2024届高考英语读后续写人与自然类：失控的雄鹿 讲义
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题目
Alexis Vaughan, 17, sat quietly in the passenger seat of her dad's car. She stared out the window at the Preston, Idaho, cornfields.
Alexis, a high school student, let her eyes lazily scan the landscape for wildlife. Still, she was terrified when a deer came into view about 200 yards in front of them, just a few feet off the road. "Dad, there's a deer, there!" Alexis said, rolling down the window for a better look. It was a three-point buck(雄鹿) --- a male deer with sharp, three-pronged antlers (角) on each side of its head．
As the car moved closer, Alexis saw that the buck's head was bent toward the ground．Then she heard a scream. A few seconds later, she saw an arm fly up near the buck's head．Alexis realized the buck was attacking a woman. Sue Panter, a 44-year-old mother, had been out for her morning run. The buck had come out from the tall corn and began following her. Having lived in rural Idaho for years, Sue knew that most bucks got frightened by humans. But this buck edged closer, even when she threw at it with a handful of gravels(石子).
Sue went to pick up a log to use for self-defense, and the buck charged．It lifted her with its antlers and threw her into the air. Sue could feel the horns punctured(刺穿) her leg and blood flowed down her leg．Within seconds, the buck had pushed her off the road and into the cornfield.
When Alexis and her father pulled up, the buck was rolling Sue like a rag doll．Alexis looked into the woman's terrified eyes, and before her father had even stopped the car, the 104 pound teenager jumped quickly out of the car and down the slope toward the buck. She was kicking and hitting it to get its attention. Then Michael, her father, who had followed his daughter, wrestled the buck away from the women by holding the antlers.
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Alexis helped Sue up the slope.
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Then she heard her father yell.
破题
文章主要讲的是一对父女（Alexis和Micheal）开车到野外的时候，看到一头雄鹿正在攻击一名妇女（Sue），然后下车营救的故事。原文结尾，父亲（Micheal）把雄鹿支开了。续写的第一段，Alexis扶着Sue到了一个斜坡上，然后继续写。
我们先来一起构思一下情节。情节构思的方法有很多，我这里想用罗伯特·麦基的《故事》中讲的方法来构思。他在《故事》中是这样写的：
你已经决定某一个特定的事件必须在你的故事中发生，一个将要进展和转折的情景。如何写出一个富有见地的情感场景？你问：“如果我是这个人物，我会怎么做？”采用斯坦尼斯拉夫斯基的“魔术般的如果”，你会去扮演这个角色。当一个场景对我们来说具有情感上的意义时，我们便可以相信，它对观众来说也同样具有意义。罗伯特·麦基《故事》
非常简单，但是非常有效。不要问“我的人物会怎么做？”而是问“我是这个人物，我要怎么做”。我们可以想一下，如果我是Sue，“我”此时最想要得到的是什么？很明显，“我”受伤了，“我”被雄鹿刺杀了大腿，“我”要马上得到救治，这是“我”最想要的东西。如果我是Alexis，“我”看到有人受伤，“我”第一个想到肯定也是帮忙救治，所以“我”会回到车上，拿出绷带帮Sue包扎。同时，“我”会想着父亲的安危。这就是第一段。
然而，“我”听到了父亲的喊叫声，这个喊叫声当然不是父亲战胜雄鹿后胜利的大叫，而是不敌雄鹿的叫声。那“我”要做的就是如何帮助父亲解围。这里也是这篇文章构思的难点。很多人会写“拿枪”，毕竟美国嘛。“拿枪”并不是不可以，只是我们有更好的东西。在这个场景当中，有一样东西体型比鹿大，而且还能发出奇怪声响，并且还是一个关键词，那就是“车”，所以“我”可以回到车上，狂按喇叭和大灯，然后慢慢把车开过去，把鹿吓跑。
下水作文
Alexis helped Sue up the slope.Behind them was a scarlet trail. Sue was hurt pretty bad. She was completely numb and terrified, her eyes filled with fear and pain. Alexis rushed back to the car and brouhgt out the first-aid kit. She helped sue stop bleeding by using bandages first. In the meantime, she couldn’t help giving quick glances in her father’s direction. Micheal was still tangling with the buck. They were safe for the time being.
Then she heard her father yell. She turned around. What she saw shocked and terrified her ---- her father was pressed down to the ground with punctured abdomen. The animal, however, didn't seem to stop. It righted itself, preparing for another charge. Alexis dashed to the car and started engine. She blew the horn and flashed the headlights with all her might. Luckily, it got the buck's attention. With the car drew nearer, it sprinted into the woods. Alexis got out the car to see to her father. Micheal and Sue was brought to the emergency room afterwards. What a narrow escape!
词句积累
1. Behind them was a scarlet trail：他们后面有一天鲜红的血迹。【用了倒装。scarlet：鲜红的。漫威绯红女巫就是这个词：Scarlet Witch】
2. first-aid kit: 急救包
3. couldn't help giving quick glances in her father's direction：忍不住往父亲的方向瞥
4. tangle with：与……纠缠
5. It righted itself：让自己站稳，扶正【熟词生义，right [v.]: to put something back into its correct upright position：使……直立，扶正】
6. blow the horn：按喇叭
7. flash the headlight：闪前灯
8. sprint into the woods：冲进树林
9. see to her father：照看父亲【see to: to deal with something or do something for someone：照料，处理】
Alexis Vaughan, 17, sat quietly in the passenger seat of her dad's car. She stared out the window at the Preston, Idaho, cornfields.
Alexis, a high school student, let her eyes lazily scan the landscape for wildlife. Still, she was terrified when a deer came into view about 200 yards in front of them, just a few feet off the road. "Dad, there's a deer, there!" Alexis said, rolling down the window for a better look. It was a three-point buck(雄鹿) --- a male deer with sharp, three-pronged antlers (角) on each side of its head．
As the car moved closer, Alexis saw that the buck's head was bent toward the ground．Then she heard a scream. A few seconds later, she saw an arm fly up near the buck's head．Alexis realized the buck was attacking a woman. Sue Panter, a 44-year-old mother, had been out for her morning run. The buck had come out from the tall corn and began following her. Having lived in rural Idaho for years, Sue knew that most bucks got frightened by humans. But this buck edged closer, even when she threw at it with a handful of gravels(石子).
Sue went to pick up a log to use for self-defense, and the buck charged．It lifted her with its antlers and threw her into the air. Sue could feel the horns punctured(刺穿) her leg and blood flowed down her leg．Within seconds, the buck had pushed her off the road and into the cornfield.
When Alexis and her father pulled up, the buck was rolling Sue like a rag doll．Alexis looked into the woman's terrified eyes, and before her father had even stopped the car, the 104 pound teenager jumped quickly out of the car and down the slope toward the buck. She was kicking and hitting it to get its attention. Then Michael, her father, who had followed his daughter, wrestled the buck away from the women by holding the antlers.
Paragraph1:
Alexis helped Sue up the slope.
Paragraph 2:
Then she heard her father yell.
破题
文章主要讲的是一对父女（Alexis和Micheal）开车到野外的时候，看到一头雄鹿正在攻击一名妇女（Sue），然后下车营救的故事。原文结尾，父亲（Micheal）把雄鹿支开了。续写的第一段，Alexis扶着Sue到了一个斜坡上，然后继续写。
我们先来一起构思一下情节。情节构思的方法有很多，我这里想用罗伯特·麦基的《故事》中讲的方法来构思。他在《故事》中是这样写的：
你已经决定某一个特定的事件必须在你的故事中发生，一个将要进展和转折的情景。如何写出一个富有见地的情感场景？你问：“如果我是这个人物，我会怎么做？”采用斯坦尼斯拉夫斯基的“魔术般的如果”，你会去扮演这个角色。当一个场景对我们来说具有情感上的意义时，我们便可以相信，它对观众来说也同样具有意义。罗伯特·麦基《故事》
非常简单，但是非常有效。不要问“我的人物会怎么做？”而是问“我是这个人物，我要怎么做”。我们可以想一下，如果我是Sue，“我”此时最想要得到的是什么？很明显，“我”受伤了，“我”被雄鹿刺杀了大腿，“我”要马上得到救治，这是“我”最想要的东西。如果我是Alexis，“我”看到有人受伤，“我”第一个想到肯定也是帮忙救治，所以“我”会回到车上，拿出绷带帮Sue包扎。同时，“我”会想着父亲的安危。这就是第一段。
然而，“我”听到了父亲的喊叫声，这个喊叫声当然不是父亲战胜雄鹿后胜利的大叫，而是不敌雄鹿的叫声。那“我”要做的就是如何帮助父亲解围。这里也是这篇文章构思的难点。很多人会写“拿枪”，毕竟美国嘛。“拿枪”并不是不可以，只是我们有更好的东西。在这个场景当中，有一样东西体型比鹿大，而且还能发出奇怪声响，并且还是一个关键词，那就是“车”，所以“我”可以回到车上，狂按喇叭和大灯，然后慢慢把车开过去，把鹿吓跑。
下水作文
Alexis helped Sue up the slope.Behind them was a scarlet trail. Sue was hurt pretty bad. She was completely numb and terrified, her eyes filled with fear and pain. Alexis rushed back to the car and brouhgt out the first-aid kit. She helped sue stop bleeding by using bandages first. In the meantime, she couldn’t help giving quick glances in her father’s direction. Micheal was still tangling with the buck. They were safe for the time being.
Then she heard her father yell. She turned around. What she saw shocked and terrified her ---- her father was pressed down to the ground with punctured abdomen. The animal, however, didn't seem to stop. It righted itself, preparing for another charge. Alexis dashed to the car and started engine. She blew the horn and flashed the headlights with all her might. Luckily, it got the buck's attention. With the car drew nearer, it sprinted into the woods. Alexis got out the car to see to her father. Micheal and Sue was brought to the emergency room afterwards. What a narrow escape!
词句积累
1. Behind them was a scarlet trail：他们后面有一天鲜红的血迹。【用了倒装。scarlet：鲜红的。漫威绯红女巫就是这个词：Scarlet Witch】
2. first-aid kit: 急救包
3. couldn't help giving quick glances in her father's direction：忍不住往父亲的方向瞥
4. tangle with：与……纠缠
5. It righted itself：让自己站稳，扶正【熟词生义，right [v.]: to put something back into its correct upright position：使……直立，扶正】
6. blow the horn：按喇叭
7. flash the headlight：闪前灯
8. sprint into the woods：冲进树林
9. see to her father：照看父亲【see to: to deal with something or do something for someone：照料，处理】