-2023-2024学年高考英语读后续写入门如何根据材料续写故事 课件(共29张PPT)

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读后续写
确定续写框架，构思续写情节
细节描写
一、动作描写
人物动作是人物内心的外在表现。在读后续写中，人物动作可以展现人物的内心活动，表现人物的性格特征，塑造人物形象并推动情节发展。但学生在答题过程中往往不会根据文章主题和故事发展的需要，生动、细致地描写主要人物的动作，从而造成文章情节失真，内容平淡，人物苍白和语言空洞。
描写精准化：
一、用含义明确的动词
精准化即用一系列小动作而不用大动作，或者用含义比较明确的动词，而不用抽象的动词来描述，以使描写更加具体生动。
例题展示：
The little boy said sorry to his mother.
The little boy hung his head（耷拉着头） and mumbled （嘟囔着）an apology to his mother.
Can you find the difference
二、给动词加修饰词
适当的修饰词能细致地表达出动作的时间、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表现人物的鲜明个性与思想情感。
动作描写中最常见的修饰成分就是状语，可使用副词、介词短语等。
例题展示：
The wolf also noticed them and turned its head back, howling at Paul and Becky.
At the same time, the wolf also noticed them and fiercely（凶猛地） turned its head back, howling loudly at and Becky.
今年的母亲节你给妈妈送啥了？
Practice 1:
The boy bought a gift for his Mum.
The boy took out some coins from his pocket and gave them to the cashier.
The boy took out some coins from his pocket with the dirty hands and gave them to the cashier carefully.
动作具体化
添加修饰词
Practice 2:
Mum accepted the gift.
Mum stepped forward and reached out for the gift.
Unbelievably, mum stepped forward excitedly and reached out for the gift with tears in eyes.
动作具体化
添加修饰词
情景串联：
母亲节男孩给母亲买了礼物，母亲接过礼物。
The boy took out some coins from his pocket with the dirty hands and gave them to the cashier carefully.
Unbelievably, mum stepped forward excitedly and reached out for the gift with tears in eyes.
小结：
1、为改进动作描写，我们可使用动作描写精准化的方法，用含义比较明确的动词，而不用抽象的动词描述。
2、除了精准选用表示动作的词语外，还要给动词加上适当的修饰成分（以状语为主，可以是单个副词，也可是时间、地点、原因、让步、方式等状语）。
动作过程化
记叙文中有不少动作描写是一连串的动作过程的展示。尤其在展示人物个性时，如果我们一笔带过，就很难突出人物形象，也很难给人留下深刻的印象，而通过细节描写展现出动作的过程，表现力会大增。
例题展示：
Lisa went to catch the butterfly.
Lisa crept(蹑手蹑脚) along the path, bent over swiftly and cupped（使成杯型） her hands around the butterfly gently.
The boy went to swim in the lake.
The boys rushed to the lake，took off their clothes and jumped into the water.
续写常用的动作链形式
(1)“A，B and C”结构
这种结构就是多个连续的动作用在一个句子中
动作链　跳入湖中嬉戏＝冲向湖边＋脱掉衣服＋跳入水中。
The boys rushed to the lake，took off their clothes and jumped into the water.
1.这个歌手唱歌。
动作链　歌手唱歌＝扫视观众＋深吸一口气＋开始演唱
The singer glanced at the audience，took a deep breath and began to sing.
2.她坐车去警察局。
动作链 上车＝拦车＋上车＋告诉目的地。
　He stopped the taxi，jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver，“Go to the police station，please.”
动作链分解
动作链分解
案例展示：
The boy took out some coins from his pocket with the dirty hands and gave them to the cashier carefully.
Unbelievably, mum stepped forward excitedly and reached out for the gift with tears in eyes.
男孩拿着礼物离开商店，回家。
完整情境展示：
The boy took out some coins from his pocket with the dirty hands and gave them to the casher carefully. The boy held the gift tightly, rushed out the grocery happily and went straight home hurriedly. Unbelievably, mum stepped forward excitedly and reached out for the gift with a big smile.
小结：
在描写动作时，要学会细化动作，把动作过程分解成一连串细微的动作，形成动作链，写出动作的连贯性，这样才能使描写具有画面感，使人物更立体。
2.句式升级： 句子+ 非谓语结构
模式1：句子＋ ing
老人静坐
动作链　老人静坐＝坐在夕阳下＋看报纸＋听广播
The old man sat under the sunset，reading the newspaper and listening to the radio.（动词ing 做伴随状语）
模式2：句子＋having done
没有买到票。
动作链　没有买到票＝排了很久队＋被告知票卖完了
Having queued for 3 hours，he was told that the ticket had been sold out.
（动作早于谓语动作发生，做让步状语）
模式3：句子＋ ed
孩子们哭了。
动作链　哭了＝被感动＋哭了。
Deeply moved by the story，the children began to cry.
The boy took out some coins from his pocket with the dirty hands and gave them to the casher carefully. The boy held the gift tightly, rushed out the grocery happily and went straight home hurriedly. Unbelievably, mum stepped forward excitedly and reached out for the gift with tears in eyes.
母亲看着手中的礼物
Deeply moved by her son, the boy’s Mum couldn’t help crying.
The boy’s Mum looked at the gift tearfully, walking up to her son and hugging him tightly.
情境再现
在观众的注视下，他感到紧张，走向跑道。
动作具体化: 他站在跑道上，喉咙发紧，手心冒汗。
使用动作链：他深吸一口气，鼓起勇气，向跑道走
去。
The eyes of the whole audience fell upon him.Standing on the track, he felt his throat tight and his palms sweating.
(句子+非谓语，动作具体化)
所有观众都看着他。他站在跑道上，喉咙发紧，手心冒汗
He took a deep breath, gathered up his courage, and walked to the track.（动作链）
他深吸一口气，鼓起勇气，向跑道走去。