江苏省徐州市2025届高三上学期零模英语考试读后续写---一次改变Simon一生的音乐课 讲义

文本解读
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开篇语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Simon was born with a very poor vision. However, to add insult to injury, Simon’s eyes are extremely sensitive to light, which is more frustrating. While others cheer and run outside on sunny days, Simon can only stay at home or wear his tightly wrapped sun hat.
上天对于主人公Simon，既是伤害又是侮辱（to add insult to injury，也可译作雪上加霜，或伤口撒盐）。Simon不光生来视力极差，对光线还非常敏感，外出要戴上包裹严实的遮阳帽，这怎不令人沮丧。
At school, Simon was haunted by a deep sense of inferiority. In class, he never raised his hand, afraid of classmates’ eyes on him. He sat in silence as others participated in discussions and activities effortlessly, while he felt trapped in his own shell of self-doubt. He constantly compared himself to others and always found himself lacking. The weight of his insecurities made every day at school a struggle.
Simon在学校总是感到自卑，不敢举手，不参加讨论和活动。读到这里，敏锐的读写嗅觉告诉我们，这是一个关于英雄成长的故事，主人公注定要发生转变。标记一下，续写时可以通过前后对比，表现主人公的变化。
这一段中的漂亮句子：
1. Simon was haunted by a deep sense of inferiority.2. …he felt trapped in his own shell of self-doubt.3. The weight of his insecurities made every day at school a struggle.
haunt意思是缠绕，萦绕心头，是及物动词。The tune haunted me all day. 这首曲子整天萦绕在我脑海。linger也有萦绕、不肯离去之意，区别在于linger是不及物动词。haunt和linger都是读后续写必备词汇。inferiority是自卑，反义词是superiority优越感。
shell本意是外壳，在这里是隐喻，Simon被困在自我怀疑的外壳里，不与人交往。the weight of his insecurities意思是不安全感形成的重担。
However, one’s life isn’t defined by these when faced with a particular set of circumstances. The best thing to do is accept them and act within the context.
“然而，在特定情况发生时，人生不再受到这些因素限制。不妨接受它们，随机应变。”这一段话承上启下，暗示转折点即将到来。
For Simon, the particular was music, which brought him endless strength. When Simon played the piano, he could feel that every change in tone and rhythm created colorful sounds. The music came alive with soft and loud keys. For a boy with a sharp sense of hearing, these details transformed the performance into an emotionally charged experience.
对于Simon，音乐就是特定情况，音乐就是转机。声音有色彩吗？colorful sounds是不是很文学。charge有充电的意思，也可以指充满某种情绪。an emotionally charged experience意思是一种充满情感的体验。
One day in a music class, the whole class were listening to a piano piece while checking the notes in the music textbooks. Simon’s eyes were shining bright as he listened to the different instruments blend together. Suddenly, he frowned his brows. He quickly bent over the music textbook, searched through the lines in his music textbook and then pointed to a certain note. He caught a mistake. He looked in the teacher’s direction, wanting to say something, but then hesitated. He bit his lip and seemed to have made up his mind.
机会来了！音乐课上老师组织学生对照课本上的乐谱欣赏一首钢琴曲，听觉敏锐的Simon发现课本上有一个音符标错了。材料结尾说，他咬着嘴唇，似乎下定了决心。这给考生留下了一个悬念。
此段包含大量生动的表情、动作和心理描写：
1. Simon’s eyes were shining bright as he listened…2. …he frowned his brows.3. He quickly bent over…, searched through…and then pointed…4. He looked…, wanting to say something, but then hesitated.5. He bit his lip and seemed to have made up his mind.
续写指导
背景：a music class
人物：Simon, classmates, teacher
情节：因为视力残疾，对光敏感，Simon深感自卑，总是活在自己的世界里。一次音乐课上，Simon发现课本里一个错误。
情节推理：Simon赢得老师和同学的称赞，从中找到自信，开始发生蜕变。
主题：人与自我；正确的人生态度
Para 1: Finally, Simon raised his hand, and the teacher stopped the music
Para 2: After class, Simon was surrounded by his admiring classmates.
续写第一段开头语说，Simon举起手，老师停下音乐。第二段开头语说，下课后，Simon被同学们围住，备受赞誉。根据所给材料和开头语，列出写作计划：
续写第一段：
1. Simon指出错误；
2. 老师验证过程；
3. 同学反应；Simon感受。
续写第二段：
1. 同学态度的变化；
2. Simon的蜕变（行为、心理、态度等）。
范文赏析
Finally, Simon raised his hand, and the teacher stopped the music. Simon told the teacher what he had found. The teacher looked at Simon with a kind, curious gaze. While she walked over to Simon’s desk and took a closer look at the note he had pointed to, the entire class whispered in disbelief. The teacher hummed a few notes, then her face lit up with surprise. The students turned to look at Simon with newfound respect, knowing that he was right. For the first time, Simon felt the weight of eyes on him not in judgment, but in admiration. It was a wonderful feeling!
范文第一段主要运用对比写法，形象刻画出验证前后老师和同学的情绪变化。老师由kind和curious到surprise，同学由disbelief到respect。范文从同学目光的角度表现Simon的感受，更是神来之笔。这与材料第二段形成鲜明的对比：由评判的压力转化为钦佩。这就是典型的续写技巧——回扣原文。
The teacher hummed a few notes...老师哼唱了几个音符……这一句画面感简直太强了！hum是生词，考生可以用sing代替。
After class, Simon was surrounded by his admiring classmates. They were all so lovely, saying such nice things with big smiles on their faces. Even the teachers had a new impression of him. Simon felt like he could take on the world! His classmates, once distant, were now admiring his talent. Some of them even came to him for help with their music assignments. Simon felt like he really belonged. As he played the piano at school events, a sense of pride washed over him—he was defined not by his appearance, but by his passion and talent.
与第一段的近镜头描写不同，范文第二段把镜头拉远了，采用了蒙太奇手法，将不同画面剪辑在一起——围观同学的赞美与笑脸，老师的表扬，Simon的春风得意，同学上门求助，Simon参加学校演出……这是影视剧结尾常用表现手法。范文在show的同时，以tell的方式点出故事的主题意义：定义我们人生的不是外表，而是热情和才华。