(
Thesis
) (
story
)
学案（学生）
Activity 1
Review the three stories in Reading A-- Stay hungry, stay foolish and find out factors contributing to his success.
Stories Factors
Connecting the dots
Love and Loss
Death
Activity 2 Framework for each story
Story 1
Thesis
story Topic
Story 2
__________________________________________________
(
↑
)
(
Reed
College
,
Without hope of
10
years
later
,
)
(
Connecting the
dots
)
(
Death
) (
Jobs
)
(
Love
and
loss
)
____________________________
At 20, At 30, Start Apple brought NeXT Returned to Apple
(
Topic
) (
Love and
Loss
)
(
Jobs
)
(
Connecting
the
dots
) (
Death
)
_____________________________
(
At
17,
A
year
ago
,
Had
a
surgery.
Be
fine now.
)
Death
Jobs
(
Love
and
Loss
)Connecting the dots
Activity 3 Draw up an outline
(
Topic
:
What is the
story
about
)
(
Thesis:
why
do
I
want
to
tell
this
story
/
what do I want to
share with
the
audience
)
(
Story
:
When
Where
What
)
Activity 4 Free writing
(
Reason
)
Peer Evaluation Checklist
Unity Does the essay have a clearly stated thesis, including a dominant impression
Support Has the writer backed up each main point with one extended example or several shorter examples
Are the details relevant and strong enough to support the thesis
Has the writer used enough specific words in the supporting details
Activity 5 Make your illustration precise and specific
(
Reason
)
Activity 6 Write Coherently
Dear classmates, salutation Brieflyintroducethetopic
It is my great honor to share a success I have achieved recently. … [When/ Where/ What]
There are several reasons/ factors/ causes for … … .
The first is …../ First of all, … play an important role in my success. / One important reason
is …./ First and foremost, ….. provide reasons oneby onewith supporting details Another possible reason is …..
Besides/ Furthermore/ What’s more,…should never be neglected/ …is the last thing that should be neglected.
Due to these reasons,……/ From this experience, I realize …../ Although the process is tough, … . summarize the reasons mentioned above
Activity 7 Peer Assessment
Assessment Checklist
Unity Does the essay have a clearly stated thesis, including a dominant impression
Have I eliminated or rewritten irrelevant material
Support Have I backed up each main point with one extended example or several shorter examples
Do I have enough detailed support
Are the details relevant and strong enough to support the thesis
Coherence Have I used transitional words to help readers follow my train of thought
Do I have a concluding paragraph that provides a summary, a final thought, or both
Sentence Skills Have I used a consistent point of view throughout my essay
Have I used specific rather than general words
Have I avoided wordiness and used concise wording
Are my sentences varied What sentence patterns have I used
Assignments:
1. Revise your composition according to the checklist provided on the worksheet.
2. Be prepared to give a speech in front of the class on the topic ‘My Secret to Success ’ in the next class.(共24张PPT)
《 高 中 英 语 》 ( 上 外 版 )
1 C U 1 M ov i ng F o rwa rd
主讲人：
课时 授课内容 1 Getting Started/ Reading A 2 Reading A/ Vocabulary Focus 3 Reading A/ Grammar in Use 4 Listening and Viewing
I 5 Moving Forward
6 Reading B 7 Critical Thinking/Further Exploration/ Self-assessment
《 高 中 英 语 》 ( 上 外 版 )
必修第 三 册第 一 单元
Describe a success story briefly with a clear thesis.
Complete the writing task following the process of outlining, free writing, formal writing, peer-assessment and self-assessment.
Figure out reasons for the success experience with proper supporting details.
Learn to use expressions for cause and effect patterns
By the end of this class, you will be able to...
Objectives
Stories
Factors
Connecting the dots
Belief in the connection of the past and the
future of one’s life.
Love and Loss
Love and enthusiasm for one’s work/ The determination of fighting for the work one loves.
Death
The awareness of the importance of time
and life.
Stay Hungry, Stay Foolish
Reed College, take a calligraphy class
Without hope of practical application
10 years later, first computer with beautiful typography
You have to trust that the dots will somehow connect in your future.
Love and loss
Death
Jobs
Connecting the dots
Story 1
Topic
story
Thesis
At 20, Started Apple in garage
At 30, got fired
Start a new company, NeXT
Apple brought NeXT; Returned to Apple
Jobs
Connecting
the dots Death
Keep looking for what you love and fight for the work you love
Thesis
story
Love and Loss
Story 2
Topic
At 17, read the quote.
A year ago, diagnosed with cancer.
Had a surgery.
Be fine now.
Your time is limited, so don’t waste it living someone else’s life.
Death
Jobs
Thesis
story
Connecting the dots
Love and loss
Story 3
Topic
We'll hold a class meeting on “My Secrets to Success”
this week. You are expected to share your own secrets to success in a certain field. You may first introduce the
achievement that you have made and then explain the reasons behind it.
Writing Task
Sharing Your Own Secrets to Success
Story: When Where What
Last month
A speech contest
Get the first place after
sound preparation
Thesis: Why do I want to tell this story
Interest and support from
teachers are very important.
Succeed in giving a public
speech
Topic:
What is the story about
Step 1 Draw up an outline
Supporting details
Reason
Step 2 Free Writing
When I was very young,I watched a
competition in CCTV 9. I was so fascinated by the talents of the contestants that I was
determined to be one of them in the future. Since then,I have seen lots of videos and read lots of books on public speech, which laid a solid foundation for my ability in
English speech.
Interest
Step 2 Free Writing
1) Organize the content in free writing in a coherent
way with transitional words and phrases between
sentences and paragraphs.
2) Polish the expressions with accurate words, varied sentence patterns and specific details
Step 3 Formal writing
Because I didn’t have much experience of giving public
speech, I didn’t dare to take part in the competition. But my English teacher believed me, encouraged me and helped me. Eventually, I got better in public speech.
Support from teacher
Make expressions specific
Because I didn’t have much experience of giving public
speech, I didn’t dare to take part in the competition. But my English teacher believed me, encouraged me and helped me. Eventually, I got better in public speech.
Support from teacher
Make expressions specific
Make expressions specific
I was shy and lacked confidence, so I was never courageous enough to step onto the stage to give a public speech. Luckily, my English teacher was very patient and supportive. She believed my pronunciation and communicative skills were strong enough to make me stand out, and she gave me the opportunities to organize class meetings and asked me to answer questions in classes as well as giving professional guidance in giving public speech. Gradually, I found I was not so timid to speak in front of the audience, and the positive comments from my teacher also made me believe I was
Example + Adj. +V.
gifted for public speech.
It is my great honor to share a success I have achieved
recently. …[When/ Where/ What]
Briefly introduce the topic
Dear classmates,
It is my great honor to share my experience of winning the first place in the English speech contest last week.
Write Coherently
classmates,
salutation
Dear
Provide reasons one by one with supporting details
There are several reasons/ factors/ causes for … … .
The first is.../ First of all,… play an important role in my success. / One important reason is …/ First and foremost..
Another possible reason is … ../Besides/ Furthermore/
What ’smore,…should never be neglected/…is the last thing that should be neglected.
Write Coherently
Provide reasons one by one with supporting details
There are several reasons for this achievement. First of all, I want to say, interest is the best teacher. When watching a
competition in CCTV 9 at a young age,I was so fascinated by the talents of the contestants that I was determined to be one of them in the future. Since then,I have seen lots of videos and read lots of books on public speech, which laid a solid foundation for my
ability in English speech.
Write Coherently
Provide reasons one by one with supporting details
Despite the great passion in my inner heart,I was shy and lacked confidence, so I was never courageous enough to step onto the
stage to give a public speech. Luckily, my English teacher was very patient and supportive. She believed my pronunciation
and communicative skills were strong enough to make me stand out, and she gave me the opportunities to organize class
meetings and asked me to answer questions in classes as well as providing professional guidance in giving public speech.
Gradually, I found I was not so timid to speak in front of the
audience, and the positive comments from my teacher also made me believe I was gifted for public speech.
Write Coherently
summarize the reasons mentioned aboye
Due to these reasons,……/ From this experience, I realize…../ Although the process is tough, … .
Even though the process of challenging ourselves is
tough, we can gain unexpected growth and development and bring out the best in us. Also we should be grateful to people who believe in us, encourage us, and support us. Without them, we can never be who we are now.
Write Coherently
Unity Does the essay have a clearly stated thesis, including a dominant impression
Have I eliminated or rewritten irrelevant material
Support Have I backed up each main point with one extended example or several shorter examples
Do I have enough detailed support
Are the details relevant and strong enough to support the thesis
Coherence Have I used transitional words to help readers follow my train of thought
Do I have a concluding paragraph that provides a summary, a final thought, or both
Sentence Skills Have I used a consistent point of view throughout my essay
Have I used specific rather than general words
Have I avoided wordiness and used concise wording
Are my sentences varied What sentence patterns have I used
Peer Evaluation
1. Revise your composition according to the checklist provided on the worksheet as well as the advice from your partner.
2. Be prepared to give a speech in front of the class on
the topic ‘My Secret to Success ’ in the next class.
Assignments
Here are a few tips for your talk:
1)Greet your audience briefly to start with the talk. 2)Briefly introduce the achievement you have made. 3)Explain how you made the achievement.
4)End your talk with a summary or anything that helps to leave an impression on the audience.
5)Remember to speak using a combination of slow, fast
and medium speeds to make your talk more effective.
Assignments
感谢您的观看《高中英语（上外版）》必修第三册 Unit 1 Road to Success
课时： 课题：说写融合
课型：说写融合 设计者：
教学设计与说明
一．学情分析
授课对象为高一学生。他们经过之前两册书的学习， 在基本语法的运用和语言输出表达 上已经具备了一定的实践经验。但是， 可能在分析上还有一定的障碍，随之而来的可能是信 息的逻辑梳理问题。因此老师应该在这方面多注意提供帮助。
二、教材分析
板块 Moving Forward 由说、写两个部分构成。主题围绕 My Secrets to success, 学生需 要描述自己的一次成功的经历，并解释成功的原因。首先学生需要完成书面的写作任务， 然 后在班会情景中以演讲的形式进行口头表达。
该任务的设置与阅读 A 篇 Steve Jobs 的演讲 Stay Hungry, Stay Foolish 有很大的关联度。
因此，可以考虑以阅读文本作为切入点，以读促写，完成写作结构和思路的建构。
三、教学设计思路
本课为本单元的第五课时，旨在以读促写。从经典作品的分析入手， 让学生理解并掌握 因果关系类型写作的核心要素，通过写演讲稿分享自己的成功经验，培养学生的语言技能和 思维品质。
导入部分通过回顾阅读 A 篇 Steve Jobs 的演讲 Stay Hungry, Stay Foolish 的内容，以思维 导图的方式梳理出作者每一个故事的核心要素：topic, thesis, story; 并且让学生明白 thesis 就 是作者成功经验的总结，也是作者讲这个故事的目的；为了支持 thesis, 作者以故事作为细 节支撑。因此我们在写作过程中也要首先确定写作的意图(thesis), 在此基础上展开细节支持， 使得文本言之有物，言之有“意 ”，言之有理。
接下来写作的过程分为：draw up an outline; free writing; peer evaluation; write coherently; Peer-evaluation; revision 六个环节。Draw up an outline 主要是让学生跟着老师的问题，通过 brainstorm 确定要写的故事，写作的主题和核心观点（即：写作意图）。Free writing 环节旨在 让学生围绕主题提供尽可能多的细节支持，无法提供足够细节支持的点就可以去掉，这样能 够进一步确定主题，同时确定的主题也会有足够的细节支持。Peer evaluation 旨在通过同伴 的帮助进一步确定细节支持合情理且有意义。Write coherently 旨在让学生将 free writing 中
的内容条理化， 同时也可以用 cause-effect 的相关表达使得文章逻辑清楚。最后的 peer- evaluation，旨在让学生在同伴的帮助下优化写作的成果；同时通过对照写作要求，检测目标 达成情况，进一步加深对该类写作要素的认识和理解。
教学重点及难点
教学重点：运用原因-影响写作模式完成写作任务。 教学难点：文章主题清晰且有恰当的细节支持。
Lesson Plan
Teaching objectives:
By the end of period, the students are expected to:
1. Describe a success story briefly with a clear thesis;
2. Figure out reasons for the success experience with proper supporting details;
3. Learn to use expressions for cause-effect patterns;
4. Complete the writing task following the process of outlining, free writing, formal writing, peer-assessment and self-assessment.
Teaching Procedures
I. Pre-activity
Interactive activity: Review Reading A and Introduce the Cause-effect Pattern
Teacher: Provide a framework with Topic, Story and Thesis for story 1 Students: Complete the framework for story 2&3 Purpose: to get to know the cause-effect pattern for writing
Guided questions:
1. [Instruction] Now you can complete the framework for the other two stories-- Love and Loss & Death.
2. What is the thesis for the second story—Love and Loss/ the third story--Death
3. How does the speaker reflect the thesis
II. While- activity
Interactive activity: Draw up an outline
Teacher: ask questions to help students determine the story they want to tell and make an outline for the success story. Students: by answering the questions, brainstorm the key elements for the story. Purpose: to help students confirm the topic and thesis for the success experience.
Guided questions:
1. What is the story about
2. Why doI want to tell this story / What doI want to share with the audience
3. When and where did you achieve this success What is your success
Independent activity: Free writing
Teacher: Provide students with a model of extending the thesis with detailed description and ask students to extend their thesis in the same way. Students: Illustrate the thesis with details by describing the process of getting to success. Purpose: to make students brainstorm as much information as possible and connect the detailed description with the thesis.
Guided questions:
[Instruction] When you are writing, you should ask yourself constantly: Which part of the story is related to the thesis / How can this detail illustrate the thesis
Peer work: evaluate free writing work with peers
Teacher: ask students to swap their work with peers and each one of them should evaluate if the details provided are relevant to the thesis confirmed in the outline. Students: evaluate the work from peers according to the checklist provided on the worksheet and give advice to each other to make sure the content is relevant and reasonable. Purpose: to help students provide sound and reasonable support for the thesis.
Guided questions:
[Instruction] Please swap your work with your partner and each of you should evaluate if the details provided is relevant to the thesis. You should try to provide some advice
for your partner.
Interactive Activity: Make expressions precise and specific
Teacher: Present an example of turning general expressions into specific illustrations with enough details Students: find out the differences between the two models by making comparison and revise their work in a similar way. Purpose: to help students revise the free writing work with precise words and specific details.
Guided questions:
1.What are the problems with the first example
2. Why is the second one better
Independent work: Organize the content in a coherent way
Teacher: Provide a beginning for speech writing and useful expressions for expressing reasons. Students: Use the model and expressions provided and fill the content finished before into the model and organize them in a coherent way. Purpose: to guide students to organize reasons in a logical and coherent way.
Guided questions:
[Instruction] Please organize the content in a logical way. The beginning and ending of the speech as well as the phrases for reasons are given as follows.
III. Post-activity
Pair work: Evaluate the composition
Teacher: Provide a checklist for students and ask them to evaluate the work of their peers and provide advice for revision. Students: work in pairs to evaluate peer’s work by referring to the checklist Purpose: to make sure there is a thesis that is well-supported in writing and the content is logically organized
Guided questions:
[Instruction] Here is a checklist for assessment. Evaluate your partner’s writing from four different aspects: unity, support, coherence, and sentence skills according to the checklist.
IV. Assignments:
1. Revise your composition according to the checklist provided on the worksheet.
2. Be prepared to give a speech in front of the class on the topic ‘My Secret to Success ’ in the next class.
Here are few tips for your talk:
1)Greet your audience briefly to start with the talk. 2)Briefly introduce the achievement you have made. 3)Explain how you made the achievement.
4)End your talk with a summary or anything that helps to leave an impression on the audience.
5)Remember to speak using a combination of slow, fast and medium speeds to make your talk more effective.(
Thesis
) (
story
)
学案（教师）
Activity 1
Review the three stories in Reading A-- Stay hungry, stay foolish and find out factors contributing to his success.
Stories Factors
Connecting the dots Belief in the connection of the past and the future of one’s life
Love and Loss Love and enthusiasm for one’s work/ The determination of fighting for the work one loves.
Death The awareness of the importance of time and life.
(
Thesis
story
Topic
) (
↑
)Activity 2 Framework for each story Story 1
You have to trust that the dots will somehow connect in your future.
Reed College, take a calligraphy class Without hope ofpractical application 10 years later, first computer with beautiful typography
(
Connecting the
dots
)
(
Death
) (
Jobs
)
(
Story
2
) (
Love
and
loss
)
Keep looking for what you love and fight for the work you love
At 20, Started Apple in garage At 30, got fired Start a new company, NeXT Apple brought NeXT Returned to Apple
(
Topic
) (
Love and
Loss
)
(
Jobs
)
(
Connecting
the
dots
) (
Death
)
Your time is limited, so don’t waste it living someone else’s life.
(
At
17,
read
the
quote
.
A
year ago, diagnosed with
cancer.
Had a
surgery.
Be
fine now.
)
Death
Jobs
(
Love
and
Loss
)Connecting the dots
(
Succeed in giving
a public
speech
)Activity 3 Draw up an outline
(
Interest and support
from teachers
are
very important.
) (
Topic
:
What is the
story
about
)
(
Last month
A speech contest
Get the first place
after
sound
preparation
) (
Thesis:
why
do
I
want
to
tell
this
story
/
what do I want to
share with
the
audience
)
Story: When Where What
Activity 4 Free writing
(
When
I
was
very
young,
I
watched
a
competition
in
CCTV
9.
I
was
so
fascinated
by
the
talen
ts
of
the
contestants
that
I
was
determined
to
be
one
of th
em
in
the
future.
Since
then,
I
have
seen
lots
of
videos
and
read
l
ots
of
books
on
public speech,
which laid a solid foundation
for my
ability
in
English
speech.
)
(
Interest
)
Peer Evaluation Checklist
Unity Does the essay have a clearly stated thesis, including a dominant impression
Support Has the writer backed up each main point with one extended example or several shorter examples
Are the details relevant and strong enough to support the thesis
Has the writer used enough specific words in the supporting details
(
Support
from teacher
)Activity 5 Make your illustration precise and specific
Because I didn’t have much experience of giving public speech, I didn’t dare to take part in the competition. But my English teacher believed me, encouraged me and helped me. Eventually, I got better in public speech.
(
I
was
shy
and
lacked
confidence
,
so
I
was
never
courageous
enough
to
step
onto
the
stage
to
give
a public
speech.
Luckily, my
English
teacher
was
very
patient
and
su
pportive
, she believed my pronunciation and
communicative
skills were
strong enough to make
me
stand
out,
and
she
gave
me
the
opportunities
to
organize
class
meetings
and
asked
me
to
answer
questions
in
classes
as
well
as
giving
professional
guidance
in
giving public
speech. Gra
dually, I
found I was not
so timid
to
speak
in
front
of the
audience,
and
the
positive
comments
f
rom
my
teacher
also
made me believe I was gifted for pub
lic
speech.
)
Activity 6 Write Coherently
Dear classmates, salutation Brieflyintroducethetopic
It is my great honor to share a success I have achieved recently. … [When/ Where/ What]
There are several reasons/ factors/ causes for … … .
The first is …../ First of all, … play an important role in my success. / One important reason
is …./ First and foremost, …..
provide reasonsone byone with supporting details
Another possible reason is …..
Besides/ Furthermore/ What’s more,…should never be neglected/ …is the last thing that should be neglected.
Due to these reasons,……/ From this experience, I realize …../ Although the process is tough, … . summarize the reasons mentioned above
Activity 7 Peer Assessment
Assessment Checklist
Unity Does the essay have a clearly stated thesis, including a dominant impression
Have I eliminated or rewritten irrelevant material
Support Have I backed up each main point with one extended example or several shorter examples
Do I have enough detailed support
Are the details relevant and strong enough to support the thesis
Coherence Have I used transitional words to help readers follow my train of thought
Do I have a concluding paragraph that provides a summary, a final thought, or both
Sentence Skills Have I used a consistent point of view throughout my essay
Have I used specific rather than general words
Have I avoided wordiness and used concise wording
Are my sentences varied What sentence patterns have I used
Assignments:
1. Revise your composition according to the checklist provided on the worksheet.
2. Be prepared to give a speech in front of the class on the topic ‘My Secret to Success ’ in the next class.
