读后续写之“改变与成长”主旨句导学案
必背素材
第一类：学习知识促“改变与成长”
It's never too late to learn. Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and
make more attempts.
学习永远为时不晚。每个人都有权利去接受更多的挑战，做更多的尝试。
【分析】individual意为“个人;个体”；make more attempts意为“做更多的尝试”。
第二类：发挥天赋促“改变与成长”
Actually, every individual possesses talent. Be brave when you find it and also make
efforts. You can create miracles in the end.
事实上，每个人都有天赋。当你发现它的时候要勇敢，也要付出努力。最终你会创造奇迹。
【分析】possess意为“拥有”；create miracles意为“创造奇迹”。
第三类：追逐梦想促“改变与成长”
It's never too late to go for your dream. As long as you grasp every opportunity and
take full advantage of it, you will stand a chance to realize your dream.
追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会，充分利用机会，你就有机会实现梦想。
【分析】take full advantage of 意为“充分利用”；realize your dream意为“实现你的梦想”。
第四类：克服困难促“改变与成长”
The journey to success is not smooth. It is full of challenges and difficulties. We
should be brave to face them. As long as we don't give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal finally.
通往成功的路不会平坦。这条路充满挑战和艰辛。我们要勇敢面对。只要我们不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难，我们最终会实现我们的目标。
【分析】smooth 意为“平坦的”；overcome all the difficulties 意为“克服所有困难”；make every effort意为“竭尽全力”；as long as意为“只要”，引导条件状语从句。
第五类：战胜恐惧促“改变与成长”
Determination and optimism are what it takes to conquer your fear and accomplish your goal. 战胜恐惧和实现目标，需要决心和乐观。
【分析】conquer your fear 意为“克服你的恐惧”；accomplish your goal 意为“实现你的目标”。
第六类：战胜自卑促“改变与成长”
I smiled as I eventually realized the real source of confidence. Now, I am proud of
what I look like and much happier, because I have realized it is your personality that decides who you truly are.
我笑了，因为我最终意识到了自信的真正来源。现在，我为我的样子感到骄傲，而且更快乐，因为我已经意识到，决定你真正是谁的是你的个性。
【分析】eventually意为“最后；终于”；personality意为“个性”。
第七类：战胜消极促“改变与成长”
Attitude is more important than facts for us. We cannot change our past; we cannot
change the facts. However, the only thing we can do is hold a positive attitude.
态度对我们来说比事实更重要。 我们不能改变我们的过去；我们不能改变事实。然而，我们唯一能做的就是保持积极的态度。
【分析】positive attitude意为“积极的态度”。
模拟练习
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Sometimes your biggest weakness can become your biggest strength. Everyone has his own weakness, but life always offers his unexpected strength in his misfortune. We'd make full use of it just like the girl below; we are certainly fortunate to be given other blessings.
This is a story of one girl who decided to study judo (柔道) despite the fact that she had lost her left arm in a car accident. The girl began lessons with an old Japanese judo instructor. The girl was doing well. But she couldn't understand why, after three months of training, the instructor had taught her only one move.
“Instructor,” the girl finally said,“shouldn't I learn more moves It isn't far enough to learn just this.”
“This is the only move you know, but this is the only move you'll ever need to know,”the instructor replied.
Not quite understanding, but believing in her instructor, the girl kept training. She didn't dare to complain about anything and it was apparent that since her instructor said so,she had to follow without any unhappiness.
Several months later, the instructor took the girl to her first tournament. Surprising herself, the girl easily won her first two matches. The third match proved to be more difficult, but after some time, her opponent became impatient and charged. The girl skillfully used her one move to win the match. Still amazed by her success, the girl was in the finals.
This time, her opponent was bigger, stronger and more experienced. For a while, the girl appeared to be defeated. Concerned that the girl might get hurt, the referee (裁 判) called a timeout. She was about to stop the match when the instructor interrupted.
“No,” the instructor insisted,“let her continue.”
Soon after the match started again, her opponent made a critical mistake: she dropped her guard. Instantly, the girl used her move to hold her opponent tightly. The girl had won the match and the tournament. She was the champion.
注意：（1）续写词数应为 150 左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1: On the way home, the girl and her instructor reviewed every move in each and every match.
Paragraph 2: “Two reasons account for your win,”the instructor answered.
一、故事梳理
这篇文章是以第三人称的视角讲述一个失去左臂的女孩学习柔道的故事。经过
三个月的训练，老师只教了她一个动作。她却凭借这一关键动作参加比赛并赢得冠军。我们可以用“5W原则”来分析文章结构和内容：
二、语言分析
通过观察我们发现原文开头第一段就是主旨段，点明了文章的主题和意义，这为
我们的续写情节设计奠定了基础并指明了方向。
1. Sometimes your biggest weakness can become your biggest strength.（Para. 1）
有时候，你最大的弱点会成为你最大的力量。
2. Everyone has his own weakness, but life always offers his unexpected strength in
his misfortune.（Para. 1）
每个人都有他自己的弱点，但生活总是在他的不幸中给予他意想不到的力量。
3. We 'd make full use of it just like the girl below; we are certainly fortunate to be
given other blessings（. Para. 1）
我们应该像下面的女孩一样充分利用它；我们当然很幸运，能得到更多祝福。
参考范文
（加黑部分为主旨句。）
Paragraph 1:
On the way home, the girl and her instructor reviewed every move in each and every
match. Then the girl took courage to ask what was really on her mind.“Instructor, how did I win the tournament with only one move Is there any magic power about it Is my opponent much weaker than me Please tell me the secret.” She couldn't wait to know the answer,but the instructor appeared unhurried. Finally, he opened his mouth.
Paragraph 2:
“Two reasons account for your win,”the instructor answered.“First, you've almost mastered one of the most difficult throws in all of judo. Second, the only known defense for that move is for your opponent to grab your left arm.” Hearing these words, she was suddenly enlightened. The journey to success is not smooth. It is full of challenges and difficulties. We should be brave to face our weaknesses. As long as we don't give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, our weaknesses can also become our strengths.读后续写之“互助类”话题素材积累
一、助人动作
在互助类的主题中，一定会描写的是具体帮助的行为，面对一个难题，想要解决它，不能轻描淡写，否则体现不了互助的意义，为了使得描写生动、具体，我们在描写中应当掌握对于“一连串动作”的写法。
具体格式为：“非谓语动词作状语，v1，v2 and v3”，表达“做完某件事情，动作1、动作2和动作3。”，其实本质上就是非谓语和谓语的灵活调配，具体的动作数量可以根据实际的情况做增减。如：
1. Hearing this, she ran back to their truck and returned with a bulging paper bag in her hand. She generously handed it to me, grinning, “Here is a sandwich. Hope you enjoy it and have a nice day!’
听到这个消息，她跑回他们的卡车，回来时手里拿着一个鼓鼓囊囊的纸袋。她很慷慨地递给我，笑嘻嘻地说:“给你一块三明治。希望你喜欢它，有一个美好的一天!”
2. Seeing what was going on, my dad reached into his pocket, pulled out a $20 bill and dropped it onto the ground. Then he picked it up, tapped the man on the shoulder and said, “Excuse me, sir, this fell out of your pocket.”
看到所发生的事，爸爸把手伸进口袋，掏出一张20美元的钞票扔在地上。然后他捡起来，拍了拍那个人的肩膀说：“对不起，先生，这个从您的口袋里掉出来了。”
二、互助心理
在互助类主题中，施助的人和受助的人的心理活动是必不可少的环节，但其中两个身份的人的心理是不一样的，我们在描写施助者的心理时，应该着重描写“责任感”“自豪”和“个人成长”；而受助者则应该侧重于他们的“无助”“焦虑”以及得到帮助后的“感激”。
如：
1. A deep sense of anxiety/helplessness/hopelessness (desperation)/embarrassment arose in my heart and quickly overwhelmed/flooded over me.
一阵焦虑/无助/绝望/尴尬出现在我的内心并快速席卷了我。（受助者——绝望）
2. With the whole thing turning around, he breathed a sigh of relief/his face lit up with pleasure.
随着整件事情出现转机，他宽慰地松了一口气/他的脸庞闪烁着喜悦的光。（受助者——放松）
3. I felt extremely/most grateful to the man for extending a helping hand. At that moment, my heart melted by their kindness.
我极其感谢那个给我施与援手的人。在那一刻，我的心被他的善良所融化。（受助者感激）
4. Knowing/Sensing what he is going through, I gave him a(n) reassuring/ sympathetic/ understanding look and made up my mind to help him/assist him/lend him a hand.
了解到了情况，我给了他一个放宽心/同情/理解的表情，并且下定了决心要帮助他。（施助者——同情）
5. Not only did I feel happy for their dream coming true, but I also took pride in myself because I acted like a hero.
我不仅为他的梦想实现而高兴，同时我也自豪于自己英雄般的举动。（施助者——自豪）
三、价值主题
“互助类”主题在文章结尾进行价值升华时，同学们容易掉入救题论题的圈子里，往往不能上升文章主题，想到更深一层的价值上升角度。这里介绍给大家一个很好用的角度，那就是“传递帮助”。尤其是在文章材料已经标明“大环境不好”“经济萧条”等负面信息的情况下，受到帮助的人因此而得到了解救，所以应该要想到把这种互助的精神继续传递，改善他们，这不仅是出题者的用意，同时也符合我们的核心价值。
如：
1. He did not forget the help of Meredith’s family, and he also did what he could to help those in need.
他并没有忘记Meredith一家的帮助，并且他也做了力所能及的事情去帮助需要帮助的人。
2. From then on, every time I eat sandwiches, I am reminded of the Mexican family, who offered others help without asking for anything.
从那一刻起，每当我吃起三明治，我都会想起墨西哥一家，他们帮助了别人又不索取任何回报。
3. I am determined to follow their example, passing the warm kindness to people in need.
我决定要以他们为榜样，把这种温暖与的善意传递给需要帮助的人。
4. It makes us proud to help others, and we realize a truth: Roses given, fragrance in hand.
这让我们以帮助别人为荣，并且我们明白了一个真理：赠人玫瑰，手有余香。
勤学巧练
仿写
1. 助人动作：听到我肚子发出的声音，她跑回他们的卡车，拿着一个鼓鼓的纸袋子跑了出来，然后慷慨地递到了我手里，说到“这里是一个三明治，享用吧！”
2.助人心理：打开包裹，里面是一个三明治和我之前给他们的20美元。我的心被他们的善良融化了。
3. 价值主题：我决定要以他们为榜样，把这种温暖与的善意传递给需要帮助的人。
练习:
1.Hearing the grumble of my stomach, she ran back to their truck, returned with a bulging paper bag in her hand and then generously handed it to me. "Here is a sandwich, enjoy!", said she.
2. The paper bag was opened and in front of me were a sweet sandwich and the previous $20 bill I had given to them. My heart melted by their kindness.
3.I am determined to follow their example, passing the warm kindness to people in need.读后续写之“家庭类”话题描写要点和步骤
一、对话描写
语言描写在我们的“续写”中无处不在，但是同学们写作时错误频出，下面需要指出几个常见的问题：（一）续写中尽量不要描写对话。因为在所有的原版名著中，对话都是另起一行出现的，续写只给我们两个自然段，所以不要用大篇的你来我往的对话，这样难以撑起文章。（二）在描写语言的时候，一要注意标点符号的正确使用，二要关注双引号前后的“said”使用时的词语升级替换，避免文章生硬。
(1)“said”类
“said”后除了可以直接补充人物的声音、神态描写之外，还可以添加动作描写，使得对话更加逼真，具有立体的画面感：
表达方式 范例（生气地说）
“…,” sb. said / “Give me the toy,” Mike said.
+ adv. “Give me the toy,” Mike said angrily.
+ with + n. “Give me the toy,” Mike said with anger.
+ in a + adj. + tone/voice “Give me the toy,” Mike said in an angry tone/voice.
+ sb.’s voice + adj. “Give me the toy,” Mike said, his voice annoyed.
基本结构：说话内容 + 谁说的 + 怎么说的 + 说话同时在做什么
如：“Give me the toy,” Mike said.
“Give me the toy,” Mike said, eyes staring at the toy in Amy’s hands.
勤学巧练
根据括号中的中文提示，在横线上补全句子
1. “Happy Mother’s Day!” The twins said,
(眼中闪烁着兴奋的光芒).
2. “Oh dear, thank you my sweeties. What a big surprise!” Mom said,
(亲吻两个孩子，灿烂地笑了).
3. “Just keep it! You have grown up.” My father
(拍了拍我的肩膀).
(2) 动作展示类
用可以展示说话方式或原因的动词，代替“said”，使得说话的动作描绘更加具体、
准确。如：
说话方式
sigh 叹息 sniff 嗤之以鼻 yell 吼叫 shout 喊出 blurted out 脱口而出 choked out 哽咽着说 stammer 结结巴巴地说 repeat 重复地说 whisper 轻声说 mumble 咕哝 exclaim 大声说出 echo 回响
说话原因
declare 宣称 announce 郑重地说 reason 理性地说 explain 解释 congratulate 祝贺 apologize 道歉 beg 乞求 add 补充道 promise 承诺 question 提问 reply 回复
勤学巧练
根据括号中的中文提示，在横线上补全句子
1.“我很抱歉，爸爸。我们把厨房弄得一团糟，杰夫的手被烫伤了。”詹娜低声说。
“I’m so sorry, Dad. We made a mess in the kitchen and Jeff had his hand burned.”
Jenna .
2.“母亲节快乐!”这对双胞胎祝贺道。
“Happy Mother’s Day!” The twins .
3.“母亲节快乐，亲爱的妈妈!”他们拥抱着她，补充道“我们爱你！”
“Happy Mother’s Day, dear Mummy!” The twins hugged their mother, and
“We love you so much!”
二、情绪描写
在家庭关系的情绪描写中，我们往往都会经历三个阶段：开始面对矛盾的“愁苦”、中间醒悟之后的“羞愧”和最后达成和解的“欣慰”。
主题一：“节日惊喜”
主要情节 筹备受挫→重振旗鼓→皆大欢喜
人物心理 失落、懊悔 坚定、紧张 感动、感恩
中心思想 感恩无私付出，用惊喜传递爱
主题二：“代际沟通”
主要情节 问题显现→真诚沟通→重归于好/收获成长
人物心理 冷漠、抗拒 惊讶、羞愧 理解、欣慰
中心思想 用真诚、有效的沟通表达，赢回家庭的温暖或个人的成长
1. 开端 ——“愁苦”
(1) 父亲惊讶地伫立着，皱着眉头地盯着眼前的情景。
Astonished, Father was rooted on the floor, staring at the scene with eyebrow frowning.
(2) 当我回到家，我发现我的父母一直在叹息，他们的眉头紧皱。
When I got home, I found my parents kept sighing, their frown deepened.
2. 推进 ——“羞愧”或“不安”
(1) 她羞愧得低下头，流下了愧疚的眼泪。
So ashamed was she that she shed guilty tears with head drooping.
(2) Jeff结结巴巴地说出了他们的计划，脸涨得通红。
Jeff stammered out their plan, his face flushing.
3. 转折 ——“惊喜”或“欣慰”
(1) 当她看到早餐时，她的眼睛睁得大大的，闪烁着笑意。
When she saw the breakfast, her eyes widened up and sparked with amusement.
(2) 爸爸看到我所做的，愣了一会儿，然后把我抱在怀里说：“你真的长大了。”
Seeing what I was doing, Dad froze there for a moment but soon he gathered me into
his arms, “You’ve really grown up.”
三、主题升华
在最后段落的结尾处，往往刻画的是一个家庭和谐、矛盾解决的画面。给到大家几个可以使用的升华句：
1. 整个房间沐浴在母亲节快乐的气氛中。
The whole room was bathed in a happy Mother's Day atmosphere.
2. 就在那一天，我才意识到，爸爸在我这个年纪所取得的成就要比我伟大得多。
It was on that day that I realized what Dad had accomplished at my age was
much greater than I did.
3. 在那一刻，我确信我们彼此理解，我意识到我已经长大了，可以承担家庭的责任。
At that moment, I was sure we understood each other and I realized I was
grown-up enough to shoulder family responsibility.
勤学巧练
仿写
1. 愁苦情绪：我的眼睛闪烁着光芒但是一想到我要把钱上交我的心立刻沉了下去。
2.感到尴尬：每一年，我的学费都是一项巨大的家庭开支。“儿子，为你骄傲！”我的父亲给了我一个大大的拥抱。然而，我的脸却因为自私而红了。
3. 价值主题：“留着它，你已经长大了”父亲拍了拍我的肩膀。就在那一刻，我确信我们理解了对方，以及我意识到了我已经长大到足够肩负家庭的责任了。读后续写之“契诃夫的枪”的写作技巧
If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it’s not going to be fired, it shouldn’t be hanging there.
—Anton Chekhov
如果你在第一章中说墙上挂着一支步枪，那么在第二章或第三章中，它绝对必须开火。如果它不会被点燃，就不应该挂在那。
—安东·契诃夫
“契诃夫的枪”这一理论本来是用来建议剧作家们在创作剧本时，要避开一切无关的可能会误导观众的细节，不让观众产生不必要的期待。而后被广泛提及，正面运用于创作中，用来指一个看似无关紧要但后来对故事很重要的细节，成为了推理小说中常用的一种手法，用来预示罪犯的身份。
运用“契诃夫的枪”的写作技巧，完成下面这篇短文续写。
A cookie thief
It was late and raining heavily one night. A young woman was waiting for her flight at an airport. She was leaving for London because she got a new job there. It was said that her new boss was a typical English gentleman—polite, modest, humorous and considerate. She was excited as well as a little nervous about her new life.
With several long hours before her flight, the woman hunted for a book in the airport shops, bought a packet of cookies and found a place to sit. She took out a book and started to read. Although she was absorbed in her book, she happened to see that the man sitting beside her, as bold as he could be, grabbed a cookie or two from the bag in between them. Educated to be wellmannered, she tried to ignore it to avoid an argument. But to show that she was the owner, she started to take cookies from that bag too. Unfortunately, the man didn’t get that hint(暗示), since he didn’t stop grabbing the cookies.
“How annoying!” She thought. As the greedy cookie thief kept eating, the woman munched(用力咀嚼) some cookies and watched the clock.
She was getting angrier as the minutes went by, thinking, “If I weren't so nice, I would blacken his eyes.” With each cookie she took, he took one, too; when only one was left, she wondered what he would do.
With a smile on his face, and a nervous laugh, he took the last cookie and broke it in half. He offered her a half, and ate the other. She grabbed it from him, glared at him and thought, “Oh, brother. This guy has some nerve and he is so rude! Why he didn't even show any gratefulness ”
She had never known when she had been so angry, and sighed in relief when her flight was called. She gathered her belongings and headed to the gate quickly, refusing to look back at the rude thief. She boarded the plane, sank in her seat, and looked for her book, which was almost complete.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请用横线标出原文中你所认为的“契诃夫的枪”；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph 1: As she reached in her baggage, she gasped(喘气) with surprise.
Paragraph 2: Surprisingly, she found the man sitting just behind her.
参考答案:
1.文中“契诃夫的枪”:gentleman; the woman; packet of cookies; the man ; cookie thief; a nervous laugh; the plane
2.参考范文: Paragraph 1:
As she reached in her baggage. she gasped with surprise. She took it out carefully and was surprised to see her own packet of cookies. At that moment, the woman was so ashamed that she covered her face with mouth open widely and face turning red instantly. The plane seemed to stop there rooted to the spot. “Why had I ridiculously considered him as a cookie thief ” “I owe him a sincere apology", she thought. Just as she was blank in her head, suddenly, a soft and clear voice, "Excuse me, Lady", woke her up to the real world. She looked back instinctively to see who he was.
Paragraph 2:
Surprisingly. she found the man siting just behind her. It was the man who, she thought, was rude and ate her cookies, smiling at her. She lowered a bit of her body shamefully, hesitated for a moment and introduced herself nervously. After further communication, she was surprised to find the gentleman was actually his new boss in London. She was struck dead with embarrassment with heart beating painfully fast and banging against her ribs. All the air seemed to disappear and she felt as if the whole world were watching her. Seeing her embarrassment and nervousness, the considerate boss calmed her down patiently and asked her to discuss her new job ahead of time.“What a coincidence! What an unforgivable mistake!", she thought.
点评
一位年轻的女士正准备前往伦敦入职新工作。然而在候机时，她却发现旁边的男人在“偷吃她的饼干”。而当她生气地登机后，却发现自己的饼干还在包里，反而自己刚才吃的是那个男人的饼干，无意间错怪了他。而更尴尬的是，女士发现两人座位一前一后，聊天中发现这个人竟是自己的新老板!这里的“契诃夫的枪”正是原文中“the new boss”。这个角色及其性格描述出现在原文一个无关紧要甚至突兀的地方，若不是写作的线索，便不用在此处浪费笔墨。因此“he new boss”一角定是推动续写展开的关键因素，并且原文中所介绍的老板的性格特点也很大程度上指引了后续情节的走向。结合范文一“boss”身份在文末得到了揭示，与原文开头的出场相呼应，设计十分巧妙。读后续写之“遇险类”话题描写步骤
一、遭遇危险
在遭遇危险的时候，一定要描写的就是人物的心理，“害怕”一定是遭遇险境之中的第一反应，笔者建议，除了套话以外，可以加入更加复杂的心理表现，并以A and B的形式出现（如害怕和后悔；害怕和紧张；害怕和不自信等），或者增添描述出现这种心理的原因，显得描写真实、有别于他人，且代入感变强。如：
1. A wave of fear wrapped around /enveloped me.【心理】
一阵恐惧将我团团围住。
2. Tears of fear and regret filled my eyes/ welled up in my eyes.【行为】
恐惧和后悔的泪水噙满我的眼眶。
3. Badly startled at/ frightened by the sudden incident, she was frozen to the spot.
【心理+行为】
受到了突发事件的惊吓，她定在原地动弹不得。
4. The thought that we might have got lost in such darkness sent shivers down my spine.【心理+原因】
想到我们可能要再这样的黑暗中迷失，我不禁全身打起了冷颤。
二、出现转机
心理描写过后，笔触要再次落回剧情的发展来推动节奏，所以不要有太多的废话，直接描写事件出现的转机。想象一下我们在一个深邃的洞穴里看到光亮，既然是转机，通常就需要交代两个事件，“深邃的洞穴”和“光亮的出现”，所以需要一个背景的铺垫，以及一个事件的主题。两种句式都非常好用，第一种：介宾作状语（铺垫），主句（转机）；第二种：从句，特别是时间状语从句，可以非常好的增加句子的节奏感。如：
1. After what seemed like ages, we heard a faint voice from the distance.【介词+宾从】
仿佛过了几个世纪，我们听到了远处微弱的声音。
2. It seemed a century had passed when the sound of water in the distance caught
our attention.【时间状语从句】
仿佛一个世纪过去了，就在这时远处的水声引起了我们的注意力。
3. Just as we were at the point of desperation, we heard a faint voice in the distance.【时间状语从句】
就在我们绝望的那一刻，我们听到了远处微弱的声音。
4. Just as we were pondering upon how to seek a way out, a brilliant idea flashed
through my mind:...【时间状语从句】
就在我们苦苦思索如果逃脱的时候，一个绝妙的想法闪过我的脑海：……
5. About 10 minutes later, the rabbit had completely gone out of our sight when we
finally realized that we got lost.【时间状语从句】
十分钟以后，就在兔子已经完全消失在我们的视线中的时候，我们终于意识到，我们迷路了。
6. Fortunately, it suddenly occurred to me/ hit me/ strike me that the river could
lead us to the camp.【主语从句】
幸运的是，我突然有了一个想法！那就是河水可以将我们引回营地。
三、脱离危险
在完全脱离了险境后，我们可以描写喜悦激动的心情，再写作者感想；当然也可以适当留白，只写到险境结束的标示性场景，再以作者感想作为文章结尾，都会是高效且好操作的手段。 如：
1. I cried with great joy and excitement. 【行为+心理】
我喜极而泣。
2. With the farm house coming into view (with sth doing), we both breathed a sigh of relief.【标志性场景】
随着农场印入眼帘，我们都长舒了一口气。
勤学巧练
练习：2018年浙江卷
【故事梗概】正值夏天，父亲带“我”去朋友（Uncle Paul）的农场度假，承诺要给我一个“前所未有”的假期。在农场里“我”还见到了他的妻子Tina,两个孩子Ryan和Kyle。日出起床吃饭劳作，夜晚就在屋内听河流潺潺和蛙声阵阵，非常惬意。一天傍晚爸爸陪“我”骑马外出，叔叔叮嘱我不要走离地上的记号以免迷路。我和爸爸边骑边看，天边云霞璀璨万分……
Para 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
Para 2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.
仿写
1. 遭遇险境：马儿突然受到了惊吓，冲进了漆黑的森林。
2. 出现转机：恐惧的泪水噙满我的眼眶。就在我们绝望的那一刻，我看到了树后面的白色标记！
3. 脱离危险：随着农场微弱的灯光以及那些熟悉的身影进入眼帘，我惊喜地呼唤道，是保罗叔叔！
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练习:1.Badly startled at the sudden incident, the horse rushed forward into the dark
forest.
2. Tears of fear welled up in my eyes. Just as we were at the point of desperation, I spotted the white track right behind the tree.
3. With the faint lights of the farm as well as those familiar figures entering into our view, I cried with great joy “It's Uncle Paul!”读后续写——— 动物篇
素材积累
(一) 词汇
1. roar v. /n. ( 狼、熊、大象等) 咆哮,吼叫
2. howl v. /n. ( 狗、狼等) 长嚎,嗥叫
3. growl v. /n. ( 狗、狼等) 低声怒吼
4. smell /sniff v. 闻/嗅
5. lick /bite v. 舔/咬
6. scratch /rub v. 抓挠/摩擦
7. fur/feather/paw n. 皮毛/羽毛/爪子
8. bark towards…wildly /weakly 朝某个方向……疯狂地/虚弱地叫
9. bark madly at sb. 朝某人疯狂地叫
10. with full strength 用尽全力
11. be surprised / amazed at 感到惊讶、不可思议
12. be concerned about 关心
13. rescue / escape…from…从……救出/逃脱……
14. express one's gratitude 表达感激之情
15. shed tears of relief 流下欣慰的眼泪
16. stretch one's hand 伸出某人的手
17. hug /huddle the dog tightly 紧紧地抱着小狗
18. form/develop a close bond with 与……建立亲密的关系
19. regard…as a friend / a member of family 被当作朋友/家庭成员
20. bend /kneel down 弯腰、蹲下/跪下
21. dash into /towards 冲进/向
22. stroke the pet 抚摸宠物
23. smooth its feather 捋它的羽毛
24. wag its tail merrily 开心地摇尾巴
25. bounce up 上下弹跳
26. little sparkling /twinkling eyes 亮晶晶的小眼睛
二) 句型
1. I was filled with a sense of satisfaction for knowing I have done just the right thing.
我的内心充满了满足感,因为我知道自己做了正确的事。
2. It was on that day that I was aware of the value of responsibility.
正是在那一天,我意识到了责任感的价值。
3. Knowing that they could keep the lovely creature,they gathered around and stroked it gently,their little hearts filled with joy.
得知他们可以拥有那个可爱的小东西,他们环抱在一起,轻轻地抚摸着它,内心充满了喜悦。
4. It was really an unforgettable experience and luckily we didn’t get hurt and escaped successfully.
这真是一次难忘的经历。幸运的是,我们没有受伤,而且成功地脱险了。
5. Sometimes a little kindness can make our world more glorious and harmonious.
有时候,一次小小的善举能让我们的世界变得更加美好与和谐。
语篇微演练
Almost all the possessions had been sold to buy food and clothing for the family.At last,nothing was left but the pet lamb,Daisy. At the thought of parting with the little creature, Mrs. Grant felt sad because the children loved it very much. Having struggled hard,she had to make up her mind to sell the lamb. But she could not ask any child to go for the butcher.Finally, she went herself with a heavy heart,dragging her leaden feet, and bargained with the butcher for the sale of Daisy.
While the children were all playing with the lamb,the butcher and his boy came to the door.“You see I am here for the lamb,” said the butcher in a loud voice. Hearing this,one child ran to her mother's side,and asked what was happening in alarm. Mrs. Grant gently pushed the child aside,bent down and was about to tell the truth.
“That's my lamb now,Charlie! ”said the butcher's boy in a playful tone,going up to Daisy with a rope in his hand.
“No,it is not your lamb. It is ours! ”said Charlie,placing himself in front of it.
But the boy,pushing him aside,threw a rope round Daisy's neck,and began to drag the little creature away. The poor lamb bleated very sadly. The cry of grief which fell upon the mother's ears was too much for her,and her heart sank within her. In a
moment ,begging with tearful eyes,the children were all around their mother with voices choking with sobs for their little pet.
“Pray,tell your boy to stop a moment,”she said in husky tones to the butcher.
The boy,at a word from the butcher,stopped dragging the lamb,and the little creature stopped its bleating.
In a trembling voice,Mrs. Grant explained to them how badly off they were after their father died. She also added that the kind butcher had given the money for Daisy. With this money,she could buy her children bread to eat.
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But the more she explained，the stronger her children begged for Daisy．
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The butcher，who had been watching all，was touched in his heart．
读后续写之社会公益类主题
语篇微演练
参考范文
But the more she explained，the stronger her children begged for Daisy．“Please，mom! Let us keep Daisy! We would rather go hunger than lose her! ”the children pleaded，with tears rolling down their faces． It seemed as if Daisy had been aware of something for it began to bleat again with full strength and cried with greater grief．The children dashed towards the poor creature and hugged it tightly together．With heart bleeding，Mrs． Grant bent down and patted her children, “I know you have formed a close bond with Daisy and regard it as our family member．” Happy
moments with the lovely creature flashed across Mrs.Grant’s mind，
and she struggled． ( 107 words)
The butcher，who had been watching all，was touched in his
heart．“You can keep it，”the butcher made up his mind． Hearing
what he said，the children and Mrs． Grant were all surprised，
unable to believe their ears． The butcher turned to his son and
stretched his hand，“Give me the rope,son.” Reluctantly，the
son obeyed his father．Only when the butcher passed the rope to
Charlie did they realize that he really meant it． “Thank you so
much，sir! ”they expressed their gratitude sincerely． Seeing the
children stroking the pet joyfully，the butcher was filled with a
sense of satisfaction for knowing he had done just the right
thing. ( 106words)
A possible version:
Paragraph 1: That night,I was struck by an idea as I read a graphic novel that all three of us liked.I would be the one toreach out and build a bridge of communication to clear up the misunderstanding.Delighted and excited,I started to draw a story about three good friends just like us. The three friends not only shared their sorrow and happiness but also faced difficulties together. Everyone would play a valuable part when facing challenges,which made them understand that they were stronger together than apart. Inspired by this,I wrote on the last page,“Kash,you are not the one left behind and we value our friendship greatly.”As soon as I finished the story,I couldn’t wait to share my idea with Liya. Then we decided to present Kash with the story and made up with him the next day.
Paragraph 2: The next day,I handed my pages of apology to Kash.As he read through the story and my heartfelt words,I could see a mixture of surprise and gratitude in his eyes.Looking into Kash’s eyes,I broke the silence,“I am sorry. We messed up.
We valued your friendship. ”Liya also made a sincere apology,with face reddening. Slowly, Kash’s gloomy expression transformed into a smile.He reached to hug us,saying “I’m sorry for being so sensitive. ” In the following days,we spent countless hours discussing the books we read, sharing our thoughts and insights. The Battle of the Books became a journey of friendship and growth. From that day on,we realized that sincerity,trust and communication are always the key to clearing up the misunderstanding between friends.读后续写——— 成长主题
一、故事人物的心路历程和行为表现
以“成长”为主题意义的读后续写故事通常出现的人物可分为三方面：主人公、亲友团和陌生人。其中，亲友团指的是同学、朋友、亲人、老师等熟悉的人；陌生人则指的是不熟悉的同学朋友、路人、观众等。
故事人物 心路历程&行为表现
主人公 遇到挫折与挑战→犹豫、紧张、害怕→受到鼓励、得到帮助→振作、鼓起勇气→成功战胜挫折与挑战→感到开心、感谢施助人
亲友团 担心、关心主人公→鼓励、帮助主人公→为主人公取得成功感到开心和骄傲
陌生人 观望、疑惑、嘲笑→鼓励、帮助主人公→被感染、感动，欣赏并赞许主人公
二、语料积累
故事人物 心路历程&行为表现
主人公 1. 犹豫、紧张、害怕 (1) rub one's hands silently/in silent 沉默地搓着手 (2) bite one9s lips 咬嘴唇 (3) feel like butterflies in stomach 感到七上八下 feel like sitting on pins and needles 感到如坐针毡 (5) with doubt 怀疑地 (6) with head drooping 韋拉着脑袋 (7) with heart beating wildly 心在剧烈跳动 (8) with hands shaking and heart pounding 手在发抖， 心在颤抖 2. 振作、鼓起勇气 (1) with eyes glistening 眼睛闪闪发光 (2) cheer up 振作 (3) take a deep breath 深呼吸 (4) sink into deep thought 陷入沉思 (5) look into one^ eyes with determination 坚定地看着某人 (6) gather/pluck up all one's courage 鼓起勇气 (7) determine to do sth.下决心做某事 (8) make up one's mind to do sth.下决心做某事 (9) make every effort to do sth.竭尽全力做某事 3. 成功完成某事战胜困难 (1) make it 达到目标，取得成功 (2) succeed in doing sth.成功完成某事 (3) one’s sweat eventually paid off 汗水最终获得回报 4. 开心、感谢 (1) give sb. a big hug 给予某人大大的拥抱 leap into the air with joy 欢快地跳起来 be immersed in sheer exhilaration 沉浸在喜悦中 express one's heartfelt gratitude 表达真挚的感谢
亲友团 （同学、朋 友、亲人、 老师等） 1. 担忧、关注、鼓励 (1) be concerned about 关心 (2) fix one's eyes on 盯着某人看 (3) encourage sb. to do sth.鼓励某人做某事 (4) look into one's eyes with great care 关切地看着 某人 (5) pat sb. on the shoulder 拍某人的肩膀 2. 开心、感动、骄傲 (1) breathe a sigh of relief 松了一 口气 (2) move into tears 感动得流泪 (3) with satisfaction/approval 满意地/肯定地 (4) be proud of感到骄傲 (5) give sb. a big smile给予一个大大的微笑 (6) give sb. a satisfied look给予某人一个满意的神情
陌生人（观众、路人等） 1. 观望、疑惑、期待 (1) whisper窃窃私语 (2) laugh at sb.嘲笑某人 (3) stare at sb.盯着某人看 (4) cheer for sb.为某人欢呼加油 (5) wonder about 想知道 (6) be confused about 感到疑惑 (7) lean forward 迪 curiosity/expectation 好奇地/期待地向前倾身 2. 感兴趣、感动、欣赏 (1) be interested in 对... 感兴趣 (2) with an approving look on their faces 面带肯定的神色 eyes wide open with admiration 睁大双眼，充满钦佩 Cheers and thunderous applause broke out. 欢呼声和雷鸣般的掌声响起。 The crowd burst into cheers. 人群中爆发出欢呼声。 (6) Everyone cheered.所有人都欢呼起来
语篇微演练
On a hot September afternoon, Peter and his friend Isabel were on their way to the library. When they passed by Tubman park, Isabel suggested cutting through it to get to the library. As they entered the park, the sight of the swings (秋千)and the merry-go-round brought back a flood of memories of their childhood spent there. But now everything looked so old, sad, and dirty.Litter lay on the ground next to an overflowing trash bin. There were still young schoolchildren playing there but they had to avoid the trash that littered the playground. A little boy told them that the city took the other trash cans away and the remaining one never got emptied often.
As they headed toward the library, the two high school students wrinkled their forehead. In the library, they encountered Mrs. Evans, their kind-hearted fifth-grade teacher, retired yet still passionate. Mrs. Evans listened as Isabel and Peter eagerly explained what they'd seen. Finally, she recommended them to go to the City Hall to voice their concerns.
The next day, Isabel and Peter went into the building of the City Hall but were met with an impatient officer. They were informed that the city couldn't help with their problem due to a tight budget. Discouraged, they left and turned to Mrs. Evans for help.
Under her guidance, they decided to ask Go Green, a nonprofit organization whose goal is to protect the environment, for help. “ This group is good at raising money for projects just like yours, ” said Mrs. Evans. She promised to arrange them to present their ideas to Go Green. Hearing this, their face lit up.
Two main tasks remained ahead: researching ways to clean up the park and preparing a convincing presentation. As Isabel was good at researching while Peter always had a talent for speaking, they cooperated quite well. Isabel learned from a science magazine that a new type of trash bin can squeeze the trash down without being emptied often, which saves time, money, and energy. Based on this, Peter practiced his presentation over and over again.
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2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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A week later, Peter stood nervously at the back of the hall where Go Green was meeting.
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After the meeting, Isabel excitedly told Peter the good news.
参考范文
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【参考范文】
A week later, Peter stood nervously at the back of the hall where Go Green was meeting. He was so nervous that he could feel nothing but his hands shaking and heart beating. Isabel walked towards him and patted him on the shoulder gently, encouraging him, "Peter, you will definitely do it well as you have practiced it over and over again. Hearing IsabeF’s words, Peter cheered up and looked into her eyes with determination. Finally, it was his turn. He took a deep breath, stepped onto the stage and began his presentation. The members of Go Green listened to him carefully and nodded with approval from time to time. The moment Peter finished his presentation, a burst of applause broke out. (109 words)
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After the meeting, Isabel excitedly told Peter the good news. The Go Green decided to make very effort to raise money for their project. As soon as Peter heard the news, he leaped into the air with joy, exclaiming, “Yes! We made it!" Then they shared the good news with Mrs. Evans and expressed their heartfelt gratitude to her. “It is your hard work and perseverance that count. I’m so proud of you two,” Mrs. Evans said with a satisfied look. Within weeks, enough money was raised and the new trash bins were purchased. When Peter and Isabel walked in the Tubman park again, they found it was clean and tidy as it used to be. Their sweat finally paid off. (117 words)读后续写之“无灵主语”的活用
无灵主语的概念和搭配：
无灵主语句子构成：inanimate subject(无灵主语)+animate verb(有灵动词) ；
无灵主语（inanimate subject）： 物品、动作、情感、时间、地点等；
有灵动词（animate verb）：有生命的事物的动作和行为，如see、find、bring、give、escape、witness、 seize、deny...
一、常见情感类的词及其转化
admire — admiration angry — anger bitter — bitterness
desperate— despair eager — eagerness joy — joy
regret — regret satisfy — satisfaction surprise — surprise
amaze — amazement anxious — anxiety bore — boredom
disappoint — disappointment happy — happiness annoy —annoyance
astonish — astonishment delighted — delight embarrass—embarrassment
horrify — horror puzzle — puzzlement sad — sadness
sorry — sorrow
常见搭配的动词：
积极情感的出现：
1. The joys of fatherhood gripped him at that moment.
那个时候，他体会到了做父亲的快乐。
2. Inspiration struck him like a silver dagger. 灵感银剑般袭来。
3. Encouragement seized me. 我内心倍受鼓舞。
4. A look of pleasure visited her face. 她的脸上露出愉悦之情。
5. My passion overwhelmed me completely for an instant. 热爱一瞬间涌了上来。
积极情感的影响：
1. Confidence defends us against any difficulties. 自信帮助我们抵御难关。
2. A content mind assists a man in enjoying the world. 知足常乐
3. Self-discipline shields us from outer temptation. 自律让我们抵制外界诱惑。
4. Occasional surprise shelters the old from suffering senile dementia.
间或性惊喜可帮助预防老年痴呆。
5. Admiration of knowledge overcomes the fear of ignorance.
对知识的向往可战胜对无知的恐惧。
消极情感的出现：
1. For years she was haunted by guilt. 多年来她一直感到愧疚。
2. Courage deserted him. 他没有了勇气。
3. An embarrassed laugh escapes my throat. 我不由自主尴尬地笑了一声。
4. Disappointment took possession of me due to the failure of my exam. 考试失败
让我很失望。
5. A chill of horror suddenly swept over him. 他突然感到不寒而栗。
消极情感的影响：
1. Anger choked my words. 我气得说不出话。
2. Anxiety tore him into pieces. 他焦虑万分，肝肠寸断。
3. Astonishment deprived me of my power of speech. 我惊讶得说不出话来。
4. Fear rooted her to the ground. 恐惧使她站在地上一动不动。
5. Fear paralyzed her. 她吓得浑身瘫软。
二、主语是具有动词意味的名词
常见的具有动词意味的名词有the sight of，the thought of，the smell of，walk……如：
The sight of the clock remind me that I was late. 一看到闹钟我就知道我迟到了。
The thought of his first failure in the exam gave him the strength to strive.
想到他第一次考试不及格，他就有了奋斗的力量。
A ten minutes’ walk brought us to the destination. 我们步行十分钟就到了目的地。
三、表示情景、自然现象的名词作主语
我们还可以通过运用拟人、比喻等手法让表达更生动。如：
An earthquake comes like a thief in the night, without warning.
地震到来，犹如夜贼，不作预告。
A sudden shower killed the wind. 突然下了一阵雨，风停了。
The rain prevented him from coming. 因下雨，他不能来。
将下列句子翻译成英文
1. 想起找工作的艰辛，他觉得万念俱灰。
2. 当他要上台讲话时，他突然失去了信心。
3. 她焦虑万千，心如刀绞。
4. 移民因孤独而聚在一起，但贫困使他们的情况每况愈下。
5. 看到这个情景，我心中满是恐惧。
6. 踏着松软的泥土，他想到了一个主意。
参考答案:
1. Despair seized him at the thought of the weary quest for work.
2. When he was about to mount the platform and address the audience, his confidence suddenly deserted him.
3. Anxiety tore her into pieces.
4. Loneliness held immigrants together, but poverty kept them down.
5. The sight of the scene filled me with horror.
6. The sight of the clock reminded me that I was late.读后续写之结尾句技巧
【素材积累】
1. 画面定格式结尾
以具有特殊意义的画面结尾，这个画面可以是开头画面的再现，也可以是其他的
画面，用来映衬人物当时的心情，渲染场景氛围。我们通常可以定格人物动作画面或者是具有特殊寓意的写景画面。
例句欣赏：The wild murmured in the trees and the sunlight flooded in through the
window, warming the whole room, as if the freezing ice was all melted.
2. 情感升华式结尾
在读后续写的结尾部分，可以采用情感升华的方式，激发读者思考，让读者产生
情感上的共鸣。情感升华的结尾要求有较高的立意，因为这样能够产生强烈的艺术感染力，使其成为故事的灵魂。通常，我们可以通过人生感悟、生活真谛或者哲理来实现结尾部分的情感升华。
例句欣赏：I held the paper bag tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love
that makes the world go around, which I felt deep in my heart.
3. 主题提炼式结尾
在结尾中，对主题进行提炼往往能够起到凝练中心、升华主旨的作用。常见的方
式是使用名言作为结尾。这种结尾可以引出结论、即时抒情、凸显主旨、渲染氛围等，为我们的续写画龙点睛、添砖加瓦。
例句欣赏：Looking back on the previous experience, he learned a new lesson: keep calm no matter what happens, and then you can overcome everything.
4. 首尾呼应式结尾
文章的开头和结尾在内容上要有密切的关系，对同一情况做出解释说明，使文章
浑然一体，突显文章主旨。写这样的结尾，常见的方式是在结尾处突显开头中的某些关键词、关键画面等。
例句欣赏：(2017·浙江卷) Despite Mom's being absent-minded and forgetful, she was still a kind and nice mom. (呼应文章开头的absent-minded)
5. 人物对话式结尾
对话看似简单，但往往蕴含着丰富的情感，令人回味。用人物对话结尾给读者留
下的不仅仅是一句话，而是一个有声有色的画面、一片充满遐想的空间，能够达到言有尽而意无穷的效果。
例句欣赏：A smile came to his face.“Mrs Li, thank you,”he said.“And thank you,
Ada,”she said.“Your smile is the nicest present I can have.”
【案例导引】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was a few months since our beloved boxer（拳师狗）Bama had passed away. He'd
lived a good and long life. Alan and I didn't have children. Our boxer was our baby. After Bama’s death, we couldn't bring ourselves to go through his toys to decide what to keep, so we put them all in the basement. I told myself I'd do it when I was ready. Apparently, I still wasn't.
Now I sat in my yard and wept. Our friends and family had suggested we get another dog, but Alan and I dismissed the idea. We couldn’t go through that kind of heartbreak again. I gazed out over the yard. Across the street was a dog. A boxer. I wiped the tears from my eyes, heart beating wildly. Was he real or just wishful imagination I took a second look. The boxer was still there. We locked eyes. He ran across the street, straight toward me. I offered my hand. He sniffed it eagerly, bushy tail wagging. He licked me.
This dog was younger than Bama, smaller. He was well fed and clean. He wore a collar but had no ID. I knew he must belong to someone in the neighborhood. But I'd never seen another boxer around.
The dog lay down beside my feet, his tongue lolling in a doggie smile. He didn't seem lost. Just as if he were dropping by for a visit.
“Alan!”I called.“You have to come see this!”
Alan joined me, and we sat together in awe for a moment. Then the boxer got up and walked off. In the following days, he'd sometimes appear in the backyard when Alan and I were outside. Other times, he'd wait for us on the front porch.
With each visit, I could feel the ache in my heart lessen. Seeing him was helping me work through my deep sorrow.
At work one day, a young man and an older woman I'd never seen before came in. I took down the man's address to complete some paperwork and noticed he lived on the other side of the street from me. His name was Tanner. The woman with him was his grandmother. He and his family had recently moved from Georgia.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph 1: “Do you happen to have a dog ”I asked.
Paragraph 2: “Not at all! Actually, he was a big help,”I said.
一、学语言，知梗概
（一）请用文本中的词汇完成翻译
1. 定期拜访某人
2. 看起来既惊讶又尴尬
3. 向外注视
4. 擦干眼泪
5. 给某人造成麻烦
6. 给某人带来安慰
7.（心）狂跳
8. 把我们所有人聚在一起
9. 积灰
10. 拜访
（二）概括原文的故事情节
Alan and I didn't have children, and we kept a boxer Bama as our baby for a long
time. But a few months ago, Bama 1. . We were so sad that we had to put Bama's toys in the 2. . We refused to get another dog because we couldn't go through the kind of 3. again. One day a 4. boxer ran across the street, straight toward me while I was gazing out over the yard. The boxer was 5. , wearing a collar without ID. I knew he must
6. someone in the 7. . In the following days, the boxer often came to visit us, which lessened our ache in the heart for losing Bama. One day, I met a young man whose name was Tanner when I was 8. . I had never seen him before. Then I took down his address and noticed he 9. . He and his family had recently 10. Georgia.
二、析主题，思情节
（一）阅读材料，找出最能体现故事主题的两个词
①family ②love ③accident ④teamwork ⑤sincerity ⑥change
（二）构思具体情节
建构合适的主干情节之后，接下来可以通过问题链来构思要续写的两段的具体
情节。
续写第一段：“Do you happen to have a dog ”I asked.
1. How would Tanner answer me
2. Was Tanner surprised at my question How would I explain it
3. What might Tanner say to make me say“Not at all! Actually, he was a big help.”
根据以上问题及其答案，我们尝试续写第一段：
续写第二段：“Not at all! Actually, he was a big help,”I said.
1. What does“he”refer to Why did I say“he was a big help”
2. How did I deal with the old toys
3. How can we design a warm ending to the story Would I see the dog again
根据以上问题及其答案，我们尝试续写第二段：
三、修结尾，添美感
在完成初稿的基础上，我们尝试使用今天所学的五种方式来给续写添加一个精
彩的结尾。
I told him about my Bama and the comfort Alex had brought to us. It has been three
years since that day. Tanner and his family have become our good friends. Alan and I see them often along with Alex, the boxer who brought all of us together. Now Bama's toys don't just sit in the basement, gathering dust. Alan and I keep them out for Alex to enjoy.
参考答案
一、（一）1. pay sb regular visits 2. look surprised and embarrassed 3. gaze out
4. wipe the tears from one 's eyes 5. cause sb trouble 6. bring comfort to sb 7. beat
wildly 8. bring all of us together 9. gather dust 10. drop by for a visit
（二）1. passed away 2. basement 3. heartbreak 4. younger and smaller
5. well-fed and clean 6. belong to 7. neighborhood 8. working 9. lived up the street
from me 10. moved from
二、（一）②⑥
（二）
续写第一段：“Do you happen to have a dog ”I asked.“We do,”he said.“Is he a boxer ”“Yes, my dog Alex is a boxer.”“I have met him. He has actually been paying me regular visits.”The moment Tanner heard what I had said, he looked surprised and embarrassed.“I am so sorry,”he said.“We are building a fence, but it is not finished yet and Alex keeps getting out.I hope he didn't cause you any trouble.”
续写第二段：“Not at all! Actually, he was a big help,”I said. I told him about my Bama and the comfort Alex had brought to us. It has been three years since that day. Tanner and his family have become our good friends. Alan and I see them often along with Alex, the boxer who brought all of us together. Now Bama's toys don't just sit in the basement, gathering dust. Alan and I keep them out for Alex to enjoy.
三、妙招1：画面定格式结尾
Possible ending version 1: From then on, every time Alex dropped by for a visit, I would throw my arms around him tightly and Alex would loll his tongue out, licking me softly. Balmy breeze wiping my face, a surge of warmth just hit us at that moment.
点评：这个结尾描绘了作者与狗狗拥抱的画面，营造出和谐温暖的氛围，并将人
物感动的心情与微风拂面的环境相结合，温暖袭人，结尾非常自然，水到渠成，也让人在这样的画面中感悟到人与动物、人与人之间的爱，温暖人心。
妙招2：情感升华式结尾
Possible ending version 2: I was touched and grateful to Alex and his family who gave me a special gift that would change my life. Something inside me just clicked by them, and I finally found my“Bama”.
点评：这个结尾通过两个心理描写的句子，表达了“我”对狗狗亚历克斯及其家人
深深的感激之情。从最后一句中的 I finally found my“Bama”可以感受到作者从亚历克斯身上获得的生活感悟：无论失去是多么痛苦，只要你敞开心扉，勇敢面对，爱依旧在。简单的结尾却饱含深情，在凸显文本主题的同时，还对全文起到了画龙点睛的作用。
妙招3：主题提炼式结尾
Possible ending version 3: This special encounter in my life made me realize that as
long as you open your heart, love is just around the corner.
点评：这个结尾的立意不仅仅局限在人与动物之间的情感关系上，还升华到了对
生活的热爱及对朋友的新定义。在人生至暗时刻，是狗狗的爱、陌生人的善意拯救了“我”，让“我”重新燃起了生活的斗志，主题在这一结尾句中得到升华。
妙招4：首尾呼应式结尾
Possible ending version 4: From then on, our“Bama”returned, bonding us with new
friends and helping us go through the darkest time of our life.
点评：此续写结尾写到 our“Bama” returned，这很好地呼应了文本开篇的“It was
a few months since our beloved boxer Bama had passed away.”。文章开头说巴马去世了，结尾却又“活”过来了，反转的结局，能极大地吸引读者的兴趣。读者通过阅读全文，了解故事后能迅速产生共鸣。
妙招5：人物对话式结尾
Possible ending version 5: Looking at Alex playing Bama 's toys, tears of gratitude
pouring down my cheeks, I did nothing but bow to Alex and address him,“Thank you, my life guide.”
点评：此结尾的前半句通过人物的神态、动作描写展现人物的情感与品质，在这
种无声的人物描写的铺垫下，最后仅有的一句话“Thank you, my life guide.”掷地有声，不仅突出主题，还让作者和狗狗亚历克斯之间的感情紧紧萦绕在读者心中。
小结：文章结尾的方式多种多样，同学们写作时要根据文章的具体情况选择最合
适的方式结尾，给评卷老师留下深刻印象。读后续写——— 个人成长类
素材积累
成长类故事构造“三步曲”：
第一步——成长前（负面情绪）
●孤独
I never made friends easily, and for a time I did little more than get on speaking terms
with some boys. 我从来不轻易交朋友，有一段时间，我除了和一些男孩谈笑风生之外，几乎没有做什么。
●伤心
1. I found nothing in my pocket, a fact that seemed like a spear piercing into my heart
which started to bleed immediately. 我在口袋里什么也没发现，这个事实就像一把长矛刺进我的心脏，我的心脏立刻开始流血。
2. Looking around anxiously, I almost burst into crying. 看了看周围，我焦急地几乎
哭了起来。
●惭愧
1. She was overwhelmed/overcome/consumed with guilt and shame. 她充满了内疚和羞愧。
2. A wave of guilt swept over me and I had to admit the fact that I had gone to the
movies and that was the real reason why I was late. 一股罪恶感席卷了我，我不得不承认我去看电影了，这就是我迟到的真正原因。
●嘲笑
They laughed loudly with screaming words like “What a finest broken watch!”. 他们
大声地笑着，尖叫着说类似“多漂亮的破表啊！”的话语。
●绝望
“My mother wouldn’t let me bring it,” I lied, desperation boiling inside me.“我妈妈
不让我带。”我撒谎道，绝望在我心中沸腾。
●紧张
1. Meanwhile, Karie sat restlessly in her seat with her fingers crossed. 与此同时，卡里不安地坐在座位上，手指交叉着。
2. She told the teacher the truth, with her heart thumping/pounding/pumping like a
drum. 她把真相告诉了老师，心怦怦直跳。
3. Having paced up and down restlessly in front of the teacher’s office, she finally gathered courage and plodded in. 她在老师办公室前不安地踱来踱去，终于鼓起勇气，迈着沉重的步伐地走了进去。
●害怕
I unknowingly avoided interacting with anyone because I was afraid they’d laugh at
me in my face. 我不自觉地避免与任何人交流，因为我怕他们当面嘲笑我。
第二步——成长中（蜕变与塑造）
●惊讶
Raising her eyebrows in surprise, Mrs Rossi froze, as if rooted on the ground. 罗西夫
人惊讶地扬起眉毛，愣住了，仿佛在地上扎了根。
●希望
ked up to him, his eyes sparkling with hope and determination. 杰斯抬起头
看着他，眼睛里闪烁着希望和决心。
●教育与成长
1.“That’s not the right way. Patience, Will. Patience,” a voice echoed in my ears after
the boys left.“那不是正确的方式。耐心点，威尔，耐心点。”男孩们离开后，一个声音在我耳边回响。
2.“What was done was done,” I thought to myself.“What is important now is to do
correct things next.”“过去的事过去了。”我心里想，“现在重要的是下一步做正确的事情。”
3. Though anger, embarrassment and sadness hung heavily in the air, the voice drew
me to the awareness of the mistakes I had made when I attempted to impress the boys. 虽然愤怒、尴尬和悲伤沉重地弥漫在空气中，但这个声音让我意识到我在试图让那些男孩留下深刻印象时犯下的错误。
第三步——成长后（正面情绪+升华）
●喜悦
1. Karie grinned as she read the label on the box. 卡里一边看盒子上的标签，一边咧
嘴一笑。
2. Hearing that, Karie grinned from ear to ear, a wave of happiness flooding over her.
听到这话，卡里笑得合不拢嘴，一股幸福的浪潮涌上她的心头。
●感激
I looked at her, tears of love and gratitude welling up in my eyes. 我看着她，爱与感激的泪水夺眶而出。
●升华
1. I knew for sure that every time I lost patience in the future I would remember my
Grandfather’s words. 我确信，将来每当我失去耐心时，我都会想起祖父的话。
2. It was the first time that I had truly realized the meaning of the gift—patience. 这是我第一次真正体会到这份礼物的意义——耐心。
语篇微演练
I could feel the excitement rising in me as I held the beautifully wrapped present in my hands. I felt the string of the package soft and then, unable to contain my curiosity any longer, I tore it open. It was a bright, brand new laptop. I had scored straight A’s as for my O level examination and this was my reward. I had always envied my friends who were exchanging news about “chat rooms”,“instant messaging” and “e mailing”, all of which I knew nothing about. Now I was going to find out.
It started out simply enough. I was searching for some information online when I came across a social networking site. Soon I became addicted to my new found electronic friend.I began to spend more and more time on the Internet. I had never imagined that the day would come when I would be controlled entirely by the glowing screen before me. Whenever I was not glued to these social networking sites, I would be going through gossip or fashion websites.
As time passed, I realized that I was addicted to the Internet. During weekends, when I had more time on my hands, I could easily spend a few hours on my laptop. It came to a point where I chose to lock myself in my room, refusing to come out and take part in family discussions. I preferred to stay connected to the friends on the Internet, although I had never met them. Soon I was spending the whole hours of the morning surfing the Internet.Sleep was reduced to small naps and my grades at school also began getting from bad to worse.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
It was about this time that my parents noticed my change.
Paragraph 2:
Then one day, my father took away my laptop.
一、故事梳理
这篇文章以第一人称视角讲述了作者因沉迷于网络而荒废学业的故事。作者考
试成绩获得全优，父母给他买了一台全新的笔记本电脑作为奖励。渐渐地，作者开始沉迷于网络，不再与父母交流，学习成绩也一落千丈。我们可以用“5W原则”来分析文章结构和内容：
二、语言分析
通过观察，我们发现原文对成长前的苦恼进行了大篇幅的描写，即对负面情绪有
很多描写。比如：
1. I began to spend more and more time on the Internet.（Para. 2）
我开始花越来越多的时间在网络上。
2. I had never imagined that the day would come when I would be controlled entirely
by the glowing screen before me.（Para. 2）
我从来没有想过，有一天我会完全被我面前发光的屏幕所控制。
3. As time passed, I realized that I was addicted to the Internet.（Para. 3）
随着时间的推移，我意识到我迷上了互联网。
4. It came to a point where I chose to lock myself in my room, refusing to come out and take part in family discussions.（Para. 3）
后来，我选择把自己锁在房间里，拒绝出来参加家庭讨论。
【参考范文】
Paragraph 1:
It was about this time that my parents noticed my change. They voiced their disapproval. It became obvious to them that I was spending too much time on the Internet. I was asked to slow down my usage of the Internet. Yet, however hard I tried, I was unable to pull myself away, unable to end my chat sessions, and unable to concentrate on my lessons. I was desperate for just another click, just another look at my e mail or message board.（成长前：负面情绪）
Paragraph 2:
Then one day, my father took away my laptop. I cried and objected but in vain. Dad
had made up his mind. But over time, I realized that Dad and Mum had always
wanted the best for me.（成长中：蜕变与塑造） That was when I decided to take the big step—to conquer my Internet addiction. Quitting was harder than I had expected. But with dogged determination, I knew that I would be able to do it. It was never too late to change. (成长后：正面情绪+升华)
