2025届高考英语专项复习 浙江G12名校协作题9月联考读后续写——无声的父爱（含解析）
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2025届浙江G12名校协作题9月联考读后续写——无声的父爱
From my memory, my father was a man of few words and we were never close to each other. Before he joined the army, he built a house with his own hands. When he was tragically killed in one battle, the house became mine. As the house aged, it became a relic of the past, and we moved away, carrying with me the echoes of his silent presence.
One day, someone called, saying that he wanted to buy that house. I said yes.
Before we reached a deal, I thought it a must to check out the old shack (小屋) first, just in case something of value had been left behind. My two young sons followed along, and we waded through the tall grass in the mead ow where the old house sat. Time had taken its toll. The front porch had collapsed in on itself, most of the windows were gone, and the siding was falling off. We entered through an open window.
I felt as though I had chanced upon a time capsule (胶囊). Here lay the things of my dad’s lives. A broken chair. Some old clothes. But the thing that drew my eye was acardboard box stuffed with papers. I dug through its contents and was instantly transported back in time. There was a tax return from 1975. Greeting cards from old relatives and friends.
I spent most of a pleasant hour going through that box. All the while, I had to answer a stream of questions from my sons about the old house. They were amazed that nine people once occupied the tiny structure. And they shivered when I told them that in those days the cook stove was the only source of heat.
There’s nothing of value had been left, I confirmed. So we came back. The house once again enjoyed the lonely solitude of our meadow.
Then the paying day came. For no reason, maybe some reason, I came to that old house to say goodbye to something.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卷的相应位置作答。
As I stood in the house my eye was drawn to a big yellowed envelope with two words “FROMARMY” on it.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
I pulled out my telephone and made a call to that buyer.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
01
情节梳理
主要人物：讲述者（父亲已故，育有两个儿子），父亲（已故军人），两个儿子。
事件发展：
1.讲述者回忆父亲生前寡言少语，和父亲关系疏远。父亲在参军前亲手建了一座小屋，战斗中牺牲后，小屋成为了讲述者的遗产。
2.随着时间的流逝，小屋变得老旧残破，讲述者决定出售这座房子。
3.在与买家达成协议之前，讲述者和两个儿子前往旧屋检查是否有遗留的有价值物品。旧屋年久失修，但讲述者在屋内找到一个装满纸张的纸箱。
4.讲述者翻阅纸箱内容时回忆起往昔岁月，有1975年的税表和老亲友的贺卡，沉浸在怀旧的时光中。
5.两个儿子对旧屋的历史充满好奇，不断询问问题，尤其对当时生活的艰辛感到惊讶。
6.讲述者确认没有有价值的东西后，带着儿子离开，旧屋再次陷入孤寂。
7.在买家支付日，讲述者心血来潮，决定再次前往旧屋做最后的告别。
02
主题分析
怀旧与父爱：文章通过讲述者对父亲建造的小屋的探索与回忆，表现了对逝去时光的怀念和对父亲的复杂情感。尽管生前与父亲不够亲近，但讲述者通过老屋的遗物与父亲重新建立了某种连接。
时间的流逝与情感的唤醒：时间让房子变得破旧，也模糊了讲述者与父亲之间的记忆，但通过物件的发现，这些模糊的记忆得以重新浮现并被珍惜。
03
情感分析
讲述者的情感变化：从最初的疏远和对房子的冷淡，到在翻阅旧物时的怀旧与感慨，再到最后的告别中的复杂情感，讲述者经历了一个情感的升华过程。
家庭和代际传承：讲述者的两个儿子对旧屋的好奇也显示出代际间的情感传递，尽管他们未曾见过祖父，但通过父亲的讲述，他们也与这段家族历史产生了连接。
续写内容及详细语法分析
Paragraph 1:
As I stood in the house, my eye was drawn to a big yellowed envelope with two words “FROM ARMY” on it. I carefully picked it up, my hands trembling slightly, and opened the flap. Inside were several faded letters and a black-and-white photograph of my father in his uniform, standing tall and proud. The letters were addressed to my mother, filled with promises of coming home soon and dreams of a future together. I could almost hear my father's voice, soft yet strong, echoing in the silent room. Tears welled up in my eyes as I realized these were not just pieces of paper; they were pieces of my father, his thoughts, his hopes, and his love. For the first time, I felt a deep connection with him, as if he were right there with me, guiding me through the house he built with his own hands.
语法运用：
1.定语从句: “that were addressed to my mother” 用于描述信件的内容，提供具体信息。
2.时间状语从句: “as I realized these were not just pieces of paper” 用于表达讲述者的情感触动和时刻。
3.条件状语从句: “as if he were right there with me” 描述讲述者的感觉，表现父亲仿佛在身边。
4.并列结构: “his thoughts, his hopes, and his love” 列举出父亲信件中的情感，使用并列来强化情感的多样性。
5.非谓语动词: “standing tall and proud” 使用现在分词来描述照片中的父亲形象，使描述更加生动。
6.介词短语: “with two words ‘FROM ARMY’ on it” 使用介词短语来描述信封上的文字，增强细节的具体性。
Paragraph 2:
I pulled out my telephone and made a call to that buyer. As the phone rang, I stared at the photograph of my father, feeling a surge of emotions that I couldn’t quite place. When the buyer answered, I found myself saying, “I’m sorry, but the house is no longer for sale.” The buyer expressed disappointment, but I knew I was making the right choice. Hanging up, I tucked the letters and the photograph back into the envelope, gently placing it into the cardboard box. I walked through the old shack one last time, not as a stranger, but as my father’s son, and I could feel his presence with every step. As I locked the door behind me, I took a deep breath, carrying with me not just the echoes of his silent presence, but the voice of a man I finally understood.
语法运用：
1.时间状语从句: “As the phone rang” 描述电话响起时的情景，为接下来的叙述提供时间背景。
2.宾语从句: “that I couldn’t quite place” 用于描述讲述者无法名状的情绪。
3.让步状语从句: “but I knew I was making the right choice” 表达尽管买家失望，但讲述者确信自己的决定是正确的。
4.非谓语动词: “feeling a surge of emotions” 使用现在分词短语描述讲述者看到父亲照片时的情感波动。
5.对比结构: “not as a stranger, but as my father’s son” 使用对比结构突出讲述者身份的转变。
6.强调结构: “not just the echoes of his silent presence, but the voice of a man I finally understood” 使用强调结构强化讲述者对父亲的理解和情感升华。
写作要点细化
1. 主题的把握与深化
明确核心主题：在续写中，明确核心主题是“与父亲的连接和情感的重建”。确保续写段落中的每一部分都在围绕这个主题展开。
情感递进：从初始的冷漠和陌生感到遗物引发的怀旧，再到发现父亲信件时的感动，最后达到情感的升华。要注意每一步情感递进的自然性，避免突然转折。
内心感悟的深度：通过讲述者发现父亲的信件和照片等，触发对父亲的深入理解和感悟，从中感受到父亲的爱与期望，最终实现与父亲的精神和解。
2. 细节描写与场景营造
细致的物件描写：对信件、照片、老屋内的布置进行细致描写。这些细节不仅仅是物品，而是情感的载体。比如，描述信件的泛黄、文字的褪色，暗示时间的流逝和记忆的沉淀。
环境氛围：通过环境描写增强怀旧感。比如，老屋内部昏暗的光线、破碎的窗户、落满灰尘的家具等，都可以烘托出时间带来的变迁和讲述者的心境。
光影效果：利用光影变化来反映情感的转折。例如，昏暗中透进的一束光，可以象征讲述者心中情感的苏醒和对父亲的重新认识。
3. 人物塑造与情感共鸣
讲述者的内心独白：在续写中加入讲述者的内心独白，让读者看到他的思考和情感变化。例如，在看到父亲信件时，可以写出他的矛盾、惊讶和最后的感动。
父亲的形象重塑：通过遗物中的信件和照片，重塑父亲的形象。之前是个寡言的军人，通过这些物件，我们可以感受到他对家庭的爱和对未来的期待，这些都是讲述者从未意识到的。
情感的双向互动：讲述者与父亲的情感在发现遗物时产生互动，这种互动是通过物件完成的。表现出讲述者对父亲的情感逐步加深，从陌生到理解，最后到一种精神上的和解。
4. 结构安排与逻辑顺畅
情节的顺序安排：确保续写内容的逻辑顺畅，从发现信件，到产生情感触动，再到做出决定不卖房子。情节发展应符合情感的递进，避免情节跳跃或突兀的转折。
过渡句的使用：在不同场景之间使用过渡句，使叙述自然流畅。例如，从房屋内部的探索转到情感的内心独白，可以使用“随着视线的移动，我的思绪也在漂流”这样的过渡句。
结尾的呼应与总结：续写的结尾应对情感和主题进行总结和呼应。可以通过讲述者锁上房门的动作，象征着他对这段记忆的珍藏与对父亲的最终理解，形成情感的闭环。
5. 语言风格的统一与生动
保持原文风格：原文风格温情且带有一丝怀旧感，续写部分要保持这一风格。避免使用过于现代或过于冷静的语言，保持语言的情感色彩。
使用比喻和拟人：通过比喻和拟人手法使语言更加生动。例如，把老屋比作“时间的守护者”，使之象征父亲对家庭的保护和期望。
适当的感官描写：除了视觉，还可以加入听觉、触觉等感官描写，使文章更加立体。比如，描述老屋的木板咯吱声，信纸的粗糙触感，这些都能增强读者的代入感。
写作指导实例
在续写过程中，可以按以下步骤进行细化：
1.开篇：通过讲述者对老屋的最后一瞥，引入发现信件和照片的场景。使用细致的物件描写，表现出发现这些物品时的震撼和触动。
2.中段：详细描写讲述者对信件内容的阅读过程，通过信件内容逐步揭示父亲的个性和情感，强化讲述者对父亲的重新认识。
3.高潮：情感的高峰在于讲述者意识到父亲对家人的深情和未曾表达的爱。在这一段中，要将讲述者的内心世界打开，让读者看到他的转变和成长。
4.结尾：讲述者做出不卖房子的决定，并通过关上门的动作象征性地将过去与现在连接，展现情感的完整闭环。
From my memory, my father was a man of few words and we were never close to each other. Before he joined the army, he built a house with his own hands. When he was tragically killed in one battle, the house became mine. As the house aged, it became a relic of the past, and we moved away, carrying with me the echoes of his silent presence.
One day, someone called, saying that he wanted to buy that house. I said yes.
Before we reached a deal, I thought it a must to check out the old shack (小屋) first, just in case something of value had been left behind. My two young sons followed along, and we waded through the tall grass in the mead ow where the old house sat. Time had taken its toll. The front porch had collapsed in on itself, most of the windows were gone, and the siding was falling off. We entered through an open window.
I felt as though I had chanced upon a time capsule (胶囊). Here lay the things of my dad’s lives. A broken chair. Some old clothes. But the thing that drew my eye was acardboard box stuffed with papers. I dug through its contents and was instantly transported back in time. There was a tax return from 1975. Greeting cards from old relatives and friends.
I spent most of a pleasant hour going through that box. All the while, I had to answer a stream of questions from my sons about the old house. They were amazed that nine people once occupied the tiny structure. And they shivered when I told them that in those days the cook stove was the only source of heat.
There’s nothing of value had been left, I confirmed. So we came back. The house once again enjoyed the lonely solitude of our meadow.
Then the paying day came. For no reason, maybe some reason, I came to that old house to say goodbye to something.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卷的相应位置作答。
As I stood in the house my eye was drawn to a big yellowed envelope with two words “FROMARMY” on it.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
I pulled out my telephone and made a call to that buyer.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
01
情节梳理
主要人物：讲述者（父亲已故，育有两个儿子），父亲（已故军人），两个儿子。
事件发展：
1.讲述者回忆父亲生前寡言少语，和父亲关系疏远。父亲在参军前亲手建了一座小屋，战斗中牺牲后，小屋成为了讲述者的遗产。
2.随着时间的流逝，小屋变得老旧残破，讲述者决定出售这座房子。
3.在与买家达成协议之前，讲述者和两个儿子前往旧屋检查是否有遗留的有价值物品。旧屋年久失修，但讲述者在屋内找到一个装满纸张的纸箱。
4.讲述者翻阅纸箱内容时回忆起往昔岁月，有1975年的税表和老亲友的贺卡，沉浸在怀旧的时光中。
5.两个儿子对旧屋的历史充满好奇，不断询问问题，尤其对当时生活的艰辛感到惊讶。
6.讲述者确认没有有价值的东西后，带着儿子离开，旧屋再次陷入孤寂。
7.在买家支付日，讲述者心血来潮，决定再次前往旧屋做最后的告别。
02
主题分析
怀旧与父爱：文章通过讲述者对父亲建造的小屋的探索与回忆，表现了对逝去时光的怀念和对父亲的复杂情感。尽管生前与父亲不够亲近，但讲述者通过老屋的遗物与父亲重新建立了某种连接。
时间的流逝与情感的唤醒：时间让房子变得破旧，也模糊了讲述者与父亲之间的记忆，但通过物件的发现，这些模糊的记忆得以重新浮现并被珍惜。
03
情感分析
讲述者的情感变化：从最初的疏远和对房子的冷淡，到在翻阅旧物时的怀旧与感慨，再到最后的告别中的复杂情感，讲述者经历了一个情感的升华过程。
家庭和代际传承：讲述者的两个儿子对旧屋的好奇也显示出代际间的情感传递，尽管他们未曾见过祖父，但通过父亲的讲述，他们也与这段家族历史产生了连接。
续写内容及详细语法分析
Paragraph 1:
As I stood in the house, my eye was drawn to a big yellowed envelope with two words “FROM ARMY” on it. I carefully picked it up, my hands trembling slightly, and opened the flap. Inside were several faded letters and a black-and-white photograph of my father in his uniform, standing tall and proud. The letters were addressed to my mother, filled with promises of coming home soon and dreams of a future together. I could almost hear my father's voice, soft yet strong, echoing in the silent room. Tears welled up in my eyes as I realized these were not just pieces of paper; they were pieces of my father, his thoughts, his hopes, and his love. For the first time, I felt a deep connection with him, as if he were right there with me, guiding me through the house he built with his own hands.
语法运用：
1.定语从句: “that were addressed to my mother” 用于描述信件的内容，提供具体信息。
2.时间状语从句: “as I realized these were not just pieces of paper” 用于表达讲述者的情感触动和时刻。
3.条件状语从句: “as if he were right there with me” 描述讲述者的感觉，表现父亲仿佛在身边。
4.并列结构: “his thoughts, his hopes, and his love” 列举出父亲信件中的情感，使用并列来强化情感的多样性。
5.非谓语动词: “standing tall and proud” 使用现在分词来描述照片中的父亲形象，使描述更加生动。
6.介词短语: “with two words ‘FROM ARMY’ on it” 使用介词短语来描述信封上的文字，增强细节的具体性。
Paragraph 2:
I pulled out my telephone and made a call to that buyer. As the phone rang, I stared at the photograph of my father, feeling a surge of emotions that I couldn’t quite place. When the buyer answered, I found myself saying, “I’m sorry, but the house is no longer for sale.” The buyer expressed disappointment, but I knew I was making the right choice. Hanging up, I tucked the letters and the photograph back into the envelope, gently placing it into the cardboard box. I walked through the old shack one last time, not as a stranger, but as my father’s son, and I could feel his presence with every step. As I locked the door behind me, I took a deep breath, carrying with me not just the echoes of his silent presence, but the voice of a man I finally understood.
语法运用：
1.时间状语从句: “As the phone rang” 描述电话响起时的情景，为接下来的叙述提供时间背景。
2.宾语从句: “that I couldn’t quite place” 用于描述讲述者无法名状的情绪。
3.让步状语从句: “but I knew I was making the right choice” 表达尽管买家失望，但讲述者确信自己的决定是正确的。
4.非谓语动词: “feeling a surge of emotions” 使用现在分词短语描述讲述者看到父亲照片时的情感波动。
5.对比结构: “not as a stranger, but as my father’s son” 使用对比结构突出讲述者身份的转变。
6.强调结构: “not just the echoes of his silent presence, but the voice of a man I finally understood” 使用强调结构强化讲述者对父亲的理解和情感升华。
写作要点细化
1. 主题的把握与深化
明确核心主题：在续写中，明确核心主题是“与父亲的连接和情感的重建”。确保续写段落中的每一部分都在围绕这个主题展开。
情感递进：从初始的冷漠和陌生感到遗物引发的怀旧，再到发现父亲信件时的感动，最后达到情感的升华。要注意每一步情感递进的自然性，避免突然转折。
内心感悟的深度：通过讲述者发现父亲的信件和照片等，触发对父亲的深入理解和感悟，从中感受到父亲的爱与期望，最终实现与父亲的精神和解。
2. 细节描写与场景营造
细致的物件描写：对信件、照片、老屋内的布置进行细致描写。这些细节不仅仅是物品，而是情感的载体。比如，描述信件的泛黄、文字的褪色，暗示时间的流逝和记忆的沉淀。
环境氛围：通过环境描写增强怀旧感。比如，老屋内部昏暗的光线、破碎的窗户、落满灰尘的家具等，都可以烘托出时间带来的变迁和讲述者的心境。
光影效果：利用光影变化来反映情感的转折。例如，昏暗中透进的一束光，可以象征讲述者心中情感的苏醒和对父亲的重新认识。
3. 人物塑造与情感共鸣
讲述者的内心独白：在续写中加入讲述者的内心独白，让读者看到他的思考和情感变化。例如，在看到父亲信件时，可以写出他的矛盾、惊讶和最后的感动。
父亲的形象重塑：通过遗物中的信件和照片，重塑父亲的形象。之前是个寡言的军人，通过这些物件，我们可以感受到他对家庭的爱和对未来的期待，这些都是讲述者从未意识到的。
情感的双向互动：讲述者与父亲的情感在发现遗物时产生互动，这种互动是通过物件完成的。表现出讲述者对父亲的情感逐步加深，从陌生到理解，最后到一种精神上的和解。
4. 结构安排与逻辑顺畅
情节的顺序安排：确保续写内容的逻辑顺畅，从发现信件，到产生情感触动，再到做出决定不卖房子。情节发展应符合情感的递进，避免情节跳跃或突兀的转折。
过渡句的使用：在不同场景之间使用过渡句，使叙述自然流畅。例如，从房屋内部的探索转到情感的内心独白，可以使用“随着视线的移动，我的思绪也在漂流”这样的过渡句。
结尾的呼应与总结：续写的结尾应对情感和主题进行总结和呼应。可以通过讲述者锁上房门的动作，象征着他对这段记忆的珍藏与对父亲的最终理解，形成情感的闭环。
5. 语言风格的统一与生动
保持原文风格：原文风格温情且带有一丝怀旧感，续写部分要保持这一风格。避免使用过于现代或过于冷静的语言，保持语言的情感色彩。
使用比喻和拟人：通过比喻和拟人手法使语言更加生动。例如，把老屋比作“时间的守护者”，使之象征父亲对家庭的保护和期望。
适当的感官描写：除了视觉，还可以加入听觉、触觉等感官描写，使文章更加立体。比如，描述老屋的木板咯吱声，信纸的粗糙触感，这些都能增强读者的代入感。
写作指导实例
在续写过程中，可以按以下步骤进行细化：
1.开篇：通过讲述者对老屋的最后一瞥，引入发现信件和照片的场景。使用细致的物件描写，表现出发现这些物品时的震撼和触动。
2.中段：详细描写讲述者对信件内容的阅读过程，通过信件内容逐步揭示父亲的个性和情感，强化讲述者对父亲的重新认识。
3.高潮：情感的高峰在于讲述者意识到父亲对家人的深情和未曾表达的爱。在这一段中，要将讲述者的内心世界打开，让读者看到他的转变和成长。
4.结尾：讲述者做出不卖房子的决定，并通过关上门的动作象征性地将过去与现在连接，展现情感的完整闭环。