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Unit7 Teenagers should be allowed to choose their own clothes.
For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure, content, grammar & language Self-check Peer check Teacher’s assessment
Structure and content I have organized my writing into paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I have showed the greetings and led to the topic . (1 point)
Para_____: I have written the rules,reasons,opinions and why (3 points)
Para.____:I have showed my conclusions (1 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (1 point)
Grammar and language My expressions are right. (3 points)
There are spelling mistakes. (1 point)
I have used some good sentences. (2 point)
I have used some conjunction words and transitional sentences.. (1 point)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total Score
What can I do to improve my writing next time Unit7
Teenagers should be allowed to choose their own clothes.
Writing Name
Analyze the topic
Writing Topic
假设你是李华，收到了朋友Lucy 的一封来信，请用英语写一封100词左右的回信给她。格式已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Li Hua,
Is everything going well with you I have heard that your parents have made some rules for you. What are the rules Why do your parents make these rules What do you think of them Why
Lucy
写作要求：
1.开头以给出，不计入总字数。
2.文中不得出现真实的人名和校名等相关信息。
3.不少于100词。
Person：
Tense：
Text：
Details
Reader：
II. What questions should we answer in the letter
questions Sentences
III. Make an outline
Structure：
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IV. Finish the first draft
I’m fine these days. /Everything is fine with me.... Dear Lucy,
1.One of the rules is that I am not allowed to do sth.2.Another rule is that I must/have to do sth. 3.The third rule is that I am asked to do sth.1.Because my parents think that...2.They make this rule because it can keep me safe/...3.The reason why they make this rule is that ...1.I think this rule is...because...2.I don’t agree with it because...3.I totally agree with it,the reason is that... 4.I think I should be allowed to ...because...
All in all/In conclusion...
V. Finish the second draft(共11张PPT)
Writing
Unit7
Teenagers should be allowed to choose their own clothes.
Pre-writing:Activity 1
Writing Topic
Dear Li Hua,
Is everything going well with you I have heard that your parents have made some rules for you. What are the rules Why do your parents make these rules What do you think of them Why
Lucy
假设你是李华，收到了朋友Lucy 的一封来信，请用英语写一封100词左右的回信给她。格式已给出，不计入总词数。
要求：
1.短文不得出现任何真实的人名、校名及其他相关信息；
2.书写规范，100词左右；可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Pre-writing:Activity 2
Analyze the writing topic
Person
The first /third person
Tense
The simple present tense/The simple past tense
Text
A letter
Reader
Lucy
What questions should we answer in the letter
Details
1.Answer all the questions about family rules
2.100 words
Pre-writing:Activity 3
What questions should we answer in the letter
Letter
Is everything going well with you
01
Why do you think so
05
What do you think of these rules
04
What are the rules
02
Why do your parents make these rules
03
Pre-writing:Activity 3
Letter
Reasons
3
1.Because my parents think that...
2.They make this rule because it can keep me safe/...
3.The reason why they make this rule is that ...
Greetings
1
I’m fine these days. /Everything is fine with me....
Rules
2
1.One of the rules is that I am not allowed to do sth.
2.Another rule is that I must/have to do sth.
3.The third rule is that I am asked to do sth.
Why
5
4
Opinions
1.I think this rule is...because...
2.I don’t agree with it because...
3.I totally agree with it,the reason is that...
4.I think I should be allowed to ...because...
Pre-writing:Activity 4 Make an outline
Body
Ending
Beginning
2
3
1
Structure
conclusion
1.Greeting 2.lead in
1.rules 2.reasons
3.opinions 4. why
Write a passage in 15 minutes
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已开始计时
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While-Writing
a clear structure:beginning,body,ending.
correct content: (answer all the questions)
some conjunction words and transitional sentences
some good sentences
no spelling mistakes
a clear and tidy hand writing
no wrong sentences
enough words
Structure
and
content
Grammar and language
Post-writing:Activity 1
Post-writing:Activity 1
Spelling mistakes
Wrong sentences &Punctuation mistakes
Good sentences
Conjunction words
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Check the composition
Post-writing:Activity 2
Work in groups,correct the mistakes and appreciate(欣赏) your group members’ compositions. Then show it to the class.
Focus on: 1. structure(结构)
2. handwriting(书写)
3. points(要点)
4. grammar(语法)
5. punctuation(标点)
6. language(语言)
7. fluency(流畅度)
Dear Lucy,
Everything is fine with me these days.Every family has its rule.And my family also have some rules.
One of the rules is that I’m not allowed to use the electronics more. Because my parents think that I spend more time on the iPhone and computers. But I think this rule is unfair because I need to use them for my homework. Another rule is that I am asked to go outside more and do some outside activities. They make this rule because it can keep me healthy.I disagree with it , the reason is that nobody at my age does those silly things . The third rule is that I have to take care of my little sister. The reason why they make this rule is that they hope that I can get along well with my sister. I totally agree with it because I think it not only can develop my responsiblity but also improve the relationship between us.
All in all,although I don’t like some rules,I know these rules are good for me.
Li Hua
Post-writing:Activity 2
