2016陕西西安市高考英语二轮：书面表达观摩（1）及参考范文
【2014高考英语吉林省实验中学一模试题】
书面表达（满分 25分）
作文：最近,你校同学正在参加某英文报组织 ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )的一场讨论.讨论的主题是:公园要不要收门票 请你根据下表所提供的信息,给报社写一封信,客观地介绍讨论情况.
60%的同学认为 40%的同学认为
1.不应收门票 1.应收门票，但票价不宜高
2.公园是公众休闲的地方 2.支付园林工人工资
3.如收票,需建大门,围墙,会影响城市形象 3.购新花木
注意: 1. 信的开头已为你写好.
2. 词数: 100 左右.
3. 参考词汇: 门票--- entrance fees
【参考范文】
Dear editor,
I'm writing to tell y ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )ou about the discussion we've had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks.
Opinions are divided ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )on the question. 60％ of the students are against the idea of entrance fees. They believe a public park should be free of charge. People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves. Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away. What is more, it will become necessary to build gates and walls, which will do harm to the appearance of a city.
On the other ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )hand, 40％ think that fees should be charged because you need money to pay gardeners and other workers, and to buy plants and young trees. They suggest, however, fees should be charged low.
Yours truly
Li Hua
【广东省惠州市三模】
读写任务（共1小题，满分25分y
阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文
1. The ministry of ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )Education is considering new measures to test the physical quality of students across the country each year, Beijing News reported. According to the measures, every student in a school is required to participate in the annual test and the results should be reported to the Ministry, which will select a specified number of students from each province each year to test their suppleness and endurance. The Ministry will select 4 pilot provinces this year and the measures are expected to expand across the whole country next year.
2. In Guangdong p ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )rovince it is reported that the students in Junior 3 are required to take 100-meter swimming test and the results will be part in the total grade in 2014. Also there is a growing voice in society that NCEE (National College Entrance Examination) should include PE tests.
【写作内容】
1. 以约30个词概括两篇报道的内容：
2. 然后以约120.个词,.就以上新闻话题发表你的看法，包括如下要点
(1) 体育成绩纳入总分的重要性；
(2) 简述你所在学校加强学生体育锻炼的做法；
(3) 你所喜欢的体育项目对如的影响。
【写作要求.】
1. 在作文中可以使用自已亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的 内容,但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2. 作文中,不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
【评分标准】.
概括准确，、语言规范，内容合适，.篇章连贯。
【参考范文】读写任务：
According t ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )o the two reports,new measures about physical assessment among students are being congsidered in Beijing and Guangdong.Besides,the society calls for more attention to students’ physical quality.
With more attent ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )ion being paid to students’ academic achievements,people gradually ignore the positive influence of physical exercise on students.It brings about an increasing number of students who are weak in body.As the saying goes ,healrh is pre-condition of all work.In order to strengthen students’ health and make them qualified to undertake the reponsibility to bulid up our country ,our government and schools should consider students’ taking PE tests when they graduate and the results should be part in the total grade.
In our ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com ) school,we have two PE classes each week,in which our PE teachers often teach us to do proper exericise to relax ourselves.Besides,there is a “big break”for us,which lasts thirty minutes every day after the third period in the afternoon.When the music for “big break”starts,we will hurry to the playground to do exercise and then do some running.The greatest sports event in our school is the annual sports meeeting .It pushes everyone’s enthusiasm about physical exercise to the fullest.
As far ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com ) as I’m concerned,I’m fond of jogging.On one hand,it’s not a rough sport and convenient to do every day,from which I relax myself a lot and refresh my mind.On the other hand,it strengthens my suppleness ,endurance and perseverance to deal with the difficulties in my study.
基础写作（共1小题，满分15分）
你是英语俱乐部的成员，参加俱乐部组织的英语学习经验交流，介绍自己最喜欢的英语读物。
【写作内容】
请你根据以下表内内容介绍《21世纪学生英文报》“高中版”。
名称 《21世纪学生英文报》“高中版”（21st Century Teens Senior Edition）
创办时间 2001年10月
读者对象 中国高中学生
报纸类型 周刊
宗旨 满足高中生学英语的要求，提高他们的英语应用能力
报纸特色 根据高中学生的阅读水平，提供国内外的时事新闻
包容 八大版块（section）,包括Fro ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )ntpage, Our World, Campus Trends等；涉及时事新闻、文化、社会生活、娱乐、体育等等
网址 http://www./
个人感受 这是一份优秀的英语报刊；受益匪浅
【写作要求】
只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。
【评分标准】
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。
【参考范文】基础写作（共1小题，满分15分）
Founded in Octob ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )er, 2001, 21st Century Teens Senior Edition is an English language weekly designed for senior high school students in China. To meet the needs of senior high school students to learn English and improve their ability in using the language, the Weekly provides up-to-date news at home and abroad, which is suitable for their reading level. It contains eight sections, such as Frontpage, Our World, Campus Trends, covering culture, social life, sports, entertainment, etc. Its website http://www./ is available now. 21st Century Teens Senior Edition is indeed an excellent English newspaper, from which I have benefited a lot.
亮点点击：本文是介绍一份报纸。第一 ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )和第二句是含非谓语动词(Founded, To meet)做状语的简单句。范文中用了不同的词(provide, contain, be available)表示“有”，使文章语言更丰富。最后一句用了非限制性定语从句表达读这份报纸的收获。
读写任务 (共1小题，满分25分)
阅读下面的短文，然后按要求写一篇150字左右的英语短文。
Mayor Bloomberg has ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )been the mayor of New York City for nearly nine years, but for ten years he has been wearing the same shoes. This is really rare to be seen on a billionaire.
“The mayor owns tw ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )o pairs of work shoes,” said the spokesman. “One day he’ll wear one, the next the other. When they got worn down, he has them repaired. He could buy any shoes he wanted, but he says since they are comfortable, and they work, there’s no need for a new pair.” According to the spokesman, the mayor saves in his footwear and he also keeps it up in his personal as well as governmental finance. “When he buys a cup of coffee, he chooses the smallest size. He buys only what he needs.”
Such is the mayor o ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )f New York City, who cares little about his shoes, avoids wasting money and focuses his attention on his work and his people in the city.
But what about ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )our fellow students nowadays Some wear super expensive clothes and shoes; besides, they buy as many as possible, far more than two pairs. They always want the latest, the newest and throw the old ones away though they haven’t worn them for many times.
【写作内容】
1. 以约30个词概括以上短文的内容。
2. 以约120个词就“勤俭节约”这一主题发表你的感想和看法，内容包括：
（1）给出你对这位市长的评价；
（2）举一个你尊敬的人勤俭节约的例子，说明他对你的影响；
（3）列举你生活中浪费的坏习惯并说说你勤俭节约的决心。
【写作要求】
1. 作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范内容合适，语篇连贯。
参考词汇：节俭的 provident/thrifty
【参考范文】读写任务(共1小题，满分25分)参考范文
The author introduc ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )es to us the mayor of New York City, a man who is rich but provident. The author also points out nowadays some students have the habit of wasting things.
When reading the pass ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )age, I am deeply moved by the mayor. Rich as he is, he has the virtue of saving. He spends money only on what he needs and never wastes money on what is of no use. I think this is really admirable.
The mayor remi ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )nds me of the great political leader of China, Chairman Mao. As the chairman of China, Mao led a very thrifty life. He used to wear old clothes at home. When his clothes were worn out, he would have them repaired and continued to wear them. He always told others that saving was a good virtue of Chinese people.
Thinking about the ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )two great leaders, I feel deeply ashamed. As a young student who still has to depend on my parents, I have been leading too comfortable a life. I buy whatever I like though I don’t really need them. Besides, I like new things; when things get “old”, I tend to begin to dislike them and stop using them. Now that I realize that this is wrong, I’m determined that I shall follow the examples of the two great leaders and start to get rid of the bad habits.2016陕西西安市高考英语二轮：书面表达观摩（4）及参考范文
【2014高考英语广东省梅州市质检试卷】
基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分)
以下是网上走红的 “低碳哥”的基本情况.
【写作内容】
根据以上“低碳哥”的基本情况写一篇介绍,内容包括:
“低碳哥”的简要介绍及走红的时间;
他的主要做法及人们的看法
3、你的看法
【写作要求】
只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。
【评分标准】
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。
参考词汇: 低碳哥Low-carbon Brother 二氧化碳 carbon dioxide
【参考范文】Possible version:
A young man called L ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )ow-carbon Brother became a hit one on the Internet in 2011, who suggests living a low carbon life, which means using less energy in our daily life so that we can help reduce carbon dioxide in the air. For example, he always picks up some waste paper on the street and uses the blank side to write something and while he is watching TV, he always turns down the brightness to the minimum and turns off the light. Besides, he goes to work by bike instead of driving. Some people think that what he is doing is just a show and impractical. But as far as I am concerned, I strongly support his idea and his behavior because although what he is doing has no huge effect on global warming, he at least can enjoy a healthy life.
基础写作评分说明
基础写作主要考查考生的语言结构的应用能力：能够应用正确、规范的语言表达特定的内容。
本试题要求考生根据所提供的信息，使用5个句子表达[写作内容]所提供的全部内容。
在评分时，应注意以下几个方面：
1．按照评分标准，实行分析法评分：按语言、内容和连贯三项标准分别给分；
2．在语言方面，重点评判句子的语法结构是否正确、用词是否规范；考生是否使用了合适的句型结构；
3．在内容方面，重点评判考生是否表达所提供的全部信息；如果考生在表达完整的内容时，适当添加一些内容，不扣分；
4．在连贯方面，重点评判5个句子是否构成一篇连贯的短文。
三、基础写作评分标准:
语 言 7-8 具有很好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性高，词汇方面使用较好，只有少许错误。
5-6 具有较好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性较好，有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。
3-4 语言运用能力一般；语法和句子结构基本准确，语法结构或词汇方面的错误不影响理解。
1-2 语言运用能力较差；语法和句子结构基本不够准确，语法结构或词汇方面的错误较多，而且影响了对句子意义的理解。
0 语言运用能力很差；语法、句子结构、词汇错误很多，句子意义无法理解。
备注 每多或少写一个句子，扣1分。
内 容 5 包括了所有信息内容。
4 包括了大部分信息内容。
3 包括了基本信息内容。
2 包括了小部分信息内容。
1 包括了少许信息内容。
0 没有包括所提供的信息内容。
连 贯 2 内容连贯，而且结构紧凑。
1.5 内容连贯性比较好，而且结构比较紧凑。
1 内容连贯性较差，而且结构不够紧凑。
0 内容缺乏连贯性，而且结构松散。
备注 文不对题，给0分。
【广东省茂名市一模】基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分)
[写作内容]
今年十一黄金周期间，我国首次对高速公路行驶的小汽车实行免费政策。对此，群众议论纷纷，褒贬不一。以下是相关信息，请你写一篇英文介绍。
利 刺激消费，有利于第三产业发展, 例如旅游行业；亲友驾车相聚拉近人与人的距离。
弊 大家都挤向高速公路，车流量猛增，从而增加拥堵；事故发生率比以往提高
你的看法
*刺激 stimulate
[写作要求]
只能用5个句子表达全部内容。
[评分标准]
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章连贯。
【参考范文】基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分)
During this Nati ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )onal Day holidays, free passage was given to cars on the highway for the first time ever, which caused a heated discussion nationwide. On the bright side, some believe that it is good to stimulate consumption and boost the third industry, such as tourism. To some extent, this policy also brings people closer, for those who were reluctant to visit their friends are totally seduced and willing to reunite by car. However, with cars flocking to the highways, others are concerned that the traffic flow will increase tremendously, resulting in worse traffic jam and higher accident rate than ever before. Personally, free passage is what the public have been longing for, but more following measures should be taken, for example, some contingency plans should be made to deal with the potential problems and more clear road signs are needed to give drivers precise guidance.
【2013界广东省茂名市一模】读写任务 （共1小题，满分25分）
阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
Nowadays, the te ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )rm " sense of happiness" has been repeatedly mentioned in various medias. During the National Day holidays, CCTV did a nation-wide survey by asking random passers-by the question " Are you happy now What exactly is happiness in your eyes " The survey aroused a heated discussion across the country and people from all walks of life expressed their opinions.
" I would say I'm ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )pretty happy at present because my dear daughter has graduated from college and found herself a decent job. " said a woman in her fifties with a big smile on her face.
Though it s ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )eemed that most people said they were happy, different voices were still heard and should not be ignored. There was a migrant worker(农民工) whose answer to the question was widely spread online. When asked if he was happy, he said " My family name is Zeng", showing his determination to refuse the interview as well as his annoyance to mention happiness.
The brand ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )-new Chinese Nobel Prize winner Mo Yan answered " I don't know " in an interview when he was asked the same question: Are you happy
[写作内容]
1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。
2.以约120个词就“幸福”的话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：
（1）目前你是否感到幸福及其原因；
（2）请描述到现在为止让你觉得最幸福的一件事情；
（3）谈谈你对幸福的理解。
[写作要求]
1作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事．也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
[评分标准]
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。
【参考范文】读写任务 （共1小题，满分25分）
When asked by the ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )CCTV whether they were happy, most people gave a positive answer while some didn't. The Nobel Prize winner Mo Yan said he didn't know whether he was happy or not.
At present, I am ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )pretty happy because I am doing what I like and I like what I am doing. As a senior three student, I study hard every day and live it to the fullest. It feels good to study hard with my determined classmates to fulfill our dreams.
When I recall the ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com ) happy things which happened to me, the experience of my receiving the scholarship in middle school topped them all. It was a time when my family was going through the extreme financial difficulties. So I made up my mind to win the scholarship, hoping to lighten my parents' financial burden. After making tons of painstaking efforts, I succeeded. At the ceremony, I could see my mom was the most poorly-dressed woman, yet with the brightest smile on her face. It was the happiest thing ever happening to me that I will treasure for the rest of my life.
As far as I a ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )m concerned, happiness lies in the effort of making those we love smile. When we bring happiness to them, it gives happiness to ourselves.
【广东省汕头市质量测评试题】
基础写作（满分is分）
和睦的家庭有利于孩子的个性 ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )发展和家人的身心健康。请你根据表格中的信息，以How we can build up a harmonious family 为题用英语写一篇短文。
[写作内容]
题目 How We can Build up a Harmonious Family
主要特征 充满温暖、爱心和欢笑；相互关爱、尊重和理解
主要益处 生长在和睦家庭环境中的孩子会乐观向上 生活在和睦家庭中的父母会健康快乐
父母该怎么做 言行举止上做好表率；经常与孩子沟通交流
我们该怎么做 体谅父母的艰辛，减轻负担，主动做家务等
[写作要求](1 )只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。题目，文章开头与结尾已给出。
(2 )句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。.
表率：role model
【参考范文】基础写作
How we can build up a harmonious family
A harmonious fami ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )ly is essential to our personal development and our physical and mental health. A harmonious family is always full of warmth, love and laughter in which parents and children not only show concern for each other bu also respect and understand each other. If a child grows up in a harmonious family , he is more likely to be cheerful and optimistic. Meanwhile, parents in a harmonious family are sure in live happily and more healthily. To create such a harmonious family parents should be rule models for their children in words and behavior and often communicate with them. As children of the family, we should show understanding for our parents’ hardship, and try in share their burdens by doing housework voluntarily and so on. If you do so, our home will always be harmonious.
【广东省汕头市质量测评试题】
读写任务（共1小题，满分25分）
阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
Two years ago, ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com ) when I was an oversea student, I worked early mornings and late nights to pay for my school fees.
One day, I was seri ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )ously ill with a very high fever. I had stayed at home for a few days, and I had run out of food. Because I had been in this town just for a short time, I also had no friends nearby who could help. So I went out to get some food. I would have gone to the supermarket, but on this occasion, I went into a small store because it was closer.
I picked up a few ite ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )ms. When I handed them to the shopkeeper, she said, “You are unwell.” “Yes，” I nodded.
She pointed ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )at the salami and bread I was buying and offered, “I can make you a sandwich, so you don’t have to do it yourself’. So, she made the sandwich and asked me to wait a moment. She went in the back room and returned with a bowl of hot soup.
“It will warm you up,” she said with a genuine smile.
What really warmed me ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )up was not the soup, but her kindness. It made me want to be as kind as the shopkeeper who had been kind to me.
[写作内容]
1. 请你以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。
2. 请你以约120个词以“善举的影响”为话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：
(I )上文使你回忆起曾经有谁的爱心举动使你感到温暖；
(2) 在感到温暖之余，你是否受到这个举动的影响，会把这份爱心传递下去？为什么？
(3) 进入大学校园后，你将如何继续传递爱心？
[写作要求]
你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄 袭阅读材料中的句子。
【参考范文】读写任务
When the aut ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )hor, an oversea student, was badly ill, a shopkeeper made him a sandwich and offered hot soup. Feeling warm with her kindness, the author decided to be as kind as her.
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It sounds lik ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )e nothing big, but her act did make me feel warm. With such a teacher, there is no doubt that I will act as her in future. As long as I do so, others can also feel the kindness of Miss Chen.
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时 间: 2011年。
人物介绍: “低碳哥”, 用行动宣讲环保概念的年轻人,主张少用能源,减少二氧化碳的排放。
主要做法: 1. 捡起废纸,用空白一面写字；
2. 不开灯看电视,还把电视亮度调到最低(minimum)；
3. 上班骑自行车,不开车等。
人们的看法: 做秀,不现实。
你的看法: 我完全支持他的想法和行为，尽管他的行为未能对全球气候变暖造成很大的影响，但他至少可以享受健康的生活。2016陕西西安市高考英语二轮：书面表达观摩（3）及参考范文
【2014高考英语湖北省汉阳市联考试题】
短文写作（共1题；满分30分）
请根据以下提示并结合一个事例，就“潜能无限”这一话题，用英语写一篇短文。
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注意：
不得照抄英语提示语；除诗歌外，文体不限；
文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；词数120以上。
【参考范文】
Potential is limitless
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【广东省揭阳市一模】
读写任务 (共1小题，满分25分)
阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
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[写作内容]
1. 以约30词概括短文内容要点;
2. 以约120词就 “个人成长需要艰难生活的磨砺”这一话题发表你的看法，并包含以下要
点：
(1) 你读了这个故事后的感受；
(2) 叙述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果；
(3) 假如你是父母一方，你会如何磨砺自己的孩子？
[写作要求]
1.可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引
用原文中句子;
2. 文中不能出现考生真实姓名和学校名称。
[评分标准]
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。
【参考范文】读写任务(共1小题，满分25分)参考范文
One possible version:
A kind man c ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )ut a cocoon open in order to lessen the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the cocoon, only to find that it could never fly because of his help. (37 words)
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读写任务评分说明：
本试题要求考生阅读一篇英语短文之后就“个人 ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )成长需要艰难生活的磨砺”这一主题进行议论，内容包括：(1) 你读了这个故事后的感受；(2) 叙述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果；(3) 假如你是父母一方，你会如何磨砺自己的孩子？
在评分时，应注意以下几个方面：
1．按照评分标准，实行分析综合法评分。
2．概括应包含以下要点：
（1）A kind old man saw a butterfly struggling out of the cocoon.
（2）The old man cut the cocoon open in order to lessen its pain.
（3）The old man found t ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )hat the butterfly could never fly because of his help.
3. 写作的内容应该包括：
（1）正确表达 “感受”, 如 “发人深省”。
（2）能描述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果, 如 “过度依赖父母, 缺乏独立能力”。
（3）就 “假如你是父母一方，你会如何磨砺自己的孩子？” 发表自己的看法。
4. 其它要求见评分标准。
【写作评分标准】读写任务
[评分说明] 读写任务的评分建议采用综合法，即：根据总体影响给分。概要和文章的分值分别为5分和20分。
项目 赋分 评 分 标 准
概括 5 按照要求概括了原文的主要信息，没有增加与原文无关的信息，语言结构正确，行文规范。
4 基本按照要求概括了原文的主要信息，没有增加与原文无关的信息。语言结构正确，行文规范。
3 基本按照要求概括了原文的主要信息，但包含一些不相关的信息。语言结构基本正确，行文比较规范。
2 不能按照要求概括了原文的主要信息，包含较多不相关的信息。语言结构不够准确，行文不够规范。
0-1 没有按照要求概括原文的主要信息，基本是不相关的信息。语言结构不准确，行文不规范。
写作 18-20 包含题目所给全部或绝大部分的内容要点。主题明确，内容丰富。词汇丰富，用词得当。能有效运用合适的语言结构，而且没有（或极少）语法错误。篇章结构的连贯性好。
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7-10 包含题目所给的部分内容要点。主题基本明确，有些内容不准确或者不相关。词汇有限，有较多的用词错误。语言结构出现较多的语法错误。篇章结构的连贯性一般。
4-6 只包含题目所给的个别内容要点。多数内容不相关或者不准确。文章有些地方照抄原文。词汇贫乏，有较多的用词错误。大多数的句子出现语法错误。篇章结构的连贯性差。
1-3 只包含与题目所给要点内容有关的一些单词。主题不明确，文章基本照抄原文。词汇极其贫乏，基本不能正确用词。几乎没有正确的句子。篇章结构零乱。
0 以下几种情况，给0分：1）完全抄袭原文（或其它文章）2）文不对题 3）只写一些零散的单词，完全没有表达完整的内容
【2013界广东省茂名市二模】
基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分)
假设你的同学因自己的肥胖而苦恼，请根据以下建议写一篇英语短文。
[写作内容]
Don’ts Dos
不要吃过多油腻的食物；睡觉前不要吃零食。否则可能增加体重或消化不良(indigestion)。 要保持均衡饮食；每天需要至少一个小时的运动，比如可以选择步行上学，这样既有利于减肥，又可以保护环境。
做到持之以恒，只有这样才会在不久的将来拥有苗条的身材。
[写作要求]
1. 只能使用5个句子表达全部内容；
2. 首句已经给出，不计入总句数。
[评分标准]
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章连贯。
Dear classmate,
I’ve learned ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )that you are trying to lose weight and I am glad to give you some suggestions. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分)
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【广东省茂名市二模】
读写任务 （共1小题，满分25分）
阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
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[写作内容]
1以约30词概括上文的主要内容。
2以约120词就“持之以恒”这个话题发表你的看法， 内容包括：
(1) 你读后的感受；
(2) 用你自己或他人的经历说明持之以恒的重要性；
(3) 呼吁大家坚持就是胜利。
[写作要求]
1作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事．也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
[评分标准]
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。
【参考范文】读写任务 （共1小题，满分25分）
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【2014高考英语吉林省长春市调研试题】书面表达（满分25分）
假定你是李华，因陪母亲看病，不能参加明天下午关于美国文化的讲座。请写一封 短信向老师Miss Clinton请假。
内容主要包括：
1. 不能听讲座，跟老师表示歉意；
2. 向老师陈述缺席理由；
3. 询问老师是否有讲座录音或影像，以便日后补听讲座。
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可以适当増加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 开头语已为你写好。
Dear Miss Clinton,
I am very sorry that ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
【语篇解读】 书面表达体裁为请假条，题材贴近考生生活。
【命题立意】 本试卷书面表达的目的在于考查考生应用已有的语言知识完成一篇应用文（请假条）写作的综合能力。
【参考范文】
Dear Miss Clinton,
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My mother is ill ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com ), and I will take her to hospital tomorrow since my father is on a business trip. I will take care of my mother until she is better, so I have to ask for several days’ leave. I am very interested in the topic of American culture. It is really a pity that I miss it. I wonder if there will be any recording of the lecture. If so, I can listen to it when it is convenient.
Thank you very much.
Yours,
Li Hua
【评分标准】
1. 本题总分为25分, 按5个档次给分。
2. 评分时, 先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次, 然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次, 最后给分。
3. 词数少于80和多于120的, 从总分中减去2分。
4. 评分时, 应注意的主要内容是: 内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性、上下文的连贯性。
5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予
以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
6. 如书写较差，以致影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。
【内容要点】
1. 正确使用表示歉意的语句。
2. 陈述理由：母亲生病，陪她去医院看病。
3. 询问是否有录音，以便过后补听讲座。
4. 语气符合学生向老师请假的情况。
【各档次的给分范围和要求】
第五档21分—25分 完全完成了试题规定的任务。--覆盖了所有内容要点；--应用了较多的语法结构和词汇；--语法或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高词汇 所致；具备较强的语言运用能力；--有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑；完全达到了预期的写作目的。
第四档16分—20分 完全完成了试题规定的任务。--覆盖了所有内容要点；--应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求；--语法结构和词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或较高词汇所致； --应用了简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑；达到了预期的写作目的。
第三档11分—15分 基本完成了试题规定的任务。--虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容；--应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求；--有一些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解；--应用了简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯；整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。
第二档6分—10分 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。--漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容；--语法结构单调，词汇项目有限；--有一些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解；--较少使用语句间连接成分，内容缺少连贯性；信息未能清楚地传达给读者。
第一档1分—5分 未完成试题规定的任务。--明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求；--语法结构单调，词汇项目有限；--较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解；--缺乏语句间连接成分，内容不连贯；信息未能传达给读者。
0分 未能传达给读者任何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。
【广东省揭阳市一模】
基础写作（共1小题，满分15分）
你是校报记者，最近进行了一次采访。以下是这次采访的情况：
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词汇：高考the College Entrance Examination
[写作内容]
根据以上情况写一篇采访报道，并包括如下内容：
1．采访的时间、对象和主题；
2．李教授解读内容。
[写作要求]
只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。
[评分标准]
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。
【参考范文】基础写作（共1小题，满分15分）
One possible version:
On Saturday, Ma ( http: / / www.21cnjy.com )rch 9th, I had an interview with Professor Li, a psychologist, about how Senior 3 students can release overwhelming stress. According to Professor Li, the main reason why Senior 3 students are suffering overwhelming stress is that most of them attach so much importance to the College Entrance Examination that they even look on it as their final goal. He suggests that Senior 3 students should take a positive attitude towards the exam. They had better do some exercise, which can be a helpful way to release their stress. What’s more, they’re supposed to keep a balanced diet and make sure that they have enough sleep.
基础写作评分说明：
基础写作主要考查学生的语言结构的应用能力，能够应用正确、规范的语言表达特定的内容。
本试题要求学生根据所提供的信息，使用五个句子表达[写作内容]中所提供的全部内容。命题思想是要求考生在表达这些内容时能够：
·正确使用采访报道的写作手法。
·正确使用同位语、分词短语、从句等来整合信息。
·正确使用时态、时间表达方式等。
在评分时，应注意以下几个方面：
1．按照评分标准，实行分析法评分：按语言、内容和连贯三项标准分别给分；
在语言方面，重点评判句子的语法结构是否正确、用词是否规范；学生是否使用了合适的句型结构。
2．在内容方面，重点评判学生是否表达全部规定的内容；如果学生在表达完整的内容时，适当添加一些内容，不扣分；
3．在连贯方面，重点评判五个句子是否构成一篇连贯的短文，逻辑是否合理。（具体内容见评分标准）
【写作评分标准】基础写作
[评分说明] 基础写作的评分建议采用分析法，即按照语言、内容和连贯三项指标分别给分，最后累计作为该题的总得分。
项目 赋分 评分标准
语言 7-8 具有很好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性高，词汇方面使用较好，只有少许错误。
5-6 具有较好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性较好，有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。
3-4 语言运用能力一般；语法和句子结构基本准确，语法结构或词汇方面的错误不影响理解。
1-2 语言运用能力较差；语法和句子结构基本不够准确，语法结构或词汇方面的错误较多，而且影响了对句子意义的理解。
0 语言运用能力很差；语法、句子结构、词汇错误很多，句子意义无法理解。
备注 每多或少写一个句子，扣1分。
内 容 5 包括了所有信息内容。
4 包括了大部分信息内容。
3 包括了基本信息内容。
2 包括了小部分信息内容。
1 包括了少许信息内容。
0 没有包括所提供的信息内容。
连 贯 2 内容连贯，而且结构紧凑。
1.5 内容连贯性比较好，而且结构比较紧凑。
1 内容连贯性较差，而且结构不够紧凑。
0 内容缺乏连贯性，而且结构松散。
备注 文不对题，给0分。
时间：三月九日，星期六
对象：心理学家 (psychologist) 李教授
主题：高三学生如何释放过大压力（overwhelming stress）
李教授解读：
1．原因： 主要是因为学生把高考看得过于重要，把它看成最终目标。
2. 建议：
（1）最重要的是积极心态；
（2）适当运动能够帮助有效释放压力；
（3）注意饮食平衡;
(4) 保证充足睡眠。
