2025届高三英语专项复习 读后续写 课件（共22张PPT）
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(共22张PPT)
读后续写
Continuation writing
授 课 教 师：
Pre-reading
Free talk
Have you ever dreamed a dream that turned out to be a reality
Who (character)
Where (place)
When (time)
What (event)
Why (reason)
How (solution)
I; Becki; “she”
along the highway;
at home
late night
I found Becki hadn't come home.
The car had come to an unexpectedly stopped
Becki accepted help from a woman
Main idea:
Becki's car broke down on the way home at night and someone offered her a ride.
While-reading
Task1:Read for main idea
setting
inciting incident
Rising action
Climax
Falling action
Resolution
Denouement
While-reading
Task2:Read for plot
The darkness was gathering as she wobbled (颤颤巍巍) in high heels along the side of the highway. The car had come to an unexpected stop, and like a normal teenager she did the only thing she could think of...get out and walk.
It was cold and late, and home was far away. This could be a long night. If only someone would stop and offer her a ride. She prayed for help and dragged herself forward.
The lights of a truck shone from behind as it approached. “Maybe he will stop,” she hoped. The brake lights flashed on as it stopped. Next instant, the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door. Slowly the truck pulled back onto the road and disappeared into the night, never to be seen again.
The darkness was gathering as she wobbled (颤颤巍巍) in high heels along the side of the highway. The car had come to an unexpected stop, and like a normal teenager she did the only thing she could think of...get out and walk.
It was cold and late, and home was far away. This could be a long night. If only someone would stop and offer her a ride. She prayed for help and dragged herself forward.
The lights of a truck shone from behind as it approached. “Maybe he will stop,” she hoped. The brake lights flashed on as it stopped. Next instant, the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door. Slowly the truck pulled back onto the road and disappeared into the night, never to be seen again.
Exposition
The darkness was gathering as she wobbled (颤颤巍巍) in high heels along the side of the highway. The car had come to an unexpected stop, and like a normal teenager she did the only thing she could think of...get out and walk.
It was cold and late, and home was far away. This could be a long night. If only someone would stop and offer her a ride. She prayed for help and dragged herself forward.
The lights of a truck shone from behind as it approached. “Maybe he will stop,” she hoped. The brake lights flashed on as it stopped. Next instant, the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door. Slowly the truck pulled back onto the road and disappeared into the night, never to be seen again.
inciting incident
rising action
1. Use rhetorical devices to hook readers.
The darkness was gathering as she wobbled (颤颤巍巍) in high heels along the side of the highway. The car had come to an unexpected stop, and like a normal teenager she did the only thing she could think of...get out and walk.
It was cold and late, and home was far away. This could be a long night. If only someone would stop and offer her a ride. She prayed for help and dragged herself forward.
The lights of a truck shone from behind as it approached. “Maybe he will stop,” she hoped. The brake lights flashed on as it stopped. Next instant, the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door. Slowly the truck pulled back onto the road and disappeared into the night, never to be seen again.
2. Use strong verbs to show feelings and develop the story
3. Use inner speech to illustrate feelings and reveal clues
While-reading
Task2:Read for plot
I woke up in a cold sweat, alarmed. Was that a dream or was it a vision It was unbelievably real, and the girl was my daughter! I jumped from my bed and ran to her room. Her bed was empty.
I stood in horror trying to think why she had not come home. As the mental fog began to lift, I remembered she was visiting her friend that evening. Perhaps she stayed there for the night. It was 1: 30 a. m, but I raced to the phone and dialed a number.
“Hello ” The voice was heavy with sleep.
“Hey. Sorry to wake you. Becki didn't come home tonight and I was wondering if she stayed at your place ”
“No, she left here a few hours ago. She should have been home at least by midnight!” The voice on the other end began to reflect my own panic.
Over the next forty-five minutes I alternated between lying in pray and pacing the floor in anxiety.
At 2:15 a.m. lights appeared as a car turned up our long driveway. I could tell immediately that it was not my daughter's car.
I woke up in a cold sweat, alarmed. Was that a dream or was it a vision It was unbelievably real, and the girl was my daughter! I jumped from my bed and ran to her room. Her bed was empty.
I stood in horror trying to think why she had not come home. As the mental fog began to lift, I remembered she was visiting her friend that evening. Perhaps she stayed there for the night. It was 1: 30 a. m, but I raced to the phone and dialed a number.
“Hello ” The voice was heavy with sleep.
“Hey. Sorry to wake you. Becki didn't come home tonight and I was wondering if she stayed at your place ”
“No, she left here a few hours ago. She should have been home at least by midnight!” The voice on the other end began to reflect my own panic.
Over the next forty-five minutes I alternated between lying in pray and pacing the floor in anxiety.
At 2:15 a.m. lights appeared as a car turned up our long driveway. I could tell immediately that it was not my daughter's car.
rising action
I woke up in a cold sweat, alarmed. Was that a dream or was it a vision It was unbelievably real, and the girl was my daughter! I jumped from my bed and ran to her room. Her bed was empty.
I stood in horror trying to think why she had not come home. As the mental fog began to lift, I remembered she was visiting her friend that evening. Perhaps she stayed there for the night. It was 1: 30 a. m, but I raced to the phone and dialed a number.
“Hello ” The voice was heavy with sleep.
“Hey. Sorry to wake you. Becki didn't come home tonight and I was wondering if she stayed at your place ”
“No, she left here a few hours ago. She should have been home at least by midnight!” The voice on the other end began to reflect my own panic.
Over the next forty-five minutes I alternated between lying in pray and pacing the floor in anxiety.
At 2:15 a.m. lights appeared as a car turned up our long driveway. I could tell immediately that it was not my daughter's car.
2. Use strong verbs to show feelings and develop the story
I woke up in a cold sweat, alarmed. Was that a dream or was it a vision It was unbelievably real, and the girl was my daughter! I jumped from my bed and ran to her room. Her bed was empty.
I stood in horror trying to think why she had not come home. As the mental fog began to lift, I remembered she was visiting her friend that evening. Perhaps she stayed there for the night. It was 1: 30 a. m, but I raced to the phone and dialed a number.
“Hello ” The voice was heavy with sleep.
“Hey. Sorry to wake you. Becki didn't come home tonight and I was wondering if she stayed at your place ”
“No, she left here a few hours ago. She should have been home at least by midnight!” The voice on the other end began to reflect my own panic.
Over the next forty-five minutes I alternated between lying in pray and pacing the floor in anxiety.
At 2:15 a.m. lights appeared as a car turned up our long driveway. I could tell immediately that it was not my daughter's car.
4. Use dialogues to thread events
While-reading
Task2:Read for plot
Paragraph 1:
My face pressed against the window and found it hard to breathe.
Paragraph 2:
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said.
climax
denouement
falling action
While-reading
Task2:Read for plot
...the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door ...
What difficulties did she face
Paragraph 2:
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said.
...she wobbled in high heels along the side of the highway...it was cold and late, and home was far away.
darkened and cold surroundings;
uncomfortable shoes;
long distance
danger
What help did she get
Who offered her help
While-reading
Task3:Read for clues
In writing the article, the writer intends to ________
to describe a terrible experience
to present readers with good and evil
to highlight an act of kindness
to show a mother's selfless love
It's wise to extend a story with a bright and positive theme.
While-reading
Task4:Read for writing pupose
意图 to highlight an act of kindness 划线词 Character
Setting
Action
Mood
段首句 Paragraph 1: My face pressed against the window and found it hard to breathe. Paragraph 2: “Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said. What did I see inside the car
What did I do seeing Becki's return
Who helped Becki
What did Becki explain her being late for home
How did I react after hearing the explanation
daughter
high heels, highway, home, night, ride, dream, midnight, car
pray
panic
While-reading
Task5:Read for prediction
setting
inciting incident
Rising action
Climax
Falling action
Resolution
Denouement
Becki's car broke down
Night approaching,
she walked along the highway in high heels.
It was cold and late and she was dragging forward when a car stopped and she got in.
Meanwhile, I made a bad dream.
A car appeared and I waited to see the “visitors”.
Becki returned home safe and sound
Becki told me a woman drove her home
sceptical
horrified
panicky
anxious
relieved
grateful
While-reading
Task5:Read for prediction
Paragraph 1:
My face pressed against the window and found it hard to breathe.
Paragraph 2:
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said.
Event: Becki returned home safe and sound
Feelings: anxious relieved
Event: Becki told me a woman drove her home
Feeling: grateful
While-reading
Task6:Read for writing
How to describe
a person's anxiety
1. Use rhetorical devices to show anxiety
A deep sense of anxiety flooded over me.
Full of anxiety, I felt like sitting on pins and needles.
如坐针毡
The thought of what might have happened to Becki sent shivers down my spine.
让我脊背发凉
A deep sense of anxiety arose in my heart and quickly overwhelmed me.
心底涌现出深深的焦虑感,并迅速将我淹没
The sense of anxiety got increasingly stronger with each passing minute.
I felt too anxious that my heart almost jumped out of my throat.
Simile
Personification
Exaggeration
Exaggeration
焦虑感渐增
Exaggeration
焦虑感淹没了我
Exaggeration
“协同效应”
My brain was like a scribble.
Simile
脑子乱作一团
2. Use strong/vivid verbs to show anxiety
I poked my head out of the window, casting an anxious glance at the car.
浑身打颤
跺脚
踱步
哭
下跪
心跳加快
甩门
飞奔
叹气
看
情绪崩溃
焦虑的表现
Anxious,I shivered in every limb./ I shook with fear.
I stamped my foot in anxiety.
I began pacing the room.
/I paced back and forth in the room.
I was close to tears.
/I began to sob bitterly.
I was almost on the verge of breaking down.
Anxious, I fell to my knees.
With heart beating hard/racing, I steadied my eye(凝神看).
Flinging open the door, I ran outside.
I darted/ trotted/galloped outside.
/I rushed out in haste.
I sighing heavily, wondering what to do next.
3. Use inner speech to show anxiety
“What happened Where did my dear Becki go ” my mind was in chaos.大脑一片混乱
“What if my daughter was injured What if she met a bad guy ” worry crept into my mind. 爬上心头
“What if the dream was true ” the thought hit me like a bucket of cold water.(像被泼了一盆冷水) I dare not think about it any longer.
“What should I do—oh! I shouldn't have let her go to meet her friend alone.” I was filled with regret.
“God, please bring my dear Becki home safely.” I prayed.
...
How to describe
a person's relief
Use inanimate subject (无灵主语)
A pair of high heels appeared. It was my daughter! I breathed a sigh of relief.
看见我女儿，我松了口气。
听到熟悉的声音，我如释重负地喘了口气。
Suddenly a familiar voice came into my ears. It was Becki. I gasped in relief.
Use inversion (倒装)
我女儿穿着她的高跟鞋(从车里)出来了。
Out stepped my precious daughter in her high heels.
The car pulled in front of the house, and out of it emerged my precious daughter.
How to describe
a person's gratitude
1. Use emphatic structure
是她在我晚上独自一人无助地在公路上走的时候向我伸出了援手。
It was she who extended a helping hand when I was walking alone on the highway hopelessly.
2. Use the subjunctive mood
没有她的帮助我不可能穿着高跟鞋走到家。
But for/ Without her help, I would have never made it home in my high heels.
Hadn't she helped me, I would have never made it home in my high heels.
Possible version：
My face pressed against the window and I found it hard to breathe. The car pulled in front of the house, and out of it emerged my precious daughter, making her way up the steps. Tears stinging my eyes (泪水模糊了我的眼睛), I threw open the door, pulled her inside and hugged her tightly. The dream was just too real and I could hardly believe I was now having my daughter in my hug. I wondered if it was because my pray was answered. Then through my blurred vision (模糊的视野)I saw a lady stepping out of the car.
同义复现
衔接
Possible version：
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said. “My car broke down on the highway and without her help, I would never have made it home in my high heels.” she continued, exposing her blistered ankles. My heart shuddered at the thought of how painfully she staggered along the dark highway. She must be an angel for Becki! I approached the lady and invited her inside. Now, I was definitely grateful to her for extending a helping hand.
Possible version：
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said. “My car broke down on the highway and without her help, I would never have made it home in my high heels.” she continued, exposing her blistered ankles. My heart shuddered at the thought of how painfully she staggered along the dark highway. She must be an angel for Becki! I approached the lady and invited her inside. Now, I was definitely grateful to her for extending a helping hand.
反义复现
Possible version：
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said. “My car broke down on the highway and without her help, I would never have made it home in my high heels.” she continued, exposing her blistered ankles. My heart shuddered at the thought of how painfully she staggered along the dark highway. She must be an angel for Becki! I approached the lady and invited her inside. Now, I was definitely grateful to her for extending a helping hand.
同义复现
Homework
1. Revise your writing using
the checklist as a guide.
2. Share your story with
your classmates.
Do I use more than 5 underlined key words
Do I plotted the events logically and coherently
Do I add rich, accurate language, including vivid verbs, inner speeches, etc.
Do my ending better match with the given material
Checklist
Thanks for listening
读后续写
Continuation writing
授 课 教 师：
Pre-reading
Free talk
Have you ever dreamed a dream that turned out to be a reality
Who (character)
Where (place)
When (time)
What (event)
Why (reason)
How (solution)
I; Becki; “she”
along the highway;
at home
late night
I found Becki hadn't come home.
The car had come to an unexpectedly stopped
Becki accepted help from a woman
Main idea:
Becki's car broke down on the way home at night and someone offered her a ride.
While-reading
Task1:Read for main idea
setting
inciting incident
Rising action
Climax
Falling action
Resolution
Denouement
While-reading
Task2:Read for plot
The darkness was gathering as she wobbled (颤颤巍巍) in high heels along the side of the highway. The car had come to an unexpected stop, and like a normal teenager she did the only thing she could think of...get out and walk.
It was cold and late, and home was far away. This could be a long night. If only someone would stop and offer her a ride. She prayed for help and dragged herself forward.
The lights of a truck shone from behind as it approached. “Maybe he will stop,” she hoped. The brake lights flashed on as it stopped. Next instant, the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door. Slowly the truck pulled back onto the road and disappeared into the night, never to be seen again.
The darkness was gathering as she wobbled (颤颤巍巍) in high heels along the side of the highway. The car had come to an unexpected stop, and like a normal teenager she did the only thing she could think of...get out and walk.
It was cold and late, and home was far away. This could be a long night. If only someone would stop and offer her a ride. She prayed for help and dragged herself forward.
The lights of a truck shone from behind as it approached. “Maybe he will stop,” she hoped. The brake lights flashed on as it stopped. Next instant, the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door. Slowly the truck pulled back onto the road and disappeared into the night, never to be seen again.
Exposition
The darkness was gathering as she wobbled (颤颤巍巍) in high heels along the side of the highway. The car had come to an unexpected stop, and like a normal teenager she did the only thing she could think of...get out and walk.
It was cold and late, and home was far away. This could be a long night. If only someone would stop and offer her a ride. She prayed for help and dragged herself forward.
The lights of a truck shone from behind as it approached. “Maybe he will stop,” she hoped. The brake lights flashed on as it stopped. Next instant, the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door. Slowly the truck pulled back onto the road and disappeared into the night, never to be seen again.
inciting incident
rising action
1. Use rhetorical devices to hook readers.
The darkness was gathering as she wobbled (颤颤巍巍) in high heels along the side of the highway. The car had come to an unexpected stop, and like a normal teenager she did the only thing she could think of...get out and walk.
It was cold and late, and home was far away. This could be a long night. If only someone would stop and offer her a ride. She prayed for help and dragged herself forward.
The lights of a truck shone from behind as it approached. “Maybe he will stop,” she hoped. The brake lights flashed on as it stopped. Next instant, the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door. Slowly the truck pulled back onto the road and disappeared into the night, never to be seen again.
2. Use strong verbs to show feelings and develop the story
3. Use inner speech to illustrate feelings and reveal clues
While-reading
Task2:Read for plot
I woke up in a cold sweat, alarmed. Was that a dream or was it a vision It was unbelievably real, and the girl was my daughter! I jumped from my bed and ran to her room. Her bed was empty.
I stood in horror trying to think why she had not come home. As the mental fog began to lift, I remembered she was visiting her friend that evening. Perhaps she stayed there for the night. It was 1: 30 a. m, but I raced to the phone and dialed a number.
“Hello ” The voice was heavy with sleep.
“Hey. Sorry to wake you. Becki didn't come home tonight and I was wondering if she stayed at your place ”
“No, she left here a few hours ago. She should have been home at least by midnight!” The voice on the other end began to reflect my own panic.
Over the next forty-five minutes I alternated between lying in pray and pacing the floor in anxiety.
At 2:15 a.m. lights appeared as a car turned up our long driveway. I could tell immediately that it was not my daughter's car.
I woke up in a cold sweat, alarmed. Was that a dream or was it a vision It was unbelievably real, and the girl was my daughter! I jumped from my bed and ran to her room. Her bed was empty.
I stood in horror trying to think why she had not come home. As the mental fog began to lift, I remembered she was visiting her friend that evening. Perhaps she stayed there for the night. It was 1: 30 a. m, but I raced to the phone and dialed a number.
“Hello ” The voice was heavy with sleep.
“Hey. Sorry to wake you. Becki didn't come home tonight and I was wondering if she stayed at your place ”
“No, she left here a few hours ago. She should have been home at least by midnight!” The voice on the other end began to reflect my own panic.
Over the next forty-five minutes I alternated between lying in pray and pacing the floor in anxiety.
At 2:15 a.m. lights appeared as a car turned up our long driveway. I could tell immediately that it was not my daughter's car.
rising action
I woke up in a cold sweat, alarmed. Was that a dream or was it a vision It was unbelievably real, and the girl was my daughter! I jumped from my bed and ran to her room. Her bed was empty.
I stood in horror trying to think why she had not come home. As the mental fog began to lift, I remembered she was visiting her friend that evening. Perhaps she stayed there for the night. It was 1: 30 a. m, but I raced to the phone and dialed a number.
“Hello ” The voice was heavy with sleep.
“Hey. Sorry to wake you. Becki didn't come home tonight and I was wondering if she stayed at your place ”
“No, she left here a few hours ago. She should have been home at least by midnight!” The voice on the other end began to reflect my own panic.
Over the next forty-five minutes I alternated between lying in pray and pacing the floor in anxiety.
At 2:15 a.m. lights appeared as a car turned up our long driveway. I could tell immediately that it was not my daughter's car.
2. Use strong verbs to show feelings and develop the story
I woke up in a cold sweat, alarmed. Was that a dream or was it a vision It was unbelievably real, and the girl was my daughter! I jumped from my bed and ran to her room. Her bed was empty.
I stood in horror trying to think why she had not come home. As the mental fog began to lift, I remembered she was visiting her friend that evening. Perhaps she stayed there for the night. It was 1: 30 a. m, but I raced to the phone and dialed a number.
“Hello ” The voice was heavy with sleep.
“Hey. Sorry to wake you. Becki didn't come home tonight and I was wondering if she stayed at your place ”
“No, she left here a few hours ago. She should have been home at least by midnight!” The voice on the other end began to reflect my own panic.
Over the next forty-five minutes I alternated between lying in pray and pacing the floor in anxiety.
At 2:15 a.m. lights appeared as a car turned up our long driveway. I could tell immediately that it was not my daughter's car.
4. Use dialogues to thread events
While-reading
Task2:Read for plot
Paragraph 1:
My face pressed against the window and found it hard to breathe.
Paragraph 2:
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said.
climax
denouement
falling action
While-reading
Task2:Read for plot
...the cab door opened. A wordless invitation was extended and she understood. Without hesitation the girl climbed up into the seat and closed the door ...
What difficulties did she face
Paragraph 2:
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said.
...she wobbled in high heels along the side of the highway...it was cold and late, and home was far away.
darkened and cold surroundings;
uncomfortable shoes;
long distance
danger
What help did she get
Who offered her help
While-reading
Task3:Read for clues
In writing the article, the writer intends to ________
to describe a terrible experience
to present readers with good and evil
to highlight an act of kindness
to show a mother's selfless love
It's wise to extend a story with a bright and positive theme.
While-reading
Task4:Read for writing pupose
意图 to highlight an act of kindness 划线词 Character
Setting
Action
Mood
段首句 Paragraph 1: My face pressed against the window and found it hard to breathe. Paragraph 2: “Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said. What did I see inside the car
What did I do seeing Becki's return
Who helped Becki
What did Becki explain her being late for home
How did I react after hearing the explanation
daughter
high heels, highway, home, night, ride, dream, midnight, car
pray
panic
While-reading
Task5:Read for prediction
setting
inciting incident
Rising action
Climax
Falling action
Resolution
Denouement
Becki's car broke down
Night approaching,
she walked along the highway in high heels.
It was cold and late and she was dragging forward when a car stopped and she got in.
Meanwhile, I made a bad dream.
A car appeared and I waited to see the “visitors”.
Becki returned home safe and sound
Becki told me a woman drove her home
sceptical
horrified
panicky
anxious
relieved
grateful
While-reading
Task5:Read for prediction
Paragraph 1:
My face pressed against the window and found it hard to breathe.
Paragraph 2:
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said.
Event: Becki returned home safe and sound
Feelings: anxious relieved
Event: Becki told me a woman drove her home
Feeling: grateful
While-reading
Task6:Read for writing
How to describe
a person's anxiety
1. Use rhetorical devices to show anxiety
A deep sense of anxiety flooded over me.
Full of anxiety, I felt like sitting on pins and needles.
如坐针毡
The thought of what might have happened to Becki sent shivers down my spine.
让我脊背发凉
A deep sense of anxiety arose in my heart and quickly overwhelmed me.
心底涌现出深深的焦虑感,并迅速将我淹没
The sense of anxiety got increasingly stronger with each passing minute.
I felt too anxious that my heart almost jumped out of my throat.
Simile
Personification
Exaggeration
Exaggeration
焦虑感渐增
Exaggeration
焦虑感淹没了我
Exaggeration
“协同效应”
My brain was like a scribble.
Simile
脑子乱作一团
2. Use strong/vivid verbs to show anxiety
I poked my head out of the window, casting an anxious glance at the car.
浑身打颤
跺脚
踱步
哭
下跪
心跳加快
甩门
飞奔
叹气
看
情绪崩溃
焦虑的表现
Anxious,I shivered in every limb./ I shook with fear.
I stamped my foot in anxiety.
I began pacing the room.
/I paced back and forth in the room.
I was close to tears.
/I began to sob bitterly.
I was almost on the verge of breaking down.
Anxious, I fell to my knees.
With heart beating hard/racing, I steadied my eye(凝神看).
Flinging open the door, I ran outside.
I darted/ trotted/galloped outside.
/I rushed out in haste.
I sighing heavily, wondering what to do next.
3. Use inner speech to show anxiety
“What happened Where did my dear Becki go ” my mind was in chaos.大脑一片混乱
“What if my daughter was injured What if she met a bad guy ” worry crept into my mind. 爬上心头
“What if the dream was true ” the thought hit me like a bucket of cold water.(像被泼了一盆冷水) I dare not think about it any longer.
“What should I do—oh! I shouldn't have let her go to meet her friend alone.” I was filled with regret.
“God, please bring my dear Becki home safely.” I prayed.
...
How to describe
a person's relief
Use inanimate subject (无灵主语)
A pair of high heels appeared. It was my daughter! I breathed a sigh of relief.
看见我女儿，我松了口气。
听到熟悉的声音，我如释重负地喘了口气。
Suddenly a familiar voice came into my ears. It was Becki. I gasped in relief.
Use inversion (倒装)
我女儿穿着她的高跟鞋(从车里)出来了。
Out stepped my precious daughter in her high heels.
The car pulled in front of the house, and out of it emerged my precious daughter.
How to describe
a person's gratitude
1. Use emphatic structure
是她在我晚上独自一人无助地在公路上走的时候向我伸出了援手。
It was she who extended a helping hand when I was walking alone on the highway hopelessly.
2. Use the subjunctive mood
没有她的帮助我不可能穿着高跟鞋走到家。
But for/ Without her help, I would have never made it home in my high heels.
Hadn't she helped me, I would have never made it home in my high heels.
Possible version：
My face pressed against the window and I found it hard to breathe. The car pulled in front of the house, and out of it emerged my precious daughter, making her way up the steps. Tears stinging my eyes (泪水模糊了我的眼睛), I threw open the door, pulled her inside and hugged her tightly. The dream was just too real and I could hardly believe I was now having my daughter in my hug. I wondered if it was because my pray was answered. Then through my blurred vision (模糊的视野)I saw a lady stepping out of the car.
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Possible version：
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said. “My car broke down on the highway and without her help, I would never have made it home in my high heels.” she continued, exposing her blistered ankles. My heart shuddered at the thought of how painfully she staggered along the dark highway. She must be an angel for Becki! I approached the lady and invited her inside. Now, I was definitely grateful to her for extending a helping hand.
Possible version：
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said. “My car broke down on the highway and without her help, I would never have made it home in my high heels.” she continued, exposing her blistered ankles. My heart shuddered at the thought of how painfully she staggered along the dark highway. She must be an angel for Becki! I approached the lady and invited her inside. Now, I was definitely grateful to her for extending a helping hand.
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Possible version：
“Mom, she gave me a ride home.”Becki said. “My car broke down on the highway and without her help, I would never have made it home in my high heels.” she continued, exposing her blistered ankles. My heart shuddered at the thought of how painfully she staggered along the dark highway. She must be an angel for Becki! I approached the lady and invited her inside. Now, I was definitely grateful to her for extending a helping hand.
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Homework
1. Revise your writing using
the checklist as a guide.
2. Share your story with
your classmates.
Do I use more than 5 underlined key words
Do I plotted the events logically and coherently
Do I add rich, accurate language, including vivid verbs, inner speeches, etc.
Do my ending better match with the given material
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