高考英语二轮复习 短文投稿篇应用文写作专题课件——What touched me most in the sports meeting.

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W hat touched me most
延迟符
评分标准
1.本题总分为 15 分,按五个档次进行评分。
2.评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和章结构三个方面考虑,具体为:
(1)对内容要点的覆盖情况以及表述的清楚程度和合理性。
(2)使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。
(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时,先根据作答的整体情况初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
4.评分时还应注意:
(1)词数少于 60 个的,酌情扣分。
(2)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受，
(3)书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分
评分标准
第五档(13~15 分)
- 覆盖了所有内容要点，表述清楚、合理。
- 使用了多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构，可能有个别小错，但完全不影响理解。
- 有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，意义连贯，完全达到了预期的写作目的。
第四档(10~12分)
- 覆盖了所有内容要点，表述比较清楚、合理。
- 使用了比较多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构，可能有些许错误，但不影响理解。
- 比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。达到了预期的写作目的。
评分标准
第三档(7~9 分)
- 覆盖了大部分内容要点，有个别地方表述不够清楚、合理。
- 使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有一些错误或不恰当之处，但基本不影响理解。
- 基本有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯基本达到了预期的写作目的。
第二档(4~6分)
- 遗漏或未清楚表述一些内容要点，或一些内容与写作目的不相关。
- 所使用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多，影响理解。
- 几乎不能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义不够连贯。未能达到预期的写作目的。
评分标准
第一档(1~3分)
- 遗漏或未清楚表述大部分内容要点，或大部分内容与写作目的不相关。
- 所使用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误很多，严重影响理解。
- 几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清晰，意义不连贯，完全未达到预期的写作目的。
零分
未作答；
所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判；
所写内容与题目要求完全无关。
题目
假定你是高一学生李华，刚参加了一年一度的校运会，请你写一篇题目为“What touched me most in sports meeting”的稿件向校英文报投稿，内容包括：
1. 最感动的场景；
2. 你的感想。
审题
体裁
主题
人称
时态
要点
谋 篇 布 局 Para 1
Para 2
Para 3
短文投稿——记叙文
运动会的感人事迹
第一人称 or 第三人称
过去式！！！！
事件发生的具体过程！！！
点题：引出主题
具体过程：“六要素”
感想
Common mistakes
1. 字迹模糊不清，难以辨认
Common mistakes
2. 时态/基本语法错误
Common mistakes
3. 体裁错误/离题
Common mistakes
4. 重点内容只写了事件，没有展开叙述/语言空洞单调，缺乏真情实感，没有说服力
Common mistakes
5. 内容与要求无关
Common mistakes
6. Chinglish/词不达意
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sample writing
I just took part in our school's annual sports meeting, and there was a scene that touched my heart deeply.
It was when our classmate, who was not the fastest runner, fell during the relay race(接力赛). Instead of giving up, he got up, dusted himself off, and continued to run with all his strength. His teammates and the whole audience cheered him on, showing that sportsmanship is more than just winning.
This experience taught me that courage and determination are the true measures of success(成功的真正标准). It's not about being the best, but about doing your best and never giving up. I feel inspired and grateful for the lesson in sportsmanship that the sports meeting provided.(119词)
The Most Touching Scene
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The Moment of Overcoming
The scene where an athlete, despite being injured, finished the race with determination and courage was moving. It showed the true spirit of sportsmanship and the will to never give up. This moment was captured by the crowd's applause and the respect it got from fellow competitors, highlighting the unity and empathy that sports can inspire.
The Unexpected Victory
The story of an underdog team or individual who, against all predictions, secured a victory that no one saw coming was incredibly touching. The hard work, dedication, and the joy of achieving the impossible were obvious, serving as a reminder that with perseverance and belief in oneself, anything is possible.
The Act of Sportsmanship
An instance where an athlete helped a competitor in need, such as stopping a race to assist a fallen opponent, showed the essence of sportsmanship. This selfless act not only touched the audience but also reinforced the idea that compassion and respect are as important as winning in sports.
useful expressions
1. 团结协作 Teamwork and cooperation
2. 坚持不懈 Perseverance
3. 公平竞争 Fair competition
4. 超越自我 Surpassing oneself
5. 友谊第一，比赛第二 Friendship first, competition second
6. 全力以赴 Go all out
7. 精神抖擞 In high spirits
8. 激动人心 Thrilling
9. 感人至深 Deeply touching
10. 鼓舞人心 Inspirational/Encouraging
useful expressions
他像岩石一样坚硬不屈。
他的精神像钢铁一样坚强。
她像不倒翁一样，无论多少次被击倒，总能重新站起来。
他的比赛表现就像一场风暴中的灯塔，坚定不移地照亮方向。
他在比赛中展现出了狮子般的勇气和力量。
He is as hard as a rock.
His spirit is as strong as steel.
Like a tumbler, no matter how many times she is knocked down, she always gets back up.
His performance was like a beacon in a storm, steadfastly lighting the direction.
He showed the courage and strength of a lion in the game.
Translation practice
1. 尽管天气炎热，运动员们依然全力以赴，展现了卓越的运动精神。
2. 我看到了一个感人的场景，我们班的一位同学在长跑中摔倒了，但他立刻站起来，继续比赛。
3. 尽管他受伤了，但他坚持跑完了全程，展现了他坚持不懈的精神。
Despite the hot weather, the athletes still gave their all, showinging excellent sportsmanship.
I witnessed a touching scene where a classmate of ours fell during the long-distance race, but immediately he got up and continued the competition.
Despite his injury, he persisted in running the entire course, demonstrating a persistent spirit.
Translation practice
4. 在接力赛(relay race)中，即使落后，他们团队也没有放弃，最终实现了逆转胜利。
5. 她在长跑中始终保持领先，最终以破纪录的成绩冲过终点线。
6. 那一刻，全场的掌声雷动，为他的坚持和勇气喝彩。
4. In the relay race, even though they were lagging far behind, their team never gave up and finally achieved a come-from-behind victory.
5. She maintained the lead throughout the long-distance run and finally crossed the finish line with a record-breaking performance.
6. At that moment, the applause from the audience thundered, cheering for his persistence and courage.
Translation practice
7. 这次运动会让我深刻体会到，有时候过程比结果更重要。
8. 看到同学们在赛场上互相鼓励，我感到非常温暖。
9. 在团队项目中，他们相互支持，共同克服了困难，展现了团队合作的力量。
10. 我为我们班级的每一位运动员感到骄傲，他们都是最棒的。
7. The sports meeting made me realize that sometimes the process is more important than the result.
8. Seeing my classmates encouraging each other on the field, I felt very warm.
9. In team events, they supported each other and overcame difficulties together, showing the power of teamwork.
10. I am proud of every athlete in our class; they are all the best.
补充记叙文的回忆语句
Memories flashed liked a movie to the day when ...
举一反三
投稿，通常会有特定的主题，如你最敬爱的人等等。如推荐一个项目，那就和推荐信写作思路一致。如最想感谢的人，那就和感谢信思路一致，不过在表达上可能人称需要换一下。基本上写一篇相关话题的小短文即可，小短文以记叙文或者议论文为主。学生需要掌握相关词汇，句式用法等。
段落要点
首段 投稿约稿目的
正文 介绍稿件的具体内容
结尾 期望祝福
举一反三
(1)【2022年全国甲卷】
你校将以六月八日世界海洋日为主题，举办英语征文比赛，请你写一篇短文投稿。
内容包括：1. 海洋的重要性；2. 保护海洋的倡议。
(2)【2022年全国乙卷】学校英文报正在开展以Learning English Beyond the Classroom为题的讨论。请使用图表中的调查结果写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：1. 学习活动状况描述：2. 简单评论; 3. 你的建议。
(3)（2021年新高考I卷）你校英文报Youth正在庆祝创刊十周年。请你写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：1. 读报的经历；2. 喜爱的栏目；3. 期望和祝福。
(4)（2021年全国高考乙卷）你校将举办英语演讲比赛。请你以Be smart online learners为题写一篇发言稿参赛，内容包括：1. 分析优势与不足；2. 提出学习建议。
(5)【2021年6月新高考卷】你校英文报Youth正在庆祝创刊十周年, 请你写一篇短文投稿, 内容包括：1. 读报的经历；2. 喜爱的栏目；3. 期望和祝福。
任选其中一个话题，完成读题表格&列举大纲
高考真题
(1)【2022年全国甲卷】
你校将以六月八日世界海洋日为主题，举办英语征文比赛，请你写一篇短文投稿。
内容包括：
1. 海洋的重要性；2. 保护海洋的倡议。
When it comes to ocean, its pollution is becoming more and more serious. World Ocean Day, falling on June 8th, is aimed at raising awareness of ocean conservation.
Ocean plays a key role in our world. Not only does ocean offer us sufficient food, but also it maintains the balance of nature. Thus, it is imperative to protect ocean. First of all, what we can do is to place importance on our daily actions. For example, garbage can’t be thrown into ocean. What’s more, we can also hand out leaflets to call on more people to protect the ocean. The more people are involved, the better the ocean environment is.
All in all, it is high time that we devoted ourselves to protecting ocean. To protect ocean is to protect ourselves.
高考真题
(2)【2022年全国乙卷】
学校英文报正在开展以Learning English Beyond the Classroom为题的讨论。请使用图表中的调查结果写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：1. 学习活动状况描述：2. 简单评论; 3. 你的建议。
Learning English Beyond the Classroom Nowadays, with the growing popularity of smartphones and computers, an increasing number of students are choosing to learn English beyond the classroom in various ways.
It can easily be seen that the percentage of students who choose listening to English songs and watching English movies is respectively 65% and 50%. However, those choosing reading English books and visiting English learning websites only account for 18% and 12%.
As far as I’m concerned, it is a disturbing trend. For students, what benefits most to their study is reading English books. Because of their lack of self-discipline, they’re more easily addicted to chatting online or playing games. It’s urgent for students themselves to improve their self-discipline, and it’s also urgent for parents and teachers to strengthen the guidance.
高考真题
(3)（2021年新高考I卷）
你校英文报Youth正在庆祝创刊十周年。请你写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：1. 读报的经历；2. 喜爱的栏目；3. 期望和祝福。
Youth and Me
The past decade has witnessed the vigorous advancement of the English newspaper Youth.
The first time I came across the newspaper three years ago, I was deeply immersed in the content which mainly focuses on the daily routine of youngsters. (读报经历) The column Stress Relief was my favorite part, since it not only provides me with various methods to deal with current study pressure but offers me plenty of materials, which can be applied to the writing assignments. (喜欢栏目及理由)
I do expect more impressive articles and wish Youth a prosperous future.(期望和祝福）
高考真题
(4)（2021年全国高考乙卷）
你校将举办英语演讲比赛。请你以Be smart online learners为题写一篇发言稿参赛，内容包括：1. 分析优势与不足；2. 提出学习建议。
Be smart online learners
Network learning has increasingly become an important means for people to acquire knowledge and solve problems.But being smart online learners has its advantages and disadvantages.
First of all, as smart online learners, we can make full use of the most extensive educational resources to broaden the horizon. Besides, We can take the initiative in our study by ourselves without time and space limit. Of course, these disadvantages are as follows.Faced with all kinds of information on the internet, We can't tell the difference between the true and the false, which may be harmful to our study and life. On the other hand, online learning itself has some imperfections, making it difficult for us not to be affected.
In conclusion , we should have a good understanding of its advantages and disadvantages and find a proper way to make our study more efficient.
高考真题
(5)【2021年6月新高考卷】
你校英文报Youth正在庆祝创刊十周年, 请你写一篇短文投稿, 内容包括：1. 读报的经历；2. 喜爱的栏目；3. 期望和祝福。
Dear editor,
As the 10th anniversary ceremony of YOUTH is drawing near, I am writing to take this opportunity to extend my heartfelt congratulations.
Ever since I was young, my parents exposed me to various magazines, but YOUTH was my favorite which has gained high praise from many students including me, a regular reader. Not only does it supply me with a platform to broaden my horizon, but its rich content can also spark my burning passion for English. I am fond of all its columns, but what I enjoy most about the paper is its language and writing style, which contributes greatly to my progress in writing.
I have thousands of blessings and I keenly wish YOUTH could achieve greater success and gain more popularity.
Yours,
Li Hua