2025届高三英语一轮复习：野外遇险类读后续写指导课件(共28张PPT)

(共28张PPT)
How to perform well in
continuation writing
——湖北十堰竹溪一中
What is Continuation Writing
阅读一篇350字左右的短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整 的故事。
要求：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你
写好；每一段70—80字
3. 记叙文。
读后续写三原则：
1. 读懂原文，找出六要素，确定人物、情节和逻辑关系：
who, when, where, what, why, how
2. 研读所给首句，续写与原文融合一致：
顺着原文的思路，根据线索(每段首句)，发挥想象，推测后面的情节。
续写主题与原文一致，续写内容与原文融合，续写语言与原文一致
3. 续写的内容必须合情合理, 结尾体现正能量。
如何构思续写的内容
Step 1
Read for
elements
Step 2
Read for
plots
Step 3
Gather
ideas
Step 4
Make predictions
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Steve was the most amazing person in all of Minneapolis, and he was my cousin. By the age of 19, Steve was a star baseball player at the University of Minnesota. I wanted to be exactly like him. So when Steve asked me to go with him on a spring fishing trip in northern Minnesota, I was excited!
After planning the trip, we gathered clothes and supplies, and began our great adventure. We reached the Superior National Forest in northern Minnesota by early evening. On our way to the campsite, Steve pointed to a small house faraway in one of the mountains, saying that it was the ranger station (护林站) where the forester worked.
Finally, after a long walk, we reached the campsite and set up the camp as the sun was setting. Steve knew all the tricks of an experienced wilderness camper. After we gathered enough wood from the forest, he started the campfire using only stone and steel — no matches. For supper we feasted on freeze-dried beef, wild rice and pea soup. I ate greedily after all that work.
Tired enough, we climbed into our sleeping bags early and talked about our plans for fishing the next day. We were still talking quietly when a sudden north wind picked up; the temperature dropped and it began to snow. Steve found a way to increase the temperature inside the tent. He dragged a log from the forest to the opposite side of the campfire. Then he wrapped aluminum foil (铝箔) around the log. The heat from the fire reflected off the foil and into the tent. Soon images of lake fish were filling my dreams.
The snow had stopped, but sometime later a powerful wind must have kicked up the flames of our dying fire. I was suddenly awakened by Steve. Our tent was on fire. Frightened, I ran out of the tent immediately. The tent collapsed (倒塌) with Steve inside. Without any thought of endangering myself, I reached into the burning tent and pulled him to the icy lake. Fortunately, we were not seriously hurt.
Paragraph 1:
Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation._________________
______________________________________________.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, we heard a loud noise in the forest.________.
Step 1 Read for elements
what
where
when
who
I, Steve, forester
In spring
In a forest
An adventurous fishing trip
Elements
Step 2 Read for plots
beginning
(character and setting)
process
climax
(the problem or conflict)
ending
(solve the problem)

Story
Mountain
beginning
process
climax
ending
1
2
3

1. Steve asked me to go on a spring fishing trip.
2. We reached the campsite and set up the camp.
3. Our tent was on fire and we escaped to
the icy lake.
4.
Step 3 Gather ideas
setting (time / place) Time: spring
Place: Superior National Forest in northern Minnesota
characters I, Steve, forester
plot Steve asked me to go on a spring fishing trip.
problem Our tent was on fire.
ending

信息整理：
体裁：记叙文
时态：一般过去时
原文核心信息解读：
“我”和表哥去森林里露营，夜里下起了雪，天很冷，表哥生起了篝火，“我们”在温暖中入睡了。睡着后，帐篷起火了，“我们”匆忙逃了出来，但帐篷烧毁了……
Step 4 Make predictions
可用于续写的已知信息：
关键词 character Steve, forester
setting clothes, supplies, campsite, forest, fire
action found, endangering
mood frightened
段首句 Para. 1: Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation. (续写部分可详细描写具体困境，比如衣服等物品烧毁，在森林中远离人烟，无法求助等。) Para. 2: Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. (续写部分可写声音的来源，发出声音者可以是提供救助的人。)
写作思路：
“我们”在荒芜人烟的森林深处，孤立无援，随身物品也都随着帐篷一起烧毁了，正当不知道该怎么办的时候，林中传来了声响，发现是护林人开着车过来了。原来护林人看到了火光，过来一探究竟，结果“我们”得救了。
构思的理由：
文章中出现过forester (护林人)，这是极其有用的信息，另外根据常识可知，护林人最重要的工作之一就是侦查火情，所以森林中有火情的话，护林人一定会一探究竟。
Useful expressions:
描写处境：
1. remote/distant 遥远的，偏僻的
2. sb. run out of sth. 某人用完某物
sth. run out. 某物用完了
3. be cut off from the outside. 与外界隔绝
4. be burnt into ashes/ruins.
被烧成灰烬/ 废墟
5. The wind picked up/roared. 风加速了/呼啸。
6. One’s face felt like a knife cutting/piercing.
某人的脸像刀削一样。
心情描写：
1. sb. be filled/seized/overcome/overwhelmed
by/with+害怕(panic/terror/horror/fright)
某人感到……
2. A sense/wave/flood/current+情感+ welled
up/surged through/rose in one’s heart.
一阵……涌上心头。
3. sb. felt as if the world was at an end.
sb. felt as if the doomsday was approaching.
某人感到世界末日来了。
4. sb. felt like an ant on a hot pan.
某人急的像热锅上的蚂蚁。
心情描写：
1. sb. felt like floating on a sea of +害怕
某人感到仿佛漂浮在……的海洋之上。
2. sb. thought he had no alternative but to
wait for death.某人认为除了等死别无选择。
3. sb. felt as if he would be frozen to death.
某人感觉会被冻死。
4. At the sight of…, sb. was as sweet as
honey.
一看到……，某人心里像喝了蜂蜜一样甜。
5. One’s face lit up with+情感；
One’s face shone like a diamond.
动作描写：
1. sb. trembled with cold. 某人冻得瑟瑟发抖。
2. sb. uttered/murmured, “…”
某人说到/喃喃自语……
3. One’s heart beat/pounded fast.
某人的心怦怦直跳。
4. sb. dragged sth., ran to sb./sth., and
jumped onto sth.
5. Tears of +情感+ ran/poured/rolled down
one’s cheeks.
……的泪水从某人脸颊滚下来。
主旨升华：
1. Only then did I realize …
直到那时我才意识到……
2. A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患难见真情。
3. A small act of kindness can make a big
difference. 小小善举，大大影响。
4. Not only did this experience … but also…
这次经历不仅……，而且……
5. Many people walk into our life, but only
true friends can be tested by time and
trouble.
6. Whenever we need help/warmth, there is some
for us.
One possible version:
Paragraph 1:
Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation. Our campsite was in the deep of the forest, really far away from the highway. We were in the middle of nowhere, wearing only underwear, with our supplies burnt into ashes, including our cellphones. Even Steve was unsure what to do next. The only thing we could do was just sit in the cold air and wonder how to get out of the forest.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. Anxiously we listened and stared into the darkness. A jeep appeared. A forester had spotted the light from the fire and had come to have a check. We jumped into the warm vehicle and the forester drove us to the ranger station, where we were given clothes and were able to call our parents. Steve and I had many more camping adventures from then on, but it was on this trip that Steve began to treat me more like a friend rather than a younger cousin. Our friendship continues to this day.
评
分
标
准
第五档：21分-25分
第四档：16分-20分
第三档：11分-15分
第二档：6分-10分
第一档：1分-5分
续问题
1、书写潦草，卷面涂改；
2、上下文的连贯性差；
3、错词错句多，好词好句少；
4、没有丰富和生动的细节推动情节的发展；
5、与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度差。
获得高分的写作技巧
Tip 1: 故事要围绕着主要人物展开。
Tip 2: 详细刻画角色及其情感。
Tip 4: 使用恰当的修饰词以使描写更加生动。
Tip 3: 使用恰当的衔接词以使故事更连贯。
Tip 5: 做到首尾呼应以使故事更加有条理。
Tip 6: 确保第二段和第一段的衔接有逻辑。