Unit7 What’s the highest mountain in the world
Name
Writing
Ⅰ. Analyze the topic
Wildlife Protection#We are collecting captions (配文) for the posters about wildlife protection.Welcome to join us sending your captions(配文)to our email and then get wildlife postcards.
写作要求：1.条理清晰，语句通顺，语法正确；
2.书写规范，80词左右；
3.文中不得出现涉及真实的人名、地名或校名等。
Person：
Tense：
Text：
Reader：
Ⅱ.Make an outline
Structure：
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IIISome useful information
Elephant Whale Northeast Tiger
Facts: biggest in the world the symbol of Thailand long nose and ivory live in forest and grassland grass,live up to 70 years dance,draw,walk for a long time ,never get lost Dangerous situation kill them for ivory cut down trees land pollution Ways to protect make laws to stop people killing not buy things made of ivory stop cutting down trees Facts: Huge Live in the sea Some kinds have teeth Sing songs Eat small fish and other sea life Jump high out of the water Dangerous situation Whale parts sold to make things like candles and soap Human catch whales for meat, fat and oil Water pollution Ways to protect Rules on whale protection Learn more about whales Stop putting rubbish into the sea Facts: largest cat orange with black stripes live in the forest and live alone has strong bite eat meat/ a lot of food be good at swimming give birth every 2 to 3 years Dangerous situation hunt them for fur worse living environment have no place to live Ways to protect make laws to stop people killing not buy things made of fur stop pollute the environment
IV. Finish the first draft
Do you know...Let me tell you.
Facts: They are... They have... They live in They feed on They can/are able to... Dangerous situation However,... One of the main reasons is that... Another reason is that... Ways to protect So we should... Firstly,we can... Secondly,... Thirdly,...
All in all/In a word,we should...
V. Finish the second draftMarking ladders
Unit7 What’s the highest mountain in the world
For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure, content, grammar & language Self-check Peer check Teacher’s assessment
Structure and content I write the letter into paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I lead to the animal (1 point)
Para_____:I have introduced all the aspects.(facts,dangerous situation,ways to protect) (3 points)
Para.____:I have showed my conclusion. (1 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (1 point)
Grammar and language My expressions are right. (3 points)
There are spelling mistakes. (1 point)
I have used some good sentences. (2 point)
I have used some conjunction words and transitional sentences.. (1 point)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total Score
What can I do to improve my writing next time (共11张PPT)
writing
Unit7
What’s the highest mountain in the world
#Wildlife Protection#We are collecting captions (配文) for the posters about wildlife protection.Welcome to join us sending your captions(配文)to our email and then get wildlife postcards.
Pre-writing
How can we write such a caption
Writing topic
Person
The first& third person
Tense
The simple past tense
Text
An e-mail
reader
Analyze the writing topic
Pre-Writing
people who are interested in wildlife protection
What can we write
Pandas are known as the “national treasure” of China.They are white and black. Most of them live in the forest and they like eating bamboos. They can live up to 20 to 30 years. An adult panda weighs many times more than a baby panda. One interesting fact is that a baby panda is pink and it can’t see and doesn’t have teeth.
However,pandas are endangered now. One of the main reasons is that Pandas don’t have babies often, only one every two years and the babies often die from illness. Another reason is that Humans started to cut down forests,so pandas can’t find enough food to eat .
So we should take action to protect them.First,we should learn more about pandas and shouldn’t cut down the trees .Second,we should make laws on pandas protection.Third ,we can tell the people around us the importance of protecting pandas.
All in all, we should play a part in protecting pandas and helping them have a safe and comfortable home.
Pre-writing
What’s the main idea of each paragraph
some facts about the pandas
dangerous situation about the pandas
ways to protect the pandas
conclusion(总结)
Pre-writing
What can we write
facts
dangerous situation
ways to protect
animal
What do they look like
Where do they live
What do they eat/like
What can they do
...
internal cause(内因)...
external cause(外因)
Humans activities...
1.learn more about ...
2.tell others the importance of saving...
3.help to make some laws about...protection
4.protect environment and don’t cut down trees
...
Why do some of them have to be protected
How can we protect them
Pre-Writing
Make an outline
Structure
(结构)
Beginning:
Body:
Ending:
Facts about the animal
(looks/living places/food/ability...)
dangerous situation
internal cause(内因)..
external cause(外因)
Lead to the animal.
Do you know the ... Let me tell you.
ways to protect
conclusion(总结)
learn/tell/protect...
Write a passage in 15 minutes
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While-Writing
While-writing
Elephant Whale Northeast Tiger
Facts: biggest in the world the symbol of Thailand long nose and ivory live in forest and grassland grass,live up to 70 years dance,draw,walk for a long time ,never get lost Dangerous situation kill them for ivory cut down trees land pollution Ways to protect make laws to stop people killing not buy things made of ivory stop cutting down trees Facts: Huge Live in the sea Some kinds have teeth Sing songs Eat small fish and other sea life Jump high out of the water Dangerous situation Whale parts sold to make things like candles and soap Human catch whales for meat, fat and oil Water pollution Ways to protect Rules on whale protection Learn more about whales Stop putting rubbish into the sea Facts:
largest cat
orange with black stripes
live in the forest and live alone
has strong bite
eat meat/ a lot of food
be good at swimming
give birth every 2 to 3 years
Dangerous situation
hunt them for fur
worse living environment
have no place to live
Ways to protect
make laws to stop people killing
not buy things made of fur
stop pollute the environment
What should a good writing have
Post-writing
a clear structure:beginning,body,ending.
correct content:Facts,Dangerous situation,Ways to protect
some conjunction words and transitional sentences
some good sentences
no spelling mistakes
a clear and tidy hand writing
no wrong sentences
enough words
Structure
and
content
Grammar and language
Spelling mistakes
Wrong sentences &Punctuation mistakes
Good sentences
Conjunction words
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Check the composition
Post-writing
Work in groups,correct the mistakes and appreciate(欣赏) your group members’ compositions. Then show it to the class.
Focus on: 1. structure(结构)
2. handwriting(书写)
3. points(要点)
4. grammar(语法)
5. punctuation(标点)
6. language(语言)
7. fluency(流畅度)
Post-writing：
