青桐鸣大联考河南2024-2025学年高三上学期11月28日联考试卷 读后续写 邻里间的误解产生矛盾需要真诚沟通去解决（讲义）

青桐鸣大联考河南2024-2025学年高三上学期11月28日联考试卷
第一节写作
假如你在英国留学，你加入了你们学校的辩论队，本期辩题是“Will Ebooks Replace Printed Books”，请你以正方立场写一份开场陈词。内容包括：1. 你们辩队的论点；2. 你们辩队的论据。1. 写作词数为80左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的对应位置作答；。
Distinguished guests and referees, dear debaters,
Good morning! On behalf of the pros team, I’d like to state our standpoint:
Thank you very much!
第二节(满分 25 分)
阅读下面短文,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The verbal conflict with my next-door neighbour, Pat, let me shocked. We had stayed a normal relationship as neighbours since the day we moved in, but his accusation that summer morning was too much, especially when my family had tried our best not to bother him.
I didn’t remember when he stopped being friendly. I could not understand it. He avoided every conversation with us and even walked away when I approached! On that particular morning, I had been gardening out when I saw Pat throw a large dogy waste from his garden onto ours! I was so upset, and I walked right over and faced up to him. “ Why would you do that ”
Folding his arms defensively, he claimed that our dog was the culprit(犯人). “I saw him do it.” Pat said. This so-called neighbour was lying to my face! I tried to remain calm. “ There is no way our dog did that.” Pat didn’t back down. “ Keepour dog of my yard,” he told me. My upset turned to anger and I let loose. “ Pat, you are a real piece of work!” I stormed in my front door and called my husband, Kevin, at work. I told him that Pat should accuse our dog of making trouble in his yard. Our dog was a Chihuahua, too little to brave himself out of our house. His advice: stay away from Pat. So I did. Pat returned the favour. If I saw him while we were both out walking, he’d cross to the opposite side of the street. When I drove past his house, he’d turn his back to my car.
One morning, I glanced out upstairs and found Pat was already carefully tending his beautiful grapes. I had a mixed feeling. On one hand, I couldn’t believe a man with so much care for a plant should be such an impolite person; on the other hand, I still couldn’t understand why Pat treated us in such a manner.
注意:
(1)续写词数应为150左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: “Bad dog! How dare you come again to destroy my yard!”
Paragraph 2: I heard the door knowc and found it was Pat, with a handful of grapes.
原文分析：红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；下划线标黄单词为需掌握积累单词；从句类会用斜体标注；需积累部分黑体加粗下划线；(定语从句1)(状从)
第二节(满分 25 分)
阅读下面短文,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The verbal conflict with my next-door neighbour, Pat, let me shocked. We had stayed a normal relationship as neighbours since the day we moved in(状从), but his accusation that summer morning was too much, especially when my family had tried our best not to bother him(状从).
I didn’t remember when he stopped being friendly(宾从). I could not understand it. He avoided every conversation with us and even walked away when I approached!(状从) On that particular morning, I had been gardening out when I saw Pat throw a large dogy waste from his garden onto ours!(状从) I was so upset, and I walked right over and faced up to him. “ Why would you do that ”
Folding his arms defensively(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作), he claimed that our dog was the culprit(犯人). “I saw him do it.” Pat said. This so-called neighbour was lying to my face! I tried to remain calm. “ There is no way our dog did that.” Pat didn’t back down. “ Keep our dog of my yard,(宾从)” he told me. My upset turned to anger and I let loose. “ Pat, you are a real piece of work!” I stormed in my front door and called my husband, Kevin, at work. I told him that Pat should accuse our dog of making trouble in his yard(宾从). Our dog was a Chihuahua, too little to brave himself out of our house. His advice: stay away from Pat. So I did. Pat returned the favour. If I saw him while we were both out walking(状从), he’d cross to the opposite side of the street. When I drove past his house(状从), he’d turn his back to my car.
One morning, I glanced out upstairs and found Pat was already carefully tending his beautiful grapes(宾从). I had a mixed feeling. On one hand, I couldn’t believe a man with so much care for a plant should be such an impolite person(宾从); on the other hand, I still couldn’t understand why Pat treated us in such a manner(宾从).
注意:
(1)续写词数应为150左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: “Bad dog! How dare you come again to destroy my yard!”
Paragraph 2: I heard the door knowc and found it was Pat, with a handful of grapes.
一、读后续写类型及分析
1. 文章类型：
本篇文章属于人际矛盾与和解类，故事以主人公与邻居Pat的矛盾为核心，逐步推进到和解的转折。这类续写需要从矛盾的升级到转机的描写，再到最终的情感升华，体现人性的善意与理解。
2. 构思思路：
布局：
开篇（矛盾深化）： 展现矛盾进一步升级的场景，情绪描写重点刻画主人公的复杂心理和对矛盾的无奈。
中间（转机出现）： 通过某件事件引发矛盾的转折点，比如主人公误解解除或某一行为打破僵局。
结尾（和解）： 展现和解场景，呼应主题，表达善意和包容。
框架提炼与实施：
从矛盾深化场景切入，具体描述情节冲突。
运用心理、环境、动作描写，引导矛盾的缓解。
合理设计对话推动情节发展，最终通过和解升华主题。
注意事项：
注意承接原文情节和情绪基调，衔接语言风格一致性。
巧妙设计细节和情节，使转折自然，避免生硬。
二、故事山模式分析
1. 故事山分析：
导入： 与邻居矛盾加深（“Bad dog!”场景引发矛盾升级）。
发展： 主人公复杂心理与对邻居行为的不解。
高潮： 门敲声与Pat带来葡萄出现，引发意料之外的转机。
结尾： 两人冰释前嫌，表达善意。
2. 衔接点：
情绪描写：
"I was so upset, and I walked right over and faced up to him."
"I had a mixed feeling."
动作描写：
"Pat returned the favour. If I saw him while we were both out walking, he’d cross to the opposite side of the street."
"Pat was already carefully tending his beautiful grapes."
关键转折点：
"I heard the door knock and found it was Pat, with a handful of grapes."
三、推荐描写例句
1. 动作描写：
He slammed the door shut, his movements quick and sharp.
She hesitated for a moment before extending her hand in a truce.
The dog barked, jumping at the fence as if trying to defend its territory.
2. 心理描写：
Her heart raced as she replayed his words in her mind, trying to make sense of them.
A mix of guilt and frustration washed over him, leaving him restless.
She couldn’t shake off the lingering feeling of unease.
3. 环境描写：
The morning air was crisp, carrying the faint scent of blooming flowers.
Shadows danced on the wall as the sun dipped lower in the sky.
A soft breeze rustled the grape leaves, whispering secrets of the garden.
四、语法现象及搭配现象
1. 高中语法现象：
被动语态： "Pat was already carefully tending his beautiful grapes."
宾语从句： "I told him that Pat should accuse our dog of making trouble in his yard."
状语从句： "When I drove past his house, he’d turn his back to my car."
2. 地道搭配：
常见短语：face up to stay away from tend to
词汇积累：
accuse (v.) 指责
近义词：blame
反义词：defend
例句：He accused me of lying, which I strongly denied.
五、范文设计的思路分析
范文1： 突出转折描写
亮点词汇短语：
"An idea struck me as I noticed his hesitation."
"A wave of relief washed over me."
亮点语法：
定语从句："The grapes, which had been his pride, were now shared with us."
范文2： 突出情绪变化
亮点词汇短语：
"My anger faded as I saw the sincerity in his eyes."
"Her apology was heartfelt, her tone unwavering."
亮点语法：
倒装："Never had I felt so grateful for a simple gesture."
范文3： 突出对话推动
亮点词汇短语：
"‘Let’s start over,’ he said, breaking the silence."
"With a nod, I extended my hand, and he shook it firmly."
亮点语法：
分词结构："Hoping for the best, I decided to knock on his door."
Possible Answer 1
Paragraph 1:
“Bad dog! How dare you come again to destroy my yard!” Pat’s angry voice startled me as I rushed downstairs to the garden(状从). To my surprise, our little Chihuahua was nowhere in sight. Instead, a stray dog was happily digging in Pat’s yard. I called out to Pat, pointing at the stray(非谓语动词做伴随动作). “That’s not my dog!” I exclaimed. Pat froze, his face flushed with embarrassment.(独立主格) Realizing his mistake(非谓语动词做伴随动作或原因状语), he muttered a quiet apology before quickly shooing the stray away. The tension between us felt unbearable, but I chose to remain silent, watching him retreat into his house(非谓语动词做伴随动作).
Paragraph 2:
I heard the door knock and found it was Pat, with a handful of grapes. “These are for you,” he said hesitantly. “I’m sorry for what I said earlier(宾从). I shouldn’t have blamed you without proof(虚拟语气).” His words caught me off guard. I smiled and accepted the grapes, saying, “Let’s forget about it. We’re neighbors, after all.” From that day on, our relationship gradually improved. Pat started waving at me during his walks, and I found myself looking forward to seeing him tending his garden.
Possible Answer 2
Paragraph 1:
“Bad dog! How dare you come again to destroy my yard!” Pat’s voice rang out angrily as I looked out of the window(状从). Curious(adj.作状语), I stepped outside and saw a stray dog leaping over the fence into our garden. Pat turned toward me, his face red with frustration(独立主格). “This must be your dog again!” he shouted. “Pat, look at him carefully,” I said firmly. “Our Chihuahua couldn’t possibly jump that high.” His gaze followed the dog, realization dawning on his face(独立主格). He frowned but said nothing, retreating into his house(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作).
Paragraph 2:
I heard the door knock and found it was Pat, with a handful of grapes. Pat stood there awkwardly, holding a small basket of freshly picked grapes(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). “I owe you an apology,” he said, his voice softer than I’d ever heard it(独立主格). “I’ve been unfair to you.” I smiled, taking the basket(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). “Let’s move on,” I replied. From that moment, things changed. Pat began greeting me with a nod and even offered gardening tips. I learned that kindness and understanding could bridge the deepest divides.
Possible Answer 3
Paragraph 1:
“Bad dog! How dare you come again to destroy my yard!” Pat’s shout cut through the quiet morning air as I stepped out to see what was going on(状从+宾从). I caught sight of a large stray dog dashing through his garden, trampling the grapevines(非谓语动词做伴随动作). My heart sank as I realized this misunderstanding would only worsen our already tense relationship(状从). Taking a deep breath(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I approached him. “Pat, that’s not my dog,” I said, gesturing toward the stray(非谓语动词做伴随动作). He looked at the dog, then at me, his expression shifting from anger to confusion(独立主格). Without a word, he turned back to his garden.
Paragraph 2:
I heard the door knock and found it was Pat, with a handful of grapes. Opening the door,(非谓语动词做伴随动作) I saw Pat holding a cluster of grapes. “I misjudged you,” he said simply, handing me the fruit(非谓语动词做伴随动作) . I could see the sincerity in his eyes, and my annoyance melted away. “Thank you,” I said warmly. From then on, we started exchanging small greetings, and our once cold relationship began to thaw. Pat’s garden flourished as did our newfound friendship, proving that even bitter misunderstandings could bear sweet fruit.(非谓语动词+宾从)
亮点分析
1. 情绪描写：
范文1: "His face flushed with embarrassment."
范文2: "His gaze followed the dog, realization dawning on his face."
范文3: "My heart sank as I realized this misunderstanding would only worsen our already tense relationship."
2. 动作描写：
范文1: "Watching him retreat into his house."
范文2: "Pat stood there awkwardly, holding a small basket of freshly picked grapes."
范文3: "Taking a deep breath, I approached him."
3. 环境烘托：
范文1: "The tension between us felt unbearable."
范文3: "Pat’s shout cut through the quiet morning air."
续写与原文衔接分析
可衔接续写的地方
动作描写: Pat 投掷垃圾、主人公与 Pat 面对面争执的场景。
心理变化: 主人公的愤怒、不解以及对 Pat 性格的矛盾情感。
情感层次: 从矛盾升级到缓和的过程。
原文关键句子与续写衔接示例
分析角度 内容分析 原文反映句
人物刻画 主人公：有正义感但容易被情绪控制；Pat：表面冷漠但心底善良。 “Pat didn’t back down.”
“I stormed in my front door and called my husband.”
情感层次 怒气→不解→复杂情绪→意外转折→释怀与和解。 “I was so upset, and I walked right over and faced up to him.”
“I had a mixed feeling.”
关键情节点 争执时双方情绪激烈；观察 Pat 照料葡萄时的复杂感受；Pat 送葡萄上门时的意外转折。 “My upset turned to anger and I let loose.”
“I glanced out upstairs and found Pat was already carefully tending his beautiful grapes.”
语言特色 使用对话和细节动作增强场景的紧张感；心理描写推动情节发展；暗示性结尾表现主题和转折。 “Keep your dog off my yard.”
“Pat, you are a real piece of work!”
关键词分析 accuse, culprit, upset, anger, mixed feeling, care for plants, tend grapes, handful of grapes。 同上。
心理描写 主人公从愤怒到复杂情绪再到释怀。 “I couldn’t believe a man with so much care for a plant should be such an impolite person.”
动作描写 Pat 投掷垃圾、指责，主人公争执、观察对方细节。 “I saw Pat throw a large doggy waste from his garden onto ours!”
环境描写 葡萄园象征 Pat 的细腻与善意，表现冲突与和解的外部环境。 “Pat was already carefully tending his beautiful grapes.”
隐含主题 人与人之间的矛盾常源于误解，交流是化解矛盾的关键。 整篇文章隐含主旨：从矛盾到和解。
情感专责 以“复杂情感”为中心，逐步过渡到释怀与和解。 “I had a mixed feeling.”
空间转换 从院子到室内再到葡萄园，空间变化体现情节推进。 “I stormed in my front door…”
“I glanced out upstairs and found Pat…”
时间过渡 从冲突发生到后来 Pat 送葡萄，时间跨度表现情感的自然过渡。 “On that particular morning…”
“One morning, I glanced out…”
一、情绪描写语料
以下是范文中以及适合续写中的情绪描写语料：
情绪 亮点词汇/短语 高级替换/同义表达 示例句
生气 upset, furious outraged, enraged "I was furious, my hands clenching into fists as I tried to keep calm."
尴尬 embarrassed, awkward ill at ease, self-conscious "He looked self-conscious, avoiding eye contact as he handed me the grapes."
感动 touched, moved heartfelt, emotional "Her kind words left me deeply touched, a smile tugging at the corners of my lips."
二、动作描写语料
以下为续写中可能使用的动作描写，能丰富场景并推动情节发展：
动作类型 亮点表达 升级/同义表达 示例句
矛盾动作 shouted angrily, stormed off lashed out, stomped away "Pat lashed out, his voice trembling with frustration."
和解动作 extended his hand, nodded softly offered a handshake, bowed slightly "With a slight bow, he offered the grapes, signaling a truce."
犹豫动作 paused, hesitated lingered, faltered "She lingered at the door, unsure whether to knock or walk away."
三、环境描写语料
为增强场景感，环境描写至关重要。以下为适合场景的环境语料：
场景 亮点词汇/短语 升级/替换词 示例句
清晨的安静 calm morning, crisp air tranquil dawn, fresh breeze "The tranquil dawn was interrupted by Pat's loud voice echoing through the garden."
花园的景色 flourishing vines, blooming flowers thriving plants, lush greenery "The lush greenery in Pat’s garden reflected his dedication despite his temper."
紧张的氛围 tense silence, charged moment strained quiet, electric pause "A charged moment passed between us, heavy with unspoken words."
四、高频单词替换汇总
基础单词 高级替换词 适用场景 示例句
angry irritated, enraged 情绪冲突 "He looked irritated, his frown deepening with each passing second."
good remarkable, excellent 表达转折后关系改善 "The grapes were remarkable, their sweetness symbolizing a new beginning."
bad unpleasant, unbearable 矛盾描写 "The unpleasant accusations left a bitter taste in my mouth."
五、亮点语法分析与语料积累
语法现象 范文中的语句 解释 拓展例句
定语从句 "The grapes, which had been his pride, were now shared with us." 用于细化描述某一事物的特征，使表达更丰富。 "The apology, which I had never expected, left me speechless."
状语从句 "When I drove past his house, he’d turn his back to my car." 增加背景信息或描述具体情境，是叙事性文章常用句式。 "Whenever I saw him, I couldn’t help but wonder what had gone wrong."
分词结构 "Hoping for the best, I decided to knock on his door." 表示同时发生或补充说明的动作，精炼表达情节。 "Smiling politely, she handed me the grapes as a gesture of goodwill."
六、常见短语积累与升级
基础短语 升级短语 示例句
face a problem confront a challenge "I decided to confront the challenge of repairing our strained relationship head-on."
say sorry extend an apology "Pat extended an apology, his voice full of sincerity."
calm down regain composure "Taking a deep breath, I tried to regain my composure before replying."