非常艰辛，所以故事中的主人公想要摆脱这种过于正式的律师生活去追求自己的“作家梦”，是合情合理的。因此，范文的结尾部分特别强调“改变是一件好事”。
[提炼归纳]
1.熟读原文，把握主线。这是一篇夹叙夹议的文章。作者在文章的开头部分就在说明“改变”的重要性。由此我们可以推测出，作者接下来可能会通过一系列的经历与体验，展现这一主题。
2.把握情节，合理拓展。作者通过“Change is essential in life--- For years now I have no idea what I have been doing with my life---But being a lawyer was never my dream or goal in life---I honestly wanted to be a Writer--- Recently, the days were abnormal for me--- That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldn’t have been any happier ---My life started at 30, and every day since that point I haven’t stopped enjoying life---…”这一完整的情节叙述，告诉我们改变是生活中的必须，即与文章第一段中的“Change is essential in life because you learn from change and it gives you a new route to take in life.”相呼应，因此，在续写的时候，就需要把握这一情节变化，进行合理的拓展。
3. 关注衔接，确保连贯。通过对作者写作的情节的把握，我们可以保证续写不会偏离文章的发展的方向。但是，我们必须使用有效的衔接手段，这样才能确保续写意义的连贯性。例如，范文中的when, however, and, since, but, yes等都是很好的衔接手段。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
The most delicious memories seem to happen during the holidays. And like a squirrel preparing for winter, I put them away to enjoy slowly during the long winter months. Sometimes, I enjoy them for years.
Among them are sweetest recollections: my little girls at the church play and the moment they got their first angel wings; a pink dolly stroller(手推车) wheeled into the bedroom with a tiny voice declaring, ''Look what Santa Claus brought me! ''; or New Year's snowmen wearing bright scarves borrowed from a grandma's fragrant drawer.
But there is one memory that is a little bittersweet -- sort of like 80% dark chocolate, but still good for you.
This story brings to mind a colorful candy dish and a very little boy. The occasion was somewhere between Christmas and New Year's when a few candies in a dish remained behind, a bright spot in dull winter gray.
Wrapped in December's chill, my then 3-year old grandson, Justin, and I had dashed from the warmth of my parked car into the building where I planned to take care of a few work-related tasks.
A smiling secretary greeted us as we brushed the snowflakes and rubbed our hands to chase the cold. Then with my grandchild close to my side, I busied myself, finishing the items of business that had brought us there. But while his hand remained in mine, his eyes fell on the candy dish sitting nearby.
As we turned to leave, the thoughtful and very observant woman behind the desk asked the question all children wait to hear.
''Honey, '' the kindly woman said, peering over her glasses at Justin. ''Would you like a candy bar '' she asked, her hand pushing the dish close for an easier reach.
The boy looked up questioningly, his eyes meeting mine, permission hanging in the air. A slight nod from me and then a hurried beeline to the candy dish followed. One candy bar was already in his hand.
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''Justin! '' I said from the doorway.
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In the humor of the moment, I felt something hard to swallow.
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It seemed I’d done everything I’d ever wanted to do in my life, but I had one regret. I was born in 1898, the oldest of five kids. Papa couldn’t spare me to go to school, so I worked in the fields with him till I was 21 years old.
Everywhere I went, I learned some hard lessons about what happens to a man who even can’t read the alphabet. People cheat you out of wages. They sell you a ticket to one city, take your money and hand you a ticket to somewhere else.
By 1928, I’d been wandering for nine years. I met a woman named Elzenia. We fell in love, married and moved to Dallas, where I got work fixing roads for the city. When Amelia, the oldest of our seven children, first went to school, I took my wife aside. “Elzenia,” I said. “I don’t want the kids to know I can’t read or write.”
In 1938, one day my boss called me in. “George,” he said. “No one knows those machines like you do. I’d like to promote you.” But my thrill and surprise were cut short when he said, “Fill out this application and we’ll get you a raise.” I couldn’t admit the truth. I thanked him and walked out of his office. I did stay right where I was, until I turned 65 and my boss made me retire. But I didn’t stop working. For the next 25 years, I lived a happy life, but it still seemed to me like something was missing.
A young fellow handed me a piece of paper. It’s information about adult education classes. People can learn to read and write. Now I’m 102. I thought of my friends and neighbours and what they might think if they found out I couldn’t read. After all these years, my secret would be out. But all my life I’ve wanted to read. It was high time for action.
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The young man drove me to a huge building and led me into a spacious classroom, which was crowded with elderly people like me.
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I’m still going to school.
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The Board Meeting had come to an end. Bob started to stand up and knocked into the table, spilling his coffee over his notes. ''How embarrassing! I am getting so clumsy(笨拙的) in my old age. ''
Everyone had a good laugh, and soon we were all telling stories of our most embarrassing moments. It came around to Frank, who sat quietly listening to the others. Someone said, ''Come on, Frank. Tell us your most embarrassing moment. ''
Frank laughed and began to tell us of his childhood. ''I grew up in San Pedro. My Dad was a fisherman. He had his own boat, but it was hard making a living on the sea. He worked hard and would stay out until he caught enough to feed a big family. Not just enough for our family, but also for his Mom and Dad and the other kids that were still at home. ''
He looked at us and said, ''I wish you could have met my Dad. He was strong from pulling the nets and fighting the seas for his catch. When you got close to him, he smelled like the ocean. No matter how much my mother washed his clothes, they would still smell of the sea and of fish. ''
Frank's voice dropped a bit. ''When the weather was bad, he would drive me to school. He had this old truck that he used in his fishing business. That truck was older than he was. Half the time, he would slam to a stop and the old truck would belch(喷出) a cloud of smoke. He would pull right up in front, and it seemed like everybody would be standing around and watching. Then he would lean over and give me a goodbye kiss on the cheek and tell me to be a good boy. It was so embarrassing for me. Here, I was twelve years old. I was a big boy and my Dad would lean over and kiss me goodbye! ''
He paused and then went on, ''I remember the day I decided I was too old for a goodbye kiss. When we got to the school and came to a stop, he had his usual big smile. He started to lean toward me, but I put my hand up and said, 'No, Dad. ' ''
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注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
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It was the first time I had ever talked to him that way, and he had this surprised look on his face.
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Frank got a funny look on his face, and the tears began to well up in his eyes.
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I was a mother of four children, working at a low-paid job. Money was always valuable, but we had a roof over our heads, food on the table, and clothes in the wardrobe. I always tell myself to be brave and strong. I hope all my efforts would be worthwhile, as long as my children can grow up healthily. It was Christmas time. We drove downtown to see the Christmas lights, and enjoyed a special dinner, but the big excitement for the kids was the fun of Christmas shopping at the mall. This was a tradition of my family, so they all looked forward to the coming of the season of goodwill. They talked and planned for weeks ahead of time, asking each other what they wanted for Christmas.
The big day arrived and we started out early. I gave each of the four kids a twenty -dollar bill and asked them to search for gifts. Then everyone scattered(分散开)with the bill. I sat at a table in a café waiting for my children and enjoying an instant of silence. It must be a happy day.
Back in the car driving home, everyone was excited about Christmas, laughing and asking each other about what they had bought. I noted Ginger, my younger daughter had only one small and flat bag with her. I could see enough through the plastic bag to tell that she had bought candy bars—fifty-cent candy bars! What did she do with that twenty-dollar bill I had given her I was so angry. After getting home, I called her into my bedroom and closed the door. I couldn't hold back my anger and shouted at her, "What about the rest of the money No one would be convinced all these candies are worth 20 dollars. What do you want to do with the rest of the money "
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She was shocked at my reaction and burst into tears. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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My anger disappeared.
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I peered over my grandma’s shoulder as she sewed pieces of cloth together. The two pieces became one faster than I’d imagined. The colors, however, looked ugly when put together and none of the patterns matched. All the patches (补丁) on this blanket seemed to disagree.
“Grandma， that’s the ugliest quilt (棉被) I’ve ever seen.”
“Oh, sweetie, it’s warm and beautiful,” said Grandma, pointing to a pile of crazy patterned shirts and suits. “I can take these old clothes that Grandpa and I will never wear again and turn them into something useful and good. It’s not the quilts appearance but the love that sews it together that makes it beautiful. This quilt will keep you warm on a cold night like tonight. And I know that for a fact.” Grandma put her hand on my shoulder, “Not everyone is as lucky as we are. Here, put on your coat. We’ll get a second opinion about how ugly my quilts are.”
Grandma folded a finished quilt and tucked it into a shopping bag. Afterwards, we got in the car and drove downtown. The white snow turned grayer as we got to the city. Eventually, Grandma pulled up at a dark alley (胡同) and we got out of the car. The terrible smell of rotting garbage made me feel sick and pinch my nose shut. Grandma took my hand and led me to the street lamp. I could see the snow shimmering (发出微光) in the light.
Grandma paused. “There’s usually somebody down this alley. It’s quiet and out of the wind--a good place to stay on cold nights. A nice warm quilt might make it even better.”
The dark engulfed (吞没) Grandma and I as we stepped deep into the alley. The pavement was cracked and missing in spots. Chicken bones and stained boxes littered their way. And Grandma’s shoes made a loud sound with each step. Feeling frightened, I squeezed Grandma’s hand. Grandma squeezed my hand back. “Its OK.” she smiled.
“Who’s there ” shouted a voice out of the darkness.
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“I have a nice warm quilt, if you want it,” said Grandma.
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Back home, I found a worn-out quilt by accident in a cupboard.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
''Justin!'' I said from the doorway. By this time his pudgy hands had grabbed one -- and only one -- and he made his way back to me. My voice was somewhat serious as I realized manners had been forgotten. ''What do you say '' Hearing this, the little boy turned on his heel, promptly returning to the candy dish. ''Get Grandma one, too! '' I laughed. The secretary laughed. And even little Justin innocently giggled at the fun we were having.
In the humor of the moment, I felt something hard to swallow. There was a truth that lingered long after the strawberry candy taste had disappeared. What example had I set for this little one while often in my care Was he learning more about ''getting'' and less about gratitude -- that heartfelt ''thank you'' In the years since, I've always loved to remember that moment. But one gift I hope we all leave with our children is the importance of a grateful heart. Really, what could be sweeter
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。文章主要讲述了作者和孙子的一次经历带给她苦中带乐的回忆。
续写分为两段。第一段的开头是：“Justin！”我在走廊上说。这时他的手上抓着一颗糖，然后朝我走过来。我的声音有点严肃，我意识到自己当时失态了。“你说什么？”。听到这话，小男孩转过身去，立刻跑到糖果盘那里。“给奶奶也拿一颗。”我笑了。秘书也笑了。小Justin也咯咯的笑了。第二段的开头是：在这个幽默时刻，我觉得有些东西难以下咽。在草莓味糖果的味道消失之后，有一个想法始种萦绕在我心头。我给小家伙树立了什么榜样？他学到了更多关于得到，更少关于感激的东西吗(那种发自内心的感激)？从那以后，我一直记得那一刻。我总是希望让孩子学会真正的感恩。没有什么比这更好了。
续写时应注意故事情节要符合逻辑，基础时态为一般过去时。
【范文点评】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些高级表达，例如：Hearing this, the little boy turned on his heel, promptly returning to the candy dish.中使用了现在分词作状语；There was a truth that lingered long after the strawberry candy taste had disappeared.中that引导同位语从句；What example had I set for this little one while often in my care 中what引导主语从句。这些表达的使用不仅给文章增色添彩，也展示了作者扎实的语言功底。
2.【参考范文】
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The young man drove me to a huge building and led me into a spacious classroom, which was crowded with elderly people like me. Through chatting, I learned that they had all been longing to read and write but never had the chance to go to school.As the bell rang, in came the teacher, a woman well past forty. After a warm and brief greeting, we started our lesson. First we learned to read the alphabet and though I made mistakes at times, no one laughed at me. Everyone helped each other with open-hearted enjoyment.
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I’m still going to school. Though faced with the most challenging event of my life, I’m full of courage and confidence. With the generous help of my teacher, friends and my children, I have made huge progress in study. Now I’m never shy about admitting the truth that once I was not able to read and write at all. Besides, I’m eager to encourage more elderly people to attend the adult education classes, because it’s never too late to learn.
【解析】
本篇书面表达属于读后续写。要求考生阅读所给内容后，根据所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者小时候作为长子，没能去上学读书。后来作者工作，结婚，生子，他不愿让孩子们和别人知道他不识字。工作中有一次老板想要提拔他，让他填申请表，但作者无法说出他不会写字的真相。65岁后，作者退休了，他很快乐，但他总觉得错过了什么。一天，一个年轻人递给他一张有关成人教育课程的宣传单，现在作者102岁了，想到朋友们、邻居们可能会发现他的秘密。但作者一生都想要读书识字，他认为是时候行动了。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：年轻人开车将我带到一个巨大的建筑前，领我进入一个宽敞的教室，里面有许多像我一样的老人。因此，接下来应该接着写：与他人交谈后，我了解到他们都是渴望读书写字但是没有机会上学。铃响之后，走进来一位老师，简单问好之后，开始了上课。首先我们学习读字母表，尽管我有时犯错，但没有人嘲笑我。每个人都坦诚地相互帮助。第二段开头是：我仍然在上学。因此，接下来应该接着写：尽管面临着我人生中最具有挑战性的事，我充满勇气与信心。在老师、朋友与孩子们的帮助下，我在学习上取得了巨大的进步。另外，我积极地鼓励老年人参加成人教育课，因为活到老，学到老。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，情节生动，内容完整，符合题目要求。范文中使用的一些词汇和句型值得我们学习。高级词汇/短语，如：spacious、be crowded with、have the chance to do sth.、at times、faced with、With the generous help of、make huge progress等；高级句型：倒装句。As the bell rang, in came the teacher, a woman well past forty. 状语从句的省略。Though faced with the most challenging event of my life, I’m full of courage and confidence.
3.【参考范文】
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It was the first time I had ever talked to him that way, and he had this surprised look on his face. I said, ''Dad, I'm too old for a goodbye kiss on the cheek. I'm too old for any kind of kiss. '' My Dad looked at me for the longest time, and his eyes started to tear up. ''You're right, '' he said. ''You are a big boy…a man. I won't kiss you anymore. ''
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Frank got a funny look on his face, and the tears began to well up in his eyes. And he spoke. ''It wasn't long after that when my Dad went to sea and never came back. It was a bad weather day when most of the fishermen stayed in, but not Dad. He had a big family to feed. The ocean has swallowed him up.''
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。文章讲述了一个故事。董事会结束时Bob不小心打翻了咖啡，他觉得很尴尬。后来，大家都开始讲述自己记忆中最尴尬的场景。
续写分为两部分。第一部分的开头是：那是我第一次用那样的方式和他讲话，他脸上出现了惊讶的表情……所以可以接着写：我说：“爸爸，我已经足够大，不要在我脸颊上吻别了！那已经不适合我了。”父亲看着我，眼睛里涌出了泪水。他说：“你是对的。你现在已经是个大男孩了，不，你已经是个男子汉了，我以后不会在亲吻你了。”
第二段的开头是：弗兰克脸上出现了一个滑稽的表情，然后泪水模糊了他的双眼……所以可以接着写：他接着说：“在那之后不久，我爸爸去出海就再也没有回来过了。那天的天气不好，所有的渔人都待在家，除了我的父亲，因为他有一大家要养。海洋吞没了他。”
续写是要注意所写内容要符合故事逻辑，基础时态是一般过去时，但直接引语要根据具体情况来判断。
【范文点评】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些主从复合句，例如：It was a bad weather day when most of the fishermen stayed in, but not Dad.中when引导定语从句。
4.【参考范文】
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She was shocked at my reaction and burst into tears. She explained to me what had happened. “I was looking around, wondering what to buy, when I found the ‘Giving Trees’ with many lovely little cards on it. Out of curiosity,I stopped and read one of them. It was for a four-year-old girl. All she wanted for Christmas was a doll. Although I had only 15 dollars left, I thought of the poor girl. I had bought sweets for my Christmas. Mom, we had so much but she didn't have anything. So I took the card off the tree and bought the doll for her. ”
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My anger disappeared. I smiled at them and felt a great relief. I never felt so rich as I did that day. My efforts paid off . Yes, we were living a poor life. However，my children had learned to care about others. They had known the significance of kindness and giving. That was what I had for my Christmas.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者是四个孩子的母亲，生活拮据。但作者觉得只要孩子能健康成长，她的一切努力都是值得的。圣诞节到了，作者给了四个孩子每人一张20美元的钞票，让他们去买喜欢的礼物。回来时，作者发现小女儿Ginger用20美元只买了50美分的棒棒糖。作者很生气，质问她拿剩下的钱都做了什么。
续写部分分为两段：
第1段开头是：她被我的反应震惊了，哭了起来。接下来应该写Ginger向作者解释发生的事情。Ginger在买圣诞礼物时看到了“赠予树”，上面有很多小卡片。她阅读了其中的一张，是来自一个4岁的小女孩的。她想要一个洋娃娃作为圣诞礼物。于是Ginger从树上摘下卡片，给那个小女孩买了一个洋娃娃。
第2段开头是：我的怒气没有了。下面应该写作者的感受。作者感到非常欣慰，觉得自己从来没有像那天那样富有。虽然他们一家过着贫困的生活，但是孩子们学会了关爱别人，知道善良和给予的意义。
续写前需要仔细阅读文章，熟悉文章故事的发展，然后根据故事发展脉络，展开合理的想象，按要求完成任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，重点突出，同时表达时也使用了很多高级词汇，如explain… to sb.；look around；out of curiosity；think of；buy sth. for sb.；smile at；feel a great relief；pay off；live a poor life；care about；the significance of；kindness
等；还运用了复杂的句式，如“be doing… when”句型的运用I was looking around…when I found the ‘Giving Trees’； although引导的让步状语从句的运用 Although I had only 15 dollars left, I thought of the poor girl；what引导的表语从句的运用That was what I had for my Christmas等。
5.【参考范文】
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“I have a nice warm quilt, if you want it,” said Grandma. After a while, a beam of light appeared and a lady walked out of the darkness. Grandma opened the shopping bag and pulled out the multicolored quilt. “That’s pretty and it looks warm,” the lady exclaimed and took the quilt, her eyes filled with tears of gratitude. As we walked back down the alley, I looked over my shoulder and saw the lady holding the quilt tightly to her face. “You’re right, Grandma. That is a beautiful quilt.” On our ride back home, the lady’s grateful words were still ringing in my ears.
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Back home, I found a worn-out quilt by accident in a cupboard. I asked Grandma curiously, Grandma, why is there a quilt here After a moment of silence, Grandma began to share her own story. On a freezing night decades ago, as a poor young woman sleeping in the same alley, Grandma was offered a quilt, which warmed her up. She was determined to pass the love forward. That’s why Grandma sewed the old clothes together and made quilts for those in need. After hearing the story, I gave Grandma the biggest hug ever. I thought of all the clothes I didn’t want to wear anymore and knew what Grandma and I would do the next morning.
【解析】
本篇书面表达属于读后续写，要求考生续写两段内容使之与已给出的材料构成一篇完整的短文。
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者看到奶奶缝制了一条带有各种补丁的被子，认为这条被子非常的丑陋。但是，奶奶却说被子的美不在于它的外表，而在于这条被子是用爱缝制的。之后，奶奶和作者一起来到城里破旧而又寒冷的街道。作者很害怕，这时，从胡同里传来了声音。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：奶奶说：我有一条暖和的被子，如果你想要的话。所以接下来应该写刚才说话的人从胡同里走出来，奶奶把被子送给这个人。这个人收下被子，并且非常感激，之后，作者和奶奶上车离开。此处，也可以描写一下作者在现场的感受。
第二段开头是：回到家里，我碰巧在壁橱里发现了一条破旧的被子……本段应该写作者向奶奶询问这条被子的来历。奶奶向作者讲述这条被子的故事，以及缝制被子送给他人的原因。作者从中学到了很多道理，并且决心向奶奶学习做些慈善的事情。
续写时我们要按照已给出的材料中的关键词来写两段内容。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：a beam of light， pull out，ring in my ears，by accident，be determined to，等高级词汇；“That’s pretty and it looks warm,” the lady exclaimed and took the quilt, her eyes filled with tears of gratitude.一句中的her eyes filled with tears of gratitude.为独立主格结构；As we walked back down the alley, I looked over my shoulder and saw the lady holding the quilt tightly to her face.一句中使用了as引导的时间状语从句，以及感官动词的复合结构；as a poor young woman sleeping in the same alley, Grandma was offered a quilt, which warmed her up.一句使用了which引导的非限制性定语从句。That’s why Grandma sewed the old clothes together and made quilts for those in need. 一句使用了why引导的表语从句；I thought of all the clothes I didn’t want to wear anymore and knew what Grandma and I would do the next morning.一句使用了what引导的宾语从句。读后续写示例与写作训练1
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A man came home from work late again, tired and irritated , to find his 5-year old son waiting for him at the door. "Daddy, may I ask you a question "
"Yeah, sure, what is it " replied the man.
"Daddy, how much money do you make an hour "
"That's none of your business. What makes you ask such a thing " the man said angrily.
"I just want to know. Please tell me, how much do you make an hour " pleaded the little boy.
"If you must know, I make $20.00 an hour."
"Oh," the little boy replied, head bowed.
Looking up, he said, "Daddy, may I borrow $10.00 please "
The father was furious . "If the only reason you wanted to know how much money I make is just so you can borrow some to buy a silly toy or some other nonsense, then you march yourself straight to your room and go to bed. Think about why you're being so selfish. I work long, hard hours everyday and don't have time for such childish games."
The little boy quietly went to his room and shut the door. The man sat down and started to get even madder about the little boy's questioning. How dare he ask such questions only to get some money. After an hour or so, the man had calmed down, and started to think he may have been a little hard on his son. Maybe there was something he really needed to buy with that $10.00 and he really didn't ask for money very often. The man went to the door of the little boy's room and opened the door.
"Are you asleep son " he asked.
"No daddy, I'm awake," replied the boy.
"I've been thinking, may be I was too hard on you earlier," said the man.
"It's been a long day and I took my out on you. Here's that $10.00 you asked for."
The little boy sat straight up, beaming. "Oh, thank you daddy" he yelled.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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Then, the little boy reaching under his pillow…
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After hearing what the boy said, the man felt so sorry for what he had said to his son.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一位父亲工作很晚回到家，他5岁的儿子问他工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元。父亲对此很生气并朝儿子发了火。事后，父亲仔细思考后觉得儿子可能有所困难才开的口，所以最后还是借了钱。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为父亲the man和他5岁的儿子the little boy。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。父亲工作很晚回到家；儿子问父亲工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元；父亲为此生了气并叫儿子回自己房间反思；父亲考虑后觉得儿子事出有因便最后借了这10美元给儿子。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是儿子用他借的10美元和自己已有的零用钱买了父亲一个小时的时间，此件事情让父亲反思自己以前花太少的时间陪儿子了。续写第一段：根据第二段开头提示的句子，小男孩接下来的行为让父亲感到惭愧。所以可能是小男孩拿着借的钱给父亲买了份礼物，也可能是小男孩拿着向父亲借的钱和自己已有的钱买了父亲一个小时的时间。续写第二段：父亲为自己说过的话感到抱歉，可以写父亲之后用实际行动来弥补儿子，也可以写父亲开始反思以前太把重心放在工作上，而忽略了应多花点时间陪陪儿子。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：”What would the boy do after he got father’s $10.00 Would he just buy a silly toy or some other nonsense for himself just like what his father said Would he do something special to his father ”等。第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：”How would the father feel after hearing what the boy said What would the father do What changes would the father make ”等。
[参考范文]
Then, the little boy reaching under his pillow, he pulled out some more up bills. The man, seeing that the boy already had money, started to get angry again. He grumbled why the boy wanted more money even if he already had some. The little boy slowly counted out his money, then looked up at the man. "Because I didn't have enough, but now I do," the little boy replied, "Daddy, I have $20.00 now. Can I buy an hour of your time "
After hearing what the boy said, the man felt so sorry for what he had said to his son. Tears filled his eyes and he gave a deep hug to the son. In the past few years, he was always engaged in work and never spent a single weekend with his son. This $20.00 is just a short to all of us working so hard for our living. Don’t let time slip through our fingers without having spent some quality time with those who really matter to us.(除给定词外，169 words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。根据第二段开头提示，小男孩一定做了让父亲很感动的举动。因此小男孩借到钱以后，加上自己已有的零用钱向父亲买了他一个小时的时间。父亲听到儿子的话后，十分感动和抱歉，对自己以前的行为有较大的感触，并进行了反思。最后两句从全文的角度进行概括，突出故事的主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中，通过两段开头给的提示进行合理的推断，并通过事先设问的方式构思文章。两段分别以小男孩和父亲为主人公进行不同角度的叙述，符合故事发展的合理结局。
2. 有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectives)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了after来说明事件的先后顺序，in the past few years来转接过去情况的描述，because来引出小男孩借钱的原因。这些连接词的使用可以使文本读上去更有逻辑感，也使文章更加紧凑连贯。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Brownie and Harry were neighbor dogs in Stowe, a beautiful and peaceful town in Lamoille County, Vermont, United States, who met everyday to play together, running after each other joyfully. Like pairs of dogs you can find in most any neighborhood, these two loved each other and played together so often that they had worn a path through the grass of the field between their respective houses.
One evening, Brownie's family noticed that Brownie hadn't returned home as usual. They went looking for him with no success. Brownie still didn't show up the next day, and, despite their efforts to find him, by the next week he was still missing.
Curiously, the other dog, Harry, showed up at Brownie's house alone one day. He barked, jumped and pestered(纠缠) Brownie's human family, showing that he was filled with anxiety. Busy with their own lives, the family just ignored the nervous little neighbor dog and decided to let the missing dog go.
Harry refused to take “no” for an answer. Ted, Brownie’s owner, was steadily disturbed by the angry, determined little dog. One morning Harry followed Ted about, barking more insistently, then rushing toward a nearby empty lot and back, as if to say, “Follow me, please!I's very urgent!”
Eventually, Ted went after the mad Harry across the empty lot as Harry paused to race back and bark encouragingly. The little dog led the man under a tree, past some tree jungles, to a lonely spot a half mile from the house. There Ted found his beloved Brownie, and he was alive, with one of his front legs falling into a steel trap. At that moment, Ted understood the strange behavior of Harry.
Feeling regretful, Ted now wished he had taken Harry's earlier appeals seriously. However, Harry had done more than simply led Brownie’s human owner to his trapped friend. Ted noticed something quite remarkable before him and was shocked that the amount of love that the dog has for his partner could be so outstanding.
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In a circle around the injured dog, there were some remains of meals.
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Brownie was saved and taken home by his owner Ted.
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2. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.
“I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there something I can do to help ” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
“No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.”
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.
It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (抢劫)!
Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.
She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that ” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!”
Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
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The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur
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From the first day he entered my classroom, Willard P. Frank existed in his own world, shutting out his classmates and me. My attempts at building a friendly relationship with him were met with complete indifference. I could see that his classmates fared no better. Willard was strictly a loner who seemed to have no desire or need to break his silence.
Shortly after the Thanksgiving holiday, we received word of the annual Christmas collection of money for the less fortunate people in our school district. “Christmas is a season of giving,” I told my students. “There are a few students in the school who might not have a happy holiday season. By contributing to our Christmas collection, you will help buy food, clothing and toys for these needy people. We will start the collection tomorrow.”
When I called for the contributions the next day, I discovered that almost everyone had forgotten except for Willard P. Frank. The boy dug deep into his pants pockets as he walked slowly to my desk. Carefully, he dropped two quarters into the small container. “I don’t need milk for lunch,” he mumbled. For a moment, just a moment, he smiled. Then he turned and walked back to his desk.
That night, after school, I took our few contributions to the school principal. I couldn’t help sharing the incident that had taken place. “I may be wrong, but I believe Willard might be getting ready to become a part of the world around him,” I told the principal. “Yes.” he nodded. “And we might do well to have him share a bit of his world with us. I just received a list of the poor families in our school who most need help through the Christmas collection. Here, take a look at it.” As I gazed down to read, I discovered Willard P. Frank and his family were the top names on the list. Seeing this, I decided to do something for him.
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On that Sunday, I paid a visit to Willard’s family.
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The next day, I had a special class for Willard.
4.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整故事。续写的词数应为150词左右。
The big Town Hall clock was striking midnight when Frank began to cross the bridge. The dark night air was cold and a little wet, and the street lamp gave little light. Frank was anxious to get home and his footsteps rang loudly on the silent night.
When he reached the middle of the bridge, he thought he could hear someone coming near behind him. He looked back but could see no one. However , the sound continued and Frank began to walk more quickly. Then he slowed down again , thinking there was nothing to fear in a town as quiet as this.
Just then , he heard short , quick steps closely behind him. By the time he reached the other side of the bridge , he could almost feel someone at his heels. He turned round and there stood a man in a large coat. A hat was pulled down over his eyes and very little of his face could be seen.
Frank said something about the weather in an effort to be friendly. The man did not answer but asked roughly where Oakfield House was. Frank pointed to a big house in the distance and the stranger continued his way.
Then Frank wondered why the stranger had wanted to find Oakfield House at such an hour. He knew that the people who lived there were very rich. Almost without realizing what he was doing , he began following the stranger quickly.
The man was soon outside the house and Frank saw him look up at the windows. A light was still on and the man waited until it went out. When about half an hour had passed, Frank saw him climb noiselessly over the wall and heard him drop on the ground at the other side.
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Now Frank knew what the man wanted to do.
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Frank couldn’t just stand in the dark and wait.
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Throughout life, we come across many people who impact us in a way. The person who left a great impact on me is my dad.
Three months after turning fourteen, my life was great. I was getting settled into a high school; my grades were already starting off greatly and I was making friends. One day as I came home from school, I walked into our living room, finding my mom and dad talking. My parents turned to me and told me to sit down because there was something important they had to tell me. I soon found out that my dad’s liver (肝脏) was failing and he needed an immediate transplant. I was shocked and confused. He was working and never looked sick. My parents told me not to worry because everything would be fine. Four months had passed and my dad still had not received a new liver; he was progressively getting worse. His body seemed to be getting weaker, but he constantly said he was fine.
It was getting hard for my family and me. My dad had to quit his job leaving my mom to be the only provider. I had to take on the responsibility of cleaning the house, cooking meals and checking on my dad while my mom was at work. I had to cut back on hanging with my friends because my dad was beginning to go in and out of the hospital. My focus for school was starting to slip. So were my grades. Two nights before my school spring break, my mom received a call from the hospital that my dad had been in a car accident and that he was in hospital. Surprisingly, my dad hadn’t received a scratch on him. Then next night my mom received a call from the doctor stating that there was a liver that matched my dad’s body and that he needed to get to the hospital immediately.
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My mom and I rushed to the hospital and my dad was brought into surgery.
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Having to take on so many responsibility at home and constantly worn about my dad has helped shaped me into the person I am today.
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答案与解析
1. 【参考范文】
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In a circle around the injured dog, there were some remains of meals. It turned out that Harry had been visiting Brownie regularly in order to keep his friend alive. Everyday Harry took half of his dog food here to Brownie. Harry tried his best to beg the owner to ask for more leftovers and then he came out with the food. Each night Harry stayed with Brownie to protect him from other meat-eating animals, leaning close to Brownie to keep hi warm and encourage him to keep his spirits up.
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Brownie was saved and taken home by his owner Ted. His front leg was treated by an animal surgeon. He was attended so carefully and very soon he recovered. Everyday Harry came to see him and played with him happily. For many years thereafter, the two families still watched the faithful friends having fun and chasing each other down that well-worn path between their houses. The two dogs not only set up their own friendship but also made the two families harmonious and close together.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，两只小狗Brownie和Harry是邻居， 每天会一起玩， 以至于两家之间的草地上已经被踏出了一条小径。一天傍晚， Brownie突然不见了踪影， 它的主人苦寻无果便决定放弃。但Harry却不断到Brownie 主人家， 狂吠， 乱跳， ”纠缠”着Brownie 的主人一家，通过它坚持不懈的”纠缠”， Brownie的主人跟随着它找到了被困的Brownie。
Paragraph 1的开头是“在受伤的Brownie四周，有一圈残羹剩饭”，文章中最后一段讲到”Harry不仅仅只是带领Brownie的主人来到它被困的朋友跟前”，由此可知，这些食物是Harry给Brownie带来的，本段应描述在Brownie 被困的日子里， Harry是如何带食物给Brownie的，并且上文提到两只小狗的感情十分深厚， 在这期间， Harry应该会一直陪伴和保护着Brownie。
Paragraph 2的开头是“Brownie被它的主人Ted救下并带回家”， 由此可知， 接下来可能会描述Brownie被带回去接受治疗， 伤好后， 两只小狗又开始一起开心地嬉戏玩耍，且可以根据情节进一步延伸，如两只小狗的友情也进一步拉近了两家人的距离。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，续写部分与原文内容一致，使之构成一篇完整的短文
【范文点评】
本续写描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：turn out，take half of ，come out with，not only … but also …等高级词汇；名词性从句It turned out that Harry had been visiting Brownie regularly in order to keep his friend alive.非谓语动词Each night Harry stayed with Brownie to protect him from other meat-eating animals, leaning close to Brownie to keep hi warm and encourage him to keep his spirits up.等高级句式。
2.【参考范文】
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” Arthur immediately realized thatthe young manwas thebankrobber. So Arthur didn’t stop, but continued to run until he saw and caught a taxi in front of him. He quickly put thesuitcasein the car and said to the driver, “Please hurry to the Police Station. I have a case to report to the police. The man shouting behind isthe bank thief!”The taxi raced away to the Police Station like an arrow.
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur said to the police who had been waiting and who had already received therobberyreport, this suitcase is that of the bank robber. It may be filled with the money stolen from the bank, I hand it to you. Please get ready to arrest the man.”
【解析】
通过审题，我们可看出命题者的要求是根据英语部分所提供的情景，续写一篇150词左右的短文。
另外，在情景的后面还有用英语所作的要求，要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；续写完成后，用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。实际上，这类试题给出了一个较为宽松的写作环境。考生应在给定的要求下多发挥想象，合理地编造故事情节，写作时注意时态的正确使用，主要时态为过去时，适当的时候用过去进行时态，尽量做到语句通顺，思路流畅，尽量用自己熟悉的表达，恰当地使用连词进行语句过渡，使文章条理清楚；合理使用副词，使文章更生动具体。如文中immediately，quickly等，文中使用了定语从句The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur said to the police who had been waiting and who had already received the robbery report使文章更富有层次感。非谓语动词的使用让语句更为简练，如：It may be filled with the money stolen from the bank.
3.【参考范文】
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On that Sunday, I paid a visit to Willard’s family. On entering his house, I was surprised to find a barely empty room with a broken bed and a dirty sofa. Willard told me his mother died and that his father was missing, leaving him to live with a sick grandma. When asked why he had given the two quarters, Willard mumbled, “I just want to help others by contributing my milk money.” I couldn’t help bursting into tears, thinking I should help him break his silence.
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The next day, I had a special class for Willard. I shared his story with the whole class and said, “Now, on behalf of the people in need, I should say thanks to Willard, you are great!” After a silence, all the students clapped, saying “Willard, you are great!” and they walked to him and hugged him tightly. A friend relationship was built and Willard’s silence was broken by a smile on his face.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，沉默寡言的Willard同学，在感恩节其他同学都忘记带要捐赠的东西时，Willard毅然决然捐出了自己的牛奶费用。作者随后在贫困生名单中发现Willard赫然在列，所以决定帮助Willard。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：星期天我前往Willard家进行家访。上文讲到Willard时贫困家庭，所以这一段落的续写应该是围绕着Willard家有多么贫困所展开。所以应该具体写家中的装潢来体现贫困。第二段的开头：接下来的一天，我决定给Willard一场特别的课。上文说到虽然贫困，但是Willard还是捐出了自己的牛奶钱。所以这一段肯定是要通过这堂课对Willard的奉献精神进行赞扬，以及课堂结束后所带来的结果。
续写时要求使用文章中的关键词，所以这就增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉文章的主要大意以及关键词，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：can’t help doing; burst into tears; mumble等高级词汇；宾语从句和状语从句的省略When asked why he had given the two quarters, Willard mumbled, “I just want to help others by contributing my milk money.”展示了句式的多样性；而非谓语作状语I couldn’t help bursting into tears, thinking I should help him break his silence.更是写得好；通过这些高级句型，让这篇文章增色不少。
4.【参考范文】
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Now Frank knew what the man wanted to do.Everyone knew that Oakfield House was filled with artwork worth millions of dollars. It was clear to Frank that the family inside was in danger. Would the man have a weapon Would he be strong enough to overpower him before he could harm the people inside Frank’s heart was racing with fear. He reached for his cellphone to call the police, but found it out of power. If only he had charged his phone before leaving the office, but it was too late.
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Frank couldn’t just stand in the dark and wait. He had to do something, even if it meant risking his own life. At his feet he silently found several good-sized stones, and he threw them with all his strength right at the windows of the house. The clatter woke up the people inside the house and a light came on upstairs. The man froze, not quite knowing what had just happened. Lights came on everywhere in the house and within a minute the night was filled with sounds of police sirens screaming towards Oakfield House.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。根据所给的两个段首句，来续写一个完整的故事。
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，午夜时分Frank走在路上，总感觉有人跟着自己，他放慢脚步，发现一个身穿大衣，帽檐遮脸的人，Frank与其交谈，试图表现出镇定的样子，而那人并不理睬，只顾着问Oakfield House怎么走。Frank好奇陌生人为什么这么晚要去Oakfield House，并且住在那里的人非常富有。想到这些，Frank决定悄悄跟随谋生人看他到底要做什么，在Oakfield House外，Frank看到陌生人等灯全熄灭后翻墙进入了Oakfield House里面……
根据段落首句，确定段落走向。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：现在Frank知道这个男人要干什么了。可能Frank猜出这个男子是盗贼。接下来Frank会做什么呢？第二段开头是：Frank不能站在那里干等。他又在等什么呢？很有可能Frank报了案，他认为不能干等着警察来。所以第一段续写Frank报案，第二段Frank接下来采取了什么措施，最后盗贼被擒住。
【范文点评】
本文续写情节合情合理，内容拓展丰富，并且运用了丰富多变的句式：如It was clear to Frank that the family inside was in danger. 此句运用了it做形式主语；If only he had charged his phone before leaving the office, but it was too late.此句运用了虚拟语气；He had to do something, even if it meant risking his own life.此句运用了让步状语从句……为文章增色添彩。
5.【参考范文】
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My mom and I rushed to the hospital and my dad was brought into surgery. We were waiting anxiously outside. After what seemed to be a long time, his doctor came out and informed us that the surgery was successful, but my dad couldn't leave the hospital for at least a month. During my dad's stay in the hospital and his adapting to his new liver, my father still tried to comfort us, saying that everything would be OK.
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Having to take on so many responsibility at home and constantly worn about my dad has helped shaped me into the person I am today. I become more responsible for my family and even for everything. Seeing my dad remain positive and strong throughout his journey has taught me not to take my life for granted, but still positive to life. Also, having seen my dad in hospital for months has inspired me to go into the medical field as a doctor. Thus, I can do everything in my power to help those in need.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者十四岁时一天放学回家父母告诉作者，父亲需要肝脏移植，四个月过去了，父亲仍然没有接受新的肝脏移植；他的病情越来越严重。他的身体似乎越来越虚弱，但他不断地说他很好。作者的母亲成为了家庭的支撑，作者也必须承担起打扫房间、做饭和照看爸爸的责任。在学校放春假的前两天晚上，妈妈接到了医院的电话，说作者父亲出了车祸，住院了。令人惊讶的是，父亲身上没有任何伤痕。第二天晚上，母亲接到了医生的电话，说有一个肝脏与父亲的身体匹配，需要马上送到医院。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：我和妈妈赶到医院，爸爸被送进了手术室。所以后文应该是讲述父亲接受手术后的情况，手术很成功，但父亲至少一个月都不能出院。在父亲住院期间，他正在适应他的新肝脏，父亲仍然说一切都会好起来的。第二段开头是：我在家里承担了那么多的责任，而且总是穿着我父亲的衣服，这些都塑造了我今天的样子。本段应该写作者在这件事中的体会，作者变得更负责，父亲也教会了作者要积极地面对生活。同时，看到父亲住院几个月的经历也激励作者进入医学领域，成为一名医生，可以尽自己所能去帮助那些需要帮助的人。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：anxiously, seem to, inform sb. that, at least等高级词汇短语；After what seemed to be a long time, his doctor came out and informed us that the surgery was successful, but my dad couldn't leave the hospital for at least a month.运用了宾语从句；Also, having seen my dad in hospital for months has inspired me to go into the medical field as a doctor.运用了动名词短语作主语等高级句式。读后续写示例与写作训练2
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Jenny was a bright-eyed, pretty five-year-old girl.
One day when she and her mother were checking out at the grocery store(杂货店), Jenny saw a plastic necklace which was priced at $2.50. How she wanted that necklace, and when she asked her mother if she would buy it for her, her mother said, "Well, it is a pretty necklace, but it costs an awful lot of money. I'll tell you what. I'll buy you the necklace, and when we get home we can make up a list of chores that you can do to pay for the necklace. And don't forget that for your birthday Grandma just might give you a whole dollar bill, too. Okay " Jenny agreed happily, and her mother bought the pearl necklace for her.
Jenny worked on her chores very hard every day, and sure enough, her grandma gave her a brand-new dollar bill for her birthday. Soon Jenny had paid off the . How Jenny loved those pearls! She wore them everywhere to kindergarten, bed and even when she went out with her mother to run .
The only time she didn't wear them was in the shower, because her mother had told her that they would turn her neck green!
Jenny had a very loving daddy. When Jenny went to bed, he would get up from his favorite chair every night and read Jenny her favorite story.
One night when he finished the story, he asked Jenny, "Hey, sweetie, do you love me "
"Oh yes, Daddy, you know I love you," the little girl said with a warm smile.
"Well, then, give me your pearls."
"Oh! Daddy, not my pearls!" Jenny refused. "But you can have , my favorite doll. Remember her You gave her to me last year for my birthday. And you can have her tea party , too. Okay "
"Oh no, darling, that's okay."Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss. "Good night, little one."
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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A week later, Jenny’s father once again asked Jenny the same question after her story...
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Another week later, when her father came in to read her a story as usual...
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：Jenny和她妈妈经过一家杂货店的时候看见一串塑料珍珠项链，她非常喜欢，于是就要求妈妈买给她并且答应了帮妈妈做家务的方式来赚取项链钱的要求。Jenny很快就赚到了足够的钱。Jenny的爸爸非常爱她，有一天晚上，爸爸问她愿不愿意将项链送给他，但是Jenny拒绝了。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为小女孩Jenny，Jenny的妈妈(mother)，Jenny的外婆(Grandma)和Jenny的爸爸(father,daddy)。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。Jenny和妈妈路过一家杂货店；Jenny看重一条塑料珍珠项链；Jenny答应妈妈买项链而提出的要求；Jenny每天做家务很快赚到了足够的钱；Jenny爸爸向她要这串项链，但是Jenny拒绝了。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是Jenny通过再三考虑几番抉择，最后还是把珍珠项链给了爸爸，没想到正因为如此却意外收获了一份更加珍贵的礼物。续写第一段：一周后，Jenny的爸爸再次问了Jenny相同的问题，可能是Jenny同意了将心爱的珍珠项链送给爸爸，也可能是Jenny还是不愿意将项链送给爸爸。但是根据续写第二段开头的提示，可能Jenny拒绝了爸爸这种可能性更符合逻辑一点。续写第二段：有续写第一段的内容作为铺垫，此段的发展可能是Jenny仍然不同意将项链给爸爸，也可能是她将项链送给了爸爸，若是这种可能，则还可以在此基础上描写一些爸爸的反应，如礼尚往来，给了Jenny其他的礼物作为回报等。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“What did Jenny response to father’s question Did she give the pearls to father or just refuse again What did the father do after Jenny’s answer 等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What did the father do this time Did he still ask the same question Did Jenny give the pearls to her father at last If so, what did her father do and how did he feel 等”。
[参考范文]
A week later, Jenny’s father once again asked Jenny the same question after her story, "Do you love me " Jenny gave a definite answer to this question without hesitation. But when the conversation came to whether she could give her pearls to her father, she refused a second time.
Another week later, when her father came in to read her a story as usual, Jenny was sitting on her bed and her lip was trembling." Here, Daddy," she said, and held out her hand. Inside of her hand was her beloved plastic pearl necklace. She let it slip into her father's hand. At this time, her father pulled out of his pocket a blue box, and some real, genuine, beautiful pearls were just inside. He had had them all along. He was waiting for Jenny to give up the cheap stuff so he could give her the real thing. Sometimes, life is just like this: give up one thing and get another chance to receive a better thing.(除给定词外，164 words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。续写两个段落开头给出句子中写了两次爸爸晚上给Jenny讲故事，提示可能性最大的情景发展应该是有两次类似的针对愿不愿意给珍珠项链的交谈。因此，第一段写了爸爸再次问Jenny愿不愿意给项链，然而这次Jenny仍然不愿意给。第二段，如果再次写Jenny不愿意给的话文章主题就很难得到升华，因此这段中，我们将主动权转交到Jenny身上，Jenny主动将项链给了爸爸，并且父亲相应的给了她一条真的珍珠项链。最后一句话是根据这个小故事而得出的关于人生的一个小道理，从而在文章结尾处点出文章主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据每段续写开头的提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在开始写范文前，我们首先用7个问题来构思整个文章的发展。通过对这7个问题的可能回答的排列组合，挑选出最符合逻辑的情节发展。同时，为了提升整个范文的情感目标，可以使结局适当出人意料及令人深思一点。本范文在第二段时转换了与原文相反的基调，突出了小女孩在这件事情中的主动性与转变，使得范文更有层次感。
2. 紧密联系原文内容
续写是在原文内容的基础上进一步对接下来发展情节的预测和描写。因此，续写的内容必须与原文紧密相关。可以在情节上承接原文，也可以用特定的细节，如人物，地点，事件等来呼应原文。如在本范文中用a second time来呼应原文中Jenny第一次拒绝爸爸的要求。
3. 有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectives)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了a week later和another week later来说明事件的时间顺序，用but来表示转折，用so来表因果关系。这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Sally had anxiety disorder trouble that made her fail to speak in social situations. I’m a nurse and use Bella to help children in my community, to bring them comfort and confidence the way only a dog can. I thought back to the day when I’d first brought Bella to the school.
That morning in January, her teacher led us to a room. “Sally hasn’t spoken outside her home in two years,” she told me. “Her parents have taken her to doctors, but nothing has worked. ” A little girl stood shyly just inside the doorway. Her eyes brightened when she noticed my dog.
“This is Bella.” I said. “She does tricks. Would you like to see ”
Sally nodded. I motioned with my hand. Bella lay down and then rolled over. Sally’s eyes lit up. I showed Sally the hand signals for various commands. She was a natural with Bella, maybe because she couldn’t rely on the spoken word herself. Bella sensed that and responded. Soon Sally was able to put Bella through her paces all on her own. I could see her standing taller, more sure of herself each time we met.
One morning in March when she was working with Bella, I heard a tiny voice, barely a whisper, “Good dog. " Sally didn't take her eyes off Bella, but I wanted to jump for joy. Sally spoke a little more each week, only to Bella at first, but then to me. Later, she started giving voice commands with her hand signals and her confidence rose.
Now, five-year-old Sally stood nervously in front of her kindergarten class, with Bella, my trained dog, sitting calmly by her side. All the eyes of her classmates were focused on Sally. They were waiting for her to speak. It was June—only one week of school left—but they had never heard her voice. Not once.
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But not a word came out. Sally had been so excited about putting on a dog show for her class.
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The next week, she told me she wanted to try again, looking up at me with determination.
2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
A dawning sun shaped the massive form of the train. Loaded with fuel, water, and sand for power, the lead train weighed in at 410,000 pounds. Conductor Robert, 49, ran his eye along the 96 cars behind him.
It was 7 a.m. Robert had already checked the list of dangerous materials aboard the train. ''We've got some gas with us,'' he'd reported to his engineer, Lindley, in the cab (驾驶室). The presence of gas would mean taking extra care when braking the 6,200-ton train. With explosive gas on board, an accident would be more dangerous. After a final external inspection, Robert jumped aboard. Slowly the train pulled out of the station.
Robert and Lindley had 50 years of railroading experience between them. They approached Lafayette at about 1:45 p. m. and slowed the train to the speed limit. Lindley turned on his flashing lights and warning bell. The two had been through the city hundreds of times, but they grew extra cautious rounding the first curve (弯道). Ahead, over just three miles of track, lay no fewer than 24 street crossings. As the train came out of the curve, Lindley noticed a small dot on the right rail about 150 yards ahead. He thought it might be a dog. Now, as the train approached within 100 yards of the object on the rail, Robert looked attentively. Then shock coursed through him.
''My God!'' he yelled as a tiny face turned toward him. ''It's a baby!''
Lindley had an instant decision to make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped around a curve. He had to risk an emergency stop. Robert opened the left door of the engine cab quickly and stepped out onto a narrow walkway. He hurried to the front of the engine and crossed to the right side. He then stepped down to the lower portion of the walkway just to the back of the train's ''cow catcher''.
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Stretching as far as he could, Robert put his right leg out in front of him.
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3.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Missus Sommers one day found herself the unexpected owner of fifteen dollars. It seemed to her a very large amount of money. For a day or two she walked around in a dreamy state as she thought about her choices. Her daughter Janie was wearing worn shoes and needed new ones. She would buy cloth for new shirts for the boys. Her daughter Mag should have another dress. And still there would be enough left for new stockings for her children. The idea about how to spend the dollars made her restless with excitement.
On the day she planned to go shopping with the money, she ate a light meal- no! Between getting the children fed and the house cleaned, and preparing herself to go shopping, she forgot to eat at all!
When she arrived at the large department store, she spotted a pile of silk stockings at the entrance. A sign nearby announced that they had been reduced in price a young girl behind the counter asked her if she wished to examine the silky leg coverings. She smiled as if she had been asked to inspect diamond jewelry, and started to feel the soft, expensive items. Missus Sommers picked up a black pair and looked at them closely. Two red marks suddenly showed on her pale face. She looked up at the shop girl and said proudly, “Well, I will buy this pair.”
Missus Sommers changed her cotton stockings for the new silk ones in the ladies’ rest area. She had let herself be controlled by some machine-like force that directed her actions and freed her of responsibility. How good was the touch of the silk on her skin! Then she put her shoes back on and put her old stockings into her bag. Next, she went to the shoe department, where she tried on a pair of new boots. Her foot and ankle looked lovely. She could not believe that they were a part of herself.
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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After buying a pair of new boots, she walked into the clothing department.
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She was about to leave the store when a kid running around reminded her of something.
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A farmer grew some vegetables in his garden. One day his wife was ill and he had no money. He had to sell some cabbages and carrots in the market. The next morning he took two baskets of vegetables to town. But it was snowing hard that afternoon and there were few people in the street. When his vegetables were sold out, it was dark. He bought some medicine and hurried to his village.
On his way home he saw a person lying on the snow. He placed his baskets on the ground and was going to help the person to get up. At that time he found it was a dead man and there was much blood on his body. He was so afraid that he ran away quickly, without taking the baskets with him.
The next afternoon the farmer was sent to the police station. Having shown the baskets, an officer asked, “Are these yours ” “Yes, sir,” the farmer answered timidly. “Have you killed the man ” “No, no, sir,” the farmer said in a hurry. "When did you see the dead man " “About seven last evening.” "Did you see who killed the man " "No, sir." The officer brought out a knife and asked, "Have you seen it before ” "No, sir." The officer became angry and told the policeman to beat him up and sent him into prison, He wanted to trap the farmer into the confession(供认), but the farmer didn't admit he was the murderer.
注意：1. 所续写的短文词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。.
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The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again.
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Last Sunday afternoon, Sandra and I were eager to meet up with a man on Detroit’s east side to help him get ready for a job interview this week. But on the way, we spotted a dog lying near the road next to his owner. We thought he’d been hit by a car. My friend, Sandra Abrahamian and I, had assisted animal rescue groups before and we thought there might be something we could do, so we quickly pulled over to help.
His owner, a woman told us the dog’s name is Bosco, and she was walking him over a mile in the heat to her new home. She said Bosco was an outside dog and no one would give him a ride to her new place. That’s when she and a friend decided to walk the entire way. He was going from a life on a chain in one backyard to another. She said Bosco was having trouble breathing along the way, but they thought he could make it. But just a block away from their destination, Bosco fell down. We could tell he was suffering from heatstroke(中暑). She told us he had thrown up and could no longer stand. Bosco was out of breath quickly, his drool(口水) was also thick. Bosco’s owner said she wanted to give him away because she didn’t have time for him. She said he would never be allowed into her new “home” because her children have allergies(过敏症) and she worried he would dirty the carpet.
I made a call to Kristina Rinaldi of Detroit Dog Rescue to ask if they could help Bosco because it was clear that he was going to die without emergency care. To our happiness, Rinaldi said they could help. At once she told the people at Oakland Veterinary Referral Services that a dog which needed critical care was being rushed in and they must be ready to try their best to save him.
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Sandra drove while I stayed in the back seat trying to comfort Bosco.
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So Bosco is now being called Roscoe, whose critical care and recovery were estimated to be several thousand dollars.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
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But not a word came out. Sally had been so excited about putting on a dog show for her class. She had been quite familiar with the hand signals and had practiced for weeks. Now her eyes found mine. I nodded encouragingly. She took a deep breath and opened her mouth. Her mouth---then her whole body--- seemed to close in on itself in defeat. Sally stood off to the side, head down. I felt awful. Sally returned to her seat, not looking at anyone, not even Bella.
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The next week, she told me she wanted to try again, looking up at me with determination. I asked whether she was sure and suggested it would be Ok if she waited till next year. She refused and insisted giving her presentation that day. Then we headed to Sally’s classroom. The kids were sitting in a circle on the floor listening to the teacher. We walked to the front of the room. I shook Sally’s hands and stepped back. For a few seconds, she stood silently, staring at her classmates. Finally she whispered, “This is Bella.” Then, a little louder with more confidence. “Bella.”
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，文章主要讲了萨莉患有焦虑症，这使她在社交场合不能说话。作者是一名护士，用贝拉来帮助社区里的孩子们，给他们带来安慰和信心，只有狗才能做到这一点。在小狗贝拉的帮助下，萨莉逐渐可以在社交场合说话了。一天，在幼儿园里，大家都在等待着萨莉说话。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：但是，萨莉一个字也没有说出来，所以后文应该是讲述萨莉一言不发的尴尬场景。第二段开头是：第二个星期，她抬头坚定地看着我，告诉我她想再试一次。本段应该写萨莉再次尝试，成功地把自己的好朋友小狗贝拉介绍给了自己的同学们。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如： Sally returned to her seat, not looking at anyone, not even Bella. 现在分词作伴随状语；I asked whether she was sure and suggested it would be Ok if she waited till next year.宾语从句等高级句式。
2.【参考范文】
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Stretching as far as he could, Robert put his right leg out in front of him. Swinging his leg out, he swept her aside with his foot. Robert swiftly leapt from the moving train and ran back to the child. She lay crying by the tracks, blood streaming from a wound beneath her hair. A great relief sweeping over Robert, Robert lifted her from the dirt. It was only then that Robert noticed the train had stopped and there were flashing red lights of emergency vehicles alongside the tracks. With the baby in his arms, Robert began to walk and was met by the police.
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Telling himself he still had a job to do, Robert went back to check on the cars. As Robert aboard rested in the train, his pent-up emotions rushed to the surface. It had all unfolded so fast, and the reality of what he had done was only now hitting him. Within minutes, Lindley was standing beside Robert, taking the controls again. They looked at each other, their expressions of relief and gratitude more persuasive than words. Robert’s overalls were still spotted with blood. The train pulled slowly out of Lafayette.
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。本篇讲述了一个故事。Robert和Lindley是经验丰富且配合默契的火车驾驶员。一次他们驾驶的火车在全速前进时，Lindley注意到远处的轨道上有个黑点，他意为是一条狗，后来证实这个黑点是一个婴儿。他们要在保证火车安全的情况下，减速救下这个婴儿。
根据第一段的开头可知，Robert尽可能把自己的腿伸长，然后右腿放在前面。故可以接着写：Robert成功救出小孩，可能自己受了皮外伤，然后把孩子交给警察、孩子的家人或铁路管理人员等，情节合理就可以接受。
根据第二段的开头可知，Robert虽然内心紧张，但他告诉自己还有工作要做。故可以接着写：Robert上车平静后，可以描写他的身体感觉，内心活动，或者描述在场人员对他的赞扬，两人的对话、动作或眼神交流等，体现出他们工作之间的默契。在紧急停车之后，他们继续前行。
【范文点评】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些高分句型，例如：It was only then that Robert noticed the train had stopped and there were flashing red lights of emergency vehicles alongside the tracks.使用了强调it was…that…；Lindley was standing beside Robert, taking the controls again.使用了现在分词作状语。
3.【参考范文】
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After buying a pair of new boots, she walked into the clothing ing to a dressing mirror, looking at herself in the mirror, “Won’t I look more beautiful if my shoe matches a perfect dress on my body ” thought Missus Sommers. She waving to the salesgirl of the department and asked her whether she could try on the fashionable dress styles. Her request was approved, Missus Sommers kept trying on. One dress after another tried on, she put them into her shopping cart fondly.
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She was about to leave the store when a kid running around reminded her of something. “Oh, My God! I forgot all about my kids!” yelled Missus Sommers, starting to blame herself. “Excuse me, salesgirl, would you be so kind as to let me put back all I had chosen, for I had intended to buy my daughter Janie a new pair of shoes, boy’s new shirts and all of them new stockings I must have lost my head!” A sense of responsibility of caring about her kids drove her to think of the right idea where the money should go.
【解析】
文章主要讲的是Sommers太太意外得到了15美元，非常高兴，想着给女儿和儿子们买鞋子和衬衫，结果在百货公司试穿衣服时逐渐忘了自己要给孩子们买东西，最后让售货小姐退还了购物车里所有的衣服的故事。在给的第一段开头中，“After buying a pair of new boots, she walked into the clothing department.”“the clothing department”是关键词，表示“服装部”，说明Sommers后来去了服装部，第一段应当围绕她在服装部发生的事情展开；在给的第二段开头中“She was about to leave the store when a kid running around reminded her of something.”此句中的kid为关键词，因为后文都围绕这个词在说。
【高分句型一】
After her request was approved, Missus Sommers kept trying on. 在她的请求被批准后，Sommers太太继续尝试。运用时间状语从句。
【高分句型二】
Although she really liked these clothes, a sense of responsibility of caring about her kids drove her to think of the right idea where the money should go. 虽然她真的很喜欢这些衣服，但是一种照顾孩子的责任感驱使她去想钱应该花在哪里。运用让步状语从句。
4.【参考范文】
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The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again. The farmer was very afraid, and he thought he would be sentenced to death by killing people, although he was innocent. He must tell people the truth, but no one could hear his voice. He hoped that someone could come and save him.
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The farmer was lucky. A few days later, a young man came to the police station with a lot of journalists, saying that he saw the murderer. It was the police officer who killed the man on the snow! He saw the police officer killing the man with a knife late in the evening. He was so frightened and ran away. But the young man thought the farmer was innocent. So he took the great courage to expose the real criminal. After the investigation, the young man was right. The police officer was sent into prison and the policeman who beat up the farmer was fired, and the brave young man was regarded as the hero by the villagers.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，农夫在超市买完菜回家的路上看到了倒在地方的人，他本想将他扶起，但发现他死了之后很害怕就跑了，并将自己的篮子忘在了那里。第二天警察找他问话，他不承认自己是凶手。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：警官非常生气，他让警察再打他一顿……，所以应该写农夫的心理活动，即他内心的恐惧以及想法等。第二段开头是：农夫很幸运。几天后……，本段应该写事情的转机。目击证人说出了谁是真凶，坏人得到了应有的惩罚，农夫也洗清了冤屈，证人收到大家尊敬。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：so … that; asked sb. to do; beat sb. up; be sentenced to; take the great courage to do; be regarded as等高级词汇；强调句It was the police officer who killed the man on the snow，定语从句the policeman who beat up the farmer was fired等高级句式。
5.【参考范文】
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Sandra drove while I stayed in the back seat trying to comfort Bosco. I thought we lost him a couple of times when he was seemingly out of breath and his eyes seemed to close. By the time we arrived, Bosco was wheeled into the animal care center to receive emergency care. Bosco was put on oxygen and was taken good care of by staff there and we waited anxiously for the dog to get out of danger. Rinaldi said another dog in Detroit Dog Rescue had already been named Bosco, and she wanted this new member to have a new name for his new life.
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So Bosco is now being called Roscoe, whose critical care and recovery were estimated to be several thousand dollars. It would be difficult for Roscoe’s new home to cover the costs as a non-profit organization. Thankfully, many people who knew Roscoe’s story on Detroit Dog Rescue’s Facebook page donated money to his care. With the help of supporters, Detroit Dog Rescue managed to make it. Once Roscoe was in a stable state, Sandra and I returned to our original mission, knowing we had already been given the chance to help one desperate soul.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。所给文章讲述了救助小狗Bosco以及给他找到新家的经过。作者和朋友Sandra在路上遇到了一只因为中暑而生命垂危的狗。狗的主人说因为种种原因，她想将这只狗送出去。作者打电话给在Detroit Dog Rescue工作的Kristina Rinaldi，向她说明了情况后，Rinaldi 答应帮忙。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：Sandra开着车而我待在后座试图安抚Bosco，再结合Paragraph 2开头的内容提示可知，接下来的内容应该是去救援中心途中Bosco的情况，以及到达救援中心后Bosco的情况(接受治疗，救援中心的工作人员给了Bosco一个新名字Roscoe等)。无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。
第二段开头是：现在Bosco被称为Roscoe，它的急救护理和恢复预计要花费几千美元。这暗示接下来的内容可能会交代这笔钱的来历(如有好心人捐款等)，还可以进一步延伸内容， 交代一下Roscoe的恢复情况以及作者的感想。
续写时要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。根据所给内容和段落开头语续写，注意连贯，使之构成一篇完整的短文。注意按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文内容符合要求，语句严谨，层次分明，同时文中使用高级句子。I thought we lost him a couple of times when he was seemingly out of breath and his eyes seemed to close.句中使用when引导的定语从句；By the time we arrived, Bosco was wheeled into the animal care center to receive emergency care.句中使用By the time引导时间状语从句；Thankfully, many people who knew Roscoe’s story on Detroit Dog Rescue’s Facebook page donated money to his care.句中使用who引导定语从句。读后续写示例与写作训练8
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A truck driver was enjoying his meal at a local restaurant when an old lady came in. To his surprise, the owner and all the servers hurried behind the counter to meet her.
“Mrs. Cosby!” They shouted, “How pleased to see you!”
The old lady smiled and greeted them all.
Bob, the owner said, “Sit down and make yourself comfortable, Mrs. Cosby! What would you like to eat ”
When Bob passed his table, the truck driver could not resist to ask what is so special about the old lady.
“I’ll explain if you are interested,” Bob smiled.
“Every school seems to have a class that everyone thinks will never graduate. Troublemakers, that’s what we were. None of our teachers stayed for long. One morning, the door to the classroom opened and a new teacher walked in. We sure gave her a hard time. But she never lost her temper, no matter what we did.
“One day after a month, Mrs. Cosby opened her briefcase and took out a bunch of papers, something totally d us. She asked each one of us to come to the front of the class, one by one, and gave us each a paper. On each paper she had written what the student in question had been good at during the last month.
“No one had ever believed in us. No one ever liked us. We were constantly told how good-for-nothing we were. Gradually we had started to believe it ourselves. The teacher attitude we had met with before didn’t encourage us to hold belief in ourselves.
“Suddenly, there came someone who could find something positive to say about each and e one of us. Once she had delivered the papers, she continued with her teaching and for the first time we forgot to make her life miserable. Mrs. Cosby did this e month then on. Each month we got a paper that emphasized our strengths, what we had been good at. We begin to act as if that was true. We start to learn more to be even better, to prove them right. With her positive teacher attitude, she transformed our class.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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“And then came the day of our graduation.
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Bob went to get the bill and when he returned he saw the truck driver talking on cell phone.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一个卡车司机在饭店吃饭，看到一位老太太受到饭店老板的热情招待。出于好奇，他询问老板Bob其中缘由。原来Mrs. Cosby曾经是Bob的老师。她用赞美和肯定的教学态度以及每月一张的优点记录单一点点改变了那些像Bob一样长期被否定的差生，使他们重拾信心、认真学习。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。
卡车司机、饭店老板Bob、服务员们、Mrs. Cosby。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。
卡车司机吃饭；Mrs. Cosby受到热情招待；好奇询问；Mrs. Cosby和学生们的故事。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是在毕业那天，Mrs. Cosby赠送了学生毕业礼物并一如既往地鼓励他们，卡车司机听完Mrs. Cosby的故事后，应该受到感动和启发，可能会给妻子打电话并学着像Mrs. Cosby一样赞美妻子。续写第一段：毕业典礼上，Mrs. Cosby把每月一张的优点记录单集结成册，送给每一位学生，同时鼓励他们相信自己，去实现自己的理想。续写第二段：卡车司机听完故事给妻子打了电话，听到妻子给他做面条时，试着去赞美妻子的厨艺，令妻子非常开心等。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)
结合下划线词和文本内容，尽可能展开丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如：第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点: “What did Mrs. Cosby do that day Did she present any gift What would she say to the class What changes did she make on the students ” 第二段可以通过下列问题来组织内容：“How did the driver feel after hearing the story of Mrs. Cosby Was he influenced by Mrs. Cosby’s story Whom did he talk to on the phone What might he say 等”
[参考范文]
“Then came the day of our graduation. Mrs. Cosby hugged e one of us, and told us with tears how proud she was of us. Then she handed each one of us a book. All the encouraging papers through the years were there, in hard cover. She wanted us to keep that book. Whenever we felt unworthy, open it and read how good we were. She was convinced that we could be anything we wanted to be as long as we believed in ourselves. So we did. She turned a bunch of troublemakers into people who could achieve things. We went on to fulfill our dreams and make our life better. Mine was to own a restaurant and here I am. Now you why that old lady deserves all the respect we can give her.” The truck driver nodded. Then he asked for his bill.
Bob went to get the bill and when he returned he saw the truck driver talking on cell phone. “Honey It is me. I thought I would drive home tonight. You might make that special noodles for me Yes, I’d really like to have some. You should sell those noodles, they are so good, better than anyone else’s! What Why do I say so Well because I want to show my attitude. Just wanted to let you know you are the best cook I have ever met! That’s your strength! You will Great, see you in the evening! Love you too!”
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。Mrs. Cosby一直以赞美和肯定的态度挖掘学生的优点。因此，第一段毕业典礼时，她送给每位学生精心装订的每月优点清单合集。一个月一个月逐渐积累下来的册子凝聚了Mrs. Cosby对学生的信任和肯定。Mrs. Cosby最后一次激励学生相信自己、追求梦想。第二段，卡车司机听完这样一个令人动容和深思的故事，又看到了饭店老板和服务员们积极乐观的现状，深受触动。在给妻子打例行电话时，不由自主地改变态度学着去称赞和肯定妻子，令妻子意外和惊喜。这样的思路非常符合故事发展的逻辑。最后一段司机的做法首尾呼应，突出赞美的巨大影响力，突出故事的主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写离不开对文本的把握和合理的推测。在正确理解的基础上才能对故事的发展做出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了使故事发展更具明确性，可以通过设问等方式将故事的后续发展凸显出来，以便于续写时信息的整理以及恰当的语言组织。在本练习中，我们通过一系列的问题来拓展并整理自己的写作思路。第一段的设问以Mrs. Cosby为主体，正面描写Mrs. Cosby对学生的付出；第二段的设问以卡车司机为表达的主体，侧面描写Mrs. Cosby的赞美和肯定的态度对他人带来的巨大影响。
2. 首尾呼应，升华主题
这是赞美产生的奇迹。这个奇迹没有通过直接的描述，而是通过这种态度的受益者——饭店老板Bob之口进行叙述，卡车司机作为故事的聆听者，和读者一起感受Mrs. Cosby带给学生的巨大变化，体会着赞美对人的巨大影响。作为一个完整的故事，在写作上做到首尾呼应常常必不可少。根据故事情节，首尾呼应不仅使故事情节具有严密性，还突出了故事的中心，升华了主题。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
The Make-up Guy
Dave was a make-up (化妆) artist who regularly held makeup artistry classes at the local community college. He was well known as an excellent trainer and enjoyed great popularity.
Usually, the majority of his students were middle-aged housewives, who wanted to fine-tune their make-up skills so as to make themselves more attractive. But this time, it was beyond him that his class was attended by a man as well.
The new student was a gentleman in his best years with a seemingly boundless interest in make-up artistry. He was keen to learn as much as he possibly could and asked questions whenever and wherever possible. He was so absorbed in learning that he wouldn t stop until he was satisfied with the result of his work.
Understandably, the man was the number one subject of conversation when the other women were alone.
Speculations (猜测) quickly started to spread. Why did he learn make-up Was he to seek for a woman to be his life partner How about my neighbor’s youngest daughter Why on earth would he attend such a woman class Who could it be
Doubts like this came crowding in.
The community college was placed in a remote rural area, which was why the other participants were quite doubtful of the man s intentions.
Throughout the lessons, ignoring the curious women around him, the man carefully listened and wrote everything down he learned, leaving the women more and more curious and puzzled.
When the day and class were slowly coming to an end, the gossiping women simply could not hide their curiosity any longer, for they knew it was time to remove their doubts, otherwise
Finally, one of them couldn t resist her curiosity, so she picked up the courage and asked him why he was so interested in make-up artistry.
What followed was a dead silence. After what seemed a century, he slowly opened his mouth and here came the most inspiring beautiful reply.
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He said his beloved wife partially lost her eyesight because of diabetes (糖尿病) and she was no longer able to apply her make-up.
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So he decided to take the course to surprise his wife.
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续写的词数应为150左右。
I woke at 5:30 A.M. after a restless night’s sleep. I slowly unzipped the tent door to inspect the new day. Just like yesterday, the wind had dropped. It was another beautiful Arctic day. I crawled out of my sleeping bag unwillingly. I am normally a morning person but the intense cold outside made that morning most unappealing. Anyhow, it was time to greet Charlie and start the day.
My dog Charlie was up and it was bouncing up and down at the end of his chain looking well rested. I poured what looked like a pound of dog food into his bowl.
Stepping out of the tent, I looked around for bears or tracks and saw none. It would never be a good thing to meet a polar bear. An Inuit (因纽特人) once told me that I should watch out for polar bears. He said that if I met a polar bear, I should keep the following rules in mind. First, keep eye contact, move sideways or slightly forward, never backward, stay calm. Do not show fear and stand beside a large object to make myself appear as large as possible. Weapons like flare gun(信号枪) are necessary, but do not shoot unless forced to. Don’t wound a bear, or you'll make it even more dangerous, and never run.
It was only six o’clock, so I decided to have a leisurely breakfast of a bowl of milk powder, coconut flakes, and butter mixed with warm water. I sat on my sled(雪橇) to enjoy my first breakfast of the expedition only to find that after the third spoonful it was frozen. So much for leisurely breakfasts! I added more warm water and ate the rest as fast as possible.
Suddenly I heard a deep, long growl coming from Charlie’s throat. In a flash I looked at him and then in the direction in which he was staring. It was a female polar bear followed by two cubs(幼崽) slowly, purposefully, toward me. They were two hundred yards away.
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With my heart quickening, I grabbed my loaded flare gun and carefully walked sideways a few steps to Charlie.
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The whole event lasted fifteen minutes but seemed years long.
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A zoo keeper had been working at a zoo for 15 years and never experienced any problems. He always worked the evening shifts (夜班) because he was trusted to properly lock up the zoo. On a warm summer night in late June, the zoo keeper turned off the lights and wished all of his animals a good night. He left the zoo and walked to his car in the parking lot. As he reached in his pocket, he realized that his keys had been left in the office. He quickly walked back to the zoo.
When he arrived at the door, to his surprise, it was unlocked. In fear of triggering (触发) the alarm that he had just set, he did not turn on the lights. He turned on the flashlight on his phone and began to make his way to the office. When he walked by the panther's (豹) cages, he saw the young cubs playing together. He liked the zoo better at this hour because at night was when the animals come to life.
At last, he made it back to the office. Unfortunately this time the office door was locked and he knew that if he were to break the window, he would set off the alarm. Knowing there was no way inside, he decided it would be best to spend the night inside the zoo. The zoo keeper walked towards the bird cages because he knew he could sleep comfortably on the benches near the cages.
A few hours later, the zoo keeper heard a door slam (砰的一声) that woke him up.
“Quiet!" a voice whispered.
“What There's no one here, another voice said. "The old man left hours ago”
"Alright, let's just grab the animals and get out of here.”
The zoo keeper didn't know what to do. He began to weigh his options: he could trigger the alarm but that would raise questions as to why he was inside, or he could face the thieves but that could potentially put him in danger. Then he turned the corner but made sure not to be seen so that he could see who had entered the zoo.
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The zoo keeper was not frightened by the two men who wanted to steal the animals.
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Then the zoo keeper found the two strings.
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Arthur was messy. He didn’t try to make messes, but he didn’t try to clean up much, either. There were always small pieces of food on the table when he was done eating. His socks never made it into the hamper (洗衣篮). And he only picked up his toys when Mom threatened to throw them away. Most days, Mom followed Arthur around the house and cleaned up after him. She brushed the crumbs (碎屑) into her hand and threw them away after meals. She picked up his socks and made sure they got washed, dried and folded neatly before going back in the drawer. She often picked up his toys when he left them to do something else.
One day, Mom asked Arthur to pick up his toy trains. “Not right now,” Arthur said. He was reading a comic book. The trains had been on the living room floor since the morning.
“You know what, Arthur I’m not going to ask you again. I’m done cleaning today.” And with that. Mom put her feet up on the sofa and picked up a book to read.
At dinner time, Arthur noticed that there was a big pile of crumbs at his place at the table. Mom’s spot was nice and clean. Arthur didn’t like the crumbs very much. After dinner, Arthur’s feet felt cold. He went to his room and opened his drawer, but the drawer was empty. “Mom, where are my socks ” Arthur called.
“There weren’t any socks in your hamper, so I didn’t wash them,” Mom said. Arthur felt unhappy. Now his feet would be cold, unless he wanted to wear dirty socks from the floor. He decided to stay barefoot.
When it was time for bed, Arthur said good night to Mom and turned to go upstairs. Arthur stepped right on his toy train in his bare feet. “Ouch!” cried Arthur. “That really hurt !”
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However, Mom was still reading and said nothing.
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“Mom ” said Arthur. “Tomorrow can you show me how to do the washing so I can wash my socks ”
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In 1989, fresh out of high school, I had the difficult task of choosing a career path before college started in three months. In those days in Pakistan, there were limited choices: becoming a doctor or an engineer, or entering the financial world after getting a business degree. I wasn’t interested in engineering, so that I was left with medicine or business. I couldn’t decide.
My uncle suggested that I do a work placement(实习) to experience it for a month in an international company followed by a month in a hospital. After that, I could make a decision. It seemed like a good idea.
I was accepted for a month’s placement at a foreign bank in Karachi. I got a feel for how the world of finance functioned, made new friends, and generally enjoyed the mostly easy-going work surroundings.
The month passed rapidly, and soon I began working at a leading hospital in Karachi. The experience couldn’t have been more different. The hospital had a stressful environment. The days started early (at 7 am, compared to 9 am at the bank), and were filled with endless duties. And the night calls! This was crazy, working all day, through the night, and again the next day.
I began thinking about my two experiences. The bank had offered a more relaxing atmosphere, better working hours and less stress. The hospital was full of excitement, but the studying and training was difficult. It seemed that the business choice was going to win out.
Near the end of my month at the hospital, I was driving home after an especially busy night call. In front of me was a public bus, with college students sitting on the top. As the driver weaved through (穿梭) traffic, I could see the boys shaking from side to side.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语；
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Suddenly, a boy fell off the back of the bus.
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The next day, when I went to the hospital to see the boy, all his family got up, with grateful smiles on their faces.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
He said his beloved wife partially lost her eyesight because of diabetes and she was no longer able to apply her make-up. Fearing being laughed at, she locked herself in her room, abandoning herself to great grief. She was absolutely beautiful even without make-up. But what upset her was that she simply felt not comfortable leaving the home without make-up. Sensing her loneliness in a colorless-world, I was also at a loss as to what to do. Once informed of this class, I determined to learn make-up without hesitation, hoping to make a difference.
So he decided to take the course to surprise her. Without a pause, he shared his story. He mastered a wide range of practical skills, allowing him to help her take on a new look. Surely, being enveloped by an atmosphere of love, his beloved wife at present was deeply affected. “I not only want to learn how to apply her make-up, I want her to wear the most beautiful make-up so her inner beauty also shines on the outside.” he announced, “It is her smile that touches most my heart, not the make-up.”
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。要求考生根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
通过阅读所给文章可知，正常化妆课的授课对象都是女性，但一天一位男士来上化妆课，而且听课十分认真，这引起在座其他同学(主要是家庭主妇们)的好奇和各种猜疑。在课程结束时，终于有人问出了他们的疑惑——他为什么来上化妆课？
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：他的爱妻因为糖尿病，视力受损，不能在自己涂化妆品，所以应该写他妻子的一些情况，不能化妆对他妻子的一些影响，以及他对于爱妻痛苦的回应。第二段开头是：所以他决定来上这个课，给妻子一个惊喜。本段应该写他利用所学内容如何帮助了妻子，以及妻子的一些转变。最后不忘初心，总结一下自己上化妆课的原因和目的。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：abandon oneself to，at a loss，without hesitation等高级词汇；主语从句和表语从句what upset her was that she simply felt not comfortable leaving the home without make-up.非谓语动词Fearing being laughed at,和allowing him to help her take on a new look强调句It is her smile that touches most my heart, not the make-up.
2.【参考范文】
With my heart quickening, I grabbed my loaded flare gun and carefully walked sideways a few steps to Charlie. Without taking my eyes off the bear, I led him to the sled and fastened his chain to a rope. The bear was getting closer. Remembering all the Inuit had told me, I fired a warning shot to the bear’s left. But on she came. Then, I fired a flare right in front of her. She stopped and looked at me. Then she fixed her eyes on Charlie, who was barking wildly. She looked back at her cubs and waited for them to catch up, then finally moved away toward my right.
The whole event lasted fifteen minutes but seemed years long. My hands were shaking as I stood still, watching the three slowly move north. But despite the fear, I could feel deep down inside a real satisfaction. I now knew that I could stand up to a bear in the wild and stay calm enough to function and still remember the words from the Inuit. With Charlie’s help I had passed my first test.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者早上从北极的帐篷中醒来，给他的狗Charlie喂了食，走出帐篷没看到任何熊的踪迹，想起因纽特人说的遇到熊的做法，因为时间还早所以决定悠闲地吃一顿早饭，突然看到一只母熊带着两只幼崽向自己走来。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：心跳加快，我抓住信号枪，小心地向一边的Charlie走了几步……所以应该写作者看到熊后的反应，即走向Charlie把它拴在绳子上，抓住信号枪向熊开枪警告，熊听到枪声后的反应及Charlie看大熊后的反应内容等。第二段开头是：整个事件持续了十五分钟，但似乎是持续了几年……本段应该熊离开后作者的反应，比如是否会感到害怕，以及从这次与熊的相遇中的收获等内容。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：take off，in front of，move away等高级词汇；that I could stand up to a bear in the wild and stay calm enough to function and still remember the words from the Inuit 引导的宾语从句，as I stood still引导的伴随状语从句，With my heart quickening...with复合结构等高级句式。
3.【参考范文】
The zoo keeper was not frightened by the two men who wanted to steal the animals. He squatted on the ground at the corner and stared at the two men to see who on earth had entered the zoo. What he saw was two thin and short men with a sack under the arm. He knew they just wanted to steal little animals. So he made up his mind to frighten them by imitating the voice of tigers. Thereafter the voice of tigers roared loudly one after another. The two men was so frightened that they began to run away. But it was so dark that they couldn’t see clearly, they fell heavily on the ground and couldn’t move any longer.
Then the zoo keeper found the two strings. He tied them to the trees and waited for the daytime coming to transfer them to the police. It’s not the courage but the wisdom that helps the zoo keeper catch the thieves.
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。一个动物园饲养员总是被安排值夜班，因为他被信任能够恰当地锁好动物园的门。一天晚上，他发现钥匙忘记放在办公室里了，返回地时候发现动物园的门没有关，可到了办公室门口发现办公室的门已经关了，他知道如果他破窗而入会引发报警器，于是决定在动物园呆一晚上。几个小时后饲养员听见砰的一声门响动的声音惊醒了他。有人想抓动物出去。这个饲养员不知道该怎么办，他开始权衡他的选择：他可以触发报警器但那样会出现为什么他会在里面，或者他会面对小偷，那会对他产生潜在的危险，于是他转过墙角但确保自己不被看见这样以便可以看清是谁进入了动物园。
审题得知根据所读内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。注意，续写词数要求为150词左右。这里可以根据末尾一段的描述来进行续写——智抓小偷的故事。第一段：描述饲养员在动物园角落里看见的是谁进来偷盗动物，以便为接下来的讲述做铺垫。第二段在模仿动物叫声的基础上，出现在他们面前，让他们惊恐无比，使得他们吓瘫在地，束手就擒。续写部分最后强调要智斗，不要直取，这样就会避免自身的危险和潜在的威胁。
【范文点评】
本续写详略得当，重点突出。智斗窃贼描写生动活泼。全文使用了高级词汇和句型：比如被动语态be frightened by被惊吓； not…but… 不是……而是；介词宾语短语结构with imitating the voice of模仿……的声音；高级词汇stared at盯着；on earth究竟；roared loudly one after another虎啸声此起彼伏；tie them to the trees捆在树上；transfer them to移交给……；fight against和……斗争。强调句型It’s not the courage but the wisdom that can helps the zoo keeper catch the thieves. who引导的定语从句The zoo keeper was not frightened by the two men who wanted to steal the animals.彰显作者的高水平的写作能力。
4.【参考范文】
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However, Mom was still reading and said nothing. Arthur wasn’t sure if she had heard him or not so he called for help again, but still Mom didn’t come. Then Arthur realized maybe it was he that could solve his problem at that very moment. He quietly picked up the toy train and put it in the box. It only took a minute for him to put the toy away, and now he wouldn’t have to worry about hurting his feet again.
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“Mom ” said Arthur. “Tomorrow can you show me how to do the laundry so I can wash my socks ” “Of course,” said Mom. “It’s nice to see you begin to learn to take care of yourself. I am always here to do whatever I can to help you become a more independent boy.” Arthur felt better. He didn’t want to wait until the next laundry day to have clean socks again. Maybe being neat wasn’t so hard after all.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，Arthur是个不爱整洁的男孩，尽管妈妈说了他很多次，他也不改正，妈妈总是跟在他后面为他整理东西，直到有一天妈妈下定决心要惩罚Arthur，于是不再给他整理东西了。Arthur找不到自己的东西，没有袜子穿，脚还踩到自己乱丢的东西上弄疼了。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：然而，妈妈仍然在看书，什么也没说。所以后文应该是讲述Arthur意识到必须自己整理自己的东西了，他悄悄地拿起玩具火车，把它放进箱子里。他只花了一分钟就把玩具收起来了，现在他再也不用担心自己的脚受伤了。第二段开头是：“妈妈？”Arthur说。“明天你能教我怎么洗吗？这样我就能洗我的袜子了。”本段应该写Arthur决心自己洗衣服，妈妈也很高兴他的改变，决定帮助他成为一个更独立的男孩。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：call for, pick up, worry about, take care of, after all等高级词汇；宾语从句Arthur wasn’t sure if she had heard him or not so he called for help again, but still Mom didn’t come.强调句Then Arthur realized maybe it was he that could solve his problem at that very moment.等高级句式。
5.【参考范文】
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Suddenly, a boy fell off the back of the bus. He hit the road face down and rolled over. He lay still in the middle of the road as the bus sped away. None of the cars behind stopped. Thinking that he could die in a matter of minutes, I stopped my car and carefully examined the boy. With the help of some passers-by, I lifted the unconscious boy into the car and raced back to the hospital. After his family was contacted, and he was wheeled into emergency surgery, I drove home, exhausted but happy.
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The next day, when I went to the hospital to see the boy, all his family got up, with grateful smiles on their faces. What a feeling it was to help save the life of another person! I spent the rest of the day in a state of the most fabulous mood I had ever experienced. Driving home that evening, I decided on my career path. Two months of placements could not do what 30 minutes’ helping an accident victim had done for me. This experience taught me that at times, the decisions are made for you—and that whatever happens is always for the best.
【解析】
本文是一篇读后续写作文，考查学生的读写能力。要求考生用150词写出接下来的两段，且必须使用5个以上文章中标出的关键词语，并标出这些关键词。
前文主要讲的是作者高中毕业后，面临职业选择的问题，先在银行做了一个月，之后再在一家医院工作的精力。在给的第一段开头中，“Suddenly, a boy fell off the back of the bus.”可推知，从公共汽车上摔下来，伤势必定很严重，再根据给的第二段开头中，“The next day, when I went to the hospital to see the boy, all his family got up, with grateful smiles on their faces.”第一段要说明作者是送小男孩去医院抢救，第二段要说明作者由此确定了自己的职业道路。
[高分句型]
Without hesitation, I got on the unconscious boy into the car and drove fast to the hospital. 我毫不犹豫地把那个失去知觉的男孩扶上车，迅速开到医院。介词短语作状语。读后续写示例与写作训练5
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Steve, a twelve-year-old boy with parents, was about to be lost forever, by the U.S. education system. , he could read, yet, in spite of his reading skills, Steve was failing. He had been failing since first grade, as he was passed on from grade to grade. Steve was a big boy, looking more like a teenager than a twelve year old, yet, Steve went unnoticed... until Miss White.
Miss White was a smiling, young, beautiful teacher. For the first time in Steve’s young life, he couldn’t take his eyes off his teacher; yet, still he failed. He never did his homework, and he was always in trouble with Miss White.
In the middle of the first semester of school, the entire seventh grade was tested for basic skills. Steve hurried through his tests, and continued to dream of other things. His heart was not in school, but in the woods, where he often escaped alone, trying to shut out the sights, sounds and smells of his alcoholic home.
One day, Miss White’s impatient voice broke into his .
“Steve!!” Startled, he turned to look at her.
“Pay attention!”
Steve locked his gaze on Miss White with adolescent , as she began to go over the test results for the seventh grade.
“You all did pretty well,” she told the class, “except for one boy, and it breaks my heart to tell you this, but...” She hesitated, pinning Steve to his seat with a sharp stare, her eyes searching his face.
“...The smartest boy in the seventh grade is failing my class!”
She just stared at Steve, as the class around for a good look. Steve dropped his eyes and carefully examined his fingertips.
“Steve! Please! I care about you!” Miss White reminded Steve with a louder voice.
Wow! Suddenly, Steve got it!! Someone cared about him Someone, totally unattainable and perfect, CARED ABOUT HIM !!
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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Steve went home from school, thoughtful, that afternoon.…
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Miss White, immediately, gave a quiz on the weekend homework...
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：12岁的男孩Steve有一对酗酒的父母，受家庭环境影响，他从来不做作业，从一年级开始每次考试都不合格，直到他遇到了Miss White。在七年级期中考试中，全班都考得很好，只有Steve一人没有通过考试，Miss White称Steve为全班最聪明的男孩并告诉他她一直在关心他，这激起了一个长久以来一直被忽视的小男孩的勇气和决心。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为12岁的叛逆男孩Steve，他酗酒的父母 parents和一直关心和激励他的老师Miss White。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。Steve有一对酗酒的父母；Steve从来不做作业，考试每次都不合格；Steve遇到了Miss White；全班参加了七年级的期中测试；Steve一人没通过考试；Miss White通过话语激励他使他发生了改变。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是Steve回到家后开始认真地做他的周末作业，Miss White通过测试同学们对周末作业的完成情况来及时表扬和证明Steve是一个可塑之才，从而彻底改变Steve的学习态度及以后的人生方向。续写第一段：根据第二段开头句子的提示，该段续写内容最有可能与周末作业相关。所以Steve回到家后，可能是转变他以前的做法，开始认真地做自己的回家作业，也可能是仍旧把作业放一边，自己去树林里玩等。续写第二段：Miss White马上针对学生的周末作业做了一个小测试，发展情节可能是Steve认真完成并通过了测试使得所有人刮目相看，也可能是他仍旧没有通过测试让Miss White失望等。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“What did Steve think What did he do after he went home Did he make a change or still remain the same 等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What did Steve behave in the test What score did he get How did Miss White respond to the result 等”
[参考范文]
Steve went home from school, thoughtful, that afternoon. Walking into the house, he took one look around and then quickly, gathered up his camping gear, a jar of peanut butter, a loaf of bread, a bottle of water, and this time...his schoolbooks. Grim faced and , he headed for the woods. Steve studied hard in the woods and finished all the homework for the weekend.
Miss White, immediately, gave a quiz on the weekend homework. Steve hurried through the test, and was the first to hand in his paper. With a look of surprise, Miss White took his paper. Obviously puzzled, she began to look it over. Steve walked back to his desk, his heart pounding within his chest. Miss White’s face was in total shock! She glanced up at Steve down and up. Suddenly, her face broke into a radiant smile. The smartest boy had just passed his first test! A great change took place within the heart of one boy, all because of one teacher, who cared.(除给定词外，165 words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。为了使文章显得更加有意义，范文中突出描写了Steve因原文中Miss White给予的关注而做出了改变。因此第一段写了Steve回到家后收拾了自己的生活必需品去他自己最喜爱的树林里，开始认真地写他的周末作业了。第二段写了Miss White针对这个周末作业进行了一个小测试，在测试中，Steve表现异常得好并顺利通过了测试。最后一句是根据原文和范文的内容进行的总结，并点出了全文的主题，引发读者思考。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据每段续写开头的提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在开始写范文前，我们首先用6个问题来构思整个文章的发展。通过对这6个问题的可能回答的排列组合，挑选出最符合逻辑的情节发展。实际上，原文在结尾处就已经暗示了接下来情节发展的可能性，最有可能的就是Steve因为老师的话和关心而做出了改变。因此，范文就顺藤摸瓜，描写了Steve彻底改变，让老师和同学刮目相看，从而突出了全文的主题。
2. 紧密联系原文内容
续写是在原文内容的基础上进一步对接下来发展情节的预测和描写。因此，续写的内容必须与原文紧密相关。可以在情节上承接原文，也可以用特定的细节，如人物，地点，事件等来呼应原文。在本范文中就有很多细节与原文相呼应，如原文中写到为了逃避自己酒气熏天，乱糟糟的屋子，Steve总是喜欢一个人在树林里(woods)闲逛或者思考。因此在范文中Steve完成周末作业的地点我们也选择了他最喜欢的小树林。再例如范文中的the smartest boy也是呼应了原文中Miss White对Steve的描述。
3. 有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectives)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了walking into the house来表示地点的转换，用with a look of surprise来表明Steve的表现给老师带来的吃惊。这些连接语的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
The little boy
A little boy selling magazines for school walked up to a house that people rarely visited. The house was very old and shabby and the owner hardly ever came out. When he did come out, he would not say hello to his neighbors or passers-by but simply just glare at them.
The boy knocked on the door and waited, sweating from fear of the old man. The boy’s parents told him to stay away from the house, and a lot of the other neighborhood children were told the same thing from their parents.
Dust found the boy lingering on and hesitating what to do. As he was ready to walk away, the door slowly opened. “What do you want ” the old man said impatiently. The little boy was very afraid but he had a quota(份额) to meet for school with selling the magazines. So he got up the courage and said, “Uh, sir, I am selling these magazines and uh, I was wondering if you would like to buy one from me.”
The old man just stared at the boy without a word. The boy could see inside the old man’s house and saw that he had dog figurines(小雕像) on the fireplace mantle. “Do you collect dogs ” The little boy asked. “Yes, I have many collections in my house. They are my family here and they are all I have.” The boy then felt sorry for the man, as it seemed that he was a very lonely soul.
“Well, I do have a magazine here for collectors. It is perfect for you. I also have one about dogs since you like dogs so much.” The old man was ready to close the door on the boy and said, “No, boy. I don’t need any magazines of any kind, now goodbye.”
The little boy was sad that he was not going to make his quota with the sale. He was also sad for the old man being so alone in the house that he owned. The boy went home and then had an idea. He had a little dog figurine that he got some years ago from an aunt. The figurine did not mean nearly as much to him since he had a real live dog and a large family.
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The little boy headed back down to the old man’s house.
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From that day on something changed inside the old man.
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When I was 17, I read a magazine article about a museum called the McNay Art Museum, once the home of a watercolorist named Marian McNay. She had requested the community to turn it into a museum upon her death. On a sunny Saturday, Sally and I drove over to the museum.
“Do you have the address ” Sally asked while we were on the way.
“No, but I will recognize it. There was a picture in the magazine” I answered confidently.
“Oh. There it is.” I pulled my car slowly over a house which seemed like a house with heavy smell of life rather than a former residence(故居).
Surprisingly, nobody was at the gate and admission was free. We opened the door and entered, excited. A group of people sitting around a table stopped chatting and started at us.
A sweet girl in her teens locked her eyes on us and welcomed us with a sweet smile, “Hello, but who are you looking for ”
A man stood up and said almost at the same time “May I help you ”
“No,” I said. “We’re fine.”
Tour guides got on my nervous. What if they talked a long time about a painting you were not that interested in Sally had gone upstairs. The people in the hall seemed very confused, keeping their eyes on me with curiosity. What was their problem Some nice sculptures were well placed along the staircases(楼梯) and some paintings from Van Gogh or Picasso were hanging on walls and I appreciated them and highly praised the most beautiful house. Suddenly a picture of a man surrounded by a warm family caught my eyes and I also spotted the sweet girl among them.
“This is the most beautiful house I have visited.” said I, turning sharply, almost scaring the girl standing behind me.
“The most beautiful house The most beautiful house!”She murmured.
“Am I at the McNay Art Museum ” asked I .
注意：
1. 所续写的短文的词数应为150 左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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She smiled, shaking her head.
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Years later, after a public speech, a woman approached and thanked me, asking whether I once entered a house , thinking it was the McNay Art Museum.
3.阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
'Usual boring day!' This would be the answer from Roman if somebody asked him how his day was. These days he found everything boring, nothing excited him.
One day he was lying in his room as usual. Suddenly light went off. His room was rather hot without an air conditioner. Though he did not want to leave his room, he had to. Unwillingly, he left his room and came to living room. Living room was slightly cool as it had two huge windows.
His young brother was playing with his friend. They were rolling on the floor. He was looking out for the TV remote, but couldn't find. He got up and searched it everywhere, but remote was nowhere. He looked at his brother who was still lying on the floor playing.
He asked him, "Where is the remote "
"Under the Sofa," his brother yelled.
He tried to look through, but it was dark. He put his hand under the sofa. He touched something, grabbed it and took his hand out. OMG! It was a snake in his hand!
After seeing that his brother started to yell, “ Snake, snake!” Mom came as soon as she heard their shouting. She too was horrified to see a snake. She was so scared that she even couldn’t speak a word. Two kids were trying to hide into each other's back. “What an old trick!” Roman thought and threw it over kids.
As the snake landed on the floor near to the kids, it started moving from left side to the right. Only then did Roman realize that the snake was real, not a toy. He threw the snake over kids because he thought it was a fake snake and kids were playing some tricks.
This time mom almost got heart attack. Now he was scared too. The snake was only 10 meters away from kids and was staring at kids. They even couldn’t call a rescue team. There might be some deadly damage before their arrival. There was not much time to think. It was the time for a quick action.
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As Roman was farther from the snake, he jumped to the window and grabbed the curtain.
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After the rescue team caught and took the snake away, everyone went inside the home.
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An 80-year-old man was sitting on the sofa in his house along with his 45-year-old highly educated son. Suddenly, a crow rested on their window.
The father asked his son, “What’s this ” The son replied, “It is a crow.”
After a few minutes, the father asked his son for the second time, “What’s this ” The son said, “Father, I have just now told you, it is a crow!”
After a little while, the old father again asked his son the third time, “What’s this ”
At this time, some expression of anger was felt in his son’s tone when he said to his father with a firm reply. “It is a crow, a crow.” A little while later, the father again asked his son the fourth time, “What’s this ”
This time, the son shouted at his father, “Why do you keep asking me the same question again and again, although I have told you so many times ‘IT IS A CROW’. Are you not able to understand this ”
A little later the father went to his room and came back with an old diary, which he had kept since his son was born.
On opening a page, he asked his son to read the page.
When the son read it, the following words were written in the diary:
“Today, my little son aged 3 was sitting with me on the sofa, when a crow was sitting on the window. My son asked me 23 times what it was, and I replied to him all 23 times that it was a crow. I hugged him lovingly each time he asked me the same question. I did not at all feel angry but I rather felt love for my innocent son.”
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After reading the diary, the son burst into tears, feeling sorry for what he had done to his father.
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Feeling ashamed, the son got down to his knees before his father.
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5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 续写的词数应为150左右。
Rescue in a Bottle
Curtis Whitson had rafted (v.乘筏) down the Arroyo Seco, a river in central California, several times before.
This year, Curtis Whitson knew the water-fall was coming. He figured he would get out of his raft into the shallow water, get down the rocks along ropes on either side of the falls, and continue on his way, as he had on a previous trip.
But this year was different. Heavy snow and spring rains had turned the usually manageable falls into something fierce. And this year, instead of his friends, Whitson’s companions were his girlfriend, Krystal Ramirez, and his 13-year-old son, Hunter. As the three of them approached the falls late in the afternoon of the third day of their camping trip, Whitson could tell from the increasing roar of water in the narrowing canyon(峡谷) that they were in serious trouble. There was no way they’d be able to get down the rocks as planned.
“The water was just roaring through there with tremendous force,” recalls Whitson, 45.
They had no smart phone service, and they hadn’t seen a single person in the past three days. And Whitson knew that they’d be sharing the ground there with rattlesnakes and mountain lions.
As he was thinking what to do, Whitson hit on a bit of luck---he heard voices coming from the other side of the falls. He yelled, but the sound of the rushing water drowned him out.
“We have to get these people a message,” Whitson thought.
He grabbed a stick and pulled out his pocketknife to carve “Help” in it. Then he tied a rope to it so the people would know it wasn’t just any stick. He tried throwing it over the falls, but it floated away in the wrong direction.
“We’ve got to do something!” Whitson yelled to his son. “Have we got anything else ”
Then he spotted his water bottle. Whitson grabbed it and carved “Help!”on it. Ramirez also reminded him that he had a pen and paper in his backpack.
Whitson knew it was a slim hope. But he wrote “6-15 19:00 We are stuck here@ the waterfall. Get help please” and pushed the note into the bottle. This time, his throw over the waterfall was perfect.
“All right, that’s all we can do,” Whitson told Hunter.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；
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It took 30 minutes to get back upstream to the beach where they’d had lunch.
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The next morning, the helicopter returned.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文1】
The boy headed back down to the old man’s house. The thought of knocking at the old man’s door filled the little boy with fear, though, he still knocked on the door, waiting breathlessly. Finally, it opened, and out came the old man. Seeing the boy holding a well-wrapped dog figurine, he looked very astonished but still glared at him without a word. Determined to break the ice, the boy gave the old man the gift with a precious card attached, expressing his care. Deeply moved by all the boy did, the old man could say nothing but to hug him tightly, the tears of appreciation welling up. Out of gratitude, he bought a magazine from the boy and saw him off.
From that day on something changed inside the old man. He adopted a real live dog and treated him as his child. It seemed that it was the company of the dog that led the lonely soul out of darkness and loneliness. Gradually, he was willing to greet others and wear a bright smile, expressing his appreciation to life. Indeed, only when we open up the door of our heart, can we be bathed in the brilliant sunshine and enjoy the warmth of love and care.
【参考范文2】
The boy headed back down to the old man’s house. The dog figurine witnessed the little boy’s ending up opening the door once more. Upon seeing the boy for a second time, the old man couldn’t bring his anger under control any longer. “Haven’t I told you I need no magazines at all ” He snapped at the boy. “Yes, sir.” said the little boy with an uneasy expression on his face, “But I think you will like the figurine.” Then he handed it to the old man. Taking the figurine from the boy’s hands, the lonely soul was so astonished that words failed to convey his emotions, tears welling up in his eyes. “Thank you so much!” he said to the boy tenderly.
From that day on something changed inside the old man. The neighborhood always found the old man hanging out and smiling at everyone. He showed his precious collections to children who were now very willing to play with him. He used to collect figurines in memory of a real live dog which had kept company with him for a long time before it died. But now, he wasn’t drowned in the sorrows and loneliness anymore. He had realized the true spirit of life!
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了一个小男孩向一位孤独的老人卖杂志，老人拒绝了，男孩看到老人收集的小狗雕像，就送给老人自己的雕像，温暖了老人孤独的内心的故事。
(参考范文1)续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：The boy headed back down to the old man’s house. ( 男孩朝老人的房子走去。)结合前文线索“The boy went home and then had an idea. He had a little dog figurine that he got some years ago from an aunt.”可知，小男孩有一个几年前从姑妈那里得到的小狗雕像，本段应该续写这个小男孩带着小狗雕像去送给这位孤独的老人，描写老人因小男孩的举动而触动内心，改变了对他的态度，比如因感动而买下了小男孩的杂志等；第二段开头是From that day on something changed inside the old man.( 从那天起，老人的内心发生了变化。) ，因此本段应该写老人的变化，比如与前文提及内容“When he did come out, he would not say hello to his neighbors or passers-by but simply just glare at them.( 当他出来的时候，他不会和邻居或路人打招呼，只是怒目而视。)”不同，他开始与人交流，有了真正的宠物狗作伴，老人不再孤独等，从而升华文章主旨：敞开心扉才能沐浴在阳光下，感受人间温暖和关爱。
( 参考范文2)续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：The boy headed back down to the old man’s house. ( 男孩朝老人的房子走去。)，结合前文伏笔“The boy went home and then had an idea. He had a little dog figurine that he got some years ago from an aunt.”可知，小男孩有一个几年前从姑妈那里得到的小狗雕像，本段应该续写这个小男孩带着小狗雕像去送给这位孤独的老人时，与老人之间的交流对话，主要围绕老人对此的反应展开描写，比如从刚开始的态度已然强硬拒绝到后来看到小狗雕像时的感动等；第二段开头是From that day on something changed inside the old man.( 从那天起，老人的内心发生了变化。) ，因此本段主要围绕“老人的变化”而展开描写，比如经常出门，与小男孩甚至与其他孩子成为朋友，从而讲述他不再因过去而悲伤，重新振作生活。
注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：
(参考范文1)
1.高级词汇：knock at; glare at; well up; out of gratitude; see sb. off; treat…as; be willing to do; be bathed in
2.高级句式：
Finally, it opened, and out came the old man. ( out came the old man 为完全倒装句式)
Seeing the boy holding a well-wrapped dog figurine, he looked very astonished but still glared at him without a word. (seeing the boy holding a well-wrapped dog figurine为现在分词作状语)
Determined to break the ice, the boy gave the old man the gift with a precious card attached, expressing his care. (with a precious card attached为with复合结构，即独立主格结构)
It seemed that it was the company of the dog that led the lonely soul out of darkness and loneliness. (it was the company of the dog that led the lonely soul out of darkness and loneliness为强调句式)
Indeed, only when we open up the door of our heart, can we be bathed in the brilliant sunshine and enjoy the warmth of love and care.(only+时间状语从句置于句首，主句采用部分倒装结构)
(参考范文2)
1.高级词汇：upon doing sth; not…any longer; snap at; hand sth to sb.; well up; hang out; smile at; be willing to do; in memory of; keep company with sb.; be drowned in
2.高级句式：
Taking the figurine from the boy’s hands, the lonely soul was so astonished that words failed to convey his emotions, tears welling up in his eyes.( taking the figurine from the boy’s hands 为现在分词作状语；so…that 引导结果状语从句；tears welling up in his eyes为独立主格结构)
He showed his precious collections to children who were now very willing to play with him.(who引导限制性定语从句修饰先行词children)
He used to collect figurines in memory of a real live dog which had kept company with him for a long time before it died.(which引导限制性定语从句修饰先行词a real live dog)
2.【参考范文】
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She smiled, shaking her head. “Sorry, the McNay Art Museum is on another street.” “What’s this place ” I asked, still confused. “It’s my home” she said with a sweet smile and her answer shocked me.Recovering from the shock, I raced to the staircases and called Sally to come down immediately. I pushed her towards the front door, waving at the family and asking them to forgive us for breaking into their beautiful house. Outside, when I told Sally what had happened, she covered her mouth, laughing.
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Years later, after a public speech, a woman approached and thanked me,asking whether I once entered a house , thinking it was the McNay Art Museum .“Yes. But how do you know We never told anyone.”I asked in surprise “That was my home. I was the girl saying hello to you in the hall.”I locked my eyes on her and could figure out the familiar sweet smile. She told me she never felt lucky before we came over and she never realized what a beautiful house she once lived in. Her feeling about her home changed after that and she had always wanted to thank me.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，文章主要讲述了作者和朋友开车去参观麦克奈艺术博物馆，结果错入了别人的家里，作者还毫不知情对房子的主人夸奖房子很美丽，在了解了自己误闯入别人之后，作者和朋友请求他们的原谅。多年以后，作者再次遇到了那个房子主人，她告诉作者，在他们来之前她从未感到幸运，她也从未意识到自己曾经住过这么漂亮的房子。从那以后，她对自己家的感觉变了，她一直想感谢作者。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：她笑了，摇了摇头。所以后文应该是讲述作者得知房子不是麦克奈艺术博物馆后的反应，他们为自己闯入了他们的房子而向主人道歉；第二段开头是：多年以后，在一次公开演讲之后，一位女士走过来感谢我，并问我是否曾经进过一所房子，以为那是麦克奈艺术博物馆。本段应该写房子的主人和作者再次重逢后，告诉作者的话。她告诉作者，在他们来之前她从未感到幸运，她也从未意识到自己曾经住过这么漂亮的房子。从那以后，她对自己家的感觉变了，她一直想感谢作者。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：recover from，forgive，figure out等高级词汇；Recovering from the shock, I raced to the staircases and called Sally to come down immediately.非谓语动词的运用；She told me she never felt lucky before we came over and she never realized what a beautiful house she once lived in.运用宾语从句等高级句式。
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As Roman was farther from the snake, he jumped to the window and grabbed the curtain. He pulled it so hard that curtain ended up landing in his hand. Then without waiting a second, he threw the curtain over the snake. When the snake came under the curtain, he grabbed two kids by their hands and brought them out of the room. He again went inside and took his mother to the front yard. Mom was shaking like a leaf and kids were sweating hard. Later, he called the rescue team from his cell phone.
After the rescue team caught and took the snake away, everyone went inside the home. Roman went back to his room and tried to sleep, but couldn't, so he went upstairs to living room where he found his brother was watching cartoon. He sat next to his brother and his cell phone beeped. It was another text from his friend asking how his day was. Roman slowly typed: "Jaw-breaking day". Then he kept his mobile aside and dragged his brother's head to his chest and started to play with his hair gently. Then he whispered something in his ear which sounds something like "Sorry".
【参考范文2】
As Roman was farther from the snake, he jumped to the window and grabbed the curtain. He pulled it so hard that curtain was torn off immediately. Without hesitation, he threw the curtain at the moving snake and covered it. Then he grabbed two extremely-frightened kids by their arms and pushed them out of room. The moment the kids went out, they started screaming. Roman went inside the room again and brought his mom out, who was standing still, frozen with fear. Later, he called the rescue team.
After the rescue team caught and took the snake away, everyone went inside the home. Everything returned to normal except that the two kids were still scared. Roman felt guilty and even angry with himself. How could he have thrown the snake to two kids. But for the quick action, it would have hurt them! He went up to the kids, patting them on the head, and said carefully, “I’m so sorry. I mistook it for a fake one. Well….” After a short pause, he said in an excited voice, “Shall we play some game together now ” The kids burst into a smile. “What a thrilling day!” Roman texted his friend later that day.
【解析】
本文是一篇读后续写。读后续写一般要求学生阅读一篇记叙文，然后发挥想象，运用自己所学的英语知识去续写一篇中心思想跟全文一致、合乎情理的记叙文。本文的中心思想是：一天，罗曼感到很无聊，来到客厅里乘凉，他的弟弟和朋友玩，罗曼错把一条蛇当做遥控器扔向了孩子们，罗曼必须采取措施把蛇弄走。考生在写作的过程中要注意：要根据以上内容写出罗曼如何救孩子的。本文要使用一般过去时。写作时注意准确地运用时态，使上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。
【范文点评】
本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，When the snake came under the curtain, he grabbed two kids by their hands and brought them out of the room.使用了when引导时间状语从句；Roman went back to his room and tried to sleep, but couldn't, so he went upstairs to living room where he found his brother was watching cartoon.使用了where引导定语从句，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。
4.【参考范文】
After reading the diary, the son burst into tears, feeling sorry for what he had done to his father. He lost his patience with his father when he was asked the same question for the fourth time. However, compared with him, his father was patient even though he asked even 23 times. By comparison, the son began to reflect on his own behavior, admitting his own mistake.
Feeling ashamed, the son got down to his knees before his father. He made an apology to his father, begging his father to forgive him. The father gave him a hug and all old memories came crowding in. It was his father that showed great concern about him. Never would he forget the days when his father used to attend to him with great care and love. How lucky he was to be blessed with such a great father! He promised that he would take care of his father the way he was treated by his father.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，本文讲述了父亲问了儿子四次“这是什么”，儿子回答是乌鸦后开始厌烦。父亲拿出以前记录不厌其烦回答儿子23遍同样问题的日记让儿子看。
根据提示内容可知，续写第一段要写儿子读完日记后的感受，可以描述儿子看完日记后对自己之前的态度感到了后悔和自责。第二段写读完日记后的做法，可以描述儿子感到惭愧后向父亲道歉，恳求父亲的原谅，以后会像父亲对待自己那样孝敬尊敬父亲。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
续写内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇，如：be filled with tears，used to do，without feeling irritation， made an apology to，afford to 等。强调句：It was his father that showed great concern about him.宾语从句： He promised that he would take care of his father the way he was treated by his father.
5.【参考范文】
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It took 30 minutes to get back upstream to the beach where they’d had lunch. With no expectation that their message in the bottle would find its way to anyone, they prepared to spend a safe night there. As the evening wore on, they decided they probably weren’t going to get rescued that night, so they pulled out their sleeping bags. Before turning in, Ramirez added wood to the fire to keep the mountain lions away. However, just after midnight, they heard a helicopter hovering above them. Wild with joy, they waved and yelled like crazy. Unfortunately, the darkness drowned everything. The helicopter circled and got back. The first rescue was in vain.
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The next morning, the helicopter returned. After the three were spotted, the helicopter lowered a crew member on a cable. The rescuers lifted them out of the mountain. It was not long before they were taken to safety. That was a moment of pure happiness as the three chatted with the rescue workers. Just at that time Whitson learned that a hiker spotted the bottle with the message asking for help. And it was exactly that bottle that saved them all! Together, they were amazed at the unlikelihood of it all.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，Curtis Whitson以前顺着Arroyo Seco河流乘筏漂流过几次，但是今年有些不一样，他带着儿子和女朋友在露营旅行中被困在水流湍急的瀑布中，他写了求救信息放入饮料瓶子里，扔过瀑布。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：他们花了30分钟才回到上游吃午饭的岸边……，所以本段应该写他们不知道求救信息是否有用，到达上游的岸边后如何度过夜晚，结合下一段首句“第二天早上，直升机返回”可知，本段应该还有直升机来营救他们等内容；第二段开头是：第二天早上，直升机返回……本段应该写直升机返回后发现他们并成功营救出他们，还应交代直升机如何知道他们被困在这里等内容。
续写时要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：add … to，be in vain，ask for等高级词汇；It took 30 minutes to get back upstream to the beach where they’d had lunch.中where引导的限制性定语从句；As the evening wore on, they decided they probably weren’t going to get rescued that night, so they pulled out their sleeping bags. 中As引导的状语从句；And it was exactly that bottle that saved them all! 使用it was…that…强调句型等高级句式。读后续写示例与写作训练6
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Wearing the thin sneakers with a few holes, Bobby was getting cold. He had been sitting out in his back yard in the snow for almost an hour, thinking. Try as he might, he could not come up with an idea for his mother’s Christmas gift. He shook his head as he thought, “Even if I do come up with an idea, I don’t have any money.”
His father passed away three years ago, and the small salary that his mother was earning could hardly make ends meet. Although the family lacked money and material things, they lived with love. Bobby had three sisters, who ran the household in their mother’s absence. All of them had made beautiful gifts for their mother. Frustratingly, he had nothing, and it was Christmas Eve already. Wiping a tear from his eye, Bobby started to walk down to the street.
He walked from shop to shop, looking into each decorated window. Everything seemed so beautiful and so out of reach. It was starting to get dark and Bobby unwillingly turned to walk home when suddenly he caught sight of something shining on the ground. He reached down and discovered a shiny dime.
Never before had anyone felt so wealthy as Bobby felt at that moment. However, his excitement quickly turned cold when he was told that he could not buy anything with only ten cents.
Suddenly the flowers in a shop caught his eye, and he went inside. Bobby presented the dime and asked if he could buy a flower for his mother’s Christmas gift. The shop owner looked at Bobby and his ten cents offering. Then he put his hand on Bobby’s shoulder and said to him, “You just wait here and I’ll see what I can do for you.”
As Bobby waited in the shop, he looked at the beautiful flowers and even though he was a boy, he could see why mothers and girls liked flowers.
The last customer’s leaving brought Bobby back to reality. Bobby began to feel lonely and anxious. (341 words)
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语以为你写好；
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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After what seemed an age, the shop owner came out.
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“Could this be true ”thought Bobby.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一个身无分文的贫穷的小男孩想给妈妈准备一份圣诞礼物。他意外地在街上拾到一枚十美分硬币，可是很快就被告知十美分买不了任何东西。之后他走进了一家花店，询问能不能用硬币买一枝花，老板让他等一会，去看看能为他做点什么。店里最后一位客人的离开将他拉回了现实，他开始感到孤单和惶恐。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为小男孩Bobby和花店老板。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。想为妈妈准备一份圣诞礼物的小男孩带着十美分的硬币走近了一家花店，询问是否可以买一支花，花店老板让他在店里等一会儿。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是过了许久花店老板才从里面走出来，然后他所做的事情使小男孩感到难以置信。结合上文中花店老板对小男孩热情关怀的态度，和小男孩的请求，可以预测或许花店老板为小男孩准备了一束价值远远超过十美分的一束美丽的鲜花，因此小男孩有种不真实感。续写第一段：花店老板出来时，手里拿着一束包装好的美丽的鲜花，并且告诉Bobby这束花的价格正好是10美分。续写第二段： Bobby被吓到了，怀疑这不是事实。花店老板用善意的谎言骗小男孩说这些花正好在促销，他手上的钱正好够付；或者向他解释这是圣诞老人准备好放在他店里并且告诉他会有一个拿着十美分硬币的小男孩来买。最后Bobby开心地付了钱，接过花，回家去了。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容——花店老板走了出来以及Bobby的不真实感，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“What did the shop owner do for Bobby Did he get the little boy some flowers What did the flowers look like What’s the price 等”；第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“Why did Bobby feel it was untrue How did the shop owner explain to him Did Bobby believe Did he get the Christmas gift for his mather How would he feel 等”。
[参考范文]
After what seemed an age, the shop owner came out. There, in his hands, lying twelve long stem, red roses, with leaves of green and tiny white flowers all tied together. Bobby’s heart sank as the owner placed them gently into a long white box. “That will be ten cents, young man.” the shop owner said, reaching out his hand for the dime.
“Could this be true ”thought Bobby. No one else would give him anything for his dime! Sensing the boy’s hesitatation, the shop owner added, “I just happened to have some roses on sale for ten cents a dozen. Would you like to buy them ” This time Bobby did not hesitate. He moved his hand to give the man his dime, and when the man placed the long box into his hands, Bobby knew it was true. Having these flowers for his mother’s Christmas gift, Bobby was more than happy. Walking out of the shop, he heard the shop keeper say, “Merry Christmas!” (154 words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。花店老板拍拍小男孩的肩膀让他等一会可以看出他对小男孩的态度热情友好，并且续写第二段给出的开头是Bobby难以置信的感觉，因此第一段写了花店老板出来后手里拿着一束用绿叶和小白花装饰的玫瑰出来以十美分的价格卖给小男孩。第二段，小男孩感到难以置信，又结合文章前文描述的小男孩热切希望能够送妈妈一份礼物，写了最终小男孩买到了一份圣诞节礼物，而这份礼物就是花店老板提供的这束玫瑰花，中间缺少一个小男孩相信这一事实而接受了十美分买这束花的理由，因此，写花店老板告诉小男孩玫瑰花正好在促销也是符合情理的。
[提炼归纳]
1. 有效运用人物心理描写和语言描写推动故事发展
在有特定情境和人物对话的故事续写过程中，要通过对故事主要人物的动作描写和语言描写来推动故事的发展。例如范文中我们用了“Bobby’s heart sank”，“This time Bobby did not hesitate”两处描写表现了知道事实前后Bobby的心理变化；而结尾中花店老板的语言描写不仅切合了他善良友好的性格特点，又推动了故事的发展。
2. 巧用非谓语动词，使语言更自然地道
在具体的写作过程中，除了让故事发展合情合理，我们还可以考虑使用一些表达技巧使文本更加连贯，语言更加地道。例如，在范文中，我们用了多处非谓语动词结构，如“There, in his hands, lying twelve long stem, red roses …”，“, reaching out his hand”，“Sensing the boy’s hesitation”等。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
The doctors sent my mother home to die. As a fifteen-year survivor of breast cancer, she had suffered two heart attacks when advanced cancer was found in her lung. The doctor told me sadly, "She has a few days, maybe a week. Her heart is weak and unstable. "Mom had struggled to raise three daughters while holding a full-time job, yet worked hard to maintain a warm home for her family. My plan for Mom’s final days was simple: she would live with love, and die with grace.
I took mother to my home, small but comfortable, which was a heaven to four cats and a dog. The animals had the run of my house. We equipped the bedroom with an electric hospital bed and an oxygen machine, which frightened the cats. I’d moved their furniture and the cats were annoyed. The dog, on the other hand, an immature dog with bad habits, was excited by all the changes in the house. He jumped up, barking. He is Otto who was not afraid of the hospital bed, the oxygen machine or the medical smells. Nor was he afraid of the weak woman who had scolded him. Otto jumped onto the foot of Mom's hospital bed, and stayed. With the exception of eating and using the litter box, Otto never left Mom's room.
Days passed and Mom started to rally. “Not unusual,” I was told, “a rally is often a sign of imminent death(回光返照)” I was heart-broken. But Otto would not give her up so easily. He used her improved condition to reposition himself from the foot of her bed to her side. Her thin fingers found his soft coat. He leaned into her body, as if holding tight the strings of her will to live. Though weak, she petted the dog and would not allowed me to take him. Days turned into weeks and Mom continued to fight.
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2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
There was something in the elderly woman’s grace that caught my eye. Although slow and unsure of her steps, the woman moved with deliberation(从容), and there was no hesitation in her gestures.
It was a few years ago, and I had taken a part-time holiday-season job in a video store at the local shopping mall. From inside the store, I could see the people outside rushing by.
The elderly woman entered the store, along with her daughter, who was displaying a serious case of impatience, rolling her eyes, sighing and checking her watch every few seconds. I guessed if she had possessed a rope, she would have fastened it to her mother to drag her along to keep step with the rush of other shoppers.
The elderly woman separated from her daughter and began to seek through the DVDs on the nearest shelf. After the slightest hesitation, I walked over and asked if I could help her find something. The woman smiled up at me and showed me a title written on an old piece of paper.
Rather than rush off to locate the DVD for the woman, I asked her to walk with me so I could show her where she could find it. Looking back, I thought I wanted to enjoy her company for a moment. Something about her deliberate movements reminded me of my own mother, who’d passed away the previous Christmas. I missed my mom and still felt regretful about the moments when I’d used my impatience to make her life unhappy.
As we walked along the back of the store, I introduced its floor plan: old television shows, action movies, cartoons, science fiction. The woman seemed glad of the unrushed company and casual conversation.
We found the DVD and she thanked me, saying that it was the one she’d enjoyed when she was her daughter’s age. Unwillingly, I accompanied her to the cash register, realizing I had to return the elderly woman to her daughter, who was still tapping her foot at the front of the store.
3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
I like all kinds of chocolate.Mother had bought a bar of it,and somehow I couldn't stop thinking about it.I was helping Father in the yard when I got the idea that I could cut off the end of that bar of chocolate.Mother would be sure to miss it,but before she had any idea who had done it,I could admit that I'd taken it to escape a spanking(挨揍)。I waited until Mother was out feeding the chickens.Then I told Father I thought I'd go in for a drink of water.I got the bar down,but I heard Mother coming just when I had the knife ready to cut.So I slipped the chocolate into the front of my shirt and left quickly.Before I went back to help Father,I went to the barn(谷仓)and hid the chocolate there.
All the rest of afternoon,I didn't like to look at Father.Every time he spoke it made me jump.My hands began shaking so much that he asked me what was the matter.I told him it was just that my hands were cold.I knew he didn't believe me,and every time he looked my way my heart started pounding.I didn't want the chocolate anymore.I wanted a chance to put it back without being caught.
I was nearly out to where the cows were when I remembered what Father had said once-some of the family money was mine because I had helped to earn it.Why wouldn't it be all right to figure the bar of chocolate had been bought with my own money That seemed to fix everything.But by the time I had the cows headed home,I had begun to worry again.I decided to leave the whole matter to the Lord.I picked up a dried stick and decided I would throw it up into the air and take my orders from the way it landed.If it pointed west.I'd take the whole bar back.If it pointed south.I'd take half an inch off the end.If it pointed east,I'd bought the bar with my own money and it wouldn't be stealing to keep it.I swung the stick as high as I could.When it came down,it pointed mostly west-but a little south.That night I couldn't sleep.I kept trying to remember how much that stick had really been pointing to the south.
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At last I got up,slipped out into the yard and took the ax(斧头)from the chopping block.
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Then he stood me on my feet and asked if I thought I had deserved the spanking._
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4.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 续写的词数应为150左右。
I sat at the breakfast table with my four-year-old son, Matthew, trying to ignore the ache in my stomach. “Mama, want to play ” “Not today, baby,” I shook my head. These days I could barely get out of bed. I was still recovering from a surgery. I hoped for strength and happiness. But the future seemed so hopeless.
Suddenly, Matthew jumped up from his spot on the kitchen floor. “Bird!” he shouted, rushing to our courtyard. Sure enough, there was a white dove seated in a rubber tree. It sat there for a few moments, and then flew away. Strange, I'd never seen one in our neighborhood before.
When I dragged myself to the kitchen the next morning, the dove was back. This time with a mate carrying twigs. “Look, Matthew,” I said, pointing to the tree. “They ’re going to make a nest.” The doves flew in and out of the courtyard all week, building on top of the rubber tree.
Matthew could hardly contain his excitement. Every morning, he'd run into the kitchen and take his spot by the sliding glass door, talking to the birds while they worked. His enthusiasm was influential. As much as I was grieving, I couldn't help but look forward to the doves' visits too.
Then it all went wrong. The courtyard was a safe enough spot for a nest, but the rubber tree's broad, thin leaves were far from stable. One night, a strong wind blew, throwing the doves' nest to the ground. I heard the twigs break apart.
I surveyed the damage. Nothing good ever lasts. I wouldn't blame the doves if they never came back. But they returned. And they paid no attention to the pile of sticks that had once been their nest.They started again from scratch. Again, though, the wind destroyed all their hard work. The next day, and the next, they renewed their efforts, as if nothing had happened.
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I knew I had to do something.
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“It works! The birds are back!” Matthew announced.
5.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was a Sunday morning. Betty woke up earlier than usual. She couldn’t sleep any longer because she was so excited that her uncle Mark was taking her to the beach. She had always loved going surfing with her uncle. She put her swimming suit on and took quickly that she had prepared the night got before and went outside to wait. She jumped up and down with joy when she saw her uncle’s red jeep turn the corner down her street.
Uncle Mark got out of the car and helped Betty get in. “Are you ready ” he asked. “Yes!” replied Betty. Uncle Mark could see the excitement in her face. Suddenly he said seriously, “Well, before we go, I have to let you know that a shark appeared recently where we're going to surf today.” Scared and shocked, Betty couldn’t say a word. “Haha! I'm kidding you,” Uncle Mark burst out laughing. Betty laughed too. She knew Uncle Mark liked teasing others. “Let’s go and have some breakfast, I know just the place,” Uncle Mark said. They went to a breakfast shop and ate some tacos (炸玉米饼).
After breakfast the two of them went down to Pacific Beach and got their surfboards ready. “First you have to wax(打蜡)the bottom,explained Uncle Mark. “I know. I’ve watched you do it before!" Betty said as she took the wax from Uncle Mark's hand. It took about 15 minutes to wax the bottom of their boards. When Betty finished, Uncle Mark looked it over to make sure it was done well. “Nice job, Betty, you wax your board like a true surfer.”
Finally, they were ready to get into the water. They carried their boards down to the beach and went out into the water. Betty was overly excited and tried to rush to catch a wave. Predictably, she crashed and had to start over. Next was her uncle's turn. He stood up on his first try and smoothly surfed the wave before jumping into the water. Betty cheered for her uncle's perfect run.
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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All of a sudden, Betty felt something touching the bottom of her foot.
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“Help! Help!” Betty screamed in horror.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
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Once, after the nurses had gone for the day, I heard the sound of Mom’s voice coming from her room. I found her with the head of the bed raised, reading from the newspaper, with Otto in her arms, listening adoringly. I will forever cherish the memory of Otto’s touching her face. Eventually, using a walker, Mom began to take walks through the house, followed by Otto. Where she rested, Otto rested. Where she moved, Otto shadowed. Somehow, Otto knew that during those days he became her dog child, giving her life purpose.
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Three years later, Mom together with Otto is still here, medicines and nurses long gone. When we saw the doctor a while ago, “I can’t believe it, Lula,” he said. “I can’t find your cancer and your heart is strong. When your daughter brought you to me, I thought you were a ship that had sailed.” Mom gives the credit to Otto, who continues to share his gift of love―a medicine more powerful than any drug a doctor could prescribe.
【解析】
1.第一段给出的首句是Jatin looked up and he saw the other boys rushing ahead.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“我发现她抬起床头，读着报纸，怀里抱着奥托，崇拜地听着。”入手扩展开去，——无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应，最后一句应该用“不知道为什么，奥托知道在那些日子里，他成了她的狗孩子，给了她生活的目标。”与第二段首句相呼应。
2.第二段所给首句Filled with pleasure, Jatin walked home in no time.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“不久前我们去看医生时，他说:‘我真不敢相信，卢拉。’”入手续写。
【范文点评】
这是一篇续写。符合续写要求，段落之间衔接紧密，句子环环相扣，层次清晰。同时文中使用高级句子。I found her with the head of the bed raised, reading from the newspaper, with Otto in her arms, listening adoringly.句中现在分词作伴随状语；Eventually, using a walker, Mom began to take walks through the house, followed by Otto.过去分词作方式状语；Where she moved, Otto shadowed.句中where引导地点状语从句；When your daughter brought you to me, I thought you were a ship that had sailed.句中when引导时间状语从句。
2.【参考范文】
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As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter. “Mind some advice ” I asked. She rolled her eyes and said. “Of course not.” But clearly there was annoyance in her reply. I smiled to show her I wasn’t criticizing. “Cherish her and cherish every single moment you can stay with her,” I said, to her surprise, And then I answered her curious expression by saying, “When she’s gone, it’s these little moments that will come back to you. Moments like this.” Having finished saying this, I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation(优雅) back to her daughter.
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Together they made their way toward the store’s exit. They stood there for a moment, side by side, watching the rush of the holiday current and then looking at each other. Slowly, the daughter placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mother’s shoulders and gently guided her back into the crowd. Tears filled my eyes when I watched them disappearing in the crowd.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者在录像带工作做兼职时，看到了一对母女一起走进了商店。女儿非常不耐烦，而母亲只是从容地选着DVD。看到这里作者想到了自己的母亲，于是在收银台排队时给了女儿一些忠告。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：当那位老妇人在收银台排队时，我走向她的女儿。可知后文应当描写作者和女儿的对话，作者劝告女儿珍惜现在和母亲相处的时刻；第二段开头是：他们一起朝商店的出口走去。后文应当描写听了作者建议的女儿和母亲在一起的表现，她把她的胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上，带着明显不习惯的感情，轻轻地把她带回到人群中。作者看着消失在人群中，热泪盈眶。
最后注意词数为150词左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如： annoyance, to one's surprise, deliberation等高级词汇；时间状语从句When she’s gone, it’s these little moments that will come back to you.；非谓语动词的运用Having finished saying this, I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation back to her daughter.等高级句式。
3.【参考范文】
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At last/got up, slipped out into the yard and took the ax from the chopping block Then I went into the barn and took the chocolate outside.By the light of the moon,I was about to cut off the end of the bar when I heard"Son!"I couldn't think of a thing to say.I grabbed up the bar of chocolate and hid it next to my chest before l turned around.Father picked me up and took me over to the woodpile.I didn't know anybody could spank as hard as he did.
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Then he stood me on my feet and asked if l thought I had deserved the spanking.He said it wasn't so much that I'd taken the chocolate,but that I'd tried to hide it from him."Son,"he said,"I know you help to earn the family money.We might say the chocolate was yours in the first place.You could have had it if you'd asked for it,but I won't have you being sneaky about things.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者记叙了孩童时一次“偷”东西的经历，因为很爱吃巧克力，作者打算偷吃一点妈妈买的巧克力却意外地将其整块巧克力拿走，然后就陷入了不知如何处理的尴尬局面中，他选择了扔棍子让天意告诉他该怎么做，如果落下来指向西就还回去，指向南就切一点，指向懂就花钱买下来，最终棍子是指向西偏一点南。续写的部分就从那天晚上开始。
【范文点评】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：我起了床，溜到院子里拿起了斧头。所以应该写他准备切巧克力了，但是第二段开头是：他让我站好然后问我觉得自己值不值得挨揍。由此可知作者在切巧克力时应该是被父亲发现了然后被父亲揍了一顿，这些都要在第一段体现。而第二段则应该承接父亲的问题，借由父亲之口向作者讲清道理，或总结作者从中的收获，使文章完整。
续写时要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，需按要求完成续写任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇。如：by the light of the moon，be about to，be sneaky about等；情境描写得较为生动，代入感强；英文表达地道，如：He said it wasn't so much that I'd taken the chocolate,but that I'd tried to hide it from him熟练地运用了形式主语it，彰显了较高的英语水平。
4.【参考范文】
I knew I had to do something. The white dove and its mate had given me something to look forward to, even in my darkest days. Now I was going to help them in return. I woke up the following morning with a plan. There was only an hour before the doves usually made their visits. I hammered a shelf into the wall next to the rubber tree and covered it with leaves to make it look like a tree. Then Matthew and I stood by the sliding glass door, waiting and hoping.
“It works! The birds are back !” Matthew announced. There they were—sitting on top of the shelf, adding some twigs to the new nest despite damage from the strong wind. Three weeks later, we watched three chicks break free from their shells. “Chirp, chirp!” Matthew sang. I held him close and kissed him, feeling more positive and hopeful than I had in months. I realized all around me, life went on. And it was filled with wonders and surprises that I couldn't even imagine.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者四岁的儿子Matthew每天都看到白鸽来到自己家的院子里，每天早上，他都会跑进厨房，站在滑动玻璃门旁边，在鸟儿搭巢时和它们说话。一天夜里，刮起了一阵大风，把鸽巢掀到地上。作者以为鸽子再也不回来，但他们又回来了。它们对那堆曾经是它们巢穴的树枝毫不在意。他们又从零开始。然而，风又一次摧毁了他们所有的辛勤工作。第二天，接着第二天，他们又继续努力，仿佛什么也没发生过。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：我知道我必须做点什么。所以后文应该是讲述鸽子给了作者一些值得期待的东西，于是作者在橡胶树旁边的墙上敲了一个架子，并用树叶覆盖，使它看起来像一棵树。然后和Matthew站在滑动玻璃门旁边等待着，希望着。第二段开头是：“起作用了！鸟儿回来了!” Matthew宣布。本段应该写鸽子们回来后的情况，三个星期后，三只小鸽子破壳而出。作者和儿子都感到几个月来从未有过的乐观和希望。作者也意识到，在周围，生活在继续，充满了无法想象的奇迹和惊喜。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：look forward to, in return, cover with等高级词汇；There was only an hour before the doves usually made their visits.运用了时间状语从句；And it was filled with wonders and surprises that I couldn't even imagine.运用了定语从句等高级句式。
5.【参考范文】
All of a sudden, Betty felt something touching the bottom of her foot. She began to panic. She tried to climb on top of her surfboard and look to see what was swimming below. She turned around and saw a giant shark fin circling her. Before Betty could call out to her uncle, the shark attacked her surfboard. Luckily the shark missed her but now she was stuck in the water.
“Help! Help! Betty screamed in horror. Hearing Betty's scream and seeing the shark, Uncle Mark was quick to act. By the time he arrived, Betty was exhausted from keeping herself afloat without a surfboard. Uncle Mark told Betty to grab onto his surfboard. He swam crazy and quickly brought them both back onto the shore. Betty was crying but felt safe as she knew Uncle Mark would always be there protecting her.
【解析】
为完成续写任务，首先需要掌握所给文章的大意，理清其叙事脉络、说明方法或论证方式，可以先从梳理每段的大意开始：
第一段：本段交代了主要人物和故事背景，一个周日的早上Betty很早就起来了，因为这一天Mark叔叔要带她去沙滩上冲浪，她心情激动，迫不及待，这时Mark叔叔的车来了。
第二段：Mark叔叔接上了Betty，跟她开玩笑说这次要去的水域最近报告有鲨鱼出没(这里可以看作一个伏笔)，然后两人就去吃早餐了。
第三段：两人来到了沙滩上，进行一些冲浪前的准备动作，主要是给冲浪板打蜡。
第四段：本段主要描写Mark叔叔和Betty准备好后下水冲浪的情景。
可以看到，前四段已经将主要的人物和事件交代清楚，属于记叙文，叙事的脉络就是按照时间顺序来展开的，续写的部分要结合所给的开头部分来继续讲述Betty和Mark叔叔在冲浪时发生的事情。
续写第一段给出的情节是“突然Betty感觉到有东西碰到了自己的脚”，而续写第二段“救命！救命！Betty恐惧地大叫道”表明Betty在水中遭遇了险情，这里就可以呼应到第二段埋下的伏笔，即Betty在水里真的遇到了鲨鱼，但仍然需要一个确认的过程，续写第一段就可以围绕这一点展开，描述Betty如何察觉危险、她的情绪如何变化、她作出何种应对，甚至可以描写鲨鱼进行了攻击但没有命中，渲染危急紧张的气氛。而续写第二段就应该切入另外一个人物Mark叔叔了，听到Betty的求救，他会作何反应，二人又将如何化险为夷，这里是有较大的发挥空间的。另外建议续写比较圆满的结局，这样更加符合一般故事的走向和价值观。
【范文点评】
与提纲类书面表达不同，读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，这意味着不仅要读懂文章大意，还要理清文章的脉络和关系。此类题目多以记叙文的形式出现，进行续写时考生需要明白故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置变化、人物特征和情感等。在此基础上，考生顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用英语表达出来，即可完成续写任务。本文的叙事线索是比较清楚的，在明确故事内容的基础上，需要注意到第二段中埋下的伏笔，并且在续写中反映出来，这样可以使得文章前后形成呼应，给人良好的阅读体验。读后续写示例与写作训练7
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Tringg-Tringggggg! Anna rolled in bed hoping the ringing would stop. When she eventually answered, her maid was calling to inform she wouldn’t come as usual, as rains had flooded her house. Unhappy, Anna slid back under the quilt, wishing she also could stay in.
Having moved to the city few months back, Anna lived alone and worked with an advertising firm. Assisting her colleague Mary on a presentation for a rich customer Mr. John, Anna worked rather hard. However, the fact that she wasn’t part of the team handling the deal was highly disheartening. Reaching for the bedside clock, she woke up hurriedly. 8:00 am — the red figure glared back. Damn! Late AGAIN! Taking a quick shower, she rushed to the bus-stop.
She had barely stepped out when downpour caught her in the middle. Blaming the rains, she made her way through the crowd when she spotted her bus leaving. She ran after it but lost her balance and her purse contents spilled out. Frustratingly looking up towards heaven, Anna sighed. Stuffing her purse, she decided to take a taxi. Attempting to hail an empty taxi for 20 minutes, Anna paced restlessly, when someone pulled at her. A young beggar girl was vying for attention. Anna shrugged her off, assuming the girl wanted money. However, the girl held out her hand holding Anna’s mobile, which Anna left behind when she dropped her bag. Embarrassed at her insensitivity, Anna offered her chocolate for appreciation, which the girl grabbed quickly. The prize lighting up her face, she joined her companions, playing in the rains with joy. Anna’s heart soared seeing the poor children treasure the little things.
Half-hour later, Anna stepped into her office which to no surprise wore a deserted look. Before she could reach her desk, Chris was walking towards her. “ Meeting with John now! Mary is not in because of water logging in here, we will go ahead”, Chris ordered seriously. Shocked yet excited at the development, Anna followed. Post the meeting, Chris announced that staff should leave instantly as thunderstorms were predicted.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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After an eventful day, Anna reached home, hungry and exhausted.
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Lost in thought, Anna looked back on the events of the day.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一大早，Anna诸事不顺：女佣因大雨不能来做家务；上班时错过了公交车；追赶公交车时摔了一跤；打的迟迟等不到车。但幸运的是，手机失而复得、工作出现了转机… …
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。
公司职员Anna、Anna的女佣、Ann的同事Mary、上司Chris、大客户Mr. John、捡到她手机的乞丐。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。
下雨天女佣请假，Anna上班错过了公交车，追赶公交车时摔了一跤，等出租车久候不至，乞丐送回了捡到的手机，上班后因同事请假意外地被委以重任。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。
故事总体的发展应该是Anna下班后又累又饿，但是因为女佣请假只能拖着疲惫的身躯继续做家务。然而在做家务的过程中，她渐渐地体会到了其中的乐趣。做完家务她开始看电视，意外地看到了她早上错过的公交车出事故的新闻。回想这一天发生的事，Anna体会到了塞翁失马焉知非福的道理。续写第一段：Anna刚回家时心不甘情不愿地烧饭烧菜搞卫生。然而，她一边干家务一边感受渐渐感受到了做家务时的宁静和愉悦，上班带来的身心疲惫得到了缓解。带着这样的心情，她开始看电视，却吃惊地看到原本她要坐的公交车发生了车祸。续写第二段：Anna回想这一天所有的事情，才发现有时候坏运气也会带来好的结果。如果女仆不请假，她不会体验到做家务带来的简单的快乐；如果她赶上了公交车，会遭遇车祸；如果她及时打到了出租车，她的手机就丢了；如果不是因为大雨同事Mary没来上班，她就无法得到上司的重用。可见，塞翁失马，焉知非福等。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)
结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What did Anna do at home How did she feel at first Did something unexpected happen to her again 等”。 第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“How did she think her maid’s absence What would happen if she caught the bus Was it a coincidence for her to get her mobile back What does this story intend to convey 等”。
[参考范文]
After an eventful day, Anna reached home, hungry and exhausted. The moment she came in, she saw a messy house. “Why is the universe out to get me ” she screamed, taking on the boring tasks of cooking and cleaning. After a while, Anna realized she was enjoying herself and the “me-time” made her refreshed. Coffee for company, she settled to catch the news. Disturbing images of a minor accident were being broadcast. Anna’s heart sank when she figured that it was the bus that she had missed.
Lost in thought, Anna looked back on the events of the day. Had the maid showed up, Anna wouldn’t have the chance to appreciate life’s simple joys. If she caught the taxi earlier, she wouldn’t have got her mobile back. Had it not been incessantly raining, Mary would attend the meeting instead of Anna. Overcome with a strange feeling that the universe was sort of looking after her, Anna smiled, closed her eyes, said a small thank you to GOD and promised to look more carefully for the tiny bright spot in every gloom and be more patient in understanding life’s hidden meaning. When one door closes, another opens.
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。前面的文本出现了很多的转折，因此，第一段延续这种内容的设定，写了Anna对做家务前后心态的变化，结合上文的伏笔，引出本文一个高潮：原本Anna要搭乘的公交车出事故了。第二段的目的在于通过Anna对这一天的反思，对全文进行概括，突出故事的主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 把握内在线索
好的故事往往上下文呼应，所谓“草蛇灰线，伏脉千里”。因此，要做好文本的续写一定要读懂给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件，抓住内在的线索。只有做到这一点，才能对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。要做好本篇的读后续写，必须发现文本中的几组对比：Anna等了很久的出租车非常郁闷，然而因为她一直在原地等车，导致她能找回原本丢失的手机；下大雨上班让Anna狼狈不堪，然而正因为恶劣的天气同事请假，使她得到了上司的重用。所以，续写要按照这一模式创造更多的意料之外、情理之中的巧合，强化文章要表达的真正目的。
2. 学会运用排比
在写作过程中，我们要根据文本特点选择相应的写作手法。在第二段的续写中，Anna回顾一天中发生的众多事情，而这些事情都有意想不到的后续，根据这一内容，采取排比句的方式不仅能让读者一目了然，而且在气势上造成强化的效果。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Sally had anxiety disorder trouble that made her fail to speak in social situations. I’m a nurse and use Bella to help children in my community, to bring them comfort and confidence the way only a dog can. I thought back to the day when I’d first brought Bella to the school.
That morning in January, her teacher led us to a room. “Sally hasn’t spoken outside her home in two years,” she told me. “Her parents have taken her to doctors, but nothing has worked.” A little girl stood shyly just inside the doorway. Her eyes brightened when she noticed my dog.
“This is Bella.” I said. “She does tricks. Would you like to see ”
Sally nodded. I motioned with my hand. Bella lay down and then rolled over. Sally’s eyes lit up. I showed Sally the hand signals for various commands. She was a natural with Bella, maybe because she couldn’t rely on the spoken word herself. Bella sensed that and responded. Soon Sally was able to put Bella through her paces all on her own. I could see her standing taller, more sure of herself each time we met.
One morning in March when she was working with Bella, I heard a tiny voice, barely a whisper, “Good dog.” Sally didn't take her eyes off Bella, but I wanted to jump for joy. Sally spoke a little more each week, only to Bella at first, but then to me. Later, she started giving voice commands with her hand signals and her confidence rose.
Now, five-year-old Sally stood nervously in front of her kindergarten class, with Bella, my trained dog, sitting calmly by her side. All the eyes of her classmates were focused on Sally. They were waiting for her to speak. It was June—only one week of school left—but they had never heard her voice. Not once.
2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
An old wooden seat that Susan extremely valued often reminded her of mother’s Golden Rule.
Back in the 1930s, the country life was really tough. One day after dinner, Susan’s mother sat on the seat, announcing to the children the Golden Rule: “Treat others the way you want to be treated.” Susan reflected carefully and seriously on what her mother had said. She resolved that she would keep in mind and follow the rule.
One Saturday afternoon, she went to farmer Jason’s inn (小旅馆) to get the pay for her mother’s washing for the guests there, which amounted to five dollars. She found Jason in the yard, who, as all the villagers knew, was selfish and mean.
His eyes clouded with anger, as he had just finished a quarrel with one of his guests. He held in his hand an open wallet, full of bills. He barely noticed Susan until she made her request for the money. Instead of shouting at her, as usual, for troubling him when he was busy, he handed her a bank note.
Feeling relieved for escaping from Jason so easily, Susan hurried out of the inn. When carefully putting the money into her pocket, she discovered that Jason had given her two bills instead of one, and her first reaction was joy at the unexpected prize. She looked around and there was nobody nearby to share her discovery. “It is mine. All mine.” she said to herself. “I will buy mum a new coat with it, and she can give her old one to sister Mary, and then Mary can go to the Sunday school with me next winter. I wonder if I can buy a pair of shoes for brother Tom too.”
Just at that moment, she realized that Jason must have given the extra money to her by mistake, and therefore she had no right to own it. But a voice of temptation (诱惑) whispered, “He gave it, and you can keep it. He will never know, even if it is a mistake. ”
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As Susan hurried home, this conflict went on in her mind.
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Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annoyance.
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Getting to watch surgeries should be exciting for any medical student. But in my case, while two doctors were doing the operation, I was checking my phone every 20 seconds to see how much longer until I could leave. I didn’t belong there; I was only pretending to be there. The truth was, halfway through university, I knew I didn’t want to be a doctor. And I had to decide whether to keep lying to myself, or change course.
Before university, I had no idea what I wanted to do with my life. I’d always wanted to do English but my parents didn’t approve, saying there was no money in it. So I figured I’d just pick a career that looked well-paid, satisfying, and would make my parents proud. “Doctor” hit all three, so I decided to do medicine. I knew all the coursework wouldn’t be easy, but didn't expect to find it as hard as I did. I spent many late nights and weekends studying my brains out, but still didn’t get good grades. I just couldn’t get the material to stick to my brain. By exam time, my grades were terrible and I felt like a fool, but I thought maybe a medical internship (实习医生期) would help raise my spirits. Absurdly, my internship was where I realized how little I wanted to be a doctor.
Every day I’d just go into work and do exactly what I was told, go where I was told to go, and watch what I was told to watch. And then I’d go home. It was fun whenever I got to play with expensive microscopes or watch crazy surgeries, but the rest of the time I struggled to get through the day. The other interns, however, practically worked so hard. They were so driven. I thought, “Wow, these interns really want to be doctors. I obviously don’t.” It was a sad realization that led to a sadder, scarier question: If I didn’t want to be doctor, what did I want to do
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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It wasn’t an easy decision.
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Eventually, I changed my course to English writing and suddenly I was enjoying university.
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4.阅读下面短文, 根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
On Friday evening, Emmett and I went to a movie as scheduled. After purchasing the tickets and drinks, we entered the cinema with delight beforehand, waiting for the beginning of the movie.
When I got up in the middle of the movie, Emmett whispered, “ Carter, where are you going ” “I forgot to call my mom to tell her what time to pick us up.” I whispered back, leaving my jacket on the seat.
I squeezed past the people in my row, trying not to step on any feet while still watching the screen. I didn’t want to miss a thing. Balfour, the good guy in the movie, was trapped in an underground cave.
When I came back, Balfour’s flashlight almost went out. An enormous snake was moving toward him, twisting its body. Balfour struggled to loosen the chains around his hands and feet to reach his magic cape (魔法斗篷). With the cape around him, he could completely disappear.
I crawled (缓慢行进) back across eight people (I counted on the way out), never taking my eyes off the screen. I sat down in my seat slowly, then picked up my drink, and swallowed it quickly. But suddenly my brain said, “That’s not coke. That’s lemonade.” I looked down at the cup, just as the girl next to me shouted, “He drank my lemonade!”
“Shhhh!” the people around us said, making quiet complaints.
“Where’s Emmett ” I asked, as if the girl had hidden him under her seat.
“Carter, down here,” Emmett answered in a low voice. He was two rows ahead of me. I was in the wrong row! Everyone was turning around to look at me.
“Here,” I said, handing the girl her drink.
“Eww,” she said. “You have had a drink of it, so you owe me a lemonade.”
“Shhhh!” everyone said again.
“OK, OK,” I said, starting my crawl across eight sets of feet again. Everybody were complaining as I inched out.
“Don’t come back,” the boy on the end said.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1
But the problem was that I had to come back to bring this girl a new lemonade.
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Paragraph 2
I thought about crawling out of this row and back into Emmett’s row, but I couldn’t.
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5.阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Mr. Taylor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic... Bingo! He put all that he prepared for the coming hiking into his backpack.
Mr. Taylor was fond of hiking, this time in particular, for it was the first time for him to hike with his two sons, Harry and Joel. Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term. “It will be an unforgettable experience, definitely.” he whispered to himself, unconsciously a smile spreading over his face.
Harry and Joel, however, argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip. Harry accused Joel of wearing smelly old shoes. Joel blamed Harry for using all of the bug spray(喷雾防虫剂). Harry told Joel he smelled terrible. Joel called Harry a coward(懦夫).
“Will the two of you just quiet down and enjoy our hike together ” their father said. “You’re missing all of the beautiful scenery!”
It was true. Neither Joel nor Harry had taken notice of the bear their father had spied at the start of their trip. They hadn’t looked up at the eagle he pointed out overhead. Worst of all, they hadn’t paid any attention to the turns and twists along the way while they continued their argument.
“Joel threw a stick at me!” Harry screamed. “That’s not true!” Joel shouted back.
Mr. Taylor could no longer contain his anger. “And both of you need to stop arguing!” he erupted. As he turned to face them, his left foot caught on a root. He slipped backward and down muddy bank, falling into the river that ran alongside the path.
Harry and Joel raced to their father’s assistance. They helped him up out of the water, and then dragged his wet backpack up onto land.
Fortunately, their wet-through father found himself just slightly injured.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后, 请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.
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”Just calm down.” Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
Paragraph 1：
But not a word came out. Sally had been so excited about putting on a dog show for her class. She had been quite familiar with the hand signals and had practiced for weeks. Now her eyes found mine. I nodded encouragingly. She took a deep breath and opened her mouth. Her mouth---then her whole body--- seemed to close in on itself in defeat. Sally stood off to the side, head down. I felt awful. Sally returned to her seat, not looking at anyone, not even Bella.
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The next week, she told me she wanted to try again, looking up at me with determination. I asked whether she was sure and suggested it would be OK if she waited till next year. She refused and insisted giving her presentation that day. Then we headed to Sally’s classroom. The kids were sitting in a circle on the floor listening to the teacher. We walked to the front of the room. I shook Sally’s hands and stepped back. For a few seconds, she stood silently, staring at her classmates.Finally she whispered, “This is Bella.” Then, a little louder with more confidence. “Bella.”
【解析】
通过阅读文章可知，莎莉患有焦虑症,作者用训练过的狗贝拉帮助莎莉慢慢学会张嘴说话，培养她的自信。在距离学期结束还有一周的时候,莎莉站在全班同学面前，所有人都等着她说出第一句话。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：但是一句话都没有。第二段开头是：第二个礼拜，她抬头坚定地看着我，告诉我她想再试一次。可知，莎莉的第一次尝试失败了，所以第一段应该写莎莉站在台上那种挣扎，作者内心的感受，注意表情描写和心理活动描写。第二段应该写萨利最终克服自己的焦虑和不自信，在全班同学面前说出了第一句话，注意过程细节的描写。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
写好这类作文要注意几个步骤:
1. 认真审题,找准提示语中的关键词或句,确定中心思想；
2. 依据关键句,草拟提纲,梳理文章的脉络;
3. 准确定位人称时态。注意使用高級词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次:
4. 最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况,有无拼写错误及标误用等
【范文点评】
本书面表达要点齐全,上下文连贯,使用一定数量的句式结构,让句子更加生动丰满,同时运用了许多高级词汇和固定短语,提高文章的档次,体现了对英语的熟练的驾驭能力。如Sally stood off to the side, head down.运用了独立主格;①Sally returned to her seat, not looking at anyone, not even Bella.②The next week, she told me she wanted to try again, looking up at me with determination. ③The kids were sitting in a circle on the floor listening to the teacher.④For a few seconds, she stood silently, staring at her classmates.这些句子则巧妙运用了非谓语动词作状语。
2.【参考范文】
As Susan hurried home, this conflict went on in her mind. When she passed through the gate, her eyes fell upon the wooden seat. Instantly, the words of the Golden Rule rang in her ears. Turning around quickly, she raced along the road breathlessly until she found herself again at farmer Jason’s gate. “Why are you back again ” shouted the cold fellow angrily, as he saw Susan again at his side. “Sir, you gave me two bills, instead of one,” she said in a trembling voice. “Two bills Did I Let me see. Well, so I did. Why didn’t you bring it back sooner You want to keep it yourself ” he blamed.
Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annoyance. Tears rolling down her cheeks, she loudly argued that she returned it almost the moment she discovered the truth. Jason looked at the child, seemingly touched. Putting his hand in his pocket, he drew out a few coins and handed them to her. “No, sir. I thank you,” sobbed Susan, “I do not want to be paid for doing right. I only wish you would not think me dishonest.” After hearing this, Jason said sorry to her, ashamed. Susan returned home with a lightened heart. Never would she forget her mother’s Golden rule in her life.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了Susan在帮妈妈向Jason索要洗衣费的时候，收到了两张纸币，其中一张是Jason不小心多拿出的，在是否将这张多余的纸币据为己有的矛盾中，Susan最终选择了将其还给Jason。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：As Susan hurried home, this conflict went on in her mind. (当Susan匆忙赶回家时，这个矛盾在她的脑海里继续着。)所以应该写Susan回到家看到那把木制椅子时的感触，想到妈妈的教导，而把多余的钱还给Jason，同时应描写Jason和Susan之间关于还钱的对话，包括Jason的疑惑，质问等；第二段开头是Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annoyance. ( Susan又尴尬又恼怒，脸都红了。) 本段应该写Susan对于Jason质问的回答，同时Jason对于Susan回答的反应，比如给与奖励，同时呼应文章主题“己所不欲勿施于人”，应描写Susan对此做出的回应，比如拒绝奖励，诚实地表达出个人的想法等。要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：1.高级词汇：fall upon on; roll down; draw out; hand sth. to sb.2.复合句式：“Why are you back again ” shouted the cold fellow angrily, as he saw Susan again at his side. (as引导时间状语从句)Tears rolling down her cheeks, she loudly argued that she returned it almost the moment she discovered the truth .(“tears rolling down her cheeks”为独立主格结构，表伴随；the moment 引导时间状语从句。)Putting his hand in his pocket, he drew out a few coins and handed them to her. (putting his hand in his pocket为现在分词作状语)Never would she forget her mother’s Golden rule in her life.(否定词置于句首，部分倒装)
3.【参考范文】
It wasn’t an easy decision. I had two choices——either keep lying to myself or do a different degree. Changing course would make the past two years of university a waste of time and money. But I realized that though I’d hate myself for quitting, I’d hate myself more if I ended up being a terrible doctor. I was glad to move onto something new, but I had to deal with my parents’ constant disappointment and complaining about my future.
Eventually, I changed my course to English writing and suddenly I was enjoying university. I was still studying my brains out writing all night and through the weekend, but, this time, enjoying the pain. I’d spend hours perfecting a single paragraph until I was happy with it. Five hours feels like 20 seconds because I was having so much fun striking my head on the keyboard until good words come out. I started looking for internships that would give me experience in professional writing. Fortunately, I made it as an editorial assistant at a website.
【解析】
这是一篇记叙文。观看手术对任何医科学生来说都是一件令人兴奋的事，但作者并不是这样的，他不想当医生，后来他做出了改变，幸运的是，作者最终成为了一个网站的编辑助理。
第一段给出的首句是It wasn’t an easy decision.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“我有两个选择——要么继续欺骗自己，要么攻读一个不同的学位。改变课程会让过去两年的大学生活变成时间和金钱的浪费。”入手扩展开去，——无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。
第二段所给首句Eventually, I changed my course to English writing and suddenly I was enjoying university.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“整个周末，我仍在整晚钻研写作，但这一次，我很享受这种痛苦。”入手续写。
【范文点评】
这是一篇续写。段与段之间衔接紧密，句与句之间层层紧扣，同时文中使用高级句子。Changing course would make the past two years of university a waste of time and money.动名词作主语；But I realized that though I’d hate myself for quitting, I’d hate myself more if I ended up being a terrible doctor.句中使用宾语从句和让步状语从句；I’d spend hours perfecting a single paragraph until I was happy with it.句中使用until引导的时间状语从句；I started looking for internships that would give me experience in professional writing.句中使用定语从句。
4.【参考范文】
But the problem was that I had to come back to bring this girl a new lemonade. I bought a lemonade, took a deep breath, and went back. This time, I bent low, looking at every person on the end of each row. When I saw the same boy, I moved through fast to get back to that girl. Unfortunately, I stepped on a boy’s feet and banged my knee. After apologized to him, I quickly fell into the seat next to the girl and handed her the lemonade. Everyone around us all turned to stare at me again with some complaints.
I thought about crawling out of this row and back into Emmett’s row, but I couldn’t. Maybe I would just stay there until the movie ended. Thanking me for the lemonade, the girl talked about the plots I missed. I whispered back, “Thanks.” When the lights of the cinema came on, I grabbed my jacket on the seat and hurried out. Emmett caught up with me, “Do you know that girl ” “No.” I answered. “Then why do you have her jacket ” I looked down and found a bright pink jacket. “Here I go again,” I said with embarrassment, spotting the girl in the crowd.
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。周五晚上，作者和埃米特按计划去看了一场电影，在看电影期间作者去给妈妈打电话，回来了作者发现自己做错了座位，还误喝了一个女孩的柠檬水。
第一段给出的首句是But the problem was that I had to come back to bring this girl a new lemonade.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“我买了一杯柠檬水，深吸了一口气，走了回去。这一次，我弯下腰，看着每一行末尾的每一个人。还是踩到了一个男孩的脚，迅速坐到女孩旁边的座位上，递给她柠檬水。周围的人都转过头来，抱怨着又盯着作者看。——无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。
第二段所给首句I thought about crawling out of this row and back into Emmett’s row, but I couldn’t.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“也许我会一直呆在那里直到电影结束。这时要续写女孩谈到了作者错过的情节。作者低声说：“谢谢。”当电影院的灯亮了，作者抓起座位上的夹克就匆匆出去了。埃米特追上作者，“你认识那个女孩吗？“没有。”作者回答。“那你为什么拿她的夹克？“作者低头一看，发现了一件亮粉色的夹克衫。“作者很尴尬，在人群中看到了那个女孩。
【范文点评】
这是一篇续写。段落衔接紧密，句与句之间顺应自然，文中使用高级句子。This time, I bent low, looking at every person on the end of each row.句中现在分词作伴随状语；When I saw the same boy, I moved through fast to get back to that girl.句中when引导时间状语从句；Thanking me for the lemonade, the girl talked about the plots I missed.定语从句用在句中。高级句式的应用彰显作者对英语写作的良好驾驭能力。
5.【参考范文】
Para 1.
But his glasses came off when he fell in the water. Harry and Joel waded back into the river. Twigs and leaves swirled around their ankles before floating away on the current. No glasses! Harry thought they might have been swept downstream. But Mr. Taylor couldn’t see without his glasses. Everything was a blur to him now. How could they get home “Oh great! Now we’re lost,” groaned Joel, “and it might be days before someone finds us.” “No thanks to you.” Harry blamed.
Para 2
“Just calm down.” Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.” Mr. Taylor fumbled in his backpack and pulled the map and the compass out. Luckily, Joel learned how to read a map from his books, and Harry knew how to use a compass from his hiking club. They stopped arguing, looked down at the map, searched for the river and used the compass to find the direction. In relief, Mr. Taylor beamed proudly, “You two will save the day. You’re pretty good hiking partners!”
【解析】
前文主要讲的是Taylor先生第一次和两个儿子Harry和Joel一起徒步旅行。然而，Harry和Joel为徒步旅行的前三英里而争吵。结果后来惹得Taylor先生生气了，他的左脚被树根缠住了，在泥泞的河岸上滑来滑去，掉进了路旁的河里。两个儿子前去帮助父亲，还好浑身湿透的父亲发现自己只是受了点轻伤。在给的第一段开头中，“But his glasses came off when he fell in the water.”“came off”意思是“掉进”，第二段开头“Just calm down.” Mr. Taylor shouted, “Without my glasses, we need to work together to find our way.”此句中的find our way为关键词，因为后文都围绕这个词在说。
【高分句型1】
Harry thought his glasses might have been swept downstream, without which Mr. Taylor couldn’t see. Harry想他的眼镜可能被冲到下游去了，没有眼镜Taylor先生就看不见。运用“介词+关系代词”结构非限制性定语从句。
【高分句型2】
They stopped arguing and looked down at the map, so that they could search for the river and used the compass to find the direction. 他们停止了争论，低头看了看地图，这样他们就可以寻找河流，用指南针找到方向。运用so that引导目的状语从句。
