2023年新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写
试题 分析 2023年新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写主要写一名英语为第二语言的中学生在老师的鼓励下参加写作比赛并通过努力取得优异成绩的故事,要求考生根据给定情节续写两段内容。这些精心设计的试题情境使写作形式更加灵活,内容更加开放,在加强语言表达能力考查的同时,强调对应用性和创造性能力的考查,引导学生在语言学习过程中注重辨析语言和文化中的具体现象,梳理和概括信息,从自己的视角正确评判周围事物和不同观念,创造性地表达自己的观点和想法。
命题 特点 1.记叙文文体,侧重于师生、帮助、激励相关的话题。 2023年新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写延续了2022年新高考Ⅰ卷的读后续写主题,话题贴合学生实际,即学生参加比赛活动,侧重于老师对学生的鼓励的作用。 2.写作形式更加灵活,内容更加开放。
考情 分析 1.注重培养学生会阅读,善于提取要点的能力。读后续写需要学生在有限的时间内,厘清文章脉络,梳理出故事线和情感线,为接下来的写作找到支撑点和伏笔。所以学生应多利用教材和学生练习中出现的记叙文本,多看原版英语小说,培养读故事的能力。读后多给学生机会去反思和讨论,寻找故事的前因后果,提高学生逻辑分析的能力。 2.把握短文关键信息和语言特点,重视开头语的提示作用。段落开头语的前后和上下衔接也很重要,考生需要注意整篇短文的篇章结构来续写、构思,理顺上下文逻辑关系,短文内语句要连贯、有序。 3.注重输入,积累语料。学生只有通过丰富的阅读,潜移默化接触到更多地道的语言,才能在高考时用最贴近意义和情境的表达,达到自然流畅描写的境界。在写作时注重使用积累的恰当的词汇,多进行模仿练习。
第一讲 评分标准解读
一、评分原则
1.本题总分为25分,按七个档次进行评分。
2.评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑,具体为:
(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度;
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性;
(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
4.评分时还应注意:
(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分;
(2)书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分;
(3)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美拼写及词汇语法均可接受。
二、评分标准
档次 描述
第七档 (22～25分) (1)创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高; (2)使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错误很少,且完全不影响理解; (3)自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯。
第六档 (18～21分) (1)创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原文情境融洽度较高; (2)使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有个别错误,但不影响理解; (3)比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第五档 (15～17分) (1)创造了基本合理的内容,有一定的逻辑性,续写基本完整,与原文情境相关; (2)使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达方式不够多样化,表达有些许错误,但基本不影响理解; (3)使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第四档 (11～14分) (1)创造了基本完整的故事内容,但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强,与原文情境基本相关; (2)使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误和不恰当之处,个别部分影响理解; (3)尚有语句衔接的意识,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯。
第三档 (6～10分) (1)内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题,续写不够完整,与原文有一定程度的脱节; (2)所用的词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误较多且比较低级,影响理解; (3)未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义欠连贯。
第二档 (1～5分) (1)内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题,或有部分内容抄自原文,续写不完整,与原文情境基本脱节; (2)所使用的词汇非常有限,语法结构单调,错误极多,严重影响理解; (3)几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯。
第一档 (0分) 未作答;所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判;所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
三、失分原因
1.不符合基本要求:词数少于120;两段的词数比例失调;随意分段;词汇语法错误;抄袭原文等。
2.内容不合逻辑:缺乏合理想象;续写部分与给定材料之间的逻辑、续写两段内容之间的逻辑以及续写部分与所给开头语之间的逻辑不相符。
3.语言不够丰富恰当:所使用的语法结构与词汇的丰富性、准确性不够;刻意使用生僻词汇和复杂句式,不考虑与原文语言风格的一致性。
4.脑洞开太大:想象不合理;续写部分立意不高,价值观有争议。
[真题在线]
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)
When I was in middle school,my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest.I said no without thinking.I did not love writing.My family came from Brazil,so English was only my second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play,where I played all the parts.No one laughed harder than he did.
So,why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply:“Because I love your stories.If you’re willing to apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at this.”Encouraged by his words,I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject.Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18,1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming.My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth.Not a brilliant idea,but funny;and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think,as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately.I got tired.I had doubts.I wanted to quit.But,like Revere’s horse,I kept going.I worked hard.I checked my spelling.I asked my older sister to correct my grammar.I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library.I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher,he read it,laughed out loud,and said,“Great.Now,write it again.” I wrote it again,and again and again.When I finally finished it,the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didn’t win,I wouldn’t care.
注意: 续写词数应为150左右。
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
高档作文
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.My name was announced as the winner in the writing contest,and I was invited to attend the award presentation.There,when I accepted the award,my heart skipped a beat,my breath caught in my throat,and tears filled my eyes.I had achieved something that I never thought was possible.It was a validation of all the hard work I had put in,of the long nights spent perfecting my essay.My teacher was right: I did have a good shot at this. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.Before I told him the good news,his face broadened into a grin.“You’re a writer.”He laughed out loud.His words filled me with confidence.It was then that I truly understood what I had accomplished was not just about winning a contest,but about realizing my own potential.His belief in me had given me the courage to try and to put in the effort.At that moment,gratitude enveloped me,for I discovered a single person can have a profound impact on others. 评语: 1.本文紧紧围绕原文的情节和情感线索,情节设计合理,呼应并深化主题,语言风格一致。 2.利用伏笔,前后呼应,如①My name was announced as the winner in the writing contest,and I was invited to attend the award presentation.(自然衔接开头语,其中award presentation呼应下一段开头语)②It was a validation of all the hard work I had put in,of the long nights spent perfecting my essay.(呼应原文“我”为写作做出的各种努力) ③My teacher was right: I did have a good shot at this.(呼应原文并自然衔接下一段开头语)④“You’re a writer.” He laughed out loud.(突出了老师对“我”的信任,其中laughed out loud呼应原文)。 3.丰富的心理描写和神态描写,如my heart skipped a beat,my breath caught in my throat,and tears filled my eyes;his face broadened into a grin等。 4.高级词汇的运用,如validation,perfect,envelope,profound等。
中档作文
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days.I was so delighted to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher.“I knew you’d win! I am proud of you.You made it!” he said excitedly.Then came the big day.When I was invited to the stage to receive the award,I expressed my thanks to my teacher.I said,“It’s you who make me fall in love with writing,my social studies teacher.Without your recognition and guidance,I couldn’t have written this article.Again thank you very much!” I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.My teacher was waiting for me.Holding my hands,he said, “Congratulations! You are a good writer,so keep writing.”“You know I didn’t like writing before,but now I am crazy about it! I will try my best to create good works.” I said seriously.Since then,I have written many works and now I am a famous writer.I owe my success to my social studies teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing. 评语: 本文能够围绕原文的情节和情感线索,情节设计合理,体现原文主题。运用了一些高级的句式,如I was so delighted to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher;It’s you who make me fall in love with writing,my social studies teacher等,但语言表达尤其心理描写直白,不够含蓄,人物对话描写偏多。
低档作文
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.I was told that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days.I was so happy to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher.“I knew you’d win! I am proud of you.You must be a success!” he said excitedly.Then came the big day.When I was invited to the stage to receive the award,I expressed my thanks to my teacher.I said,“thanks you,my social studies teacher.Without your praise,I couldn’t wirte this article.Again thank you very much!” I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.My teacher was waiting for me.Seeing me,he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer,so keep writing.”“You know I didn’t like writing before,but now I like it! I will try my best to write good works.” I said seriously.Since then,I write many good works and now I am a famous writer.Thanks to my teacher,I succeed. 评语: 本文能够围绕原文的情节和情感线索设计情节,体现原文主题。但本文语法词汇错误较多,如You must be a success;thanks you;couldn’t wirte;Since then,I write many等;句式简单,缺少体现高中生写作表达水平的高级词汇和语法。(共25张PPT)
专题六 读后续写
2023年新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写
试题 分析 2023年新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写主要写一名英语为第二语言的中学生在老师的鼓励下参加写作比赛并通过努力取得优异成绩的故事,要求考生根据给定情节续写两段内容。这些精心设计的试题情境使写作形式更加灵活,内容更加开放,在加强语言表达能力考查的同时,强调对应用性和创造性能力的考查,引导学生在语言学习过程中注重辨析语言和文化中的具体现象,梳理和概括信息,从自己的视角正确评判周围事物和不同观念,创造性地表达自己的观点和想法。
命题 特点 1.记叙文文体,侧重于师生、帮助、激励
相关的话题。
2023年新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写延续了
2022年新高考Ⅰ卷的读后续写主题,话
题贴合学生实际,即学生参加比赛活
动,侧重于老师对学生的鼓励的作用。
2.写作形式更加灵活,内容更加开放。
考情 分析 1.注重培养学生会阅读,善于提取要点的能力。读后续写需
要学生在有限的时间内,厘清文章脉络,梳理出故事线和
情感线,为接下来的写作找到支撑点和伏笔。所以学生应
多利用教材和学生练习中出现的记叙文本,多看原版英语
小说,培养读故事的能力。读后多给学生机会去反思和讨
论,寻找故事的前因后果,提高学生逻辑分析的能力。
2.把握短文关键信息和语言特点,重视开头语的提示作用。
段落开头语的前后和上下衔接也很重要,考生需要注意整
篇短文的篇章结构来续写、构思,理顺上下文逻辑关系,
短文内语句要连贯、有序。
3.注重输入,积累语料。学生只有通过丰富的阅读,潜移默
化接触到更多地道的语言,才能在高考时用最贴近意义和
情境的表达,达到自然流畅描写的境界。在写作时注重使
用积累的恰当的词汇,多进行模仿练习。
第一讲 评分标准解读
第一讲 评分标准解读
一、评分原则
1.本题总分为25分,按七个档次进行评分。
2.评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面
考虑,具体为:
(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度;
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性;
(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,
然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最
后给分。
4.评分时还应注意:
(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分;
(2)书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分;
(3)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分
时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美拼写及
词汇语法均可接受。
二、评分标准
档次 描述
第七档 (22～ 25分) (1)创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高;
(2)使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错误很少,且完全不影响理解;
(3)自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯。
第六档 (18～ 21分) (1)创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原文情境融洽度较高;
(2)使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有个别错误,但不影响理解;
(3)比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第五档 (15～17分) (1)创造了基本合理的内容,有一定的逻辑性,续写基本完整,与原文情境相关;
(2)使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达方式不够多样化,表达有些许错误,但基本不影响理解;
(3)使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第四档 (11～14分) (1)创造了基本完整的故事内容,但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强,与原文情境基本相关;
(2)使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误和不恰当之处,个别部分影响理解;
(3)尚有语句衔接的意识,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯。
第三档 (6～ 10分) (1)内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题,续写不够完整,与原文有一定程度的脱节;
(2)所用的词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误较多且比较低级,影响理解;
(3)未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义欠连贯。
第二档 (1～ 5分) (1)内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题,或有部分内容抄自原文,续写不完整,与原文情境基本脱节;
(2)所使用的词汇非常有限,语法结构单调,错误极多,严重影响理解;
(3)几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯。
第一档 (0分) 未作答;所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判;所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
三、失分原因
1.不符合基本要求:词数少于120;两段的词数比例失调;随意分段;
词汇语法错误;抄袭原文等。
2.内容不合逻辑:缺乏合理想象;续写部分与给定材料之间的逻辑、
续写两段内容之间的逻辑以及续写部分与所给开头语之间的逻辑
不相符。
3.语言不够丰富恰当:所使用的语法结构与词汇的丰富性、准确性
不够;刻意使用生僻词汇和复杂句式,不考虑与原文语言风格的一
致性。
4.脑洞开太大:想象不合理;续写部分立意不高,价值观有争议。
[真题在线]
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)
When I was in middle school,my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest.I said no without thinking.I did not love writing.My family came from Brazil,so English was only my second language.
Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play,where I played all the parts.No one laughed harder than he did.
So,why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply:“Because I love your stories.If you’re willing to apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at this.”Encouraged by his words,I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject.Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18,1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming.My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth.Not a brilliant idea,but funny;and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think,as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately.I got tired.I had doubts.I wanted to quit.But,like Revere’s horse,I kept going.I worked hard.I checked my spelling.I asked my older sister to correct my grammar.I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library.I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher,he read it,laughed out loud,and said,“Great.Now,
write it again.” I wrote it again,and again and again.When I finally finished it,the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didn’t win,I wouldn’t care.
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
高档作文
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.My name was announced as the winner in the writing contest,and I was invited to attend the award presentation.There,
when I accepted the award,my heart skipped a beat,my breath caught in my throat,and tears filled my eyes.I had achieved something that I never thought was possible.It was a validation of all the hard work I had put in,of the long nights spent perfecting my essay.My teacher was right: I did have a good shot at this.
评语:
1.本文紧紧
围绕原文
的情节和
情感线索,
情节设计
合理,呼应
并深化主
题,语言风
格一致。
2.利用伏笔,前后呼应,如①My name was announced as the
winner in the writing contest,and I was invited to
attend the award presentation.(自然衔接开头语,其中award
presentation呼应下一段开头语)②It was a validation of
all the hard work I had put in,of the long nights spent
perfecting my essay.(呼应原文“我”为写作做出的各种努力)
③My teacher was right: I did have a good shot at this.
(呼应原文并自然衔接下一段开头语)④“You’re a writer.”
He laughed out loud.(突出了老师对“我”的信任,其中
laughed out loud呼应原文)。
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.Before I told him the good news,his face broadened into a grin.“You’re a writer.”He laughed out loud.His words filled me with confidence.
It was then that I truly understood what I had accomplished was not just about winning a contest,but about realizing my own potential.His belief in me had given me the courage to try and to put in the effort.At that moment,gratitude enveloped me,for I discovered a single person can have a profound impact on others.
3.丰富的心理描写和神态
描写,如my heart
skipped a beat,my
breath caught in my
throat,and tears
filled my eyes;his
face broadened into
a grin等。
4.高级词汇的运用,如
validation,perfect,
envelope,profound等。
中档作文
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,
there came the news.I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days.I was so delighted to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher.“I knew you’d win! I am proud of you.You made it!” he said excitedly.Then came the big day.When I was invited to the stage to receive the award,I expressed my thanks to my teacher.I said,“It’s you who make me fall in love with writing,my social studies teacher.Without your recognition and guidance,I couldn’t have written this article.Again thank you very much!”
评语:
本文能够围绕原文的情节和情感线索,情节设计合理,体现原文主题。
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.My teacher was waiting for me.Holding my hands,he said, “Congratulations! You are a good writer,so keep writing.”“You know I didn’t like writing before,but now I am crazy about it! I will try my best to create good works.” I said seriously.Since then,I have written many works and now I am a famous writer.I owe my success to my social studies teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.
运用了一些高级的句式,如I was so delighted to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher;
It’s you who make me fall in love with writing,my social studies teacher等,但语言表达尤其心理描写直白,不够含蓄,人物对话描写偏多。
低档作文
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.I was told that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days.I was so happy to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher.“I knew you’d win! I am proud of you.You must be a success!” he said excitedly.Then came the big day.When I was invited to the stage to receive the award,I expressed my thanks to my teacher.I said,“thanks you,my social studies teacher.Without your praise,I couldn’t wirte this article.Again thank you very much!”
评语:
本文能够围绕原文的情节和情感线索设计情节,体现原文主题。
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.My teacher was waiting for me.Seeing me,he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer,so keep writing.”“You know I didn’t like writing before,but now I like it! I will try my best to write good works.” I said seriously.Since then,I write many good works and now I am a famous writer.Thanks to my teacher,I succeed.
但本文语法词汇错误较多,如You must be a success;thanks you;couldn’t wirte;Since then,I write many等;句式简单,缺少体现高中生写作表达水平的高级词汇和语法。
