Worksheet
Task 1
Please polish your partner’s writing by using sensory details (sight, hearing, taste, touch and smell), dialogues or other details. Check the writing checklist after you finish writing.
Writing Checklist
1. Do I present a personal experience of exploring science 2. Do I use sensory details or dialogues to enable the readers to experience the event 3. Do I arrange the details appropriately 4. Do I use a variety of vocabulary 5. Do I use varied sentence structures 6. Do I make grammatical errors 7. Does my voice reflect my feelings and opinions clearly _____ _____ _____ _____ _____ _____ _____
Task 2
Comment on the descriptive writing polished by other students using the writing checklist and give suggestions about further improvement.
Writing Checklist
1. Do I present a personal experience of exploring science 2. Do I use sensory details or dialogues to enable the readers to experience the event 3. Do I arrange the details appropriately 4. Do I use a variety of vocabulary 5. Do I use varied sentence structures 6. Do I make grammatical errors 7. Does my voice reflect my feelings and opinions clearly _____ _____ _____ _____ _____ _____ _____
Suggestions:
Assignment
The science society in your school is celebrating its 4th anniversary next month. You are asked to write one of your most impressive personal experiences of exploring science in about 100 words. It could be a scientific lecture you attended, an experiment you did in school or at home, a visit to a science and technology museum, a science game you played with friends, etc. You may find the following writing checklist helpful.
Writing Checklist
1. Do I present a personal experience of exploring science 2. Do I use sensory details or dialogues to enable the readers to experience the event 3. Do I arrange the details appropriately 4. Do I use a variety of vocabulary 5. Do I use varied sentence structures 6. Do I make grammatical errors 7. Does my voice reflect my feelings and opinions clearly _____ _____ _____ _____ _____ _____ _____
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单元封面
《 高 中 英 语 》 ( 上 外 版 )
选择性必修第二册第一单
元
Scientists
授课教师 ：
课时
授课内容
1
Getting Started/ Reading A
1
Reading A/ Vocabulary Focus
1
Reading A/ Grammar in Use
1
Listening, Viewing and Speaking
1
Reading B and Culture Link
1
Critical Thinking
1
Writing
1
Further Exploration/ Self-assessment
单元封面
《 高 中 英 语 》 ( 上 外 版 )
选择性必修第二册第一单元
学习目标 Learning Objectives：
At the end of the lesson, you will be able to ...
1. 能通过比较学生作业与范例语篇，理解描述性写作的目的与 特点，以及感官细节和对话在描述性写作中表情达意的作用；
understand the purpose and features of descriptive writing and the
effects of sensory details and dialogues in descriptive writing by
comparing one peer ’s essay with the sample writing in the textbook.
2. 能运用感官细节和对话，润色同伴作业；
apply sensory details and dialogues to descriptive writing by polishing their peers ’ essays;
3. 能通过细节，在描述科学探索的个人经历的描述性写 作中表达情感、态度与品质。
demonstrate their feelings, attitudes and qualities through details in descriptive essays about the experience of
exploring science.
Assignment
My visit to the Shanghai Science Museum left a deep impression on me and aroused my interest in science.
The items on display were fascinating. I learned much about the
history of science. Besides, there are lots of collections for visitors to enjoy.
I spent my whole day in the museum and had a good time.
Review homework
details
topic
how
The success of descriptive writing lies in the details.
How
There are two major ways to make detailed descriptions — using dialogues
and using five senses (sight, hearing, taste, touch and smell).
The main purpose of descriptive writing is to describe a person, place or
thing in such a way that a picture is formed in the reader’s mind.
Descriptive Writing
We arrived at the science fair in the morning. The place was Sensory
overcrowded with students from different schools. I saw handmade details
models of motor cars, trains, ships, aircraft, X-ray machines, etc. What
interested me most was a model of a human body powered by electricity.
The workings of the heart, lungs and other organs of the body were displayed vividly before my eyes.
Analyze a Descriptive Essay Topic
Our class visited a science fair last week. I was so excited that I
couldn’t sleep the night before! This experience still remains fresh in my
mind.
v.s.
We arrived at the science fair. The place was crowded. I saw models What interested me was a model of a human body. The workings of the body were displayed before my eyes.
...
“That’s so cool!” I said excitedly.
The inventor glowed with pride. “ I‘ m always fascinated by how our body works. Our biology and physics classes have really helped a lot!”
“That’s amazing! I hope I can come here with my model train next year.”
We left the fair with a feeling of joy and wonder. I will definitely visit a science fair again!
Analyze a Descriptive Essay Topic
Our class visited a science fair last week. I was so excited that I couldn’t sleep the night before! This experience still remains fresh in my mind.
v.s.
“That’s so cool.” I said.
The inventor glowed. “ I‘ m always fascinated by how our body works. Our biology and physics classes have really helped a lot.”
“That’s amazing. I hope I can come here with my model train next year.”
Dialogues
2. Tall, slender, elegant, she was the picture of an African princess.
(sight)
3. She smelled of wet cigarettes and bacon. (smell)
4. The mother hugged the boy, breathing her hot breath onto his neck.
(touch)
5. Mr Jenkins was awakened by a sharp noise of a bat hitting a ball.
(hearing)
6. He could feel the taste of blood in his throat. (taste)
Let's see some examples:
1. “Justin,” Mum shouted, “get in the room now!” “Just a moment. I’ ll be right there,” said Justin.
Analyze sample sentences
Topic
(dialogues)
Polished Assignment
My visit to the Shanghai Science Museum left a deep impression on me and aroused my interest in science.
The items on display were fascinating. There were several high quality exhibitions in the museum. The one that attracted my attention was about the history of science. Many prestigious scientists and their
unparalleled scientific achievements were illustrated both in words and pictures. Although the exhibition
were crowded with hundreds of people, I made my way to appreciate the exhibits and read the captions for more information. Through close reading, I learned much about the history of science and decided to search for more materials later.
Besides, there are lots of collections for visitors to enjoy. The exhibition about the magnificent universe,
for instance, put a series of HD pictures taken by spacecraft on display. With the audio illustration, I found
those pictures easy to understand and grew more curiosity about the universe. The scientific knowledge that once seemed so complicated was no longer hard to understand.
I spent my whole day in the museum and I would like to visit the museum for a second time in my summer vacation.
Analyzing the polished version of the homework
details
topic
how
Discuss with your partner :
What did the place/the items look
like
What sounds did he/she hear What did it feel like
What did it taste like What did it smell like
What conversation did he/she have How did he/she feel
Polish your partner's homework
How to use sensory
details and dialogues to
polish this essay
Writing Checklist 1. Do I present a personal experience of exploring science
_______
2. Do I use sensory details or dialogues to enable the reader to experience the event
_______
3. Do I arrange the details appropriately
_______
4. Do I use a variety of vocabulary
_______
5. Do I use varied sentence structures
_______
6. Do I make grammatical errors
_______
7. Does my voice reflect my feelings about the event
_______
Writing Requirements
sensory details and dialogues; details; vocabulary; sentence structures; voice...
Time to Polish it!
Writing Checklist 1. Do I present a personal experience of exploring science
_______
2. Do I use sensory details or dialogues to enable the reader to experience the event
_______
3. Do I arrange the details appropriately
_______
4. Do I use a variety of vocabulary
_______
5. Do I use varied sentence structures
_______
6. Do I make grammatical errors
_______
7. Does my voice reflect my feelings about the event
_______
Comment on the descriptive writing polished by other students using the
writing checklist and give suggestions for further improvement.
Evaluation
1. The science society in your school is celebrating its 4th
anniversary next month. You are asked to write about a personal
experience of exploring science in about 100 words.
It could be a scientific lecture you attended, an experiment you did in school or at home, a visit to a science and technology
museum, a science game you played with friends, etc.
Assignments
Writing Checklist 1. Do I present a personal experience of exploring science
_______
2. Do I use sensory details or dialogues to enable the reader to experience the event
_______
3. Do I arrange the details appropriately
_______
4. Do I use a variety of vocabulary
_______
5. Do I use varied sentence structures
_______
6. Do I make grammatical errors
_______
7. Does my voice reflect my feelings about the event
_______
Use the following checklist for your descriptive essay.
Assignments
Present the booklet you have created. Your presentation should last no more than 10 minutes and should respond to the following questions:
1). What is the title of the booklet Why did you decide on this title
2). Who are the scientists of your choice Why did you make such choices
3). Among all the facts, which is the most impressive one that reflects the scientist’s qualities and why
4). Among all the quotes, which is the most impressive one and why
5). What do you think of each scientist Use one word for each scientist to make comments.
6). What is your reflection on your learning of this unit and your experience of designing the booklet
2. Prepare for the presentation of the final project.
Assignments
T h a n k y o u ！《高中英语（上外版）》选择性必修第二册 Unit 1 Scientist
课时：第 7 课时
教学内容：Descriptive Writing
课型： 写作课
一、教学设计与说明
1. 教学目标
本课为本单元的第七课时，学生通过该课时的学习，能通过比较学生作业与范例语篇， 理解描述性写作的目的与特点，以及感官细节和对话在描述性写作中表情达意的作用；能 运用感官细节和对话，润色同伴作业；能通过细节，在描述科学探索的个人经历的描述性 写作中表达情感、态度与品质。
2. 设计思路
本课为写作课，着重探讨描述性写作中感官细节和对话表情达意、展现品质的作用。
本课首先对学生第六课时的作文作业进行点评。第六课时的作文作业为：写一个 60 字左 右的语段，描述个人科学探索过程中克服困难的一个经历。在点评作业过程中，让学生感 受作者如何在文章中表达自身的情感态度和科学品质，引出描述性写作的目的与特点，即 运用细节表情达意，增加描述的生动性。其次，通过引导学生回顾 Reading A 的细节描写， 比较相同话题下富含细节和缺乏细节的范例文本，辨识和分类感官细节，帮助学生理解感 官细节和对话表情达意、突显科学家品质的作用。然后，组织学生结对，互相阅读同伴习 作，通过提问增进对同伴作文的理解，并运用感官细节和对话修改同伴习作，同时介绍并 引导学生使用作文修改评价表来评价修改后的作文。接下来，邀请学生分享修改后的作文， 要求其余学生根据作文修改评价表进行评价，并给出修改意见。
作业要求：写一篇 100 字左右的短文，描述一个令自己印象最深刻的科学探索的个人 经历。另外，完成单元大作业，并根据展示要求为大作业的展示做准备。
3. 重点难点
在写作中运用感官细节和对话展现作者的情感态度和科学品质
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Lesson Plan
Learning Objectives
By the end of this period, students will be able to:
1. understand the purpose and features of descriptive writing and the effects of sensory details and dialogues in descriptive writing by comparing one peer’s essay with the sample writing in the textbook;
2. apply sensory details and dialogues to descriptive writing by polishing their peers ’ essays;
3. demonstrate their feelings, attitudes and qualities through details in descriptive essays about the experience of exploring science.
Learning Procedures:
I. Interactive activity 1: Reviewing homework
*T: Ask Ss to read and comment on one peer’s essay from the homework for the last period. Remind Ss of what qualities the scientists aforementioned possess. Motivate Ss to explore
the student author’s attitudes to science in his / her essay and his / her ways to demonstrate those attitudes.
*Ss: Make comments on one peer’s essay from the homework for the last period. Recall the previous learning outcomes, and share their perceptions of the author’s attitudes to science in essay. Reflect on how to polish the peer’s essay.
Purpose: To help Ss review the importance of details in writing and reflect on one peer’s essay from the homework for the last period.
Guided questions:
What does the sample essay tell you about the author’s attitudes towards science
II. Interactive activity 2: Grasping the effects of sensory details and dialogues
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*T: Introduce the purpose and feature of descriptive writing by relating descriptive details in Reading A. Guide Ss to understand the effects of sensory details and dialogues by comparing the sample passage with the less vivid one. Help Ss categorize sensory details by relating keywords with their types. *Ss: Grasp the purpose and feature of descriptive writing by recalling descriptive details in Reading A. Understand the effects of sensory details and dialogues by comparing the sample passage with the less vivid one. Categorize sensory details by relating keywords with their types. Purpose: To introduce Ss descriptive writing and its major features, and to enable Ss to understand the effects of sensory details and dialogues in descriptive writing.
Guided questions:
1. How does the sample essay convey the attitudes and feelings of the author
2. What are the effects of sensory details and dialogues
3. How can we demonstrate one’s attitudes and quality in a descriptive writing
III. Interactive activity 3: Analyzing the polished version of the homework aforementioned
*T: Have Ss read a polished version of the peer’s essay. Ask students to use the table in Step 2 on Page 16 in the textbook to analyze the details employed in the new version and evaluate their effects. *Ss: Analyze the details in the polished version based on the table in Step 2 on Page 16 in the textbook. Evaluate the effects of the details and share with their peers their opinions. Purpose: To help Ss evaluate the use of sensory details in a descriptive essay.
Guided question:
1. How does the polished essay convey the attitudes and feelings of the author compared with the original version
2. How can we demonstrate one’s attitudes and quality in a descriptive writing
IV. Interactive activity 4: Discussing how to polish students’ own pieces of homework
*T: Ask Ss to discuss in pairs how to use sensory details and dialogues to polish the homework of the partner, and help Ss make conclusions after their discussion. *Ss: Brainstorm and discuss the possible ways to employ sensory details and dialogues to improve the original version. Share their own opinions with the whole class later. Purpose: To help Ss conclude ways of applying sensory details and dialogues to demonstrate the feelings and qualities of the author.
Guided question:
How can the author’s feelings and attitudes be demonstrated vividly
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V. Interactive activity 5: Polishing homework
*T: Introduce Ss to an essay revising checklist. Emphasize the use of sensory details and dialogues to reflect the author’s feelings and attitudes and demonstrate the qualities of a scientist. Encourage Ss to cooperate and polish their partner’s homework. *Ss: Add sensory details, dialogues and other details wherever appropriate to polish their partner’s homework. Purpose: To encourage Ss to apply sensory details and dialogues to writing.
Guided question:
How can details be used to reflect the author’s attitudes and demonstrate the qualities of a scientist
Checklist
Do I present a personal experience of exploring science Do I use sensory details or dialogues to enable the readers to experience the event Do I arrange the details appropriately Do I use a variety of vocabulary Do I use varied sentence structures Do I make grammatical errors Does my voice reflect my feelings about the event ______ ______ ______ ______ ______ ______ ______
VI. Interactive activity 6: Evaluating polished homework
*T: Encourage Ss to comment on their essays polished by their partners and essays polished by other students. Encourage Ss to provide suggestions for further improvement. *Ss: Comment on their essays polished by their partners and essay polished by other students. Provide suggestions for further improvement. Purpose: To help Ss appreciate and evaluate the effects of details in descriptive writing.
Guided questions:
How can descriptive essays demonstrate the qualities of a scientist
VII. Assignments:
1. The science society in your school is celebrating its 4th anniversary next month. You are
asked to write one of your most impressive personal experiences of exploring science in about
100 words. It could be a scientific lecture you attended, an experiment you did in school or at
home, a visit to a science and technology museum, a science game you played with friends, etc.
2. Prepare for the presentation of the final project.
The Requirement of the Presentation
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Present the booklet you have created. Your presentation should last no more than 10 minutes and should respond to the following questions:
1) What is the title of the booklet Why did you decide on this title
2) What type of scientist did you decide on Who are the four scientists of your choice Why did you make such choices
3) Among all the eight facts, which is the most impressive one that reflects the scientist’s qualities and why
4) Among all the four quotes, which is the most impressive one and why
5) What do you think of each scientist Use one word for each scientist to make comments.
6) What is your reflection on your learning of this unit and your experience of designing the booklet
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