2024年高考英语真题（新高考I卷）读后续写 解读分析学案

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2024年高考新高考I卷续写解析
写作第二节（满分25分）阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it,” he said.Just then I realized that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry.”注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150个左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news._____________________________Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.______________________ 【解析】本题要求读完所给的故事的前半段，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之够成一篇完整的短文。为了形成合理的情节逻辑，考生在阅读原文时要搞清楚故事中的人物的性格特点和故事的情节发展，清楚要解决的问题，实际上就是要续写的内容。本题所给材料：主人公“我”在旅途中的一段经历，遇到了出租车司机Gunter，根据提示语暗示，在作者无法支付车费和时间紧急的情况下，他们约定四天后再见面时付款。第一段开头语：I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.根据逻辑关系判断，无法取现金，无法付账；公共汽车很快就要发车，“I”不能错过这辆车，所以，两人通过商量取得互信，“I”承诺四天后付款。第二段开头语：Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. 按照承诺“I”见面后付款，并感谢Gunter的善良。升华部分应该是人际交往中的互助和互信。
【应试点拨】 1. 分析原文过程中要明确人物的姓名、性别、人物的性格特点、相互关系，理清故事发展的关键情节，明白需要解决的问题和可能的解决方案，等等。比如本题中，Gunter的工作是出租车司机。为了送顾客到自己不熟悉的公共汽车车站打电话问朋友，到了车站后他的开心微笑，在无法得到车费后的相信顾客并达成协议，这些都是反映出他善良淳朴的性格特点。而“I”急着赶最后一班车，不能耽误参加会议，但无法付出租车账单，遇到Gunter的善良，非常感动。续写部分就要描写两人如何简短交流达成协议，并在四天后如何履行了协议。 2. 要注意续写中的“变化的过程”，比如人物的心理变化的过程、解决问题的方式方法的形成和生效的过程、人生观和价值观形成的过程，等等。这个过程就是层次安排的依据。一般我们安排层次要考虑逻辑关系和表达的需要，比如：一个互相的交流回合一个层次、一个方法的试用过程一个层次、一个情绪或心理活动的变化一个层次，等等。3. 注意三处衔接和一处升华。第一层和第一句提示语的衔接；第三层和第二句提示语的衔接；第四层和第二句提示语的衔接；第六层升华。衔接要合理并且紧密。升华要依据故事的亮点、对人物的影响、宣扬积极正面的人生哲理和传递正能量。简单说就是“三层因果不加戏，因果清晰正能量”。 4. 提纲和扩写提纲，注意词数的限制。考场上时间有限，精神紧张，如果没有明确的构思和写作方向，不容易得高分。扩写提纲过程中注意层次之间的连接，用好连接词。平时的练习要注重表达方式的积累，使用复合句和非谓语形式为文章添彩。每一层最好开展成两长一短的句子，容易形成较完整的情节，并且能保障住150词的要求。5. 词汇和句式的使用一定要服务于表达的需要，不能仅仅堆砌现成的已有语料。【原文译文】我在九月的一个寒冷、潮湿、难忘的夜晚遇见了甘特。我原计划乘飞机去维也纳，然后乘公共汽车去布拉格参加一个会议。由于一场大风暴，我乘坐的航班延误了一个半小时。我抵达维也纳时，最后一班开往布拉格的公共汽车仅剩30分钟就要出发了。我一下飞机，就像疯了一样穿过机场大楼，毫不犹豫地跳上了第一辆出租车。就是那时，我遇到了甘特。我告诉他我要去哪里，但他说他没听说过那个公共汽车站。我想是我的发音出了问题，所以我又更慢地解释了一遍，但他仍然看起来很困惑。正当我要放弃的时候，甘特摸索出他的小手机，给一个朋友打了个电话。激烈的讨论似乎持续了一个世纪，然后甘特放下手机，启动了汽车。最终，距发车只剩下两分钟的时候，我们开进了汽车站。谢天谢地，还有很长的队伍在等着上车。甘特把出租车停在公共汽车后面，转过头来，满脸笑容地看着我说：“我们到了。”就在那时，我意识到我的钱包里没有现钞。我快速微笑了一下作为歉意，同时掏出我的葡萄牙银行卡。他试了好几次，但那台读卡机就是没反应。当我看到排队上公共汽车的人越来越少时，一种无助的感觉涌上心头。这时，甘特指着汽车站的候车厅。在入口处，有一台取款机。我跳下他的车，疯狂地向那台机器跑去，把卡插进去，却看到上面写着:“故障。抱歉。” 【联想词汇】nervous explained offered relieved kindness boarded promised paid present inspired taxi fare wait for my return spreading kindness reflected on spared my trouble built our faith 【思路和提纲】 1. His reaction and my offer. 2. Our discuss and deal. 3. I promised and departure. 4. We met and I paid. 5. My thanks and praise. 6. Kindness warmed the world.【参考范文】I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. He was obviously nervous, which made me naturally guess that he was worried about the taxi fare, so I quickly explained my situation and offered to give him something equal to the value of the fare. But Gunter seriously refused and said he could wait for my conference ending and my next return to Vienna. Relieved and touched by his kindness, I quickly put down my phone number for him and asked for his. I boarded the bus as I promised to call and pay back the taxi fare.Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. He came to meet me and greeted me with his usual big smile. I paid him with a mountain of thanks and offered him a special present which he accepted delightedly. We talked for a moment, during which I sent the praise and regards from my colleagues when they heard of the story and he said that inspired him to continue spreading kindness. After our departure, I still reflected on the whole incident: how a stranger’s kindness spared my trouble and how it built our faith in each other.【范文译文】我跑回甘特那里，告诉他这个坏消息。他显然很紧张，这让我很自然地猜到他是在担心出租车的车费，所以我赶紧向他解释了我的情况，并提出给他留下一些与车费等值的东西。但甘特严肃地拒绝了，说他可以等我的会议结束，等我下次回维也纳。他的善意让我感到宽慰和感动，我赶紧写下我的电话号码，也问他要了他的电话号码。我上了车，答应给他打电话还车费。四天后，当我回到维也纳时，我如约打电话给甘特。他来见我，用他惯常的灿烂笑容迎接我。我一边付车费一边对他不停表示感谢。我送给他一份特别的礼物，他高兴地接受了。我们聊了一会儿，我向他转达了同事们听到这个故事后对他的的赞美和问候。他说这激励了他继续传播善良。在我们分手后，我仍然回想着整个事件:一个陌生人的善意是如何为我省去了麻烦，又是如何建立了我们对彼此的信任。